四年级英语作文评分标准(20篇)

Everyone has their own dreams, I am no exception. My dream is to be a glorious peoples teacher, use white chalk to impart knowledge, to take care of students with broad mind.

If I were a teacher, I would let the poor in the remote mountainous areas was born in class in our school. I will teach them many knowledge, let them grow up have literary grace.

If I were a teacher, I wont shield the result good students, despise those bad students. A result good student make a mistake, should be criticized, the education they could not proud. A low-achieving students have problems, I will wait patiently to him, let him accept slowly, slowly.

If I were a teacher, in the class, I will make the class more laughter. Next class, I will be on time class is over, let the students to make full use of the valuable time to play, go to bask in the sun, spirit one hundred times to meet the next class.

If I were a teacher, I would with their own efforts to do a best teacher.

每个人都有自己的梦想，我也不例外。我的梦想是当一名光荣的人民教师，用洁白的粉笔来传授知识，用博大的胸怀来关爱学生。

假如我是一名老师，我会让那些边远山区的贫困生来我校上课。我会传授他们许多知识，让他们长大了都有文采。

假如我是一名老师，我不会包庇那些成绩好的学生，鄙视那些成绩坏的学生。一个成绩好的学生犯了错，应该受到批评，教育他们不能骄傲。一个成绩差的学生遇到难题，我会耐心地给他讲解，让他慢慢地接受，慢慢地体会。

假如我是一名老师，上课时，我一定会让课堂上多一点笑声。下课时，我一定会按时下课，让学生充分利用这宝贵的时间，去玩玩，去晒晒太阳，精神百倍去迎接下一堂课。

假如我是一名老师，我会以自己的全力去做一个最好的老师。

中考作文的评分标准中对一类文是这样规定的：

由此可见，二者区别在“比较”二字，那么实现二者之间的跨越，其关键在于从“比较”到“十分”的跨越。以2012年中考作文题《少年风采》为例：

符合题意，指的是能吃透题意的内涵、依照题目行文。题目关键词为“少年”，就是紧紧围绕“少年”这个年龄段写，写少年，写初中生。如果你写一帮中年人厌恶了一成不变的生活而决定重走青春的事情，那就离题了。

内容具体，指的是内容充实、不空洞。围绕“少年风采”题目，你既可以写个人，就是自己的事情;还可以写群体，写你和同学们一起，班级或者特定的团体，比如班级的集体活动、运动会、辩论赛，或者你参加了合唱队，整个合唱队的活动。在你的作文中，主体部分的内容，必须十分充实、丰富，事件可以一个或多个，应有详有略，体现你主旨情感，或者最精彩最吸引人眼球的部分，应着墨写作，而一般过程性的语句，可一笔带过。

中心明确，即文章的中心思想要表达清楚，明白确切。“少年风采”主题没有限定，你可以写奋斗、亲情、奉献、坚持、积极向上的人生态度等，但需要你注意的是，你作文的中心必须只有一个，切忌面面俱到，切忌表达不清。

条理清楚、结构合理，指的是行文中，应有一定的逻辑顺序，材料安排的先后、详略、分段衔接，都是需要注意的方面。因此，行文之前在头脑中形成清晰的作文提纲尤为重要。

语言通顺，指行文中要做到能让读者明白你在说什么，想要表达什么;在此基础上还要注意润色语言，加强运用熟悉的修辞手法、细节描写、环境描写的意识，开头结尾集中彰显文采，比如，一篇满分作文的小作者是这样写的：“他九岁读《汉书》，随手指摘其中的错漏……他凭借其超众的才华被后人尊为‘初唐四杰’之首，并留下了‘落霞与孤鹜齐飞，秋水共长天一色’这样的千古绝唱!”(王勃)看似很有文采的句子，其实就是关于王勃的相关背景知识的简述。大家平日里背诵了很多的诗词名篇，必要的时候可以用在自己的作文中，既彰显文采又很能说明问题，何乐而不为呢!

明确一类文的评判标准，找到自己的作文“短板”，才能高效备战、突破瓶颈!

To protect the environment, as early as in "no desiccation jersey have fish, deforestation and hunting," the old adage. Today, we should know how to protect the environment is to protect ourselves, we not only use resources rationally, whenever they better protect the environment, let environment eternal youth, always service for our human survival and development, as a student, is now mainly to create a green campus.

Have a period of time, the campus of debris-brick everywhere, forget to turn off the faucet spouted flow a... Corridor between, not to mention the, everyone has experience, after the sweeping, turn round and then will find that the ground has been some people into different ornament, these things often let me hanging with ancient, these cases often let me deadly serious today, the campus is a small society, students in the campus of a management system cannot achieve good care environment, out of the campus into society, the environment, and how? Thats more dare not imagine.

The classmates, save our earth! You should immediately take action, starts from the minor matter, starts from now, start from the care for the campus environment. We picked up a piece of paper, a drop of water, we save, a heap of rubbish, we clean the, we love a tree seedlings, a frog, a blade of grass, plant a tree, the environmental protection as own duty, use own practical action to protect the environment, to create a green campus.

保护环境，早在“不涸泽有鱼，不焚林而猎”的古训。在今天，我们更应懂得保护环境就是保护我们自己，我们不仅合理利用资源，更竭心尽力保护环境，让环境永葆青春，永远为我们人类的生存发展服务，作为学生，现在主要是创建绿色校园。

得有段时间，校园里果皮纸屑随处可见，忘关掉的水龙头哗哗地流着……楼道间，就更不用说了，大家是有亲身体验的，扫完后，转身就会发现地面已被有些人点缀成另一番景象，这些事情常让我吊怀远古，这些情况常让我警言今日，校园就是个小社会，同学们在有管理制度的校园中都不能做到爱护环境，走出校园，进入社会这一大环境，又能怎样呢?那就更不敢设想了。

同学们，救救咱们的地球吧!大家应立即行动起来，从小事做起，从现在做起，从爱护校园环境做起。一片纸，我们捡起，一滴水，我们节约，一堆垃圾，我们打扫，我们爱一棵苗，保一只蛙，种一根草，栽一棵树，把保护环境作为自己应尽的义务，用自己的实际行动保护环境，创建绿色校园。

四年级英语作文：My Teacher-我的老师

My favourite teacher is Miss Huang. She is a beautiful lady. She has two big eyes, a high nose and a little red mouth. There is always a smile on her face.

