英语中考作文时态写错了扣多少分（汇总20篇）

英语写作是中考学生的一个盲点，缺乏对英语写作的专门训练和反思，老师的工作量大，造成作文讲评大多数时候只谈现象，因此学生学得也不具体、不深入，忽略写作技能的提高，甚至误认为只要句子结构正确，无单词拼写错误就应该得满分。同学们应该走出对英语写作认识上的误区。那么怎样才能写出一篇优秀作文，而在中考中获取高分呢?下面是YJBYS网作文频道为大家整理的英语写作指导。

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、习作点评

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that，so，little by little，when，so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to，became interested in，come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water，the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago，some of them paid no attention to protecting the environment.They threw their rubbish，such as plastic bags，fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees，picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily，great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins，and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to prevent starting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirty water into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this，the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

As we know, our country suffered heavy ice early 2011. Everything was covered with freezing rain. Guizhou, Hunan and Sichuan suffered the most. It caused the buses, trains and planes stop service. The disaster destroyed power facilities, cutting power supplies in many areas. As a result, huge economic loss was caused. Many people could not work and live normally. There was no food, water or light in some places. Our government called on people to fight against heavy snow. As a student, I think we should learn from those heroes. We must study hard at school. We should learn all kinds of knowledge to make our motherland stronger, better and richer.

导语：每个人都有自己的梦想，你的梦想是什么呢?下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

When we talk about dreams, we are so excited, we have many dreams, such as being a famous person, traveling around the world and so on. Dreams are what we pursue for a lifetime, with many dreams, we have motivation to fight for our life. The opposite side of dream is reality, we have to face reality everyday, reality is what we perceive in our life. Reality always frustrates us to be successful. We need to balance them. First, we need to face reality, though it is not ideal, we live in a world, we have to know exactly who we are. Second, to make our dreams come true, we need to adjust our dreams according to the reality.

【参考译文】

当我们谈到梦想的时候，会感到很兴奋，我们有很多理想，比如成为一个出名的人，环游世界等等。梦想是我们一生所追求的，拥有梦想，我们才有动力为生活奋斗。与梦想相反的另一面就是现实，我们不得不每天面对现实，现实是我们生活中所觉察到的。现实总是让我们在成功的路上受挫。我们需要平衡他们。第一，我们需要面对现实，虽然不理想，但是我们是生活在世界上，需要清楚地知道自己是谁。第二，为了实现我们的梦想，我们需要根据现实调整梦想。

On the weekend, I don’t have class, I feel so happy. I always wake up in the morning at about eight o’clock, my mother ask me to have breakfast. After breakfast, I go to shopping with my mother, I buy a lot of the things I like, then I go to play with my friends, we play the game hind and seek. I am so happy in the weekend.

在星期天，我没有课，我觉得很开心。我总是在早上大概八点钟起床，我的妈妈叫我吃早餐。吃完早餐，我和妈妈去购物，我买了很多我喜欢的东西，然后我和朋友去玩，我们玩抓迷藏。周末我玩得很开心。

中考英语试卷写作的分数各个省市有所不同，一般在15-20分之间。下面从阅卷老师的角度分析一下中考英语作文的得分点和扣分点。

中考英语作文对考生的要求有四点：1、内容要完整。 2、语句流畅。3、没有语法错误。4、书写规范。能达到上述要求的作文，都会得到相应的高分。

一：先看一下扣分点：

1.内容方面：要点缺失，可酌情扣分。比如中考作文“I want to do something for my school”，若没有写一件具体的事情，是要扣3分以上的;若写的事情太过于虚幻，没有实际内容，也会扣1-2分。

2.字数：少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。

中考英语作文要求60字以上，标点符号不算，少了就要扣分。但是60字的作文能不能得高分?从我们拿到的实例作文来看，16分以上的作文，没有少于75字的，甚至少于80字的也少之又少。当然，也极少有超过100字的，因为中考试卷的短线格一共80个，在格子下面大约还有2行的空间，可以加20字左右，再多阅卷人就很难看清了，也会影响卷面的美观。所以，同学们如果想让作文得到高分，最好是让字数在75-100字之间。

3. 语法和拼写错误：每个扣0.5，重复错误不计;

4. 标点错误：每4个扣0.5.

