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In a year of many programs, my favorite is the Spring Festival. The Spring Festival is also called the Chinese New Year.

According to legend, "year" is a monster, every Chinese new year it ran to the scourge of human people, so people in the door to paste the red antithetical couplet, home burning fire, burning firecrackers to scare away Sheng "year", so the formation of people with fire, burning, paste antithetical couplet Sheng firecrackers is celebrated a year of good harvest and pray for a bumper harvest in the coming year tradition.

As soon as the Spring Festival comes, our family will go to grandmas home. The old house is busy, and the people out are going back. Every year is waiting for my father to write a couplet, we help to stick. The most interesting thing is to put off fireworks and firecrackers, and always do not play enough. Grandpa and grandmas "money" is more than a year, saying that it is saving for us to read the University. With mom and dad went from door to door, a relative blessing, "Happy New Year" "Happy New Year" "fortune" and "when leading" the university entrance exam

The Spring Festival is the end of a year. It is also the beginning of the year. People celebrate the years harvest in the Spring Festival, and summarize the results of the year. The harvest of people on holidays, jubilant, eat delicacy, to reward their relatives. At this time, I will calm down in the bustle, think of the past year, how I have passed, what is worth remembering, and what is worth celebrating. "The plan of a year is spring". Spring is a new beginning of a year, and it is my starting point. We should plan my life for a year and get better results.

One Sunday my mother （Mother） had （made） me take my little young brother to the a trip to the country. She bade me take good care of him.

While we were walking along the road, the sun was shining brightly and the breeze was blowing gently. We saw the beautiful flowers smile （smiling） at us and heard the birds sing （singing） their sweet songs on the trees. The scenery was indeed very pretty （beautiful）。

When we felt tired, we returned home. We saw Mother （our mother） wait （waiting） for us at the door.

有一个星期日，我母亲叫我带小弟弟去乡村游历。她吩咐我要好好照料他(www.kuaidu.com.cn)。

当我们沿着道路行走的时候，太阳灿烂地照耀着，微风轻轻地吹着。我们看见美丽的花儿对我们微笑着，并听见鸟儿在树上唱着悦耳的歌曲，风景实十分美丽。

当我们感觉到疲倦的时候，我们就回家了。我们看见母样正在门口等候我们。

理想的学校,即一所好学校,总的评判标准是其在育人方面的贡献程度.而要有高质量的教育教学水平,我认为有以下方面.

首先,在器物层面上,我认为一所好学校不一定要有现代的高楼大厦,简朴、富有文化底蕴的建筑物或许更有利于教育教学.但是,良好的绿化环境和干净整洁的面貌必不可少.

其次,在制度层面,学校要有高效率的管理制度、教学制度.这些制度好比人体的骨架,起着贯穿和支撑全局的作用.

再次,在精神层面,学校要有先进的、明确的办学理念,这是学校一切教育教学活动的指导思想.

最后,教育是培养人的活动,由教师具体完成.一所学校必须有高水平的教师,所谓高水平包括：扎实的专业知识、过硬的教学能力、良好的道德素养等等.

拥有以上几点,即是我梦想的学校.

哲学家苏格拉底曾说：“世界上最快乐的事，莫过于为理想而奋斗”。每个人都有自己的理想，并一直朝着这个目标奋斗着，这的确是一件快乐的事。我也有我自己的理想--做一名英语翻译家。

你们一定想知道我为什么要做英语翻译家？因为我从小就喜欢英语。在我上幼儿园，第一次接触英语的时候，老师教我们读“apple苹果”，“banana香蕉”，老师怕我们不懂，还特意拿来香蕉，指着香蕉对我们说：“这是不是很像‘b’呢？上面瘦瘦的，下面胖胖的。一个个香蕉就成了banana，这样，香蕉的英语是不是很容易拼出来。”老师还教我们学了很多英语单词。从那以后，我就喜欢上了英语。

虽然这个理想对我来说是一件非常遥远的事情，但我愿意为这个理想而努力拼搏。每当我听到别人那一口流利的英语，我都非常羡慕，同时我的心灵也一样受到了鼓舞。我相信只要努力就一定可以做到。现在我会从身边的每一步开始做起，努力学好英语。我希望通过我的努力，可以实现我的梦想。

通向理想的道路是遥远的，艰辛的，但我坚信自己只要为理想奋斗，为理想拼搏，就一定能实现理想。

As time goes by,it is the most meaningful day in the year---Spring

festival. Everyone is looking forward to it and the families are busy preparing

for it besides me.

