淮安英语中考作文评分标准汇集20篇

My name is Joe.I come from England.I live in a very big house with my parents.Now let me show you my house.

我的名字是乔。我来自英国。我和我的父母住在一个大房子。现在让我告诉你我的房子。

This is the living room.I like to sit on the couch to watch TV.There are two bedrooms.One is for my parents;another is for me.My bedroom is not very big but comfortable.I like the kitchen very much，because my parents always cook delicious food for me in the kitchen.The refrigerator is in it.My father and mother put vegetables and meat in the refrigerator.Our bathroom is very beautiful.I take a shower everyday in it.I love my house.

这是起居室。我喜欢坐在沙发上看电视。有两间卧室。一个是我的父母;另一个是我。我的卧室不是很大但很舒适。我很喜欢厨房，因为我的父母总是煮好吃的食物给我在厨房的冰箱。是的。我的父亲和母亲把蔬菜和肉放在冰箱里。我们的浴室很漂亮。我每天都在它洗个澡。我爱我的家。

Life, environmental pollution continuously affects our lives. Such as: polluted air, rivers and garbage pollution, etc., has seriously damaged our living environment.

Rivers are polluted, the creature will not be able to survive in the water, also cant use it to irrigate crops, the human will not eat fresh food. If same, groundwater contamination, people will drink less than clean water, humans will get sick, poisoning, and it may even die. So, no one should be put on the possible environmental pollution of waste into the river.

Air is a guarantee to the survival of all living creatures. If the air is polluted, all creatures will live in the "gas", disease and all kinds of disasters will be the humanitys greatest enemy. Last, mankind will perish. Visible, clean air is how important!

Garbage can be seen everywhere in our daily life, the visible human bad habits - littering behavior is really too serious. Random pile up garbage can cause great harm to the environment, such as: air pollution in a breeding ground for germs, sexually transmitted diseases, and river and so on.

The pollution was terrible! To prevent the pollution, we must care for the environment, protect the earth, to stop all the pollution of the environment.

生活中，环境污染不断地影响着我们的生活。比如：被污染的空气、河流和垃圾污染等等，已经严重地破坏了我们的生活环境。

河流被污染了，水中的生物将无法生存，也不能用它浇灌庄稼，人类将吃不到新鲜的食物。同样，地下水如果被污染，人们将喝不到洁净的水，人类将会生病、中毒，甚至可能会死亡。所以，任何人都不应该往河里投放有可能污染环境的废弃物。

空气是所有生物赖以生存的保证。如果空气被污染了，所有生物将会生活在“毒气室”一样的环境里，疾病和各种灾难将会是人类最大的敌人。日久天长，人类就会灭亡。可见，洁净的空气是多么重要啊!

垃圾在生活中随处可见，可见人类的坏习惯——乱丢垃圾的行为实在太严重了。随意堆放的垃圾会对环境造成很大的危害，例如：滋生病菌、传播疾病、污染空气以及河流等等。

这些污染真是可怕呀!要预防这些污染，我们一定要爱护环境，保护地球，制止一切污染环境的行为。

1. Every coin has two sides.每个硬币都有两面，比喻事物的两面性。

2. The winter is coming and the spring is not far.冬天已经临近了,春天还会远吗?

3. Failure is the mother of success.失败是成功之母。

4. Practice makes perfect.熟能生巧。

5. Actions speak louder than words. 事实胜于雄辩。

6. A fall into a pit, a gain in your wit.吃一堑，长一智。

7. A good beginning is half done.良好的开端是成功的一半。

8.Dont put off till tomorrow what should be done today.今日事，今日毕。

9.Time and tide wait for no man.时不我待。

10.Where there is a will, there is a way.有志者事竟成。

[必备的10句谚语中考英语作文备考资料

越来越多汽车进入我们的家庭生活，改善了我们的生活，但同时也带来了很多问题，如塞车和车祸，给家庭和社会带来极大的危害。作为中学生，我们应该怎样做呢?

