商务英语正式自我介绍【推荐20篇】

​导语：相信很多外国人来到中国都会想了解我们的家庭生活，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

I live with my father and mother in a very big house in Dongguan. My parents are both very busy. They leave for work very early in the morning and don’t return home until late in the evening.

When I am home on weekends from school, we spend a lot of time together. We talk about my studies, my health and my school life. I love my parents very much.

My grandparents are still living, but they don’t live with us. Their health is good and they both do sports very early in the morning. My grandmother does gymnastics with elderly women her age in the park. Both of my grandfathers play basketball in the morning and sometimes they go swimming.

Chinese people eat rice for every meal, but I don’t like rice because I think it is tasteless! We eat meat, fish and vegetables. My family eats noodles and congee. My favorite is noodles.

I often play computer games because I like it so much. I often watch Japanese cartoon movies with my parents on the weekends. On long holidays we take trips, too.

That is my description of typical family life in China.

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我和爸爸妈妈住在东莞的一所大房子里。我父母都很忙。他们很早就动身去上班，晚上很晚才回家。

当我周末放学回家时，我们花很多时间在一起。我们谈论我的学习，我的健康和我的学校生活。我非常爱我的父母。

我的祖父母还活着，但他们不住在我们这里。他们的身体很好，他们都很早就开始运动。我祖母和公园里同龄的老年妇女做体操。我爷爷两个早上都打篮球，有时去游泳。

中国人每顿饭都吃米饭，但我不喜欢米饭，因为我觉得米饭很无味!我们吃肉，鱼和蔬菜。我的家人吃面条和粥。我最喜欢的是面条。

我经常玩电脑游戏，因为我很喜欢它。我经常在周末和我的父母一起看日本卡通片。在长假期间，我们也去旅行。

这是在中国的家庭生活。

导语：每到一个新班级都要进行一次自我介绍，你会用英语介绍自己吗?下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

Teachers，good afternoon.

Allow me to briefly talk about myself. My name is - xx graduated from the south gate of the private secondary schools. Tourism now studying at the school in Hubei Province. Studying hotel management professional. I was a character，cheerful girl，so my hobbies is extensive. Sporty. In my spare time likes playing basketball， table tennis，volleyball，skating. When a person like the Internet at home，or a personal stereo. Not like too long immersed in the world of books，and family members have told me，Laoyijiege is the best. Talking about my family，then I will talk about my family has. Only three people my family ， my grandmother ， grandfather and my own. My grandfather is a engineer，I am very severely on peacetime，the Church me a lot. Grandma is a very kindly for the elderly，care for my life in every possible way. Therefore，I have no parents in their care，childhood and growth were full of joy. I like this hotel management professional，because I like to live in a strict order of the management environment. I have my professional self-confidence and hope，as long as the efforts will be fruitful，this is my motto. Since I chose this profession，I will follow this path，effort，perseverance path.

Thank you teachers. I finished presentation.

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老师,下午好。

请允许我简单介绍我自己。我的名字是——毕业于xx私立中学。现在在这所湖北省旅游学校学习。学习酒店管理专业。我是一个性格开朗的女孩,所以我的爱好是广泛的。运动。在我的业余时间喜欢打篮球,乒乓球,排球,溜冰。当一个人喜欢在家上网,或者一个听随身听。不喜欢太长时间沉浸在书的世界里,和家人告诉我,劳逸结合是最好的。谈谈我的家庭,然后我将谈谈我的家人。我的家庭只有三个人,我的奶奶,爷爷和我自己。我的祖父是一个工程师,我非常严重在和平时期,教会我很多。奶奶是一个非常和善的老人,照顾我的生活在每一个可能的方式。因此,我没有父母的照顾,童年和成长都充满了快乐。我喜欢这个酒店管理专业,因为我喜欢生活在一个严格的秩序的管理环境。我有我的专业自信和希望,只要努力将是富有成效的,这是我的座右铭。既然我选择了这个职业,我将遵循这条道路,努力,坚持不懈的路径。

谢谢你老师。我完成了演示。

Neighbors have a lovely little white rabbit. I often go to the neighborhood to tease it to play. It is snow and white, when it rolled into a group, like a furry snowball. Red eyes like two sparkling rubies, cleverly turn around. Long and big ears of a movement on the "brush" about the vertical up. The short and small tail is like a small pile of balls attached to the buttocks behind. Rabbit front legs short, hind legs long, powerful hind legs as long as the back of a pedal, it pops out very far.

