高中英语作文20分评分标准(合集20篇)

Dear Friend,

How have you been recently? I miss you very much. Do you still remember

me?

To be honest, Im honored to make friends with you. I still remember the

days when we were together. As far as I know, you are the kindest person in the

world. Once we were together, you always treated me as if I were your dear

brother, so I was grateful to you in my heart. After you leaving, I always

thought of you. Next time we have a chance to see each other, I will say "thank

you" to you. Thank you for your kindness. Now I have got the meaning of my

life.

Although we are in two different places now, we are still together, because

we are always heart to heart. I believe we can see each other again. Since we

are always close friends as well as dear brothers. Because of you, my life is

always so significant. Wherever I am, I will pray good luck for you.

Last but not the least, I hope you can make it and have a bright

future.

Sincerely yours,

Jason

We need to follow all kinds of public rules, such as the manner rules and

the traffic regulation. If we break the rules, then all the work will be out of

order and everybody will suffer the loss. But few people just ignore the rules

and waste other people’s time and money.

Chinese high speed train has won many praise from foreign people. The

trains always start off as the timetable and reach the destination on time. High

speed train is popular by the public by its speed and punctuality, but what if

someone breaks the traffic rule? Recently, a video got popular on the Internet.

A woman was stuck in the door of high speed train and the staffs tried to stop

her but failed. She said her husband was on the way and she wanted the train to

start off later. How ridiculous it was. How could she let all the passengers to

wait for her. Everybody’s time is precious.

Though the woman apologized after the policemen’s education, what she did

discomforts the public. The way she acted wasted the public’s time. It is our

duty to follow rules and keep the public in order.

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1、Diligence is the mother of success.

成功来自勤奋。

2、God helps those who help themselves.

自助者天助。

3、Gold will not buy anything.

黄金并非万能。

4、No man can do two things at once.

一心不可二用。

5、Nothing is difficult to the man who will try.

世上无难事，只要肯登攀。

6、Wealth is nothing without health.

失去健康，钱再多也没用。

7、Dont put off till tomorrow what should be done today.

今日事，今日毕。

8、Two heads are better than one.

三个臭皮匠，赛过诸葛亮。

9、Actions speak louder than words.

事实胜于雄辩。

10、A friend in need is a friend indeed.

患难见真情。

11、All things are difficult before they are easy.

万事先难后易。

12、An idle youth, a needy age. / A young idler, an old beggar.

少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲。

13、Well begun is half done.

良好的开端是成功的一半。

14、Health is happiness.

健康就是幸福。

15、He laughs best who laughs last.

谁笑到最后，谁笑得最好。

16、Failure is the mother of success.

失败是成功之母。

17、Where there is a will, there is a way.

有志者事竟成。

18、Practice makes perfect.

熟能生巧。

19、An apple a day keeps the doctor away.

一天一个苹果，医生远离我。

20、Health is above wealth.

健康胜于财富。

21、Kill two birds with one stone.

一箭双雕。

22、All beginnings are hard.

万事开头难。

23、The early bird catches the worm.

早起的鸟儿有虫吃。

24、Easier said than done.

说起来容易做起来难。

25、Think twice before you do、/Look before you leap.

三思而后行。

26、Do as the Romans do.

入乡随俗。

27、A good beginning is half done.

良好的开端是成功的一半。

28、Knowledge is power.

知识就是力量。

29、Facts speak plainer than words.

事实胜于雄辩。

30、Confidence in yourself is the first step on the road to success.

自信是走向成功的第一步。

31、A thousand mile trip begins with one step.

千里之行，始于足下。

32、Unity is strength.

团结就是力量。

33、Time and tide wait for no man.

时不我待。

34、Do nothing by halves.

不可半途而废。

35、Business before pleasure.

先工作，后娱乐。

36、Nothing is too difficult in the world if you set your mind into it.

世上无难事，只怕有心人。

37、Dont judge by appearance.

不可以貌取人。

38、Time flies.

光阴似箭。

39、Time is money.

时间就是金钱。

40、Nothing seek, nothing find.

没有追求就没有收获。

41、A life without a friend is a life without a sun.

人生没有朋友，犹如生活没有阳光。

42、A life without a friend is a life without a sun.

活到老，学到老。

43、All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.

只工作而无娱乐会使人愚钝。

44、Every advantage has its disadvantage.

有利必有弊。

45、Every advantage has its disadvantage.

光阴一去不复返。

46、All roads lead to Rome.

条条大路通罗马。

47、Do it now.(.)

机不可失，时不再来。

48、As one door closes, another door opens.

无绝人之路。

49、Honesty is the best policy.

做人诚信为本。

january 18 XX

i have rested for a week. i began to feel bored. so i went out with my friends. they are my best friends in the middle school. we didn’t go to someplace special. we just saw the other. we had lunch together. while we were having lunch, we were still talking about the new school and new friends. yes! a year later, we have grown riper. and we learned much more things and got new life. we haven’t enough time to play, to waste and to lose the way. we only have two years. two years to go, we will get the real life which belongs to us.

【译文】

1月18日XX

我已经休息了一个星期。我开始感到无聊。所以我和我的朋友出去。他们是我最好的朋友在中学。我们没有去特别的地方。我们只是看到了其他。我们一起共进午餐。当我们吃午饭,我们仍在谈论新的学校和新朋友。是的!一年后,我们变得成熟。和我们学到了更多的东西,得到了新的生活。我们没有足够的时间去玩,浪费和损失。我们只有两年。两年去,我们会得到真正的生活,是属于我们的。

january 19 XX

i have stayed in shanghai alone for a week. it’s time for me to go to my real home—it is in beijing. my parents are waiting for me. although outside is no matter how beautiful, beijing is still my home. in fact, there is many fresh things. like red bayberries. in the afternoon, i took a bus to beijing. i was very unlucky that my mp3 was stolen. i was very sad. i didn’t know why thieves went to steal other’s things. why don’t they hunt for a job? i don’t why! i hope there is no thief in our motherland.