请写一篇有关交通安全的短文(80字左右)

内容包含：

1、遵守交通规则，如走人行道/过斑马线。

2、别在街道上或马路上玩耍和踢球。

3、可以适当增加内容，让短文通顺，过渡自然。

4、参考词汇：sidewalk 人行道 zebra-crossing 斑马线

注：第一段已给出，不计入总数

参考范文：

With more and more cars coming into our families, we are

With more and more cars coming into our families, we are happy that it has greatly improved our life. But unluckily, it has also brought many problems, such as heavy traffic and traffic accidents。

Traffic safety is everybodys business. We must obey the rules. For example, we must walk on walk side, when we cross zebra – crossing, stop and look right and left, then go across fast. Don’t play football on the road .we can tell our parents not to drink before they drive, not to run through red lights, not to talk and laugh while driving etc。

We can say cars are coming into our life, but only when everybody thinks traffic safety is everybodys business can we be safe driving on roads and walking on sidewalks.

My birthday is on .i celebrate it every year with my family and my friends.every year,i hold a little birthday party and invite my friends over. we chat and play a lot of games together. the best part of it is that i love the birthday cake and the gifts i get from my parents and my friends. i also get some money on my birthday.i can buy what i want with the money. i have GREat fun on my birthdays. but on the other hand, i also understand that i am 1 year older after each birthday. and that means i should be more responsible for myself and i should also my self-aware. i should understand more things and be less ignorant!fianlly, i should be thankful for my parents,i know they have done their best in raising me up.

My birtiday is on XXX. I always have both happy and sad feelings on my birthday. Why I am happy? I have group of friends that come over to celebrate with me. And they give me birthday presents, sometimes the gifts surprised me very much. Also, I can feel how much my family loves me because my parents always make a birthday cake for me. They do not go to buy one, but make one themselves. I feel so happy about that. However, I understand my mother was the one who suffered the most pain on the date I came to the world. I feel so sorry for my mother for what she had suffered. But I promise her, I will take good care of her when I have that ability.

[中考英语作文:My birthday

Changes in Shanghai

1 300年前的上海

2 上海的今天(东方明珠、金茂大厦)

3 上海的明天(2010年的世博会)

参考作文

Shanghai was a small town three hundred years ago. There were only a few thousand people living here. Many of them were fishermen and farmers.

300年前，上海只是个小镇，只有几千人居住在这里，其中很多人是渔民和农民。

Today, Shanghai is becoming an international city. Many tall building have been built. Some bridges have been put up over the Huangpu River. More and more foreigners come to Shanghai for a visit every day.

今天，上海已变成一座国际大都市，并建成了很多高楼大厦。黄浦江上架起了很多桥梁。每天都有越来越多的外国人前来旅游。

Shanghai has already won the bid for holding the World Expo 2010. I think the environment will be better and better and the city will be more and more beautiful.

上海已经取得了2010年世博会的举办权，我相信上海的环境会越来越好，并且越来越美丽。

点评：虽然2010年世博会已经结束，但关于城市发展的话题依然热烈，除了上海，像广州、北京、深圳等大城市也有可能是考试的热点。

As we all know, our life is full of challenges as well as opportunities. Every one of us expects to be successful and deserve others’ respect. In my opinion, the key to success is that we should manage to make the most of what we’ve already had.

When I was a child, I am fond of making things by hand. At one time, I took part in a hand-made activity in our school. I wanted to make a model house as I usually did, but suddenly I found the materials that I had weren’t enough. Faced with such a situation, I really wanted to give up. However, after a second thought, I thought of an idea to pide some of the materials into small parts and I finally succeeded in making a special model plane. To my great joy, I was given the first prize because of my creativity.

After that, I understand whenever we face trouble, it is no use complaining. We should try our best to make use of what we have already had to solve problems.

我们都知道，我们的生活充满了挑战和机遇。我们中的每一个人都希望获得成功，并得到别人的尊重。在我看来，成功的关键在于我们应该设法使我们所拥有的。

当我还是个孩子的时候，我喜欢用手做东西。有一次，我参加了一个手工制作的活动在我们学校。我想做一个模型房子，我通常做的，但突然发现我的材料是不够的。面对这样的情况，我真的很想放弃。然而，经过一次思考，我想到了一个想法把一些材料分成几个小部分，最后我成功地制作了一个特殊的模型飞机。我非常高兴，因为我的创造力，我得到了第一个奖。

之后，我明白每当我们面对麻烦，抱怨是没有用的。我们应该尽我们最大的努力去利用我们已经解决的问题。

[中考英语满分作文努力

1 The Chinese government pays great attention to environmental problems arising from China‘s population growth and economic development.

