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1000考研英语应用文写作范文之感谢信
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+ 加入清单结构要点感谢信是就某事向收信人表示感谢的信件,分为三个部分:
1. 指出对方帮助自己的事情,表示感谢;
2. 展开叙述这件事;
3. 再次感谢,并可表示希望回报对方。
Suppose your were recommended by Professor Sun to get further education in Yale University last June and now you have been admitted by that university. Write a letter to Professor Sun to express your gratitude in about 100 words. Do not sign your own name, using “Li Ming” instead.Dear Professor Sun,
I am writing to extend my gratitude to you—without your help I would not have been a postgraduate student of Applied Mechanics Department of Yale University.
Last June, you helped me with no reservation when I applied for Yale University. You wrote a recommendation letter for me to Professor W, the dean of the department. You gave me instructions on how to fill the application forms and write the application letters. Whats more, you also taught me how to take care of myself and get along with others, which I believe are lifes great lessons.
Your help enabled me to fulfill my dream to pursue my studies in a great university. In the following days I will remember what you have told me and work and study hard to be a capable, conscientious and responsible person.
Yours truly,
Li Ming
感谢信
语言注意点感谢信应充分表达自己的谢意,切不可给对方草率的印象。可借助谈对方的帮助来进一步表达感激之情。言辞应真挚、得体。
Suppose you were taken good care of by Aunt Sun when you pursued your studies in Los Angels where Sun lived. Write a letter in about 100 words to extend your appreciation. Do not
sign your own name, using “Li Ming” instead.Dear Aunt Sun,
It is a great pleasure to extend my sincere gratitude to you for your hospitality and consideration while I pursue my bachelors degree at University of California.
As soon as I arrived in Los Angeles, you found me an apartment near my university. When I met with difficulties you often sent your daughter to help me and when I felt homesick you often talked to me patiently. You told me how to improve my efficiency in both work and study and how to get on well with teachers and schoolmates. Furthermore, you invited me to dinner on nearly every weekend.
Without your help, I would not have graduated with honors and found a satisfactory job back here in China. I know I can never repay you for everything you have done for me in the past four years, but you can be sure that I
Best regards.
Yours faithfully,
Li Ming ll never forget it.
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篇1:关于茶的英语作文初中
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+ 加入清单In China , tea has a very long history and has formed the Chinese tea
culture. At the same time, tea is beneficial to our health, thus it is well
received by many people. Chinese tea culture is both extensive and profound,
which not only contains the level of material culture, but also includes a deep
level of spiritual civilization. Referring to Chinese tea, we can trace it back
to ancient times, which flourished in the Tang and Song Dynasties, Since then,
the spirit of tea has penetrated into the court and society, going deep into
Chinese poetry, painting, calligraphy , religion and medicine. For thousands of
years, China has accumulated a great deal of culture in tea cultivation and
production, moreover, enriching the spiritual culture of tea.
篇2:初中电脑英语
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+ 加入清单The computer is a very useful machine. It is the most important invention
in many years. People use it widely today in many ways.
Most computers have memories. People can store information in them and take
it out at any time. Computers are getting smaller and smaller, and working
faster and faster.
Computer can do many kinds of work. Now in many large factories there are
very few people. Computers do most of the work. They really help a lot.
篇3:初中英语作文:自我介绍
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+ 加入清单Hi, everybody! Today, I would like to introduce myself!
My name is ChengZiYing, 9 years old this year, I am a lovely little girl. I have a pair of watery eyes, a pair of big ears, a straight nose, a plausible mouth, a tender little face, have a black long hair on his head. Oh, regardless of appearance! Tell me about my hobby, advantage!
I often help my mother do housework at home, I also can play the piano! Ill play the song: "Mr. Red rope", "river bank Mongolia folk song", "dream wedding", "the moon represents my heart". Sometimes, when I was at home all right, will create their songs to play, and the lyrics!
I am very obedient at home, this is me, do you understand me? If you still dont understand, that is quick to make friends with me!
篇4:高考作文的写作技巧
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+ 加入清单考场的高分作文,在有些考生看来则又是可望而不可及的。下面整理了一些高考作文的写作技巧,希望对大家有所帮助!
一、理顺强化内在逻辑
大考前,应该对自己曾写过的文章进行一次大的梳理。查看与反思一下,特别是是深入高三之后,自己写过的文章内部的思路、逻辑、层次、结构是否都合理,有什么不顺通之处吗,该如何改正呢?如果,上述问题基本做得还好,那么,还应该进一步想一想,有没有更佳的思路与表现的角度?在层次与结构上,还可再作那些完善与突破?
一篇考场佳作,需要把握好段与段之间的内部关系。每一文出,必有其内在的行文逻辑,此逻辑一定要顺达严整,合理自然,不偏不拗,不离不散。高分作文,非常重要的一点,便是文脉清晰,文理畅达。
二、牢固拓展写作内容
无论高考作文如何命题,一般而言,题目控制的是题旨,是方向,对于写作内容往往是不加干预的。择选恰切的自我熟悉的内容构思成文,这是考生的写作自由。这一特点,及体现了新课标的核心理念,也是作文成功备考的关键所在。作文命题的题旨与方向,考生一定是事前未知的,但无论怎样的题旨与方向,都需要充实有效的写作内容来支持;而充实有效的写作内容则一定需要考生提前准备,也必须提前准备。当然,这样的准备,不是讲考试的时候,简单的照搬照抄,考生需要依据题目的具体要求对自我写作内容进行恰当的取舍与整合;而取舍与整合的基础则必须是事先的充分拥有。
拥有,分为两步。一为牢固,一为拓展。高三作文备考,教师很重要的工作就是能够不断激发、牢固、拓展考生的写作内容。这是因为,在某种程度上讲:考场,时间紧,考生,阅历浅,在考场上写出有深刻思想内涵的文章实属不易。因此,高考作文思想内涵之争,就往往容易演化为写作内容之争。
高考写作内容的准备包括哪些重要的方面呢?择其要,概括为9类:生命发现、情怀依依、精神强度、艺术之光、万物有灵、中西对比、生活温度、质疑追问、民族文化。此9类,需要考生重点加以关注。
三、增强完善表达方式
我们常提及的5种表达方式记叙、议论、说明、描写、抒情,是对一个人具有较好表达能力的要求,作文备考过程中于此5种方式不容我们忽视。这5种表达方式,在写作运用中,考生朋友可以有所侧重,有所擅长,但应该有一个基本前提,那便是这5种表达方式应该基本都能运用,没有死结,没有盲点。
一些学校,在备考中,只练议论文;有的考生还错误地认为,议论文可以弥补自己语言表现力不足的问题。这些做法与想法都是有片面性的。选用怎样的表达方式,实际上是依据命题特点而定的,不好刻舟求剑。例如,上海卷曾有一个题目曰我想握住你的手,此题写成严正板直的议论文恐怕就不易。再如2011年重庆卷情有独钟,完全可以写成一篇有较为浓郁的抒情氛围的文字。特别是炼就高分作文,更应该达到5种表达方式均可运用得较为自如的程度。因为,表达方式的恰切选用,对于高考作文命题而言,才可以做到新颖独创,异军突起;而这一点恰好是成就高分作文最主要的一个原因。
篇5:初中生英语作文
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+ 加入清单Now I am a middle school student, I will enter high school soon. Everybody thinks that the age of mine is the best age, because we are young and full of vitality. But I want to grow up quickly. I am not afraid of growing old and I want to grow older. In my eyes, age is a gift. As the time goes by, I will become mature. Because the thing I have been through will teach me the lesson and I will learn a lot, becoming a better person. The young and innocent me eager to grow up, I know it takes time to be independent. Age is a gift, so now I cherish every moment.