Miss Huang likes singing and collecting posters. She is good at playing the piano. In the evening, she always sits in front of the piano and plays nice music. She is good at dancing, too. Sometimes she teaches us dancing.

Miss Huang likes dogs very much because the dog is very friendly and cute. Her favourite color is blue. Because blue is the color of the sky and the sea.

This is my favourite teacher. Our classmates all like her very much.

译文：

我最喜欢的老师是黄老师。她是一位漂亮的女性。她有两只大大的眼睛，一个高高的鼻子和一张小小的红唇。她的脸上总带着笑容。

黄老师喜欢唱歌和收集海报。她钢琴弹得很好。晚上，她常常坐在钢琴前弹奏优美的乐曲。黄老师跳舞也很棒。有时她也会教我们跳舞。

黄老师非常喜欢狗，因为狗很友好也很可爱。黄老师最喜欢的颜色是蓝色，因为蓝色是天空和海的颜色。

这就是我喜欢的老师。我们班的同学都非常喜欢她。

四年级英语作文：My New Teacher

My new teacher is science teacher. He’s very strong. He has a big mouth, two big ears, two big eyes and a not too big and not too small nose. He often wears a black new shirt and brown pants, with two big shoes.

My science teacher is very kind. And he is very smart, isn’t he? Today, we have science class. We are very happy. Because he is so funny. Who is he? He’s a Mr. Zhou .

四年级英语作文：My English teacher

My good friend

I have a best friend. He is a lovely boy. He has short black hair ,big black eyes and big ears. He has a bigmouth and a small nose. I think he is handsome. And he is strong and quiet. He likes sports very much. After class, we often play football, basket ball on the playground .He is a good player. He also likes to study. English and math are his favourite subjects. He helps me a lot.

四年级英语作文：My father

My father

I have a father。His name is WenyiDong. He live in ShenZhen for 5 yers.He likes playing golf very much.He is a good teacher. He has been a teacher for 7 years. I like him .He has live in ShenZhen sine 1992. He like Shenzhen very much.

He has many hobbys. He likes read ,play golf and play the football.He has a easy ambition .To be a goog teacher.

He live with my mother and I.We live in Yangguanglijing grand.We are so happy.I like my father very much.

小学英语作文：My Teacher 我的老师

My Teacher 我的老师

My favourite teacher is Miss Huang. She is a beautiful lady. She has two big eyes, a high nose and a little red mouth. There is always a smile on her face.

Miss Huang likes singing and collecting posters. She is good at playing the piano. In the evening, she always sits in front of the piano and plays nice music. She is good at dancing, too. Sometimes she teaches us dancing.

Miss Huang likes dogs very much because the dog is very friendly and cute. Her favourite color is blue. Because blue is the color of the sky and the sea.

This is my favourite teacher. Our classmates all like her very much.

译文：

我最喜欢的老师是黄老师。她是一位漂亮的女性。她有两只大大的眼睛，一个高高的鼻子和一张小小的红唇。她的脸上总带着笑容。

黄老师喜欢唱歌和收集海报。她钢琴弹得很好。晚上，她常常坐在钢琴前弹奏优美的乐曲。黄老师跳舞也很棒。有时她也会教我们跳舞。

黄老师非常喜欢狗，因为狗很友好也很可爱。黄老师最喜欢的颜色是蓝色，因为蓝色是天空和海的颜色。

这就是我喜欢的老师。我们班的同学都非常喜欢她。

英语作文 My Father-我的爸爸

My Father My father is a tall man with a pair of glasses. Everyone says he is a kind-hearted man. He often helps his neighbours and some strangers whom he doesnt know at all. He has really done a lot for others. I dont like him to do so because I think it has taken him too much time. When I discourage him, he always says with a smile,The world needs warm hearts.

My father loves his family, and loves his work even better. In the company, he is called workaholic He spends most of his time working, and often forgets to have meals or to go to bed.As a result,he doesnt enjoy good health. My father likes reading in his spare time. He told me reading was very interesting. I became interested in reading little by little. I like books, because they help me in many ways. My father has a bad habit he likes smoking very much. I hate it. See, the house is full of smoke. I know its bad for his health as well as mothers and mine. I advise him to give up smoking. Im sure he will follow my advice some day. Such is my father. I am proud of having such a good father.

我的爸爸 我的爸爸个子高高的，戴着一副眼镜。大家都说他是个好心肠的人。他经常帮邻居排忧解难，对于一些他压根不认识的陌生人，他也总是尽力相助。他为别人真是付出了许多许多。我不愿意他这么做，因为这花费了他太多的时间。每当我劝阻他时，爸爸总是笑着说：“世界需要热心肠嘛!” 爸爸热爱家庭，更注重事业，公司里的人都叫他“工作狂”。他把大部分时间都用于工作，为工作他常常废寝忘食。过度的劳累使他的健康状况欠佳。 爸爸闲暇时爱读书。他告诉我，读书很有趣。我渐渐地对读书产生了兴趣。我爱上了书，因为书对我帮助很大。 爸爸有个坏习惯——太爱吸烟。我不喜欢他抽烟。瞧，家里充满了烟味。我知道吸烟有害他的健康，对我和妈妈也有害无益。我建议他戒烟。我相信总有一天他会这么做的。 这就是我的爸爸，我为有这样的好爸爸而自豪。

Before I came to middleSchool, I felt so excited about the new life, and I

had prepared for it for the whole summer vacation. The moment I stepped in the

school, it surprised me. The green trees and colorful flowers are around the

school. Sometimes I felt like walking in the park. There is a big playground.