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1月19日XX

我独自在上海呆了一个星期。我去的时候我真正的房屋,它是在北京。我的父母正在等我。虽然外面是无论多么美丽,北京仍然是我的家。事实上,有很多新鲜的东西。喜欢红色月桂树。下午,我乘公共汽车去北京。我很倒霉,我的mp3被偷了。我非常伤心。我不知道为什么小偷去偷别人的东西。为什么他们不寻找工作吗?我不为什么!我希望没有小偷在我们的祖国。

january 20 XX

when i got home, it was very dark. why? there is no electric. every year in beijing, there is lack of electric to supply. because there are a lot of factories. and it is very cold in winter. so the government decided: supply electric to resident and the factories must stop working. my house is in the manufacturing district. i was unlucky. it was very cold. so my father use the electric making machine to make electric. oh! what a unlucky winter!

【译文】

1月20日XX

当我回到家,它很黑。为什么?没有电。每年在北京,有缺乏电力供应。因为有很多工厂。在冬天,它很冷。所以政府决定:电力供应居民和工厂必须停止工作。我的房子在制造业。我真倒霉。它很冷。所以我父亲使用电力电气制造机。哦!多么不幸的冬天!

january 21 XX

it was cooler than yesterday. one of my father’s friends invited me to eat red bayberries. you must know it is unusual. because we will climb the hill to eat red bayberries. there is no chance to eat red bayberries in the hill for the people who don’t live in beijing. on the hill, you can breathe the fresh air, you can listen birds singing and you can eat red bayberries. it was enjoyable. it is said there are wild pigs in the hill. what a beautiful natural.

【译文】

1月21日XX

这是比昨天凉爽。我父亲的一个朋友邀请我去吃红月桂树。你必须知道它是不寻常的。因为我们将爬山吃红色的月桂树。没有机会吃红杨梅山上的人不要住在北京。在山上,你能呼吸新鲜空气,你可以听鸟儿唱歌,你可以吃红月桂树。这是令人愉快的。据说山上有野猪。多么美丽的自然。

Smoking and Health-吸烟与健康

About Internet-关于因特网

The Problem of Food-食品问题

Add Feet-添足

Accompany Us Studying-陪读

Early Rising-早起

My Dream-我的梦想

Going Abroad-出国

Correct Directions-辨明方向

真正的美-True Beauty

读书的价值-The Value of Reading Books

空余时间的利用-Use of Free Time

环境与发展-Development and the Environment

过度词

1)递进：furthermore,moreover,besides,inaddition

2)转折：however,but,nevertheless,after all

3)总结：finally,at last,in brief,to conclude

4)强调：really,indeed,certainly,surely,above all

5)对比：in the same way, just as, on the other hand

中间段落句

1. 相反，有一些人赞成……，他们相信……，而且，他们认为……。

On the contrary，there are some people in favor of ___.At the same time，they say____.

2. 但是，我认为这不是解决……的好方法，比如……。最糟糕的是……。

But I don"t think it is a very good way to solve ____.For example，____.Worst of all，___.

3. ……对我们国家的发展和建设是必不可少的，(也是)非常重要的。首先，……。而且……，最重要的是……

______is necessary and important to our country"s development and construction. First，______.What"s more, _____.Most important of all,______.

4. 有几个可供我们采纳的方法。首先，我们可以……。

There are several measures for us to adopt. First, we can______

5. 面临……，我们应该采取一系列行之有效的方法来……。一方面……，另一方面，

Confronted with______，we should take a series of effective measures to______. For one thing，______For another，______

6. 早就应该拿出行动了。比如说……，另外……。所有这些方法肯定会……。

It is high time that something was done about it. For example. _____.In addition. _____.All these measures will certainly______.

7. 为什么……?第一个原因是……;第二个原因是……;第三个原因是……。总的来说，……的主要原因是由于……

Why______? The first reason is that ______.The second reason is ______.The third is ______.For all this, the main cause of ______due to ______.

8. 然而，正如任何事物都有好坏两个方面一样，……也有它的不利的一面，象……。

However, just like everything has both its good and bad sides, ______also has its own disadvantages, such as ______.

9. 尽管如此，我相信……更有利。

Nonetheless, I believe that ______is more advantageous.

10. 完全同意……这种观点(陈述)，主要理由如下：

I fully agree with the statement that ______ because______.

(三)结尾句

1. 至于我，在某种程度上我同意后面的观点，我认为……

As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter opinion to some extent. I think that ____.

2. 总而言之，整个社会应该密切关注……这个问题。只有这样，我们才能在将来……。

In a word, the whole society should pay close attention to the problem of ______.Only in this way can ______in the future.

3. 但是，……和……都有它们各自的优势(好处)。例如，……，而……。然而，把这两者相比较，我更倾向于(喜欢)……

But ______and ______have their own advantages. For example, _____, while_____. Comparing this with that, however, I prefer to______.

4. 就我个人而言，我相信……，因此，我坚信美好的未来正等着我们。因为……

Personally, I believe that_____. Consequently, I’m confident that a bright future is awaiting us because______.

5. 随着社会的发展，……。因此，迫切需要……。如果每个人都愿为社会贡献自已的一份力量，这个社会将要变得越来越好。

With the development of society, ______.So it"s urgent and necessary to ____.If every member is willing to contribute himself to the society, it will be better and better.

6. 至于我(对我来说，就我而言)，我认为……更合理。只有这样，我们才能……

For my part, I think it reasonable to_____. Only in this way can you _____.

