初中英语写作常见错误及分析【实用20篇】

Three years ago, I was a cool and detached girl. I never helped others or cried, because I thought that was very boring.

One day an unusual girl rushed into my life. She looks like a boy and she is also very lovely. She is very cheerful. I always feel she is a "Red Sun". She is the most beautiful girl that I have ever seen. She often helps me and plays with me. We became good friends at once. Since then, I have been sanguine.

Now, I am still a happy girl. I‘m often moved by the world. I think our life is so short, and it isn‘t easy for people to live in the world. I‘ve learned to help others and to cry. I‘ve also learned to be happy and grateful. I also understand that crying doesn‘t mean "coward", crying can mean "visualize a bright future!"Though she has lots of new friends and I have many too, she will be my best friend forever, because she has taught me a lot…

Thank you--my best friend!

[初中优秀英语作文谢谢你，我最好的朋友

迈克是我的好朋友。每当我需要帮助时，他就来到我身边。一天放学了，我不得不留下来跟3组的同学一起打扫卫生。但3组的其他人都在外边玩，他们谁都不想回来。于是迈克就过来帮我扫地。真是优秀作文 ，患难朋友才是真正的朋友。

Mike is my good friend. Any time I need help, he will come to me. One day after school, I had to stay and clean the classroom with Group Three. But they were still playing outside without any sign to go back. So Mike came and helped me clean the floor. A friend in need is a friend indeed.

雅思写作考试是对考生的综合语言能力的考查，但有的考生在备考过程中，往往只是注重应试培养。那我们应该如何合理高效的备考雅思写作呢?

正如之前上面所说，许多考生备考过程中，往往会忽视了对语言知识和实际运用能力的锻炼，那么常见不可取的备考方法有哪些？考生们可以来看看自己有没有中枪

1. 话题准备，厚此薄彼：

教育类和科技类话题通常是雅思写作题库的主角，尤其是教育类话题，考试频率相对来说比较高，如剑9写作的4个话题中，就有两个是教育类。可是这就造成了一些考生在备考雅思写作时比较偏心，只是准备教育类和科技类话题，疯狂的背相关词汇，表达及素材观点，对其他话题却置之不理，这让其他话题情何以堪啊。其实，纵观近几年的雅思写作考试，社会类，环境类和媒体类等话题始终都是一线演员，拥有着和教育类及科技类话题一样比较高的出镜率，而其他话题也不断上位。因此，考生应了解近年雅思写作考试题库和出题规律，针对不同题型和话题，掌握写作方法和技巧，积累相关的词汇表达，句型结构和素材观点，确保万无一失。

另外，在准备雅思图表作文时，同学们不应该只练习曲线图，饼图，柱状图和表格的写作，还要重视流程图和地图题，熟悉表示时间次序和地理方位的相关短语及表达。尤其是地图题出现的频率在近两年的雅思考试中呈现了明显的上升态势，而其中以考察历史变迁的类型为主。所谓历史变迁，即某个地方在经历一段时间后发生了一些调整或改变，可能是地图上的建筑物从无到有，也可能是建筑的位置改变或是规模的扩大或缩小等等。需要同学们从给定的地图中挖掘相应的信息，按照时间和空间顺序，用恰当的语言有逻辑的呈现给读者。《剑九》Test 1就为我们呈现了一道变迁题。这种图表其实难度不大，但是有的童鞋在平时备考的过程中接触且准备的很少，所以在考场上根本无法动笔。事实上，如果我们在备考时，熟记表示方位的词汇和表达，仔细分析并经常练习此类题目，我们就能更好地把握这类题目的写作技巧与方法，在考场上遇到此类题目时不再迷茫。

Everyone has different hobbies.Some people like to paint and others like to play basketball.I have many hobbies because I like to do many things.Let me share a few of my hobbies with you.

To begin with,I really lie games,both indoor and outdoor.I like collecting cards and playing card games with my friends.But my favorite games are vidio games.I could play them all day long.On the other hand,I also like being outside in the fresh air and sunshine,so I play a lot of sports.I like riding and rollerblading very much,but swimming is my favorite sport.

In addition,I like to draw pictures and read comics,but please dont tell my parents because they dont approve.listening to music and singing songs are things I enjoy too,and Im learning how to play an instument--the guitar.Finally,I enjoy learning English because I like speaking with foreigners and I like watching Disney cartoons.

As you can see,my hobbies keep me busy and excited.Im always looking for new things to do!

[初中英语作文：我的爱好

When I was a girl,I was very bad.I often drew pictures on the English book and laughed loudly with my classmates.I never listened to my English teacher carefully.Of course,my English was very bad.

When I was in Grade 5,my mother sent me to an English school.My English was still very bad there and I didnt stand up when the teacher let us stand up and dance.But to my surprise,that English teacher called Angela didnt hate me and she still gave me another chance.One day,Angela found me and said:"Janice,you are very good,I trust that you can study English very well and you can be a good ***e on,my clever Janice,study English carefully from now on.Can you do it"Angela looked at me and I looked her>She looked like mysister who smiled at me.

I was moved by Angela.I said to her:"Yes,of course.I promise to study English well forever."

From that day on,I study English carefully and my English started improving.Now,my English is very well.

"Why do you study English well?"my classmates often ask me.My answer is:Angela.Yes,Angelas trust made me study English well.Thank you,Angela.