二：加分点

除了这些扣分点，还有一些得分点：比如说作文的组织结构分，就是根据学生使用复杂句型、单词和谚语、俗语的情况来加分。

只要文章中有1个亮点，基本就可以争取到1分(3分的文采分是很难全部拿到的)。而这1分的亮点，是可以提前准备的。例如，有一些“万金油”式的复杂句型，例如强调句型、only相关的倒装句等，只要同学们多操练几次，几乎是一定能用到作文当中，从而为自己争取到这1分。

其次就是卷面分

很多家长和同学，尤其是部分书法并不是十分整洁的同学，都会关心是否真的有“卷面分”的存在。虽然在阅卷标准里面并没有卷面分这一项，但是这个分数却真切地反映在了同学们的分数里面。

据阅卷老师的经验，在阅卷的时候并不是按这3个部分逐项打分的，而是在第一遍读完全文之后，心里已经形成了一个“印象分”，然后再细读第二、三遍，把印象分分配到各个打分部分。因此，这个“印象分”就非常重要，而同学们的书法，也正是在这个环节，影响到了自己的分数。所以初三的考生，如果书法不好，一定要注意。所谓的书法并不需要写的很漂亮，符合3个简单的标准即可：没有斜体、没有连笔、涂改较少。

①在此结构中，there是引导词，在句中不能充当任何成分，也不必翻译出来。句中的主语是某人或某物，谓语动词be要与主语的数保持一致。例如：There is a man at the door. 门口有一个人。

当主语是由两个或者两者以上的名词充当时，谓语动词be要跟它邻近的那个名词的数一致（就近一致）。例如：There are two dogs and a cat under the table.桌下有两只狗和一只猫。 比较： There is a cat and two dogs under the table.

②There be句型中的be不能用have来代替，但可以用lie(位于，躺)，stand(矗立)，exist(生存)，live(生活)等词来替换。例如：There stand a lot of tall buildings on both sides of the street. 街道两旁矗立着许多高楼。

There lies lake in front of our school. 我们学校前面有一个湖。

Once there lived a king here. 这儿曾经有一个国王。

There is going to be a sports meeting next week. 下周准备开一个运动会。

与there be 类似的结构： there seem(s)/happen(s) to be…

There seems to be one mistake in spelling. 似乎有一处拼写错误。

There happened to be a ruler here. 这儿碰巧有把尺子。

There seemed to be a lot of people there. 那儿似乎有很多人。

[中考英语作文热点句型

假设你是李华，David是你的美国网友。他对目前中国出现的雾霆天气很关注，来信向你询问此事。请你给他写封回信。主要内容如下：1.感谢他的关注。 2.简介雾霾 (smog) 天气给人们的身体、生活带来的危害。3.谈谈你的感想。注意：可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯流畅;开头与结尾已写好，不计人总词数; 词数：120左右Dear David，

Im glad to receive your letter. _______________________________________

Yours，

Li Hua

【参考范文】：

Dear David,

Im glad to receive your letter. I have learned from your letter that you are concerned about the smog which frequently appears in some areas of China. Thank you for your concern. Im also very worried about such terrible weather because it has brought much inconvenience or rather harm to peoples health such as traffic jam, road accidents, bad coughs, throat hurts and ever lung cancers and so on.

As everybody knows, a good environment comes from good protection. So we should do what we can to make a difference. Try to drive less and choose air-friendly products. Only when everyone has the environmental awareness can we have cleaner air.

Hoping to hear from you soon and share your good ideas.

一篇文章的结尾，是文章的画龙点睛之处，如何用精简的语言，最精确地总结和概括文章的意思呢?今天，的名师为您总结了5种文章结尾的方式，一起来看看吧。

1、Taking all these factors into consideration， we naturally come to the conclusion that…

把所有这些因素加以考虑，我们自然会得出结论……

2、Taking into account all these factors， we may reasonably come to the conclusion that …

考虑所有这些因素，我们可能会得出合理的结论……

3、Hence/Therefore， we’d better come to the conclusion that …

因此，我们最好得出这样的结论……

4、There is no doubt that (job-hopping) has its drawbacks as well as merits.

毫无疑问，跳槽有优点也有缺点。

5、All in all， we cannot live without … But at the same time we must try to find out new ways to cope with the problems that would arise.

总之，我们没有…是无法生活的。但同时，我们必须寻求新的解决办法来对付可能出现的新问题。

有了以上的五种万能的结尾句型，我们在托福写作结尾的时候，就不用啰嗦一大堆又得不到分了。

饮食安全是个不变的话题，YJBYS为大家准备的这篇范文绝对值得大家收藏，请继续关注我们英语作文栏目。

假如你是一所国际学校校办英文杂志的学生编辑.你看了下面这封信后，也想写一篇关于该信的读后感，内容要点包括：你对此事件的看法;解释你的理由并提出你的建议;向受害者表达尽快康复的祝愿.

