英语日记写作技巧(实用20篇)

日记：高三学习十分紧张，所以班长建议本周去郊外放松一下，享受秋天的美景。请你在今天的日记里发表对班长建议的想法。

October 12, 2009, Monday Fine

It is universally acknowledged that Senior Three is undoubtedly a critical phase of life. The school life is extremely busy, so our monitor suggests that we have an outing to relax ourselves this weekend.

It is terrific! After a month s study, I feel we really need a break for one day, and so do some of my friends. Senior Three should not be filled with study only and relaxation is also an important part. Sometimes relaxation is more useful than an hour s hard work. While having an outing, we can relax ourselves and enjoy the beautiful scenery of autumn --- yellow leaves, attractive sunset against the blue sky and so on. Isn t it enjoyable? After the outing, I think all the students will have a better physical and mental state to meet the further challenges we may come across and cope with difficulties for ourselves.

[精彩的高三英语作文:日记

This afternoon, we play a game called ‘Family Tree’. This game is very

interesting. I’m very interested in it. Our teacher’s family is very large. She

has many brothers and sisters. But I am unlucky, I has only a sister and I

without brothers. But I think I have the best parents in the world. They are

very friendly to me. I live in a good family. My grand parents loves me, too.

When they buy meat, they will give the best parts of the meat to me.

When I was a child, I can’t undertand them. I want to have bread. My grand

father took a bike to Qu Tang. Because in our village there is no ‘bread house’.

Qu Tang is far from our village. Now I grow up. I understand them when I think

of this things. I will cry I can’t use words to say I love them.

I love my family!

今天下午，我们玩了一个游戏叫做“家谱”，这个游戏很有趣。我觉得非常有趣。我们老师的家是非常庞大的，她有兄弟组妹。但我是不幸的，我仅有一个妹妹并没有弟弟。但我觉得我有全世界最好的父母。他们对我非常好，我有一个好的的家庭，我的父母也很爱我，当他们买肉，他们会把最好的给我吃。

当我还很小的时候，我不理解他们。我想要吃面包，我的伟大的父亲骑车去Qu Tang.因为在我们乡村这里没有面包房。qu

tang离我们村庄很远，现在我长大了，我明白了他们为我为我想要的事，我感到愧疚，无法用言语表达我爱他们。

我爱我的家人。

I have a sister. She is 16 years old. She was tall, about one meter and a

half tall, with glossy black hair, bright little eyes, a small mouth foaming

with oil, and a sweet face foaming with perfume.

She loves beauty. Every morning she combs her hair and washes her face.

She loves clean very much, must change a dress everyday, often can see her

to wash a hair, wash clothes, brush the figure of the shoe.

Her hands are very skillful. Her handwork is very delicate. But she has a

bad temper, whenever something goes wrong, she doesn‘t eat, so her stomach is

not very good.

I hope my sister can be happy every day.

快乐的寒假到了，为了能过一个既快乐又有意义的寒假。这次，我计划先把作业搞定。每天完成10页的《寒假乐园》，还要安排一篇日记，练一小时的钢琴。

Happy winter vacation arrived, in order to be able to live a happy and meaningful winter vacation. This time, I plan to do my homework first. Finish 10 pages of "winter vacation" every day, and also arrange a diary to practice the piano for an hour.

作业做完了，我这个“书虫”终于能狂啃书了!我最喜欢啃柔萱写的《好玩数学博客》，在这本书中学到了让人意想不到的数学小知识，享受玩中学的快乐。我认识《今年你七岁》中调皮可爱的刘一波，从辫子姐姐写的《当时年纪实在小》我感受到她童年时代的快乐与悲伤，知道了《皮皮鲁遥控老师》的奇妙故事……狂啃书的滋味真好啊!

I have finished my homework, I was finally able to this "bookworm" mad kenshu! I love eating soft Xuan wrote "fun math blog", in this book to the mathematical knowledge of the unexpected, enjoy playing happy middle school. I know Liu Yibo, seven years old, who is very naughty and cute. From the braid elder sister wrote "at that age is very small", I feel the joy and sorrow of her childhood. I know the wonderful story of Pipiru remote control teacher. Its good to be crazy about books!