当我还是个小女孩的时候，我很不好，我经常在英语书上画画，和我的同学一起大声笑，我从来没有听过我的英语老师，当然，我的英语很差。

当我在5年级的时候，我妈妈送我去英语学校，我的英语还是很不错的，我没有站起来的时候，老师让我们站起来跳舞。但让我吃惊的是，英语老师叫安吉拉不恨我，她还是给了我一个机会。有一天，安吉拉找到我，说：“珍妮丝，你很好，我相信你能学好英语，你可以成为一个好的***，我聪明的珍妮丝，好好学英语了。你能做的”安吉拉看着我，我看着她她像我妹妹他对我笑了笑。

我被安吉拉感动了，我对她说：“是的，当然，我保证永远学英语。”

从那天起，我认真学习英语，我的英语水平提高了。现在，我的英语很好。

“你为什么学英语？”我的同学经常问我，我的回答是：安吉拉，是的，安吉拉的信任让我学好英语，谢谢你，安吉拉。

导语：高考英语书面表达想拿高分并不容易，首先你要避免一些在学生中比较常见的几种错误才行。下面小编为大家整理了高考英语写作常见的错误，希望大家在考试中能够避免。

有的同学对于否定的概念模糊，不知如何否定，有时会写出不合规则或有异义的句子。

1. 我认为没有必要买大的。

误：I think its not necessary to buy the bigger one.

正：I don’t think it is necessary to buy the bigger one.

析：有些动词如think, believe, expect, suppose, imagine, guess, fancy等的主语是第一人称单数且一般现在时，表示否定的观点应用I don’t think…，而I think… not则属于汉语式表达习惯。

2. 我们直到天全黑了才到家。

误：We arrived home until it became completely dark.

正：We didn’t arrive home until it became completely dark.

析：此汉语句子里面尽管没有否定词，但until用于肯定句时意为“直到…为止”;用于否定句时，其意为“在…以前”。因此，表示“直到…才”用not…until。

3. 如果没有受到邀请的话，我是不会去参加舞会的。

误：I’ll not go to the party unless I’m not invited.

正：I’ll not go to the party unless I’m invited.

正：I’ll not go to the party if I’m not invited.

析：unless“除非”、“如果不”，常可用if…not来替换。误句中的条件状语从句双重否定表示肯定，结果与原句意思相反。

4. 那孩子不够大不能去上学。

误：The child is not old enough not to go to school.

正：The child is not old enough to go to school.

正：The child is too young to go to school.

析：这是学生最容易写错的句子。enough to“足以、足够”。原句中“不够大不能去上学”意思是“不够上学的年龄”，故应译为not old enough to go to school。

5. 他们两个都不说英语。

误：Both of them don’t speak English.

正：Neither of them speaks English.

析：中国学生特别对于all…not 和both…not等这种部分否定结构，很容易理解成全部否定。两者全部否定用neither, 三者以上用none。

6. 开车时再小心也不过分。

误：You can be too careful in driving a car.

正：You can not be too careful in driving a car.

析：cannot…too“无论作…也不过分”。

Dear teacher and classmates:

I am very glad to make a speech here in this class again! This time, Id like to talk something about English.

I love English. English language is now used everywhere in the world. It has become the most common language on Internet and for international trade. Learning English makes me confident and brings me great pleasure.

When I was seven, my mother sent me to an English school. At there, I played games and sang English songs with other children . Then I discovered the beauty of the language, and began my colorful dream in the English world.

Everyday, I read English following the tapes. Sometimes, I watch English cartoons.

On the weekend, I often go to the English corner. By talking with different people there, I have made more and more friends as well as improved my oral English.

I hope I can travel around the world someday. I want to go to America to visit Washington Monument, because the president Washington is my idol. Of course, I want to go to London too, because England is where English language developed. If I can ride my bike in Cambridge university, I will be very happy.

I hope I can speak English with everyone in the world. Ill introduce China to them, such as the Great Wall, the Forbidden City and Anshan.

I know, Rome was not built in a day. I believe that after continuous hard study, one day I can speak English very well.

If you want to be loved, you should learn to love and be lovable. So I believe as I love English everyday , it will love me too.

[初中英语作文：我爱学习英语

Park

Thereisaparknearmyhome.Therearealotofbeautifultrees,flowersandbirdsinthepark.Somanypeoplegototheparktoenjoytheirweekends.Theylikewalkingorhavingapicnicinthepark.ButIlikeflyingakitewithmysisiterthere.我家附近有一个公园。那里有很多美丽的树、花和小鸟。所以很多人都喜欢到那里去度周末。他们喜欢在公园里散步或是野餐.但是我喜欢和我姐姐在那里放风筝。

Bedroom

Ihaveasmallbedroom.Thereareonlyasmallbed,asmalldeskandasmallchairintheroom.Andthereisabeautifuldollonmybluebed.EverydayIdomyhomework,readbooksandplaygameswiththedollinmybedroom.Itissmall,butitgivesmemuchhappiness.我有一间小小的卧室。那里有一张小小的床、小小桌子和一把小小的椅子。而且还有一个漂亮的娃娃在我那张蓝色的小床上。我每天都在房间里写作业，看书和与我的娃娃玩。虽然房间很小，但是他给了我很多欢乐。

Myfather

Myfatherisatallandhandsomeman.Heisapoliceman.Everydayhecomesbackhomeverylate,becausehemusthelptheothers.Hedoesnthavetimetoexaminemyhomeworkandtakemetothepark.ButIlikemyfather,becauseheisagoodpoliceman.我的爸爸是一个高大帅气的男人。他是一个警察。他每天都很晚才回家，因为他要帮助其他的人。他没有时间给我检查作业和带我去公园。但是我仍然很喜欢我的爸爸，因为他是一个好警察。

IamfromShenZhen.Inspring,theweatheriswarmandwet.Icanplaykite.Insummer,theweatherishotandwet.Icanswimintheswimmingpool.Intheautumn,theweatheriscoolanddry.Icanplaykite,too.Inthewinter,theweatheriscoldanddry.Itneversnow.