Today, I received the readers letter. I was shocked at it.Personally speaking, I think we should pay more attention to the food safety.The government must make some necessary laws. Whats more, some businessmenshouldnt be only interested in making money. They must care about peopleshealth. Wed better not eat anything in dirty places though some food isdelicious, because eating unhealthy food does harm to our health.

Finally, I hope the family in the accident will getbetter soon.

Pollution around us

In recent years our life is becoming better and better. But our environment is becoming worse and worse. Its very bad for our life. Now many people have air-conditioners and cars, they produce (give off ) waste gas. More and more trees are being cut down. There are so much sand on the earth (leaving only sand ) . We often see factories pour waste into rivers or lakes. Water in the river is quite dirty. We havent enough clean water to drink in cities. Now we are in danger. Its very necessary and important to protect the environment well. I think if everyone tries his best to protect the environment, the world will become much more beautiful , and our life will be better and better .

我们周围的污染

近年来我们的生活越来越好。但是，我们的环境越来越糟。它对我们的生活很糟糕。现在很多人都有空调和汽车，他们生产的（出）废气。越来越多的树被砍伐。有那么多的沙子在地球（只留下沙）。我们经常看到工厂把废水倒入河流或湖泊。河里的水很脏。我们没有足够的干净的水的城市。现在我们有危险。这是非常必要和重要的保护好环境。我想，如果每个人都尽自己最大的努力去保护环境，世界将变得更加美丽，我们的生活会越来越好。

环境保护问题是中考热门话题，出现频率高，难度较大，必须掌握。 典型句子： 1. It s our duty to save wate 2. As we know , water is very important to man, 3. we can t live without water. 4. The amount of

环境保护问题是中考热门话题，出现频率高，难度较大，必须掌握。

典型句子：

1. It’s our duty to save wate

2. As we know , water is very important to man,

3. we can’t live without water.

4. The amount of water which is suitable to drink is less and less.

5. But some people don’t care about it .

6. Many rivers and lakes are seriously polluted.

Something must be done to stop the pollution.

7. Its our duty to protect our environment。

8. It is very important to take care of our environment

9. We should not throw litter onto the ground

10. We should not spit in a public place/ cut down the trees

11. We should plant more flowers and trees。

12. We must pick up some rubbish and throw it into a dustbin

13. If everyone makes contribution to protecting the environment, the world

will become much more beautiful.

14.Trees are very helpful and important for us.

15.We should plant more and more trees in order to live better and more healthy

in the future.

It’s everyone’s duty to love and protect the environment.

例文：

1、假如你是新华中学的学生，名叫MIKE。去年6月1日我国已经禁止使用塑料袋，你对此有何看法和什么好的建议?

参考答案:

I’m Mike. I am a student in Huaxing Middle School. Do you know the plastic bags? Do you often use the plastic bags? I don’t like them. I think they use the wasting valuable oil their production. And they can’t decompose(分解) in a short time.The plastic bags will make our world worse. I agree with the rule, which people can’t get the free plastic bags in the shops, supermarkets. It encourages people to use their cloth bags and baskets. It’s good for our environment.

So I hope all the students in our class stop to use the plastic bags, and use our own cloth bags. I hope we can take care of our environment. Let’s make our world more and more beautiful.

2 、6月5日( June 5)是世界环境保护日， 我们周围的环境变得越来越糟糕，污染越来越严重……。假如你是学生Jone.，你校要进行“如何保护我们的环境?”专题演讲比赛。

要求：1、举例说明环境存在的问题1—3方面;

2、如何保护好我们的环境，采取怎样的措施，举例1—3方面进行说明，字数80左右。

参考答案:

Dear headmasters,teachers,classmates and friends:

I’m very proud that I have chosen to speak to you all today, I’m a bit(=a little) nervous as I’ve never made a speech before to so many people ,so please forgive me if it shows.

As we all know, the environmemt around us is getting worse and worse . In some places we can’t see fish swimming in the river or trees on the hills. Some people even have no clean water to drink. So I think we must do something to protect the environment. .But what can we do? How to protect our environmemt? For example ,we can go to school on foot or by bike . we can use shopping basskets not plastic bags when we go shopping and we can use both sides of the paper when we write . In a word ,if everyone pays more attention to our environment , there will be less pollution and our lives will be better.

“There is only one earth”,I hope everyone will protect our environment well.