大年28，我回到了老家——马山。现在我可以狂吃狂喝狂玩狂乐了。我吃奶奶给我准备的香喷喷、黄澄澄的鸡腿，绿油油、白嫩嫩的蔬菜……喝的是甜滋滋，爽歪歪的橙汁。各种色香味俱全的美味佳肴。看着这些好吃的，我真想一口吃成个大胖子，吃完以后，我就挺着“将军肚”找小朋友玩。我们在沙堆上放火箭炮，只听“吱”的一声，火箭炮如离弦之箭一般直冲天空，“砰”的一声爆炸了!只见几张纸片缓缓地从空中漂落下来。后来我们放了威力最强的彩雷王，我把它点燃，放进纸管里，纸管被炸得面目全非。你看，我多开心呀!

In the year 28, I returned to my hometown, Mashan. Now I can be crazy, crazy, crazy, and crazy. My grandma gave me to eat delicious chicken, yellow, green, tender vegetables...... The drink is sweet, Shuangwai Orange Juice. All kinds of delicacies that are full of color and fragrance. Look at these delicious, I really want to eat into a big fat, eating, Im a "General belly" looking for friends to play. We put the Rockets in the sand, just listen to "squeak" sound, rocket like an arrow into the sky, a "bang" explosion! I saw a few pieces slowly from the sky fall down. Then we put the most powerful color of this, I lit it into the paper tube, paper tube was bombed out. You see, how happy I am!

嘿嘿，这样的寒假真是快乐啊!

Hey hey, such a winter vacation is really happy ah!

February 22nd Sunday fine.

Every Saturday, my mother will clean, very hard. I will help my mother to throw out the garbage in every room. First, all the useful waste paper is picked out and put into the waste paper bag for garbage classification. Put the basket inside the rest of the rubbish into a big bag and threw it into the door of the garbage can, then cover on new bag in the basket, with the above compression ring compression bag is ok.

Helping my mother take out the garbage can make me exercise, and I can learn more. Extend my hands, help my mother to do some of the little things I can do, I feel I have grown up!

十月一日是举国欢庆的节日，这天早晨五点钟，我们全家就起床了，简单洗漱完毕，我们就坐上了大巴车向着目的地出发。窗外正飘着蒙蒙细雨，我们一路谈笑风生。经过几个小时的车程，我们先来到了游览的第一站——苏州园林。这里的景色很美，庭院里到处都散发出迷人的桂花香，古色古香的建筑群，令人目不暇接的园林设施，不禁让我流连忘返。

傍晚，告别苏州园林，我们又驱车前往上海外滩，一到外滩，首先映入眼帘的是灯火辉煌的外滩夜景，江中的游轮来回穿梭着，为江面增添了一道美丽的景致。

第二天一大早，我们又乘车来到了世界瞩目的上海世博会展览馆，尽管世博会已闭幕，但来这里参观游览的游客却依然数不胜数，在人头攒动的队伍中依次进入园区，首先来到了我最喜欢的红色中国馆，眼前高大的古典建筑，充分展现了我国劳动人民的勤劳与智慧，中国五千年文化却在这里得到体现。闻名中外的《清明上河图》中栩栩如生的人物形象，更是让我叹为观止，错落有致的古建筑，深深地震撼了我。走进绿色环保大厅里，百花齐放，仿佛又将中国推向世界环保大国的前列。我为我伟大的祖国深感自豪。

下午，我们乘车踏上了归途，这次旅行中所看到的美丽景致在我脑海中不断浮现，我的心情久久不能平静，这次国庆之旅真令人难忘啊！

暑假，我和爸爸妈妈一起到张家界旅游。我们坐了一天的火车，到了晚上天黑才到张家界。

第一天，我们来到了天子山，我们乘坐索道来到了天子山山顶，远远望去，山好像戴了帽子似的，云雾在山顶上环绕好像神仙就要降临在我面前，我们首先到达的景点是乾坤柱。哇，这个乾坤柱可真大呀!简直就是十个房子都比不上!我们下一个到达的景点是天下第一桥，我一开始看都没发现天下第一桥在哪里呢，后来妈妈告诉我，天下第一桥就在对面那个岩石的下面，其实天下第一桥还是自然生成的呢!天下第一桥是用岩石构成的，大自然可真是奇妙啊!