篇6:为父母做过的事初中英语作文
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+ 加入清单Love for my parents
Our parents give us much love every day,so we should give them love,too.That was a holiday,I stayed at home alone.I made a dinner for my parents.Because I was only seven,the meal was really awful.But my mother never stopped saying,"Its very delicious!"She said she was very impressed.
How do you give your parents love?
篇7:生日宴会初中英语作文
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+ 加入清单昨天是我的生日,我十四岁。妈妈为我举行生日宴会,我邀请了我的一些朋友。妈妈送了我一些书作礼物,朋友们也为我带采了礼物。我们玩的很开心。
A Birthday Party
Yesterday was my birthday. I was fourteen years old. My mother had a party for me and I asked my friends to come. My mother gave me some books as birthday presents. My friends bought some presents for me. We had a good time.
篇8:英语写作基础改写病句的技巧
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+ 加入清单改写,就是把原有的一篇文章改变形式、长短的一种写作类型。下面是英语写作基础改写病句的技巧,欢迎参考阅读!
改写,包括改写、缩写、扩写、写摘要等多种形式:或改头换面,或削足适履,或海阔天空,或归纳总括,让你有足够的内容、机会和样式适应要求,施展才华。
改写是用不同形式表达同一内容的方法,使之成为与原文意思相同而表现方式、文体不同的作品。改写可以变换文章的人称、顺序,可以改变原文的体裁、结构,可以灵活运用自己的语言,尽可能用多种方法来表达、替换原文语句的内容。比如,我们可以把对话改写成散文,可以把记叙文变成通讯报导、新闻特写,反之亦然。
缩写是根据词数、字数的要求对原文加以压缩、概括,从而达到缩短篇幅、简化内容、突出中心等目的的写作形式。简言之,缩写是原文的“高度浓缩”。缩写时要忠实于原文,保留原文体裁、题材、主要内容、主要思想、结构顺序、语言风格、人称视角和表现方法等;既要使篇幅缩短,结构紧凑,又要使内容简明扼要,重点突出;不能对原文加入个人的认识、体会或对原文进行评论,也不能加入原文中没有的内容。
扩写则与缩写相反,是把篇幅短小的内容扩展成为篇幅较长的文章。扩写时,可以施展个人的想像力,在不离原文核心内容的前提下海阔天空,任意发挥,从而使细节更加充实、生动,使情节更加具有感染力,使解释、说明、论证更加充分有力。
摘要是一篇文章或一本书的梗概,多指论文或报告内容的提要。一些期刊、杂志上论文的“提要”、“摘要”,某些报纸、杂志在一篇文章前面写的“编者按”,一本书的前言等均属此列。写摘要就是简明扼要地向读者介绍一篇文章,一本书,一篇论文或一个报告的主要内容,使读者用较少的时间阅读后,能了解文章或书的来龙去脉。摘要可以改变体裁。写摘要时,笔者可以用原文的人称、语气、也可以用第三人称,即笔者的语气,但是不能改变原文的事实和观点,也不能丢掉原文的要点,应写成连贯的文章而不能写成提纲。
总之,改写、缩写、扩写、摘要都是对原有的文章进行适合某种需要的裁剪或放大,选取原文的精要而和盘托出,对其要点和实质容不得偷换和贪污。这些写作形式对学习写作的学生来说,是一种练习综合分析、归纳概括能力的好方法;对成人来说,是工作中的很好的帮手。
一个作家可以把一本小说改写成剧本,把一则简短的消息扩展为一部短篇或长篇小说;一名记者可以把一段会谈改写成一篇通讯报导或特写;一个编辑可以把收到的稿件根据版面大小或缩或扩写成适当的文章;我们在听领导人、某方面的专家做报告时要作点笔记,然后写出摘要文章;我们写成一篇论文后,可以给它写一段简短的摘要,等等。这些都是人们在生活、工作中必不可少的书面表达形式。所以,学会这些写作技巧,能使我们适应各方面的需要。
篇9:为父母做过的事初中英语作文
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+ 加入清单Our parents give us much love every day,so we should give them love,too.That was a holiday,I stayed at home alone.I made a dinner for my parents.Because I was only seven,the meal was really awful.But my mother never stopped saying,"Its very delicious!"She said she was very impressed.
How do you give your parents love?
篇10:初中英语作文之我的五一计划
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+ 加入清单My plan for may day
On May 1sh, Im going to my grandmothers home.I think that must be very significative.Because she is too old to visit me and my parents, and she must be very have in mind our.
I will go for a walk with my grandmother and buy she some summer wears.they must fit her like best. Of course , I dont think that is a easy work! So it must takes me many time.
After shopping, we will have a good rest and have lunch in my grandmothers home.
And then, I will clean the home with my grandmother.
At last, I go home.
Of course, I must finish my homewolk.
篇11:放松英语作文初中
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+ 加入清单Recently, we have little time to keep close contact with nature. We spend
too much time on study or working. We almost forget that how green the grass is,
how beautiful the flowers are, and how sweetly the birds are singing outside our
windows. A saying goes, "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy". It means
that we need to relax ourselves and go out to breathe more fresh air. We can
also climb a hill in the suburbs.Its good for our health.
Lets go outing.