When all the students get together, it is very lively. When the sports meeting

comes, there will be all kinds of competitions, and all the students fight for

their classes. The sound of cheering for the teams can be heard around the

school. I like to walk around school after class, which makes me feel eased.

Push open the door, you will feel the room is full of tong qu. On the wall all round, plastered with various and colorful stickers, with winnie the pooh and tigger, there are flowers and butterflies. At the sight of them, my mood immediately become happy. In the middle of the room, is my little bed, bed respectively with three my beloved toy: bear, "black" bear "doudou" and the elephant "beep". No matter spring, summer, autumn and winter, only to hold them tasting, ability falls asleep. Put a row of ambry, the wall is in the middle of the TV cabinet, both sides is my snack cabinets, all kinds of snacks.

In the side, is my mother and I will come in the morning of the dresser, there is a mirror on the wall, desk full of beautiful things in eyes with all kinds of cosmetics, every day, my mother and I to enjoy dressing up. Put on the window is my desk. Lying on the desk in the winter can join the bedplate of glass, glass down with my photos. Desk a few belong to use large box. Door on the left side of the wall, put on my chest, one season clothes have to be packed in a wooden cabinet, sometimes. This is my room, do you like it?

一推开门，你就会感到这房间充满了童趣。四周的墙壁上，贴满了各式各样、五彩缤纷的贴画，有小熊维尼的，有跳跳虎的，还有小花和蝴蝶的。一看见它们，我的心情立刻就变得开心起来。在房间中央，是我的小床，床上分别摆着三个我心爱的毛绒玩具：大熊“黑皮”，小熊“豆豆”和小象“嘟嘟”。无论春夏秋冬，唯品都要抱着它们才能入睡。贴着墙放了一排橱柜，中间的是电视机柜，两边是我的零食柜，各种各样的零食应有尽有。

在最里侧，是我和妈妈每天早上必来的梳妆台，贴着墙壁有一面镜子，桌上琳琅满目地摆放着各式各样的化妆品，每天我和妈妈都要美美地打扮一番。靠着窗户摆放的是我的书桌。书桌上放着冬天可以加入的玻璃台板，玻璃下压着我的照片。书桌旁有几个放属用的大箱子。门左边的墙，放着我的衣柜，一个季节的衣服就得装一格柜子，有时还装不下。这就是我的房间，你喜欢吗?

今天晚上，我去上英语课外班。上课时，英语CANDY老师教我们了一个英语小寓言，名字叫CityMouseandCountryMouse（城市老鼠和乡下老鼠）。这个寓言特别有意思，一只城市老鼠乘公交车去乡下看望他的老兄——乡下老鼠。他看见了在田野上有好多奶牛、马、池塘、篱笆、鸟。这时，他的表兄张下老鼠说：“你好，表弟，见到你很高兴。”

过了一会儿，城市老鼠不高兴了，说：“我好饿，可这里却没食物，还冷。还不如去城市，我可以让你住我的公寓，那里很暖和。”乡下老鼠说：“好，走吧！”

他们来到城市老鼠的家——一座公寓里。他们看见牛奶和奶酪放在一个大桌子上，正准备吃，却有一只猫要吃掉它们。乡下老鼠不想过惊险的日子，只好回到了乡下。

学完这篇小故事，老师要让我们表演，我很高兴，因为我最喜欢表演了。老师把全班16个同学分成四组，有四个角色：城市老鼠、乡下老鼠、大花猫、旁白。我和TINA、LILY1、DANG一组，我演乡下老鼠，TINA濱城市老鼠、LILY1演大花猫，DANG读旁白。

开始表演了，TINA假装坐着公交车来到乡下，我友好地打招呼，我们来到城市，我很惊讶，开心。我们表演得声情并茂，有时还加上小动作。4个小组表演完后，老师还说我们小组表演得最出色。

这个故事很有意思，同时我们表演得也很棒哦！

My father is a humorous person.My father short stature,fine fine thin,white skin,black hair,a head of the “big wave” self-invited roll hair,who would think that he is met at the barbers hot. His colleagues said he is narrowed down fei xiang,I think so too. He is a fine art,is famous in the central south five provinces binding artist,his one-man show has a favorable review in the many famous people. After another wall,he is a funny people,special love kidding,I dont know if all of the art is very humor,I think my dads body is full of humor cells. No matter how tired he how busy work,as long as take a door,exactly,he said,as long as a see me,and immediately he smile,I followed delightful sounds.

我的爸爸是一个幽默的人。我的父亲身材矮小，细瘦，白皮肤，黑头发，一头“大波浪”自来卷的头发，谁会想到他会在理发店烫。他的同事说他是缩小了，费翔，我也这么认为。他是一个很好的艺术，在中南五省的结合是著名艺术家，他的独角戏中有许多著名的人好评。在另一面墙上，他是一个风趣的人，特别爱开玩笑，我不知道如果所有的艺术是很幽默，我想我爸爸的身体充满幽默细胞。无论多累，他工作多么忙碌，只要一进家门，确切地说，他说，只要一见到我，他立刻笑了，我跟着愉快的声音。

I have a room.Its not big,but its really tidy.You can see a map of China on the wall.There is a big bed in my room.My quilt and pillows are on the bed.I have a bookcase is next to my bed.It is red.My books are on the bookcase.Some keys are on my desk.My computer is on my desk,too.Under my chair you can see a soccer ball ,and the chair is under the desk.This is my room.I like it very much.Do you like it?

Topic(题目)：

What are some of the qualities of a good parent.Use specific details and examples to explain youranswer.

Model Essay(范文)：

I am fortunate to have good parents so it is easy for me to identify the qualities that makethem good. These qualities are unconditional love, trust, and respect for me and my brothersand sisters.

All mothers and fathers love their children. They nurture them and keep them from harm. Butnot all love is unconditional. Some parents would not love their children if they married someoneof a different religion or from a different ethnic group. Some parents would not love theirchildren if they were of a different sexual orientation. My parents won’t. My parents would loveus regardless of whom we married or whom we chose to love.