Thanks!

3、目前南通市正在积极创建全国文明城市，中学生也在为之努力。假如你是你是某中学的一名学生张通，请根据下列图表所示内容，给笔友John写一封电子邮件，介绍有关情况。

注意：1.邮件内容应包含所有要点，不要简单翻译，可适当发挥;

2.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名等信息;

3.词数90左右(邮件中已经写好了的部分，不计入总词数)。

4.参考词汇：civilized 文明的 respect 尊敬

Dear John,

I’m glad to hear from you. Now let me tell you something about our city. Nantong is trying to set up a national civilized city. We middle school students are also doing something for it.

_______________________________________________________________

Zhang Tong

参考答案:

Dear John,

I’m glad to hear from you. Now let me tell you something about our city. Nantong is trying to set up a national civilized city. We middle school students are also doing some things for it. We are all polite to our teachers. (In class, we listen carefully to them./ When we meet them, we always say hello to them./…) We also respect the old. For example, we help them cross the streets.

We are always ready to help each other. (When one has difficulty with his studies, others will help him at once./...)We often show our love to those in trouble. Last month, the students of my class donated money to the earthquake-hit areas.

Besides, we plant trees to protect the environment and make our city more beautiful.

Nantong is my hometown. I will do my best to turn Nantong into a civilized city.

Zhang Tong

4、保护环境

从2008年6月1日起，国家将禁止商家免费提供塑料袋，掀起全国“拒塑”的环保运动。假如你是李华，准备以“What Can We Do for the Environment” 为题，写一篇保护环境的英语演讲稿。

内容包含：

1.在购物时用布袋子替代塑料袋;

2.尽可能地再利用使用过的课本;

3.离开教室应关灯;

4.最好走路或骑自行车上学;

5.简述理由：保护环境，减少污染，节约能源等

注意：

1.词数：80词左右。开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计入总词数;

2.可根据要点适当增加细节，使行文连贯;

3.文章中不能出现真实姓名和校名，否则以零分处理。

4.参考词汇：布袋子cloth bag塑料袋plastic bag保护protect能源energy污染pollution课本textbook

What Can We Do for the Environment

Hello, everyone. I’m Li Hua. It’s nice to speak about what we can do for the environment,and I think each of us can do a little bit to help with this problem.

___________________________________________________

In fact, even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the

environment. I believe we can make the world a better place to live in.

Thank you for your listening!

参考作文：

What Can We Do for the Environment

Hello, everyone. I’m Li Hua. It’s nice to speak about what we can do for the environment, and I think each of us can do a little bit to help with this problem.

The first thing we can do is to use cloth bags in stead of plastic bags when we go shopping. It helps to protect the environment. The second thing we can do is to reuse(再利用) the old textbooks as possible as we can. We should also never forget to turn off the lights when we leave the classrooms in order to save energy.What’s more, it would be better if we walk or ride a bike to school. We should try our best to reduce pollution and waste.

In fact, even the simplest everyday activities(日常活动) can make a real difference to(对…有影响) the environment. I believe we can make the world a better place to live in.

Thank you for your listening!

一篇文章通常由开头、正文内容和结尾三个部分构成。的名师表示，这三个部分的比例安排要合理，只有合理的文章构成，才能拿到令人满意的分数。

文章的开头一般来说应尽量做到开门见山，用简单明白的叙述引出文章的话题，使读者了解文章要谈论什么，一下于引起读者的兴趣。

作文常见的开头形式大致有以下几种：

1、直叙主题开门见山

文章一开头就交待清楚文章的主题是什么。如“How I Spent My Vacation”(我怎样度假)的开头是：

I Spent my last vacation happily.

下面是题为“Honesty”(谈诚实)一文中的开头：

Honesty is one of the best virtues.An honest man is always trusted and respected.On the contrary, one who tells lies is regarded as a "liar",and is looked upon by honest people.

2、交代文章背景开头

在文章的开头，先把人物、事件和环境交待清楚。例如“A Trip to Jinshan” (去金山旅游)的开头：

The day before yesterday my class went on a bus trip to Jinshan. The bus ride there took three hours. The long trip made us very tired, but the sight of the beautiful sea refreshed us.

3、 以回忆来开头

用回忆的方法来开头。例如“A Trip to the Taishan Mountain”(泰山游)的开头是：

I remember my first trip to the Taishan Mountain as if it were yesterday.