篇12:关于英语说明文的写作方法
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+ 加入清单就“说明对象”而言,英语说明文可分为对“客观具体事物”的说明和对“主观抽象观念”的说明两大类,比如:对“LASER(激光)”、“Computer Problem of Year XX(计算机XX年问题)”等等的说明都是对客观或者具体事物的说明,而“The Successful Interview(谈成功的面试)”、“How to Write Good English Composition(如何才能写好英语作文)” 等是对主观抽象观念的说明。对我们中学生朋友来说,在汉语说明文的教学中似乎比较侧重前者,即解释客观具体事物的说明文。但在英语说明文中,阐述和说明 “主观抽象观念”的说明文占了很大的比重,其中有些类似汉语中的议论文。但是无论是对“客观具体事物”的说明还是对“主观抽象观念”的阐述,英语说明文从结构上看大致可分为三个部分:第一部分一般是文章的第一段,提出文章的主题,也就是说,文章想要阐述、说明的主要内容;第二部分是文章的主体,可由若干个段落组成,对文章的主题进行展开说明;第三部分是结尾段,对文章的主题作归纳总结。从英语说明文的结构可以看出,要写好英语说明文的关键在于第二部分如何对文章主题进行展开说明。在英语中,常见的用来展开文章主题的方法有下列几种:
1.罗列法(listing)
在文章开始时提出需要说明的东西和观点,然后常用first,second,…and finally加以罗列说明。罗列法广泛地使用于各类指导性的说明文之中,下面这篇学生作文就是用罗列法写成的:
Early Rising
Early rising (早起) is helpful in more than one way. First, it helps to keep us fit (健康)。 We all need fresh air. But air is never so fresh as early in the morning. Besides, we can do good to our health from doing morning exercise (做早操)。
Secondly, early rising helps us in our studies. We learn more quickly in the morning, and find it easier to remember what we learn in the morning.
Thirdly, early rising enables (使能够) us to plan the work of the day. We cannot work well without a good plan. Just as the plan for the year should be made in the spring, so the plan for the day should be made in the morning.
Fourthly, early rising gives us enough time to get ready for our work, such as to wash our faces and hands and eat our breakfast properly.
Late risers may find it very difficult to form the habit of early rising. They ought to make special efforts to do so. As the English proverb says,“Early to bed and early to rise, makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise.”
罗列法经常用下列句式展开段落,我们可以注意模仿学习:
There are several good reasons why we should learn a foreign language. First of all, …Secondly, …And finally, …
We should try our best to plant more trees for several good reasons First of all, …Secondly, …And finally,
必须指出的是,有时罗列法并不一定有明确的first, second…等词,但文章还是以罗列论据展开的。
2.举例法(examples)
举例法是用具体的例子来说明我们要表达的意思,常用for example, for instance, still another example is…等词语引出。下面这篇学生作文就是用举例法写成的:
Recreation
It is impossible to keep in good health unless we take enough recreation (娱乐)。 The mind, too, needs change to make it fresh and vigorous (有活力的) There is much truth in the old saying, All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.“
There are many games which boys and girls can play after their school work is done, for instance, football, tennis, and kite-flying. Other examples of recreation are boating, fishing, gardening, cycling, walking, chess-playing, and reading. Persons who sit much at their business should take a kind of recreation that will supply their muscles (肌肉) with exercise. Those who spend most of their time in the open air and do manual work (体力活) should adopt (采纳) reading or some other quiet form of recreation.
Cycling is said to be an important means of recreation, but many persons foolishly tire out themselves by cycling too much. The same may be said in regard to football. Tennis is a pleasant form of recreation. Many persons take great delight in boating. Fishing requires much patience, and there is much danger of taking cold by sitting still on a cold day too long. A good brisk (轻松) walk is one of the finest forms of exercise. For persons engaged in outdoor labor, chess-playing is another excellent form of recreation.
可以看出,举例法和罗列法有时可以结合使用:即用罗列法来列出例子,用例子充实罗列的说明。
3.比较法(comparison and contrast)
比较法是对两个对象进行比较,从而进行说明的写作手法。比较法又可细分为比较相同点(comparison)和比较不同点(contrast)两种方法,比如:
From Paragraph to Essay
Although they are different in length (长度), the paragraph and the essay are quite similar in structure (结构)。 For example, the paragraph starts with either a topic sentence (主题句) or a topic introducer followed by a topic sentence. In the essay, the first paragraph sets up the topic focus (主题所在) Next, the sentences in the body of a paragraph develop the topic sentence. Similarly, the body of an essay consists of a number of paragraphs that discuss and support the ideas given in the introductory (引导的) paragraph. Finally, a concluding sentence (结束句) ——whether a restatement, conclusion, or observation——ends the paragraph. The essay, too, has a concluding paragraph which ends the essay logically and satisfactorily. Although there are some exceptions (例外), most well written expository (说明文的) paragraphs and essays are similar in structure.
可以看出,在比较相同点的时候,常用到similarly,also,too,in the same case,in spite of the difference等这样的词语。
European Football and American Football
Although European football is the parent of American football, the two games show several major differences. European football, sometimes called association football or soccer, is played in 80 countries, making it the most widely played sport in the world. American football, on the other hand, is popular only in North America (the United States and Canada)。 Soccer is played by eleven players with a round ball. Football, also played by eleven players in somewhat different positions (位置) on the field, is played with an elongated (拉长的) round ball. Soccer has little body contact (接触) between players and therefore needs no special protective equipment. Football, in which players make the greatest use of body contact to stop a running ball-carrier and his teammates, needs special protective equipment. In soccer, the ball is advanced toward the goal by kicking it or by butting (顶) it with the head. In American football, on the other hand, the ball is passed from hand to hand or carried in the hands across the opponents (对手) goal. These are just a few of the features which distinguish (区别) association and American football.
这是一篇用比较不同点的手法写的说明文。从文章中可以看出:however,on the other hand,in contrast,but,nevertheless等表示转折的词语常用来引导对不同点的比较。
4.定义法(definition)
定义法也是英语说明文中常用的写作手法,特别是在对具体事物概念进行说明时经常使用。定义法的基本要素是定义句。英语中常见定义句的模式是:
被定义对象is所属类别+限制性定语
可以看出,定义句中限制性定语越详细,定义就越精确,比如:
A bat is a small mouse-like animal that flies at night and feeds on(以……为食品)fruit and insects but is not a bird.