第二天，我来到了仙人溪，哇!我闻到了好吃的的烧烤味，这里有自助烧烤吗?走近一看，还真的有，我恨不得马上去烤一个鸡腿吃，我让爸爸立刻马上现在就去烤鸡腿，趁着爸爸烤鸡腿的时间，我要出去逛逛，呀，这里还有一个天然的游泳池，然后就立马去游泳了，过了一会，爸爸对着游泳池大声说：“鸡腿烤好了，快来吃哦!”我小声的对自已说：“耶，鸡腿终于烤好了!”我立马爬上岸跑到爸爸那里拿起一个鸡腿就啃，真好吃呀!

第三天，我来到了黄龙洞，到了黄龙洞，那天晚上正好是土家族举行篝火晚会的时候，我真希望时间可以过的快一点，这样就可以早点到举行篝火晚会的时候了;白天，我跟爸爸妈妈一起去了黄龙洞，我和爸爸妈妈走到了黄龙洞的深处，里面好凉快呀，而且还有一个大大的舞台，下面还有很多座位，我们向着舞台后面走，竟然看到了好多蝙蝠，后面还有个楼梯，从楼梯上去有一个小房子和一个花园，请问这是谁家的花园，怎么这么多雾呀，好像仙人住的房子呀!到了晚上，有好多穿着土家族服装的叔叔阿姨在广场上敲锣打鼓，中间摆放着一个大锅，锅里面放了一些柴火，倒了一些油，有一个叔叔拿了一个火把，把火把丢进了大锅里面，大锅里瞬间燃起了熊熊大火，土家族的人们兴高采烈地围着火堆跳起了土家舞……

张家界可真好玩!

I went to the Peoples Park with my family today. We had picnic in the

park. My mother and grandparents were preparing food, father was playing

badminton with his friend while I was reading under a tree.

今天我跟家人去公园。我们在公园野餐。我妈妈和爷爷奶奶准备吃的。爸爸跟朋友在打羽毛球，我在树下看书。

April 28th Saturday Fine

It was Saturday， just before May Day. My classmates and I went to the park nearby， we didnt go there for amusement but took part in voluntary labor.

We got there at 9：00. We were pided into three groups and then began working. The students in Group One planted trees and watered flowers. The task for Group Two was collecting the litter left about by tourists and cleaning the benches. The group I was in got to the Childrens Play ground and wiped all the equipment clean. We worked very hard. At 11：00， when all the work was finished up， all my classmates met again. Although everyone was in a sweat， yet we felt happy because we had done good job.

4 月28 日（星期六）晴天

今天是星期六，是在五一劳动节之前。我和我的同学去附近的公园，我们不是去那里娱乐，而是去参加义务劳动。

我们在9:00到达那里。我们分为三组，然后开始工作。第一组学生种植树木和花草浇水。而第二组的任务是捡起游客留下的垃圾和清洁长凳。我在的组去了儿童游乐场给所有的设备清洁。我们工作很努力。在11:00，所有的工作都完成了，我的同学们再次集合。虽然每个人都满身是汗，但我们感到高兴，因为我们做了很好的工作。

Since I go to school, I start to form the habit of noting what I have read.

I found it is very helpful for me, because I get bad memory, I will forget what

I have learned in the class soon, so my teacher asks me write down what I get.

Now, after class, I will open the note, go over what I have learned.