中国政府非常重视因人口增长和经济发展而出现的环境问题。

2 While developing its economy， China will handle properly the relationship among the population， natural resources and the environment.

中国在发展经济的同时，将处理好与人口、资源和环境的关系。

3 China relies on improving supervision， management and technological progress to promote environmental protection.

中国依靠强化监督管理和技术进步手段推动环境保护事业发展。

(注意：汉译英时的逻辑顺序)

4 Land， arable land in particular， should be used reasonably and economically. Strong measures will be taken to strengthen the building of the urban environmental infrastructure， regulate industrial structure and lay-out， shun the unpromising way of “pollution first， treatment afterwards”， and strengthen prevention and control of the pollution in major river valleys to ensure the security of the drinking water of the inhabitants.

合理和节约利用土地尤其是耕地资源，加强城市环境基础设施建设，规划产业结构和布局，避免“先污染后治理”的老路。加强流域污染防治，保证居民饮水安全。

(注意：这个句子比较长，首先要注意不要漏翻，再者要注意一些专有名词的译法，不要出现逻辑错误)

5 Measures should be taken to stop predatory development， and return to lakes， forests and grasslands what has been taken from them， vigorously plant trees and grass， treat soil erosion， prevent and control desertification， establish ecological agriculture， strengthen the protection of natural resources such as arable land， water， forest， grassland and biological species， and the conservation of bio-diversity.

改变掠夺性经营开发方式，有计划地退耕还湖、还林、还草，大力开展植树造林，治理水土流失，防止沙漠化，建立生态农业，加强耕地、水源、森林、草场、物种等自然资源和生物多样性保护。

(注意：这个句子比较长，要注意专业名词的翻法)

6 To economize on water， land， power， raw materials， grains and other resources.

节水、节地、节能、节材、节粮以及节约其他各种资源。

7 To endeavor to obtain high socio-economic benefits and a well-preserved environment with less investment and less consumption of resources.

努力做到投资少、消耗资源少，而经济社会效益高、环境保护好。

外籍教师Richard想了解一下你所在班级学生的到校方式。假如你是李华，请以The way I go to school为题，写一篇英语短文，想Richard介绍自己的到校方式。

提示：

1. How do you go to school?

2. Why do you prefer to go in that way?

注意：

1. 短文必须包括所有提示内容，并围绕你所选择的某种交通方式，写出二至三个理由，可适当发挥。

2. 文中不得出现真实的人名，校名和地名。

3. 词数60-80个。(短文开头已给出，不计入总词数)

The way I go to school

I’m Li Hua.

参考样文：

I’m Li Hua. I go to school on foot. I have several reasons for that.

First, my home is not very far from my school, it is just about two kilometers away from school. It takes me about 20 minutes to get there. Second, walking to school is a kind of exercise. It is good for my health. Third, it’s pretty safe to walk to school because there is a lot of traffic on the road at this time of a day. So I prefer going to school on foot. It’s really a good choice.

This morning, my father took me to school by bike. I sat at the back of the bike, eating abanana. After I ate it up, I threw the skin onto the street randomly. No sooner had I done thisthan I realized that I had done something bad to our environment. And maybe someone wouldstep on it and tumbleover. I must pick it up. Thinking of these, I asked father to stop. I jumpedoffthe bike and ran back to pick up the banana skin and threw it into a roadside dustbin. Seeingthis, father praised me and I felt very happy.

In future I will protect the surroundings more consciously and think more about others.

上学路上

今天早晨，爸爸骑车带我去上学。我坐在后车座上，吃着香蕉。吃完后，我顺手将香蕉皮扔到了街上。我马上意识到我的所作所为破坏了我们的环境，或许有人会踩在上面而跌倒，我必须把它拾起来。想到这些，我让爸爸停车。我跳下自行车，跑回去拾起香蕉皮，并扔到了路边的垃圾箱里。看到这些，爸爸表扬了我。我感到很高兴。

将来我要更自觉地保护周围的环境，更多地为他人着想。

初中生活马上就要结束了，你有什么感想呢?下面是语文迷为大家整理提供的毕业感想的作文，希望对你有帮助。

初中生活马上就要结束了，三年的初中生活一定给你留下了很多挥之不去的回忆。请你给大家讲一个最值得你回忆的故事。包括时间、人物、事情经过和事后你的感想(请不要写出真实的学校名称以及真实姓名)。

提示词语： three years, memories, one of, one day, think, happy/ sorry

How time flies! I have studied in my school for three years. And I will graduate from middle school in a month. I am eager to share my happiness and sadness with you. I had so many memories in three years’ life. One of them impressed me very much. I still remember, when I began to learn English, I found it too difficult. No matter how hard I tried, I still couldn’t do well in it and almost gave it up. As soon as my English teacher found my problem, she had a talk with me about how to learn English well. Since then, she has kept helping me. Little by little, I’ve become interested in English and I’m good at it. I think I am so lucky to become one of her students. I’ve learned a lot from her. I will try to help others when they are in trouble. I think it is a happy thing to help others.