Little white rabbit favorite fresh leaves. It is funny three petals to eat things to always "tut, tut, tut" to ring, and eat quickly, as if afraid of being robbed like. I often hold the leaves in front of it dangling, the white rabbit to see the leaves on the eyes like light, forelegs lifted, neck stretched long, kept chasing leaves turn. When it was about to eat the leaves, I moved the leaves again, and it was anxious to go and drill in the cage. A chance to snatched leaves to hide in the side with relish to eat up.

Ah! Neighbors small rabbit really cute.

【内容提示】

用英语写一篇介绍你的母亲的文章。内容要求如下：

①我的母亲刚过50岁，像我们的国家一样，经历了传统美德和现代意识两个时代。②我的母亲受过高等教育。但她有家庭责任感，为了我们家她牺牲了自己的事业。

③她善于接受新鲜事物。近年来，她成了股迷，还成了足球迷。

④我爱我的妈妈，我们成了亲密的朋友。

【作文示范】

My Mother

My mother is just over fifty, a little bit older than our republic nation, so she has experienced two periods just like our country, showing both the traditional goodness and modern ideas.

Like all mothers, she is responsible and devotes most of her efforts to our family. So sometimes I feel regretful for her to give up her work, but she thinks it is the proper social role for a woman to be a housewife. She is satisfied with the family members＇ achievements. She insists on keeping her children under her wings. You see how traditional she is.

However, since she is intelligent①and has received the high education, it is easy for her to accept something new. In recent years, she is interested in the stock②. Therefore, she cares about the political and economic③ situation of the country and the world, and actively collects information of the companies whose stocks she bought. What is more, she is a fan of the Argentine④football team. So she was very sad after the defeat of this team in the 14th World Cup Tournament ⑤.

I love my mother, just because she loves me. Since we share some interests such as playing chess, we get chances to communicate⑥with each other, which makes us close friends.

【词语解释】

①intelligent[in＇telidN nt] a．聪明的；明智的

②stock[st&k] n．股票

③economic[?i:k ＇n&mik] a．经济（上）的

④Argentine [＇a:dN ntain] a．阿根廷的

⑤tournament [＇tu n m nt]n．锦标赛；比赛

⑥communicate[k ＇mju:nikeit]v．交流（感情、信息等）

【写法指要】

这是一篇介绍家庭成员的说明文。本文是典型的启、承、转、合结构的文章。“启”就是开始，即引言段，作者在该段写出篇题：“showing both traditional goodness and modern ideas”，指出“母亲”既保持了传统美德，又接受了现代意识。“承”即接续之意，也就是扩充引言段篇题方面的内容。本文第二段写“母亲”的传统美德，就是“承”的段落。“转”是用来表示与第二段相反或不同意见的内容，常用“however，but”等词语来表达。本文第三段即为“转”段，它说明篇题的第二层意思，也就是“母亲”的现代意识。所谓“合”就是结束，即指结尾段，该段往往综合前三段内容，对全文做一总结。本文作者总结说，由于母亲和自己的情趣相同，所以他们相亲相爱，如同亲密无间的朋友似的。

大熊猫是中国特有物种，现存的主要栖息地是中国四川、陕西和甘肃的山区。下面语文迷小编为大家整理了介绍大熊猫的英语作文，希望对你有帮助。

英语作文一：介绍大熊猫

Panda is one of the scarcest animals. People in the world like it very much. There used to be many pandas in China long ago. As the balance of nature was destroyed and the weather was getting warmer and warmer, pandas became less. But at present, the number of pandas is increasing year by year. There are now so many pandas that some are being sent to other countries so that people there can enjoy them.

Nowadays, the biggest nature park for panda in China is in Sichuan. There is a research centre for nature and wild life there. Scientists hope that one day they will have enough pandas to be set free and let them live in the wild again.

