高中英语作文20分评分标准(通用20篇)

After a year, just for one day.This day is to have the spring festival.There are two days to have the Spring Festival, people began to busy.

Firecrackers, poetic couplet and had bought, the prepared food, need to buy some bread stored, ready enough meat and noodles, dumplings have the Spring Festival.Dried fruit, fruit, candy, beverage, wine is also essential in the Spring Festival, celebrating the new years Eve night, when using, do a sumptuous the dinner on New Years Eve, usher in the new year.Many people also began to clean the windows, polished, call a person to see repeatedly praised.The room to maintain ones original pure character, good to create new year new weather.

Adults and the elderly are beginning to give the children ready to gift money, with red packaging, on behalf of the children new year wishes.I also began to prepare a few words of good wishes, wait until the new years Eve, people used to toast.Let them in the new year, happy to spend.

Television, host and various performances have also started to prepare a unable to hold oneself back Gala, back lines. Net, recorded the playing order.I hope that after this kind of careful preparation, Spring Festival Gala more colorful than last year!So that the audience can more easily through it in a year, turn the page, continue to have a happy life!

Soon have the Spring Festival, soon have the Spring Festival … …

切入分为54分

1.紧扣题旨，立意深刻，构思新颖。能真实生动叙写有关“纪念日”的故事，(公共的、自己的或他人的，现实的或历史的)并能抒发真情实感，或能阐释有关“纪念日”在人类进步发展、社会文化传承等方面重要意义，内容丰富，结构严谨，可从65分切入。语言精彩的，最高可判70分。要对照“发展等级”细则，准确赋分;要发现好文章，准确判高分。

2.符合题意，立意准确。能紧扣“纪念日”选材作文，中心突出，内容充实，结构完整，语言有鲜明特色的，可从60分切入。

3.符合题意。中心基本明确，结构基本完整，语言通顺，可从54分切入，视语言表达水平上下浮动。

4.写记叙文仅是对所叙对象轻描淡写，缺乏情感体验;写议论文仅对“纪念日”空谈泛谈，而无真材实料，观点缺乏清晰有序的表述;写成了“纪念”，忽视了具体“日子”，可在48至53分之间赋分。记叙文中缺乏基本要素，议论文中出现以叙代议、点据不一，比照同等情况降低一档赋分(一档4至5分)。行文若即若离，可在42至47分之间赋分。

5.不解题意，立意偏颇(所写内容不属于“纪念日”，或全无“纪念”价值)，硬贴标签，结构不完整，语言欠通顺，最高不超过41分。如胡编乱造、违背常理，文字表述低下，在41分以下赋分，最低可判25分。抄袭套作不超过20分。

6.错别字，每错一字扣1分，扣满3分为止;篇幅不足400字，最高30分，依实际情况定;篇幅基本完整，字数不足者，每少50字扣1分，扣满3分为止。

The period of high school stage is the preparation for college, all the students work hard in the purpose of the better future. In this stage, they hold the same target, fighting for the College Entrance Exam, especially in the third year, the sprint is very important. There are some suggestions for a better sprint. First, students should take a regular work schedule, it is very important to sleep in time, so that students can wake up early in the morning and then work with efficiency. Second is to keep the balanced diet. Students should pay attention to what they eat, the nutrition should be enough, so they can keep a better mind, thinking in a quick way. The last year of high school life must be hard and tedious, the one who keeps hold on will gain what they want. If they do as the mentioned suggestions, they can work better.

good morning, my admirable professors and my dear fellows. it’s my great honor to be here to introduce myself to all of you. my name is xing heng and i’m in my eighteen years old. i come fromxiamen, which is a famous and beautiful city. i strongly suggest you visiting there and i can be your guide if it’s convenient. after three years’ hard work, i am so excited that i am finally enrolled by my dreaming school,sichuanuniversityand be one of you. i am outgoing and i have many interests, such as playing basketball, football, and swimming, but i am only good at basketball.

i hope we can always play together in the next four years. computer science and technology is my favorite subject and i am sure that it’s also a promising area in the future, with the great development of computer science and our society. i am glad to be a classmate of you and i hope we can study and make progress together in the future. i greatly expect my life to be with you in the coming four years.

Most westerners always celebrate Christmas Day as their major festival, in

order to memorialize Jesus. During that time, they always have several days off,

so they can enjoy this festival with all their hearts. The children often get

together with their friends. The adults are busy with decorating their houses.

They also send the postcards with their best wishes to each other. In the

streets, there are so many Fathers Christmas sending presents to the passers-by.

And everything is on a discount in the supermarkets. Thus the supermarkets are

the busiest places.