1.如今微信已成为我们生活中的一部分，尤其受到年轻人的欢迎。其优点如下：1.可以非常迅速地与朋友进行文字、表情等交流;2.可以与朋友分享图片、音乐、视频等;3.不仅能发送语音讯息，而且可以直接通话;4.使用时不受时间地点限制;5.使用时免费。

词数为80左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Nowadays, WeChat has been a part of our life. It is becoming more and more popular with young people because of the following advantages. First, we can communicate with our friends by sending words and expressions very quickly. Second, we can share pictures, music and videos with them. Third, we can not only send voice messages to them but also speak to them directly. Besides, we can use it in any time. Last but not least, we use it for free and can save money. In my view, although WeChat has improved our lives, it should be used properly. We shouldn’t lose ourselves in it.

08年浙江义乌中考英语作文范文：义乌作为一个国际商贸名城，吸引了越来越多的国内外游客来旅游购物。因此，建设一个绿色，文明的义乌显得尤为重要。请你以为题，写一篇短文。

参考词汇：environment duty,rubbish,plstic,pollution,plant

要求：（1）语句通顺，语意连贯，书写认真 （1）词数809左右。文章开头已给出，不计入词数

（3）可适当发挥（文中不能出现真实的人名和姓名）

As we know,Yiwu is an international city.________________________________________________________

参考中考英语作文范文：

How to build a greener city

As we know,Yiwu is an international city. It attracts more and more people to come and do business.So its our duty to build a beautiful green city. As students,we shouldnt throw rubbish anywhere on the ground or use too many plastic bags. Ask the factories not to put waste water into the river and wed better not go to school by car so that we can reduce the air pollution. Whats more, we should plant more trees and flowers to make our city greener. Lets work hard for our city tohave a good environment.

如何建立一个更绿色的城市我们知道，义乌是一个国际城市。它吸引更多的人来这里做生意。所以建立一个美丽的绿色城市，我们的责任。作为学生，我们不应该把垃圾扔在地上的任何地方或使用太多的塑料袋。要求工厂不要把废水排入河中，我们最好不要坐汽车去学校，我们可以减少空气污染。更重要的是，我们应该种更多的树和花来绿化我们的城市。让我们努力工作，为我们的城市有一个良好的环境。

导语：每个人都有梦想，这能让我们更加的努力，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的my dream英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

I have many dreams, such as I am rich in the future. Therefore, I can buy all what I want. But my greatest dream is that I want to be an astronaut. Our country develops fast and our space make great progress in the last several decades. It has great achievements. All of our country are proud of it. Therefore, I want to be one of this amazing area. In order to make my dream come true, I must work hard now. So that I can go to a good university to learn more knowledge. I hope my dream can come true one day.

【参考译文】

我有很多梦想，比如我希望将来变得富有，这样我就可以买我想买的一切。但是我最大的梦想是成为一名宇航员。我们国家发展得很快，而且在过去几十年中太空取得了巨大进步，有很多大成就，所有人都为之骄傲。因此，我想成为这一神奇领域中的一员。为了使我的梦想成真，我必须从现在开始努力。这样我就能够去一所好的大学学习更多的知识了。我希望有一天能够梦想成真。

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请你以 “To Be an Honest Man”为题，用英语写一篇80词左右的短文。

内容包括：1.说说你对诚实的认识。2.谈谈你做过或听过的不诚实的事例以及带来的危害。3.倡议同学们做个诚实的人。

提示词：traditional virtue（传统美德）, wolves（狼）, tell lies（撒谎）

To Be an Honest Man

As we know, honesty is one of the Chinese traditional virtues, so I think it is necessary for everyone to be an honest man.