I got up early in the morning ,and then I went to the shop with my parents

to do some shopping. After going back home,I cleaned the house,doing some

housework.Everything is ready,I am waiting for you ---Spring festival.

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时光荏苒，又到了一年中最有意义的时刻——共度春节。每个人都盼望着，期待着，家家户户都在忙碌地准备着，当然也少不了我!

一早，我就起床了，接着和爸爸妈妈一起去了趟超市，采购一番。待购物后，我们开心的回了家，回家后，我帮家里打扫了屋子，做了一些力所能及的家务活。一切准备就绪，现在我整期盼着春节的来临!)

I have to say that music really has a strong attractiveness to me. Naturally, everyone can choose suitable music to listen to. However, when you find a kind of music which can bring happiness to you, you will be surprised and become excited. Music has a magical energy, and it can help people gain good mood in a great extent.

When you feel sad, you can have a try to listen to soothing music. At first, soothing music will let you calm down. You will find that you will play much attention to the music, and then your sadness can be decreased. You will enter music ocean. You can experience a baptism of your heart. It does not matter that when you listen to soothing music and you want to cry, you should just follow yourself feeling to have a thorough release. Music will give you enough encourage to overcome difficulties.

Music also can double your happiness and arouse the fighting. For instance, when you solve some very difficult situations and gain success eventually, you will have a great mood. At this time, exciting music will witness your success. You will feel satisfied. Music lets you remember the glorious moment and cherish your success. Music can give you unlimited motivation to achieve goals，because you still want to listen to glorious music.

In addition, music includes a lot of useful knowledge. People can learn precious knowledge from music. Because there is different music, we can find out that different nations have different music thoughts to express. And from music, we can listen to music culture. Music culture will givee you a deeper understanding to learn foreign culture, such as foreign language, foreign history and foreign traditional customs and so on. In a word, music has an important effect on promoting society development.

Music indeed has a magical power to help people and society develop. I believe that music will still continue to bring us many surprises. As the development of society, great music will become more important.

我想说的是音乐对我真的有一股强大的吸引力。很自然，每个人都能选择适合自己的音乐去聆听。然而，当你发现一种能够带给你巨大幸福的音乐时，你将会很惊讶很激动。音乐有一种神奇的力量，在很大程度上，音乐能够帮助人们获得好心情。

当你感到悲伤时，你可以尝试听一下舒缓的音乐。首先，舒缓的音乐可以让你平静下来，你会发现你将会把注意力转移到音乐上，这样你的悲伤就会减少了。你进入 了音乐的海洋。你也经历了一次心灵的洗礼。当你听舒缓音乐时忍不住想要哭时，不要有任何顾虑，就跟着你的感觉走，让自己有一个完全的释放。音乐会给你足够 的勇气来战胜困难的。

音乐当然也可以让你的快乐加倍并且激发你的斗志。例如，当你解决了许许多多的困难并且最终成功时，你就会有一个好心情。这时，振奋人心的音乐会见证你的成 功。你会感到满足，音乐会让你记得这个光荣的时刻并且让你珍惜你的成功。音乐给了你无限的动力取得成功，因为你依旧想要听到光荣的音乐再次响起。

此外，音乐还囊括了许许多多有用的知识。人们可以从音乐中学到珍贵的知识。由于存在着很多不同的音乐，我们可以发现不同的的国家所表达音乐思想不同。从音 乐中，我们可以聆听到音乐文化。音乐文化将会给你一个更深的理解力去学习外国文化，例如外语，外国历史，外国传统习俗等。总而言之，音乐对促进社会发展有 着重要的影响。

