高中英语作文20分评分标准【推荐20篇】

1摘要的定义与三类摘要的写法

国际标准ISO214-1976指出：摘要是一份文献内容的准确压缩,不加解释或评论。中国国家标准规定：摘要是报告、论文的内容不加注释和评论的简短陈述。摘要是读者判断论文价值，判断论文是否值得阅读的依据。会议所征摘要是决定是否录用全文的依据。写好摘要是科技人员写作所必备的基本功。如果一篇内容价值较高的英语论文,其摘要写得平平淡淡，不能体现论文的特点和学术价值，将带来一系列不利影响：失去被刊载的机会，需要本文的读者不会阅读全文,从而失去应有的学术影响;对中文期刊论文而言,难以进入国际检索系统等。

摘要分为报道性摘要、指示性摘要、报道—指示性摘要、结构性摘要等种类。学术期刊多采用报道性摘要，特别是试验研究和有定量数据的论文。对新内容较少，或数据少的论文用指示性摘要或报道—指示性摘要。摘要的内容一般由3部分组成：研究目的,研究方法,研究结果或结论。中文摘要一般200-300字,外文摘要字数不超过250个实词。摘要的详简程度和篇幅大小根据具体情况及要求而定，如期刊论文摘要、会议征稿摘要、博士学位论文摘要的差别很大。期刊论文摘要通常位于署名和单位地址之后。

1.1 报道性摘要

报道性摘要要求反映作者的主要成果,提供比较完整的定量及定性信息。篇幅一般为200-300字。示例如下：

示例1： (题名：BiSrCaCuO高温超导纤维)

采用激光加热小基座法(LHPG)成功地制备出BiSrCaCuO超导纤维。它性能稳定,工艺可重复性高。纤维最大长度达60mm，直径范围35-500um，其中细径纤维有挠性。超导纤维的起始转变温度为118K,零电阻温度为87K，临近电流密度为2.5kA/cm2 (77K,H=0,直流电流量)。纤维中超导相(2212相)，显微结构有典型的取向性。纤维的超导电性与其生长条件及后处理过程密切相关。首次指出，a轴平行于纤维的轴向。

示例2：(篇名: 约瑟夫森结Alx-Al隧道势垒的实验研究)

通过X光电子能谱、阳极氧化电压谱和FISKE台阶电压的测量，研究了约瑟夫森结中ALOX-AL隧道势垒。发现结的隧道势垒最佳沉积AL层厚度为7nm，AL上形成了ALOX厚度只取决于氧化条件，与沉积AL厚无关，势垒AL氧化物可能含有一个像ALOOH态的OH基团。

1.2 指示性摘要

指示性摘要的目的是使读者对论文有一个概括的了解，适用于新内容较少，或数据少的论文。篇幅一般为50-100字。示例如下：

示例1: (题名 ：冷轧槽楔外端与摩擦影响的定量分析)

建立了与Avitzuer不同的连续速度场，经变上限积分与参量积分求的槽楔冷轧变形力上界解解，并侧重定量的讨论了外端与摩擦对变形力的影响。

示例2: (题名 ：白薯线虫的防治)

对密西西比州种植的白薯由于根节线虫所引起的问题作了讨论,叙述了1967年由蔬菜收获分公司实验站所进行的商品熏剂和杀虫剂的试验。对行间撒播的施用方法作了比较。列出了包括商品杀线虫剂vorlex、DOW WV W─85、DD和试验的固体杀线虫剂68 138及Dasanit的试验结果。

示例3： (题名：湘江水体中硒的分布)

[目的] 为给综合防治污染提供一定依据,对湘江水体中硒的分布进行了探讨。

[方法] 在湘江上游兴安县至洞庭湖的河口采集了28个底泥样品, 用气相色谱法进行分析。

[结果] 结果表明:湘江底泥已受到不同程度的污染,其中有些硒含量超过本底值数的十倍甚至百倍,大多数样品中硒含量较一般土壤和底泥为高。还分析了污染严重的霞湾港水样，结果表明此段江水中硒含量尚不高，在地面水最高容许浓度范围内。

1.3 报道—指示性摘要

报道—指示性摘要是对论文中价值最高部分内容采用报道性摘要，其余部分以指示性摘要报道。篇幅一般为100-200字。

示例1: (题名：柴油机燃用棉籽油的试验研究)

介绍了不经任何改装的S195型柴油机燃用棉籽油与柴油混合油或纯棉籽油的试验研究情况。结果表明，燃用棉柴混合油或纯棉籽油时，发动机性能良好，无异常现象;适当调整供油提前角、加大循环供油量，可以达到原机功率，而且烟度有所下降。还分析了S195型柴油机在试验工况下的燃烧特性和放热规律。

2 写作中的常见问题

要有摘要与论文分离单独出版的写作思想，对随文摘要，不要认为“全文在后边”，编写摘要可简单、随便。

应用“用(采用)...方法”、“报告了...现状”、“进行了...调查”等记述方法编写摘要。即，要用第三人称编写，不要用第一、二人称编写，不要用“本文”、“我们”、“作者”、 “THIS PAPER"、"THIS ARTICLES"等作为主语。

