2017年安徽省英语中考作文实用20篇

Low carbon environmental protection starts from me In order to further the implementation of green education plan, improving our school teachers and students practice ability of green environmental protection, promote green development in our school, the school and group in the school moral education carried out to learn from the German schoolchildren diary of green environmental protection initiatives, and organize the children learn German elementary students environmental protection consciousness, strengthen the understanding of the green environmental protection.

Each grade has conducted a diversity of activities: one, two, three grade children completed a small environmental protection knowledge test, for all our children to understand the importance of low carbon, environmental protection; Four, grade six carried out to learn from the German schoolchildren diary of green environmental protection of the essay competition; Fifth grade was carried out to learn from the German schoolchildren diary of green environmental protection in order to "green, environmental protection" as the theme of creative copies out the newspaper.

This activity to further strengthen the consciousness formation of the students in our school environmental education, innovative the way students habits to develop education. In each child long growth formed the scenery along the road!

低碳环保从我做起 为了深入实施绿色教育计划，提升我校师生的绿色环保实践能力，促进我校绿色发展，学校德育办和大队部在全校开展了向《德国小学生的绿色环保日记》学习的倡议，并组织孩子们认真学习德国小学生的环保意识，增强做好绿色环保的认识。

各年级开展了丰富多彩的活动：其中一、二、三年级的孩子们完成了环保小知识的测验，让我们所有的孩子都了解了低碳、环保的重要性;四、六年级开展了向《德国小学生的绿色环保日记》学习的征文比赛;五年级开展了向《德国小学生的绿色环保日记》学习的以“绿色，环保”为主题的创意手抄报活动。

本次活动进一步加强了我校学生环保意识的养成教育，创新了学生行为习惯养成教育的方法。在每一个孩子漫漫成长的道路上形成了一道风景!

为配合我市开展“创建文明城市(build a civilized city)”活动，学校举办以“How to Behave Well”为主题的英语征文比赛。现在请你根据所给提示内容，用英语写一篇参赛短文。

提示：

1. 衣着整洁;

2. 保持环境卫生;

3. 待人有礼，乐于助人;

4. 遵守交通规则;

5. ……

要求：

1. 文章必须包括所给提示中1—4 项内容，可展开思路，适当发挥;

2. 文中不能出现考生的真实姓名、校名和其他真实信息;

3. 词数：80词左右。

范文

How to Behave Well?

In order to build a civilized city, we students should try our best to behave well in the activities.

Its a good habit to keep our clothes clean and tidy. Our city should be kept clean every day. Dont throw litter or spit about. Its good manners to say "Thank you" and "Please" and so on. We should never say dirty words. Be friendly to others and always ready to help the people in need. For example, when we are on a bus, we should give our seats to the old and the women with babies. We should also obey traffic rules. When the traffic lights are red, we should stop. And wed better not talk or laugh loudly in public.

If everyone behaves well, our city will be more beautiful and more attractive.

[中考英语作文热门欣赏

中考英语作文1：my friend

Han Mei is my best friend. We know each other since we were born. Because we are twins. She is my elder sisiter. Like most twin sisters, we look almost the same. The most easy way to to distinguish us is that she has a scar on her arm. It is my fault. When we are six years old, we played beside the stair, and then I pushed her down the stair accidently. She got hurt but not blame me at all. That is the history of her scar. Since then our parents always recognize us with that mark. Han Mei is better than me in study. So, sometimes I was criticized by our mother for failing the exam, she will pretend me to receive the criticism, without making my mother see the mark. I’ m so thankful for this. So sometimes I will pretend her to take part in the piano class, as she is not interested in it. It is so interesting to play such game.

中考英语作文2：my friend

My good friend is Mei. She’s a girl. She is my classmate.

Mei is tall and thin. She has two big eyes and long hair. She likes listening to music and reading books. Sometimes we listen to music together. She likes summer. Because she can swim in the summer holiday. She likes pink and white. She is in Class Four, Grade Six with me. She usually goes to school by motor cycle. Sometimes she goes to school on foot. We often go shopping together on the weekend.