其实,在英—英词典中,对英语单词的英文解释就是定义法的典型例子。比如,看看Longman词典对student和teacher的定义是很有意思的:A student is a person who is studying at a place of education or training. A teacher is a person who gives knowledge or skill to sb. as a profession (专业)。
5.顺序法(sequence of time, space and process)
顺序法是指按时间、空间或过程的顺序进行说明的一种写作手法。比如按照时间顺序介绍一个科学家的生平,用空间顺序阐述逐渐开发西部的重要意义,用过程顺序法解释葡萄酒的生产过程等等。
下面这篇学生作文就是用顺序法写成的:
Coal
Coal underwent (经受) many changes before it became the bright, brittle (脆的), black substance which we now use. During ancient times (在上古时代), when the earth enjoyed a very warm and wet climate, the land was covered with large forests and big plants. As time went on, the ground changed and began to sink (下沉) a little. These very large numbers of trees and vegetables received a deposit (沉淀) of sand and clay. This layer of sand and clay pressed upon the layer beneath and prevented it from contact with air. These trees and plants received the pres sure and changed its appearance.
Generations after generations (几世纪后), as the ground kept gradually sinking, another layer of sand and clay was again deposited (积聚) above the layers already formed. A great pressure was thus exerted (作用) and the peat (泥煤) was changed into the black and brittle substance which is known as coal.
Coal is a kind of mineral which is formed by nature as above stated. It is an important industrial material and is chiefly used as fuel. It is very valuable in the industrial world. The place where coal deposit is called a coal mine (煤矿)。 In China, coal mines are largely found in the north-west part of the country. Shanxi is a famous province for producing coal. It has the most coal of China.
6.分类法(classification)
分类法是将写作对象进行分类说明的一种写作手法。比如:著名的英国哲学家弗朗西斯·培根(Francis Bacon)在其脍炙人口的《谈读书》(Of Studies)一文中就用到了分类法:
Some books are to be tasted, others to be swallowed, and some few to be chewed and digested, that is, some books are to be read only in parts, others to be read, but not curiously, and some few to be read wholly, and with diligence and attention. Some books also may be read by deputy, and extracts made of them by others; but that would be only in the less important arguments, and the meaner sort of books…
参考译文:书有可浅尝者,有可吞食者,少数则须咀嚼消化。换言之,有只须读其部分者,有只须大体涉猎者,少数则须全读,读时须全神贯注,孜孜不倦。书亦可请人代读,取其所需摘要,但只限题材较次或价值不高者……
——转摘自《英汉翻译教程》(张培基等)
可见,如果能够根据具体情况,选用合适的写作手法,就可为文章增添无穷的魅力。
除了上述提到的6种展开英语说明文主题的写作方法之外,还有因果法、归纳法等其他方法。但相比之下,对于中学生来说,上述6种方法是首先值得掌握的。另外必须指出的是:在一篇文章中往往是以一种写作手法为主,同时辅以其他写作手法。有时,甚至会几种写作手法混用而不分主次。因此,必须根据具体情况,选用合适的展开主题的写作手法,才能写出优秀的英语说明文。
篇13:2024年中考英语作文写作技巧
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+ 加入清单一、认真审题,确定时态人称,同时关注题材格式
时态:故事性文章一般用过去时,其中表达感受时可用现在时。
说明性或议论性文章一般用现在时,举例时可用过去时。
根据题目要求也会出现时态的交错使用,如过去和现在的对比等。
如果句中出现了时间状语,时态则要遵循时间状语。
如ago,last…——过去时
next,in…——将来时等
人称:注意在句子中人称的统一。
例如:Thanks to the teachers, we have improved our English。
其中we和our就是人称的统一。
格式:注意书信格式的开头和结尾。
二、找全信息点,紧扣主题,突出重点
切忌只看表格中或所列1、2、3中的信息点。一定把题读全,找齐信息点,建议用铅笔标出,写完后再涂掉。
根据题目,可适当增加合理内容。
特别注意文章要有开头和结尾。
三、成文时表述正确,文字流畅
切忌与汉语提示的一一对应,使用所学表达方法将语义表达出来即可。
首先考虑句子结构(如主谓宾,主系表等)。
同时注意短语的正确使用和单词的拼写,最好使用课本上学过的短语和句式。
四、文章结构清晰,重点句型出彩,可使文章在得分上提高一个档次
考虑文章的篇章结构,使用适当的连接短语,使文章结构紧凑。
常用连接词:
1.表文章结构顺序:First of all,Firstly/First,Secondly/Second…
And then,Finally,In the end,At last
2.表并列补充关系的:What ismore,Besides,Moreover,Furthermore,Inaddition
3.表转折对比关系的:However,On the contrary,but
Although+clause( 从句),In spite of+n/doing
On the one hand…
On the other hand…
Some…,while others…
4.表因果关系的:Because,As
So,Thus,Therefore,As a result
5.表换一种方式表达:In other words
6.表进行举例说明:For example,句子;For instance,句子;such as+n/doing
7.表陈述事实:In fact
8.表达自己观点:As far as I know,In my opinion
9.表总结:In short,In a word,In conclusion,In summary
文中正确使用两三个好的句型,如:宾语从句、状语从句、动名词做主语等。
宾语从句举例:I believe Tianjin will be more beautifulandprosperous。
状语从句举例:If everyone does something for the environment, ourhometown will become clean and beautiful。
动名词做主语举例:Reading books in the sun is bad for our eyes。
It’s bad for our eyes to read books in the sun。
常用状语从句句型:
1)时间when,not…until,as soon as
2)目的so that+clause;to do( 为了)
3)结果so…that+clause,too…to do(太……以至于……)
4)条件if,unless(除非),as long as(只要)
5)让步though,although,even though,even if
no matter what/when/where/who/which/how
6)比较as…as…,not so…as…,than
五、认真检查,检查信息点是否全面,时态、人称是否一致,句子结构是否清晰,短语使用、单词拼写是否准确等。
检查后,将草稿誊写在纸上,请注意按结构分段,书写清晰。
下面列举一些在检查中可发现的错误:
1.We live more and more comfortable。
改正:comfortably(副词修饰动词)
2.we can get many informations by reading newspapers。
改正:much information
(不可数名词由much修饰)
3.There has many programs in TV。
改正:There are many programs on TV。
(There be句型和介词短语)
4.I think ride a bike can keep our health。
改正:I think riding a bike can keep us healthy。(动名词作主语)
建议大家练习或模仿不同题材的文章,特别注意改错总结和吸取范文中好的结构与表达方法,适当运用于自己的文章中。
篇14:优秀英语作文写作指导:六级写作高分七大技巧
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+ 加入清单不管做什么是,找对技巧很重要。下面语文迷网整理了英语六级的写作技巧,供大家阅读参考。
一、 长短句原则。
工作还得一张一弛呢,老让读者读长句,累死人!写一个短小精辟的句子,相反,却可以起到画龙点睛的作用。而且如果我们把短句放在段首或者段末,也可以揭示主题:As a creature, I eat; as a man, I read. Although one action is to meet the primary need of my body and the other is to satisfy the intellectual need of mind, they are in a way quite similar. 如此可见,长短句结合,抑扬顿挫,岂不爽哉?牢记!