I have heard of the story “Wolves are coming”. The little boy lost all his sheep at last because he told lies to the villagers twice. From the story, I know that if someone is not honest, he or she will lost good friends.

Remember that honesty is invaluable. Each of us should try to be an honest man not only in our study but also in our daily life from now on.

[英语中考作文：诚信

导语：正如我们所知道的，安全是我们生活中最重要的东西。所以，我们应该尽力确保我们的安全。下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

建设平安校园是我们每个人的责任与义务。作为一名学生，我们更应该珍惜自己的生命，更应该注意自己的人身安全。假如你是Li Hua，并担任校学生会主席，请你就安全问题，向全校学生发出倡议，写一封安全倡议书。

内容提示：(1)不带管制刀具到学校;(2)不私自下河洗澡;(3)不打架;(4)上学放学的途中应该注意安全;(5)遇紧急情况，立即报告警察或老师。

参考词汇：管制刀具：restricted knives or things;洗澡：have a bath;打架：fight;紧急情况：emergency;交通安全：pay attention to the traffic。

写作要求：(1)用词恰当，要点全面，层次清晰，书写规范。(2)可适当发挥，80词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数。(3)严禁出现自己的真实姓名和学校等相关信息。

★ 范文

Dear students,

As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should try our best to make sure we are safe.

We mustn’t bring restricted knives or things to our school because these things may cause serious problems. Do not have a bath in rivers or ponds by ourselves without our parents’ permission. And, we should be friendly to others so fighting is strongly banned. Make sure that we should always pay attention to the traffic on our way to school or home. Furthermore, if we meet some emergency, we must call for help from the police or our teachers.

In a word, following these safeties rules above can make us live in peace.

Yours,

Li Hua

【汉语翻译】

亲爱的同学们，

正如我们所知道的，安全是我们生活中最重要的东西。所以，我们应该尽力确保我们的安全。

我们不能带限制的刀子或东西到我们的学校，因为这些东西可能会导致严重的问题。未经父母允许，不得在江河或池塘内洗澡。我们应该友好地对待别人，所以强烈禁止打架。在上学或回家的路上，一定要注意交通。此外，如果我们遇到紧急情况，我们必须向警察或我们的老师求助。

总之，这些安全规则可以使我们生活在和平。

你的好朋友，

李华

1. 不用说……

It goes without saying that …

= (It is) needless to say (that) ….

= It is obvious that ….

例：It goes without saying that it pays off to keep early hours.

不用说早睡早起是值得的。

2. 在各种……之中，……

Among various kinds of …, … /= Of all the …, …

例︰Among various kinds of sports, I like jogging in particular.

在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。

3. 就我的看法……;我认为……

In my opinion, …

= To my mind, ….

= As far as I am concerned, …

= I am of the opinion that ….

例：In my opinion, playing video games not only takes much time but is also harmful to health.

在我看来，玩电脑游戏既花费时间也有害健康。

4. 随着人口的增加…… With the increase/growth of the population, …

随着科技的进步…… With the advance of science and technology, …

例：With the rapid development of Taiwan’s economy, a lot of social problems have come to pass.

随着台湾经济的快速发展许多社会问题产生了。

5. ……是必要的 It is necessary (for sb.) to do/that …

…… 是重要的 It is important/essential (for sb.) to do / that …

…… 是适当的 It is proper (for sb.) to do / that …

……是紧急的 It is urgent (for sb.) to do / that …

例：It is proper for us to keep the public places clean.

=It is proper that we (should) keep the public places clean.

我们应当保持公共场所清洁。

6. 花费 spend … on sth. / doing sth. …

例：We shouldn’t spend too much time on something we aren’t interested in.

我们不应该在我们不感兴趣的事情上花太多的时间。

7. how 引导的感叹句

例：At least it will prove how honest you are.

那至少可以证明你很诚实。

8. 状语从句

⑴ 如果你不…，你就会… If you don’t ..., you’ll ...

例︰If you don’t keep working hard, you’ll lose the chance.

如果你不坚持努力工作，你就会失去这次机会。

⑵ 如此 ……，以至于…… so … that …

例：At that moment, I was so upset that I wanted to give up.

当时，我非常伤心，最后都想放弃了。

⑶ 每当我听到……我就忍不住感到兴奋。Whenever I hear …, I cannot but feel excited.

每当我做……我就忍不住感到悲伤。 Whenever I do …, I cannot but feel sad.