We will be good friends forever.

中考英语作文3：my friend

My best friend is --- He is 15 years old. We are both in the same class. He works very hard. He is never late for school and he does well in all his lessons. He is always ready to help others. My math is very poor, so he often helps me with my math after class. His parents are both teachers. They are very busy, so he often helps do the housework at home. He is a little shorter than me but he is very strong. He likes playing football very much at school. We often play football together and he plays it pretty well . He gets on well with us . Everyone in our class likes him .

1 人活着 总是要得罪一些人的 就要看那些人是否值得得罪

When alive ,we may probably offend some people.However, we must think about whether they are deserved offended。

2 命里有时终需有 命里无时莫强求

You will have it if it belongs to you,whereas you dont kveth for it if it doesnt appear in your life。

3 没有谁对不起谁，只有谁不懂得珍惜谁。

No one indebted for others,while many people dont know how to cherish others。

4 永远不是一种距离，而是一种决定。

Eternity is not a distance but a decision。

5 在回忆里继续梦幻不如在地狱里等待天堂

Dreaming in the memory is not as good as waiting for the paradise in the hell。

6 哪里有真爱存在，哪里就有奇迹

Where there is great love, there are always miracles。

7 爱情就像一只蝴蝶，它喜欢飞到哪里，就把欢乐带到哪里。

Love is like a butterfly. It goes where it pleases and it pleases where it goes。

8 假如每次想起你我都会得到一朵鲜花，那么我将永远在花丛中徜徉。

If I had a single flower for every time I think about you, I could walk forever in my garden。

9 有了你，我迷失了自我;失去你，我多么希望自己再度迷失。

Within you I lose myself, without you I find myself wanting to be lost again。

10 每一个沐浴在爱河中的人都是诗人

At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet。

11 看看我的眼睛，你会发现你对我而言意味着什么。

Look into my eyes you will see what you mean to me。

12 距离使两颗心靠得更近。

Distance makes the hearts grow fonder。

13 如果没有相等的爱，那就让我爱多一些吧。

If equal affection cannot be, let the more loving be me。

14 爱是长在我们心里的藤蔓。

Love is a vine that grows into our hearts。

15 因为你，我懂得了爱。

If I know what love is, it is because of you。

16 爱情是生活最好的提神剂。

Love is the greatest refreshment in life。

17 有了你，黑暗不再是黑暗。

The darkness is no darkness with thee。

18 如果没有人爱我们，我们也就不会再爱自己了。

We cease loving ourselves if no one loves us。

18 治疗爱的创伤唯有加倍地去爱。

There is no remedy for love but to love more。

20 如果爱不疯狂就不是爱了。

When love is not madness, it is not love。

21 有爱的心永远年轻。

A heart that loves is always young。

22 爱情就像月亮，不增则减。

Love is like the moon, when it does not increase, it decreases。

23 灵魂不能没有爱而存在。

The soul cannot live without love。

24 生命虽短，爱却绵长。

Brief is life, but love is long。

25 爱比大衣更能驱走寒冷。

Love keeps the cold out better than a cloak。

26 没有了爱，地球便成了坟墓。

Take away love, and our earth is a tomb。

27 我的爱与你同在。

My heart is with you。

28 尽管还不曾离开，我已对你朝思暮想!

I miss you so much already and I havent even left yet!

29 我会想你，在漫漫长路的每一步。

Ill think of you every step of the way。

30 无论你身在何处，无论你为何忙碌，我都会在此守候

Wherever you go, whatever you do, I will be right here waiting for you。

沉迷网络游戏是很多家长十分关注的事情，因此这也就成了中考十分热门的写作话题。今天YJBYS继续为大家更新关于网络游戏的范文。

题目：李小虎沉迷于电脑游戏中，影响了学习。作为他的好朋友，你打算怎么帮他呢?

请用下面所给的提示词写一篇短文。

提示词： give up concentrate on be (become)interested in

Li Xiaohu spent too much time playing computer games andhe fell behind others. As a good/close friend of his, I must do something tohelp him.