7. 对我来说，我认为有必要……。原因如下：第一，……; 第二，……;最后……但同样重要的是……

In my opinion, I think it necessary to____. The reasons are as follows. First _____.Second ______. Last but not least,______.

8. 在总体上很难说……是好还是坏，因为它在很大程度上取决于……的形势。然而，就我个人而言，我发现……。

It is difficult to say whether _____is good or not in general as it depends very much on the situation of______. However, from a personal point of view find______.

9. 综上所述，我们可以清楚地得出结论……

From what has been discussed above, we may reasonably arrive at the conclusion that____.

10. 如果我们不采取有效的方法，就可能控制不了这种趋势，就会出现一些意想不到的不良后果，所以，我们应该做的是……

If we can not take useful means, we may not control this trend, and some undesirable result may come out unexpectedly, so what we should do is_____.

The generation gap refers to the difference in attitude toward thing or the

lack of understanding between young people and older folks.

In families as well as in society, the young and the older may not agree

with each other on this and that from time to time. Young people would llke to

make as much money as they could and spend as much money as they could earn

while older folks are easily satisfied with what they earn and save as much as

possible. Young people llke the exciting and deafening pop music while older

folks prefer melodious folk-songs or classic music. A boy and a glrl today may

fall in love with each other as quick as lightning, while their parents or grand

parents might trudge over a long distance before they kissed each other and

became lovers when they were young.

However, we should not be amazed at the generation gap,for it is quite

natural in the development of society. The world is a changing world, in which

everything keeps changing, generations of human beings included. And changes

lead to progress.

高中写未来生活的英语作文带翻译范文篇1

With the development of science and technology, our lives have changed a lot in the past century. Many things that wouldn’t happen before have come into reality now. Therefore, our lives will change as well in the future. Our pace of live will greatly speed up, because we will help many machines to finish our work. Many things can be done autonomously. Therefore, people will have more time for fun. People can travel the outer space freely. Space shuttle can bring people to planets far from the earth. Human beings may live in other planets. Besides, our environment will be much better than now, because some effective measures are taken to protect the environment. Earth is still a beautiful home for human.

随着科技的发展，上个世纪我们的生活发生了很大改变。很多以前不可能发生的事现在都成为了现实。因此，我们将来的生活也会改变。我们的生活节奏会大大加快，因为我们会让很多机器帮我们完成工作。很多事情都可以自动完成。这样人们就有更多时间来玩了。人们可以自由到外太空旅游。航天飞机可以把人们带到远离地球的行星上。此外，我们的环境会比现在好，因为我们可以采取一些有效措施来保护环境。地球仍旧是人类的美好家园。

高中写未来生活的英语作文带翻译范文篇2

I imagine a lot about lives in the future. I think two words can summarize my imagination. The first word is fast. In the future, we will have more quickly transportation means. Now matter how far we go, it takes only a short time. With the development of science and technology, we can travel to the moon, Mars or somewhere outer space. People may can live in other planets. The second word is convenient. Because of the fast development of our society, many work can be done by the computers or even robots. Lots of things are fully automated. Humans just need to give some simple instructions to complete complecated tasks.

我对未来生活充满了想象。我认为可以用两个词来概括我的想象。第一个词是快速。将来，我们会拥有更快的交通方式。不管我们去得多远，它总能在短时间内把我们带到目的地。随着科学技术的发展，我们可以到月球，火星或者其他外太空旅游。人们也许可以在其他星球居住。第二个词是便利。由于社会的快速发展，很多工作可以用电脑或者机器人来完成。很多东西都是全自动的。人们只需要提供一些简单的指令来完成复杂的任务。

Since we went to school, we have been educated to be polite, no matter to

the young or old people. People follow the manner rules and have a nice

communication between each other, but some people ignore the rules and they

treat their rude behaviors as something cool. Today, people advocate the

individuality, so the young generation wants to do something different and catch

peoples attention. For example, they dont care other peoples feeling and

criticize others as they like, or just interrupt when other people is talking,

they just show what they want to say and they believe they are special and cool.

This is very rude behavior that they dont respect others and have the wrong

idea about individuality. We can do something special on the base of respect

others and follow the rules, or we are just the rude people.

When we are very small, we dream to be the great person in the future, such

as the scientist, the policeman and so on. It is good for the children to own

the big dream, so that they will study hard and fight for their future. But the

fact is that not all the person can become the great person, most people are

doing the ordinary jobs. In my opinion, ordinary is beautiful, too. Though they

are not doing the fine jobs, they find their own place and make a contribution

to the world. Take the cleaner for example. They wake up early and do the

cleaning work. People dare not to do the job because it is so dirty, but the

cleaners decorate the city with their hard work. The cleaners are the ordinary

people while doing the great job.

Going to high school is my first time to leave home. I have to live in school from Monday to Friday. I like to stay away from my parents for some time, because I can make my own choice and be free to go anywhere. My friends and I like to spend the weekend in the countryside that near the city we live. It is the short travel that I can not only appreciate the beautiful scenery, but also learn to be independent. The things that nature teaches me are a lot. I can see from the color of the cloud to predict the weather and the sound of of animals have different meanings. All of these are hard to know from the books. I have my own thinking from these trips, and the way to take care of myself helps me to grow up.

A young man asked Socrates the secret to success. Socrates told the young man to meet him near the river the next morning. They met. Socrates asked the young man to walk with him toward the river. When the water got up to their neck, Socrates took the young man by surprise and ducked him into the water. The boy struggled to get out but Socrates was strong and kept him there until the boy started turning blue. Socrates pulled his head out of the water and the first thing the young man did was to gasp and take a deep breath of air. Socrates asked, “What did you want the most when you were there?” The boy replied, “Air.” Socrates said, “That is the secret to success. When you want success as badly as you wanted the air, then you will get it. There is no other secret.”