中学英语教学大纲中明确指出：“写是书面表达和传递信息的交际能力。培养初步写的能力，是英语教学的目的之一。”在近年的高考中英语写作也占有相当比重。因此，在高中阶段教师应在指导和组织学生进行英语写作上下功夫，在平时教学中应有计划有目的地去训练和提高学生的写作能力。

一、学生能充分认识英语写作的重要性是写作能力提高的必要条件。

英语写作能力的提高需要持之以恒的长期训练。如果学生对写作重要性认识不够，他们就不能积极主动地去配合老师搞好写作训练，甚至产生逆反心理，产生对立情绪，英语写作就会半途而废，达不到预期目的。

在平时教学中，老师要经常性地有意识地对学生进行写作重要性的教育。学生一进入高中就要让他们了解初中和高中英语教学要求的异同。

我给学生找几份中考和高考题，帮助他们了解中考和高考英语试题对基础知识和基本技能要求的相同之处和不同之处，引导他们转变观念，更新和完善学习方法，要让他们了解到英语写作在高考中、实际运用中以及对将来继续学习英语的重要性。

我还联系在过去高考中英语取得优异成绩的毕业生，用书信介绍学好英语的方法，特别是在英语写作方面的成功经验和英语写作对他们当时及后来英语学习的重要性。这些毕业生有很大的感召力，很有说服性，尤其对那些有逆反心理的学生。

二、指导写作应注意的几个问题：

1．教师要有明确合理的教学计划和教学程序，组织系统规范的有序训练。

2．帮助和要求学生养成积极主动地坚持英语写作的良好习惯。

3．坚持循序渐进的训练原则。写作要先易后难，先短后长，先学会运用简单句、并列句，后学会用复合句表达，先写正确句子逐步过渡到围绕一个人、一件事、一个观点去写有中心的文章，由不限定时间到限定时间，由限定时间长到限定时间短，由限定字数少到多……

4．分程度要求。对学生的要求不能一刀切，对学习好的要求要高，对学习差的要求要适当低一些。要避免有些学生轻而易举垂手可得，而有些学生又可望而不可及的情况发生。

5．注意讲评。要经常指出优点，以利模仿，指出缺点，警示避免。

6．鼓励优秀，耐心帮助差生。充分利用板报、专栏进行优秀作文展览，或者也可采用传阅方式进行。但不能放弃或岐视差生，要经常帮助他们树立信心，掌握写作方法和技巧。

7．基础知识和能力并重，听说读和写并举。教师在平时教学中应充分利用一切可以利用的机会启发引导学生提高自己的写作水平。如遇到优秀的句、段或篇提示学生注意欣赏作者的表达法，把它们作为范例，在自己写作中加以模仿和运用。又如遇到英汉表达方法不同之处，提示学生注意英语的正确表达法，切忌出现汉语式的英语。要帮助学生养成正确运用标点符号的好习惯，切忌一点到底的错误方法。

8．要求学生在写作中宁简勿误，不能养成随随便便的习惯，要养成严谨推敲的风气。

三、训练写作的常用方法。

写作训练应考虑循序渐进的原则，采取逐步提高的形式进行。

1．用学过的词、短语或句式，模仿课文中的表达法造句。2．换课文中的人物、时态、语态或体裁等改写课文。3．看图作文。4．填补式作文。5．写课文复述材料或写心得体会。6．将打乱顺序的句子按事件发展的时间顺序或逻辑关系等整理成一篇完整的短文。7．教师给出题目和提纲让学生写作。8．写日记或周记。9．材料作文。教师给出汉语提示让学生用英语表达。

四、注意纠正学生英语作写中容易出现的错误。

学生最初写作时，教师要给予必要的指导，使他们少犯错误。教师还要经常性地例举错误的表达法，提醒学生注意避免。在批阅作文时教师要随时标出学生错误之处，还要随时记录学生所犯错误，把学生的错误加以归类总结，把普遍性的错误提出来，让学生集体改错，使他们的语言表达尽可能地规范正确。

总之，学生英语写作能力在老师有计划的组织和耐心帮助、正确引导下，在学生长期积极密切的配合下是能够得以逐步提高的。

The Wind And The Sun

风和太阳

One day the wind said to the sun, “Look at that man walking along the road.

I can get his cloak off more quickly than you can.”

有一天风跟太阳说: “看看那个沿着路上走的人.我可以比你快让他把披风脱下来.

“We will see about that,” said the sun. “I will let you try first.”

“我们等着看吧,”太阳说, “我让你先试.

So the wind tried to make the man take off his cloak. He blew and blew, but

the man only pulled his cloak more closely around himself.

因此风尝试让那个人把披风脱下来.他用力地吹,可是那个人把披风拉得更紧.