英语作文二：介绍大熊猫

Panda are cute animals.They live in the forests or the mountains and they eat bamboo for food.The grown-up panda is about from 120 to 190 metres tall.And its weight is about 85 to 125 kilometres.The skin of panda is black and white,its thick and soft.In fat,there is also a kind of brown pandas,but only five are left in the world.There are a few pandas all around the world,so we should protect them.

英语作文三：介绍大熊猫

Chinese panda living in the south, they are a bamboo for food, eat slowly, eat 12 hours a day, every day to eat 15 kilograms of bamboo. Their numbers are fewer and fewer of the panda in the wild only just over 1600, have a small number of people living in the zoo. They are a lovely precious animals, we should pay more to protect.

The majestic the Imperial Palace museum is a world famous one of the Royal buildings.

Into the Tiananmen, through the side door, gate, came to the gate, a large palace show in my eyes, this is the office of the Taihe palace, after the temple came to the temple and temple, and there is. Each house has Zhu Hong walls and gates, the roof is covered with yellow glazed tiles. After then, then turn a corner, I saw a small door in the door, look right, see nine, nine engraved with nine dragons, their colors are white, blue, yellow, black four kinds of shapes of them, no two are the same. Over history, then from the left door into the room to watch. When I entered the room when I watch, startled, apparently came to the bell of the Kingdom, the clock of the ocean, big and small Guzhong row upon row of, a mahogany clock fan a superb collection of beautiful things, characters, gilded bronze green shark skin chronometer, clepsydra, hardwood carved since the name of clock, there are 1000 kinds of clock. The watch room, turn a circle came to the Imperial Garden, Imperial Garden, beautiful scenery, there are four flowers, the flowers are not welcome, that kind of opened again. There is a rockery in the middle of the garden, and the rockery is more beautiful under the cover of the surrounding grass.

The Imperial Palace Museum, the beautiful scenery everywhere, not to say that, I hope you have a chance to appreciate.

雄伟壮观的故宫博物院是世界闻名的皇家建筑群之一。

走进天安门，经过端门，午门，就来到太和门，一座高大的宫殿展现在我的眼前，这就是皇上办公的太和殿，经过太和殿就来到中和殿，过了中和殿就是保和殿。每个殿都有朱红的宫墙和大门，屋顶上盖的是黄色的琉璃瓦。过了保和殿，再拐个弯，就看到一个小门，进了门，向右看，就看见九龙壁，九龙壁上刻着九条龙，它们的颜色分别是白，蓝，黄，黑四种，它们的形状各异，没有哪两条是相同的。过了九龙壁，再从左边小门进去，就来到钟表室。当我进入钟表室时，我不禁愕然，分明是来到钟的王国，钟的海洋，大大小小的古钟鳞次栉比，琳琅满目，有红木人物风扇钟，铜镀金绿鲨鱼皮天文钟，铜壶滴漏，硬木雕花自名钟等，一共有钟表1000多种。过了钟表室，转个圈儿就来到御花园，御花园景色优美，四季都有花开，这一种花还没有谢，那一种又开了。花园中间有个假山，在周围小草的掩映下，假山更漂亮了。

故宫博物院到处有美丽的景色，说也说不尽，希望有机会你去细细赏玩。

i am xx . i was born in . i graduate from senior high school and major in english. i started learning english since i was 12 years old. my parents have a lot of american friends. that’s why i have no problem communicating with americans or others by speaking english.

in my spare time, i like to do anything relating to english such as listening to english songs, watching english movies or tv programs, or even attending the activities held by some english clubs or institutes. i used to go abroad for a short- term english study. during that time, i learned a lot of daily life english and saw a lot of different things.

i think language is very interesting. i could express one substance by using different sounds. so i wish i could study and read more english literatures and enlarge my knowledge.

[酒店面试英语的自我介绍

The city of xi an is my beautiful home, which has the wall, the wild goose pagoda, the drum tower, the terracotta warriors... It is. My family has my familiar smiling face, familiar family, xi an is the city of the city is my honor and my pride.

In the spring of a lot of people gathered outside the wild goose pagoda, because they know that master xuan zang in starting to get true through, so the people respect him very much as the quality of the firm and meticulous spirit, where there will be a wonderful fountain performance and a wonderful song.