一个年轻人向苏格拉底询问成功的秘诀，苏格拉底让年轻人第二天早晨到河边 见他。他们见面后，苏格拉底叫年轻人和他一起走向河里，当河水淹至他们的 脖子时，苏格拉底出其不意地抓住年轻人并把其压入水中，那人想要挣出水面， 而强壮有力的苏格拉底将他摁在水中直到他变得无力抗争，脸色发青。苏格拉 底将他的头拖出水面，这个年轻人所做的第一件事就是大口喘息后，深吸一口 气。苏格拉底问： “当你闷在水里的时候你最想要的是什么?”年轻人回答说： “空气。 ”苏格拉底说： “那就是成功的秘诀。当你像渴望空气一样渴望成功， 你就能够获得它!没有其他的秘密了。 ”

雅思作文

剑桥雅思作文评分标准：

Task Response

Coherence and Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为“内容”，“逻辑结构”，“语法的准确使用和范围”以及“词汇量”四个标准。

实际案例

根据下面的全面修改案例，读者可以清楚的看到一篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。

Cambridge 8 – Test 2

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?

Has this become a positive or negative development?

原文：

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

Yes, the technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In past there was no quick technology to contact or to establish any communication between one person to another person. The drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and were time taking process such as telegrams, letter etc. People used to afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecure medium of communication. When it comes to professional level, the privacy and accuracy should be maintain but, to that time there were no secure communications.

Now the things have changed around, people from far distance contact their loves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the interaction level between two person. Quality the level of the interaction between people to people, has improved because the people are equipped with high-tec technology which enhances the communication. There are many many medium which are available now such as internet, called cards etc.

The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time anywhere in the world.

People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want. It has become so easier and feriendly to be in touch with your feriends, relatives even with the unknown people.

原文翻译：

今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了改变。

是的。技术改善了人们的交流方式。以前人们总是期待找到方便的方法联系居住在异地的亲朋好友。以前没有高效的技术帮助人们沟通交流。以往的通讯系统的问题是速度慢，费时间，比如：电报和信件等。在过去，人们不敢给爱人写一些私密的事情因为担心通信不够安全。专业的通信技术应该是安全的、准确的，但是在当时根本没有安全的通信可言。

现在，这些事情已经改变了，住在远处的人们利用一种高效的方式联系他们的爱人。这些方式改善了人们之间的交流方式。因为人们使用了改善交流的高科技，所以他们交流的方式已经得到改善。现在有了很多这类媒体，比如：国际互联网、语音卡等。

这些技术提供了更快的移动性，帮助人们在任何时间、世界上的任何地方与他人沟通。

现在人们能够在任何时间联系亲朋好友。和朋友、家人以及陌生人的沟通变得更容易了。

（注：上述的习作存在语法错误和表达错误，因此对应的翻译也有一定出入。）

Sample Answer:

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.5 score. Here is the examiner’s comment:

这是一位考生写的5.5分作文。下面是考官的评语。

The topic introduction has been copied from the task and is deducted from the word count. This leaves the answer underlength at 236 words, so the candidate loses marks for this.

文章的开篇是从标题中抄来的，所以不能算字数。剩下的只有236个字，考生因此失分。

This answer addresses both questions, but the first is not well covered in terms of how actual relationships have changed. Nevertheless, there is a clear opinion that the effects have been positive and relationships have improved, with some relevant ideas to support this. There is a general progression to the argument, with some effective use of time markers and linkers. There is also some repetition, however. Paragraphing is not always logical, and ideas are not always well linked. A range of vocabulary that is relevant to the topic is used, including some precise and natural expressions. There are quite a lot of mistakes in word form, word choice or spelling, but these do not usually reduce understanding. A variety of sentence type is used, but not always accurately. Errors in grammar and punctuation are distracting at times, but only rarely cause problems for the reader.

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Nowadays,.(It is true that technology has shifted people’s communicative ways. 利用It is true that的句式突出后面的事件；Change和shift是同义词替换；the way people interact和communicative way是同义词替换。这样的改变可以避免引用标题中的原词。)

（拒绝非正式的使用方法。）The technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people used（前后时态必须一致。）to wait and try to find easy ways（名词单复数）to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In the past, there was no （词汇使用不当，应该改成effective）technology to contact others or to establish any communication between two people. And（重要的连接词，表示本句和上一句共同解释为什么“人们一直在期待找到更有效的通讯方式。”）the drawback ofthe past communication systems was that they （指代不清，这里指代的是communication systems）were too （表示“太”。）slow and were time-consuming （表示“费时”）, including （这是应该使用分词形式，表示对主句的communication ways的具体描述。）the telegrams, the letter etc. Not only that,（这里需要连接词）people used to be afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their loved ones because of （because of 强调“外部原因”；due to 强调“根据”）information security （根据上下文理解，此处应该表达的是“信息安全”）of communication. (They worried their letters might be stolen or read by some strangers.这里可以继续描述人们的担心。)

However，（上文主要讨论过去的情况，而接下来将讨论现在的改变）now the things have changed around.（必须避免使用“，”连接两个句子。正确的处理方法是，要么采用断句的方法，要么添加连词。）People in a long distance contact their lovesd one in (effective and efficient) ways, which improve（主谓一致，which代替ways。）the interaction level between two persons. Quality （用词重复）of the interaction between people and people（主谓之间不能添加“，”。）has been improved（这里使用被动是因为沟通质量的提升是因为技术的发展。）because they are equipped with high-techdevices which enhances their communication. There are many（重复）mediummediaavailable such as internet, called cards etc.So the technology has provided better mobility , which help people to talk or keep in touch with each other at any time anywhere in the world.（不应该单独成段，应该和上一段结合在一起。）（本句应该被删除，因为没有提出任何新的观点，并且与上文的句子非常重复。）

Li Ying is one of my classmates.We share a bedroom with four others,so we

are also roommates.Today is her birthday and it so happened that it is Sunday at

the weekend.We decide to hold a party to celebrate Li Yings birthday in our own

bedroom.Since she is the youngest in our room,we all feel responsible to take

care of her.We hope that this party can relieve her homesickness.