Part of unconditional love is trust. My parents trust us to do what is right. They know we wouldnever do anything to hurt them or to disgrace them. They trust us so we trust them. We areconfident that they would never do anything to hurt us.

Because our parents love us, they also respect us. They treat us as individuals. They accept ourdifferences. They do not expect us to be like them. They want us to be our own persons. Theywant us to make our own way in the world, not follow in their footsteps.

Without their love, I would not be as confident as I am. Without their trust, I would not befree to do what I want. Without their respect, I would not feel comfortable being on my own. Allchildren should have such wonderful parents.

[考研英语作文：合格的父母的标准是什么

学校通过组织一个圣诞节英语派对，丰富同学们的课余生活，培养学生的学习兴趣和热情，增加小朋友们对于英语的兴趣，让所有小朋友都能广泛参与。英语圣诞晚会，还能激发学生在我们学校学习英语，帮助学生提高综合素质评价，在同一时间，提高学生学习英语的能力，为以后学习和竞争中取得良好的优势。

今天中午吃完饭后，妈妈送我来到了我们英语学校举行的年度圣诞节晚会。

大约13：30的时候，我们的晚会正式开始了，我们大家都非常高兴。首先，我们观看了精彩的节目：有打架子鼓的，有弹吉他的，有跳拉丁舞的，还有打双节棍的，等等等等，真是精彩绝伦，赏心悦目啊!

看完精彩的节目之后，我们进行了三等奖的抽签活动之中。悲哀，我不是那30个当中幸运儿的其一，但是老师说，还有一等奖和二等奖。

我们休息了片刻，看了看同学变得小戏法之后，我们打二等奖抽签活动又开始了。果然，好心不负有心人，我是10名二等奖中的得主，获得了一个毛绒玩具。这时的我正在想，那丰富多彩的一等奖又会花落谁家呢?

接下来，我被邀请上台做了游戏。这个游戏的名字叫做家长互换。游戏规则：10位孩子站在舞台上，后面是自己的家长。然后，我们10位孩子蒙上眼睛，家长互相移动。1分钟之后，必须找到自己的家长。幸好妈妈有明显的标志物，手里拿着手机。

所有活动结束后，我们每个人都领了学习大礼包。里面有各种各样的学习文具，我们都异常的欢喜。

祝大家圣诞节节日快乐!

I like Christmas, it is just like our Spring Festival.

我喜欢圣诞节，它就像我们的春节。

Maybe the Spring Festival is much more important and interesting than Christmas, but I like Christmas Day better. Because we can spend time with our friends and classmates during Christmas. When it is snowy,

也许春节比圣诞节更重要和有趣，但我更喜欢圣诞节。因为我们可以花时间与我们的朋友和同学在圣诞节。当下雪的时候，

Christmas becomes much more lovely, just like in fairytales. I can imagine I am in a fairytale, the girl who sold the matches is my friend, the ugly duck becoming more and more beautiful and so on. What a beautiful place! So we can also call Christmas “Snowy Lovely Day.”

圣诞节变得更可爱，就像是童话故事。我可以想像我在一个童话，卖火柴的小女孩是我的朋友，丑小鸭变得越来越漂亮等等。多么美丽的地方!所以我们也可以把圣诞节“雪可爱的一天。”

On Christmas Day, shops are red and green. There are so many Christmas cards, Christmas hats, Christmas dolls and many colourful things. So shops look very beautiful. We can give a card or a doll to our friends and say “Merry Christmas.” By the way, I think studying can also become much more interesting.

在圣诞节，商店是红色和绿色。有许多圣诞卡，圣诞帽，圣诞娃娃和许多丰富多彩的事情。所以商店看起来很漂亮。我们可以提供信用卡或一个玩偶我们的朋友说：“圣诞快乐”。顺便说一下，我想学习也可以变得更加有趣。

Christmas is coming, it also means a new year will come. Let’s study harder to welcome the new year!

圣诞节即将来临，这也意味着新的一年到来。让我们更加努力学习来迎接新年!

In the field of food safety in our country in recent years, the worrying problems. Kentucky Fried chicken "Sudan red", "sodium formaldehyde sulfoxylate in tofu, dumplings in the" poisonous green vegetables "... More dangerous is the "melamine", it is not only present in high amounts in milk, also exist in the eggs. These diverse food safety issues, like the global outbreak of the financial crisis, across the earth, to peoples life and health has brought serious influence, more affecting everyones heart.

The original food safety problem happened on our side, may be happening in our endangering our health. I think, our country should pay great attention to the food safety problems, only by strengthening legislation, strict law enforcement to stop the emergence of these problems. At the same time as a primary school student, we should also actively involved in the food safety propaganda, let more people know the dangers of food safety, resistance to pesticides food, chemical, food and food problems, in this way can we make food safety with our health.

近年来，在我国食品安全领域出现了令人忧虑的问题。肯德鸡的“苏丹红”、豆腐中的“吊白块”、水饺中的“毒青菜”……更危险的是“三聚氰胺”，它不仅在牛奶中大量出现，还在鸡蛋中存在。这些形形色色的食品安全问题，就像目前全球暴发的金融危机一样，席卷整个大地，给人们的生命健康带来了严重的影响，更牵动着大家的心。

原来食品安全问题就发生在我们的身边，也可能正在发生在我们的身上危害着我们的健康。我想，我们国家要高度重视食品安全这个问题，只有通过加强立法，严格执法才能制止这些问题的出现。同时做为一名小学生，我们也要积极地参与到食品安全的宣传中，让更多的人认识食品安全的危害，抵制农药食品、化学食品、问题食品，这样才能让食品安全与我们的健康同行。

切合题意

指文章主题符合命题意图，作者对命题者所给的题目能准确、全面地理解。

如：《推开这扇门》一文，全文紧紧围绕“门”这一主题词，写了生活中有许多繁琐的小事，想了解其中的奥秘必定要用不同的方法去发现其中的道理，就像一扇门只能用一把与门孔形状相同的钥匙才能开启通往智慧的道路，展现出作者对生命中所遇困苦的思考。抒发小作者对生活的热爱，紧扣题目。