In the summer the Terra Cotta Warriors gathered a lot of Chinese and foreign tourists, they take up the sun fire here will be very hard, of course we will not abuse their.

The bells and drums of the bell tower are so wonderful in autumn.

All the buildings in the winter are covered, the white snow is so beautiful!

故城西安是我美丽的家，那有城墙、大雁塔、钟鼓楼、兵马俑……。我的家有我熟悉的笑脸、熟悉的家人，西安被评为古城是我的荣誉也是我的骄傲。

春天的大雁塔的外面聚集了许多的人，因为他们知道当年的玄奘法师在出发去取真经的，所以人们非常敬重他那样坚定的品质和一丝不苟的精神，哪里还会有精彩的喷泉表演和美妙的歌声。

夏天的兵马俑里聚集着许多的中外游客，他们冒着火辣辣的太阳来到这里一定会很辛苦的，当然我们也不会虐但他们的。

秋天，钟鼓楼的钟声和鼓声是多么的美妙。

冬天所有的建筑物都盖上了，白白的积雪真美丽阿!

Everyone has a really good friend or Zhixin Ren, so I have a friend like her grown very ordinary, very pure, performance is also very good, she is adorable, but her character is very cheerful, I particularly like him.

He helped me a lot of busy, I have once physical education class, careless, wrestling has. Her to send me to school medical room, and she still takes care of me and asked if I have things to buy me water to drink, I am very grateful to her, so呀was my best friend.

翻译：每个人都有一个真心的好朋友或者是知心人，我就有一个这样的朋友，她长得很普通，很纯洁，成绩也很好，她是个活泼可爱的人，她的性格非常开朗，我特别喜欢他。

他帮我很多的忙，有一次，我上体育课时，一不小心，摔跤了。是她把我送进校医室的，她还很照顾我，问我有没有事，给我买水喝，我非常感谢她，所以呀是我最好的朋友。

Today is Sunday.Its sunny today.I go to the zoo with my mother.I can see many animals.There are tigers,lions,pandas,snakes and many more.Look!The pandas are over there.Theyre from China.Look at the baby panda!Its climbing trees. How cute it is!I love pandas.

Next,we go to see the lions.The lions are so strong.Their mouths are too big.The tigers ae next to them.They are from Asia.They are yellow.At last,we go to see the monkeys.Some are climbing moutains,some are eating bananas.THeyre so much fun!

I see many animals at the zoo and Im so happy today!

My name is XX,Im 12 years old.I come from XX primary school.I think Im a kind and confident girl.I like all the subject that I will learn this year,and I try my best to lear English well all the time.I like listening to pop songs and singing.Ive been learning dance for 4 years.I think these hobby will be good for my future.I got on well with my classmates and my teachers when I was in the primary school,Im glad to meet all the people in our class.Lets be friends!

“I have a dream that one day this nation will rise up and live out the true meaning of its creed:"We hold these truths to be self-evident:that all men are created equal."

Mr.Kings dream of all men created equal is mine too.When I hear his speech,I come to know thatI have the same dream that people should work together and live together like brothers.Nobody will take advantage of others,with less work but more income.But no,Mr Kings dream remains as a dream even after so many decades since he left us.Look,people who have more houses want to keep them all for themselves,although there are so many people who do not even have a room to stay in.On the other hand,many people ,who have nothing,do not want to work harder to earn something on their own.They just complain that all men are not created equal.

So,if we look close at human beings,we will realize that Mr.Kings dream will be a dream for a long,long time.Still,I admire him because at least he has a great dream,which is leading many people to treat others better.

导语：走进新疆, 呼吸一口新疆的空气, 走进新疆, 拥抱一下它的自然。下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

The northern xinjiang have altay mountain, in the south kunlun mountain, karakoram and altun. Tianshan, xinjiang tianshan mountains as symbol, central, southern traverses formed tarim basin and northern in junggar basin. Traditionally the tianshan region south of call nanjiang, tianshan area north of xinjiang, the name call east hami and turpan basin, xinjiang. Xinjiang abundant and unique tourism resources. Xinjiang tourism magical landscape unique natural, ice and HuoZhou opposite deserts and oasis fain.