“I give up,” said the wind at last. “I cannot get his cloak off.” Then the

sun tried. He shone as hard as he could. The man soon became hot and took off

his cloak.

“我放弃了,”风最后说, “我无法让他把披风脱下来.”然后由太阳试试看.他尽可能地晒他.不久,那个人很热就把披风脱下来了.

Mom said today is Christmas Eve, no homework, great! I went out to dinner

with my parents and saw that the Catholic church was very crowded. Mom and dad

asked me what gift I want, I said no, Santa Claus will give me a gift, I as long

as a safe and happy family together.

After dinner we went home and the family started decorating the Christmas

tree and made a Santa out of silly putty. This Christmas Eve had a good

time!

导语：要学好写英语短文，就必须经常练习写作。记日记是提高书面表达能力的有效方法之一。下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文指导，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

一、日记的格式

英文日记通常由书端和正文两个部分组成。日记常以第一人称记下当天生活中的所见、所闻、所做或所想的事情。中、英文的日记三格式大致一样。英语日记的书端是专门写日记的日期、星期和天气的。左上角是日期(年、月、日)、星期。右上角写上当天的天气情况，如：Sunny，Fine，Rainy，Windy，Snowy，Cloudy等。

1、日期表达有多种形式。年、月、日都写时，通常以月、日、年为顺序，月份可以缩写，日和年用逗号隔开。例如：

A)September 1，2004或September 1st，2004也可省略写成Sept. 1，2004或Sept. 1st，2004;the 1st of September in 2004(月份不可以缩写)

B)只有月、日：September 1或September 1st(月份可以缩写)

C)只有年、月：September 2004或the September of 2004(月份不可以缩写)

以上的1或1st都应读作the first.

2、星期也可以省略不写，可将其放在日期前或后，星期和日期之间不用标点，但要空一格，星期也可缩写。如：

Saturday，October 22nd，2004;October 22nd，2004 Saturday

3.天气情况必不可少。天气一般用一个形容词如：Sunny，Fine，Rainy，Snowy 等表示。写在日期之后，用逗号隔开，位于日记的右上角。如：

Saturday，March 4，2004，Windy;1st January，2004，Fine

二、日记的要求

日记的正文是日记的主要部分，写在星期和日期的正下方，可以顶格写，也可以内缩3至5个字母的空间。由于记载的内容通常已经发生，谓语动词多用一般过去时。但也可根据具体情况，用其它时态。如：记叙天气、描写景色，为了描写生动，可以使用现在时，以表现当时的情景。再如文后发表感想或评论可用现在时态或将来时态。记日记力求简单明了，有连贯性。若有文字提示，则应重视提示，把握要点。在句式上尽量使用简单句，以防繁杂，造成语法、句型错误。

三、日记的类型和训练

日记分为记事型、议论型、描写型和抒情型。建议大家在学习写日记的过程中，可按以下步骤进行：

①将一天所经历的主要事情和过程依次简要地记下来，不附加任何感情色彩，这是最简单的记日记的方法;

②阅读别人的日记，并利用所学过的句型来表达个人在一天中观察到的或感受到的事情。

「范文与点评」

March 12th，2003，Tuesday Sunny (Fine)

Today is Tree Planting Day. At 7∶30 in the morning，all the students in our class met at the school gate. We walked to the park. Miss Gao and other teachers went and worked with us. All the students worked very hard，and we planted about 200 trees. Though we were dirty and tired，we still felt very happy.

这是一篇记叙型的日记。结构严谨，中心突出，有选择地记录当天的见闻(人或事)，并加以分析和评论。

暑假英语日记第一篇：

Today is the first day that we start our summer camp. Everybody is amazed at the foreign teacher. They have white skin, yellow hair, blue eyes……But no one is very beautiful or handsome.

Foreigners are very tall or fat. I don’t like them. White skin with them is a little ugly. All day around I found that two thirds of the day time I was sleepy. I think tomorrow will be better.