音乐的确有着神奇的力量来帮助人们和社会发展。我相信音乐依旧会带给我们许多惊喜。随着社会的发展，好的音乐会变得越来越重要。

[高一英语作文我爱音乐（中英文翻译）

Last night, I watched a movie, it is about two teenagers, they have cancer,

but the boy is positive about life while the girl is negative about life. They

meet each other, then the girl is affected by the boy, she starts to see the

beautiful things in her life. I am so moved by the movie, though the ending of

the movie is not so perfect, we see the change of the girls life. The topic of

the movie is to tell people to be positive about life, no matter what happens,

even the bad fortune they get, they still need to smile every day. People need

to find the beauty of life, so they wont life live without meaning.

昨晚，我看了一部电影，那是关于两个青少年，他们身患癌症，但是男孩对生活很乐观，然而女孩子却对生活很悲观。他们遇见了彼此，然后女孩受到了男孩子的影响，她开始看到了生活的美好食物。我被这部电影深深地感动，虽然电影的结局不是那么的完美，但是我们看到了女孩生活的改变。电影的主题是告诉人们要对生活乐观，无论发生什么事情，即使他们遇到不幸，仍然需要每天乐观面对生活。人们需要发现生活的美，这样他们就不会活得没有意义。

Low carbon environmental protection starts from me In order to further the implementation of green education plan, improving our school teachers and students practice ability of green environmental protection, promote green development in our school, the school and group in the school moral education carried out to learn from the German schoolchildren diary of green environmental protection initiatives, and organize the children learn German elementary students environmental protection consciousness, strengthen the understanding of the green environmental protection.

Each grade has conducted a diversity of activities: one, two, three grade children completed a small environmental protection knowledge test, for all our children to understand the importance of low carbon, environmental protection; Four, grade six carried out to learn from the German schoolchildren diary of green environmental protection of the essay competition; Fifth grade was carried out to learn from the German schoolchildren diary of green environmental protection in order to "green, environmental protection" as the theme of creative copies out the newspaper.

This activity to further strengthen the consciousness formation of the students in our school environmental education, innovative the way students habits to develop education. In each child long growth formed the scenery along the road!

低碳环保从我做起 为了深入实施绿色教育计划，提升我校师生的绿色环保实践能力，促进我校绿色发展，学校德育办和大队部在全校开展了向《德国小学生的绿色环保日记》学习的倡议，并组织孩子们认真学习德国小学生的环保意识，增强做好绿色环保的认识。

各年级开展了丰富多彩的活动：其中一、二、三年级的孩子们完成了环保小知识的测验，让我们所有的孩子都了解了低碳、环保的重要性;四、六年级开展了向《德国小学生的绿色环保日记》学习的征文比赛;五年级开展了向《德国小学生的绿色环保日记》学习的以“绿色，环保”为主题的创意手抄报活动。

本次活动进一步加强了我校学生环保意识的养成教育，创新了学生行为习惯养成教育的方法。在每一个孩子漫漫成长的道路上形成了一道风景!

July 21 2014

It was cooler than yesterday. One of my father’s friends invited me to eat red bayberries. You must know it is unusual. Because we will climb the hill to eat red bayberries. There is no chance to eat red bayberries in the hill for the people who don’t live in Beijing. On the hill, you can breathe the fresh air, you can listen birds singing and you can eat red bayberries. It was enjoyable. It is said there are wild pigs in the hill. What a beautiful natural.

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2014年7月21日

这是比昨天凉快。我父亲的朋友邀请我吃红色杨梅。你必须知道，这是不寻常的。因为我们会爬上山吃红杨梅有没有机会吃红色杨梅在山的人并不住在北京。山坡上，你能呼吸新鲜空气，你可以听鸟唱歌，你可以吃红色月桂果。这是愉快的。据说有野猪在山上。一个多么美丽的自然。

[美丽的大自然初三英语日记带翻译

《我的暑假》

I love holidays,because during holidays ,I can do everything I like,and study something new.Now the summer holidays is coming,Im going to do something meaningful.

I like English,I spell words well,but I can not speak English very well.So I want to improve my English in the holiday.I will read English every moring,and then I think my English must be improved.