Xinjiang tourism culture accumulation massiness, dense nationality amorous feedings, numerous places of interests, which have great potential for exploitation. Xinjiang tourism scenic spot famous natural scenery has tianchi, kanas lake, nalati grasslands, Boston, SaiLiMuHu, bain brooke grassland, etc. Xinjiang humanities rich tourist resources, in the ancient silk road in the south, north, three main line has hundreds of ancient city, ancient tombs, ancient sites caocao thousand-buddha grottoes, humanities landscape, jiaohe city, city, loulan gaochang sites, kilzil thousand-buddha cave, sweet princess tomb of famous international, record the history of junction between Chinese and western culture, showing the ancient xinjiang brilliant culture and picture scroll, attracting more and more tourists. Xinjiang uygur autonomous region is world-famous dance township, melon and fruit of the township, the gentiles.

Xinjiang is a huge-geographical country, is a vast land, mountains and magnificence, vast endless, monuments, ethnic folk throughout numerous, singular. Xinjiang tourism scenic spots have altitude 8600 meters of the world, and second peak 154 meters below sea level minimum depssions, both a Chinese inner-leakage li river, world-now the grassland, and overflow weird gobi dreamland and mysterious desert wonders. Well-pserved original plant and animal species, accentuated advantaged nature colors. Xinjiang land rich and beautiful, the vastness and magical, The people, hospitality, both gracious, enthusiasm, and simplicity, friendly, Here is the poets kingdom, artists of treasure, historians of heaven, travellers paradise!

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新疆北部有阿尔泰山，南部有昆仑山、喀喇昆仑山和阿尔金山。天山，天山作为新疆象征，横贯中部，形成南部的塔里木盆地和北部的准噶尔盆地。习惯上把天山以南地区叫南疆，天山以北地区叫北疆，把哈密、吐鲁番盆地叫东疆。新疆旅游资源丰富而独特。新疆旅游自然景观神奇独特，冰峰与火洲相望，沙漠与绿洲为邻。

新疆旅游文化积淀厚重，民族风情浓郁，名胜古迹众多，开发潜力巨大。新疆旅游景区著名的自然风景有天池、喀纳斯湖、那拉提草原、博斯腾湖、赛里木湖、巴音布鲁克草原等。新疆人文旅游资源丰富，在古丝绸之路的南、北、中三条干线上有着数以百计的古城池、古墓葬、千佛洞、古屯田遗址等人文景观，交河故城、高昌故城、楼兰遗址、克孜尔千佛洞、香妃墓等蜚声中外，记录了中西文化交汇的历史，展示出古老新疆辉煌的文化画卷，吸引着越来越多的中外游客。新疆维吾尔自治区是举世闻名的歌舞之乡、瓜果之乡、黄金玉石之邦。

新疆幅员辽阔，地大物博，山川壮丽，瀚海无垠，古迹遍地，民族众多，民俗奇异。新疆旅游景区有海拔8600米的世界第二高峰，又有低于海平面154米的中国最低洼地，既有一泄千里的河流、万顷碧波的草原，又有光怪陆离的戈壁幻境，神秘莫测的沙漠奇观。保存完好的原始动植物种群，更显出得天独厚的大自然的本色。新疆的土地富饶而美丽、广袤而神奇;这里的人民，热情好客、既豪爽、热情，又纯朴、友好;这里是诗人的王国、画家的宝库，史学家的天堂，旅游者的乐园!

Panda—the National Treasure

Panda is one of the scarcest animals.People in the world like it very much.There used to be many pandas in China long ago.As the balance of nature was destroyed and the weather was getting warmer and warmer,pandas became less.But at present,the number of pandas is increasing year by year.There are now so many pandas that some are being sent to other countries so that people there can enjoy them.

Nowadays,the biggest nature park for panda in China is in Sichuan.There is a research centre for nature and wild life there.Scientists hope that one day they will have enough pandas to be set free and let them live in the wild again.

Hello!Everyone,my name is xxx.Im 16 years old.Im from Wuxi,Jiangsu Province.My favorite subject is Chinese.And I like reading very much,especailly in reading history books.As a student,I study very hard.I made a lot friends in school,most of them are working hard,too.I hope all of us cuold catch the best time to reach our goal.Just try our best!

