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初中英语写作常见错误及分析(实用19篇)

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在说明文的写作中,应该注意克服几种常见的毛病

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第一,防止知识性的差错

如有篇写“牛”的习作这样写道:“牛有水牛、黄牛两种,牛是反刍动物,只吃青草,不必喂料。牛都两只角,体强力大,是世界各国普遍使用的耕作工具。”由于写作者对有关牛的知识了解不够,有些只是一知半解。所以写起来造成知识性的错误。世界上牛的品种不只水牛、黄牛两种,杂交品种的牛并不长角;除了青草外,还必须给牛喂其它饲料;世界上也不是普遍使用牛作为耕作工具,牛还有专供食用、奶用或运输用,甚至作为神物崇拜的。

第二避免文体性的错误。

如有篇说明文题为《蚯蚓》,其中写道:“……别看这小动物不惹眼,它可天天在松土、干活,它不讲究吃穿,不讲究休息,不讲住的,不讲报酬,整天埋头苦干,为人们劳作耕地,让作物生长茂盛。我不禁想起我们的老师,他们也有蚯蚓精神。

我愿作一条辛勤劳动的蚯蚓。”

显而易见,这篇习作把一篇说明文写成了一篇借物咏志的抒情散文了。

第三,克服片面性的论述。

如,有篇题为《青蛙》的知识小品,介绍青蛙时写道:“青蛙是两栖、变温的动物,营养价值很高,……”这样定是片面的,青蛙能捕捉害虫,有益于庄稼的生长,只写它营养价值高,不宣传要保护它,饲养它,必然会造成不良社会影响。片面性是不利普及科学知识的。

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篇1:关于故宫的英语作文初中

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The Palace Museum is located on city center in Peking.China is existing

biggest, most integrity of thou building cluster.It is been one of five greatest

temples in the world by the fame.

The Palace Museum start to set up in A.D.1406, the Palace Museum have the

size courtyard more than 90s and the house contain 980 and add up to 8704.the

Palace Museum surroundings surround 12 meters in height, long the Palace Museum

wall of 3400 meters, form is one rectangular city defense, there is 52 meter

wide moat outside the wall surround, formation a fortress of severe barracks.The

Palace Museum has 4 doors, center door Wu door, east door Donghua door, west

door Xihua door, north door Shengwu door.

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篇2:英语写作小技巧

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一. 肯定不如否定好

修辞的使用在书面表达中算作很大的亮点,在高中阶段很少有学生会注重修辞的应用。

双重否定也是种修辞,而且对于考生来说,只要稍加注意,可以在文章中设计双重否定的句子。

例如想表达“邮递员天天准时到”,如果写成The postman comes on time every day,就不如变成双重否定,The postman never fails to come on time,就变成了亮点句,起到强调作用。

“几乎每个人对生活的态度都不同程度受到地震的影响”,写成双重否定There was hardly a man or a woman whose attitude towards life had not been affected by the earthquake.

应用类似的修辞会在中为同学们加分。

二. 陈述不如倒装妙

在书面表达中阅卷老师喜欢看到的高级语法共有五种:倒装,强调,从句,独立主格和分词结构,以及虚拟语气。

倒装是一种最简单易行的使句子呈现亮点的方法。在高中阶段只需掌握倒装的四种形式,就足以应对书面表达。

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篇3:关于生活英语作文初中

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Nowadays, with the development of technology, the market competition is

fierce and people feel great pressure. In order to improve the working

efficiency, they force themselves to work overtime. However, they are not

machine and need to slow down life pace, or they will break down sooner or

later.

We cant slow down the working hour, but we can control our private time. A

lot of young people mix with working time and private time, so they cant enjoy

their life and feel depressed all the time. The smart person will find the

balance. They will put aside the working stuff when the clock tells them that it

is time to be off work and find the way to release their pressure, such as

KTV.

Spending the time with friends and families is always a good way to enjoy

our time. No matter what kind of difficulties we face, when we recall of these

happy moments, we will have motivation to move on. We cant choose everything we

want, but we can adjust ourselves to the environment and keep the good mood.