I will also learn to swim.I think it is very helpful.

There are too many things to do,I believe in myself can do them well!

My summer holiday must be a good one !

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I think my teacher got out of bedon the wtong side this afternoon as she

hasn’t cries.i went to office saw the boys unhappy.Because the students got

their teacher’s goat became they didn’t do their homework..I think this is my

teacher unhappy’s cause. Today, I saw a boy ,he played the handset.But didn’t

saw the walls so he Rnocked we laugh up our sleeve at he knocked ,but he hurt

his norse in the accident, and he was laying it on thick about how painful it

was .

It’s also a happy day, isn’t it ?

我想我的老师走出bedon的错误方向今天下午，她就一直没有哭.我到办公室看到男孩不高兴.因为学生得到老师的山羊成为他们没有做功课..我认为这是我的老师不愉快的事业。今天，我看到了一个男孩，他发挥了handset.但是没有看到这样的墙壁，他使我们笑了我们套在他撞倒，但他伤了挪威在这起事故，他就铺设厚如何痛苦这是。

这也是一个快乐的日子，是不是?

本次英语考试以中考题型命题，加强对基础知识的考查，侧重考查学生综合运用语言的能力。命题材料贴近学生生活，难度适中。其中听力笔录要点和书面表达失分较多。我所教两个班级19班比20班在人平，及格率和优秀率方面稍高。

从本次考试所反映的现状来看，今后的教学中应注意：

1.加强单词听写和课文背诵的落实工作，多关注课文文本知识。

2.狠抓基础知识，加强写作训练。书面表达能客观地反映学生英语基础知识掌握情况，并且一直是学生的薄弱环节。

3.继续注重英语阅读教学。阅读理解在我们的各种测试中所占分值越来越大，而且选材也更趋广泛化。因此课堂教学中要侧重“篇章”，强调“含义”，将语篇教学贯穿于课文教学和阅读理解教学中，利用语篇教学扩大学生词汇量，增强语感，丰富文化知识，提高学生分析问题和解决问题的能力。

4.注重兴趣培养，慎防两极分化。从试卷分析中可以看出，每个学校都不同程度地出现了令人担忧的“两极分化”现象。初学阶段一定要注意激发培养学生的学习兴趣，关注学生的情感，营造宽松，民主、和谐的教学氛围，保护每个学生的自尊心和学习英语的积极性。只有这样，掉队的学生才会减少，也才可能大面积提高人平。

5.注重课堂“时效性 ”，在优化课堂组织教学、合理设计教学活动，加大训练强度和密度的基础上，注重因材施教、分层教学。既要使大多数学生掌握好基础的知识与技能，同时注重知识的扩展和规律性知识的总结与归纳，让好学生也能获得充分的发展。

6.加强听力训练，营造语言环境。课堂上一定要加强对学生的听力训练，坚持用英语组织教学，尽可能利用多种教学资源让学生接触地道的语音、语调，多听英、美人士的录音材料。

My name is Li Haoyi. Im nine years old. Im a monkey. School: Park Primary School, class two (3).

I was a lively and cheerful and brave pupils in the class is worthy of the name "big star". I was very good at math. I was sealed by Mr. Zhou as a representative of math class. I also got the good praise from Mr. Huang.

Once, I saw in the exercises when the teacher Huang and Professor Zhou refers to me, I think that is calling me. After the exercise, the teacher let my mother come to school, I was more nervous! When my mother talked to the teacher, I knew that my sister was praised. (call to a false alarm.)

Look, this is me!

Christmas Day is important in western countries. It comes on December 25. People have several days off from their work. They go back home to get together for a big dinner. There is a Christmastree in each family. It is decorated with small things and brightlights. During Christmas Day, many shops are busy selling goodsas presents. On that day people often exchange presents. Childrenlike the festival because they can receive many beautiful presents.