4、以概括的方式来开头

即对要在文章中叙述的人或事先作一个概括性的介绍。如“The Happiness of Reading Books”(读书的快乐)的开头：

People often say that gold and silver are the most valuable things in the world. But I say that to read books is more valuable than anything else, because books give us knowledge and knowledge gives us power.

5、铺垫环境来开头

即开头利用自然景物或自然环境引出要介绍的事物。如“An Accident”(一场事故)的开头是:

It was a rainy and windy morning. The sky was gloomy, the temperature was low, and the street was nearly empty. I was on my way back to school. Suddenly, a speeding car came round the corner.

6、表述目的来开头。

在文章的一开头就交待写作目的，如通过文章要表扬谁，批评谁，或说明一个什么问题等。如“Pollution Control”(控制污染)的开头：

In this article I shall draw your attention to the subject of pollution control.

以上就是中考英语作文满分、高分分段的同学常使用的几种开头方式，您也可以依据自身的习惯来挑选适合自己的开头方式。不论用什么开头，目的都只有一个，那就是取得高分。

根据中英文提示，与一篇日记，记叙一次(西塞山)郊游。(短文的开头已经给出。)

要求：

1.短文应包括汉语和英语提示内容。

2.语句通顺，意思连贯。

3.书写工整，卷面整洁，标点符号正确。

4.字数不少于80个英语单词。

Sunday, May 1st

I got to school very early. Our class took a special bus to Xisai Mount. We got to the foot of the mount at 8:30.We began climbing the mount soon. On our way the air was so fresh and the scenery was so beautiful. Everybody was talking and laughing.We reached the top at about 10:00. The Yangtze River appeared in the north, and over the river there was a great bridge. We felt very relaxed. Seeing some birds flying in the sky, I suddenly remembered a popular poem of Tang dynasty. " Birds are flying in front of Xisai Mount ,…". I kept feeling proud of our city.

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、作文案例

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[学生解答A]

My hobby is read books①.When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

②also的位置应放在can之后。

[点评]：档次9-11分。

①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

③有少量错误。

[学生解答B]

My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improvemy writing.I want to be a writer in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。

②真情流露，理由充分。

③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

[点评]：档次13-14分。

①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting theenvironment.They threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to preventstarting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirtywater into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

What is my dream job? I want to be a doctor. I think it’s great and interesting job. I can help many patient. It’s a hard job but I don’t mind it. I can find some happy in this job. Some people think doctors are work late. I don’t think so. If I feel happy, I can’t feel it’s very late.

If I am a doctor now, I like my job. I don’t regret it, I can say:” I found a good job!” I don’t think this job makes me tired, I think it makes me solidity and happy. I believe I am sure to succeed.

This is all of my dream job. I think I am sure to be a good doctor.

我的梦想工作是什么?我想成为一名医生。我认为这是伟大的和有趣的工作。我可以帮助很多病人。这是一份艰难的工作,但我不介意。我可以找到一些快乐的工作。有些人认为医生工作到很晚。我不这么认为。如果我感到快乐,我感觉不到很晚了。

如果我是医生,我喜欢我的工作。我不后悔,我能说:“我发现了一个很好的工作!“我不认为这项工作让我累了,我想这让我坚固和快乐。我相信我一定会成功。

这是我所有的梦想的工作。我想我肯定是一个好医生。

Should students make friends online? Some people say yes. Internet helps people make many friends. Chatting on line, students can express their feelings and opinions more freely, and even get help for their foreign language studies.

Others, however, think students should not. They say making friends online is a waste of time, which should be spent more meaningfully on study. Besides, some students get cheated online.

It is my opinion that students should place their study, health and safety before other things. As for friendship, we can readily find it in our classmates and other people around us.

很多同学对英语书面表达的部分都感到头疼，一是因为突然拿到一个题目，脑中一片空白，写不出几个句子来，二是写好一篇文章，可是总是流于平淡，语言枯燥，不得老师喜爱，分数也一直不高不低，难以突破。建议同学们，第一类问题，是可以通过练习而补救的，第二类问题，则需要我们的积累和智慧了。

每一次考试或练习，我们的语文写作中总是时不时的会出现很多诗词，名言，他们或哲理，或抒情，或励志，或优美，总能让我们的文章读来津津有味，而且让老师觉得有文学感，甚至会因此而觉得有文采。同样是作文，我们为什么不能把这种思路搬到英文中来呢?答案当然是可以的，而且成功的例子也不少。

在英文的写作当中，运用名言警句这样的潜规则也是存在的。根据目前的要求，一篇英文作文篇幅在100词以上，这样的长度相对于语文作文来说自然是很简单了，但是对于高考水平的英语写作来说，是完全有空间在其中运用名言警句的，只要我们用的合适，就会取得意想不到的效果。

那么，我们如何善用这些名言警句呢?