暑假英语日记第2篇：

Today is sunny day, the sunshine is very nice. I am very happy, because I meet some new classmates, chinese teachers and an Englsih teacher. They are really friendly to me. In the morning we go to meeting room to atten the opening ceremony of the summer camp. There are so many people in it. Then I have a test. In fact, I really can’t stand it. In the afternoon, we meet English teacher. He is really tall and thin. He is funny and friendly. The lesson is very interesting. We like him. Then we meet Maria Zhang. She can speak English very well. She teachs them about genesis and sing an English song. They are so great.

Ho, I’m free and I’m happy!

暑假英语日记第三篇：

Full of excitement

The English summer camp begins today.We were all excited today.

When we got on the bus in the morning,our guide miss Guo reminded us to take care of ourseues.She also asked us to introduce ourselves and after that,we got known with each other.

How time flies!After only on hour,we got to Zhejiang University.The university is pretty,beautiful and large.The Teaching buildings and student’s building are very new.I couldn’t wait to go into the student’s building.The condition of the flat is good.The air conditioner is prepared for us.The headteacher has a strong mind,no matter how hot it was,he still helped us to solve the problems.

In the afternoon,we had our first class.Mrs Zheng asked us 10 questions,and we answered them.

After having dinner,my friend and I went to the supermarket to buy some fruit.

How happy the day we had today!

20xx年11月14日 星期日 天气：晴

Sun.,Feb. 14 Rainy Spring Festival ,known as the Chinese New Year, is the most important holiday in China.From late January to early February,Chinese people are busy preparing for the New Year.They clean their houses ,have their hair cut,and buy new clothes .Jiaozi or dumpling is most popular.To those who live far away from their home,this festival is also a framily reunion occasion. And they often go back home to celebrate the festival with their family.The first day of the new year is the time when people visit their friends adn wish each other good luck in the new year.

二月十四日 星期日 雨春节，即中国人的新年，是中国最重要的节日。从一月末到二月初人们忙着为新年做准备。他们打扫房屋、理发和买新衣服。饺子是最受欢迎的。对那些远离家乡的人们，春节是一个合家团聚的时刻。他们经常回家和家人欢度春节。新年第一天人们访友并互祝新年好运。

Fri. ,Feb. 5 Rainy

In my dream

Last night ,I dreamed I became a very beautiful brid. I dreamed that I was in a forest. In tht forest,there were a lot of animals. Then,an old bird told us,"we have a very beautiful forest,we should therefore protect it from pollution. "All the animals agreed with him.

But the second day,people came into our forest. Many animals were caught. The people wanted to build house and parks in our forest. Many old trees were felled. And then suddenly,nothing was left standing.

I was so shocked and then I bursted out crying. I woke up at midnight. It was only a dream.

二月五日 星期五 雨

在梦中

昨晚我梦见我变成一只非常漂亮的鸟。 我梦见我在一座森林，森林里有很多动物。 然后有一只老鸟告诉我们，"我们有一座非常美丽的森林，因此我们应该保护它，免受污染"所有的动物都赞成他。

但是第二天，人们进入我们的森林，许多动物被逮捕。 这些人要在我们的森林地上建造房子和公园。 许多年老的树木被砍下，然后，突然间，一切都被夷平了。

我很震惊，接着突然大哭起来。 我在半夜醒来，原来只是个梦。

Spring Festival Spring Festival is the most important festival in China .In

the evening before the Spring Festival ,families get together and have a big

meal .In many places people like to set off firecrackers .Dumplings are the most

traditional food .Children like the festival very much ,because they can have

delicious food and wear new clothes .They can also get some money from their

parents. This money is given to children for good luck . People put New Year

scrolls on the wall for good fortune .

January 17 20xx

20xx年1月17号

It is a special day today. My mother sent one hundred basket of red bayberries. I like to eat red bayberries. It tastes nice. When they arrived in Shanghai, they were still fresh. But most of them would be sent to my mothers business friends. I chose the best basket of red bayberries to eat. I put the rest in my refrigerator. Red bayberry is my hometowns special product. It is well-known in china. Many people like to eat it.