圣诞节在西方国家是很重要的节日，它是指12月25日那天。人们有几天假期。他们回到家中举办一个家庭宴会。每个家庭都有一棵圣诞树，树上全是小的装饰品和亮亮的灯。圣诞节期间，许多商店忙着卖一些作礼物的商品，人们互相交换礼物。孩子们喜欢这个节日，因为他们可以收到许多美丽的礼物。

My school life is very interesting and happy. I like English best of all the subjects in the school. Because it can make me know something new about the world and make friends with a lot of foreigners. I often play basketball with my classmates at school and surf the Internet at home . I will study hard at other subjects from now on in order that I can enter a better high school.

我的学校生活是非常有趣和快乐。我最喜欢英语在所有的科目在学校。因为它能让我知道一些新的关于世界和结交了很多的外国人。我经常在学校和在家里上网，我的同学们打篮球。我会努力学习其他科目从现在开始，我可以进入一个好的高中。

Everyone has a dream, everyone dreams of each has its own characteristics.

My dream is to become a singer. Astronauts ya-ping wangs dream is when astronauts, soaring in the sky, after a test, 1 on 1 June 2013 live at 38 points, 5 ya-ping wang realized their dream. Dream is all the motivation, if did not have the power, then you will always be stepped in situ, power will let you constantly burning inner small universe, you want a perennial desire for a better life. Dream, can let you are not afraid of wind and rain, l fearless risk, keep moving forward.

Dancers Liao Zhi lost her legs in an earthquake, also lost daughter, hospitalized for 4 months, finally can was released from the hospital, but she must take prosthesis, thought it wont pain again, but she never thought with prosthesis is how much pain. Back to the home, want to go to the Wc, and calling to dad, mom, called for a long long time no one her. She remembered that mom and dad might not be home, so, she endured the pain with the prosthesis to the toilet. Just walked into a toilet and a load into the toilet, the hair is wet, look in the mirror before their mess, she decided to practice, have not yet learned to walk just learn to dance, in order to dream hard practice for six, seven years.

This reminds me of the dishes during the summer vacation, didnt stick to quit a few days. Will insist on a dream, the realization of the dream is not, make track for to dream on the road requires effort and sweat, and tears. In to abandon, do not give up. Vocabulary, dream, how beautiful dream, only constant efforts, constantly insist, to be courageous ya-ping wang, Liao Zhi insisted.

每个人都有一个梦想，每个人的梦想都各有特色。

我的梦想是当一名歌唱家。宇航员王亚平的梦想是当上宇航员，在天空中翱翔，经过一番的考验，就在2013年6月1住1日5时38分，王亚平实现了自己的梦想。梦想就是一切前进的动力，如果没有了动力，那你将永远的踏步走在原地，动力会让你不断的燃烧内心的小宇宙，激发你对美好生活向往生生不息的渴望。梦想，会让你不惧风雨l，无畏风险，不断前进。

舞蹈家廖智在一次地震中失去双腿，也失去了女儿，住了4个月的医院，总算可以出院了，但她必须带假肢，本以为不会再痛苦了，但她万万没有想到带假肢是有多么痛苦。回到了家，想上Wc，便叫爸爸，妈妈，叫了很长很长时间都没有人理她。她才想起爸爸妈妈可能不在家，于是，她忍着痛苦带着假肢走向了厕所。刚走进厕所便一头载进了马桶，头发也湿了，看着镜子前狼狈的自己，她便下定决心苦练，还没有学会走路就学会跳舞，为了梦想苦苦练习了六，七年。

这让我想起了在暑假里洗碗，没坚持几天就放弃了。有梦就要坚持，梦想的实现并非一朝一夕，追来梦想的道路上需要付出努力和汗水，甚至泪水。在抛弃，不放弃。梦想，是多么美好的词汇，梦想，只有不断的努力，不断地坚持，才能拥有王亚平的勇敢，廖智的坚持。

In my life， Ms Wang is the most important person to me. Her teaching skills are diverse. In class， she usually uses games and posters. She works hard for us. When other teachers rest， she still keeeps working and working. When we are mischievous， she is good at giving systematic guidance.

We are readlly grateful for what she has done for us. We want to say "Thank you" to her.