Once life pace slows down, we control our life.

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篇4:初中英语作文春节

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On the thirty, is the new years day, everywhere permeated with a festive atmosphere. Everybody happily sit together to eat dinner, I love to eat fish balls on the table, my sister and brother Sweet and Sour Spare Ribs favorite, favorite braised fish in soy sauce. After the dinner, my brother and sister began to set off firecrackers and fireworks. At this time, I brought a carefully lit fireworks, fireworks, and for a while a green spray, spray red, while spraying purple, is really fun.

My sister brought the firecrackers, the "popping" and "shout shout" sound like thunder, scared us everywhere escape. Brother of fireworks and crackers, is even more magical, while fly to the sky, while flying on the roof of the night dressed as the day, we see dazzling.

Just as we are playing vigorously, "when Dangdang, Dangdang", the bell of zero hour is ringing, the new year begins. Lets all wish the happy new year and the happy family together.

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篇5:初中英语作文旅游

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Last winter holiday, I went to Harbin with my mother. It‘s very cold in winter. There is snow and ice everywhere and you are always in a white world. You must wear warm clothes. The most exciting thing is playing with snow. Skating is also very interesting there. I will always remember Harbin, for the snow, the ice and all the beautiful things. I love Harbin.

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篇6:电脑游戏初中生英语作文

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题目:李小虎沉迷于电脑游戏中,影响了学习。作为他的好朋友,你打算怎么帮他呢?

请用下面所给的提示词写一篇短文。

提示词: give up concentrate on be (become)interested in

Li Xiaohu spent too much time playing computer games and he fell behind others. As a good/close friend of his, I must do something to help him.

First, I think it’s very important for him to learn lessons well. He should spend most of his time on his study instead of computer games. Secondly, I must tell him that playing computer games too much is bad for his health, especially for his eyes. So he must give it up. I can play more sports with him after school. Maybe he will become more interested in sports than computer games. And then Ill ask him to concentrate more on his study. Of course, I will try my best to help him with all his subjects. I think I can do it in many fun ways and let him find much fun in studying. At the same time, Ill ask both his parents and our teachers to help him, too. If I try these, Im sure he will make great progress soon.

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篇7:初中期末考试分析

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现实生活中没有完美的人生,正如舞台上没有纯粹的喜剧.

海浪不回避礁石的撞击,才得以壮观,人生不拒绝遗憾的存在,才得以乐观.

--题记

这两句话我很喜欢,正和我这次考试一样,这次考试不是完美的,但现实中没有全是完美的,正如第一句现实生活中没有完美的人生,这次的失利不代表失败,一次的失败不代表永久的失败,这次的失败并不能说明什么.只要在哪里跌倒,就在哪里爬起,这次的失败不是给下次的成功有了经验吗,有了失败才有成功,失败乃是成功之母嘛.而返回到前面说,人的一生不可能是一帆风顺的,哪能不经历点风风雨雨,"不经历风雨怎么见彩虹,没有人能随随便便成功",这句话说的不也就是吗.这次考试考完了就过去了,不要再去想,只要知道自己错在哪里,就是最好的,也可以说是一种进步,知道了哪里错还要去填补这快空缺,补得严严实实,缝不可透.第二句名句也是说不经历点挫折失败,哪能有成功胜利.

虽然刚才一直都在安慰自己,可是我还是按捺不住自己的情感,豆大的眼珠总是在眼圈晃动,这回考试辜负了太多人的期望,就不用一一再提,我真的自己也很不甘心,很伤心,辜负了你们,对不起,真的对不起,辜负了你们的一片苦苦期望,爸爸妈妈.我的全家人.好友.y友.老师....都对我们寄予了很高的期望,可是我却....虽然老师对我的成绩十分满意,可就是让我数学再努努力,而我的其他家人好友们都对我的成绩难以置信,怎么才考这么点,怎么别的时候不失礼,非要在这个时候失礼,这是多么重要的一次考试,但是我还是希望过去就过去了,不要再提了,提也只能让我更伤心。这次考试是普遍的没考好,可大姨对我说,不要把普遍当作理由,我会记住的257d,深深地记住。爸爸也对我说,第一名只有一个。难道不是吗,虽然是普遍没考好,但也有考好的呀,我还是要象他们奋进,需要的则还是努力,假期里好好弥补自己的不足,再一步地提高提高,我相信,只要有我的努力,就一定会有我的成功,只要我努力了,我能行.不经一番彻骨寒,怎得梅花扑鼻香.我到下次考试时一定不会再辜负你们了,争取升学考试时一鸣惊人.你们相信我吗.你们还会一如既往地鼓励我支持我吗.我在你们眼里还是个优等生吗.我希望还能象以前一样,你们还能鼓励我支持我相信我,好吗.在升学考试时我一定要给你们一个惊喜.

不再想了,过去就过去了,笑对人生,人生路上坎坎坷坷,这算什么."风雨中,这点痛算什么,擦干泪不要怕,至少我们还有梦...."抬起头扬起胸,以后的路还很长....

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篇8:高中英语写作高级句型汇总

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1) 主语+ cannot emphasize the importance of … too much.(再怎么强调……的重要性也不为过。)例如:We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much.

2)There is no need for sb to do sth. for sth.(某人没有必要做……),例如:There is no need for you to bring more food. 不需你拿来更多的食物了。

3)By +doing…,主语can …. (借着……,……能够……),例如:By taking exercise, we can always stay healthy. 借着做运动,我们能够始终保持健康。

4) … enable + sb.+ to + do…. (……使……能够……),例如:Listening to music enables us to feel relaxed. 听音乐使我们能够感觉轻松。

5) On no account can we + do…. (我们绝对不能……),例如:On no account can we ignore the value of knowledge.我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值。

6) What will happen to sb.? (某人将会怎样?), 例如:What will happen to the orphan? 那个孤儿将会怎样?

7)For the past + 时间,主语 + 现在完成式…. (过去……年来,……一直……)例如:For the past two years,I have been busy preparing for the examination. 过去两年来,我一直忙着准备考试。

8)It pays to + do….(……是值得的。)例如:It pays to help others. 帮助别人是值得的。

9)主语+ be based on….(以……为基础),例如:The progress of thee society is based on harmony.社会的进步是以和谐为基础的。

10)主语 + do one’s best to do….(尽全力去……),例如:We should do our best to achieve our goal in life.我们应尽全力去达成我们的人生目标

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篇9:初中初一英语介绍自己的作文范文

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Dear friend,

My name is Wang Lin . Now I live in Hangzhou , China. I want to find a pen pal in England. I’m now 14 years old . I speak Chinese .And I can speak a little English. I like sports ,swimming is my favorite . I also like playing the computer games . My favorite subject in school is math. I like to

go to movies with my friends. My favorite movie is Beauty and Beast . Now I live with my parents .

Can you write to me soon ?

Wang Lin

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篇10:初中英语作文的写作方法

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不少同学在问了,英语作文怎么写?如何写好英语作文,下面是小编为大家收集的初中英语作文的写作方法,欢迎阅读。

初一英语写作题,题材一般是写人、写事、写物、写景、日记、书信、通知、便条等文体。一般来说,不同的写作题材,它的人物,时间,写作的重点也是不尽相同的。下面结合一些常见的题型介绍一下写作的注意事项以及写作技巧。

各地的评分标准略有差异,但是都包括以下几个方面:整体印象、语言表达、词数规定等几方面内容。我们在写作中要尽量避免扣分,争取有加分点。当然用英文写作不同于用母语那样得心应手,常常会受到生词、语法、惯用法的限制,只要同学们平时注意两种语言的异同性,抓住写作要点,也可妙笔生花。

1、为了保证文章层次分明、条理清楚,要把时间固定下来,如:记叙一件事要用过去时;写经常发生的事或对人物的描写,要用一般现在时。整个文章中的人称要一致,首尾呼应,不要随意改动,以免造成误解。

2、不要为了追求“一鸣惊人”而去找一些生冷的词汇,对这些一知半解的词你不会用,不知道如何搭配,结果可能适得其反,使文章显的生硬、不协调,甚至错误百出,所以要使用有把握的词,避免不必要的失分。比如说发生了一起意外事件,我们通常用“have an accident ”来表示,不要错误的使用“have an incident”。

3、注意不同语言的表达习惯,也是写好英语作文的重要环节,如“我的理想是做一名歌手”,很多同学写成“My ambition is to do/make a singer,” “to do”表示“做”或者“干”,“to make”表示“制作”,而“做一名歌手”则表示“成为一名歌手”应该用“be/become a singer”;又如“看书、看报”应用“read a book/newspaper”,而不是“see a book/newspaper”。因此,平时应该注意不同语言的表达习惯,切忌望文生义或一味生搬硬套。

4、有些同学因怕出错而只写短句或简单句,写出的文章过于幼稚、空洞乏味。要使文章有血有肉就要把平时学的知识用进去,如:定语从句、宾语从句、非谓语动词和比较等句型,关键时用上一、二个,就能使文章不同凡响,更有文采,特别是对关联词的使用,如“so that”、“not…but ”“not only...but also”等,会使你的文章逻辑结构紧密、层次鲜明、条理清楚,更能显示出你的英文功底,但要做到这些并非一日之功,要靠平时的不断训练和积累。

5、最简单的增分点就是认真的书写。工整漂亮的书写会给评卷老师留下美好的第一印象,在扣分时自然会“手下留情”,而且很多地区都在写作上有1分的书写分。只要平时多下点功夫,得到这一分并不难。

注意事项

最后将英语写作的基本步骤和技巧归纳为以下几个环节:

1、细心审题细读题目中每一项提示或观察所给的每一幅画,明确文章的中心思想,弄清题意,确定写作体裁,掌握所要表达的要点做到心中有数,避免随心所欲,文不对题。

2、理顺要点在所给提示或图上标出要点,然后按事件先后的顺序或各要点之间的内在联系排序,分出层次。如果是看图作文,则要按图构思,这样做既可避免要点遗漏,又可使表达内容条理清楚。

3、构成框架将理顺的要点或每幅图画的含义加以连贯,构成写作的整体框架,进一步定人称、定时态语态、定顺序、定段落、定开头结尾。基本框架构成后,写作就有了把握。

4、组织句子用自己最熟悉的短语或句型将理顺的要点逐句表达出来,多用简单句,用有把握的复合句。要扬长避短,避难就易。若遇到表达障碍,可换一种说法,将一句变成两、三句,只求达意。

5、串句成篇将写好的句子连贯地组织起来,注意上下句的逻辑关系,适当采用递进、让步、转折、因果等关联词语,使短文浑然一体,层次分明,过渡自然。6、检查修改文章草成后,默读1~2遍,检查修改,尤其要注意人称、大小写、拼写、习惯用语、格式有无错误,要点有无遗漏,文句有无语病,词数是否恰当,行文是否连贯。

英语写作水平的提高是一个渐进的过程,只要同学们在平时多加训练,多读文章,做一个有心人,就能在英语作文中取得理想的成绩

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篇11:英语写作题型分析及方法指导

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英语写作说难也不难,下面是语文迷为大家整理的一些英语写作方法指导,供大家参考选择。

2014年6月的3套题的考查形式是这样的:write an essay explaining “why it is unwise to jump to conclusion upon seeing or hearing something”, “why it is unwise to put all your eggs in one basket”, “why it is unwise to judge a person by their appearance”;

2014年12月的3套题的出题形式是这样的:write an essay based on the picture below, you should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then discuss “whether technology is indispensable in education”, “whether there is a shortcut to learning”, “what qualities an employer should look for in job applicants”;

2015年6月的3套题的出题形式是这样的:write an essay commenting on the saying “knowledge is a treasure, but practice is the key to it”, “if you can’t do great things, do small things in great way”, commenting on Albert Einstein’s remark “I have no special talents, but I am only passionately curious”。

但是,透过这些变化的考查形式,我们也可以发现不变的考查方向,不论是2014年6月的谚语或名言原因阐述型,还是2014年12月的漫画或图片描述型,亦或是2015年6月的俗语或名言评论型,在写作体裁上都是一样的,都是在要求考生写出一篇夹叙夹议,以议论为主的议论文。

六级写作方法指导

议论文写作是六级考试的重点,考生既要注意旗帜鲜明地说出自己的观点,围绕观点展开深层次的论述,更要注意综合运用一些高端词汇和句型来表达自己的观点,尽量避免套用一些常见模板,从而给阅卷老师留下耳目一新的感觉,取得高分。

具体而言,六级议论文通常都可以采用“三段式”的结构。

第一段开门见山,直接提出观点;

第二段对观点展开论述,先陈述理论,在列举事例;

最后一段再次回应论点,也可提出措施,再次强调论点。

对于谚语或名言类文章,首先,要注意充分理解和深刻挖掘其中的道理,不能仅从字面去理解,更多的是要结合实际理解其深刻的寓意,其次,要选择有典型性更有说服性的事例展开论述,把道理讲透并让人信服。谚语类题型近年来出现频率越来越高,所以,考生要注意加强日常的积累,多积累多思考,只有这样,才能在考试时不慌不忙、有理有据地写好谚语类作文。图画类作文是议论文的一种,区别在于该类作文要求考生首先要理解图画内容并在首段将其清晰的描述出来。第二、三段的写作与其他议论文是一样的。

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篇12:,初中写我的妈妈英语作文

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My mother is thirty-four years old and does not look old. Melon seeds face a pair of watery eyes, tall tall, the body is not fat nor thin.

Mom loves me more attention to my study. Some time ago Galen English teacher told us there is a national English game, hope we can actively participate in, show yourself. I signed up for an English song contest. Big after that, my mother began to go online to find songs, lock the song after her mother to learn to sing their own, every day humming ah, after the concert began to teach me.

Mothers song for me is the English version of the Girl with Wings Wings. At that time and in the final review stage, immediately to test, my mother did not delay my review of the case every day out of an hour to help me practice singing, correct my pronunciation. I have successfully passed the preliminary round of the stadium, Jinzhou City, the semi-finals, entered the finals of the Liao Dynasty Division, if the Liao in the Division can take on the National Finals, and that I hope for a long time.

Mother is very honorable parents. Once, my grandmother was sick, slightly cerebral thrombosis was admitted to the hospital. This can be anxious mother, and she every day in the hospital care grandmother, wash her face to help her practice walking, busy outside. Grandmother came home after discharge, my mother and take the housework, laundry, cooking, mopping the land ... ... every year when the mother will not forget to give grandparents to buy some gifts. I want my mother as an example, but also a good boy to honor their parents.

Every summer, my mother always said he was fat, eat two meals a day, you know why she did so because she wanted to lose weight, wear fashion clothes, so that they become more beautiful.

This is my mother, sometimes gentle, sometimes severe, sometimes cute, I love my beautiful mom.

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篇13:初中英语作文有翻译

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As a middle school student, I learn many subjects, I study so hard every day. When I get home, I will do my homework and then go over the book. But when holiday comes, I feel a little confused, because I don’t want to study and do something new. Then I don’t know what to do, my mind get blank. I decide to develop my interest. Some day, I happened to see a tennis match and I couldn’t stop watching, then I fell in love with tennis. So I started to learn playing tennis, I felt so happy. Now tennis is my favorite sport, I find a way to relax myself.

作为一个中学生,我学许多科目,我每天那么努力学习。当我回家时,我会做作业,然后复习书本。但当假期来临的时候,我感到有点困惑,因为我不想学习,想做一些新的事情。我就不知道要做什么,我的头脑一片空白。我决定培养我的兴趣。有一天,我碰巧看到一场网球比赛,我无法停止下来看,然后我爱上了网球。因此我开始学习打网球,我感到很高兴。现在网球是我最喜欢的运动,我找到一个方法来放松自己。

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篇14:初中英语满分

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Im always working hard for a bright future. I imagine what my life in 20

years will be like.

In 20 years, I will play an important role in my family. I will take care

of my parents. Maybe I will be married and have a lovely child. In my free time,

I will get together with my good friends to talk about the past school life. We

can also do other things such as gardening and doing yoga. Whats more, I will

have a job and face new challenges. I think I will be a doctor and help

patients. Last but not least, maybe I will have a robot. It can help me a lot in

my daily life.

In a word, I hope my life in 20 years will be a better one!

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篇15:关于夏天的初中英语作文

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篇16:初中日记和写作教案

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教学目标:

1、 知识与能力:通过片段训练,学生能对一件事情做到具体叙述。

2、 过程与方法:通过演示实验、练习,掌握一定的写作技巧。

3、 情感态度与价值观:营造浓郁的文学氛围,激发学习文学热情,陶冶学生心情。 教学重点:片段练习

教学难点:通过片段练习,掌握如何使作文具体化的技巧方法

教学设想:演示实验—练习—分析—片段练习—方法总结

教学过程:

一、组织教学、课堂导入:

同学们在学习语文的过程中感到最可怕的是写作文,感到最难的`也是写作文,胶尽脑汁而无处下笔,搜肠刮肚找不到一个恰当的词语。不由的发出感叹:“作文难啊,难于上晴天”。其实作文难写吗?答案是肯定的!真那么难写吗?亦不然!

因为在祖国的语言文字里,有黄河的不羁和刚强,有长江的奔放和潇洒,有泰山的威武,有草原的粗犷,有彩陶的古朴典雅,有花椒的芳香四溢。有先秦的繁星明月:是皎洁的汉宫秋月,是珠落玉盘的琵琶,是高山流水的琴瑟,是“推”“敲”不定的月下门,是庄子的逍遥游,是孔子的颠沛流利,是魏王的老骥之志,是诸葛的锦囊妙计,是君子好逑的《诗三百》,是魂兮归来的《楚词》,是执过羊鞭的《兵法》,是受过宫刑的《史记》,是李太白的杯中酒,是曹雪芹的梦中泪,是千古绝唱的诗词曲赋,是功垂青史的《四库全书》……它不仅是我们每个人学习、工作、生活的工具,而且负载着丰富的情感,深邃的思想,人类的文明。有了这些,我们写作文怎么会难写呢?何愁写不好呢?这就要我们平时养成多读书、读好书的习惯,写好读书笔记。因为书到用时方恨少。这节课老师和同学们一起解决作文中的一个难题:如何使作文具体化?

二、活动一:

(一) 、教师演示:教师手拿一枚硬币,硬币从手中滑落,掉到讲桌上后又掉到地上。

1、要求:

(1)、每一个同学仔细观察这种现象,然后用一句话描写这种现象。

(2)、同学之间交流、分享。

摘录例句:

(1)、有一枚硬币从老师手中滑落,掉到了地上。

(2)、有一枚硬币从老师胖乎乎的手中滑落,掉到了讲桌上,然后又像一个小精灵叮叮当当的掉到了地上,在地上画了一个优美的圆弧后平静地躺在哪儿。

2、分析:

在同学们写的句子中你认为哪一句写的最好?原因是?第二句比第一句增加了一些内容,说说增加了哪些内容?