In the evening, the families usually have pudding, sandwiches, apple pies

and some other desserts for dinner. After supper, the families always sing and

dance around the Christmas tree. Sometimes, they also go to church. Before going

to bed, the children often hang up their stockings beside their bed, so that

Father Christmas will fill them with presents. It is said that Father Christmas

always drives a deer to the human world and entering into each house from the

chimney. Now the children no longer believe in Father Christmas, but they still

hang up their stockings, because their parents will fill them with presents.

The annual Spring Festival will soon come, everyone is busy to stick couplets on theSpring Festival, every family is jubilant atmosphere, very happy, our family is no exception, annual 29, I just get up and cried out, mother let my sister and I to stick couplets on the Spring Festival, we put up a big everyone in the middle of the door, the door both sides put up Spring Festival couplets, top allied is bottom allied FuZhongSheng is fond of music is "rich world wealth suisui huan" horizontal batch is "good luck in the New Year" we soon ok, Im very happy to be looked at his work.

New Years eve morning, we put on new clothes, and sister go to set off firecrackers. A villager "through the voice from our ears, as if to send blessings to families, we arevery happy. New Years eve night, we ate dinner, I and the father? Mother and sister together to watch Spring Festival gala. The wonderful performance of let my mood suddenly enlightened, crosstalk, sketch and dance... Very good. But I like the small shenyang? Ya eggs? Zhao benshan and old never put off till tomorrow what you can do "not bad money" is so fun.

OnceI studied in middle school, I met a very nice English teacher. Her name wasClara. Although I have left her for a long time, I still remember her verywell. It was her who gave me the enthusiasm to learn English, and it was alsoher who pulled me up when I stumbled.

在我读中学的时候，我遇到了一个非常好的英语老师。她的名字是克拉拉。虽然我离开她已经很长时间了，但我仍然记得她。是她给了我学习英语的热情，也是她在我跌倒时扶我一把。

Thefirst time I saw her, I was very surprised, because she was very young andbeautiful. She was also humorous. She always made her classes lively andinteresting. As she always did the activities with us, she was not only ourteacher, but also our best partner.

我第一次见到她的时候，我感到非常惊讶，因为她很年轻很漂亮。她还很幽默。她总是让她的课生动有趣。因为她总是与我们互动，所以她不仅是我们的老师，也是我们的最好的伙伴。

What’smore, she was very patient and responsible. Every time I was in trouble, shealways offered me a hand. She was willing to communicate with me. I didnt knowhow to appreciate her. Without her, my English cant be so good.

更重要的是她很有耐心和责任心。每次我遇到麻烦的时候，她总是帮助我。她愿意和我交流。我不知道如何感谢她。没有她，我的英语不会这么好的。

[高中英语作文：我的英语老师

it was the first day of our summer holiday.all of us were very happy. why? because we have two months to do things we love to do.we are free.although we have some homework.but we can finish them in several days.and the rest time we can make good use of.my god! we have been very tired after hard studying.in summer holidays,i want to have full sleep and eat good food in order to replenish myself. last but not the least,i will have a good rest.

这是我们暑假的第一天，我们都很高兴。为什么？因为我们有两个月的时间去做我们喜欢做的事情了。我们自由了。尽管我们有很多家庭作业。但是我们几天就可以完成，剩余的时间我们可以自由支配.上帝啊，在努力的学习之后我们很累。在暑假，我想睡好吃好为了放松我自己。最后，我将可以好好休息。

[高中生暑假英语日记

Going to high school is my first time to leave home. I have to live in school from Monday to Friday. I like to stay away from my parents for some time, because I can make my own choice and be free to go anywhere. My friends and I like to spend the weekend in the countryside that near the city we live. It is the short travel that I can not only appreciate the beautiful scenery, but also learn to be independent. The things that nature teaches me are a lot. I can see from the color of the cloud to predict the weather and the sound of of animals have different meanings. All of these are hard to know from the books. I have my own thinking from these trips, and the way to take care of myself helps me to grow up.

the beijing zoo is the largest in asia and one of the largest in the world. there are hundreds of different kinds of animals in it.

we can see yellow, green, orange and brown birds, which can sing nice songs. the elephants have a long nose and big ears and they are kind to humans. we can also see big and little monkeys running and dancing, just like happy children. pandas, with good manners, are very friendly and polite to visitors. we will certainly have a good time there.

Nowadays, some discussions about the childrens education and management

have raised the whole social concern. It seems not only about childrens

personal development, but also about the whole countrys future.

There are two main views in debate, which of them is that children should

obey the rules set by parents and teachers. The other is that less control will

help children to deal with their future adult life.