First, I think it’s veryimportant for him to learn lessons well. He should spend most of his time onhis study instead of computer games. Secondly, I must tell him that playingcomputer games too much is bad for his health, especially for his eyes. So hemust give it up. I can play more sports with him after school. Maybe he willbecome more interested in sports than computer games. And then Ill ask him toconcentrate more on his study. Of course, I will try my best to help him withall his subjects. I think I can do it in many fun ways and let him find muchfun in studying. At the same time, Ill ask both his parents and our teachersto help him, too. If I try these, Im sure he will make great progress soon.

为大家认真的准备的没一篇文章都是为了大家的每一分的努力。希望大家不懂的问题直接咨询我们武汉小马的专家老师。

中考英语作文评分标准一般分为三类：一等作文、二等作文和三等作文。为了让不同层次的学生在作文得分率上都能有所提高，现对各类作文进行分析，找出相应的得分秘诀。下面说说中考英语一等作文的写作方法。

一、中考英语一等作文的评分标准

内容完整，具体，丰富，包含所有要点，能够围绕内容适当发挥，语句流畅，应用了较丰富的语言结构和词汇，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连续，层次分明，表达清楚，无语法错误，书写规范，标点正确，计满分。

二、中考英语一等作文的写作要求

(一)确保作文的完整性，关注评卷第一印象

考试的时候，要尽量留出充足的时间写作文。这样，我们才能有足够的时间去构思，打草稿。由于评卷是人工进行的，所以作文留给人的第一印象是很重要的，从以往经验看，第一印象至少占1分，那些卷面整洁，文字自然流畅，书写工整，标点符号正确的非常“吃香”，所以，大家平时就应该注意作文的“形象”，“仪表”一定要保证自己看卷面时觉得舒服，那么中考得高分就不是一句空话了。

不论做哪种题目，审题是最关键的，写好中考作文更是这样!要做到内容完整，我们首先要认真看好题目的要求，分析题目到底要我们写什么。比如要求我们用第三人称来写作，如果审题没有审好，用了第一人称，那么，作文一定得不到满分，说不定还是最差的。所以，要重视审题，按题目的具体要求进行构思。中考书面表达基本上都是提示性作文(包括看图作文)，因此要保证运用所有的提示要点，进行合理的发挥，为写下满分作文打好基础。

(二)打好草稿质量，全面留意扣主题

写好中考英语一等作文除了做到上面讲的内容之外，还要做到以下几点：

1. 要做到内容具体。中考提示性作文都有具体的内容和要求，写作时只要按规定将作文写出来，得分就不难，但是要想得满分，必须做到围绕内容适当发挥，并且要突出文章的主题，体现实际的中心思想。

2. 要做到语句流畅。这就要求有扎实的英语基本功。在平时的学习过程中，注意一些常用句式的表达方法。要尽量使用自己最熟悉的词语和句型，要尽量避免汉语式的表达方式。要注意句子之间的连贯性，不仅仅从语法上，更主要的是从句意上，把握句子的连贯性。

3. 要做到层次分明。写文章不都是一个段落，一个模式，要根据文章的具体需要，来确定文章究竟用几个段落，作文要讲究层次分明，突出主题。

4. 要按规定的词数书写。中考提示作文都有具体的词数要求，写作时要注意数一数所用的单词数量，词数过多或过少都会丢分。

5. 最后要注意检查。写完作文不是没事可做，最后一步就是细心检查，这很关键。检查时要从题目要求开始，到具体内容无误结束。保证词语，句型的运用正确，标点运用得当等等，都是重点检查的项目，直到在一定的时间之内完成好作文，不留遗憾为止。

My hometown is a country known as "jujube township" town -- linze county. All say "landscape jiatianxia guilin, my home is not in guilin the wonderland is beautiful, but also has a small city of beauty. Town, the beauty of the static Shi green beauty, charming beauty, make each town residents of the mind is also beautiful.