不用图表、示意图、公式、结构式和非公用的符号和术语。

要采用规范化的名词术语、缩略语、略语、代号、法定计量单位、简化字和标点符号。

避免与标题和引言在用词上明显重复，忌罗列正文中目次，小标题和段落标题，或结论部分的文字。

要排除在本学科领域已成为常识的内容和教材中已有的东西。

除非该论文证实或否定了他人已出版的著作,否则不必引用。

不要作自我评价。如：本文以变量代换为工具,利用高等代数的知识,证明了齐线性微分方程组的降阶定理,给出了一种实际的解题方法。因此，这个结论的证明不仅具有一定的理论意义，而且在解题过程中也具有重要的指导意义。

不要对题名等进行注解。如论文“分类指导重点突破加速农机化步伐”的摘要写成：农机化是农业生产力发展到一定阶段的必然过程,是现代农业的产物,在我国它的发展只能与农村经济发展水平相适用。因此分类指导即根据不同经济力、生产组织形式和现实物质技术条件，进行有效地指导、协调、组织带层次性的农机化生产。重点突破即在提高经济效率的前提下，在“化”水平上有所突破。

3 成功写作摘要的要点

摘要写作成功的诀窍是突出新贡献，并使之尖锐化。用精辟语句使新东西出现在摘要的突出位置。所谓新贡献包括:新技术、新理论、新方法、新观点、新规律、纠正前人错误、解决争议、补充和发展前人成果等。有的作者常常不在摘要中体现重要的研究成果，而到论文的后部分经分析推论等才指明，这是错误的观点和写作方式。

使自己新贡献尖锐化。即区别他人工作和自己新贡献不同之处(如:“想法”、“设想”和“已给出数学定义、模型”等的区别)，使之分离，使自己新东西尖锐化。新贡献不要多谈，要精辟。不能模棱两可，让读者去分析作者的贡献“新”在何处。而应指出来让读者看。但不能自我评价。

Once Chairman Mao said one is never too old to learn, his famous words inspire people to keep learning all their lives. Since we are small, we study at school, then we have to learn until we are at college, after graduate from college, we finish our education in the school.

Then the new stage comes, we start to work, making money, learning knowledge seems unnecessary to us.

This is totally wrong, we learn all the time, even we are out of school, we have lessons from life.

Life is a big topic, we have to learn it all the time. We have to deal with trouble, learning to make friends and accept fail.

All these things we will not learn at school, we have to learn by ourselves, we are students and teachers. If you think you finish learning after school, you are narrow minded.

毛主席曾经说过“一个人要活到老学到老”，他的著名话语激励着人们终身学习。

当我们还小的时候，我们在学校学习，然后直到大学前，我们都要学习，大学毕业后，我们完成了在学校的学习。然后新的阶段到来，我们开始工作，挣钱，学习知识似乎不必要了。

这是完全错误的，我们一直学习，即使不在学校，我们学习生活。生活是一个大主题，我们不得不一直学习。我们要处理麻烦，学着交朋友和接受失败。所有的这些东西我们都不会在学校学到，我们必须自己学习，即是学生也是老师。如果你觉得你出了学校后就完成了学习，你的思想就很狭隘了。

[高中英语作文：终身学习

every one has a dream. i have a dream, too. i have a dream that one day i could become a math teacher.

i love math very much, because i think math is quite useful. its useful when people are buying things. its useful when students are learning subjects like physics and chemitry. and its useful when scientists are doing experiments. teachers can not only help students to learn things but also teach the students to apply what they learn into practice.

therefore, i hope to be a math teacher in the future. i want to help more students learn math.

Recentlythe news that U.S attack on Chinas Internet is always exposed.And the question of how to stay online safely raises a lot of discussion in our country.As a resultin the era of rapid development of networkwe must take measures to protect our security of privacy and property effectively.

最近的新闻都揭示了美国对中国网络的攻击.如何安全地上网在我国引起了大量的讨论.结果是在网络飞速发展的时代我们必须要采取有效的措施来保护我们的隐私和财产安全.

From my perspectivein the first placewe should call attention to our personal information.Not only do we not offer them at random in some strange websitesbut we need to distinguish right from wrong among the numerous websites.Furthermoreit is inevitable that some secure anti-virus soft wares can be installed.And it will make it possible for that network can run more steadily.In addition to doing some work by ourselvesthe government needs to draw up some policies to preserve national cyber security.It involves probing for deeply rooted reasonsdevising creative solutionsdeveloping high-tech talents and strengthening the supervision.

从我的角度来看首先我们应该关注我们的个人信息.我们不仅不随随便便在一些奇怪的网站提供自己的信息而且我们需要在众多的网站之间明辨是非.此外安装一些安全的杀毒软件是必须的.这使得网络运行更加稳定.除了我们自己该做一些努力之外还需要政府制定相关政策来保护国家网络安全.这就涉及到探究深层次的原因想出有创造性的解决方案发展高新技术人才、加强监管.