强烈建议:在文章第一段(开头)用一长一短,且先长后短;在文章主体部分,要先用一个短句解释主要意思,然后在阐述几个要点的时候采用先短后长的句群形式,定会让主体部分妙笔生辉!文章结尾一般用一长一短就可以了。
二、 主题句原则。
国有其君,家有其主,文章也要有其主。否则会给人造成“群龙无首”之感!相信各位读过一些破烂文学,故意把主体隐藏在文章之内,结果造成我们稀里糊涂!不知所云!所以奉劝各位一定要写一个主题句,放在文章的开头(保险型)或者结尾,让读者一目了然,必会平安无事!
特别提示:隐藏主体句可是要冒险的!To begin with, you must work hard at your lessons and be fully prepared before the exam(主题句). Without sufficient preparation, you can hardly expect to answer all the questions correctly.
三、 一 二 三原则。
领导讲话总是第一部分、第一点、第二点、第三点、第二部分、第一点… 如此罗嗦。可毕竟还是条理清楚。考官们看文章也必然要通过这些关键性的“标签”来判定你的文章是否结构清楚,条理自然。破解方法很简单,只要把下面任何一组的词汇加入到你的几个要点前就清楚了。
1)first, second, third, last(不推荐,原因:俗)
2)firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally(不推荐,原因:俗)
3)the first, the second, the third, the last(不推荐,原因:俗)
4)in the first place, in the second place, in the third place, lastly(不推荐,原因:俗)
5)to begin with, then, furthermore, finally(强烈推荐)
6)to start with, next, in addition, finally(强烈推荐)
7)first and foremost, besides, last but not least(强烈推荐)
8)most important of all, moreover, finally
9)on the one hand, on the other hand(适用于两点的情况)
10)for one thing, for another thing(适用于两点的情况)
建议:不仅仅在写作中注意,平时说话的时候也应该条理清楚!
四、短语优先原则。
写作时,尤其是在考试时,如果使用短语,有两个好处:其一、用短语会使文章增加亮点,如果老师们看到你的文章太简单,看不到一个自己不认识的短语,必然会看你低一等。相反,如果发现亮点—精彩的短语,那么你的文章定会得高分了。
其二、关键时刻思维短路,只有凑字数,怎么办?用短语是一个办法!比如:I cannot bear it. 可以用短语表达:I cannot put up with it. I want it. 可以用短语表达:I am looking forward to it. 这样字数明显增加,表达也更准确。
五、多实少虚原则
原因很简单,写文章还是应该写一些实际的东西,不要空话连篇。这就要求一定要多用实词,少用虚词。我这里所说的虚词就是指那些比较大的词。
比如我们说一个很好的时候,不应该之说nice这样空洞的词,应该使用一些诸如generous, humorous, interesting, smart, gentle, warm-hearted, hospitable 之类的形象词。
再比如: 走出房间,general的词是:walk out of the room 但是小偷走出房间应该说:slip out of the room 小姐走出房间应该说:sail out of the room 小孩走出房间应该说:dance out of the room 老人走出房间应该说:stagger out of the room 所以多用实词,少用虚词,文章将会大放异彩!
六、 多变句式原则。
1)加法(串联)都希望写下很长的句子,像个老外似的,可就是怕写错,怎么办,最保险的写长句的方法就是这些,可以在任何句子之间加and, 但最好是前后的句子又先后关系或者并列关系。比如说:I enjoy music and he is fond of playing guitar. 如果是二者并列的,我们可以用一个超级句式:Not only the fur coat is soft, but it is also warm. 其它的短语可以用:besides, furthermore, likewise, moreover
2)转折(拐弯抹角)批评某人缺点的时候,我们总习惯先拐弯抹角说说他的优点,然后转入正题,再说缺点,这种方式虽然阴险了点,可毕竟还比较容易让人接受。所以呢,我们说话的时候,只要在要点之前先来点废话,注意二者之间用个专这次就够了。The car was quite old, yet it was in excellent condition. The coat was thin, but it was warm. 更多的短语:despite that, still, however, nevertheless, in spite of, despite, notwithstanding
3)因果(so, so, so)昨天在街上我看到了一个女孩,然后我主动搭讪,然后我们去咖啡厅,然后我们认识了,然后我们成为了朋友…可见,讲故事的时候我们总要追求先后顺序,先什么,后什么,所以然后这个词就变得很常见了。其实这个词表示的是先后或因果关系!The snow began to fall, so we went home. 更多短语:then, therefore, consequently, accordingly, hence, as a result, for this reason, so that
4)失衡句(头重脚轻,或者头轻脚重)有些人脑袋大,身体小,或者有些人脑袋小,身体大,虽然我们不希望长成这个样子,可如果真的是这样了,也就必然会吸引别人的注意力。文章中如果出现这样的句子,就更会让考官看到你的句子与众不同。其实就是主语从句,表语从句,宾语从句的变形。举例:This is what I can do. Whether he can go with us or not is not sure. 同样主语、宾语、表语可以改成如下的复杂成分:When to go, Why he goes away…
5)附加(多此一举)如果有了老婆,总会遇到这样的情况,当你再讲某个人的时候,她会插一句说,我昨天见过他;或者说,就是某某某,如果把老婆的话插入到我们的话里面,那就是定语从句和同位语从句或者是插入语。The man whom you met yesterday is a friend of mine. I don’t enjoy that book you are reading. Mr liu, our oral English teacher, is easy-going. 其实很简单,同位语--要解释的东西删除后不影响整个句子的构成;定语从句—借用之前的关键词并且用其重新组成一个句子插入其中,但是whom or that 关键词必须要紧跟在先行词之前。
6)排比(排山倒海句)文学作品中最吸引人的地方莫过于此,如果非要让你的文章更加精彩的话,那么我希望你引用一个个的排比句,一个个得对偶句,一个个的不定式,一个个地词,一个个的短语,如此表达将会使文章有排山倒海之势!Whether your tastes are modern or traditional, sophisticated or simple, there is plenty in London for you. Nowadays, energy can be obtained through various sources such as oil, coal, natural gas, solar heat, the wind and ocean tides. We have got to study hard, to enlarge our scope of knowledge, to realize our potentials and to pay for our life. (气势恢宏) 要想写出如此气势恢宏的句子非用排比不可!