通过讨论分析得出结论:都认为第二句好。第二句不仅写出了硬币从哪儿掉下来,更写出了老师的手,硬币掉到地上的响声,还运用拟人的手法,写出了硬币的姿态,写出了情感。

3、教师点拨:

我们在课堂上要会听课:伸开耳朵去细心的听,睁大眼睛去仔细的看,张开嘴巴去详细的说,用心去细细的想,让后用笔去写写、记记——你看看你变的“聪”明了。在前面的学习讨论中,逐步扩充,最终使句子完整、生动、形象,我们不妨给它取名“步步追问”。用这个方法可以把内容写的具体一些。但是同学们想想:在现实生活中,我们遇到的事情,能不能每件事情都要去演示,都要去追问,这显然是不可能的!有些事情我们不能去演示,只能通过联想和想象去解决,使情节更合理,我们不妨叫它“想象延伸”。如“绿色”、王羲之“之”字写法、“台阶”你可以想到什么?

4、学生讨论总结:

由“绿色”想象到:“水、植物、春天、军人、生命、和平、希望、朝气、青春……等”;

由王羲之“之”字写法想象到:“要有个性、不要墨守成规、行行出状元……等”;

有“台阶”想象到:“一切从零开始、成功的道路的不平坦的、人梯精神、永不止步……等”。这样以来我们的思维变的活跃了,视野开阔了,作文变得好写了。

5教师点拨:我们每天生活在祖国温暖的怀抱之中,生活在亲人、老师、同学的关爱之中、生活在亲情之中,其乐融融。要我们去刻画一个人物的肖像,同学们想想,上面两种方法是否可行?显然以上两种方法是不不够的,我们必须对一个人的某一部位,某个方面进行精细的描绘,才能表现出这个人的优秀品质,我们不妨叫它“局部雕刻”。举例:《范进中举》中胡屠户形象。

三、活动二:根据以上方法进行片段练习。

(一)、练习话题1:我惭愧。

1、公式:具体心理形象=步步追问+想像延伸

2、注意:

(1)、是什么原因惭愧?

(2)、惭愧时是什么表情?

(3)、惭愧时是什么心理?

3、师生互动交流,分享成果。

4、教师范文:

我惭愧。我站在老师跟前,耷拉着脑袋,脸火烧火燎的,两只手没处放了,只是无意识的拧着衣角,两脚无力的支撑着身体。心里好像打翻了五味瓶,酸甜苦辣咸,什么滋味儿都有。同学们信任我,选我当班干部,我却做出这等丢人现眼的事儿,我对的起谁?是家里的父母,还是学校里的老师。我的目光在地面上搜寻着,如果有个缝儿的话,我一定会钻进去。

(二)练习话题2:既喜欢又讨厌的同桌。

1、公式:具体人物形象=步步追问+想象延伸+局部雕刻

2、注意:

(1)喜欢到什么程度?

(2)讨厌到什么程度?

(3)为什么会有这样两重情况?

(4)特别注意人物刻画。

3、学生练笔、师生互动、交流分享成果。

4、教师范文:

1、大胆夸张,来点叛逆。

范文:

已知:数学卷2张,语文卷2张,物理、化学卷各1张,英语卷2张, 求:能否在眼皮打架之前做完?

解:因为:一天24小时,在校上课学习时间9个小时,睡觉休息时间8个小时,吃喝拉撒、路上时间2个小时,数学卷2个小时,语文卷2个小时,物理化学卷2个小时,英语卷2个小时。

所以:总共需要27个小时。 结果:在眼皮打架之前不能完成。

2、巧妙悖论,来点幽默。

范文:

3、准确扑捉,画一副漫画。

范文:

4、学以致用,历练身手。

范文:

五、总结:文似看山不喜平。所以除了引人眼球的标题,一锤定音的开头,回头百媚生的结尾外,还要做到词语生动、句式灵活、善用修辞、文体立意等诸多方面。做生活中的有心人,在生活中运用语文,在生活中学会语文。

六、作业:以“他在娘的脸上亲了一下”为话题,写150字左右的片段。

七、板书设计

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篇17::初中写秋雨的英语作文

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How is it, you do not believe it? Look, she has left her footprints everywhere.

The air is so fresh, the weather is so blurred. The sun is warmer. Her million gold happy kiss all things, so gentle, so comfortable.