Although scientists still cannot overcome the problem completelythey are studying a great deal about how to protect our national cyber security.Howeverconsciousness of cyber security should not decline.Only in this waywe just enjoy the convenience brought by the network.网络的好与坏高中英语作文

尽管科学家仍无法完全克服这个问题但是他们正在研究大量关于如何保护我们国家网络安全的办法.然而不应该放松网络安全意识.只有这样我们才能享受到网络带给我们的便利.

Mid-autumn Day is a Chinese festival。 It usually es in September or October 。On that day we usually eat a big dinner and mooncakes。 It is said "Hou Yi" missed his wife，so he made mooncakes。 It looks like the moon。

There are many kinds of mooncakes。 They are small round cakes with meat， nuts or something sweet inside 。 eating mooncakes has been our custom。 Families stay outside in the open air eat a big dinner and mooncakes。 The most important thing is looking at the moon， On that day， the moon kooks brighter and rounder。 We call this moon the full moon。

On that day， families get together， so we call this day getting together。 This is Mid-autumn Day。 I love it very much。 Because on that day I can eat mooncakes。 And my brother es back home。 He works outside all year。 Only that day and the Spring Festival。 He es back。 So that day I am especially happy。 On that day my family gets together。

中秋节是一个中国节日，通常是九月或十月。当天我们经常吃一顿丰盛的晚餐和月饼。据说“后羿”想念他的妻子，所以他做了月饼。它看起来像月亮。

有各种各样的月饼。它们是小圆饼，里面有肉，坚果或者里面的甜点。吃月饼是我们的习惯。家人在户外露天吃大餐和月饼。最重要的是看着月亮，在那一天，月亮变得越来越明亮。我们称这个月亮为满月。

在那一天，家庭聚在一起，所以我们称这一天聚在一起。这是中秋节。我非常喜欢。因为那天我可以吃月饼。而且我的兄弟回家了。他全年都在外面工作只有那一天和春节。他回来了。所以那天我特别开心。那天我的家人聚在一起。

Hello, everyone. I’m am a student in No.1 Middle School. I’m very proud that I have been chosen to speak to you all today.How to protect/save our environment/world?

The environmental pollution is worse and worse /more and more seriously today. Water is polluted ,we have no clean water to drink Many trees are cutting down, some animals is getting less and less.Some factories is poring dirty air in the sky , the population is increasing faster and faster ,resources is getting less and less…etc. Not only does it affect our lives and health, it also has a great affection in the future.

The first fact I worry about is noise pollution. People can"t sleep well if there is too much noise. That"s why so many people prefer to live in the countryside rather than live in the noisy city. I suggest all the factories and cars shouldn"t make terrible noises. If they make terrible noise that isn"t allowed, they will be fined, and we can also produce the cars which can"t make terrible noise.

The other pollution is rubbish pollution. If everyone makes so much rubbish, one day we may live in a world filled with rubbish. Some people throw the waste paper about. I suggest rubbish should be put into different kinds of dustbins or paper bags.

[高中保护环境的英语作文

We need to follow all kinds of public rules, such as the manner rules and

the traffic regulation. If we break the rules, then all the work will be out of

order and everybody will suffer the loss. But few people just ignore the rules

and waste other people’s time and money.

Chinese high speed train has won many praise from foreign people. The

trains always start off as the timetable and reach the destination on time. High

speed train is popular by the public by its speed and punctuality, but what if

someone breaks the traffic rule? Recently, a video got popular on the Internet.

A woman was stuck in the door of high speed train and the staffs tried to stop

her but failed. She said her husband was on the way and she wanted the train to

start off later. How ridiculous it was. How could she let all the passengers to

wait for her. Everybody’s time is precious.

Though the woman apologized after the policemen’s education, what she did

discomforts the public. The way she acted wasted the public’s time. It is our

duty to follow rules and keep the public in order.

Thereare four seasons in the year. They’re spring, summer, autumn and winter.

一年有四个季节.它们是春天，夏天，秋天和冬天。

Springis warm and sunny. In spring days, everything in our nature is green, so we cango out to release ourselves and breathe the fresh air. I think its a good wayto enjoy our beautiful nature.

春天是温暖又阳光灿烂的。在春天，自然界中的一切都是绿色的，所以我们可以释放自己，呼吸新鲜空气。我认为这是享受美丽的大自然的一种很好的方式。

Summeris hot and rainy, but summer is the best season for entertainment, because wecan go swimming in the sea and enjoy the beautiful sunshine on the beach. Itmust be very interesting.

夏季炎热多雨，但夏季是休闲娱乐的最佳季节，因为我们可以在海里游泳，在沙滩上享受美丽的阳光。那肯定很有趣。

Autumnis very cool and comfortable, and it is also the best season for harvest. Inautumn days, the farmers are busy in their fields. If we had a chance, we couldgo to the countryside and pick up some fresh fruits and vegetables.

秋天很凉爽舒适，也是收获的最好季节。秋天的时候，农民们在他们的田野里忙碌。如果我们有机会，我们可以去乡下摘一些新鲜的水果和蔬菜。

Winteris very cold and freezing. In winter, our world is covered with white snow, sowe can either make snowmen or fight with snow. And we can also enjoy thebeautiful ice lanterns in Harbin. But I prefer to go to Sanya during that time.As its on Hainan Island, the weather is always so temperate. Even in December,I can still enjoy the green palm trees, the beautiful sea, the sunny beach andthe blue sky. Maybe I can find endless pleasure there.

冬天很冷，很冰。冬天，我们整个世界都被雪覆盖了，所以我们可以堆雪人或者打雪仗。我们还可以欣赏哈尔滨的美丽的冰灯。但我更喜欢在那段时间去三亚。因为它是在海南岛，天气总是很温和。即使是在十二月，我仍然可以享受绿色的棕榈树，美丽的大海，阳光明媚的沙滩和蔚蓝的天空。也许我可以在那里找到无穷的乐趣。

[高中英语作文：一年四季

一个人静静地坐在书桌前，望着照片上老师那和蔼可亲的脸，心中泛起阵阵涟漪。因为有了您，就有了一个特别的节日－－教师节。从此，我们就多了一份对您深深的敬意。是您播种未来，是您点燃我理想之火，是您在我心里播下了快乐的火种，让我感受到的一切欢乐因老师您的爱而起。在我快要站立不住的时候，您给我一个鼓励的眼神。在我悲伤的时候，您点起我的希望之火；在我迷茫的时候，您为我照亮前进的道路！虽然我们只相处了一年！但那些难忘的日子呀！是您－－老师，让我学会如何面对困难，如何感受生活，如何珍惜幸福，如何自我发展。

不知您是否还记得那件事那次期中考，我考的很差，伤心了好几天，您知道后，就找我去谈心，您静静的看着我，，眼睫毛时不时眨动着，但您的目光不动。昔日严肃的面庞，挂着一种温和的笑容。那是这样的一种眼神，有关爱，有温馨，有期望，有激励，那么明亮，那么闪烁，给我温暖，给我勇气！霎时间，来自心灵的感觉传遍全身，是震撼，更是感激。悲伤已没有必要，有的只是一个新的起点，一次摔倒后的重新爬起，一次为了成功必须迎接失败。

老师，我们相处的时间是365天，但时间早已悄悄流逝，一晃就过去，也许有人说的对快乐的时光很容易流失，我能感觉到你这段时间尽心尽力的为我们付出。因为您的鼓励，让我有重新起航的信心；因为您的邮件，让我有勇敢面对困难的信心；谢谢您让我对现在充满活力，对未来充满理想。这一年的点点滴滴，一个个动人的情景把我的生活点缀得精彩美丽，也把我的记忆巩固得刻骨铭心。我忘不了您！

我在心底默默地感谢曾经在我学习失败时0，鼓励我成功是从这里起步的；在我悲伤时，安慰我吴晓振作起来的英语老师。然而——一切发生得那么突然，就在我按您的话开始努力的时候，我却即将要离开您了。

“感恩的心，感谢有你，陪伴着我度过快乐的高二。感恩的心，感谢命运，花开花落我一样会珍惜我们的师生情。”老师，感谢你，感谢您一年以来在讲台上用汗水浇洒干渴的我们；感谢你一年来如蜡烛般燃烧自己，照亮我们；

风儿吹下一片落叶，承载着我心中的一句话：老师，我爱你！真的很舍不得离开您！

最后，让我再真诚地说声：“谢谢！”

[高中我的英语老师作文

today is national day.we have no classes. in the morning,i went to the people‘s park with my mother.we had a good time. in the afternoon,i helped my parents to cook supper.i had a busy day today.

oct .1 xx sunny

today is national day,but i don’t feel any happy at all,just no reson. last night i download the english paper till 3am,sometime i want to give up.but in order to accomplish my dream.i can handle it.

today is national day on oct,1 xx,weiqun have 2 days as holiday,i just made a call to home but she still didn‘‘t get home,i asked mother to try to call her to confirm her position right now in order to be convenient for taking fetch by my father in 6-cross roadmouth. new house has been finished nearly. dad decided to resume working in houzai glass factory just for rmb350 monthly even actually i don‘‘t want him to work back. there are 7 days holiday i will take for chinese national day. but maybe i need on duty every day. linyunbin will come back to dongguan today.

Thanksgiving Day

Thanksgiving is a holiday celebrated in much of North America, generally observed as an expression of gratitude, usually to God. The most common view of its origin is that it was to give thanks to God for the bounty of the autumn harvest. In the United States, the holiday is celebrated on the fourth Thursday in November. In Canada, where the harvest generally ends earlier in the year, the holiday is celebrated on the second Monday in October, which is observed as Columbus Day or protested as Indigenous Peoples Day in the United States.