中心突出，思想健康

从写作材料里提取中心思想，在写作过程中要重点提出或者要加以论述，即要，中心思想和中心论点要突出、鲜明。

内容充实且层次清楚、语句通顺、段落分明

指写进文章里的材料有较高的质量，文章内容丰富、具体。所选材料对表现中心是必要的、足够的。

但这里所说的足够，并非把很多材料堆积形成的，而是要在内容充实的基础之上保证思路清晰，层次明了。且保证语言规范、准确、连贯。即用词准确、造句正确、没有语病、句子与句子之间上下衔接、句子顺序合理、语意通畅。

情感真挚

重内容，重真情实感，重创新轻模仿。

一定要灌输给孩子一个正确的思想写作无非就是把自己的所见、所闻、所感、所想用文字的形式记录下来罢了，切忌为写作文而习作。

结构严谨

指文章结构思路清晰、结构完整。

文章结构无外乎有：总分总;分总;总分这几种形式，写作前确定写作顺序后，切记不可混用。好的文章应该，布局周密，上下连贯，主次分明。

如：《日出》一文由“日出前”、“日出时”、“日出后”三部分组成，然后逐层展开论述。全文结构严谨

会用标点，错别字少，卷面整洁

作文是一道考查学生语文综合功底的题型。

考生在写作时要注重细节问题;字迹、卷面、甚至标点符号，这就要求考生在平时就要注重积累与习惯。

Winter comes again, this is my fifth winter vacation since elementary school. Holiday that day, the teacher a lot of homework on the blackboard. Due to the winter vacation homework more, need reasonable arrange time to complete, so I made a plan for the winter vacation to learn.

Im going to put the winter vacation homework math and Chinese winter vacation homework do three surfaces. And in the winter vacation reading a good book, "we good word", "detective conan" and the "the practical abstract upper and lower edition watch. About a day at about 20 minutes. Finished winter vacation homework in the morning and after reading the rest of the time free activities. This is I use my mothers mouth. His work is. To sleep for an hour at noon, afternoon to learn Kim seng. Learned after a hour to go to school in the computer computer application knowledge, reading a an article "love education", and say what comments after reading this article, what is the feeling, what to do in the future, and so on.

Before sleeping to delve into a really, read an English composition, ha ha, this is "language, number and the three-no" by mistake!

The above is my study plan, winter vacation? My winter vacation plan is good! Oh, by the way, I also want to help my parents do some housework, because in this way can make mom happy. After listening to my plan, is you happy?

寒假又来了，这是我上小学以来的第五个寒假。放假那天，老师在黑板上布置了许多作业。由于寒假作业比较多，需要合理的安排时间才能完成，所以我制订了一个寒假学习计划。

我准备把《数学寒假作业》和《语文寒假作业》各做3面。并在寒假里看一本好书，《好词好句大全》、《名侦探柯南》和那本《实用文摘上、下版》看完。大约一天看20分钟左右。上午做完寒假作业和课外阅读后剩下的时间自由活动。这可是我在妈妈的嘴里使用了我的“大舌头功”才争取来的。中午睡觉一个小时，下午去学金声。学完之后在电脑上学一个小时的电脑应用知识，读一篇《爱的教育》的一篇文章，并说说读完这篇文章有什么心得体会，有什么感受，今后应该怎么做等等。

睡觉前再钻研一道奥数题，读一篇英语作文，哈哈，这真是“语、数、英三不误”啊!

以上就是我的寒假学习计划，怎么样?我的寒假计划不错吧!哦，对了，我还要帮爸爸妈妈做一些家务，因为这样才能让妈妈开心。听完我的计划，你们是不是很开心呢?

Hello! I’m Jessie. I like English very much, because of my English teacher, Nettie. Today, I’ll introduce her to you.

In my eyes, she’s not a teacher, but a lovely girl and a good friend of mine. She is not tall. She is thin. She has the long hair. Her face is round. There are two small eyes on her face. She likes smiling. When she smiles, her eyes just like the moon at the beginning of the month. I think she is very beautiful girl.

She’s very kind, like an old friend. She can sing. She can draw. She can dance. She can speak very good English. She can tell us stories. She can play games with us. When we have an English lesson, we feel very happy. All of us are interested in her lesson.

I have a good teacher. I think I’m very lucky.

In the early morning, my sister went out and brought home a bunch of pretty flowers. Right after my mother got up out of bed, we said "Happy Mothers Day"! to her and gave her the flowers. My mother was very happy; she smiled and said, How wonderful the flowers look! Thank you! Also, we told her we were going to do all the housework for our beloved mother, and she could take a rest for a day.

在清晨，我姐姐出去了一束漂亮的鲜花。当我的母亲起身下床，我们说“母亲节快乐”!给她的花。我妈妈很高兴;她笑着说，“花看起来多么美妙!谢谢你!同时，我们告诉她我们要为我们的母亲做所有的家务，她可以休息一天。

In the beginning, we were excited about all the work we can do at home. Before long, we found that the housework seemed to be endless, There was cooking and washing, and cleaning to do, and there was shopping to do, too . During the dinner hour, the kitchen seemed so busy. My father was making a salad, my sister was baking a pie for dessert, and I was washing rice and vegetables, and there were many other things to do. Finally, the dinner was ready; it was two hours behind the usual schedule. The food was not as delicious as my mothers. Nevertheless, my mother and father enjoyed it, and felt very proud of their daughter and son.

在开始的时候，我们感到很兴奋，我们能做的所有的工作在家里。不久，我们发现，家务似乎是无止境的，有洗衣做饭，和打扫卫生，并有购物的事，太。在晚宴小时，厨房似乎很忙。我的父亲是一个沙拉，我的姐姐是一饼烘烤的甜点，我洗大米和蔬菜，还有许多其他的事情要做。最后，准备晚餐;它是两个小时后通常时间表。食品是不是我的母亲。尽管如此美味，我的父亲和母亲很喜欢，和他们的女儿和儿子感到无比自豪。

My mother is just over fifty, a little bit older than our republic nation, so she has experienced two periods just like our country, showing both the traditional goodness and modern ideas.