每当我想到……我就忍不住感到紧张。Whenever I think of …, I cannot but feel nervous.

每当我遭遇……我就忍不住感到害怕。Whenever I meet with …, I cannot but feel frightened.

每当我看到……我就忍不住感到惊讶。Whenever I see …, I cannot but feel surprised.

例：Whenever I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot but feel sad.

= Every time I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot help feeling sad.

每当我想到我家附近那一.��清澈的小溪我就忍不住感到悲伤。

9. 宾语从句

我认为，…… / 我认为……不...... I think / I don’t think that …

我想知道是否…… I wonder whether …

例：He doesn’t think I should stop him joining the club.

他认为我不应该阻止他参加这个俱乐部。

10. Since + S + 过去式, S + 现在完成式.

例：Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.

自从他上高中，他就一直很用功。

根据初中阶段的写作具体目标：写作时考虑不同的目的和对象，写作要感情真挚，力求表达自己对自然、社会、人生的独特感受和真切体验;多角度地观察生活，发现生活的丰富多彩，捕捉事物的特征，力求有创意地表达;根据表达的中心，选择恰当的表达方式。合理安排内容的先后和详略。条理清楚地表达自己的意思。运用联想和想像，丰富表达的内容;写记叙文，做到内容具体：写简单的说明文，做到明白清楚;写简单的议论文，做到有理有据;根据生活需要，写日常应用文……简单地说，就是会写记叙文、简单的说明文、简单的议论文和一般的应用文;内容具体明确，语言文从字顺;感情真实健康，力求有创意。安徽省中考作文评分基本上涵盖了上述精神。

一、作文评分总体要求

以安徽省2009年中考题“师生之间”为例，对中考作文评分标准具体分析，具有可解读性和可操作性。这个命题作文，它的内容很宽泛，可写的东西很多，有关师生之间的事、物、情，皆可入文。具体评分要求如下：

1、要审清题目。文章要切题，不能写成“我的老师”， 要扣住“之间”来写，是老师和学生之间的双向活动。

2、体裁要分辨清。叙事有起伏，阐述有哲理，写人须有触动人物内心深处，抒情、议论兼而有之。

3、立意要有创新。文题看似平平淡淡，没有精心雕琢，但要写出独特的、与众不同之处。师生老师与学生的界定可以引申、拓展，也可以是广义的。

4、文章有真情实感。写事要具体可感，语言要流畅，有文采，有点睛之笔，行文思路清晰，感情充沛。

二、作文分等分类简述

就阅卷评分标准结合学生实际作文情况，作文大致分为以下几类：

(一)力求创新。力避旧瓶装新酒，有的同学在考场中将师与生进行引申、比喻，文章开头引用《三字经》中的“生不学，师之惰”，接着亮出自己的观点，“生不学”未必是“师之惰”，用“诸葛亮与刘禅”这对师生来佐证。以思辩的眼光去看待师生之间的关系，提倡一种平等、和谐的新型师生关系，这篇文章结构完整、首尾照应、层次清楚、语言流畅，应属一类文(得54分)。

(二)形式新颖。

形式新颖，内容详实、描写具体。比如一位考生列了四个小标题：“酸”、“甜”、“苦”、“辣”，分别写了与老师之间的四件事，也都有师生之间的活动，有师生间真挚的情感，内容具体真实，可成为一篇佳作，属一类中等(得50分)。

(三)误读题意。一位考生将师生之间写成了“教与学”的关系，整篇文章围绕着“师傅领进门，修行在个人”来写。在立意、内容上只能归属为三类下、四类上。(得30分左右)

(四)选材陈旧。在选材方面流于俗套而缺乏真挚的情感。比如很多考生写在我生病时老师不顾羸弱的身体背着我去医院，老师在下雨天送我回家，把伞让给学生，自己却淋透了，生病了等。没有从生活实际中选取典型的、新颖的、感人的事例来表现主题。这样的事例不够典型，情感也抒发的不到位就难以达到感动人的目的。属三类下。(得32分)

(五)切题不紧。中等成绩的考生的作文都更倾向于写老师是如何对待自己的，主要写老师是如何关心我，如何辅导我的学习，这样的文章中老师的行动是主体，其中穿插了学生的感悟与体会，但占的笔墨不多，因为写老师的文字中必然有学生的活动。这样的文章不能说完全切题，也不能说离题，因为它写到了老师对学生的关爱与呵护。属于二类下、三类上。(得38分)