As for the former, the advantages of it seem to be very apparent, which of

them is that children can make a distinction between right and wrong things. And

they will have a sense of principle and responsibility. Of course, the

disadvantages are also very clear. Firstly, children will be lacking in

imagination and creation. Secondly, they cannot make up their mind on their

own.

Concerning the latter, the view seems to be reasonable because in this ways

these children are more clever and active to create something special. However,

the drawbacks couldnt be ignored as a result of a problem that children cannot

get a clear understanding of their lifetime.

Combining the both points, as far as Im concerned, parents and teachers

are supposed to instruct children to obey the primary principle when they do

some deeds. Moreover, children need more freedom to realize their dreams. Only

in this way can the problem be solved perfectly.

In conclusion, we cant only support one side simply. On the contrary, we

ought to choose different measures to educate children flexibly.

Last May 4th was my birthday.I had a party at my home.

My relatives and friends came to my home in the evening.And I got a lot of presents from them.My mother prepared a big birthday cake for me.

There are even candles on it.After singing the song “Happy birthday”，I shared the cake with my friend and relatives.Then we watched TV and listened to music.Same of the girls danced with the music.We had a good time that day.

Now I want to say “Thank you my friends.Thank you my parents！I ’m so happy！”

We havebeen told when we were a little child that we help others as they are in need. Weoften do as what we were told in the childhood, but when we grow up nowadays weare not dare to help others.

Because the society becomes more and complicated. Thereare some people will make traps for the kind people.

For example, you see anold lady falling on the ground and you would like to help her. However, you maybe charged for pushing her down and ask you to give money for seeing a doctor. Yeah,this things often happen.

But helping others is the traditional for ourChinese, we should carry it out on any condition. Helping others will not onlyhelp other people but also help yourself.

You will feel happy and satisfy whenassisting others. So please give a hand to the people in need carefully.

我们在很小的时候就被告知要帮助那些需要帮助的人。

我们小的时候经常就像被告知的那样做，但当我们长大了，我们却不敢去帮助别人了。

因为社会变得更复杂了。有一些人会对善良的人设陷阱。例如，你看到一个老太太倒在地上，你想帮她。

但是，她可能会说是你把她推到的并让你赔偿医药费。是的，这种事情经常发生。但帮助他人是我们中国的传统，不管在任何情况下我们都要发扬光大。帮助别人不仅可以帮助别人也是帮助自己。在帮助他人时你会感到快乐和满足。所以请小心的帮助需要帮助的人。

[高中英语作文：帮助别人

写作是对同学们英语综合能力的考查，是最能体现大家英语水平的一种检测方式。学生在写作的过程当中经常会暴露一些弱点、犯一些错误。今天，我们对大家英语作文中的常见错误进行简要归纳，并举以实例，大家在今后的英语写作中要尽量避免这些错误的发生。

一.名词

写作中，学生们常把握不好名词的数、所有格以及一些集合名词的用法。

1.Hegavemeaverygoodadviceyesterday.

句中的a要去掉，因为advice是不可数名词。一些汉语概念为可数的词在英语中却是不可数的，表示数量时在要其前加apieceof，类似的词有：news,bread,work,paper,chalk,furniture,information等等。

2.Thatgirllovesreadingbook.

可数名词单数不能孤零零地放在句子里，或前面加冠词，或将其变为复数。此处最好变为books.

3.Hewentintoabooksshopandboughtadictionary.

一般表示有生命的东西的名词的所有格用’s，如mymother’scar,而此处适宜用名词修饰名词，改为abookshop.

4.MyfamilyiswatchingTV.

一些集合名词如看成一个整体，则用单数的谓语动词，如Myfamilyisahappyone.如果强调集合中每个个体的个人行为，则用复数的谓语动词。此处看电视是个体行为，应把is改为are。类似的词有：team,class,audience等。

5.Iboughtsomepotatosandtomatosatthesupermarket.

中学阶段，以“o”结尾的名词中有四个词变复数时要加es，它们是tomato,potato,Negro,hero;其余的都加s变为复数。

6.Thishasnothingtodowiththeirbelieves.（这和他们的信仰没关系。）

以f,fe结尾的词变为复数时一般去f,fe加ves，如knife—knives,

thief—thieves;而roof和belief直接加s变为复数。所以应把believes改为beliefs.

二.冠词

7.Thebosswantstohireanusefulperson.

用a还是an，取决于后面单词音标中的第一个音，如为元音用an，为辅音用a。useful的第一个音是辅音所以应把an改为a。类似的，我们说aEuropeancountry.

8.Planeisamachinethatcanfly.

plane为可数名词单数，不能单独放在句中，应在其前加冠词或把它变为复数，而本句后有amachine,因此只能在其前面加a，变为Aplane。

9.Heplayedapianoatthepartyyesterday.