大家好!我叫xxx.我16岁.我来自江苏无锡.我最喜欢的科目是语文.而且我非常喜欢阅读,特别是跟历史有关的书籍.作为一个学生,我很努力.在学校,我有很多朋友,他们大多数也都很努力.我希望我们都能抓住最好的时光来达到我们的梦想.尽我们的全力吧!

导语：“当我登上了神舟五号飞船的第一次，我不禁感到兴奋，我决定，我要飞了。”下面是yuwenmi小编为备考的同学准备的优秀英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

"When I boarded the Shenzhou-5 spacecraft for the first time, I couldnt help feeling excited, I decide that I must fly it."------said by Yang Liwei.

Colonel Yang Liwei is an astronaut, and he is also a member of the Astronaut Team of the Peoples Liberation Army.

Born on June 21st,1965 in a teathers family in Suizhong Country of Liaoning Province,Yang Liwei had a happy childhood with his parents.Not only was he a good student in school,but he also had a gift for math.He won a lot of math competition prizes.After graduating from middle school,Yang Liwei continued his studies at the No.8 Aviation College of the Air Force of the Peoples Liberation Army.He studied very hard and graduated with a Bachelors degree.Later,hebecame a fighter pilot.

Several years later,because of his excellent manifestaion,Yang Liwei was among 14 persons chosen from 1,500 pilots for astronaut training.Yang Liwei did very well and passed astronaut tests in 1996 and 1997.Then he became one of three astronauts for Chinas first manned space flight.After a series of hard trainings and tests,Yang Liweibecame Chinas first astronaut on Oct15,2003 at last.

Being the first Chinese to travel in space,Yang Liwei is a hero of our nation in our heart and mind.He devotes himself to Chinese space program.Whenever we review the moments which Yang Liwei was traveling in Shenzhou-5 in space,holding our national flag in hand, we will be proud of our country and think highly of Yang Liwei.I believe that China will make greater progress in space flight in the future.

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“当我登上了神舟五号飞船的第一次，我不禁感到兴奋，我决定，我要飞了。”------杨利伟说。

杨利伟上校是一名宇航员，也是人民解放军航天员小组的成员。

出生于绥中的国家辽宁省在一个教师家庭1965年6月21日，杨利伟有一个幸福的童年和父母。他不仅是个好学生，但他也有一个礼物给数学。他赢得了很多数学竞赛的奖品。中学毕业后，杨利伟继续他的研究，在对人民解放军空军航空大学8。他学习很努力，和学士学位毕业后，成为一名战斗机飞行员。

几年后，由于他出色的表现，杨利伟被选为宇航员训练飞行员从1500 14人中，杨利伟做的非常好，在1996和1997通过测试的宇航员。然后他成为了对中国的首次载人航天飞行的三名宇航员。一系列的艰苦训练和测试后，杨利伟成为中国的第一个宇航员。

作为第一个中国旅游的空间，杨利伟是我在我们心目中的民族英雄。他致力于中国的太空计划。每当我们回顾的时刻，杨利伟乘坐神舟五号在太空，手里拿着我们的国旗，我们会为我们的国家感到自豪，对杨利伟的评价很高。我相信中国会在太空飞行的未来更大的进步。

how are you, i call xx.this year is 22 years old.graduate from xxxx college.the profession is a calculator multimedia.i am one is bright, optimism, there is the person of responsibility.a fondness for plays basketball, computer, listen to music, etc..thankful your company gives me this the opportunity of the personal interview!

中文版：你好，我叫xx。今年22岁。毕业于xxxx学院。专业是计算机多媒体。我是一个开朗，乐观，有责任心的人。爱好打篮球，电脑，听音乐，等。感谢贵公司给我这次面试的机会!