To say small core of beauty, that they belong to the h and rokuen. There are more than thousand trees, trees, is a good place for summer!

Spring, the city is green, the leaves cui lust drops, h and rokuen, grass swinging with the breeze, the green grass, green leaves, all kinds of bright flowers together. Forsythia flower park blows the golden horn, square, various kite and baiyun mountain, everything is so quiet Shi.

People wear sandals in summer, h and rokuen step in waterways, music fountain, the children got into drill and adults were standing to the side, a smile the night in the square thick fragrance, barbecue flavor, mutton changing, town in summer is really hot!

Golden autumn, a town full of jujube aroma, h and rokuen jujube branches full of big, red jujube, it could make tea and can be used as a traditional Chinese medicine, passing pedestrians can resist the urge to take one. People in the street, selling red jujube mine, be happy.

Winter, although winter is so cold, but people is such a warm heart, a nice snow world, the groups of childrens play, added a few for city landscape for brilliance.

Not to have such a song? "Small story, full of joy and joy, if you come to town, much harvest", the beauty of the static Shi, charming beauty, unique beauty.

I love you -- -- hometown linze!

我的家乡是一个被祖国誉为“枣乡”的小城—临泽。都说“桂林山水甲天下”，我的家乡虽没有桂林那仙境般的美，但也别有一番小城美景。小城那静谥的美，绿色的美，迷人的美，使每个小城的居民心灵也美。

要说小城美的核心，那便属颐和绿苑了。那儿有千多棵树，绿树成荫，是避暑的好地方呢!

春天，小城是翠绿色的，树叶翠色欲滴，颐和绿苑里，小草随微风摆动，青的草，绿的叶，各色鲜艳的花聚拢而来。街心公园连翘花吹起金黄的小喇叭，广场里，千姿百态的风筝与白云戏耍，一切都是那么静谥。

盛夏，颐和绿苑里人们穿着凉鞋踏在水道里，音乐喷泉中，孩子们钻进钻出，站在一旁的大人个个露出笑容，广场上的夜市香味浓浓，烧烤味、羊肉串味，小城的夏天真是火辣辣啊!

金秋，小城充满了枣香味，颐和绿苑的枣树枝上挂满了又大又红的红枣，它可以泡茶，可以作中药，过路的行人都忍不住要尝一个。大街上，卖红枣的人们各各喜笑颜开。

隆冬，虽然冬天是那么的冷，可人们心中是那么暖和，雪的世界真好看，那一群群孩子的嬉戏，为小城景色增添了几争光彩。

不是有这样一首歌吗?“小城故事多，充满喜和乐，若是你到小城来，收获特别多”，静谥的美，迷人的美，独特的美。

我爱你——家乡临泽!

根据中文设置的情景和英文提示词语，写出语法正确，意思连贯的句子。所给的英文提示词语必须都用上。

上星期日，我们乘车去西山植树。一些学生种树，其他学生……

1. it, fine, last sunday

2. we, go, west hill, by bus

3. some, plant trees, other, carry water

4. because, we, work hard, tired, happy

5. all, know, stop… form, blow, and, city, make, beautiful

___________________________________

it was fine last sunday. we went to west hill by bus. some students planted trees, others carried water. because we worked hard, we were tired, but we felt happy. we all know trees can stop the wind from blowing the sand towards the city, and they can make the city beautiful.

[中考英语作文训练:去西山植树去(Goes to Xishan to plant trees)

This is my family.They are my mother,my father and me.My father is a teacher.He works in a school.He is of medium height and of medium build.He has shortstraight black hair.He looks young.Now he is reading books.

这是我的家庭。他们是我的母亲，我的父亲和我。我的爸爸是一位老师。他在一所学校工作。他中等身高，中等身材。他很高留着短而直的黑头发。他看起来很年轻。现在他正在看书。

My mother is a reporter.She works in a TV station.She is of medium height and a little thin.She has long curly black hair.She is very beautiful.Now she is watching TV.I am a student.I am tall and thin.I have long straight black hair.I am doing my homework,now.