把a改为the，因为乐器前用定冠词。

10.Themachinewasinventedin1920s.

在in后加the，因为表示年代用in加the再加几十的复数，如在八十年代inthe80s。

11.XiaoHongwenttoschoolbythebuseveryday.

去掉the，因为表示交通方式用by直接加交通工具。

三.代词

使用代词时请注意其单、复数，主、宾格以及形容词性物主代词和名词性物主代词的用法。

12.Heisoneofthosespeakerswhomakehisideasperfectlyclear.

定语从句的先行词是thosespeakers，为复数，因此从句中的指示代词应为复数，应把his改为their。

13.Whomdoyouthinkhasleftthelightson?

放在疑问句特殊疑问词后的doyouthink/believe/guess/imagine/suppose等都不参与句子成分。本句中去掉doyouthink后缺的是主语，应把Whom改为Who。

14.ThebosspretendednottoseeJohnandI.

John和I在句中都做的宾语，应把I改为me。

15.Thesebooksaremine；thoseinthebagareher.

her是形容词性物主代词，后面应该加名词books，或把her改为hers。

四.数词

16.Therearefourteenhundredsstudentsinourschool.

hundred/thousand/million/score/dozen等词前有具体数字时后不加s，前面没有具体数字时在其后加s和of，表示大约几百几千的概念。如two

hundredstudents（两百个学生），hundredsofstudents（成百上千个学生）。例句中应把hundreds改为hundred。

17.Theirschoolistwiceaslargerasourschool.

表倍数关系的as...as中间只能用形容词或副词的原级。因此应把larger改为large.

18.Today’shomeworkisafive-hundred-wordscomposition.

几个单词由连字符连接而组成的复合形容词中的名词只能用单数，所以把five-hundred-words改为five-hundred-word.

19.TwothirdofthestudentsinourschoolarefromAmerica.

英语表达中分数的分子用基数词，分母用序数词，分子大于一时分母后要加s，所以就把third改为thirds.

五.形容词和副词

形容词和副词容易被误用，形容词和副词的比较级和最高级也是应注意的重点。

20.Thepatientappearednervouslywhenhetalkedtothedoctor.

appear在此是个系动词，其后应接形容词作表语。所以应把nervously改为nervous.

21.Theartistworkedhardlytofinishhisdrawingsontime.

此句需要一个副词来修饰，hardly是副词，但意为“几乎不”，hard也可以是副词，表努力，因此把hardly改为hard.

22.Thisshirtismorecheaperthanthatone.

more只构成比较级，而不能修饰比较级。因此把more去掉。

23.Heisthemostsuccessfulofthetwobusinessmen.

两者相比较时，比较级前用定冠词，三者或三者以上才用most，因此把most改为more.

24.Heworkslessharderthanheusedto.

表不如?...时用less加上形容词和副词的原级，因此把harder改为hard.

25.Thebookisfairlymoreinterestingthanthatone.

fairly只能修饰形容词和副词的原级，可以修饰比较级的副词或短语有：much,even,still,far,alot,alittle,abit,any,no,byfar,rather等，因此把fairly改为rather.

26.Thisisasaninterestingastoryastheoneinthemagazine.

as?as中间的词序是as加上形容词加上a(n)加上名词再加上as，因此应改为asinterestingastoryastheone.

27.Theweatherhereisnicerthan.

同样的事物才能相比较，weather和不具有可比性，因此应改为Theweatherhereisnicerthanthatof.

29.Iwouldrathertakeatrainthanwentbybus.

这个词组为wouldratherdo?thando?，因此把went改为go.

30.Isthereinterestinganythingatthemeeting?

修饰anything,something,everything,nothing的形容词都要放在它们的后面。

31.Ineverhaveseensuchapersonbefore.

像never之类的副词在句中应放在be动词、助动词之后，实意动词之前。因为应改为Ihaveneverseensuchapersonbefore.

32.Thebookisworthtoberead.

beworthdoing意为值得被做。因此改为Thebookisworthreading.

33.Itissurethathewillsucceed.

sure的主语只能为人，而certain的主语可为人和物。因此把sure改为certain.

34.Heisregardedasoneofthebestalivewritersatpresent.

alive为表语形容词，偶尔也做后置定语。因此把alive改为living，或把alive放在writers后面。

35.Idon’tknowthathehasfinishedtheworkyet.

yet用于否定和疑问句，already用于肯定句。把yet改为already.

36.Hesaidnearlynothingatthemeeting.

nearly不与否定词用在同一个句子中，而almost可以。因此把nearly改为almost。

六.介词

37.Heusuallygoestoschoolbyhisfather’scar.

by加上名词表示一种交通方式，中间什么都不加，如bycar,bybus,byplane等；如果名词前有其他的词修饰，则应用除by以外的其他介词，此处把by改为in.