We bought some fruit and candy,nineteen small candles,and a cake.At seven

in the evening,the party began.We lit the candles and sang "A happy birthday to

you" to Li Ying.And then we each gave her a small present.Li Ying looked excited

and happy.She blew out the candles,and we tasted the fruit and candy while

talking about various funny things we experienced in our childhood at home.At

the end of the party we encouraged each other to study even harder and be top

students in our class.

The party was a success,for Li Ying seemed very pleased and looked more

confident of herself.Tomorrow she will be nineteen years of age.

一个人静静地坐在书桌前，望着照片上老师那和蔼可亲的脸，心中泛起阵阵涟漪。因为有了您，就有了一个特别的节日－－教师节。从此，我们就多了一份对您深深的敬意。是您播种未来，是您点燃我理想之火，是您在我心里播下了快乐的火种，让我感受到的一切欢乐因老师您的爱而起。在我快要站立不住的时候，您给我一个鼓励的眼神。在我悲伤的时候，您点起我的希望之火；在我迷茫的时候，您为我照亮前进的道路！虽然我们只相处了一年！但那些难忘的日子呀！是您－－老师，让我学会如何面对困难，如何感受生活，如何珍惜幸福，如何自我发展。

不知您是否还记得那件事那次期中考，我考的很差，伤心了好几天，您知道后，就找我去谈心，您静静的看着我，，眼睫毛时不时眨动着，但您的目光不动。昔日严肃的面庞，挂着一种温和的笑容。那是这样的一种眼神，有关爱，有温馨，有期望，有激励，那么明亮，那么闪烁，给我温暖，给我勇气！霎时间，来自心灵的感觉传遍全身，是震撼，更是感激。悲伤已没有必要，有的只是一个新的起点，一次摔倒后的重新爬起，一次为了成功必须迎接失败。

老师，我们相处的时间是365天，但时间早已悄悄流逝，一晃就过去，也许有人说的对快乐的时光很容易流失，我能感觉到你这段时间尽心尽力的为我们付出。因为您的鼓励，让我有重新起航的信心；因为您的邮件，让我有勇敢面对困难的信心；谢谢您让我对现在充满活力，对未来充满理想。这一年的点点滴滴，一个个动人的情景把我的生活点缀得精彩美丽，也把我的记忆巩固得刻骨铭心。我忘不了您！

我在心底默默地感谢曾经在我学习失败时0，鼓励我成功是从这里起步的；在我悲伤时，安慰我吴晓振作起来的英语老师。然而——一切发生得那么突然，就在我按您的话开始努力的时候，我却即将要离开您了。

“感恩的心，感谢有你，陪伴着我度过快乐的高二。感恩的心，感谢命运，花开花落我一样会珍惜我们的师生情。”老师，感谢你，感谢您一年以来在讲台上用汗水浇洒干渴的我们；感谢你一年来如蜡烛般燃烧自己，照亮我们；

风儿吹下一片落叶，承载着我心中的一句话：老师，我爱你！真的很舍不得离开您！

最后，让我再真诚地说声：“谢谢！”

[高中我的英语老师作文

导入：

第1段：Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题)

Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧)

正文：

第2段：Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点)

Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由)

第3段：However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点)

Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由)

结论：

第4段：Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点) オ

根据初中阶段的写作具体目标：写作时考虑不同的目的和对象，写作要感情真挚，力求表达自己对自然、社会、人生的独特感受和真切体验;多角度地观察生活，发现生活的丰富多彩，捕捉事物的特征，力求有创意地表达;根据表达的中心，选择恰当的表达方式。合理安排内容的先后和详略。条理清楚地表达自己的意思。运用联想和想像，丰富表达的内容;写记叙文，做到内容具体：写简单的说明文，做到明白清楚;写简单的议论文，做到有理有据;根据生活需要，写日常应用文……简单地说，就是会写记叙文、简单的说明文、简单的议论文和一般的应用文;内容具体明确，语言文从字顺;感情真实健康，力求有创意。安徽省中考作文评分基本上涵盖了上述精神。

一、作文评分总体要求

以安徽省2009年中考题“师生之间”为例，对中考作文评分标准具体分析，具有可解读性和可操作性。这个命题作文，它的内容很宽泛，可写的东西很多，有关师生之间的事、物、情，皆可入文。具体评分要求如下：

1、要审清题目。文章要切题，不能写成“我的老师”， 要扣住“之间”来写，是老师和学生之间的双向活动。

2、体裁要分辨清。叙事有起伏，阐述有哲理，写人须有触动人物内心深处，抒情、议论兼而有之。

3、立意要有创新。文题看似平平淡淡，没有精心雕琢，但要写出独特的、与众不同之处。师生老师与学生的界定可以引申、拓展，也可以是广义的。

4、文章有真情实感。写事要具体可感，语言要流畅，有文采，有点睛之笔，行文思路清晰，感情充沛。

二、作文分等分类简述

就阅卷评分标准结合学生实际作文情况，作文大致分为以下几类：

(一)力求创新。力避旧瓶装新酒，有的同学在考场中将师与生进行引申、比喻，文章开头引用《三字经》中的“生不学，师之惰”，接着亮出自己的观点，“生不学”未必是“师之惰”，用“诸葛亮与刘禅”这对师生来佐证。以思辩的眼光去看待师生之间的关系，提倡一种平等、和谐的新型师生关系，这篇文章结构完整、首尾照应、层次清楚、语言流畅，应属一类文(得54分)。