我的母亲是一位记者。她在电视台工作。她中等身材，有点瘦。她有一头长长的黑发。她很漂亮。她现在正在看电视。我是一个学生。我又高又瘦。我有长而直的黑头发。我做我的家庭作业现在。

This is my family.

这是我的家人。

Since I was a little child, I had a dream that I wanted to be a doctor. When I was little, I watched many TV series and movies about doctors. I thought they were so great. Therefore, I made up my mind to be a doctor. In my opinion, doctor is the people who can help patience get out of sickness and pain.I want to be the person who can help others. However, being a doctor needs so much professional knowledge and there is a long way to go. So I have to try my best on my study and go to a good college.

从我还是个小孩开始，我就梦想着成为一名医生。当我还小的时候，我看很多关于医生的电视剧和电影。我认为医生很伟大。因此，我下定决心要成为一名医生。在我看来，医生是可以帮助病人走出疾病和痛苦的人。我想成为可以帮助他人的人。但是，成为医生需要很多的专业知识，还有很长一段路要走。所以我必须努力学习，考上一个好大学。

i like my school life very much,it is very interesting.i usually reach school at half past seven.then we do morning exercises at eight oclock.we have eight lessons every day.the lesson begin at a quarter past eight.my favourite subject is english.i can get a lot of english knowledge from our teacher.our teacher are very good-natured.they are always kind to us.i also like our outdoor activities.when we have outdoor activities,everyone in the playground is active and lively.how happy we are in our beautiful school!i love the life in my school!

英语写作是学生学习的一个盲点，缺乏对写作的专门训练和反思，老师的工作量大，造成作文讲评大多数时候只谈现象，因此学生学得也不具体、不深入，忽略写作技能的提高，甚至误认为只要句子结构正确，无单词拼写错误就应该得满分。同学们应该走出对英语写作认识上的误区。那么怎样才能写出一篇优秀作文，而在中考中获取高分呢？

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全；人称时态，逻辑清楚；

关键词汇，动词第一；组词成句，结构完整；

组句成文，连词增色；此路不通，绕道迂回；

字迹工整，留好印象；从句适量，高分有望。

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料；同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

这次英语期中考试我没有考好，没有达到期中考试前制定的目标。我知道父母和老师对于我有着很大的期望，可是我还是没有考好。对于这点我感到十分抱歉。但是既然犯了错误就要改正，所以，通过考试我也想了很多。我知道期中考是一面清澈的镜子，在它面前，我羞愧地低下了头。仔细看看试卷发现竟然错了很多不该错的地方。我的基础知识部分扣了很多分，主要是单词掌握不好。阅读题扣了8分，说明我的阅读量不够，我的阅读速度慢影响了做后面的题，思考的时间少了。老师狠狠地批评了我。我的这次英语作文只得了8分，这与我的词汇量不够，阅读积累不够有很大的关系，分析原因，主要是课前没有做好预习，课堂上没有积极的举手发言，课后不认真复习，把写作业当成一种完成任务。

于是，在期中考的时候，我得到了我应有的“报应”。 经过我的仔细反思，有这样的结果是我 在做作业时，囫囵吞枣，没有仔细审题，认真做题，这让我失去了一次特别好的自我提高的机会。我应该把写作业当成一个新的开始，而不是上一段学习的结束，每一次的作业都要当做一次小的考试。我要增加一些仿写和阅读的练习。在今后的学习中，我在课堂上要积极回答问题做好笔记，多记一些老师拓展的知识点，每天回家要复习一遍老师讲的内容，认真完成一篇阅读与完形填空，我有上进心想去学更多的英语知识，自己努力，超越自己，比别的同学更好。

一、教育类

● And gladly would learn , and gladly teach .( Chaucer , British pot

勤于学习的人才能乐意施教。(英国诗人, 乔叟)

●Better be unborn than untaught , for ignorance is the root of misfortune .(Plato , Ancient Greek philosopher)

与其不受教育,不如不生,因为无知是不幸的根源.(古希腊哲学家 柏拉图)

●Genius without education is like silver in the mine. (Benjamin Franklin , American president )

未受教育的天才，犹如矿中之银。 (美国总统 富兰克. B.)