这是一个特殊的时光今天。我的母亲寄100红bayberries篮子。我喜欢吃红bayberries。味道不错。当他们来到上海,但他们仍记忆犹新。但是,其中大部分将被派往我母亲的商界的朋友。我选择了最好的红色bayberries篮子吃。我把我的冰箱的休息。杨梅是我的故乡的特殊产品。这是着名的中国。许多人喜欢吃它。作文地带提供中文翻译。寒假英语日记带翻译仅供大家参考和学习，祝大家学习进步、寒假愉快!

my daily life

Though my daily life is extremely monotonous, I try hard to adapt myself to

it. Why? Because I intend to be a good student. I wish to render service to my

country. I get up at six o’clock every day. after I wash my face and brush my

teeth, I begin to review my lessons. I go to school at seven o’clock. after

school is over, I return home. we usually have supper at seven o’clock.then I

begin to do my homework. I want to finish it before i go to bed.

我的日常生活

虽然我的日常生活十分单调，但我却竭力设法去适应它。为什么?因为我打算做一个好学生，希望将来为国家服务。

我每天六点起床、洗脸刷牙后，就开始复习功课，七点钟我就去上学。

放学后，我就回家了。我们通常在七点钟吃晚餐，之后我就开始做家庭作业，希望在睡觉前把它做完。

一、 教学目标：通过片段训练，使学生能进行细致的描写。

二、 教学重点：片段练习

三、 教学难点：通过片段练习，掌握进行细致描写的技巧。

四、 教学设想：演示实验——练习——分析——片段练习——方法

五、 教学过程：

(一) 组织教学、课堂导入： 同学们在学习语文的过程中，感到最可怕的是写作文，往往胶尽 脑汁而无处下笔， 搜肠刮肚找不到一个词语。 其实，

你们都是幸运的， 因为前人留给我们太多的宝藏，

“孔子的‘三人行，必有我师’，李太白的杯中酒，曹雪芹笔下的十二金钗，只要我们能多读好书，再掌握一定的作文技巧，又何愁写不好作文呢?这节课，就让我们一起解决作文中的一个难题：

“怎么进行细致的描写”?

(二) 讲授新课

1、 教师演示：教师手拿一个纸飞机，用力射出去，然后飞机掉 教师演示到了地上。 要求： (1)同学们要仔细观察，然后用一段话进行描写。

(2)同学们之间交流、分享。

2、摘录例句： 、摘录例句： a、老师把纸飞机用力的射了出去，飞机在空中飞了一圈，掉到 了地上。

b、老师右手拿一个纸飞机，高高向斜后方举起，身体向右倾斜 45 度角，右脚后退一小步，头微微抬起，向斜上方看，用力的将

飞机射了出去。飞机在空中像一个翩翩起舞的女子，画了一道优 美的弧线，轻轻地站在了地上。

3、分析：这两段话，你认为哪段写的好?为什么?

4、教师引导分析：得出“描写三原则” 。师总结：描写是什么呢?我认为描写就是把你看到的东西，可能是一 个人、一件物品、一个场景，告诉没有看到的人。

如果你要告诉别人什么，

首先一定要告诉别人。师总结：描写时，除了告诉别人“有什么”“怎么样”外，还要告诉别人“像什么”(板书：像什么)运用一定的修辞，这样才能使你的作文生动形象。“有什么”使我们明白了描写的对象，“怎么样”使描写具体起来，而“像什么”使描写变得更形象、生动，这三点就是描写三原则。

5、下面，同学们按照描写的三原则，检验一下自己刚刚的描写，进行修改。

6、教师让同学们将自己修改后的片段读出来，然后同学之间进行互评，教师让同学们将自己修改后的片段读出来。

7、美文共赏： 朱自清的《春》 分析：春天里“有什么”? 春天里“怎么样”? 春天的事物“像什么”? 8、作业：每人发一张图片——小鸭游水图，

让同学们课后按图片所画进行 描写练习。 要示：用词准确，100 字左右。

9、板书设计：三式妙法巧绘大千世界

1、有什么(对象) 描写三原则： 2、怎么样(细致) 3、像什么(修辞)

10、教学反思：通过本节课对描写的练习，同学们都有一个感觉：原来作文很简单。这也是这节课，我要告诉同学们的一个道理——作文 并不难。

但也有一部分同学词句匮乏，以后教学中，一定要加强词句的积累。