我是来自深圳。在春天，在天气温暖及潮湿。我可以玩风筝。在夏季，天气炎热及潮湿。我可以游泳，在游泳池。在秋天，天气凉爽，干燥。我可以玩风筝，太。在冬季，天气寒冷及干燥。它从来没有积雪。

Todayismygrandpasbirthday.Ourfamilywentbacktomygrandpashomeinthemorning.Wegottogethertohaveabigfamilydinnertocelebratehisbirthady.Weboughtabigbirthdaycakeandgavesomepresentstomygrandpa.

Intheafternoon,wewenttotheparktogoboating.Wehadagoodtime.Mygrandpahadanicetimeonhisbirthday.

今天是爷爷的生日，我们全家早晨回到爷爷家。我们举行了大型家庭聚会来庆祝爷爷的生日。我们买了一个大生日蛋糕，并且送给爷爷一些礼物。

下午我们去公园划船。我们玩得很开心，爷爷过了一个愉快的生日

Mr.Knottisateacher.Heisathome.Thetelephonerings.Heanswersthephone.Hesays,“Hello.Thisis82654379.Whosthat?”“Watt”amananswers.“wattsyourname,please?”saysMr.Knottisangry.“Wattsmyname!”theothermanisangey,too.

knott先生是一名教师。他是在家中。电话响了。他回答接起电话，说，“你好，这是82654379。你是谁？”“瓦特”一个男人答道。“请问你的名字是什么？”knott先生生气地说。“瓦特就是我的名字！”另一名男子是也生气了。

Afarmerhasfivesons.TheyareTed,Bob,Tom,JohnandBill.Johnhasnoelderbrother.Hewasfouryearsolderwhenhisfirstyoungerbrotherwasborn.ThenumberofTom‘selderbrothersisequaltohisyoungerbrothers.Billwillbetwenty-oneyearsoldnextyear,andheisfiveyearsolderthanBob.BobistwoyearsyoungerthanTom.Tedwassadbecausehehasnoyoungerbrother.TherearetwelveyearsbetweenhimandJohn.一个农民有5个儿子。他们是Ted,Bob,Tom,John和Bill。John没有比他大的哥哥，他比第一个出生的比他小的那个弟弟大4岁，Tom哥哥的数量和他的弟弟的数量是一样的（就是他是老三）Bill明年就21岁了，他比Bob大5岁，比Tom小2岁，Ted因为没有弟弟而难过Ted和John之间差了12岁

Everythinginthisworldhasanatureofitsown.Somearecharming,someareseducing,likethecandy,chocolate,thecakes,andsomeburneverythinglikefire,assoonasyougetnear.

天地万物各有其本质，有些东西很有吸引力、很诱人，像糖果、巧克力、蛋糕等；有些则像火一样，任何东西一靠近就会被它烧掉。

OnMyWaytoSchool

TodayIgotupveryearlyinthemorning.AfterIfinishedbreakfast,Iwenttoschool.OnmywaytoschoolIsawsomethinglyingontheground.

Ipickeditupandfounditwasamobilephone.IwasafraidIwouldbelateforschool.Ihadnotimetowaitfortheowner.SoIgaveittothepoliceman.

ShortlyafterIreachedmyschool,theheadmastercametomyclassandpraisedmeinfrontoftheclass.Howcouldheknewallaboutit?IguessitmustbethepolicemanwhotoldhimwhatIdid.

IamveryhappythatIhavedoneagoodjob.

就我在上学的路上

今天，我得到了很早就在上午。当我完成早餐，我去了学校。就我在上学的路上我看到的东西躺在地上。我挑选它，并发现这是一部手提电话。我恐怕我会迟到的学校。我没有时间去等待的所有者。因此，我给它的警察。

不久后，我达到了我的学校，校长来到我的班级，并赞扬我在前面的阶级。他怎么会知道的所有关于它呢？我猜想，它必须是警察谁告诉他，我所做的。我很高兴我已经做得不错。

Chinahasbeenapowerfulcountryforthemostpartofthepastthreethousandyears.Chinaisnowrisingagain.Whyisthatsosurprisingtopeople?Historyisthebestevidence.TheriseofChinaisjustamatterofwhen,notif.Plus,doyouwant$100jeans?Doyouwant$200shoes?Doyouwant$3000computers?IftheanswersareNO,youdbetterthankChinaandappreciatethebenefitsthatitbringstoyourdailylife.

中国在过去3000年历史中大部分时间当中都是个强大的国家。中国现在再次崛起，为什么人们会感到如此奇怪？历史是最好的证明。中国崛起只是个时间问题，而不是是否能崛起的问题。另外，你希望卖100美元一条的牛仔裤，200美元一双鞋，3000美元的电脑吗？如果不愿意，你必须要感谢中国，感谢中国为你日常生活做出的贡献。

It was a sunny day today,when i got up in the morning,i decided to see my

grandparents.so i took the bus and got there at noon,they were happy to see

me,and i was very happy,too.

In the afternoon,my farther asked me to help him water the plant,and i was

happy to see the flowers smiling in the wind.

In a word,today is a unforgetive day.because i saw my relatives and helped

people.

考辅P42

1. I gave Tom the book. ／／

2. He bought his mother some flowers. ／／

3. The bridge was built by workers last year.／／

4. We have to finish the work today. ／／5. He will do his homework tomorrow. ／／

6. We clean the rooms every day. ／／7. The writer spent 3 years on the book. ／／

8. It is a book with a lot of beautiful pictures.／／

9. The book sold very well during the first week. ／／first week.

10. Mary was the only one in the office. ／／

11. She finished her work at 10 o’clock. ／／She didn’12. She had to take a taxi home because it was too late.

13. Liza and Mike arrived at the Great Wall in two hours.

14. They were happy to get to the top.／／

15. They enjoyed themselves on the Great Wall.／／

16. The postman sent Susan and Tommy a paper box.

17. They opened it and found a present from their friend.

18. They both liked the present and felt very happy.

19. Alice didn’t feel well today, so she went to the hospital.

20. The doctor asked her some questions. ／／

21. The doctor didn’t give her any medicine in the end.

（全真１）

1. The capital Airport has been in use for 20 years. ／／

2. The capital Airport is the largest one in China. ／／

3. I have never taken a plane. My friend Li Ping , either. ／／

（全真２）

1. Father gave $20 for me to buy some books. ／／

2. I was excited when I saw so many good books in the bookstore.

3. But some books would cost more than I have. ／／

But I didn’／／（全真3）

1. Many Chinese friends went to the party. 2. Tony was given a lot of presents by his friends. ／／Tony’

3. Seeing his Chinese teacher at the party made Tony very happy. ／／（全真4）

1. I want to eat something. ／／2. The refrigerator is empty.／／3. Bob spent fifteen yuan on the hamburger. ／／／（全真5）

1. Mr.Wang doesn’t work in that factory any longer. ／／

2. Mr. Wang left home earlier in order to catch the bus. 3. Mr. Wang finds it not easy to get along with that young guy. ／／（专家1）

1. Many people went shopping yesterday.

2. Jane spent 4 hours to buy New year gifts. ／／

3. She was so tired that she couldn’t walk any longer. ／／

（专家2）

1. My friends said to me, “Are you free?”

2. She wanted me to go shopping with her.

3. She thinks it a pleasure to go shopping with a friend.

My Favourite Sport英语作文一

I like doing sports very much.My favourite sport is swimming.I often go to swim with my good friend Lily.She likes swimming ,too.And she is very good at it.She always swims better than me.When I am swimming in the pool,I am very happy.I look like a lovely fish in the pond.I enjoy swimming,because swimming can make me strong and healthy.It can also bring me a lot of happiness.Of course,I like watching this sport.I hope I will become a swimmer in the future.

My Favourite Sport英语作文二

There are many kinds of sports that I enjoy,such as swimming,running,and dancing.However,the sport that I like most is basketball.When I was in junior high,I started to play basketball in school.At that time,I found I had loved deeply this sport.Now,I would like to watch basketball games as much as I can.The basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.

My Favourite Sport英语作文三

I like badminton and basketball，basketball is my favourite sport，I like basketball best.

I always wear a T-shirt，shorts and runners to play basketball. I can throw the basketball in the net， I think it is easy， but someone think it is hard， I can catch the basketball，too. On Sundays，I am a bbasketball player.I like to watch basketball game on TV， Yao Ming is my favourite basketball player， I want to be a real basketball player someday.

It is well known that exercise is important. In our school, we have to do an hours exercise every day. Many students are very happy. In the one hour, some of us play basketball, football and ping pong, and some run around the playground. Everyone is talking and laughing. I love this activity very much. I also hope that there will be more and more sunlight sports in our life after school. That not only makes us happy, but also makes our body healthier.

Unlike Martin Luther King’s, my dreams are fair and plain, and there are

many of them. I have a dream from the first time I sit in a car—I want to

drive.

Driving is like running without foot, racing without strength. It’s the

most meaningful way to meet human being’s desire of “faster”. When driving, I

have to put all my spirit to. Operating a car at ease will cost years of

experience.

Driving will take me to my wanting destination, no matter it rains or snows

or winds. I never am afraid of shoes wet, umbrella broken or ears frozen. A car

is rather like a moving house, which protects me completely and helps me rush

directly to the aim hanging ahead. That suits my nature perfectly: love to take

risks conservatively. A smooth ride in a good car is an enjoyable satisfaction.

Seeing rows of trees moving backward rapidly, a feeling of stepping forward will

fill fully in my mind. With music hovering, breeze blowing, my soul flies in the

air.

I was always sick when took a ride of a car, especially when I was young.

Father told me that a driver would never have carsick. That may be one of the

important reasons for me to desire driving.

This summer I am going to learn driving and get my car license. The dream

with all my heart will follow the promise it had made.

I am studying in a middle school now, my school is near my home.

I love my school, I can learn a lot in my school. The teachers teach me knowledge about math, Chinese and others things about life, these are important to me, I become mature. I make many friends here, the first day I come to this school, I get to know my deskmate, in a few days, I get to know my classmate, now I have a lot of friends, I feel so happy.

In my school, the equipment is modern and we can use the newly invented resource. The environment of my school is also beautiful, the trees are tall, the grass is green. I love my school so much.

我现在在一所初中上学，我的学习离家很近。我爱我的学校，我从那里学到很多东西。老师教了我关于数学，语文和关于生活的知识，这些对我来说很重要，让我变得成熟。我在这里交了很多朋友，我来学校的第一天认识了我的同桌，在以后的日子里，我认识了班上的同学，现在我有很多朋友，我感到很高兴。在我的学校，设备很现代化，我们可以使用到最新发现的资源。我们学校的环境也很漂亮，树很高，草很绿。我很爱我的学校。

[初中英语作文：我爱我学校

一.不一致(disagreements)

所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致，它还包括了数的不一致时态不一致及代词不一致等.

例1. when one have money ,he can do what he want to .

(人一旦有了钱，他就能想干什么就干什么.)

剖析：one是单数第三人称，因而本句的have应改为has ;同理，want应改为wants.本句是典型的主谓不一致.

改为：once one has money ,he can do what he wants (to do)

二.修饰语错位(misplaced modifiers)

英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，句子的含义可能引起变化.对于这一点中国学生往往没有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解.例1. i believe i can do it well and i will better know the world outside the campus.

剖析：better位置不当，应置于句末.

三.句子不完整(sentence fragments)

在口语中，交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等，不完整的句子完全可以被理解.可是书面语就不同了，句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清，这种情况常常发生在主句写完以后，笔者又想加些补充说明时发生.

例1. there are many ways to know the society. for example by tv ,radio ,newspaper and so on .

剖析：本句后半部分＂for example by tv ,radio ,newspaper and so on .”不是一个完整的句子，仅为一些不连贯的词语，不能独立成句.改为：there are many ways to know society ,for example ,by tv ,radio ,and newspaper.

四.悬垂修饰语(dangling modifiers)

所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清.例如：at the age of ten, my grandfather died.这句中＂at the age of ten＂只点出十岁时，但没有说明”谁”十岁时.按一般推理不可能是my grandfather,如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改明确一点，全句就不那么费解了.改为：

when i was ten, my grandfather died.

例1. to do well in college, good grades are essential.剖析：句中不定式短语“to do well in college”

五.逻辑主语不清楚.

改为：

to do well in college, a student needs good grades.五.词性误用(misuse of parts of speech)

“词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名词当动词用等.例1. none can negative the importance of money.

剖析：negative系形容词，误作动词。

改为：

none can deny the importance of money.

六.指代不清(ambiguous reference of pronouns)

指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清，或者先后所用的代词不一致。试看下面这一句：

mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.

(玛丽和我姐姐很要好，因为她要她做她的伴娘。)

读完上面这一句话，读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚，谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词的所指对象加以明确，意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为：

mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.

例1. and we can also know the society by serving it yourself.剖析：句中人称代词we和反身代词yourself指代不一致。改为：

we can also know society by serving it ourselves.

七.不间断句子(run-on sentences)

什么叫run-on sentence?请看下面的例句。

例1. there are many ways we get to know the outside world.剖析：这个句子包含了两层完整的意思：“there are many ways.”以及“we get to know the outside world.”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

改为：

there are many ways for us to learn about the outside world.或：there are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world

八.措词毛病(troubles in diction)

diction是指在特定的句子中如何适当地选用词语的问题，囿于教学时间紧迫，教师平时在这方面花的时间往往极其有限，影响了学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲，斟酌的习惯。他们往往随心所欲，拿来就用。所以作文中用词不当的错误比比皆是。

例1. the increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.

(农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。)

剖析：显然，考生把obstacles“障碍”，“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use (不断增加的使用)”应改为“abusive use (滥用)”。

改为：

the abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.

九.累赘(redundancy)

言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词；写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组；能用词组的不用从句或句子。如：

in spite of the fact that he is lazy, i like him.本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句，我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：in spite of his laziness, i like him.例1. for the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.

剖析：整个句子可以大大简化。

改为：

diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.

十.不连贯(incoherence)

不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语，或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。

例1. the fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.

剖析：the fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯。it与things在数方面不一致。

常见联词

表层进

first, firstly to begin with/second, secondly to start with/third, thirdly what’s more/also and then/and equally important/besides in addition/further in the first place/still furthermore

last but not the least/next besides/too moreover/finally

表举例

for example for instance/to illustrate as an illustration/after all/表解释

/as a matter of fact/frankly speaking/

雅思考试作文写作技巧与应注意事项

in this case namely/in other words

表总结

in summary in a word/in brief in conclusion/to conclude in fact/indeed in short/in other words /of course/it is true specially/namely in all/that is to summarize/thus as has been said/altogether in other words/finally in simpler terms/in particular that is/on the whole to put it differently/therefore表强调

of course indeed/above all most important/emphasis certainly in fact

表让步

still nevertheless/in spite of all the same/even so after all/concession granted naturally/of course

表比较

in comparison likewise/similarly equally/however likewise/in the same way/

表转折

by contrast although/e same time but/in contrast nevertheless/notwithstanding on the contraryon the other hand otherwise/regardless still/though yet/despite the fact that even so/even though for all that/however in spite of/instead

表时间

after a while afterward/again also/and then as long as/at last at length/at that time before/besides earlier/eventually finally/formerly further/furthermore in addition/in the first place in the past/last lately/meanwhile moreover/next now/presently second/shortly simultaneously/since so far/soon still/subsequently then/thereafter too/until until now/when.

[雅思考试作文写作技巧与应注意事项

Raise your head on August 4 and gaze at the stars, you will find something romantic going on in the sky.

VALENTINE‘‘S Day in China, the seventh day of the seventh lunar month, falls on August 4 this year.

That is, on Monday evening, Niu Lang and Zhi Nu will meet on a bridge of magpies(鹊桥) across the Milky Way(银河). Chinese grannies will remind children that they would not be able to see any magpies on that evening because all the magpies have left to form a bridge in the heavens with their wings.

Romantic legend

The legend has been handed down for nearly 2 millennia. The story has been recorded as far back as the Jin Dynasty (256-420 AD). Poets composed hundreds of verses on the love story and many types of Chinese opera tell the story.

The Chinese people believe that the star Vega(织女星), east of the Milky Way, is Zhi Nu and, at the constellation of Aquila(天鹰座), on the western side of the Milky Way, Niu Lang waits for his wife.

Zhi Nu was said to be the youngest of seven daughters of the Queen of Heaven. With her sisters, she worked hard to weave beautiful clouds in the sky, while Niu Lang was a poor orphan cowherd, driven out of his home by his elder brother and his cruel wife.

Niu Lang lamented over his lonely and poor life with an old cow, his only friend and companion. The magical cow kindly told him of a way to find a beautiful and nice woman as his life companion.

Under the direction of the cow, Niu Lang went to the riverside on an evening, where the seven fairies slipped out of their heavenly palace to bathe.

He took one of the beautiful silk dresses the fairies had left on the bank. When the fairies left the water, tthe youngest couldn‘‘t find her clothes and had to see her sisters fly back to heaven without her.

Then Niu Lang came out with the dress and asked the youngest fairy, Zhi Nu, to stay with him.

Several years passed on Earth, which were only a few days in heaven. Niu Lang and Zhi Nu lived happily together and had two children before the Queen of Heaven discovered Zhi Nu‘‘s absence.

She was so annoyed she had Zhi Nu brought back to heaven. Seeing his beloved wife flying in the sky, Niu Lang was terrified. He caught sight of the cowhide hanging on a wall. The magical cow had told him before dying of old age: "Keep the cowhide(牛皮) for emergency use."

Putting the cowhide on, he went after his wife with his two children.

With the help of the cowhide, Niu Lang was able to follow Zhi Nu into heaven. He was about to reach his wife when the Queen showed up and pulled off her hairpin to draw a line between the two. The line became the Silver River in heaven, or the Milky Way.

Zhi Nu went back to the heavenly workshop, going on weaving the clouds. But she was so sad, and missed her husband across the Silver River so much that the clouds she weaved seemed sad. Finally, the Queen showed a little mercy, allowing the couple to meet once every year on the Silver River

很久以前，有一个跟着哥嫂过活的孤儿，既聪明又勤快，可嫂嫂仍嫌弃他，天不亮就赶他上山放牛，大家都叫他牛郎。几年后，哥嫂和牛郎分了家，狼心的嫂嫂只给他一间破茅房、一头老牛。从此，牛郎白天放牛、砍柴，晚上就和老牛同睡在那间破茅房内。一天，牛郎赶牛走进了一片陌生的树林，这里山青水秀、鸟语花香。牛郎见到九个仙女驾着祥云落在河的草地上，然后脱去五彩霓裳，跳进清澈见底的河水里，牛郎盯着一个最年轻是美丽的仙女看入了神，这时老牛突然说话了："她是天上的织女，只要拿走五彩霓裳，她就会做你的妻子。"牛郎悄悄地沿着树从，悄悄拿走了织女的五彩霓裳。天近午时，其他仙女纷纷穿起五彩霓裳，驾着祥云而去。唯独找不到五彩霓裳的织女留下了。这时，牛郎从树后走出，请求织女做他的妻子。织女见牛郎忠厚老实，勤劳健壮，便脉脉含羞地点了点头。牛郎织女喜结良缘后，男耕女织，互敬互爱。两年后，织女生下一男一女。然而天帝闻知织女下嫁人间，勃然大怒。七月初七，王母奉旨带着天兵天将捉了织女。悲痛欲绝的牛郎在老牛的帮助下，用萝筐挑着儿女追上天去。眼看追上了，王母拔下金簪一划，牛郎脚下立刻出现一条波涛汹涌的天河。肝肠寸断的织女和肩挑儿女的牛郎，一个在河东一个在河西，遥望对泣。哭声感动了喜鹊，霎时无数的喜鹊飞向天河，搭起一座鹊桥，牛郎织女终于可以在鹊桥上相会了。王母无奈，只好允许牛郎织女每年的七月初七在桥上相会一次。

当然，这只是个传说。乞巧的仪式源自古代织女桑神的原始信仰。这种信仰结合了牛郎织女每年七月七日相会的说法，成了我们今时今日的七夕七巧民间信仰。

在我国，农历七月初七，人们俗称"七夕节",也有人称之为"乞巧节"或"女儿节",这是中国传统节日中最具浪漫色彩的一个节日，也是过去姑娘们最为重视的日子。其实不仅仅是汉族，壮族、满族、朝鲜族等也有过"七夕节"的习俗。不过，随着西方"情人节"流入中土，"七夕节"逐渐又被人称为中国的"情人节".然而她在年轻人中的影响力，却远不及每年阳历2月14日的西方"情人节".不光如此，象这样历史悠久且文化内涵深厚、有如此美丽传说的节日，竟越来越不受社会重视，越来越受冷落，是世界变化得太快?还是节日不够现代跟不上时代?牛郎织女难道真的会被中国人遗弃吗?"七夕节"受冷落迫使我们的目光又聚焦到中国传统节日的兴衰上。农历七月初七--七夕节

民间爱情传说之一的牛郎织女的故事。

七夕节始终和牛郎织女的传说相连，这是一个很美丽，千古流传的爱情故事，是我国四大民间爱情传说之一。

相传在很早以前，南阳城西牛家庄里有个聪明、忠厚的小伙子，父母早亡，只好跟着哥哥嫂子度日，嫂子马氏为人狠毒，经常虐待他，逼他干很多的活，一年秋天，嫂子逼他去放牛，给他九头牛，却让他等有了十头牛时才能回家，牛郎无奈只好赶着牛出了村。

……

一天，天上的织女和诸仙女一起下凡游戏，在河里洗澡，牛郎在老牛的帮助下认识了织女，二人互生情意，后来织女便偷偷下凡，来到人间，做了牛郎的妻子。织女还把从天上带来的天蚕分给大家，并教大家养蚕，抽丝，织出又光又亮的绸缎。

牛郎和织女结婚后，男耕女织，情深意重，他们生了一男一女两个孩子，一家人生活得很幸福。但是好景不长，这事很快便让天帝知道，王母娘娘亲自下凡来，强行把织女带回天上，恩爱夫妻被拆散。

牛郎上天无路，还是老牛告诉牛郎，在它死后，可以用它的皮做成鞋，穿着就可以上天。牛郎按照老牛的话做了，穿上牛皮做的鞋，拉着自己的儿女，一起腾云驾雾上天去追织女，眼见就要追到了，岂知王母娘娘拔下头上的金簪一挥，一道波涛汹涌的天河就出现了，牛郎和织女被隔在两岸，只能相对哭泣流泪。他们的忠贞爱情感动了喜鹊，千万只喜鹊飞来，搭成鹊桥，让牛郎织女走上鹊桥相会，王母娘娘对此也无奈，只好允许两人在每年七月七日于鹊桥相会。

后来，每到农历七月初七，相传牛郎织女鹊桥相会的日子，姑娘们就会来到花前月下，抬头仰望星空，寻找银河两边的牛郎星和织女星，希望能看到他们一年一度的相会，乞求上天能让自己能象织女那样心灵手巧，祈祷自己能有如意称心的美满婚姻，由此形成了七夕节。

[初中英语作文七夕节

导语：When there is no hope there can be no endeavour.下面是yuwenmi小编为还在备考的同学整理的优秀英语素材，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

Actions speak louder than words.

事实胜於雄辩。

Adversity leads to prosperity.

逆境迎向昌盛。

A fall into the pit, a gain in your wit.

吃一堑，长一智。

A friend in need is a friend indeed.

患难朋友才是真朋友。

A friend is a second self.

朋友是另一个我。

A friend is best found in adversity.

患难见真友。

All time is no time when it is past.

光阴一去不复返。

All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy; all play and no work makes Jack a mere boy.

只工作，不玩耍，聪明孩子要变傻;尽玩耍，不学习，聪明孩子没出息。

A near friend is better than a far-dwelling kinsman.

远亲不如近邻。

An idle youth, a needy age.

少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲。

Business before pleasure.

事业在先，享乐在後。

Diligence is near success.

勤奋近乎成功。

Diligence is the mother of good luck.

刻苦是成功之母。

Diligence is the mother of success.

勤奋是成功之母。

Education has for its object the formation of character.

教育的目的在於培养品德。

Every brave man is a man of his word.

勇敢的人都是信守诺言的人。

Every man is the architect of his own fortune.

每个人都是他自己命运的建诛师。

Every man is the master of his own fortune.

每个人都是他自己的命运的主宰。

Failure is the mother of success.

失败是成功之母。

Faith will move mountains.

精诚所至，金石为开。

Friendship ---- one soul in two bodies.

友谊是两人一条心。

Grasp all, lose all.

贪多必失。

He alone is poor who does not possess knowledge.

没有知识，才是贫穷。

Health is above wealth.

健康胜於财富。

Health is better than wealth.

健康胜於财富。

He who does not advance falls backward.

不进则退。

Honesty is the best policy.

诚实是上策。

Hope is life and life is hope.

希望才有人生，人生要有希望。

Idle young, needy old.

少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲。

If you dont aim high you will never hit high.

不立大志，难攀高峰。

I might say that success is won by three things: first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort.

成功之道唯三点∶努力、努力、再努力。

Improve your time and your time will improve you.

珍惜时间，时间才会珍惜你。

In doing we learn.

行而知。

Industry if fortunes right hand, and frugality her left.

勤勉是幸福的右手，节俭是幸福的左手。

In lifes earnest battle they only prevail, who daily march onward and never say fail.

在人生的搏斗中，只有日日前进不甘失败的人，才能获胜。

It is dogged does it.

天下无难事，只怕有心人。

Judge not according to the appearance.

不要以貌取人。

Labour is often the father of pleasure.

勤劳常为快乐之源。

Learning without thought is labour lost; thought without learning is perilous.

学而不思则罔，思而不学则殆。

Like tree, like fruit.

有其因必有其果。

Manners make the man.

礼貌造就人。

Never neglect an opportunity for improvement.

抓住大好时机，切莫等闲错过。

Never too old to learn.

学到老，学不了。

No great loss without some small gain.

塞翁失马，安知非福。

No one can call back yesterday.

往日不复返。

No sooner said than done.

言而必行。

No sweet without some sweat.

不劳则无获。

Nothing is difficult to a man who wills.

世上无难事，只怕有心人。

Nothing is impossible to willing mind .

有志者事竟成。

Nothing is impossible to the man who will try.

天下无难事，只怕不努力。

Nothing is really beautiful but truth.

只有真理才是真美。

No time like the present.

只争朝夕。

One cannot put back the clock.

光阴一去不复返。

Overdone is worse than undone.

过犹不及。

Paddle your own canoe.

自立更生，自食其力。

Perseverance is vital to success.

不屈不挠是成功之本。

Second thoughts are best.

三思而行，再思可也。

Selt-trust is the essence of heroism.

自信是英雄的本色。

Self-trust is the first secret of success.

自信是成功的首要秘诀。

Success belongs to the persevering.

坚持到底必获胜利。坚持就是胜利。

Success grows out of struggles to overcome difficulties.

成功来自於克服困难的斗争。

The first element of success is the determination to succeed.

成功的首要因素是要有成功的决心。

The more a man knows, the less he knows he knows.

懂得越多，就越知道自己懂得不多。

Union is strength.

团结就是力量。

Virtue is a jewel of great price.

美德是无价之宝。

Waste of time is the most extravagant and costly of all expenses.