七、挑战极限原则。
既然十挑战极限,必然是比较难的,但是并非不可攀!原理:在学生的文章中,很少发现诸如独立主格的句子,其实也很简单,只要花上5分钟的时间看看就可以领会,它就是分词的一种特殊形式,分词要求主语一致,而独立主格则不然。比如:The weather being fine, a large number of people went to climb the Western Hills. Africa is the second largest continent, its size being about three times that of China. 如果你可以写出这样的句子,不得高分才怪!
篇15:英语作文写作10大技巧
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+ 加入清单学生写作时,如果仅局限在把内容交代清楚的水准上,只选用一些普通的、直截了当的词,或一律使用简单句平铺直叙,那么,这样写出来的文章就会像一碗白开水,呆板、单调,没有可读性。下面是小编整理的英语作文写作10大技巧,欢迎阅读。
1. 灵活改变句子开头
在通常情况下,英语句子的排列方式为“主语+谓语+宾语”,即主语位于句子开头。但若根据情况适当改变句子的开头方式,比如使用倒状语或以状语开头等,会使文章增强表现力。如:
(1) There stands an old temple at the top of the hill.
→ At the top of the hill there stands an old temple.
在小山顶上有一座古庙。
(2) You can do it well only in this way.
→ Only in this way can you do it well.
只有这样你才能把它做好。
(3) A young woman sat by the window.
→ By the window sat a young woman.
窗户边坐着一个年轻妇女。
2. 避免重复使用同一词语
为了使表达更生动,更富表现力,同学们在写作时应尽量避免重复使用同一词语来表示同一意思,尤其是一些老生常谈的词语。如有的同学一看到“喜欢”二字,就会立刻想起like,事实上,英语中表示类似意思的词和短语很多,如 love, enjoy, prefer, appreciate, be fond of, care for等。如:
I like reading while my brother likes watching television.
→ I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.
我喜欢看书,而我的兄弟却喜欢看电视。
3. 合理使用省略句
合理恰当地使用省略句,不仅可以使文章精练、简洁,而且会使文章更具文采和可读性。如:
(1) He may be busy. If he’s busy, I’ll call later. If he is not busy, can I see him now?
→ He may be busy. If so, I’ll call later. If not, can I see him now?
他可能很忙,要是这样,我以后再来拜访。要是不忙,我现在可以见他吗?
(2) If the weather is fine, we’ll go. If it is not fine, we’ll not go.
→ If the weather is fine, we’ll go. If not, not.
如果天气好,我们就去;如果天气不好,我们就不去了。
(3) She could have applied for that job, but she didn’t do so.
→ She could have applied for that job, but she didn’t.
她本可申请这份工作的,但她没有。
4. 适当运用非谓语结构
非谓语结构通常被认为是一种高级结构,适当运用非谓语结构,会给人一种熟练驾驭语言的印象。如:
(1) When he heard the news, they all jumped for joy.
→ Hearing the news, they all jumped for joy.
听了这消息他们都高兴得跳了起来。
(2) As I didn’t know her address, I wasn’t able to get in touch with her.
→ Not knowing her address, I wasn’t able to get in touch with her.
由于不知道她的地址,我没法和她联系。
(3) As he was born into a peasant family, he had only two years of schooling.
→ Born into a peasant family, he had only two years of schooling.
他出生农民家庭,只上过两年学。
5. 结合使用长句与短句
在英语写作中,过多地使用长句或过多地使用短句都不好。正确的做法是,根据实际情况在文章中交替使用长句与短语,使文章显得错落有致,这样不仅使文章在形式上增加美感,而且使文章读起来铿锵有力。如:
At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. Then we had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced. Some told stories. Some played chess.
→ At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing, telling jokes and playing chess.
中午我们晒着太阳吃野餐。休息一会儿后,我们唱的唱歌,跳的跳舞,还有的讲笑话、下棋,大家玩得很开心。
6. 适当使用短语代替单词
(1) He has decided to be a teacher when he grows up.
→ He has made up his mind to be a teacher when he grows up.
他已决定长大了当老师。
(2) He doesnt like music.
→ He doesnt care much for music.
他不大喜欢音乐。
(3) He told me that the question was now under discussion.
→ He told me that the question was now being discussed.
他告诉我问题现正正在讨论中。
7. 恰当套用某些固定表达
(1) He was very tired. He couldn’t walk any farther.
→ He was too tired to walk any farther.
他太累了,不能再往前走了。
(2) The film was very interesting. Both the teachers and the students liked it.
→ The film was so interesting that both the teachers and the students liked it.
这电影很有趣,学生和老师都很喜欢。
(3) Your son is old. He can look after himself now.
→ Your son is old enough to look after himself now.
你的儿子已经长大,可以自己照顾自己了。
8. 尽量使句子带点“洋味”
(1) Dont worry. Be bold and try it, and youll learn it soon.
→Dont worry. Just go for it, and youll get it soon.
别担心,大胆试一试,你很快就会学会的。
(2) Thank you for playing with us.
→Thank you for sharing the time with us.
谢谢你陪我玩。
9. 综合使用各类所谓的“高级”结构
(1) Now everyone knows the news. I think Jim must have let it out.
→ Now everyone knows the news. I think it must have been Jim who has let it out.
现在人人都知道这消息了,我想一定是吉姆把它泄露出去的。
(2) We had to stand there to catch the offender.
→ What we had to do was (to) stand there, trying to catch the offender.
我们所能做的只是站在那儿,设法抓住违章者。
(3) If her pronunciation is not better than her teacher’s, it is at least as good as her teacher’s.
→ Her pronunciation is as good as, if not better than, her teacher’s.
如果她的语音不比她的老师好的话,至少也不会比她老师的差。
10. 适当使用名言警句点缀
在写作时根据实际情况恰当地用上一两句名言警句来点缀文章,不仅使文章显得有深度、有智慧,而且会让文章在评分中上一个“得分档次”。如:
(1) As the proverb says, “Where there is a will, there is a way.” Though you fail this time, you needn’t lose heart. As long as you work hard and stick to your dream, you will succeed one day.