Thanksgiving is traditionally celebrated with a feast shared among friends and family. In the United States, it is an important family holiday, and people often travel across the country to be with family members for the holiday. The Thanksgiving holiday is generally a "four-day" weekend in the United States, in which Americans are given the relevant Thursday and Friday off. Thanksgiving is almost entirely celebrated at home, unlike the Fourth of July or Christmas, which are associated with a variety of shared public experiences.

[高中英语作文感恩节

When I was very small, my grandpa liked to tell me his tough year and I liked to listen to him. At that time, wars were everywhere, people ran away for keeping alive. My grandpa was so hungry all the time because he had no food to eat. People had the very hard life before the found of new China. Today, Chinese economy develops so fast, we live the good life, we are no longer struggle for the hunger. Thanks to our great predecessors, they build the road for us. We enjoy the peaceful life and I know it is not easy to achieve. My grandpa educates me not to waste the food and I keep his words in my mind. Peace is the main theme of today’s world, we can chase our dreams and enjoy our life, but we must remember the contribution which is from our predecessors.

在我很小的时候，爷爷很喜欢给我讲他的艰难岁月，我也喜欢听他讲。那个时候，战争无处不在，人们为了活命而逃亡。爷爷总是很饿，因为他没有东西吃。人们在新中国成立前过着艰难的生活。今天，中国的经济发展快速，我们过上了好生活，不再为饥饿挣扎。多亏了我们伟大的先辈们，他们为了开拓了道路。我们享受这和平的生活，我知道这来之不易。爷爷教育我不要浪费食物，我一直记着他的话。和平是世界现在的主题，我们可以追求梦想，快乐生活，但是我们必须记得先辈们的贡献。

[《和平的生活》高中英语作文赏析

Music is the important part of my life. The world needs music to amuse

peoples life. As they live in the fast pace, music can bring them the great joy

and relax. Since I was very small, I fell in love with music and every time when

I heard music, my body would move and feel relaxed. The function of music is

various.

There is a famous song, which called let the music heal your soul. A lot of

young people have their favorite singers. When they see their idols face to

face, they would say thank you to the singers, because their songs inspire these

young people to move on in the dark days. The songs deliver positive messages to

the public and inspire them to never give up.

Listening to the music is the main way for the young people to release

their pressure. Every day before I sleep, I will listen to the light music,

which helps me to take relax and make me sleep well. The reason why so many

people like to KTV after their work lies in releasing pressure. They need to

shout and then forget about the annoyance.

Music is favored by everyone and it is the indispensable part of our

life.

good morning, my admirable professors and my dear fellows. it’s my great honor to be here to introduce myself to all of you. my name is xing heng and i’m in my eighteen years old. i come fromxiamen, which is a famous and beautiful city. i strongly suggest you visiting there and i can be your guide if it’s convenient. after three years’ hard work, i am so excited that i am finally enrolled by my dreaming school,sichuanuniversityand be one of you. i am outgoing and i have many interests, such as playing basketball, football, and swimming, but i am only good at basketball.

i hope we can always play together in the next four years. computer science and technology is my favorite subject and i am sure that it’s also a promising area in the future, with the great development of computer science and our society. i am glad to be a classmate of you and i hope we can study and make progress together in the future. i greatly expect my life to be with you in the coming four years.

Holiday back, clean up a lot of stuff, and then, feeling, very comfortable very comfortable

First of all, moved toward the shoe ark of the head of a bed for a couple of years (my mother said to do bookcase, open on see, incredibly still really put a lot of my book is on the inside). Then, on the window is to the bed foot, however, is a cycas, very lush very lush, every time I open the window, sees the thorns are uncomfortable uncomfortable, so I put it away again.

Then, put on and inclined toward my room two sundry room (eighty percent eighty percent can be called junk) anything that moved away. Then, bathroom stone to the room, flower POTS, a bird than the bad bad, a lot of basin of aloe vera (original aloe is quite thorny) also moved away.

On the balcony, having a heap of mud and cling to my room to the head of a bed (think of that song, unrequited loves the mud, you might as well listen to again, that song was once the golden melody, xu also incredibly took the best male singer), the mud it was covered with a layer of steel net, piled on the following objects: a very bad bad mouse cage, 10 lousy flowerpot, within a few rotten stone, there are other I have forgotten. Clean up the mud, unexpectedly found it still has a lot of broken tiles, more surprisingly, inside still have a lot of iron, very young, but rough tough than wire, but the strange thing is, its doors on my bed, its so strange (cant help but think of oneself since moved to the Jin Juhua community so much has happened).

Later, I found, to my room still has a long very lush yellow skin fruit (colloquialism commonly known as chicken excrement), heard this name, I want to cut it, but mother has been planted for years, is too big, in fact I was also dont understand, why do miniascape of yellow skin. However, mother also planted sweet potatoes cane over the past two years, a lot of basin are put in window edge, and fe (vernacular called nine dishes), as for the carambola, I find it hard to entrance.