Like all mothers, she is responsible and devotes most of her efforts to our family. So sometimes I feel regretful for her to give up her work, but she thinks it is the proper social role for a woman to be a housewife. She is satisfied with the family members achievements. She insists on keeping her children under her wings. You see how traditional she is.

However, since she is intelligent and has received the high education, it is easy for her to accept something new. In recent years, she is interested in the stock . Therefore, she cares about the political and economic situation of the country and the world, and actively collects information of the companies whose stocks she bought. What is more, she is a fan of the Argentine football team. So she was very sad after the defeat of this team in the 14th World Cup Tournament .

I love my mother, just because she loves me. Since we share some interests such as playing chess, we get chances to communicate with each other, which makes us close friends.

我妈妈刚刚超过五十个,有点超过我们共和国的国家,所以她经历了两个时期就像我们的国家一样,表现出传统美德和现代观念。

像所有的母亲一样,她负责,她的大部分努力致力于我们的家庭。所以有时我后悔让她放弃她的工作,但她认为这是适当的社会角色对女人是一个家庭主妇。她的家庭成员感到满意的成就。她坚持让她的孩子在她的翅膀。你看看传统。

然而,由于她是聪明,受到了高等教育,对她很容易接受新事物。近年来,她对股票感兴趣。因此,她关心这个国家的政治和经济形势和世界,并积极收集信息是她买了股票的公司。更重要的是,她是一个阿根廷足球队的球迷。所以她非常伤心失败后,这支球队在第14届世界杯比赛。

我爱我的母亲,因为她爱我。因为我们分享一些利益,如下棋,我们互相交流的机会,使我们亲密的朋友。

A dog has a large piece of meat in his mouth. Near the water he looks down and sees himself in the water. He thinks it is another dog. That dog has also a large piece of meat in his mouth. He says to himself, "I want to get his meat. Then I can have two pieces." He opens his mouth to bark and his meat goes down into the water.

[小学四年级英语作文A Piece of meat

2013高考英语作文评分标准

1 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

2 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次 的 要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3 词数少于 80和多于 120的，从总分中减去2分。

4 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准 确性、上下文的连贯性。

5 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程 度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受。

6 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。

各档次的给分范围和要求

Ⅰ. 第五档(很好)；(21-25分)：

完全完成了试题规定的任务

⑴ 覆盖所有内容要点

⑵ 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，

⑶ 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力，

⑷有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 ， 完全达到了预期的写作目的 Ⅱ. 第四档(好)：(16-20分)

完全完成了试题规定的任务

⑴虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容

⑵应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求

⑶语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致 ⑷应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 达到了预期的写作目的

Ⅲ. 第三档(适当)：(11-15分)

基本完成了试题规定的任务

⑴虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容

⑵应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求

⑶有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解

⑷应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的Ⅳ. 第二档(较差)：(6-10分)

未恰当完成试题规定的任务

⑴ 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容

⑵语法结构单调、词汇项目有限

⑶ 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解

⑷较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性 信息未能清楚地传达给读者

Ⅴ. 第一档(差)：(1-5分)

未完成试题规定的任务

⑴明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求

⑵语法结构单调、词汇项目有限

⑶较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解 ⑷缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯 信息未能传达给读者。

Ⅵ. 不得分：（0分） ⑴ 未能传达给读者任何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要

求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。

三点关键定档因素(不跑题是前提)

词汇多样性

语法复杂性

文章连贯性

书面表达的五项秘诀：

审题，遣词，造句，润色，谋篇

既然知道了这些关键因素和高分秘诀，我们要如何从这些方面入手呢审题的概念

拿到试卷后，首先浏览书面表达的题目，研究题目要求。正确的审题内容包括A、审标题B、审体裁C、审要点。审标题：看文章是否要求有题目(title)或者主题(topic)能够确保你不跑题;审体裁：确能够定文章的文体，为你写作提供方向。审要点：如果英语作文中，有要求要点的，一般打分时是踩点给分的，准确把握住要点，是高分的一个诀窍。

如何审要点要做到以下两个方面：

总结归纳要点：不是所有内容都要写出来，而是抓住其中的关键要点、衔接要点!

理顺要点：将提炼的要点按逻辑关系(如时间关系、因果关系、转折关系等)重新安排，这样整篇文章看起来就整体有序，流畅自然，更加容易打动评分老师，从而作文分数提升一档。

构思文章提纲：根据题目的要点，安排好段落和主次关系。要形成良好的分段意识，写作分段是必须要进行的(2至4段为佳)，这样显得文章不会拥挤并且层次分明。在行文意识上，要注意突出要点。

遣词的注意点

不出现语言错误

词语和短语搭配

适度使用加分词汇

避免词语重复

注意词语和短语搭配使用

可以适度的使用加分词句：高级词、同义词、短语等替代

造句的原则

表达意思要清楚无误。

多种表达方式表达相同含义

避免句式单调(简单句，并列句，复合句等适度调整)

表达意思清楚无误：具体化，细节化

可以用形象思维来表达(什么叫形象思维比如说你朗读的“很好听”，用“抑扬顿挫”来表达就是形象思维)

谋篇的攻略

注意分段、详略搭配、注意连贯

行文时多用关联词、引导词，把文章句子通过各种关系整合起来，达到起承转合，运用自如的目的，从而获取高分。

具体的连接关系有：并列关系、递进关系、因果关系、转折关系、让步关系、列举关系、条件关系、举例关系、时间关系等。

2015年高考英语全国I卷

写作阅卷评分标准及各档次作文示例

——领会高考阅卷要求，有效指导学生高考写作备考

【作文题】假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友彼得写信约稿，要点如下：

1.栏目介绍;

2. 稿件内容;

3. 稿件长度：约 400 词;

4. 交稿日期：6 月 28 日前。

注意： 1. 词数 100 左右; 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯; 3. 开头语已为你写好。