(2) There is a proverb goes like this “Life isn’t a bed of roses.” It is ture that it is likely for everyone to meet problems and difficulties in life.
(3) In the modern world, more and more people live alone, which is not so good for our life. It is better for us to make more friends and enjoy friendship. Just as a proverb says, “A near friend is better than a far-dwelling kinsman.”
篇16:英语读后感写作技巧
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所谓“感”
可以是从书中领悟出来的道理或精湛的思想,可以是受书中的内容启发而引起的思考与联想,可以是因读书而激发的决心和理想,也可以是因读书而引起的对社会上某些丑恶现象的抨击、讽刺。读后感的表达方式灵活多样,基本属于议论范畴,但写法不同于一般议论文,因为它必须是在读后的基础上发感想。要写好有体验、有见解、有感情、有新意的读后感,必须注意以下几点:
首先,要读好原文
“读后感[1]”的“感”是因“读”而引起的。“读”是“感”的基础。走马观花地读,可能连原作讲的什么都没有了解,哪能有“感”?读得肤浅,当然也感得不深。只有读得认真,才能有所感,并感得深刻。如果要读的是议论文,要弄清它的论点(见解和主张),或者批判了什么错误观点,想一想你受到哪些启发,还要弄清论据和结论是什么。如果是记叙文,就要弄清它的主要情节,有几个人物,他们之间是什么关系,以及故事发生在哪年哪月。作品涉及的社会背景,还要弄清楚作品通过记人叙事,揭示了人物什么样的精神品质,反映了什么样的社会现象,表达了作者什么思想感情,作品的哪些章节使人受感动,为什么这样感动等等。
其次,排好感点
只要认真读好原作,一篇文章可以写成读后感的方面很多。如对原文中心感受得深可以写成读后感,对原作其他内容感受得深也可以写成读后感,对个别句子有感受也可以写成读后感。总之,只要是原作品的内容,只要你对它有感受,都可能写成读后感,你需要把你所知道的都表示出来,这样才能写好读后感。
第三、选准感点
一篇文章,可以排出许多感点,但在一篇读后感里只能论述一个中心,切不可面面俱到,所以紧接着便是对这些众多的感点进行筛选比较,找出自己感受最深、角度最新,现实针对性最强、自己写来又觉得顺畅的一个感点,作为读后感的中心,然后加以论证成文。
第四、叙述要简
既然读后感是由读产生感,那么在文章里就要叙述引起“感”的那些事实,有时还要叙述自己联想到的一些事例。一句话,读后感中少不了“叙”。但是它不同于记叙文中“叙”的要求。记叙文中的“叙”讲究具体、形象、生动,而读后感中的“叙”却讲究简单扼要,它不要求“感人”,只要求能引出事理。初学写读后感引述原文,一般毛病是叙述不简要,实际上变成复述了。这主要是因为作者还不能把握所要引述部分的精神、要点,所以才简明不了。简明,不是文字越少越好,简还要明。
第五,联想要注意形式
联想的形式有相同联想(联想的事物之间具有相同性)、相反联想(联想的事物之间具有相反性)、相关联想(联想的事物之间具有相关性)、相承联想(联想的事物之间具有相承性)、相似联想(联想的事物之间具有相似性)等多种。写读后感尤其要注意相同联想与相似联想这两种联想形式的运用。
编辑本段如何写读后感
格式
一、格式和写法
读后感通常有三种写法:一种是缩写内容提纲,一种是写阅读后的体会感想,一种是摘录好的句子和段落。题目可以用《读后感》;还可以用自己的感受(一两个词语)做题目,下一行是——《读有感》,第一行是主标题,第二行是副标题。
二、要选择自己感受最深的东西去写,这是写好读后感的关键。
三、要密切联系实际,这是读后感的重要内容。
四、要处理好“读”与“感”的关系,做到议论,叙述,抒情三结合。
五、叙原文不要过多,要体现出一个“简”字。
六、要审清题目。
在写作时,要分辨什么是主要的,什么是次要的,力求做到“读”能抓住重点,“感”能写出体会。
七、要选择材料。
读是写的基础,只有读得认真仔细,才能深入理解文章内容,从而抓住重点,把握文章的思想感情,才能有所感受,有所体会;只有认真读书才能找到读感之间的联系点来,这个点就是文章的中心思想,就是文中点明中心思想的句子。对一篇作品,写体会时不能面面俱到,应写自己读后在思想上、行动上的变化。
八、写读后感应以所读作品的内容简介开头,然后,再写体会。
原文内容往往用3~4句话概括为宜。结尾也大多再回到所读的作品上来。要把重点放在“感”字上,切记要联系自己的生活实际。
九、要符合情理、写出真情实感。
写读后感的注意事项
①写读后感绝不是对原文的抄录或简单地复述,不能脱离原文任意发挥,应以写“体会”为主。
②要写得有真情实感。应是发自内心深处的感受,绝非“检讨书”或“保证书”。
③要写出独特的新鲜感受,力求有新意的见解来吸引读者或感染读者。
④禁止写成流水账!
编辑本段要写关于学习的读后感应该读什么有感
(1)引——围绕感点 引述材料。简述原文有关内容。
(2)概——概括本文的主要内容 ,要简练,而且要把重点写出来。
(3)议——分析材料,提练感点。亮明基本观点。在引出“读”的内容后,要对“读”进行一番评析。既可就事论事对所“引”的内容作一番分析;也可以由现象到本质,由个别到一般的作一番挖掘;对寓意深的材料更要作一番分析,然后水到渠成地“亮”出自己的感点。要选择感受最深的一点,用一个简洁的句子明确表述出来。这样的句子可称为"观点句"。这个观点句表述的,就是这篇文章的中心论点。"观点句"在文中的位置是可以灵活的,可以在篇首,也可以在篇末或篇中。初学写作的同学,最好采用开门见山的方法,把观点写在篇首。
(4) 联——联系实际,纵横拓展。围绕基本观点摆事实讲道理。写读后感最忌的是就事论事和泛泛而谈。就事论事撒不开,感不能深入,文章就过于肤浅。泛泛而谈,往往使读后感缺乏针对性,不能给人以震撼。联,就是要紧密联系实际,既可以由此及彼地联系现实生活中相类似的现象,也可以由古及今联系现实生活中的相反的种种问题。既可以从大处着眼,也可以从小处入手。当然在联系实际分析论证时,还要注意时时回扣或呼应“引”部,使“联”与“引””藕”断而“丝”连这部分就是议论文的本论部分,是对基本观点(即中心论点)的阐述,通过摆事实讲道理证明观点的正确性,使论点更加突出,更有说服力。这个过程应注意的是,所摆事实,所讲道理都必须紧紧围绕基本观点,为基本观点服务。
篇17:初中英语
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+ 加入清单A few days ago, the movie Red Sea Operation was very hot and people were
very impressive about the policemen, who saved the citizens lives in a very
urgent situation, some even sacrificed their lives as the price. We live in a
peaceful country. This is because policemen protect us all the time, and they
are the great persons. March 14th is the policemens day, people make this day
for them and show respect. They deserve the publics praise. They sacrifice so
much, such as the time to accompany their families. Many childrens future dream
is to be a policeman, as this career brings the public hope and future.