Moved a lot of a lot of things these days, though hard, your body is not good (since moved to this community, to the present as in the whole body is ill, strabismus, obesity, poor spirit, should be very poor, kidney failure, hernia, also recently appeared signs of high blood pressure, heart, breathing rapidly, and disfigured before the hearing loss, rhinitis, afraid of see the sunshine, communication difficulties, gangsters, hubei hubei, do things round, personal ability serious decline, was suddenly unprovoked pointing to DuMa (a junior high school of Yang classmate) can get no response, etc.), but after moving, comfortable a lot of really, really, really very comfortable, twisting his years of disfigured (mom difficult for his nose, but mom said, this is your own thing, want to rely on yourself to break through this obsession, who also cant help you) is loose.

First wrote here today to continue next time, bye.

放假回来，清理了不少杂物，然后，感觉，好舒服好舒服

首先，搬走了对着床头好几年的鞋柜(妈妈说要用来做我的书柜，打开一看，居然还真的装了很多我的书在里面)。接着，对着窗口不过是对着床脚的，是一棵铁树，很茂盛很茂盛，我每次打开窗口，见到它的刺就很不舒服很不舒服，于是，我又把它移开了。

然后，把对着和斜对着我房间的两个杂物房里面的东西(八成可以叫做垃圾)八成搬开了。接着，对着房间卫生间的石头，花盆，一张远比上述烂的烂台，很多盆芦荟(原来芦荟还挺多刺的)也搬开了。

在阳台上，有着一堆烂泥紧贴着我房间也正好对着床头(想起许志安的那首歌--烂泥，大家不妨再听一下，那首歌曾经是当年的金曲，许还居然拿了最佳男歌手)，烂泥上面还居然铺着一层铁网，上面堆着如下物体：一个很烂很烂的老鼠笼，10个以内的烂花盆，几块烂石，还有其他我都忘记了。清理烂泥时，居然发现里面还有很多碎瓦，更奇怪的是，里面还有好多条铁条，很幼，但比铁丝要粗韧，而奇怪的是，它门都对着我的床头，真奇怪啊(不禁想到自己自从搬到这个金菊花小区之后发生了这么多事)。

之后，我发现，对着我房间的还有一棵长的很茂盛的黄皮(白话俗称鸡屎果)，听到这个名字，我就想把它砍掉，但妈妈已经种了很多年了，太大了，其实我当时也不明白，为什么盆景要种黄皮。不过，妈妈这两年还种了番薯藤，好多盆都放在窗口边，还有菲菜(白话称为九菜)，至于杨桃，我觉得很难入口。

这些天搬了很多很多东西，虽然辛苦，自己身体也不好(自从搬到这个小区后，到现在好像周身都是病，斜视，肥胖，精神不佳，应该是很不佳，肾亏，疝气，最近还出现了高血压迹象，心跳很快，呼吸急速，还有以前破相所带来的的听力下降，鼻炎，怕见阳光，交际困难，混混鄂鄂，做事轮尽，个人能力严重下降，被人突然无端指着来毒骂(一个初中的杨姓同学)都居然可以无反应等等了)，但搬走后，真的舒服很多，真的，真的很舒服，缠绕自己多年的破相(被妈妈捏难了鼻子，但妈妈却说，这是你自己的事情，要靠你自己去冲破这个困扰，谁也帮不了你)困扰也松了。

今天先写到这里，下次继续，再见。

类别

内容A.内容B.语言C.篇章评分细则

一类卷

切合题意思想健康中心突出内容充实感情真切语言顺畅没有语病结构完整条理清楚

①具备ABC三项条件的，评一类下(43-45分)。

②立意深、构思巧、语言生动形象的，评满分;具备其中两项条件的，评一类上(48-49分);具备其中一项条件的，评一类中(46-47分)。

二类卷(35-42分)

切合题意思想健康中心明确内容具体感情真实语言通顺偶有语病结构完整

条理较清楚以38分为基准分，适当浮动：

①具备B项和另一项条件，其余一项达到三类卷标准的，获得基准分;

②具备ABC三项条件的，酌情加分;或材料新鲜，或立意新颖，或结构新巧，可评为二类上;

③具备B项条件，而另两项只达到三类卷标准的，酌情减分。

三类卷(27-34分)

基本合题意中心尚明确内容尚具体感受尚真实语言尚通顺语病不多条理尚清楚能分段

以30分为基准分，适当浮动：

①基本具备ABC三项条件的，获得基准分;,

②其中B项较好的，酌情加分;

③另有某些缺点的，酌情减分。

四类卷(18-26分)

偏离题意中心欠明确内容不具体语言不通顺语病较多条理不清楚

以22分为基准分，适当浮动：

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为四类卷，获得基准分;

②另两项较好的，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

五类卷(0-17分)

文不对题不知所云语病严重文理不通结构混乱不能完篇

以13分为基准分，适当浮动:

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为五类卷，获得基准分;②其他两项尚好，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

说明：

1.漏写题目扣1分。2.错别字每3个扣1分，重现不计，最多扣2分。3.字迹工整的加1─2分;字迹潦草，难以辨认的酌情扣1—3分。4.字数不足550字，每少50字扣1分;不足400字，降一等。5.凡认为有严重错误的答卷，评卷领导小组研究处理。

写作是对同学们英语综合能力的考查，是最能体现大家英语水平的一种检测方式。学生在写作的过程当中经常会暴露一些弱点、犯一些错误。今天，我们对大家英语作文中的常见错误进行简要归纳，并举以实例，大家在今后的英语写作中要尽量避免这些错误的发生。

一.名词

写作中，学生们常把握不好名词的数、所有格以及一些集合名词的用法。

1.Hegavemeaverygoodadviceyesterday.