第一，积累是必需的。英语是一门语言，语言是没有速成的，尤其是一些经典的词句，是需要我们一点一滴积累的。在收集名言警句的过程中，我们可以有目的性地收集。所谓目的性，是指在作文中，命题的形式和题材一般是固定的，那么针对这样的内容，我们就要尽量收集能用得上的名言警句，或者说，名言警句要对的上路子，这么做可能有一点功利，但咱们毕竟是应试，退一步说，这样收集的句子也不一定都是没有用的，所以，我们要首先找准方向，少走弯路。

第一类是哲理类的，这一类名言警句可以说是万精油，放之四海而皆准，几乎在每一篇作文中都能用到它们。比如说描写做家务活。我们就可以用上Just as the saying goes： It is never too late to learn!来说明学习做家务活的积极性。再比如以汶川地震为背景描写一个叫Lin Hao的小孩救出同学的事迹，我们就能用As we all know， where there is a life， there is a hope.或者where there is a will， there is a way来赞扬Lin Hao的精神品质等等，诸如此类的命题比比皆是，只要我们用得恰当，就一定能波的阅卷老师的青睐;

第二类是励志类的，这种语句在涉及到个人成长经历内容的文章中，可以发挥很大作用;

第三类是情感类的，表现家庭生活或者个人情感的内容能用到它。

[中考英语作文出色善用“潜规则”的方法

My dream job will be working in one of the biggest international accounting firm as an accountant.I want to be an accountant because I love mathematics and business so much.Also,being an accountant can help me to explore my knowledge of business and provide me a board range of network among the business world.I need to do a lot in order to achieve my goal.First,I have to get an undergraduate degree in accounting from college.Then I might either to go graduate school for a more advanced degree in accounting or get prepare for the CPA exam.With the CPA lisence,I have a better opportunity to get a job in the accounting firm.Finally,with my experience in the accounting firm,I can apply accounting position in the international accounting firm and to serve as an accountant there!

我梦想的工作将工作在一个最大的国际会计公司当会计。我想成为一名会计师,因为我非常喜欢数学和商业。同时,作为一个会计能帮助我去探索我的商业知识,提供我一个板范围的网络在商业世界。我需要做很多为了达到我的目标。首先,我要从大学会计本科学位。然后我可以去研究生院更高级的学位,主修会计或得到准备会计师考试。CPA lisence,我有一个更好的机会在会计师事务所工作。最后,以我的经验在会计事务所,我可以申请会计职位在国际会计师事务所,作为一个会计!

Dear friend,

Welcome to our school. I would like to talk about two ways of study in our school. The first way is to study in groups. When we study in groups, we can help each other. We can learn to listen to others and how to work together. Also, everyone can have chances to express his own ideas. The other way we like is to study by ourselves. We can make our own plans for study and learn to make good use of time. We can also learn to think by ourselves. And the most important thing is that we we can be the master of our own study Thanks for listening!

[中考英语话题作文

Last week, the cat that our family raised for two years had lost. All of us searched every corner of the house and even walked down the whole street block to ask others, but just got no information of it. At last, we had to give up, though I was sad, I had to get used to it. But last night, the cat showed up in our balcony. When I saw her, I just couldn’t believe, how she could walk home after missing for almost a week. This is miracle, for the first time I believe in miracle. My parents were so surprised and happy to see our member return.

上周，我们家养了两年的猫不见了。我们搜查了房子的每一个角落，甚至跑到街上去问别人，但是都没有人见过她。最后，我们不得不放弃。虽然我很伤心，但我必须要去适应。不过昨晚，猫突然出现在我们的阳台上。当我看到她时，我简直不敢相信，她怎么会在失踪了近一个星期后还能回来。这是奇迹，我第一次相信奇迹。我父母也非常惊讶也很高兴看到我们的成员回来了。

[深圳市中考英语作文

My Low-carbon Life

The environmental pollution is worse and worse today. Many trees are cut

down, and water and air are polluted. As a student I try to have a low-carbon

life to save energy and reduce pollution.

Firstly, I often walk to school. It can reduce air pollution. Secondly, I

always turn off the lights and fans when leaving the classroom. Thirdly, I

always make full use of paper and other school things and never waste water.

I wish more students to join me and make the earth more and more

beautiful.