●The roots of education are bitter , but the fruit is sweet .(Aristotle , Ancient Greek philosopher )

教育的根是苦的，但其果实是甜的。( 古希腊哲学家 亚里士多德)

二、知识类

●Activity is the only road to knowledge .(George Bernard Shaw , British

dramatist)

行动是通往知识的唯一道路。 (英国剧作家 肖伯纳. G.)

●A free man obtains knowledge from many sources besides books .(Thomas Jefferson ,

American president)

一个自由的人除了从书本上获取知识外，还可以从许多别的来源获得知识。(美国总统

杰斐逊 . T.)

●A great part to the information I have was acquired by looking up something and finding something else on the way .(Adams Franklin , American humorist )

我的大部分知识都是这样获得的：在寻找某个资料时意外的发现了另上的资料。(美国幽默作家

富兰克林. A.)

●If a man empties his purse into his head , no man can take it away from him , an investment in knowledge always pays the best interest .(Benjamin Franklin ,

American president )

倾已所有追求知识，没有人能夺走它;向知识投资，收益最佳。(美国总统

富兰克林. B.)

●Imagination is more important than knowledge .(Albert Einstein , American scientist )

想象力比知识更为重要。 (美国科学家 爱因斯坦. A. )

●Knowledge is power . (Francis Bacon , British philosopher )

知识就是力量。 (英国哲学家 培根. F.)

●The empty vessels make the greatest sound . (William Shakespeare , British dramatist )

满瓶不响，半瓶咣当。(英国剧作家 莎士比亚. W.)

按照二十四节气，谷雨是春季的最后一个节气，处在暮春时节的谷雨，意味着春将尽，夏将至，冷空气大举南侵的情况比较少了，但影响北方的冷空气活动并不消停。4月底到5月初，气温毕竟要比3月份高得多，土壤干燥、疏松;空气层不稳定，上层风动量下传，锋面气旋活跃，共同引发的大风、沙尘天气比较常见。

According to the twenty-four solar term, rain is the last solar term of spring, in the late spring of the spring rain, means that will do, summer is approaching, the cold air to the southward invasion situation is relatively small, but the effect of cold air activities in the north is not corpuscles. At the end of 4 to early 5, after all, to the temperature was much higher than that of March, the soil is dry, loose; the air layer is not stable, the upper air quantity, frontal cyclone activity, trigger winds, dust weather is more common.

雨水节气，不见雪花飞舞，静听春雨无声，意味着黄河中下游地区开始下雨。而谷雨节气的名称，来自古人的“雨生百谷”之说，表示这个时期的降水对农作物的生长极为重要。不过这谷雨的谷字不仅指谷子这一种庄稼，而是农作物的总称。谚语说“谷雨无雨，交回田主”，是从相反的角度来说明雨水的重要。

The solar term, does not see the snowflakes dancing, listening to the rain sound, means that the middle and lower reaches of the Yellow River began to rain. While the name Guyu solar term, from the ancient "the valley", said the growth in this period of precipitation on crops is very important. But the Guyu Valley not only refers to the millet this kind of crops, but the crop. The saying goes: "rain no rain, returned to the owner", is to illustrate the rainwater from the opposite angle of.

想要写好英语作文都有哪些技巧呢?下面是语文迷网为大家提供的英语写作技巧，欢迎阅读参考。

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、作文案例

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[学生解答A]

My hobby is read books①.When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

②also的位置应放在can之后。

[点评]：档次9-11分。

①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

③有少量错误。

[学生解答B]

My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improvemy writing.I want to be a writer in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。

②真情流露，理由充分。

③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

[点评]：档次13-14分。

①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting theenvironment.They threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to preventstarting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirtywater into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

Pollution around us

In recent years our life is becoming better and better. But our environment is becoming worse and worse. Its very bad for our life. Now many people have air-conditioners and cars, they produce (give off ) waste gas. More and more trees are being cut down. There are so much sand on the earth (leaving only sand ) . We often see factories pour waste into rivers or lakes. Water in the river is quite dirty. We havent enough clean water to drink in cities. Now we are in danger. Its very necessary and important to protect the environment well. I think if everyone tries his best to protect the environment, the world will become much more beautiful , and our life will be better and better .