(二)形式新颖。

形式新颖，内容详实、描写具体。比如一位考生列了四个小标题：“酸”、“甜”、“苦”、“辣”，分别写了与老师之间的四件事，也都有师生之间的活动，有师生间真挚的情感，内容具体真实，可成为一篇佳作，属一类中等(得50分)。

(三)误读题意。一位考生将师生之间写成了“教与学”的关系，整篇文章围绕着“师傅领进门，修行在个人”来写。在立意、内容上只能归属为三类下、四类上。(得30分左右)

(四)选材陈旧。在选材方面流于俗套而缺乏真挚的情感。比如很多考生写在我生病时老师不顾羸弱的身体背着我去医院，老师在下雨天送我回家，把伞让给学生，自己却淋透了，生病了等。没有从生活实际中选取典型的、新颖的、感人的事例来表现主题。这样的事例不够典型，情感也抒发的不到位就难以达到感动人的目的。属三类下。(得32分)

(五)切题不紧。中等成绩的考生的作文都更倾向于写老师是如何对待自己的，主要写老师是如何关心我，如何辅导我的学习，这样的文章中老师的行动是主体，其中穿插了学生的感悟与体会，但占的笔墨不多，因为写老师的文字中必然有学生的活动。这样的文章不能说完全切题，也不能说离题，因为它写到了老师对学生的关爱与呵护。属于二类下、三类上。(得38分)

(六)文体单一。绝大多数写成记叙文，显得平铺直叙，没有生动、细致的描写，选择写议论文的很少，即使有所议论，也是空发感慨。基本上分数不会太高。(得25分上下)

三、中考作文评分细则解读

我们通常用语言优美、立意新颖、结构独特、构思精巧、内容充实、感情真实、表达恰当等方面去评判优秀学生的作文。其实，对于绝大多数学生来说，评分标准的制定有所局限性，就安徽省而言，主要从内容和表达两个方面对作文的评分细则简要解析。

(一)内容方面：

新课标所提倡的作文理念，在安徽省的作文命题及评分标准的制定中已得到很好的体现。内容具体、充实的作文也不在少数，考生视野开阔，体现了他们对生活的感悟，做到了我手写我心，出现了一大批关注亲情友情、关注社会自然、关注艺术历史的佳作。如2007年安徽省的“我们的心近了”，有考生写通过感悟李白、李煜和岳飞的诗词与他们的爱国之心;有写通过印度洋海啸与世界人民的心近了，通过中国免除非洲债务，中国人民与非洲人民的心近了……这些选材与立意都是很高的，有部分考生写社会生活的一些小小的细节反映人与人之间的心近了，如写为瓜农提供方便，与辛苦劳作的人心近了;到山区体验生活与农村孩子的心近了，选材立意温暖人心……我感到：出题人与考生的心近了，考生与家庭、学校、社会、自然、历史的心近了。具体得分点有以下几点：

(1)中心明确。有些考生选材虽好，但中心不够明确，如有考生写了三个片断：与同学的心近了，与老师的心近了，与父母的心近了，但各有自己的中心，没有将三个片断统一到一个主题上。还有将“心近了”误当成团结、友爱的同义词，写成了“团结就是力量”、“友爱使人快乐”等主题。

(2)文章切题 。未抓住题眼“近了”，“近了”是一个过程，而这个过程有些考生未作为重点。如有一个考生重点描写了父母与自己的矛盾，而对矛盾解决的过程即“近了”只是一笔带过就总结说“我们的心近了”，作文主次不分明。个别考生干脆将“心近了”写成“心静了”，严重偏题。有的同学字顺文美，读之感人，但读后和材料要求对照，跑题了。

(3)内容充实。少数学生为了出新出奇，另辟蹊径，对“老师”和“学生“的内涵和外延进行了拓展。如有学生把“书本”、“大自然”等比作“老师”，写出自己徜徉其中的经历和感受。有些考生将作文写成议论文或者散文，虽反复点题，但内容不够具体，缺少有力的论据或感人的细节，只是空洞的议论或抒情。如：无视“我们的心”，写成“他们的心近了”。如一个考生创作了一篇小说，笔触细腻地写了两个小女孩由竞争到互相帮助的过程，但用的是第三人称的叙述视角，没有“我们的心近了”之意，很遗憾地与一类作文失之交臂。其实只要将小说中的一个角色换成“我”即可。大部分考生都能围绕中心有话可写，内容也较充实。写作水平较高的学生所写内容都能较好地兼顾“老师”和“学生”两个方面，紧扣中心，表达有技巧，具有一的表现力，演绎出师生之间的情感变化，常令人耳目一新。

(4)感情真实。出现了许多题材雷同的套作。可能是时代变了，考生的作文中有不少写对后妈由排斥到心近的过程。有许多夫妻离婚可以理解，怎么父母离婚了，孩子都是跟着爸爸?后妈个个都那么宽容、忍让?这类作品有些感情不够真实，很难得高分。

(5)立意新颖。作文关键抓住“心近了”来立意，选材涉及到对题目中的 “我们”的具体所指，大多数学生理解为“我与父亲”、“我与母亲”、“我与老师”、“我与同学”、“我与朋友”、“我与后爸”、“我与后妈”等，具体所指的身边人物，当属切题作文;还有把“我们”理解为台湾与祖国大陆，香港、澳门与祖国，时值香港回归祖国十周年之际，属立意有一定的高度;还有理解为中国与世界、中国加入WTO，世界经济一体化;中国与日本、涉及到中日两国由来已久的渊源关系，到当下的中日关系;中国与印度，涉及海啸中中国人民的友好援助。这些都充分体现了学生对时事的关注，对焦点问题的思考，眼界相当开阔，立意也很深刻。