句中的a要去掉，因为advice是不可数名词。一些汉语概念为可数的词在英语中却是不可数的，表示数量时在要其前加apieceof，类似的词有：news,bread,work,paper,chalk,furniture,information等等。

2.Thatgirllovesreadingbook.

可数名词单数不能孤零零地放在句子里，或前面加冠词，或将其变为复数。此处最好变为books.

3.Hewentintoabooksshopandboughtadictionary.

一般表示有生命的东西的名词的所有格用’s，如mymother’scar,而此处适宜用名词修饰名词，改为abookshop.

4.MyfamilyiswatchingTV.

一些集合名词如看成一个整体，则用单数的谓语动词，如Myfamilyisahappyone.如果强调集合中每个个体的个人行为，则用复数的谓语动词。此处看电视是个体行为，应把is改为are。类似的词有：team,class,audience等。

5.Iboughtsomepotatosandtomatosatthesupermarket.

中学阶段，以“o”结尾的名词中有四个词变复数时要加es，它们是tomato,potato,Negro,hero;其余的都加s变为复数。

6.Thishasnothingtodowiththeirbelieves.（这和他们的信仰没关系。）

以f,fe结尾的词变为复数时一般去f,fe加ves，如knife—knives,

thief—thieves;而roof和belief直接加s变为复数。所以应把believes改为beliefs.

二.冠词

7.Thebosswantstohireanusefulperson.

用a还是an，取决于后面单词音标中的第一个音，如为元音用an，为辅音用a。useful的第一个音是辅音所以应把an改为a。类似的，我们说aEuropeancountry.

8.Planeisamachinethatcanfly.

plane为可数名词单数，不能单独放在句中，应在其前加冠词或把它变为复数，而本句后有amachine,因此只能在其前面加a，变为Aplane。

9.Heplayedapianoatthepartyyesterday.

把a改为the，因为乐器前用定冠词。

10.Themachinewasinventedin1920s.

在in后加the，因为表示年代用in加the再加几十的复数，如在八十年代inthe80s。

11.XiaoHongwenttoschoolbythebuseveryday.

去掉the，因为表示交通方式用by直接加交通工具。

三.代词

使用代词时请注意其单、复数，主、宾格以及形容词性物主代词和名词性物主代词的用法。

12.Heisoneofthosespeakerswhomakehisideasperfectlyclear.

定语从句的先行词是thosespeakers，为复数，因此从句中的指示代词应为复数，应把his改为their。

13.Whomdoyouthinkhasleftthelightson?

放在疑问句特殊疑问词后的doyouthink/believe/guess/imagine/suppose等都不参与句子成分。本句中去掉doyouthink后缺的是主语，应把Whom改为Who。

14.ThebosspretendednottoseeJohnandI.

John和I在句中都做的宾语，应把I改为me。

15.Thesebooksaremine；thoseinthebagareher.

her是形容词性物主代词，后面应该加名词books，或把her改为hers。

四.数词

16.Therearefourteenhundredsstudentsinourschool.

hundred/thousand/million/score/dozen等词前有具体数字时后不加s，前面没有具体数字时在其后加s和of，表示大约几百几千的概念。如two

hundredstudents（两百个学生），hundredsofstudents（成百上千个学生）。例句中应把hundreds改为hundred。

17.Theirschoolistwiceaslargerasourschool.

表倍数关系的as...as中间只能用形容词或副词的原级。因此应把larger改为large.

18.Today’shomeworkisafive-hundred-wordscomposition.

几个单词由连字符连接而组成的复合形容词中的名词只能用单数，所以把five-hundred-words改为five-hundred-word.

19.TwothirdofthestudentsinourschoolarefromAmerica.

英语表达中分数的分子用基数词，分母用序数词，分子大于一时分母后要加s，所以就把third改为thirds.

五.形容词和副词

形容词和副词容易被误用，形容词和副词的比较级和最高级也是应注意的重点。

20.Thepatientappearednervouslywhenhetalkedtothedoctor.

appear在此是个系动词，其后应接形容词作表语。所以应把nervously改为nervous.

21.Theartistworkedhardlytofinishhisdrawingsontime.

此句需要一个副词来修饰，hardly是副词，但意为“几乎不”，hard也可以是副词，表努力，因此把hardly改为hard.

22.Thisshirtismorecheaperthanthatone.

more只构成比较级，而不能修饰比较级。因此把more去掉。

23.Heisthemostsuccessfulofthetwobusinessmen.

两者相比较时，比较级前用定冠词，三者或三者以上才用most，因此把most改为more.