我们周围的污染

近年来我们的生活越来越好。但是，我们的环境越来越糟。它对我们的生活很糟糕。现在很多人都有空调和汽车，他们生产的（出）废气。越来越多的树被砍伐。有那么多的沙子在地球（只留下沙）。我们经常看到工厂把废水倒入河流或湖泊。河里的水很脏。我们没有足够的干净的水的城市。现在我们有危险。这是非常必要和重要的保护好环境。我想，如果每个人都尽自己最大的努力去保护环境，世界将变得更加美丽，我们的生活会越来越好。

Life, environmental pollution continuously affects our lives. Such as: polluted air, rivers and garbage pollution, etc., has seriously damaged our living environment.

Rivers are polluted, the creature will not be able to survive in the water, also cant use it to irrigate crops, the human will not eat fresh food. If same, groundwater contamination, people will drink less than clean water, humans will get sick, poisoning, and it may even die. So, no one should be put on the possible environmental pollution of waste into the river.

Air is a guarantee to the survival of all living creatures. If the air is polluted, all creatures will live in the "gas", disease and all kinds of disasters will be the humanitys greatest enemy. Last, mankind will perish. Visible, clean air is how important!

Garbage can be seen everywhere in our daily life, the visible human bad habits - littering behavior is really too serious. Random pile up garbage can cause great harm to the environment, such as: air pollution in a breeding ground for germs, sexually transmitted diseases, and river and so on.

The pollution was terrible! To prevent the pollution, we must care for the environment, protect the earth, to stop all the pollution of the environment.

生活中，环境污染不断地影响着我们的生活。比如：被污染的空气、河流和垃圾污染等等，已经严重地破坏了我们的生活环境。

河流被污染了，水中的生物将无法生存，也不能用它浇灌庄稼，人类将吃不到新鲜的食物。同样，地下水如果被污染，人们将喝不到洁净的水，人类将会生病、中毒，甚至可能会死亡。所以，任何人都不应该往河里投放有可能污染环境的废弃物。

空气是所有生物赖以生存的保证。如果空气被污染了，所有生物将会生活在“毒气室”一样的环境里，疾病和各种灾难将会是人类最大的敌人。日久天长，人类就会灭亡。可见，洁净的空气是多么重要啊!

垃圾在生活中随处可见，可见人类的坏习惯——乱丢垃圾的行为实在太严重了。随意堆放的垃圾会对环境造成很大的危害，例如：滋生病菌、传播疾病、污染空气以及河流等等。

这些污染真是可怕呀!要预防这些污染，我们一定要爱护环境，保护地球，制止一切污染环境的行为。

如果让你创建一个节日，你会创建怎样一个节日，为什么要创建它，时间是什么时候，在那天要做些什么，在什么地方，哪些人......

If I am able to create a holiday, it would be the "Food and Fun Day". Think about it, with all the school homework and exams; it would be really nice to take a break from all the studies and just relax. Also I think everyone would enjoy the great food and lots of fun. Its just like a big party where everyone is invited. I would like the "Food and Fun Day" be set during the middle of the school year, where everyone can relax from their studies for a day. On that day, everyone will bring food and drinks to school and share what they brought with friends, students, and teachers. There will also be games and winners gets great prizes. Think about it, how great it would be to have a holiday like that!

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Winter has gone，and spring is coming on .

Watching the ice melting，I know the whole earth is being rejuvenated from the winter. A variety of flowers come out to show their beauty and bring us fragrance .It is a feast for our eyes and souls. The yellow grass suddenly turn green.The young leaves grow on the branches.The swallows fly back home with the greeting of spring .

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