Its time to fall!

Section just after the autumnal equinox, they feel a bit cool. Gradually yellow leaves can not withstand the wind and rain to destroy the destruction of a piece of leaf leaves falling in the high and low roof, falling on the road in large and small, falling in criss-crossing the river.

Autumn rain is light blue, crystal clear. 10 million silver, rippling in the air, fans of the veil, draped over the dark faint fields. The rain fell in the water, like a thrown into the crystal jade plate, splashed grain pearls; rain fell on the tree, like to branches with soft hair; rain fell to the ground rolled up a burst of smoke, the land seems Blooming out of a laughing dimple.

The autumn of autumn, grooming the mountains, nourishing the earth. The puddle of water on the ground is full of water. They slowly flow to the big ditch, brought together this years affection and hope of the coming year. This autumn is as if it is sweet wine, dedicated to the breeding of all things of the land, dedicated to the harvest full of joy ... ...

Autumn is not annoying. Behind the misty rain curtain is a sweet smile. It is to celebrate the birthday of the motherland smile; that is the fruit of the mountains and plains of the red face. "Autumn autumn rain sad people" era, in the golden autumn of the motherland, has long gone.

I look up at the blue sky, think the sky is more sunny, the sun is more brilliant, a blossoming light like white clouds, like to the blue sky embroidered with white flowers. This view makes the breathtaking.

Autumn rain is not only wonderful, but also full of new hope.

Ah! Autumn rain - intoxicating autumn rain.

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篇18:关于春节的初中优秀英语作文

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Spring festival is the most important festival in China.During Spring festival,people visit their relatives,sending their best wishes for a new year.Children are the happiest in spring festival.They will receive red envelopes that contain money as new year presents.They can also play crackers and fireworks.Whats more,they are given a lot of freedom,which they have dreammed of for a whole year.During Spring festival,there will be plenty of foods.Thats why many people put on "holiday weight" after Spring festival.When it comes to food,there are many festival specialties.The world famous Jiaozi and Chunjuan(spring roll) have even been accepted by foreigners as fast foods.Spring festival usually comes in Feburary,sometimes earlier.Its a festival full of hope and good wishes.Its a symbol of Chinese culture.

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篇19:成长的初中英语

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Third, I have been standing at a fork mouth of life. Looking back, looking at the footprints of your own growth, it does mean something. Love is Xin Qijis "ugly girl", his first words as we age children from small to large portrait.

"The young do not sorrow taste". Childhood, from just remember to middle school, always feel carefree. Hungry, looking forward to dinner; thirsty, looking forward to drinking water; scared, looking forward to Mom coming; frightened, looking forward to Dads side. These, call it, or just show it with tears and cry, will be able to get satisfactory results. Childhood is so simple, and it is so real. A little bigger, become a teenager, looking forward to be praised by the teacher, looking forward to the applause of the students, looking forward to full marks. When I was praised, like psychological flow with honey; whenever there is out, it went to the jubilant mom and dad to show off a beam with joy. At that time, how simple and innocent.

Now, the childhood in my mind has become an eternal memory, the dream of the flower season is also like a distant landscape, childhood wind like, feel, but can not see, can not touch, there are countless ways of life before, I have to walk with heavy steps wandering. Just like the taste of sorrow now". So, what about the future? Is it to open up life or to enjoy life? Yue Feis sake, Gou hardships, let me dance, father chose the former; comfortable air conditioning, cola fun, crispy potato chips, the excitement of the game so I choose the latter. Both steady stand in the balance at both ends, not the severity of the conflict scale blocking my schedule. Secondary education in less than a year will end after nine years of baptism we have strong body, sucking countless knowledge in the motherland to defeat in the mighty wave crashing on a sandy shore,? No, can not, the process of growth is painful, "enjoy life" although intoxicating, but if our youth long drunk, do not laugh for people?

Therefore, in the face of growth, we must bravely overcome the idea of ease in mind, and open up a perfect life course.

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