Dear Peter,

I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.________

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

2015年普通高考评卷英语作文评分标准

评分总则：

1、本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

2、评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定是否达到及格线（15分），然后确定其所属的具体档次，以该档次的要求来衡量，最后给分。其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3、词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。

4、评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性。

5、若缺少要点，分数降一档处理。

6、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

7、书写较差以至于影响交际，将其分数降低一个档次。 评分细则：

优秀（22--25）：紧扣主题，覆盖所有要点，内容充实；语法结构多样，词汇丰富，行文流畅，显示出较强的语言运用能力，允许有个别语言错误，但不影响意思表达。

安徽省合肥市包河区教育局教研室 王一枝

根据初中阶段的写作具体目标：写作时考虑不同的目的和对象，写作要感情真挚，力求表达自己对自然、社会、人生的独特感受和真切体验;多角度地观察生活，发现生活的丰富多彩，捕捉事物的特征，力求有创意地表达;根据表达的中心，选择恰当的表达方式。合理安排内容的先后和详略。条理清楚地表达自己的意思。运用联想和想像，丰富表达的内容;写记叙文，做到内容具体：写简单的说明文，做到明白清楚;写简单的议论文，做到有理有据;根据生活需要，写日常应用文……简单地说，就是会写记叙文、简单的说明文、简单的议论文和一般的应用文;内容具体明确，语言文从字顺;感情真实健康，力求有创意。安徽省中考作文评分基本上涵盖了上述精神。

一、作文评分总体要求

以安徽省2009年中考题“师生之间”为例，对中考作文评分标准具体分析，具有可解读性和可操作性。这个命题作文，它的内容很宽泛，可写的东西很多，有关师生之间的事、物、情，皆可入文。具体评分要求如下：

1、要审清题目。文章要切题，不能写成“我的老师”， 要扣住“之间”来写，是老师和学生之间的双向活动。

2、体裁要分辨清。叙事有起伏，阐述有哲理，写人须有触动人物内心深处，抒情、议论兼而有之。

3、立意要有创新。文题看似平平淡淡，没有精心雕琢，但要写出独特的、与众不同之处。师生老师与学生的界定可以引申、拓展，也可以是广义的。

4、文章有真情实感。写事要具体可感，语言要流畅，有文采，有点睛之笔，行文思路清晰，感情充沛。

二、作文分等分类简述

就阅卷评分标准结合学生实际作文情况，作文大致分为以下几类：

(一)力求创新。力避旧瓶装新酒，有的同学在考场中将师与生进行引申、比喻，文章开头引用《三字经》中的“生不学，师之惰”，接着亮出自己的观点，“生不学”未必是“师之惰”，用“诸葛亮与刘禅”这对师生来佐证。以思辩的眼光去看待师生之间的关系，提倡一种平等、和谐的新型师生关系，这篇文章结构完整、首尾照应、层次清楚、语言流畅，应属一类文(得54分)。

(二)形式新颖。

形式新颖，内容详实、描写具体。比如一位考生列了四个小标题：“酸”、“甜”、“苦”、“辣”，分别写了与老师之间的四件事，也都有师生之间的活动，有师生间真挚的情感，内容具体真实，可成为一篇佳作，属一类中等(得50分)。

(三)误读题意。一位考生将师生之间写成了“教与学”的关系，整篇文章围绕着“师傅领进门，修行在个人”来写。在立意、内容上只能归属为三类下、四类上。(得30分左右)

(四)选材陈旧。在选材方面流于俗套而缺乏真挚的情感。比如很多考生写在我生病时老师不顾羸弱的身体背着我去医院，老师在下雨天送我回家，把伞让给学生，自己却淋透了，生病了等。没有从生活实际中选取典型的、新颖的、感人的事例来表现主题。这样的事例不够典型，情感也抒发的不到位就难以达到感动人的目的。属三类下。(得32分)

(五)切题不紧。中等成绩的考生的作文都更倾向于写老师是如何对待自己的，主要写老师是如何关心我，如何辅导我的学习，这样的文章中老师的行动是主体，其中穿插了学生的感悟与体会，但占的笔墨不多，因为写老师的文字中必然有学生的活动。这样的文章不能说完全切题，也不能说离题，因为它写到了老师对学生的关爱与呵护。属于二类下、三类上。(得38分)

(六)文体单一。绝大多数写成记叙文，显得平铺直叙，没有生动、细致的描写，选择写议论文的很少，即使有所议论，也是空发感慨。基本上分数不会太高。(得25分上下)

三、中考作文评分细则解读

我们通常用语言优美、立意新颖、结构独特、构思精巧、内容充实、感情真实、表达恰当等方面去评判优秀学生的作文。其实，对于绝大多数学生来说，评分标准的制定有所局限性，就安徽省而言，主要从内容和表达两个方面对作文的评分细则简要解析。

(一)内容方面：

新课标所提倡的作文理念，在安徽省的作文命题及评分标准的制定中已得到很好的体现。内容具体、充实的作文也不在少数，考生视野开阔，体现了他们对生活的感悟，做到了我手写我心，出现了一大批关注亲情友情、关注社会自然、关注艺术历史的佳作。如2007年安徽省的“我们的心近了”，有考生写通过感悟李白、李煜和岳飞的诗词与他们的爱国之心;有写通过印度洋海啸与世界人民的心近了，通过中国免除非洲债务，中国人民与非洲人民的心近了……这些选材与立意都是很高的，有部分考生写社会生活的一些小小的细节反映人与人之间的心近了，如写为瓜农提供方便，与辛苦劳作的人心近了;到山区体验生活与农村孩子的心近了，选材立意温暖人心……我感到：出题人与考生的心近了，考生与家庭、学校、社会、自然、历史的心近了。具体得分点有以下几点：

(1)中心明确。有些考生选材虽好，但中心不够明确，如有考生写了三个片断：与同学的心近了，与老师的心近了，与父母的心近了，但各有自己的中心，没有将三个片断统一到一个主题上。还有将“心近了”误当成团结、友爱的同义词，写成了“团结就是力量”、“友爱使人快乐”等主题。