38.Pleasewaitmeattheschoolgate.

wait为不及物动词，需加介词for后才能再跟名词或代词做宾语。

39.HehasbeenmarriedwithBettyformorethantwentyyears.

marry不跟with连用，应把with改为to。

40.Ifinishedtheworkontimeunderthehelpofhim.

Recently, we often show that shopping online is better than in store, but

is this really the case? Actually, there is no consensus of opinions among

people as to the view of shopping online is better than traditional shopping.

Some people consider that online shopping will replace the mall shopping, stores

will disappear in the future, while others argue that stores would unlikely to

be disappeared, it has its own advantages.

Most people shopping online because it is very convenient, there is no need

to go out, just click the mouse gently, they can buy the goods they want. In

addition, goods online are cheaper than entity shop that buyers can save a lot

of money. But even the coin has two sides. Online shopping also has advantages

and disadvantages. In recent years, we see a lot of news about online cheating,

and many buyers complain about poor quality of the goods, which is different

with the description.

However, the situation above is rare in traditional shopping store, because

the guest can communicate with the seller face to face. Buyers can also see

goods intuitively. But the traditional shopping does not convenience as well as

online shopping, for example, if people meet a traffic jam on the way to the

shopping which will affect the happy mood of shopping.

根据初中阶段的写作具体目标：写作时考虑不同的目的和对象，写作要感情真挚，力求表达自己对自然、社会、人生的独特感受和真切体验;多角度地观察生活，发现生活的丰富多彩，捕捉事物的特征，力求有创意地表达;根据表达的中心，选择恰当的表达方式。合理安排内容的先后和详略。条理清楚地表达自己的意思。运用联想和想像，丰富表达的内容;写记叙文，做到内容具体：写简单的说明文，做到明白清楚;写简单的议论文，做到有理有据;根据生活需要，写日常应用文……简单地说，就是会写记叙文、简单的说明文、简单的议论文和一般的应用文;内容具体明确，语言文从字顺;感情真实健康，力求有创意。安徽省中考作文评分基本上涵盖了上述精神。

一、作文评分总体要求

以安徽省2009年中考题“师生之间”为例，对中考作文评分标准具体分析，具有可解读性和可操作性。这个命题作文，它的内容很宽泛，可写的东西很多，有关师生之间的事、物、情，皆可入文。具体评分要求如下：

1、要审清题目。文章要切题，不能写成“我的老师”， 要扣住“之间”来写，是老师和学生之间的双向活动。

2、体裁要分辨清。叙事有起伏，阐述有哲理，写人须有触动人物内心深处，抒情、议论兼而有之。

3、立意要有创新。文题看似平平淡淡，没有精心雕琢，但要写出独特的、与众不同之处。师生老师与学生的界定可以引申、拓展，也可以是广义的。

4、文章有真情实感。写事要具体可感，语言要流畅，有文采，有点睛之笔，行文思路清晰，感情充沛。

二、作文分等分类简述

就阅卷评分标准结合学生实际作文情况，作文大致分为以下几类：

(一)力求创新。力避旧瓶装新酒，有的同学在考场中将师与生进行引申、比喻，文章开头引用《三字经》中的“生不学，师之惰”，接着亮出自己的观点，“生不学”未必是“师之惰”，用“诸葛亮与刘禅”这对师生来佐证。以思辩的眼光去看待师生之间的关系，提倡一种平等、和谐的新型师生关系，这篇文章结构完整、首尾照应、层次清楚、语言流畅，应属一类文(得54分)。

(二)形式新颖。

形式新颖，内容详实、描写具体。比如一位考生列了四个小标题：“酸”、“甜”、“苦”、“辣”，分别写了与老师之间的四件事，也都有师生之间的活动，有师生间真挚的情感，内容具体真实，可成为一篇佳作，属一类中等(得50分)。

(三)误读题意。一位考生将师生之间写成了“教与学”的关系，整篇文章围绕着“师傅领进门，修行在个人”来写。在立意、内容上只能归属为三类下、四类上。(得30分左右)

(四)选材陈旧。在选材方面流于俗套而缺乏真挚的情感。比如很多考生写在我生病时老师不顾羸弱的身体背着我去医院，老师在下雨天送我回家，把伞让给学生，自己却淋透了，生病了等。没有从生活实际中选取典型的、新颖的、感人的事例来表现主题。这样的事例不够典型，情感也抒发的不到位就难以达到感动人的目的。属三类下。(得32分)