篇18:寒假初中英语
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+ 加入清单My winter holiday was very interesting.as that day I got back to my native hometown,cousins and cousines took me to ski.My skiing skill isnt well,got down for 15 times,they laughed at me behind,I cant help smiling too.
The day of spring festival was the most happiness day,we had meal for the first,a table of delicious food,that made me so glad.then we played the fireworks.The childrens waving the lightening ticket while watching the adults playing the fireworks.that was so beautiful!like the stars rainning down the world.at the end,it was time to get the red bag.
We were very exciting,and satisfied.sometimes,we also go shopping and buying something we like.
Winter holiday life was really abundant!
篇19:初中描写花的英语
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+ 加入清单Kapok isthe city flower of Guangzhou. It is straight trunk. The kapok flower is red. it is very beautiful. It open in cold weather like a hero. The kapok flower can eat, and it is a medicine. I like kapok very much. Do you like it ?
篇20:2024期末考试英语记叙文写作指导
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+ 加入清单记叙文是记人叙事的文章,它主要是用于说明事件的时间、背景、起因、过程及结果,即我们通常所说的五个" W "( what, who, when, where, why )和一个" H "( how )。记叙文的重点在于"述说"和"描写",因此一篇好的记叙文要叙述条理清楚,描写生动形象。下面就谈谈英语记叙文的特点和写好记叙文的基本要领。
一、记叙文的特点
1. 叙述的人称
英语的记叙文一般是以第一或第三人称的角度来叙述的。用第一称表示的是由叙述者亲眼所见、亲耳所闻的经历。它的优点在于能把故事的情节通过"我"来传达给读者,使人读后感到真实可信,如身临其境。如:
The other day, I was driving along the street. Suddenly, a car lost its control and ran directly towards me fast. I was so frightened that I quickly turned to the left side. But it was too late. The car hit my bike and I fell off it.
用第三人称叙述,优点在于叙述者不受"我"活动范围以内的人和事物的限制,而是通过作者与读者之外的第三者,直接把故事中的情节展现在读者面前,文章的客观性很强。如:
Little Tom was going to school with an umbrella, for it was raining hard. On the way, he saw an old woman walking in the rain with nothing to cover. Tom went up to the old woman and wanted to share the umbrella with her, but he was too short. What could he do? Then he had a good idea.
2. 动词的时态
在记叙文中,记和叙都离不开动词。所以动词出现率最高,且富于变化。记叙文中用得最多的是动词的过去的,这是英语记叙文区别于汉语记叙文的关键之处。英语写作的优美之处就在于这些动词时态的变化,正是这一点才使得所记、所叙有鲜活的动态感、鲜明的层次感和立体感。
3. 叙述的顺序
记叙一件事要有一定的顺序。无论是顺叙、倒叙、插叙还是补叙,都要让读者能弄清事情的来龙去脉。顺叙最容易操作,较容易给读者提供有关事情的空间和时间线索。但这种方法也容易使文章显得平铺直叙,读起来平淡乏味。倒叙、插叙、补叙等叙述方法能有效地提高文章的结构效果,让所叙之事跌宕起伏,使读者在阅读时思维产生较大的跳跃,从而为文章所吸引,深入其中。但这些方法如果使用不当,则容易弄巧成拙,使文章结构散乱,头绪不清,让读者不知所云。
4. 叙述的过渡
过渡在上下文中起着承上启下、融会贯通的作用。过渡往往用在地点转移或时间、事件转换以及由概括说明到具体叙述时。如:
In my summer holidays, I did a lot of things. Apart form doing my homework, reading an English novel, watching TV and doing some housework, I went on a trip to Qingdao. It is really a beautiful city. There are many places of interest to see. But what impressed me most was the sunrise.
The next morning I got up early. I was very happy because it was a fine day. By the time I got to the beach, the clouds on the horizon were turning red. In a little while, a small part of the sun was gradually appearing. The sun was very red, not shining. It rose slowly. At last it broke through the red clouds and jumped above the sea, just like a deep-red ball. At the same time the clouds and the sea water became red and bright.
What a moving and unforgettable scene!
5. 叙述与对话
引用故事情节中主要人物的对话是记叙文提高表现力的一种好方法。适当地用直接引语代替间接的主观叙述,可以客观生动地反映人物的性格、品质和心理状态,使记叙生动、有趣,使文章内容更加充实、具体。试比较下面两段的叙述效果:
I was in the kitchen, and I was cooking something. Suddenly I heard a loud noise from the front. I thought maybe someone was knocking the door. I asked who it was but I heard no reply. After a while I saw my cat running across the parlor. I realized it was the cat. I felt released.
这本来应是一段故事性很强的文字,但经作者这么一写,就不那么吸引人了。原因是文中用的都是叙述模式,没有人物语言,把"悬念"给冲淡了。可作如下调整:
I was in the kitchen cooking something. "Crash!" a loud noise came from the front. Thinking someone was knocking at the door, I asked, "Who?" No reply. After a while, I saw my cat running across the parlor. "Its you." I said, quite released.
二、写好记叙文的基本要领
1. 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个" W "和一个" H "有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些" W "和" H ",但动笔之前,围绕五个" W "和" H "进行构思是必不可少的。
2. 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children. They have not eaten for days." I took some food with me and went.
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger. There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger.
I gave the rice to the mother. She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice. When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors - they are hungry also!"
3. 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away. He was soon lost among people and traffic. He could not find the way back home and started crying. Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying. They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened. Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived. The two students decided to take him home. Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound. She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didnt take it. She served them with tea but they left.
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street. After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home. But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic. When he could not find the way home, he started and crying. Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop. They immediately went up to him.
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked.
"I want Mom, I go home." said the boy, still crying.
"Dont worry, well send you home."
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boys house. With the help of a policeman, they finally found it.
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house. Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea.