考试后的思考怎么写(汇总20篇)

作文检查重点：

1.是否使用了正确的语法结构，比方说，动词时态一致、主谓一致、用词准确、词性(尤其是名词、动词、形容词)、名词单复数、冠词错误和介词错误。

2.句式是否有变化 (如各种从句的使用、分词结构等 )

3.使用了一定的词汇量 ( 如用同义词或词组来避免过多的重复)

4.标点、拼写没有错误。

5.在每段的主题句中都表明了这个段落的中心思想，所有扩展句都紧扣主题。

6.使用了过渡性词语，因而句子之间和段落之间都有逻辑性和条理性。

7.每一段话都得到充分的展开。

8.提供了足够的细节、例子或论据。

9.明确的观点。

10.每一段话都紧扣文章的主题。

1、3、4、6为考试时检查的重点，最先检查首段，和每段的首末句。

除了最为基本的单词，语法，句型变化外，我们还需要注意文章本身的逻辑性以及完整性，最后小编祝大家都能考出好成绩。

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写作：六月份考试重点注意文化类，科技类和教育类，（写作题不要看了就行，一定要好好写完十篇 “才10篇，不多嘛”，尤其是打×号难度大的题目，最好找专人修改）。

1．Some people think that the earlier technology has changed our life more than the recent technology. Do you agree or disagree?

×2．Some people think there is no drawback to ethnic in the multi-cultured country. Multi-cultured does more benefit to a country than the problems it brings about. Do you agree or disagree?

3． Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution. What extend do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think more effective?

4．Many countries have spent vast sum of money on armament for the sake of self defense. Some people think they should spend on helping the poverty and other disadvantages rather than on weapons. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

5．Should criminals be sent to a jail or let them do something else as punishment instead of sending into a jail? Why and give your reasons.

×7． Do the negative effects of some international media such as TV and magazine for example overweigh the positive effects?

8．Government should protect culture. Therefore, some people believe that new building should be built in traditional style. Do you agree or disagree?

×9.Memorization of information by frequency repetition (rote learning) plays the most important role in education system. To what extend do you agree or disagree？

10． As scientists contribute more to the development of our society than other people ,science student should get more financial support from the government than other student get ,do you agree?

或According to recent survey, more and more people are paying less attention to basic science. Is this phenomenon also true in your country? What do you think about the causes of this trend and give your recommendations.

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雅思写作模板介绍雅思考试大作文的用词和句法技巧

本文来自雅思作文网《介绍雅思考试大作文的用词和句法技巧》。   西方人有一句话说：Your boss has a big vocabulary than you have，that is one good reason why your boss is your boss. 这句话翻译过来就是说：你老板的词汇量比你大，这是他之所以是你老板的一个很好原因。可见词汇量大不但对一个人的工作起着决定性作用，而且也是获得雅思写作高分最有力的武器之一。

（一）词汇运用的层次

通过对雅思写作评分标准，官方范文以及考生所写的文章的分析，考生在用词方面可以分为以下几个层次：

1. 正确（Correct）：表达你想表达的意思，对于同一个意思可能有好几个词，那么同义词基本上都是正确的。

2. 合适（Appropriate）：在不同语境下要使用不同的词，比如在肯定的语义中要用褒义词，而在否定的语义中要使用贬义词。

3. 精确（Exact）：要联系上下文，尽可能用词到位，因为有些词是不够精确的。比如： allocate part of the fiscal revenue，allocate是分配，不能用divide来替换。

4. 灵活（Smart）：英语本身就有很多约定俗成的表达方法，用我们的话来说，就是有很多潜规则。因此，我们要注意培养地道英语表达，还要注意词汇的固定搭配。

（二）词汇的变换技巧

在写作评分标准里有明确的关于词汇的标准： Lexical Resource： 词汇资源。它考察词汇的运用是否多样恰当且准确。词汇的多少并不能决定文章的好坏，但用词精确性是可以加分的。一般来说，词汇的准确表达可以通过两个方面达到，一是在用词的难度上拔高，二是在近义词的多种表达上提升。值得提醒的是，不要过分堆积华丽的，会给考官留下华而不实的感觉。

1. 使用同义词进行替换

使用同义词的好处在于首先可以向考官展示考生词汇量的丰富，其次也可以使文章富有变化。因此，同义词的运用是衡量考生英语水平的一个很有力的标准，考官认同你的同时，自然也会给你高分。请看下面的例子：

School teachers used to be the source of information. However，some people argue that teachers are not as important as before because there is an increasing variety of information resources. What is your opinion？ （08年4月24日考题）

2. 使用各种形式的同根词进行替换

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英语里面有很多同根词，通过单词的变换来吸引阅卷者眼球并获得高分是一个很好的办法。一些单词通过添加前缀或者后缀的方式可以衍生出很多新的词汇。而使用这些词汇可以避免重复原文当中的词条，也可以向阅卷者展示你变化词汇的技巧。

比如写作中我们经常会用到“知道”这个概念，我们可以用know这个词以及它的其他形式和它们的同义词来表示“知道”这个意思。

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100109 社会 Some people believe that the charity organizations should give aid to those in greatest need，wherever they live. Some people believe that the charity organizations would better concentrate on helping people who live in own country instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

100109 科技 Some people argue that the technology such as mobile phone destroys social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

100114 政府 In todays world, it is private companies rather than government who pay for and carry out most on scientific research. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

100123 社会 The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming much wider, the rich richer, the poor even poorer. What problems can the situation cause and give the solutions.

100123 社会 Many people are moving to big cities. Why is that? To what extent do you think it is a good trend?

100130 社会 Today there is a great increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?

100206 社会 Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. The ordinary people can get no advantage with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

100211 社会Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world. Other people, however, believe that scientists have the greatest influence. Discuss both of views and give your own opinion.

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这次的期中考试令老师与父母大失所望，成绩令我也十分震惊，是的，考砸了。

总结了失败的原因，才发现有很多。首先，学习态度不端正，课前预习不充分，学完每一课后没有及时复习，导致考试时碰到以前课程的题目，失分过多。学习习惯不好，没有合理安排时间，作业的质量与效率不高，经常熬夜，上课没有精神。

其次，上课没有积极参与课堂，对于每一个问题没有仔细思考，以致思路不活跃，掌握的知识不具体、不全面，不会举一反三，思考问题所需时间很长，导致作文时间不充裕。做的练习很少，做题的经验较少。再者便是课外书的阅读，阅读量过少，导致写作文没有素材，词汇的积累也很少，语言没有逻辑性，文章显得十分杂乱，苍白无力。对历史与人文的理解也很少，对许多文章包括诗词都不能理解，导致考试中的课外知识失分不少，阅读能力仍有待提高。在数学上主要是没有很好的理解定义和公式，往往把定义和公式记反了，所以造成考试时出现错误的现象。最后，则是我最大的弱点：粗心。总是“大意失荆州”，做题马马虎虎，没有审清题意便盲目做题，做完试卷后没有仔细检查，导致犯了许多不该错的失误，正确率较低。以后做题一定要仔细，不能因为题目简单而不去在意，学习是一个循环渐进的过程，只有打牢了基础，才能在此之上再去提高，所以，对以前知识的掌握，是必要性的。

通过了对本次期中考试的总结，我了解了更多自己的不足之处，知道了，自己的水平还差得很远，只有下苦功夫，才能取得成功。

令人紧张的期中考试结束了，考试的失败与成功还是一个未解之谜，可是，当考完最后一门功课时，老师简短的几句话却成了我们心情的晴天霹雳，使一下子松弛下来的我们像打了霜的茄子——蔫儿了！ 今年的期中考试题非常简单，但老师说过：“考试题越简单越是会错题连篇。”因此，我们都不敢轻视这次考试。但是，最终简单的考试题把我们征服了，使快速答完题的我们闲下来，并且认为：“这么简单的考试题，一定不会错误百出”有了这个念头，我们便不去仔细检查，而是飞快的游览着卷面，任凭让错题在那里摆着，即使特别显眼，我们也无法发现它，更不会去将它们改一下，就这样我们交了卷儿，考后家长问：“考得怎么样？”我们一律回答说：“可以的。”可是，老师给我们判卷，告诉我们卷子的一、二、三、四题丢分儿丢得很多，这下我心里也没底了，因为我平时老也写错字，而且还有一个给“高”字加部首组成新字的题不会，平时还不注意留心这种类型题，使这次考试造成了无法弥补的失误！

唉！考试已经过去，考试的过失也无法弥补了，只能今后注意、并改正。以后，我会多积累形近字、给字加部首组成新字等类型题。我要多积累错题，分析错题原因，对比正确答案，使我更好掌握丰富的语文基础知识，活学活用。

考试题是多变的，我们不但要积累，还要灵活运用，这样我们才能对考试题应对自如。

考试后反思时间如流水般淌过，转眼间中段考也已结束，成绩也已经公布了。望着试卷上的分数，我惊讶了。因为这并不是我真正想要的分数。为什么我不能考得再高一些呢！于是，我开始自我检查。

我每到考试的时候总因紧张而很着急，为此，我想出了几个办法。

1.解答题时，不要急于下笔，要先在草稿纸上列出这道题的主要步骤，然后按照步骤一步步做下来，不忽略每一个细节，尽量把每一道题都答得完整；2.平时多做一些不同类型的题，这样就会对大多数题型熟悉，拿到试卷心中就有把握；3.适当做一些计算方面的练习，让自己不在计算方面失分。我想如果我能做到我以上提到的这几点，我一定能把考试中的失误降到最低。因此，我一定会尽力做到以上几点的。

但我想单单只靠以上几点还是不够的，我还就该拥有几点科学应试技巧。于是，我根据我自己的实际情况想出了几点。

5号的期末考试结束了，可是我很担心，不知道考的怎么样，因为考试前我和奶奶有个约定，如果我三门功课考不到90分以上，奶奶就要回家，不管我了，所以我的压力很大，只能等结果。

我担心的事今天有消息了——考分下来了，我考得不理想，和奶奶的要求只差一步，语文考了87。5，没上90分，和同学比，我还差一些，没有达到平均分，我就不由自主地哭了，心里特别的难受。在复习的时候，我也没少用功，为什么我就考不了高分呢?我把自己关在房间里，越哭越伤心，恨不得打自己几下，奶奶和妈妈把门推开，劝我不要哭了，现在哭又有什么用呢?只能在下学期好好努力，把功课赶上去，但是我还是很上心，我怕奶奶回老家，以后家里空荡荡的，因为爸爸妈妈要上班，事情比较多，经常家里只剩我一个人，我真害怕，所以越来越伤心，奶奶可能看出了我的心思，就把我抱在怀里，认真又严肃的说：“这次原谅你，也取消约定，在下学期一定要好好学习，在这个假期里，除了完成作业，还要找找差距，主要改变学习的浮躁，满足于一知半解，没有真正地理解，所以题稍微有变化就不会了，马虎大意，不看清题就下笔，所以就造成不该错的题了，而且学习的自觉性不够。”听了奶奶的话，我决心在新的一年里，发扬成绩，克服缺点，百尺竿头更进一步!

句子、词语。文章由句子组成，句子由词语组成。在着手写文章之前，应该提醒自己注意下面几点

1)句子与词语的正确用法。这是最基本的一点。这里包括单字的正确拼写、词语在特定句子中的正确应用、正确的句子模式。注意：千万不要在文章中出现中国式的英语。这就要求在构思的时候不要用中文进行思考，写的时候要仔细斟酌文章的语句。

2)句子的多样化。这点的实现必须在句子与词语的正确上来实现。句子的多样化是体现一个人英语语言水平的关键也是使文章获得高分的重点。如非谓语从句、定语从句、宾语从句等，以及简单句、复杂句的综合使用。

3)标点的正确使用

文章的整体风格与气氛。

作为考官或者是阅读你文章的人，在第一次接触到你文章时就可以感受到文章的特点与风格，或者活泼或者呆板，而依据模板写的文章很难做到活泼或者是吸引读者。

保持书写的工整性与字迹

Dont confuse a university degree with a successful life, even though higher education canopen doors to a range of economic options. It is one thing to make a good living, and yet it isquite another to make a good fortune. In various aspects of life, success is to be measurednot so much by the education that one has as by the effort that one makes, plus of course lotsof luck.

Undoubtedly, there are some types of success in professional life that are dependent on auniversity education. You need a college degree to have a career in a profession such as law,medicine, engineering, or teaching. In todays workplace, job opportunities and academicdegrees are linked in such a way that it seems difficult, if not impossible, for an individualwithout good qualifications to make any career success happen. According to national statisticsshown by economists, bachelors degree holders earn upward of 40 percent more than high-school graduates. Based on this pattern, income levels rise as educational levels rise. Manystudies also reveal that university education introduces you not only choices of career but alsolife goals and the power to reach these goals. In short, being able to go through highereducation increases ones employability and earning potential as well as ones self-esteem.

Having a degree, however, does not mean that one will be successful in life. In some work fields,what is crucial are hard work and being lucky. To begin with, you do not have to have a highereducation to become successful people like business-persons, sports players, political leaders,movie and music stars. While hard work is motivated by the desire to triumph, success bydestiny is associated with that old ABC--ability, breaks and courage. Not all success stories aretold about university graduates, nor are academic degrees particularly essential when it comesto becoming wealthy. Ironic but true, successful entrepreneurs even benefit from not havingacademic qualifications, because going to college and taking examinations forces people tolearn and think like other millions of graduates. This actually makes it less likely that they willcome up with creative ideas and truly mould-breaking insights on which amazing successes arebuilt.

There is no arguing the importance of a university education as long as employability andincome are concerned, but success also comes from effort to do the right work at the righttime. If you think a successful life means having a lot of money, you are far from wrong.Nevertheless, it does not follow that the door to success is closed for people who do not haveacademic results.

一、外显连接

所谓外显连接是指用特定的连接词将相关信息进行连接。通常情况下，例子作为论据由for example, for instance, like, such as, take… as 等引出。

如：it is undeniable that mobile phones have facilitated our lives in many different ways. For example, when an emergency occurs, such as a traffic accident or a violent crime, mobile phones can help the victims to call the police or an ambulance immediately for help.

本例中，for example 引出例子论证“mobile phones have facilitated our lives in many different ways.” 而后面的 such as 则引出emergency 的具体形式。For instance 与它的用法完全相同，即后面要接句子例证。 Like, such as, take…as 等直接名词（或相当于名词的词）。由于这些都是基本常识，这里不再赘述。

为了使连接词多样化，建议考生运用下面的一些短语（或句式）连接论点和论据：

…is a case in point;

…serve as a typical example

…can be taken as an example;

one example is that…

another one is that等

如：Working part time when you are studying in university is beneficial to your life. I myself is a case in point（or‘my experiences serve as a typical example’）. Through those experiences, I have learned to be independent and responsible.

二、内化连接

实际上，大家看原汁原味的文英文文章会发现有些信息的连接不用外显式，而是通过某些特定的词或者特定的方式给读者以清晰的层次感，从而使文章信息传递更通畅。

下面我们来看一下哪些例证可以省去连接词，实现内化连接。

1、人物经历作例子

其中的人物可以是名人，Thomas Edison gave us an example that success only comes after persistence and hard work. 也可以是作者自己的亲身经历 I remember that ten years ago cell phones were unusual and seldom seen. 人物经历作例子因为其较强的故事性而引人关注。但是切记，如果运用名人做例证，要注意信息的准确性； 如果运用自己的亲身经历做例子则要注意例子选择是否典型、有说服力。但是无论怎样，有人物经历时，一定会给人以非常明确的细节信息的感觉，所以完全可以省去连接词。

2、数字信息作例子：

引入带有数字信息的例证，除可以更具体、更详实的说明观点外，也可以内化连接词，因为数字信息所要传递的一定是一个量化的概念，而这一概念就是它所要论证的中心。看个例子：

The work was immense: filling about eighty large notebooks (and without a library to hand), Johnson wrote the definitions of over 40,000 words, and illustrated their many meanings with some 114,000 quotations drawn from English writing on every subject, from the Elizabethans to his own time.

例子中immense是观点中心词，后面的具体数字都是对这一中心词的佐证。（当然我们不要忘记这里“：”也是在帮助这段文字内化连接，相当于“for example”）

3、专有名词信息作例子

人名、地名属于细节信息的范畴，也经常出现在例证中，以一种’fact’的形式出现。如：

Air pollution is increasingly becoming the focus of government and citizen concern around the globe. From Mexico City and New York to Singapore and Tokyo, new solutions to this old problem are being proposed and implemented with ever increasing speed.当你看到这些地名时，一定会想到它们是某一类具有相同性质的地域的代表，那么自然也就是’点’信息，而非‘面’信息，从而可以省去连接词的使用，却依然保持主次分明。

其它诸如期刊杂志名、书名等专有名词也可以有类似的用法。

4、一些小的介词（短语）引导例子

如果大家注意总结，会发现雅思阅读文章中有一些介词（短语）也可以引出例子。

如：from…to: Toughened glass is found everywhere, from cars and bus shelters to the windows, walls and roofs of thousands of buildings around the world.

再如：including: …..

Other substances were then introduced: including fillers, catalysts and hexa.

这里including 相当于such，like等。

综上，举例论证除了需要牢牢掌握大家熟知的表举例的连接词外，还要注意积累一些隐去连接词却嵌入一些表细节信息的词汇的情况，或者注意学习老外用标点符号以及被我们轻视的一些小词来标示文章层次的巧妙的做法。同时，同学们也要关注一下，人物经历和事实信息（尤其是带有数字、专有名词的事实）作例证更有说服力也非常容易掌握。所以同学们要从举例论证的连接词、常用例子类型等角度全面掌握举例论证，从而让举例论证更好地论证观点，更好的为雅思大作文服务。

[雅思考试作文及写作技巧推荐

今天数学考试，我很期待，但也很害怕，因为我与班上一位学霸男生的赌约就此实现，我一直以为，至始至终，勤能补拙，但到最后，考试发下来的那一刻，面对那一个个大叉叉，我还是懦弱的哭了，不知自己究竟在哭什么，是为第一次赌约就输了，还是自己没能满足老师的期望而难过，微风缓缓飞，我思考着，思考思考，曾几何时，我也曾像这样，站在阳台，望着远处的景物发呆，那时在想好美啊!，这时，我却在想考试的失误事情。

我面对他的成绩与他的人，我顿时感觉无地自容，他是那么优秀，但也是那么懒，可为什么我就是无法赢他呢!我渴望，勤能补拙，记得是一位启蒙老师跟我说的。

我也一直坚信，究竟是自己不够努力，还是心思没有放在考试、学习上，他脑子很好使，我也因为有他这个对手而自豪，因为有人曾说：要看你这人是怎样的一个人，一是看你交的朋友，二是看你的对手?我有他这个对手，应该感到骄傲吧!

但我为什么就是高兴不起来，是因为自己一直无法赢过他而感到难过吧!我并不认为他有多努力，包括平时他的作业都是用抄的，但为什么会考得那么好，我想，我应该好好深思，面壁思过。

[考试过后的思考作文

Many successful persons seem alike to have a very strong will called desire. It seems anuncommon common sense to make success happen. Probably no other human characteristicis more outstanding than the will to plan carefully and to work patiently.

As a saying goes: "Success favors the prepared mind." For this reason, preparing ones careerwith details is like seriously mapping lifes routes toward achievements. Only by so doing with aconsistent mind can one prevent desire from becoming blind ambition seeking accidently tostrike it rich or downright to be particularly lucky in life. In other words, a successful person iscapable of setting goals and paving the way against all odds. Of course, important to successare also such human qualities as honesty, intelligence, a sense of humor, among othervirtues. However, these characteristics must be considered as only advantages which do notalone guarantee success in life.

Few would doubt that working with patience is an expression of desire. Nothing worthwhilecomes easily and good work takes pains. This means that a successful person is one who canmake the best of education and talents, if any. Unfortunately, an educated person would remainonly an educated person unless possessing passion to do more. Likewise, it would be a wasteof talents if gifts from heaven are abandoned in idleness. So it is work, continuous work thatcan accomplish results that last.

As a conclusion, it is easier said than done to be able to plan and to work in such a way thatthe way to success can be ensured. A motto may apply: "Where there is a will; there is a way."When people do not succeed, it might be either that the desire is not strong enough, or that itmight be the absence of desire in the first place.

雅思写作有规律可循，掌握一些有用的句型，对你的写作必然是有百益而无害的，下面是小编整理的相关内容，希望对你有帮助。

1. According to a recent survey, four million people die each year from diseases linked to smoking。

依照最近的一项调查，每年有4，000，000人死于与吸烟有关的疾病。

2. The latest surveys show that quite a few children have unpleasant associations with homework。

最近的调查显示相当多的孩子对家庭作业没什么好感。

3. No invention has received more praise and abuse than Internet。

没有一项发明像互联网一样同时受到如此多的赞扬和批评。

4. People seem to fail to take into account the fact that education does not end with graduation。

人们似乎忽视了教育不应该随着毕业而结束这一事实。

5. An increasing number of people are beginning to realize that education is not complete with graduation。

越来越多的人开始意识到教育不能随着毕业而结束。

6. When it comes to education, the majority of people believe that education is a lifetime study。

说到教育，大部分人认为其是一个终生的学习。

7. Many experts point out that physical exercise contributes directly to a persons physical fitness。

许多专家指出体育锻炼直接有助于身体健康。

8. Proper measures must be taken to limit the number of foreign tourists and the great efforts should be made to protect local environment and history from the harmful effects of international tourism。

应该采取适当的措施限制外国旅游者的数量，努力保护当地环境和历史不受国际旅游业的不利影响。

9. An increasing number of experts believe that migrants will exert positive effects on construction of city. However, this opinion is now being questioned by more and more city residents, who complain that the migrants have brought many serious problems like crime and prostitution。

越来越多的专家相信移民(微博)对城市的建设起到积极作用。然而，越来越多的城市居民却怀疑这种说法，他们抱怨民工给城市带来了许多严重的问题，像犯罪和卖淫。

10. Many city residents complain that it is so few buses in their city that they have to spend much more time waiting for a bus, which is usually crowded with a large number of passengers。

许多市民抱怨城市的公交车太少，以至于他们要花很长时间等一辆公交车，而车上可能已满载乘客。

11. There is no denying the fact that air pollution is an extremely serious problem: the city authorities should take strong measures to deal with it。

无可否认，空气污染是一个极其严重的问题：城市当局应该采取有力措施来解决它。

12. An investigation shows that female workers tend to have a favorable attitude toward retirement。

一项调查显示妇女欢迎退休。

13. A proper part-time job does not occupy students too much time. In fact, it is unhealthy for them to spend all of time on their study. As an old saying goes: All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy。

一份适当的业余工作并不会占用学生太多的时间，事实上，把全部的时间都用到学习上并不健康，正如那句老话：只工作，不玩耍，聪明的孩子会变傻。

14. Any government, which is blind to this point, may pay a heavy price。

任何政府忽视这一点都将付出巨大的代价。

15.Nowadays, many students always go into raptures at the mere mention of the coming life of high school or college they will begin. Unfortunately, for most young people, it is not pleasant experience on their first day on campus。

当前，一提到即将开始的学校生活，许多学生都会兴高采烈。然而，对多数年轻人来说，校园刚开始的日子并不是什么愉快的经历。

16. In view of the seriousness of this problem, effective measures should be taken before things get worse。

考虑到问题的严重性，在事态进一步恶化之前，必须采取有效的措施。

17. The majority of students believe that part-time job will provide them with more opportunities to develop their interpersonal skills, which may put them in a favorable position in the future job markets。

大部分学生相信业余工作会使他们有更多机会发展人际交往能力，而这对他们未来找工作是非常有好处的。

18. It is indisputable that there are millions of people who still have a miserable life and have to face the dangers of starvation and exposure。

无可争辩，现在有成千上万的人仍过着挨饿受冻的痛苦生活。

19. Although this view is wildly held, this is little evidence that education can be obtained at any age and at any place。

尽管这一观点被广泛接受，很少有证据表明教育能够在任何地点、任何年龄进行。

20. No one can deny the fact that a persons education is the most important aspect of his life。

[英语雅思考试作文经典句子

议论文，作为雅思写作中举足轻重的一部分，锻炼的是烤鸭们在遇到一个受人关注的话题时说理和自圆其说的能力，它培养的不仅是考生在应试时的临场反应能力，更是将来在国外生存时完成essay以及与他人沟通和交谈的能力。因此在雅思写作考试中，议论文占了将近三分之二的分值。

雅思官方对该篇作文的字数要求为不少于250字，此要求和国外留学时所需要的1000字起步的essay相比虽存在差距，但已经使许多考生头疼不已。为什么如此多的中国考生在写作过程中存在字数不达标和无话可说的情况，归根结底是由于对议论文思路扩展的那些重要切入点不够了解，没有掌握说理时的方法和技巧。下面专家将对论文思路扩展方法一一分析。

一、因果推理法

所谓议论文，最关键之处在于论述得当。支持句应使主题句更加令人信服，令考生的想法更加鲜明的呈现在考官面前。然而，中国考生在论述时往往存在一些误区：

（一）一味重复主题，空洞解释。

此类段落不论字数多少，都给人空虚的感觉。考生往往为了凑足篇幅而“不择手段”。表面看来扩展了许多，但仔细体会永远只有一个意思。不得不让考官觉得即单调又啰嗦。

（二）论述浮于表面，不达根源。

这类考生往往缺乏刨根究底的精神，总是在主旨周围绕圈子，不达中心。这也是中国考生的通病，看似八九不离十，却总也不愿把话点破，让考官怎能不又急又气。

在所有的扩展方式之中，因果推理法是最受用也是最透彻的方法。凡事先追溯到其原由，再扩展其结果，这是将主题阐述清晰、论述有力并且具有逻辑感的最佳手段。例如在“出国留学利弊”这一题目之前，若考生单纯说“有可能会使青少年学坏”，难免缺乏说服力，但若紧接着扩展“因为孩子高中毕业后思想上还不成熟，若认识不好的朋友会难以抵抗社会上不好的诱惑”，那么此论点一定会让考官眉头舒展，点头认同。由此可见，善用此推理法会让议论文如虎添翼，事半功倍。

引出原因的表达方式主要有：Because../Since.../As....

引出结果的表达方式主要有：so.../Therefore,.../Consequently,.../Accordingly,... /As a result,.../In this way,.../result in.../Thanks to.../Due to.../ Owing to..

【写作真题】Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or ate out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. Discuss.

【名师献计】It is important to note that imports are now increasingly affordable to the general population. Thanks to the rapid development of the freight transport industry, air travel has become an economical mode of transport, resulting in the subsequent decrease in the cost of importing. Meanwhile, technical advance in the food processing industry has made it much easier to preserve fresh fruits and vegetables over a long-haul air flight. Because of the wide availability of imported crops, there are more varieties...

二、举例法

雅思考试有条写作指令叫做：Include relevant examples from your own experience. 所以很多考生在考试时都喜欢使用举例法（exemplification)。这一扩展方式本身无可厚非，然而在使用时几种例子是不适合的。

（一）局限于自己或朋友的例子。

此类例子往往缺乏客观性和说服力，由于第一人称的局限导致所叙述事件难免“鸡毛蒜皮”。要明白，个人不代表整体。

例：I keep my dog to avoid my loneliness and I find a lot of fun.

这样的例子让人犹如在看记叙文，和议论文很不搭调。

（二）引用过多数据。

太多专业数据会给人捏造的痕迹，缺乏真实性。考官会质疑数据的出处。

例：A survey indicates that the number of people smoking has increased to as high as 65 percent in China.（一项调查显示。。。）

"65%"让文章看起来有些假，有捏造的嫌疑。"A survey"又不够具有代表性。

（三）中国式的例子。

一个国家同样难代表世界。雅思是international的考试，不应将范围框的太局限。此外考官来自各个国家，过分使用一个国家的例子会引起他们的反感。

例：Many children in China like to play computer games for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.

只需小小改动便可成为成功范例。

举例是为了更加形象地叙述事情。朗阁海外考试研究中心提醒考生们要注意以下原则：

（一）要来源于生活，要具有生动的论述效果。

不能过于空洞，也不能脱离现时，否则就失去了举例的意义。

（二）要客观表达。

虽然来源于身边社会，但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮，拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到，只需要把事件中某一个具体的你，我，他，变成是客观群体，比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。

举例的常见表达方式：

for example,/for instance,（后加句子）

Such as/ like      （后加词组）

Take... as an example,

A case in point is that......

其次，在举例时还应注意尺度。

1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称，为了加强客观性，应将人称写成第三人称。

改正：Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.（那些养宠物，例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感）

2. 应避免引用一项调查研究，并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉，用含糊的方法表示。

改正：There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. （大量证据表明。。。）

3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家，尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。

改正：Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.（在全世界，许多孩子在屏幕前待太久，导致了他们的视力减弱。

“全世界”的表达方式：around the world, all over the world, across the globe

【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood) throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.

文化和道德本来就是雅思大作文中较难的两个话题，而近来这两个话题考的频率又很高。考生不防也从这两个角度来准备一下主体段落的观点。

反对强势文化入侵：

Globalization might undermine cultural diversity. Multinational corporations promote a certain kind of consumerist culture, in which standard commodities, promoted by global marketing campaigns exploiting basic material desires, create similar lifestyles, which is so-called Coca-Colanization.

该不该撒谎：

The dishonest practice of telling lies will produce a perverse impact on ones personality.

总之，在大作文的主体段落写作过程中，考生可以将以上的思路结合题目的特点综合应用，切忌生搬硬套。平时在读文章时也要多总结别人的观点角度，而后为我所用。这样定能让你逐渐形成西方的思维习惯，在考试中能才思泉涌，下笔有神。

以上就是雅思为大家整理的雅思写作论点分析：文化和道德，非常实用。更多资讯、资料尽在雅思。最后，雅思预祝大家在雅思考试中取得好成绩!

老人言：小心驶得万年船。因此对于一次考试的成功，不要盲目乐观，你不可能做到完美无缺。你也许有不会的地方，也许有马虎的地方，即使这些你都没有而得了满分，你也会有方法不佳的地方。假如你一意孤行、夜郞自大，失败只是迟早到来的结局。因此善待每次考试后的分析总结，不断反省自己，发现问题，主动改进。在顺利登陆理想的彼岸之前，请不要轻言成功。

常言道：胜败乃兵家常事，更何况从小到大我们要经历过无数次的考试。考前养精蓄锐，充分准备;考场上勇往直前，全力以赴;胜利的结局固然可喜，但失败的结局意义更重大。失败乃成功之母。失败的痛苦是成长的动力，即使一百次跌倒也要第一百零一次爬起;失败的教训是成长的养料，我们仍需为人生理想的高峰不断攀登。

老师还告诉我们不经历风雨怎能见彩虹。只有经历过无数风雨的洗礼，才能获得真正的成功。我们应该感谢考试，为我们架起人生成功的跳板;感谢考试，为我们铺就攀登高峰的阶梯。从考试中我们经历过失败、痛苦、成功，也得到了磨炼、反省、升华自我的机会。怀一颗智慧之心，怀一颗虔诚之心，怀一颗热忱之心，积极投入生活、学习、工作，而不是消极避世，也不是做闲云野鹤。

面对分数与名次，胜不骄、败不馁;面对荣耀与屈辱，宠辱不惊、卧薪尝胆。 期中考试过去了，但它并不是结束，而是新的征程的开始。我们还有许多的事要做，还有许多的东西等着我们总结、反思。我想将文学大师冰心的话赠与每一位努力、战斗的同学：“成功的花，人们只惊羡她现时的明艳!然而当初她的芽儿，浸透了奋斗的泪泉，撒遍了牺牲的血雨。所以，如果失败，我们无须遗憾，因为那成功是我们竭尽所能也摘不到的天星，如果我们一味怨天尤人，遗憾抱怨，那就太失败了，因为那成功是我们俯首可拾却没有弯腰去拾的珍宝。”。最后，希望我们每一位同学把本次考试作为一个新的起点，去努力，去奋斗，去实现自己远大的理想。

[雅思写作]雅思考试作文抢分秘笈

作文中常用句套：

下文中出现的 A,B, “...”(某事物), "sb"( somebody),

要在写作中要根据上下文进行适当替换.

开头：

When it comes to ..., some think ...

There is a public debate today that ...

A is a commen way of ..., but is it a wise one?

Recentaly the problem has been brought into focus.

提出观点：

Now there is a growing awareness that...

It is time we explore the truth of ...

Nowhere in history has the issue been more visible.

进一步提出观点：

... but that is only part of the history.

Another equally important aspect is ...

A is but one of the many effects. Another is ...

Besides, other reasons are...

提出假想例子的方式：

Suppose that...

Just imagine what would be like if...

It is reasonable to expect...

It is not surprising that...

举普通例子：

For example(instance),...

... such as A,B,C and so on (so forth)

A good case in point is...

A particular example for this is...

引用：

One of the greatest early writers said ...

"Knowledge is power", such is the remard of ...

"......". That is how sb comment ( criticize/ praise...).

"......". How often we hear such words like there.

讲故事

（先说故事主体），this story is not rare.

..., such delimma we often meet in daily life.

..., the story still has a realistic significance.

提出原因：

There are many reasons for ...

Why .... , for one thing,...

The answer to this problem involves many factors.

Any discussion about this problem would inevitably involves ...

The first reason can be obiviously seen.

Most people would agree that...

Some people may neglect that in fact ...

Others suggest that...

Part of the explanation is ...

进行对比：

The advantages for A for outweigh the disadvantages of...

Although A enjoys a distinct advantage ...

Indeed , A carries much weight than B when sth is concerned.

A maybe ... , but it suffers from the disadvantage that...

承上启下：

To understand the truth of ..., it is also important to see...

A study of ... will make this point clear

让步：

Certainly, B has its own advantages, such as...

I do not deny that A has its own merits.

结尾：

>From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw

the conclusion that ...

In summary, it is wiser ...

In short...

在作文中引用合适的名言警句，会给你的文章增色许多。这里收集了我本人喜爱的一些名言，可能会对你有用。我们使用引用的位置可以在开头结尾或正文段落中，

常见的使用形式如下：

One of the greatest early writers said ...

"Knowledge is power", such is the remard of ...

"......". That is how sb comment ( criticize/ praise...).

"......". How often we hear such words like there.

Useful quotations

逆境

by Robert Collier

In every adversity there lies the seed of an equivalent advantage. In every defeat there is a lesson showing you how to win the victory next time.

努力与成功

by Ann Landers

Opportunities are usually disguised as hard work, so most people dont recognize them.

坚持

by Ralph Waldo Emerson

No one can cheat you out of ultimate success but yourselves.

Confucius 孔子

Our greatest glory is not in never falling...

but in rising every time we fall.

坚持

Mother Teresa

To keep a lamp burning we have to keep putting oil in it.

Henry Ford

Nothing is particularly hard if you divide it inuo small jobs.

Winston Churchill

Never, never, never, never give up.

Albert Einstein

In uhe middle of difficulty lies opportunity.

努力与成功

by Crassus

Those who aim at great deeds must suffer greatly.

Thomas Edison

There is no substitute for hard work.

Leo Tolstoi

The strongest of all warriors are these two- Time and Patience.

Thomas Jefferson

Im a great believer in luck,

and I find the harder I work...

the more I have of it.

Robert Collier

Success is the sum of small efforts, repeated day in and day out.

Ray A. Croc

Luck is a dividend of sweat. The more you sweat, the luckier you get.

实际经验与间接经验

Youll learn more about a road by traveling it...

than by consulting all the maps in the world.

动机与结果

Vince Lombardi

Winning isnt everything...

but wanting to win is.

John F. Kennedy

We choose to go!to the moon and other things , oot because they are easy, but because they are hard.

Thucydides

The strong do what they will.

The weak do what they must.

为人态度：

John Wooden

Talent is God given--Be Humble.

Fame is man given-- Be Thankful.

Conceit is self given --Be Careful.

行动：

Theodore Roosevelt

Do what you can , with what you have , with where you are.

Publilius Syrus Maxim

No one knows what he can do till he tries.

Terence

There is nothing so easy but that i

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t becomes difficult when you do it reluctantly.

Thomas Fuller

A wise man turns chance into good fortune.

William Hazlitt

Prosperity is a great teacher;

adversity is a greater.

William Penn

No pains, no palm;

no thorns, no throne;

no gall , no glory;

no cross, no crown.

Will Rogers

Even if youre on the right track, youll get run over... if you just sit there.

Opportunity rarely knocks on your door.

Knock rather on opportunitys door if you ardently wish to enter.

成功与失败

Vince Lombardi

Its not whether you get knocked down.

...Its whether you get up again.

Winston Churchill

An optimist sees an opportunity in every calamity;

a pessimist sees a calamity in every opportunity.

热情（年轻/年老）

Ralph Waldo Emerson

Nothing great was ever achieved without enthusiasm.

信心

James Allen

The will to do springs from the knowledge that we can do.

Samuel Johnson

Few things are impossible to diligence and skill.

Aughey

Lost time is never found again.

Voltaire

No problem can stand the assault of sustained thinking.

Napoleon

Victory belongs to the most persevering.

细心

Euipides

Leave no stone unturned.

计划与工作

Norman Vincent Peale

Plan your work for today and every day;

then work your plan.

Henry Ford

Failure is only the opportunity to more intelligently begin again.

Thomas Edison

I start where the last man left off.

理想与现实

What the mind of man can conceive and believe,

the mind of a man can achieve.

勤奋

Benjamin Franklin

Plough deep while sluggards sleep.

目标

Henry David Thoreau

In the lone run men hit only what they aim at.

幸运

Emily Dickinson

Luck is not chance...

Its toil...

Fortunes expensive smile is earned.

勤奋

Thomas Edison

Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.

Useful Quotations

想象力

Albert Einstein

Imagination is more important than knowledge.

挑战：

Walter Begehot

The great pleasure in life is doing what people say you cannot do.

机会与准备

Abraham Lincoln

I will prepare and some day my chance will come.

信心与事实

Henry Ford

Whether you think you can or think you cant -- you are right.

English Proverb

Where theres a will theres a way.

There is no failure excepting no longer trying.

Luck is what happens when preparation meets opportunity.

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时光飞逝，岁月流梭。怀揣着紧张的心情，进入了5好考场。一张答题卡，承载了我的希望，我这半学期的努力全靠这一张纸，传递出去。当我拿到我的成绩，我为我感到开心。虽然只拿到了250名的成绩，但对于我三月份月考320名的成绩，我已经进步了70名，但是我并不会满足，我会继续努力冲进前200.我并不认为我的能力只局限于250名，现在反思自己为什么不能拿到高分。

语文，分数101分。其实这个分数我并不满意，我的阅读题其实可以拿更高分，并不只有0,3这些分数。我觉得是因为我不够认真看阅读，因为我感到时间紧迫，所以便放松了，这是不对的，就算只有几分钟，也要认真将题做好，做到位。我的作文只拿了38分，但是我不会轻易放弃。我会这此为警告，是自己多练习作文，争取拿到42、43的高分。我的作文，一想到是39，一直没突破，这说明了我的水平还不够，需要多看些作文书，来吸取精华，创造新成绩。我的古文，一项很烂，这次也不例外。但是，我还是会将家中的古文书《世说新语》、《古文观止》等看完，使自己对古文的理解更透彻、清晰。我平时上课会偷懒，老师的笔记有时也不抄，这些都是导致成绩下降的元凶。所以，以后上课我不能分心，要全心投入到课堂中去。将老师笔记熟背，将老师布置的作业、背诵按时完成。考完试仔细检查，不能马虎大意。我期待着下一次月考我发挥的水平，加油!

数学，分数60分。数学是我最薄弱的一刻。也正是因为这样，我对数学渐渐失去了信心失去了动力。每次教师，我对数学都抱着爱怎样怎样的心理，所以总不能拿高分。我对数学一直都不认证。对平方更、算数平方公里都会弄混。刚开始一直都在30、20几风之间徘徊。后来经过自己的努力提高了许多，现在慢慢地宋雪莲，上了初一下学期，开始不认真，直接导致了我只考60分。我有时许多地方都搞不懂也不回去问老师、同学。出在“三人行”白板上不懂的数学题别人帮我解答了，我也不会撕下来，就贴在那儿不管不顾。每次下定决心好好学习时，便开始认真，课时三分钟热度，一会儿便将决心跑到九霄云外去了。不是我没有毅力，是自己的潜意识就懒。我上课不应该低着头不看黑板，不应该上课就走神分心。我想如果我懂得吸取教训，那么，我应该会更好。以后，我会将老师的作业完成好，上课听讲，认真做笔记。不会再与旁人上课时说话、玩耍。我会配合好张老师的工作，不会让她失望了。她给予了我希望，我不饿能辜负他的期盼。

英语，分数89分。我承认这次考得不好，以前一直都是90多分的，这次这个分数，让自己、家长都很担心，担心成绩退步地这么快，以后该怎么办?成绩下滑，唉，还不是不认真惹的祸。我现在学习英语越来越放松，写周报不认真改预学案不认真。我不能因为会了而骄傲和放松，这样会使后面的同学追上来。我们在同样的起跑线上，同样是在年级排名与成绩中追逐的运动员，当你有一个障碍时，便要勇敢地跨越过去，因为后面也有人在试图冲刺，当他们与你擦肩而过时，一切都已成定局。所以每当看到英语成绩变回害怕，怕万一有一天成绩下滑，便有人要超过自己了，到那个时候，便有二倍的努力去超越。改预学案时，要认真。不要认为只打勾勾错错就行了，书上自己写错的知识点，不要走马观花，看完就行，要取其精华，缩在脑海中。周报上的题，我总是做完就不理了，其实，这上面的题都是精华，我应该认真听老师讲解，不应该马虎对待。每次知识对下答案而已，从不听老师讲解题目。

历史，分数83分。历史是我自认为的强项，课时身为历史课代表的我却考得这样差。虽然班中只有11人上了80分，但是这不重要，重要的是这证明，已经有11人多在努力了，我这次都没超过一些以前成绩平平的人。题纲我都没有好好背诵，知识胡乱看了几遍，没有真正用心去背。书上的笔记，有一些也没有记住。老师上课讲的话，我也没有去认真的记。有时，连作业也是等快收时才开始做。有时，只是将笔记及在树上，然后再也不去看。这都是需要注意的。

地理，分数80分。地理在近一个学籍一直都不错，至少没掉下80分。但是书上笔记却做得很少。比如说欧洲西部，日本这两章都没有去认真学、背、做。老师说的重点，也没有认真国，背过，知识光靠画线去记，只是有个形而已，其实根本心不在焉。欧洲西部，书上也没一点笔记，只是将老师黑板的笔记记下而已，没有自己的理解，只是自己将老师的当成自己的，所以学习效率非常低。有时还分不清W、S，这些东西南北代号。如果自己能积极起来，那么便太棒了。

生物，分数……60分以下，不及格。以前生物也是70多，现在降到这么低，实在出乎我意料。我一直没在生物这一学科下功夫，都是在别的科上功夫，总是遗忘了这一科的重要性，血管、体循环、呼吸这些都没有好好背过知识一扫而过，所以才得了不及格。不只是出乎意料，还是意料之中了。我现在很苦恼，怕以后还会犯同样的错误。我要多请教办理生物学霸的学习方法，多请教老师，以后啊还要将这次的生物分数到红灯，告诫自己要认真学习这一薄弱之项。

政治分数81分。感觉较于上一学期，进步了许多，从70——80，十分的飞跃。但是这不是最还得成绩。我的题纲都没怎么背，书也没怎么看。我感觉自己没有认真。我不知是我什么，是因为运气让我这次考81分。我没有真正用心。回家也没有好好复习，只是草草地看了一下，我这次终于争了一口气，突破了八十大关，相信以后如果我更努力，可以拿到90分得好成绩。以后我要努力背题纲，老师上课时要认真听讲。老师布置的作业要认真做完。

我相信，下次一定会更好。

[中学生反思考试的作文

期中考试已经过去了，成绩已经发下来了，眼睛也就直了。

我的期中考试成绩令我很不满意，语文93.5分，数学103分（105分满），英语92分。在班级排第13名。和我上一次考试下降了8名。

我的语文，在考试前胸有成竹，以为自己能考满分的语文。却考了93.5分，有的错了一些不该出错的题。就说第一课《山中访友》中的填空吧！“重新梳妆”我只写了“梳妆”但“重新”不知道丢到那里去了。

数学错的就更不应该了，那两分丢在了一个最基础的判断题上，而且，那题我还做过。

英语，我也错了一些马虎题，但这不是借口，是我做题时没往心里去，才造成所谓的“马虎”许多单词都错了，许多不应该错的都错了。

期中考试虽然已成为过去，但深深地记在我心里。也同时给我敲了一记警钟，叫我不再自高自大，不再叫我轻“敌”更叫我不再马马虎虎。我会努里，希望在期末考试中取得好成绩。加油！

[期中考试引发的思考学生作文

1, 小作文的字数不够乃低级错误之最！

2 ， 尽量把字迹写工整，虽然字迹工整与否并不是评分标准范畴里的，但若你的英文写成了狂草书，考官也是会抓狂的！

3 ， 小作文不需要用太过于复杂的句式，能避免使用定语从句就不用，记住一句话：用最精辟的语言表达出最完整的信息！

4 ， 在小作文中放入插入语，伴随状语等形式能让你的文章更显精辟！

5 ， 小作文是客观性作文，所以你的文章中只能使用客观用词，不能出现 because 等主观性解释性的语句。

6 ，不要用一般现在时贯穿首尾，一般情况下小作文主要时态为过去时。此外，将来时不会出现在小作文中！

7 ，单词重复属于小作文写作中的大忌！在精辟的同时请选用多样化的词汇彰显你的学术范儿。

8 ， 大作文所占分值更多，所以若遇大作文比较难写，先干掉大作文！

9 ， 老外非常注重英文写作时候的逻辑，所以在你的小作文里请分段清楚，那最能体现你清晰的逻辑思路。

10 ， 熟练掌握小作文三大段框架，即开头介绍段，中间描述段和结尾总结段，这会让你的文章看起来更具有条理和整洁。

11 ，中间描述段要以便于对比为目的，从对比和类比，从不同属性的比较，从最具有代表性的数据入手等都是行之有效的分段方法。

12 ， 小作文写作最好有明确是时间分配，即准备阶段 3 分钟，写作阶段 15 分钟。严格遵循 18 分钟完成小作文的要求。绝对不能抢大作文的风头！

13 ， 绝对不能忽略对比，当你用完比较级，最高级后开始绞尽脑汁时，何不尝试一下从数据入手，从曲线本身入手，从总量对比入手使用分数，倍数，百分比等语法手段多方位多角度立体式轰炸呢？

14 ， 字数不能过多，字数过多只说明一个问题：你在描述 all features 而不是 main features ！

15 ，在确定好首段改写 introduction 以及末段总结后，从宏观出发，找到分段点。再确定 main features. 最后选定合适的词和句。层层递进，逐个击破！

16, 不要为了凑字数而写，在准备阶段最好在心中有数，设定好整篇文章可以用几个句子完成，以期达到精辟和有效，没用的信息只会让考官反感。

17 ，结尾段不要遗漏，相反，重申总结或通过中间段分析得出结论能提高你文章的整体层次感！

18 ，单词拼写错误是写作中最不划算的扣分项，请写完后迅速浏览自己文中的单词拼写问题。

[雅思考试小作文写作技巧介绍

各位同学：

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题目：

Now many people think that we are spending too much time and money on protecting animals. The money should be better spent on human population. Do you agree or disagree?

学生作文：

In reality, a large number of money have been funded on the development of human population in order to enhance the living standand. Although government and animal lovers have started to assist in conservation of animals, lacking of money and social awareness is still a key problem of animal conservation progam. now people should care and pay more for animals rather than living in luxury.

Government have put certain fund on wild animals, while a few part of them was spent on protecting animals legally. Instead, large account of money has been cost to murder them. eg. in scientific research, animals are more like victims whose body might suffer a lot even damaged through experiment in aimning of coming out a result from experiment, rather than lucky ones who can benefit lots care and love from hunman being. From long term view, government should not only spend money for current profits but aslo pay more for our generations.

Admittedly, although money has been gathered to set covervation program for animals, it is so limited that animals could not get a better care in zoos. Lacking of money is the mainly problem to maintain the running of zoos, which cause the animals have to transform to another area, and some of them could die for the frequently traving and uncomfortable weather. Animals are facing awful fate unless government could settle the financial issue by all means.

To sum up, animals lovers should do more effort to save the endanged animals especially rare species, by wakening up the social awareness and donating money. where people could save money for animals ,when we will get benefit from wildlife.

何钢的评点：

文章共275字，基本符合要求。

1) Arguments, ideas, and evidence.

审题：现在许多人认为我们在保护动物方面花了太多的时间和金钱。这些时间和金钱与其用来保护动物，不如用来花在人身上。你同意不同意这个观点？

此题结构与《高分作文》第8页范文类似。在写作这篇文章的时候，首先应该分析我们目前在动物保护方面的现状：是否花费过多，并提出自己的观点。如果认为的确花费过多，要说说为什么。并且应该进行比较分析，为什么更应该花钱在人身上。如果认为花得值，那么要说说原因，然后谈谈保护动物对于人类的作用和意义。

[雅思考试作文技巧及应试步骤

考试学术类图表作文要求考生观察一幅图表并用自己的语言呈现出图表中的信息。而对图表的描述旨在考查考生组织、表达及比较分析图表中各种数据，描述过程中的步骤，阐明事物工作原理等的能力。但就09年上半年以及历年的考试情况来看，通过柱、线、饼、表四种常规图表及其组合，考查得最多的还是考生的第一种能力。描述过程步骤的流程图，阐明事物工作原理的示意图等题一直也会有所涉及，但比例甚低。这类题在今天上半年出现了三次。这一考查趋势和比例预计仍将在2009年下半年延续下去。

线形图单独考查的比例依旧不会很大，也较可能出现在综合图表的考查中，且多会是多条曲线并存，因为它对趋势变化的表现形式相对单一和具体，比较好入手。但它也是唯一一种始终有时间变化(即纵比)的图形，所以对考生来说，线形图的操练是对纵比的趋势等描述的非常基础和重要的练习，词汇和相关表达都能从中得到很好的积累。如果能很好的掌握线形图中的纵比描写，那么在其他图表中出现纵比的情况下，写作起来也会显得游刃有余，且能较好的把握顺序性。

e.g. The line graph illustrates the world demand of five energy sources from 1970 to 2030.

(2009.06.20)这个曲线图描写的主要思路是按时间顺序分别描写在这段时间中的纵向变化情况。但千万注意，此题的题目中提到的时间涉及过去与将来，所以分段的依据应以此为基础，分两段来分别描述过去以及预测的量的变化，再穿插五种能源量的一个横向比较。大家可以参考剑桥上关于三个国家老年人人口的变化的那幅图。