(五)切题不紧。中等成绩的考生的作文都更倾向于写老师是如何对待自己的，主要写老师是如何关心我，如何辅导我的学习，这样的文章中老师的行动是主体，其中穿插了学生的感悟与体会，但占的笔墨不多，因为写老师的文字中必然有学生的活动。这样的文章不能说完全切题，也不能说离题，因为它写到了老师对学生的关爱与呵护。属于二类下、三类上。(得38分)

(六)文体单一。绝大多数写成记叙文，显得平铺直叙，没有生动、细致的描写，选择写议论文的很少，即使有所议论，也是空发感慨。基本上分数不会太高。(得25分上下)

三、中考作文评分细则解读

我们通常用语言优美、立意新颖、结构独特、构思精巧、内容充实、感情真实、表达恰当等方面去评判优秀学生的作文。其实，对于绝大多数学生来说，评分标准的制定有所局限性，就安徽省而言，主要从内容和表达两个方面对作文的评分细则简要解析。

(一)内容方面：

新课标所提倡的作文理念，在安徽省的作文命题及评分标准的制定中已得到很好的体现。内容具体、充实的作文也不在少数，考生视野开阔，体现了他们对生活的感悟，做到了我手写我心，出现了一大批关注亲情友情、关注社会自然、关注艺术历史的佳作。如2007年安徽省的“我们的心近了”，有考生写通过感悟李白、李煜和岳飞的诗词与他们的爱国之心;有写通过印度洋海啸与世界人民的心近了，通过中国免除非洲债务，中国人民与非洲人民的心近了……这些选材与立意都是很高的，有部分考生写社会生活的一些小小的细节反映人与人之间的心近了，如写为瓜农提供方便，与辛苦劳作的人心近了;到山区体验生活与农村孩子的心近了，选材立意温暖人心……我感到：出题人与考生的心近了，考生与家庭、学校、社会、自然、历史的心近了。具体得分点有以下几点：

(1)中心明确。有些考生选材虽好，但中心不够明确，如有考生写了三个片断：与同学的心近了，与老师的心近了，与父母的心近了，但各有自己的中心，没有将三个片断统一到一个主题上。还有将“心近了”误当成团结、友爱的同义词，写成了“团结就是力量”、“友爱使人快乐”等主题。

(2)文章切题 。未抓住题眼“近了”，“近了”是一个过程，而这个过程有些考生未作为重点。如有一个考生重点描写了父母与自己的矛盾，而对矛盾解决的过程即“近了”只是一笔带过就总结说“我们的心近了”，作文主次不分明。个别考生干脆将“心近了”写成“心静了”，严重偏题。有的同学字顺文美，读之感人，但读后和材料要求对照，跑题了。

(3)内容充实。少数学生为了出新出奇，另辟蹊径，对“老师”和“学生“的内涵和外延进行了拓展。如有学生把“书本”、“大自然”等比作“老师”，写出自己徜徉其中的经历和感受。有些考生将作文写成议论文或者散文，虽反复点题，但内容不够具体，缺少有力的论据或感人的细节，只是空洞的议论或抒情。如：无视“我们的心”，写成“他们的心近了”。如一个考生创作了一篇小说，笔触细腻地写了两个小女孩由竞争到互相帮助的过程，但用的是第三人称的叙述视角，没有“我们的心近了”之意，很遗憾地与一类作文失之交臂。其实只要将小说中的一个角色换成“我”即可。大部分考生都能围绕中心有话可写，内容也较充实。写作水平较高的学生所写内容都能较好地兼顾“老师”和“学生”两个方面，紧扣中心，表达有技巧，具有一的表现力，演绎出师生之间的情感变化，常令人耳目一新。

(4)感情真实。出现了许多题材雷同的套作。可能是时代变了，考生的作文中有不少写对后妈由排斥到心近的过程。有许多夫妻离婚可以理解，怎么父母离婚了，孩子都是跟着爸爸?后妈个个都那么宽容、忍让?这类作品有些感情不够真实，很难得高分。

(5)立意新颖。作文关键抓住“心近了”来立意，选材涉及到对题目中的 “我们”的具体所指，大多数学生理解为“我与父亲”、“我与母亲”、“我与老师”、“我与同学”、“我与朋友”、“我与后爸”、“我与后妈”等，具体所指的身边人物，当属切题作文;还有把“我们”理解为台湾与祖国大陆，香港、澳门与祖国，时值香港回归祖国十周年之际，属立意有一定的高度;还有理解为中国与世界、中国加入WTO，世界经济一体化;中国与日本、涉及到中日两国由来已久的渊源关系，到当下的中日关系;中国与印度，涉及海啸中中国人民的友好援助。这些都充分体现了学生对时事的关注，对焦点问题的思考，眼界相当开阔，立意也很深刻。