除以上几方面以外，还有就是我与书，我与语文，我与古代名家，像李白、杜甫、陶渊明、李煜等等，写得是大气磅礴，文采飞扬，充分显示了学生深厚的文学底蕴，这些当属一类作文中的上品。

(二)表达方面

(1)表达方式运用得好。多数考生表达方式运用的合理，但也有一些考生处理不好。如：出现了一些结构不够完整，表达方式单一，甚至不知所云的作品，如一些考生通篇记叙自己与父母关系“近了”的事实，没有动人的细节描写，语言平淡无味，缺少感染力，缺少个性;从表达角度来看，大多数学生还是以大量口语化的语言出现在卷面，缺乏书面语，缺少语文的文学气息。

(2)结构完整，条理清楚。如：一位考生的考场作文，全文的结构如下：师生之间是加减乘除。一：师生之间是+，老师+学生=家;二：师生之间是-，减去烦恼;三：师生之间是×，师生相乘，走向成功;四：师生之间是÷，除去陋习，让学生改邪归正。总结：加减乘除都是爱。

(3)语句流畅、通顺。语言以朴实真挚风格为主，有不少语言流畅、文采飞扬的佳作。如：有一位考生写中日关系近了，远溯到唐代用鉴真六次东渡和晁衡留居长安证明两国一衣带水的亲密，又提到近代日本对中国的侵略，日本右翼分子的猖狂，中国一部分人民身受伤害后的仇日情绪表现“远”了，然后用两国民间社团友好往来，温总理“融冰之旅”表现两国人民相互了解和对和平友好的向往以及希望世界和平的主题。行文结构严谨，通篇语言流畅，美妙的比喻和一气呵成的排比层出不穷，且恰到好处。最后以“心近了，心静了，心惊了，心敬了，心近了”结束全篇，耐人寻味。

有少数学生引用古诗文名句，巧用一些修辞造句，驾驶语言的能力相当强。 如： 开篇： 蒲公英因长风飞向远方，小树苗因甘霖获得滋长，学生因老师而成材。结尾：冰寒于水而出于水，青胜于蓝而出于蓝。纵观整体来说，基本上做到了语句通顺，表述清楚。一部分考生通篇议论抒情、空喊口号，令人乏味;还有个别考生掉书袋，几乎每一句都要引用古诗句，没有自己的语言和感悟可言。

(三)字数的要求。安徽省及芜湖市均有明确的规定：考虑到内容的充实，文章不要少于500字。字数不足500字，每少50字酌情扣一分。但是，一篇文章写的字数较少分量自然很轻。其实，400字、500字的作文扣分不过2分，可再少就不仅仅是字数的问题了。从考场作文实际看，600-700字的作文很多，分数上也偏向这些文章。

(四)、卷面书写。试卷最后一项得分栏就是卷面得分，共5分。根据是书写干净与否;有无涂抹和大面积改动;字体端正、匀称、工整与否。卷面整洁，书写、标点、格式正确等一般给4—5分，最少2—3分。从得分看，字体有形、书写清楚的文章得分较高，好作文卷面分也很高，是相辅相成的。

《语文课程标准》的总目标中，对学生写作能力有如下概括：能具体明确、文从字顺地表达自己的意思，能根据日常生活需要，运用常见的表达方式写作。其实，作文评分标准只是参考，最主要的是鼓励学生写真事、抒真情，写作的过程也是一个教育学生做人的过程。

Everyone admires beauty. Everyone has his own standard about beauty.

Nowadays some people tend to think that they own beauty if they have a good

looking. They are not satisfied with their appearance. They spend much money

taking a kind of operation. Can beauty really be man-made? If so， everybody can

get beauty. As a result， there is no beauty at all.

The appearance is given by our parents and is unique in the world. Everyone

should value it. Id rather prefer nature as the standard of beauty. Just accept

yourself， accept everything the god gives to you， and create the beautiful life

belong to you.

Many heroes dont have beautiful surface. However， their beautiful images

often come to our minds. Their beauty comes from their contributions to the

society.

Dont be eager to judge whether a person is beautiful or not without a

thorough understanding of him. A beautiful person is not the one with a good

looking， but with a broad and kind heart.

Good looking is pleasant while spiritual beauty is more important. As an

old saying goes， “ Virtue is fairer than beauty. ” If you have a kind heart， you

own real beauty.

As the new bell tolled, the Chinese people exclaimed with excitement, "the New Year is here! New Year! Ah! What a wonderful New Year! I am excited to run back and forth in my home, unable to restrain my joyful mood, the Spring Festival composition 600 words. When I ran to the balcony, all of a sudden, the fireworks fly on the sky, in a flash, Fried opened, and some like countless meteor, some like colorful flowers, some like golden coat, and like the golden sun, the earth was like the day. How beautiful!

High school students have come into a sensitive stage, their bodies grow so fast and their minds have to keep up with the change.

The boys and girls start to realize the gender difference, there will be some awkward moments between them.

The troubled adolescent annoys many teenagers, because they have problems all the time. For the girls, they want to look as beautiful as the commercial models, so they go on a diet and struggle with hunger.

For the boys, they want to be as cool as the heroes in the TV, so they pretend to care about nothing and go against the school regulations.

The troubles teenagers meet are very typical, they can talk to their teachers or go to see the psychologist. They need to take the right attitudes towards these problems, or they will go the wrong way.