在我的人生中，王老师对我来说是最重要的人。她的教学手法很多样。课堂上，她经常利用游戏和标语。为了我们，她努力工作。当其他老师休息的时候，她仍然在工作。当我们淘气的时候，她循循善诱，因势利导。

我们真的很感激她为我们做的事情。我们想对她说声“谢谢”。

Today the crime rate in cities of our country is rising. Many citizens

often complain about the thefts and robberies that have taken palce in the areas

they live in and appeal to the governments at all levels to take effective

measures to reduce the crime rate.

如今犯罪发生率在我国众多城市呈现出上升趋势。许多公民常常抱怨在他们生活的地方，偷窃和抢劫常发生。他们希望各级政府能采取有效措施来减少犯罪发生率。

Faced with criminals, some people are so frightened that they shamelessly

give up the fight and other people turn a blind eye to them. However, some

people are brave enough, to risk their lives to fight the criminals.Their

fearless actions prevented the criminals from doing evils, saved the victims,

and protected the public properties.

面对罪犯，好些人因为过于害怕而无耻地放弃了斗争，和其他人一样，睁一只眼闭一只眼。可是，还是有些人有足够的勇气与罪犯斗争。他们无惧罪犯的行动阻止了犯罪分子做邪恶的事情，拯救了受害者并保护了公共财产。

To reduce the crime rate, we all the people should receive a law education.

Criminals must be severely punished. Meanwhile we should set up a foundation to

reward those who fight criminals. It is also important to call on people to

learn from those heroes and encourage more people to stand up to crime.

为了降低犯罪率，我们所有人都应该接受法制教育。罪犯必须受到严惩。同时，我们应该建立一个基金来奖励勇于与犯罪分子斗争的人。号召人们向英雄学习并鼓励更多的人抵抗犯罪也是一件非常重要的事情。

I would rather suffer hardships than fail。 In other words， to achieve

success is my only desire。 We all know that there are many factors of success。

Now let me write down the most important ones in the following。

Diligence—Foolish as a person is， he can succeed in his work if he works

hard。 That does not admit of any doubt。

Perseverance—When you fail， don’t lose heart。 Keep on working until you

acplish your aim。

Honesty—If you tell lies or does not keep your words， no one will rely on

you。 I would rather be scolded than cheat (others)。

我宁愿受苦难不愿失败。换句话说，获致成功是我唯一的愿望。我们大家明白成功要素很多。此刻让我们把它们最重要的写在下方。

勤勉――一个人虽然不大聪明，但是他地能做成他的工作，如果他苦干的话。那是不容置疑的。

毅力――当你失败的时候，不要灰心。要继续工作，直到你到达目的为止。

诚实――如果你说谎或不守信，没有人会信赖你。我宁愿挨骂不愿欺骗人。

想要写好英语作文都有哪些技巧呢?下面是语文迷网为大家提供的英语写作技巧，欢迎阅读参考。

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、作文案例

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[学生解答A]

My hobby is read books①.When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

②also的位置应放在can之后。

[点评]：档次9-11分。

①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

③有少量错误。

[学生解答B]

My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improvemy writing.I want to be a writer in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。

②真情流露，理由充分。

③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

[点评]：档次13-14分。

①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting theenvironment.They threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to preventstarting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirtywater into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

Today, I feel stair very dirty, I want to do good deeds. I said to her

mother, "I want to clean sweep on the first floor, has been stair." Mother

agreed. So I took the broom began to clean the stair, from my house to the fifth

floor downward all Saul to the first floor. I think has swept very clean, but

also esau is fast, but I was not a bit tired. I clean after me good, he went to

the 4th floor old womans house.

I can do this thing, a savory praised me, I was very happy.

译：

今天，我觉得楼梯很脏，我要做好事。我对妈妈说：“我要打扫楼梯，一直扫到一楼。”妈妈答应了。于是，我拿着扫把开始打扫楼梯，从我家5楼一直往下扫到一楼。我觉得已经扫得很干净了，而且也扫得比较快，可是我一点也不累。我打扫好了以后，就到4楼阿婆家玩。

我做了这件好事后，阿婆表扬了我，我心里很高兴。