除以上几方面以外，还有就是我与书，我与语文，我与古代名家，像李白、杜甫、陶渊明、李煜等等，写得是大气磅礴，文采飞扬，充分显示了学生深厚的文学底蕴，这些当属一类作文中的上品。

(二)表达方面

(1)表达方式运用得好。多数考生表达方式运用的合理，但也有一些考生处理不好。如：出现了一些结构不够完整，表达方式单一，甚至不知所云的作品，如一些考生通篇记叙自己与父母关系“近了”的事实，没有动人的细节描写，语言平淡无味，缺少感染力，缺少个性;从表达角度来看，大多数学生还是以大量口语化的语言出现在卷面，缺乏书面语，缺少语文的文学气息。

(2)结构完整，条理清楚。如：一位考生的考场作文，全文的结构如下：师生之间是加减乘除。一：师生之间是+，老师+学生=家;二：师生之间是-，减去烦恼;三：师生之间是×，师生相乘，走向成功;四：师生之间是÷，除去陋习，让学生改邪归正。总结：加减乘除都是爱。

(3)语句流畅、通顺。语言以朴实真挚风格为主，有不少语言流畅、文采飞扬的佳作。如：有一位考生写中日关系近了，远溯到唐代用鉴真六次东渡和晁衡留居长安证明两国一衣带水的亲密，又提到近代日本对中国的侵略，日本右翼分子的猖狂，中国一部分人民身受伤害后的仇日情绪表现“远”了，然后用两国民间社团友好往来，温总理“融冰之旅”表现两国人民相互了解和对和平友好的向往以及希望世界和平的主题。行文结构严谨，通篇语言流畅，美妙的比喻和一气呵成的排比层出不穷，且恰到好处。最后以“心近了，心静了，心惊了，心敬了，心近了”结束全篇，耐人寻味。

有少数学生引用古诗文名句，巧用一些修辞造句，驾驶语言的能力相当强。 如： 开篇： 蒲公英因长风飞向远方，小树苗因甘霖获得滋长，学生因老师而成材。结尾：冰寒于水而出于水，青胜于蓝而出于蓝。纵观整体来说，基本上做到了语句通顺，表述清楚。一部分考生通篇议论抒情、空喊口号，令人乏味;还有个别考生掉书袋，几乎每一句都要引用古诗句，没有自己的语言和感悟可言。

(三)字数的要求。安徽省及芜湖市均有明确的规定：考虑到内容的充实，文章不要少于500字。字数不足500字，每少50字酌情扣一分。但是，一篇文章写的字数较少分量自然很轻。其实，400字、500字的作文扣分不过2分，可再少就不仅仅是字数的问题了。从考场作文实际看，600-700字的作文很多，分数上也偏向这些文章。

(四)、卷面书写。试卷最后一项得分栏就是卷面得分，共5分。根据是书写干净与否;有无涂抹和大面积改动;字体端正、匀称、工整与否。卷面整洁，书写、标点、格式正确等一般给4—5分，最少2—3分。从得分看，字体有形、书写清楚的文章得分较高，好作文卷面分也很高，是相辅相成的。

《语文课程标准》的总目标中，对学生写作能力有如下概括：能具体明确、文从字顺地表达自己的意思，能根据日常生活需要，运用常见的表达方式写作。其实，作文评分标准只是参考，最主要的是鼓励学生写真事、抒真情，写作的过程也是一个教育学生做人的过程。

Dear Mum and Dad,

Time flies! Ive been here for nearly a year. Im very pleased to find that our school is really a good one. The students in our school work hard at their lessons. They take an active part in activities that help to improve their qualities and health. They are friendly to each other and always ready to help each other.

The teachers here all enjoy their work and they love their students. They work hard and do what they can do to help their students. And the students respect their teachers. They get on well with each other. The students in our school try their best to kkp the school yard clean and tidy. They never throw waste about nor pick the flowers.

In a word, I am deeply impressed by the harmonious atmosphere in this school. I love my new school.

Yours,

Tom

亲爱的妈妈和爸爸，

时光飞逝！我来这儿已经快一年了。我很高兴发现我们学校真是一个好的学校。我们学校的学生在功课上努力工作。他们积极参加活动，帮助提高他们的素质和健康。他们彼此友好，随时准备互相帮助。

这里的老师们都喜欢他们的工作，他们喜欢他们的学生。他们努力工作，尽他们所能做的来帮助他们的学生。和学生尊重他们的老师。他们相处得很好。我们学校的学生尽力北校园干净整洁。他们从不乱扔垃圾，也不摘花。

一句话，我对这所学校的和谐氛围印象深刻。我爱我的新学校。

My mother is a teacher, so she pays special attention to my education. Before I went to primary school, she bought me a lot of novel books. I remembered that when the hot movie Harry Porter came out, she bought me the novel the other day. I was so surprised and read these books quickly. Thanks to my mother, she cultivated my interest to read successfully. I keep reading books every day, even though I was busy with my homework, I would take out the books to read some chapters before I went to sleep. Reading these books helps me a lot. I am good at writing and it broadens my vision. I can give my own opinion and other students admire me. Now I start to read the classic novel. Reading makes me happy and find my world.