高中生来到了敏感的阶段，他们的身体快速成长，思想不得不跟上这样的变化。男孩和女孩意识到了性别的不同，他们之间会存在尴尬的时刻。烦恼的青春期困恼着很多青少年，因为他们总是会有问题。

对于女孩来说，她们想要看起来和商业模特那样美丽，因此她们节食，挣扎于饥饿。对于男孩子来说，他们想要和电视上的英雄们那么酷，因此他们假装对一切不在意，违背校规。青少年遇到的麻烦是很典型的，他们可以和老师聊聊，或者去咨询心里医生。他们需要正确对待这些问题，不然容易走歪道。

[高中英语作文：烦恼的青春期

一、根据衔接词本身在文章中起到的作用，主要分为以下四类，即“起”、“承”、“转”、“合”。

(一)表示“起”的词/词组：用于开篇引出扩展句。

at first 最初 for one thing?(for another)

at present 现在;当今 首先?(其次)?

currently 目前;最后 recently 最近

first(ly)第一 in general 一般说来

in the beginning 起初 one the one hand?(on the other hand)

to begin with 首先;第一 一方面?(另一方面)

first of all 首先;第一 generally speaking 一般地说

in the first place 首先;第一 on the whole 总起来说

lately 最近 to start with 首先;第一

presently 现在;此刻 now 现在

(二)有关“承”的常用词语：用来承接上文。

after/after that/afterwards此后 by this time 此时

after a few days 几天以后 certainly 无疑地;当然地

after a while过了一会儿 therefore 因此;结果

also/too 并且;又 for example 例如

at the same time 同时 for instance 例如

beside 此外 for this purpose 为了这个目的

Besides/what,s more 而且;此外 from now on 从此

in addition 此外 second 第二;第二点

in addition to? 除?之外 secondly 第二

in fact 事实上 similarly 同样地

in other words 换句话说 so 所以

in particular 特别(地) soon 不久

in the same way 同样地 still 仍然

by the way 顺便提一句 then 然后

indeed 的确 third 第三;第三点

meanwhile 与此同时 thirdly 第三

moreover 而且，此外 for another 其次

no doubt 无疑地 such as 正如

obviously 明显地 later 后来

of course当然 truly 事实上;真实地

particularly特别地 unlike ?不像??;和??不同

what is more 而且;此外

(三)有关“转”的常用词语：用来表示不同或相反的意见。

after all 毕竟 fortunately 幸运地

all the same 依然;照样 however 然而;无论如何

anyway 无论如何 in spite of 尽管??;虽然??

at the same time同时;然而 luckily 幸运地

but 但是 by this time 此时

though/although 尽管 no doubt 无疑地

in/by contrast 对比之下 on the contrary 相反地

even though即使 otherwise 否则

still 仍然 unfortunately 不幸地

in fact 事实上 unlike 不像??;和??不同

as a matter of fact 事实上 yet仍;然而;但是

especially 特别地

(四)有关“合”的常用词语：用于小结上文或结束本段落的内容。

above all 最重要的是 accordingly 于是

as a result结果 in sum 总之，简而言之

as has been noted 如前所述 in summary 简要地说

as I have said 如我所述 on the whole 总体来说;整个看来

at last 最后 therefore 因此

by and large 一般说来 thus 因此

briefly 简单扼要地 to speak frankly 坦白地说

by doing so 如此 to sum up 总而言之

eventually 最后 surely 无疑

finally 最后 to conclude 总而言之

in brief 简言之 no doubt 毫无疑问

in conclusion 总之，最后 undoubtedly 无疑

in short 简而言之 truly 的确

in a word 总之 so 所以

certainly 当然地;无疑地 obviously 显然

all in all 总之

二、根据衔接词本身的意思和文章连接所需要的逻辑意义，可分为以下14类。

(一)表示因果关系

as a result

He never studied hard, and as a result he failed in the last examination. as a result of

He is late for work as a result of traffic accident.

accordingly

He wanted to buy a radio for study English, and accordingly her mother bought it for him.

because(of)

We are delayed because of a traffic jam.

due to

His success is due to his excellent work.

owing to

Owing to his absence, our meeting is not held.

thanks to

Thanks to a good teacher, she passed the examination.

now that

Now that you have grown up, you must earn for yourself.

so long as

You could realize your dream so long as you try it again and again.

since

Since you are here now, you,d better give a hand.

in that

The policy is harmful in that it may encourage people to give up.

so that

The office speaks at the top of his voice so that every soldier could hear him. therefore

There is a calculating mistakes there, therefore, the answer is wrong.

(二)表示解释关系

as a matter of fact

I will go there this morning, as a matter of fact, I am only 10 minutes, drive from you.

as well

I will go there. My friend will go with me as well.

frankly speaking

Frankly speaking, I am not very satisfactory with your words.

in this case

In this case, I will go there as soon as possible.

(三)表示推理关系

or else

Hurry up, or else you,ll be late.

otherwise

You must carry this passport, otherwise you will be stopped by the guard. if so

If so, it will make a great difference.

High school is very important in one’s lifetime. Nowadays, the movies about the high school time are so popular, but the stories are exaggerated, my memories about high school life are so different from the movie. During the three years, study occupied most of my time. I fought for the future with my classmates. We studied together and shared our opinion about the difficult points. When I made great progress, I was so happy, but when I fell behind, I would not give up. I grew up and became patient, I was not the little girl anymore. In the part-time, I would go to play basketball with my friends, it became the most exciting thing at that time. Though the high school life was simple, I gained a lot. I would never forget the classmates who worked with me together.

高中是一个人一生中非常重要时刻。如今,关于高中生活的电影如此受欢迎,但这些故事被夸大了,我对高中生活的记忆是不同于电影里面的。在三年里,学习占据了我大部分的时间。我和我的同学们一起为未来奋斗。我们一起学习，并且分享我们对难点的意见。当我取得很大的进步的时候,我很高兴,但是当我落后,我也不会放弃。我长大了,变得有耐心,我不再是个小女孩了。在课余时间,我会和我的朋友一起去打篮球,这成为最令人兴奋的事情。尽管高中生活很简单,但是我收获了很多。我永远不会忘记曾我和一起学习的同学。