(2)文章切题 。未抓住题眼“近了”，“近了”是一个过程，而这个过程有些考生未作为重点。如有一个考生重点描写了父母与自己的矛盾，而对矛盾解决的过程即“近了”只是一笔带过就总结说“我们的心近了”，作文主次不分明。个别考生干脆将“心近了”写成“心静了”，严重偏题。有的同学字顺文美，读之感人，但读后和材料要求对照，跑题了。

(3)内容充实。少数学生为了出新出奇，另辟蹊径，对“老师”和“学生“的内涵和外延进行了拓展。如有学生把“书本”、“大自然”等比作“老师”，写出自己徜徉其中的经历和感受。有些考生将作文写成议论文或者散文，虽反复点题，但内容不够具体，缺少有力的论据或感人的细节，只是空洞的议论或抒情。如：无视“我们的心”，写成“他们的心近了”。如一个考生创作了一篇小说，笔触细腻地写了两个小女孩由竞争到互相帮助的过程，但用的是第三人称的叙述视角，没有“我们的心近了”之意，很遗憾地与一类作文失之交臂。其实只要将小说中的一个角色换成“我”即可。大部分考生都能围绕中心有话可写，内容也较充实。写作水平较高的学生所写内容都能较好地兼顾“老师”和“学生”两个方面，紧扣中心，表达有技巧，具有一的表现力，演绎出师生之间的情感变化，常令人耳目一新。

(4)感情真实。出现了许多题材雷同的套作。可能是时代变了，考生的作文中有不少写对后妈由排斥到心近的过程。有许多夫妻离婚可以理解，怎么父母离婚了，孩子都是跟着爸爸?后妈个个都那么宽容、忍让?这类作品有些感情不够真实，很难得高分。

(5)立意新颖。作文关键抓住“心近了”来立意，选材涉及到对题目中的 “我们”的具体所指，大多数学生理解为“我与父亲”、“我与母亲”、“我与老师”、“我与同学”、“我与朋友”、“我与后爸”、“我与后妈”等，具体所指的身边人物，当属切题作文;还有把“我们”理解为台湾与祖国大陆，香港、澳门与祖国，时值香港回归祖国十周年之际，属立意有一定的高度;还有理解为中国与世界、中国加入WTO，世界经济一体化;中国与日本、涉及到中日两国由来已久的渊源关系，到当下的中日关系;中国与印度，涉及海啸中中国人民的友好援助。这些都充分体现了学生对时事的关注，对焦点问题的思考，眼界相当开阔，立意也很深刻。

除以上几方面以外，还有就是我与书，我与语文，我与古代名家，像李白、杜甫、陶渊明、李煜等等，写得是大气磅礴，文采飞扬，充分显示了学生深厚的文学底蕴，这些当属一类作文中的上品。

(二)表达方面

(1)表达方式运用得好。多数考生表达方式运用的合理，但也有一些考生处理不好。如：出现了一些结构不够完整，表达方式单一，甚至不知所云的作品，如一些考生通篇记叙自己与父母关系“近了”的事实，没有动人的细节描写，语言平淡无味，缺少感染力，缺少个性;从表达角度来看，大多数学生还是以大量口语化的语言出现在卷面，缺乏书面语，缺少语文的文学气息。

(2)结构完整，条理清楚。如：一位考生的考场作文，全文的结构如下：师生之间是加减乘除。一：师生之间是+，老师+学生=家;二：师生之间是-，减去烦恼;三：师生之间是×，师生相乘，走向成功;四：师生之间是÷，除去陋习，让学生改邪归正。总结：加减乘除都是爱。

(3)语句流畅、通顺。语言以朴实真挚风格为主，有不少语言流畅、文采飞扬的佳作。如：有一位考生写中日关系近了，远溯到唐代用鉴真六次东渡和晁衡留居长安证明两国一衣带水的亲密，又提到近代日本对中国的侵略，日本右翼分子的猖狂，中国一部分人民身受伤害后的仇日情绪表现“远”了，然后用两国民间社团友好往来，温总理“融冰之旅”表现两国人民相互了解和对和平友好的向往以及希望世界和平的主题。行文结构严谨，通篇语言流畅，美妙的比喻和一气呵成的排比层出不穷，且恰到好处。最后以“心近了，心静了，心惊了，心敬了，心近了”结束全篇，耐人寻味。

有少数学生引用古诗文名句，巧用一些修辞造句，驾驶语言的能力相当强。 如： 开篇： 蒲公英因长风飞向远方，小树苗因甘霖获得滋长，学生因老师而成材。结尾：冰寒于水而出于水，青胜于蓝而出于蓝。纵观整体来说，基本上做到了语句通顺，表述清楚。一部分考生通篇议论抒情、空喊口号，令人乏味;还有个别考生掉书袋，几乎每一句都要引用古诗句，没有自己的语言和感悟可言。

(三)字数的要求。安徽省及芜湖市均有明确的规定：考虑到内容的充实，文章不要少于500字。字数不足500字，每少50字酌情扣一分。但是，一篇文章写的字数较少分量自然很轻。其实，400字、500字的作文扣分不过2分，可再少就不仅仅是字数的问题了。从考场作文实际看，600-700字的作文很多，分数上也偏向这些文章。

(四)、卷面书写。试卷最后一项得分栏就是卷面得分，共5分。根据是书写干净与否;有无涂抹和大面积改动;字体端正、匀称、工整与否。卷面整洁，书写、标点、格式正确等一般给4—5分，最少2—3分。从得分看，字体有形、书写清楚的文章得分较高，好作文卷面分也很高，是相辅相成的。

《语文课程标准》的总目标中，对学生写作能力有如下概括：能具体明确、文从字顺地表达自己的意思，能根据日常生活需要，运用常见的表达方式写作。其实，作文评分标准只是参考，最主要的是鼓励学生写真事、抒真情，写作的过程也是一个教育学生做人的过程。