想要获得更加高分的英语写作，在语言表达需要增加一些"亮点"。下面是语文迷为大家提供的具体指导，大家一起来阅读吧。

一、了解高分作文的特点

要想作文获得高分，必须了解高分作文具有的特点，才有助于我们朝之而努力。高分作文一般具有以下特点：

1、书写工整，书面整洁，很少有涂改痕迹。

2、分段合理。全文分段一般不止一个自然段，让阅卷老师很容易就能找到作文所要求写的要点和重要句子。

3、要点齐全，不缺要点。

4、首尾呼应，自然成一体。

5、使用了大量的高级词汇和句型。阅卷老师一看就知道这个同学的功底非不一般，自然就给打高分了。

6、开头言简意赅，不啰嗦，不偏题，迅速引入主题。

7、段与段之间，自然过渡。有合适的连接词。

8、句与句之间，有恰当的连接词，使之自然成一体。

9、全文中同一个意思，基本没有重复使用某一个词、短语或者句型等，说明这个同学的词汇量不同寻常。老师自然就对该作文有好感了。

10、能够恰当使用谚语、格言等给文章添彩。

二、勤积累，巧准备

要想作文得高分，除了了解以上的特点外，还要在平时的学习中注意一下方面：

1、牢记课标词汇是基础

一篇作文多数是由积极词汇写出来的，这些词汇主要来源于课标。因此，牢记课标词汇是写好作文的基础。

2、掌握课标词汇和短语的用法

要想作文不扣分或者少扣分，有个要求是作文的语病少。怎么能够减少语病呢?这就要求我们在平时的学习过程中反复通过练习，掌握课标词汇和短语等的用法。例如，对于as soon as 、stop some body from doing something 、other 、another等的用法很多学生就经常出错。

3、高度重视同一个意思的多种表达方式

高分作文有个特点是：让老师发现你拥有丰富的词汇量，你的水平高人一筹。这由何而来?靠我们在平时学习过程中，逐步积累起来的。比如：今年的中考作文，谈的就是帮助他人的问题。同一个意思“帮助”，假如你就用一个动词“help”，岂不显得你词汇贫乏?假如你在作文中不断地变换方式，用help、give somebody a hand、 give a hand to somebody 、be in need of 等以表达“帮助”同一个意思，岂不更好呢?

像这样的例子很多，比如：大家都觉得很简单又很基础的“表示姓名的方式”就有：My name is Jim. I’m Jim. I’m called/named Jim. I’m a boy called /named /with the name of Jim. 等等。

表达年龄的方式有：She is 12. She is 12 years old. She is aged 12. She is a girl of 12(years old). She is a girl aged 12.等等。

很显然，使用高级一点的更好。

4、加强练习，积累经验

学习语言最好的方法是运用，作文也不例外。我们要想作文得高分，必须经常练习，才能提高水平。

5、充分利用作文范文

很多资料书上都有作文范文。诚然，他们有很多值得借鉴的地方。

我们怎么利用它们呢?首先，我们先不要看文章，自己先思考一下：假如你来写，你会怎么去写，会用到哪些词或者句子等。然后去比较，勾出其中的好词佳句，并且把它摘录在专门的作文册子上。供写作时选用。

另外，背一些范文也是很有必要的。

6、背诵一些谚语和警句

作文中如果出现恰当的谚语和警句，会有锦上添花的效果。

三、精心审题，沉着写初稿

很多同学看到作文后，下笔就写。这是不对的。一则很容易写偏题、写出病句，涂改后书面又不整洁，影响得分。

其实，会写作文的同学都知道，审题非常的重要，可以防止很多毛病，提高得分。那么我们审题要做些什么呢?

审题主要要做一下事情：

1、审人称、时态、体裁等

审题时，要求我们要弄清楚这篇文章主要使用的人称是第几人称，什么时态、什么体裁。这些问题解决后至少不会犯很严重的错误：全文皆错。例如，如果一篇文章，本来应该一般过去时，你的每句话却用了一般现在时态。你想想，那还能得高分吗?

2、明确必须表达的要点

高分作文有个特点是要点齐全。如果漏掉一个要点，则要扣分。因此我们必须认真细读其要求，把必须表达的要点勾出来。保证不漏掉任何一个要点。

3、罗列出可能会用到的短语、句型，确定好使用哪个?

4、确定好如何分段

就是要确定好，将哪些要点放在一个自然段里面，首段、尾段打算写哪些?