我妈妈是一名教师，所以她特别重视对我的教育。在我上小学之前，她给我买了很多小说。我记得，当热门电影《哈里波特》出来的时候，第二天她就给我买了这本小说。我很惊讶，同时也很快看完了。感谢我的妈妈，她成功地培养了我对阅读的兴趣。我坚持每天读书的习惯，即使作业任务很繁重，我都会在睡觉之前拿书出来看一会。看这些书给我的帮助很大。我擅长写作，而且视野也拓宽了。我可以给出自己的见解，其他同学也佩服我。现在我开始看古典小说，阅读使我快乐，我找到了属于自己的世界。

[良好的阅读习惯高中英语作文

With the development of science and technology, smart phone becomes more and more popular. Even the students on campus begin to use handphone. Is it a good or bad thing?

随着科学和技术的发展，手机变得越来越流行，就连在校园里的学生也开始使用手机了。这到底是好还是坏？

Smart phone , on one hand, is good for students. For one thing , it enables students to keep in touch with their friends and family more conveniently and quickly. For another, it makes students fashionable and proud.

手机一方面来说对学生是有利的，举例来说，它能使学生与朋友和家人更方面快捷的取得联系。同时，它也使学生感到很时尚和骄傲。

On the other hand, smart phone has a negative effect on the students. First , it will cost them more money than before. Second, it will distract them from their study and life. Third, it will sometimes become a nuisance especially when it rings in classroom or in the library.

但另一方面，智能手机对学生也有负面作用。首先，手机会让学生们比以前花费更多的钱。其次，智能手机也让人更容易从学习和生活中分心。第三，智能手机让人感到麻烦和讨厌，尤其是在图书馆里或者是上课的时候。

so , smart phone is a good thing .However , the students should use it well .

所以，智能手机是个好东西，但是，学生们也要好好使用才行。

[高中英语作文：对手机的看法

As there are alot of languages in the world, it will make lots of difficulties when wecommunicate with people from other countries. However, smile is a kind of magiclanguage that everyone can read easily, no matter where he comes from.

由于世界上有很多种语言，这让我们在与来自其他国家的人交流时带来了很多的困难。然而，微笑是一种神奇的语言，不管来自何方大家都可以轻松地理解。

For one thing, smilecan transfer warmth and energy. As graduates, we are faced with a lot ofrecruitment. Each of us is nervous. But when we see the smile on others’ faces,its just like the golden sunshine. Smile is just the medium of positiveenergy.

首先，微笑可以传递温暖和能量。作为大学生，我们面临着很多招聘。我们每个人都很紧张。但当我们看到别人脸上的微笑，就像温暖的阳光。微笑只是正能量的媒介。

For the otherthing, smile can express friendship. When we praise others, just bonus a smile,it will be prettier than amount of words.

其次，微笑可以表示友谊。当我们称赞别人时，只要奖励一个微笑，那会比任何词都漂亮。

It is obviousthat smile is a good way to show your respect to others. Smile is the shortestdistance between two people. Wish you have good relationships with others.

很明显的微笑是展示尊敬的好方法。微笑是两个人之间最短的距离。希望大家可以与他人友好相处。

[高中英语作文：微笑是两个人之间最短的距离

if you want to understand adversity, take two identical acorns from the same oak tree and plant them in two different locations. plant the first in the middle of a dense forest, and the other on a hill by itself.

要是你想理解什么是逆境，就去拿两颗从同一棵树上摘下来年龄相同的橡树果，并且把它们种到不同的地方。第一颗种在浓密的树林当中，而另外一颗则单独种在一座山上。

heres what will happen. the oak standing on a hillside is exposed to every storm and gale. as a result its roots plunge deep into the earth and spread in every direction, even wrapping themselves around giant boulders. at times it may seem the tree isnt growing fast enough—but the growth is happening underground. its as if the roots know they must ported the tree from the threatening elements.

事情的结果便是这样。那颗长在山上的橡树经历了大风大雨，结果它的根深深地扎进了泥土中间，并不断向四周扩张，甚至把自己置身于巨大的石块当中。有时它可能看起来长的不是很快，但这时它却在地下悄悄生长着，好像它的根知道自己必须快速生长来保护树木免受自然危害的影响。