浪费时间是一切花费中最奢侈豪华的费用。

When there is no hope there can be no endeavour.

没有希望就不会努力。

Without a friend the world is a wilderness.

没有朋友，世界就等於一片荒野。

You cannot judge a tree by its bark.

人不可貌相。

My name is Lily， a Grade eight student。 I like my school life very much because it’s really enjoyable。 In school， I spent the time with my lovely classmates and teachers。 They all help me a lot with my study and life。

I have six courses each day from Monday to Friday and forty minutes each。 The courses I learn in school are Chinese， mathematics， English， geography， sports and so on。 I like Englishmost because it’s very interesting and my teacher is so lovely and kind。 In one word， my school life makes me happy and I learn a lot in school。

写作包括两部分，一是要求在35分钟内写一篇150字左右的短文，二是要求在10分钟内写一个50--60字的便条。这两部分均为命题作文，作文内容与大学生的日常生活、学习都密切相关，另外也有社会热点问题，比如环保、旅游、健身等，题目理解起来都比较容易。

短文写作部分文体为议论文，一般采用三段式的结构，第一段为论点，第二段为论据，第三段为结论。最高要求为文章内容切题，思想表达清楚，论据充分，论证严密，基本无语言错误。要想写好一篇文章，应该注意一下写作步骤：

1.审题：作文评分的第一个要求就是内容切题，因此审题特别关键。专业四级作文都是命题作文，而且多有中文提示或提纲，所以你首先应了解命题的基本要求，理解题目的真正意图，然后确定提纲中的关键词及各要点间的逻辑，整理自己的思路，对自己所想到的内容进行组织和全面安排。尤其对要讨论的问题，该涉及的内容，所需的事实、例证、阐述、说明和总结等，在头脑中形成一个整体的构思。

2.组织段落：构思好之后，根据构思的提纲，运用选好的材料，恰当地运用连词，合理安排段落，使文章条理清楚、内容连贯。段落的组织主要是通过扩展句对主题句的支持或说明来进行的。各段的主题句在审题构思时就应基本形成，主题句确定下来，接着就是通过一系列的扩展句，来说明、论证或阐述主题句的思想。常见的段落展开方法有列举、举例、比较和对比、因果、叙述、归类、下定义等，考试时应灵活运用。

3.修改：也就是说要删除与主题不相干的内容，检查句子时态、语态等。特别应注意单词的正确拼写；字母大小写和标点符号；数的一致性（包括主语与谓语以及名词与其限定语的单复数一致性）；指代关系（包括指代的一致性和代词的选用）；动词形式（时态、语态、语气）等方面。

关于考试过程中短文写作的时间分配问题。我们知道，短文写作的时间为35分钟, 要力争写完写好, 这就要求考生做到有条不紊，忙而不乱，充分发挥自己应有的水平。建议按照如下的方案分配时间: 审题1～2分钟；组织素材, 细节和关键词: 4～5分钟；起草: 20～25分钟；修改定稿: 4～5分钟。

最后要说明的是，从某种意义上来说，专业四级考试作文有其固定的写作格式、结构，而对于固定的题型，有固定不变的表达法。因此，大家有理由相信只要训练方法得当，搞好写作是不难的。大家不妨试试多背范文和常用句型，包括各类型作文的开头、结尾句、中间展开、过渡句，以及比较、图表说明等的常用句型和表达法，然后自己多动笔写一写，只要按这样的方法进行练习，相信在一定时间内就可以在写作上取得满意的分数。因为是三段式作文，写作的时候一定注意第一段提出的论点要简洁明了，开门见山；第二段的论据要能充分说明论点，论证条理清楚；第三段的结论要水到渠成，切忌草率，严谨完整的结尾是取得高分的保证。

便条写作最主要的是注意格式正确，交待清楚，比如请柬、贺信、道歉函等，要注意称呼、正文、签名等的格式，一定要把相关的时间、地点、原因及主要事件内容交待清楚。

Marie Curie, as a distinguished female scientists, In eight years time, and just 3,000 were of two different disciplines on the highest scientific crown -- Nobel Prize and the Nobel Prize in Chemistry.

No one has admitted she let such a beautiful and delicate woman to bear the cross of science,and she is going without looking back, in the history of mankind and left their names be eternal. Marie Curies life for the contribution it has made remarkable man. As a great woman, she has won the love and admiration for the people of the world.

However, she refused lifelong wealth, the honor and regard with indifference. She naturally behave but not disclosed to bear fruit, and she has not taken any of the fish for fame, neither helpless. Marie was born with the quality: unwavering character, intellectual perseverance; know all contributions to the spirit of self-sacrifice and not accept any benefits; success is not particularly proud of, scourge can bend the very purity of the soul. Shes all that. Her colorful life than work, or even more commendable.

I am one year older than my cousin. Both of us are the only child in the family, so my cousin and I are very closed, we are just like the sisters. I like to share my secret with my cousin, because I don’t want to tell my parents.

My cousin is a good listener, when I feel not happy, I will tell her about my annoyance, then she will comfort me and make me feel better. When Friday comes, I will ask my cousin to sleep with me, we will talk about a lot of things.

I am so lucky that I have a cousin as my good friends.

我比我的表妹长大了一岁。我们都是家里的独生子女,所以我和我的表妹很亲近,我们就像姐妹一样。我喜欢和我的表妹分享我的秘密,因为我不想告诉父母。我的表妹是一个好的倾听者,当我感到不高兴时,我会告诉她我的烦恼,然后她会安慰我,让我感觉良好。周五时,我会叫我的表妹和我睡觉,我们会谈论很多事情。我很幸运,有一个表妹作为我的好朋友。

[初中英语作文：我的表妹