拓展阅读：写好作文"加分点"

合理使用动词使表达更生动

(例)In front of the building, there was a tall tree。

In front of the building stood a tall tree。巧妙使用动词短语增加表达的新颖性

(例)I like writing poems at middle school。。

I took great interest in writing poems at middle school。

改变动词增强文章的感染色彩

(例)When she heard he had died, she was very sad。

At the news of his death, she felt very sad。

Before, how much I dont understand, always cut class, make you angry, still fight with people, to do this, you hold a lot of heart for me, although you hit me, scold me, but I still love you. Because I know it is my own fault, you dozen I scold me, just to put my back into the right direction. Whenever someone asked me "what do you like your mom or dad?" I would not hesitate to tell him "I like all parents, but I like my father." Others asked "why do you like my dad? Your father hit you, punish you, you should not hate him, isnt it?" I can honestly tell him "I the fight with person, father will be scold me, sometimes will scold me, but at night he would quietly coated for me several times, I still see him touch my wounds tears, then I will tell myself, I must not let dad sad so sad."

Now I wont fight, dont skip class, I am much better than before. These are all  dads credit. No longer make my father angry, no longer get bothered by dad. Dads mood than they used to be happy, I also feel very happy.

After completing my military service, I have been looking for a challenging goal for me to achieve. And I found that the Intermediate of General English Proficiency Test fits my new achievement properly.I graduated from Taipei Commercial Junior College, majored in business administration. Instead of spending much time in playing, I devoted myself to my studies and paid attention to all meaningful things happened in daily life. By the way, I learned a lot from Mr. Wang, the professor of my business class. He is my good friend till now an often gives some appropriate suggestions toward my problem confusion.My father is, in the same way, a good consultant to me. As he said: I am in poor education, little for you; to clarify, what he have given is far beyond his words, I do think so. I was born in a country of Ping Tung Country, farming is our career of generations. There are four people in my family, Mother is housewife and my brother is a student of an Agriculture CollegeI am optimistic and active, and I am confident that I can pass the test. Thank you for your precious to read my autobiography.

Chinese New Year! Every place has different customs, and each has its own characteristics. I had the opportunity to back to my home in chongqing this year New Years day, let me introduce you to the Spring Festival customs of tujia.

New Years eve at noon, I saw my grandma cooked a lot of rice, just curious to ask: why want to cook so much rice, we also cant eat a meal? Grandmother replied: "want to cook some more, todays day cant cook fresh rice again. For tujia people seldom eat fish, so be about to cook more, it is also called more every year."

New Years eve afternoon, grandpa and father stick couplets, I also coincided with in the past. East, west to see see. When my father asked me: "do you know why do we need to stick couplets?" I answered: "know a little bit, festive bai." "Also right, couplet to express the good wish of people to pray for good fortune in the New Year. Now we stick couplets, cannot go toward outside throwing things, even cant throw rubbish, until annual lunar calendar to throw things. This means that circle the goods at home." Dad went on to say that.

On the evening of New Years eve, the home of the elder led the family to "worship the mountain ancestor worship". On the front of ancestors grave red candle and incense, placed offerings, to miss to ancestors. This also is respect for them.

These are the Spring Festival customs of tujia, I know you think its interesting.

过年啦!每个地方都有不同的习俗，并且都各具特色。今年我有幸回趟老家重庆过年，就让我给大家介绍一下土家族的春节习俗吧。

除夕的中午，我见奶奶煮了好多饭，就好奇的上前去询问：为什么要煮这么多饭，我们一顿也吃不了呀?奶奶回答道：“今天要多煮一些，大年初一可不能再煮新鲜饭。因为土家族人很少吃鱼，所以就要多煮饭，这也叫‘年年有余’吧。”

除夕的下午，爷爷和爸爸一起贴对联，我也过去凑热闹。东看看，西瞧瞧。这时爸爸问我：“你知道我们为什么要贴对联吗?”我回答：“知道一点点，喜庆呗。”“也对吧，对联是为了表达人们祈求新年福运的美好心愿。现在我们贴好了对联，就不能往外扔东西了，连垃圾也不能扔，一直要到大年初二才可以扔东西。这样就表示把财圈在家里了。”爸爸接着说。

除夕的傍晚，由家里的最长者带领全家去“拜山祭祖”。在先辈的坟前点上红烛和香，摆上祭品，以表对先辈的怀念。这也是对他们的尊敬。

这些就是我了解的土家人的春节习俗，你觉得有趣吧。