24.Heworkslessharderthanheusedto.

表不如?...时用less加上形容词和副词的原级，因此把harder改为hard.

25.Thebookisfairlymoreinterestingthanthatone.

fairly只能修饰形容词和副词的原级，可以修饰比较级的副词或短语有：much,even,still,far,alot,alittle,abit,any,no,byfar,rather等，因此把fairly改为rather.

26.Thisisasaninterestingastoryastheoneinthemagazine.

as?as中间的词序是as加上形容词加上a(n)加上名词再加上as，因此应改为asinterestingastoryastheone.

27.Theweatherhereisnicerthan.

同样的事物才能相比较，weather和不具有可比性，因此应改为Theweatherhereisnicerthanthatof.

29.Iwouldrathertakeatrainthanwentbybus.

这个词组为wouldratherdo?thando?，因此把went改为go.

30.Isthereinterestinganythingatthemeeting?

修饰anything,something,everything,nothing的形容词都要放在它们的后面。

31.Ineverhaveseensuchapersonbefore.

像never之类的副词在句中应放在be动词、助动词之后，实意动词之前。因为应改为Ihaveneverseensuchapersonbefore.

32.Thebookisworthtoberead.

beworthdoing意为值得被做。因此改为Thebookisworthreading.

33.Itissurethathewillsucceed.

sure的主语只能为人，而certain的主语可为人和物。因此把sure改为certain.

34.Heisregardedasoneofthebestalivewritersatpresent.

alive为表语形容词，偶尔也做后置定语。因此把alive改为living，或把alive放在writers后面。

35.Idon’tknowthathehasfinishedtheworkyet.

yet用于否定和疑问句，already用于肯定句。把yet改为already.

36.Hesaidnearlynothingatthemeeting.

nearly不与否定词用在同一个句子中，而almost可以。因此把nearly改为almost。

六.介词

37.Heusuallygoestoschoolbyhisfather’scar.

by加上名词表示一种交通方式，中间什么都不加，如bycar,bybus,byplane等；如果名词前有其他的词修饰，则应用除by以外的其他介词，此处把by改为in.

38.Pleasewaitmeattheschoolgate.

wait为不及物动词，需加介词for后才能再跟名词或代词做宾语。

39.HehasbeenmarriedwithBettyformorethantwentyyears.

marry不跟with连用，应把with改为to。

40.Ifinishedtheworkontimeunderthehelpofhim.

Which is better, shopping online or traditional shopping? Different people

have different attitudes towards it. Some people think that online shopping is

very convenient, for it can save them a lot of time and energy. It’s especially

helpful for those who are always busy with their work. Besides, through the

internet, they can get more information about the commodities they want to buy

and buy a lot of things that cannot be bought in local places.

Nevertheless, I’m not keen on online shopping at all, since most

commodities which are bought online are of poor quality. Once we are cheated, we

may find it difficult to make a complaint. Thus we should take more cautions

when shopping online.

In my eyes, I prefer traditional shopping, because I can choose what I

really need. Also, I can know the quality of every commodity more clearly. Even

if there’s something wrong with the commodities, I can still ask the sellers to

compensate for my loss.

Today is the first day of the New Year, the morning of fresh air and

sunshine, mother took me to feel the New Years day outside the atmosphere.

Street vehicle comings and goings, flowing very lively, mother took me to

the supermarket to buy things, supermarket bustling, originally people rush to

buy New Year gift! My mother said he wanted to buy a toy, I say: "I is the big

kid dont car these toys, it would save some money to buy school things," then I

will take some learning supplies and a cake billet to do our own cake to

celebrate New Years day. On the way back to my grandmas I saw many shops,

supermarkets in glass written on New Years day wishes everybody happy, return

to my grandmas I took the cake billet and brother in above the text is

made.

Less than half an hour a nifty bright homemade cake will appear in the

present, this is really a happy New Year!

How to improve network security

As time goes ongoing surfing on the Internet become more and more popular.It is a new phenomenon and sounds an alarm (for online security ).

Network security cover anti- virus network security and hacker protection . Together with the technology of Access Control redundant backup recovery and network security it makes an allround security system . Many companies devote to the information security technology and product research and development production and sales providing advanced network security solutions . Firewall just is an effective measure of network security .如何提高网络安全

随着时间的推移，上网冲浪变得越来越流行，这是一个新的现象，听起来是一个警钟(在线安全)。

网络安全覆盖防病毒、网络安全和黑客保护。结合访问控制技术、冗余备份恢复、网络安全，它使一个全面的安全系统。许多公司致力于信息安全技术和产品的研发、生产和销售，提供先进的网络安全解决方案。防火墙只是是网络安全的一种有效措施。

This morning i went to the english corner which is in the park near my home. it is three years since it was founded.

Many middle school students as well as college students and foreigners take part in the activity. people there practice speaking english by talking about something interesting. people also exchange the experience in english learning. i think it is a good chance for me to use what i have learnt in my english class. i felt very cool after i got back home.

I’ll try my best to learn english better, for it is so widely used in the world.