(六)文体单一。绝大多数写成记叙文，显得平铺直叙，没有生动、细致的描写，选择写议论文的很少，即使有所议论，也是空发感慨。基本上分数不会太高。(得25分上下)

三、中考作文评分细则解读

我们通常用语言优美、立意新颖、结构独特、构思精巧、内容充实、感情真实、表达恰当等方面去评判优秀学生的作文。其实，对于绝大多数学生来说，评分标准的制定有所局限性，就安徽省而言，主要从内容和表达两个方面对作文的评分细则简要解析。

(一)内容方面：

新课标所提倡的作文理念，在安徽省的作文命题及评分标准的制定中已得到很好的体现。内容具体、充实的作文也不在少数，考生视野开阔，体现了他们对生活的感悟，做到了我手写我心，出现了一大批关注亲情友情、关注社会自然、关注艺术历史的佳作。如2007年安徽省的“我们的心近了”，有考生写通过感悟李白、李煜和岳飞的诗词与他们的爱国之心;有写通过印度洋海啸与世界人民的心近了，通过中国免除非洲债务，中国人民与非洲人民的心近了……这些选材与立意都是很高的，有部分考生写社会生活的一些小小的细节反映人与人之间的心近了，如写为瓜农提供方便，与辛苦劳作的人心近了;到山区体验生活与农村孩子的心近了，选材立意温暖人心……我感到：出题人与考生的心近了，考生与家庭、学校、社会、自然、历史的心近了。具体得分点有以下几点：

(1)中心明确。有些考生选材虽好，但中心不够明确，如有考生写了三个片断：与同学的心近了，与老师的心近了，与父母的心近了，但各有自己的中心，没有将三个片断统一到一个主题上。还有将“心近了”误当成团结、友爱的同义词，写成了“团结就是力量”、“友爱使人快乐”等主题。

(2)文章切题 。未抓住题眼“近了”，“近了”是一个过程，而这个过程有些考生未作为重点。如有一个考生重点描写了父母与自己的矛盾，而对矛盾解决的过程即“近了”只是一笔带过就总结说“我们的心近了”，作文主次不分明。个别考生干脆将“心近了”写成“心静了”，严重偏题。有的同学字顺文美，读之感人，但读后和材料要求对照，跑题了。

(3)内容充实。少数学生为了出新出奇，另辟蹊径，对“老师”和“学生“的内涵和外延进行了拓展。如有学生把“书本”、“大自然”等比作“老师”，写出自己徜徉其中的经历和感受。有些考生将作文写成议论文或者散文，虽反复点题，但内容不够具体，缺少有力的论据或感人的细节，只是空洞的议论或抒情。如：无视“我们的心”，写成“他们的心近了”。如一个考生创作了一篇小说，笔触细腻地写了两个小女孩由竞争到互相帮助的过程，但用的是第三人称的叙述视角，没有“我们的心近了”之意，很遗憾地与一类作文失之交臂。其实只要将小说中的一个角色换成“我”即可。大部分考生都能围绕中心有话可写，内容也较充实。写作水平较高的学生所写内容都能较好地兼顾“老师”和“学生”两个方面，紧扣中心，表达有技巧，具有一的表现力，演绎出师生之间的情感变化，常令人耳目一新。

(4)感情真实。出现了许多题材雷同的套作。可能是时代变了，考生的作文中有不少写对后妈由排斥到心近的过程。有许多夫妻离婚可以理解，怎么父母离婚了，孩子都是跟着爸爸?后妈个个都那么宽容、忍让?这类作品有些感情不够真实，很难得高分。

(5)立意新颖。作文关键抓住“心近了”来立意，选材涉及到对题目中的 “我们”的具体所指，大多数学生理解为“我与父亲”、“我与母亲”、“我与老师”、“我与同学”、“我与朋友”、“我与后爸”、“我与后妈”等，具体所指的身边人物，当属切题作文;还有把“我们”理解为台湾与祖国大陆，香港、澳门与祖国，时值香港回归祖国十周年之际，属立意有一定的高度;还有理解为中国与世界、中国加入WTO，世界经济一体化;中国与日本、涉及到中日两国由来已久的渊源关系，到当下的中日关系;中国与印度，涉及海啸中中国人民的友好援助。这些都充分体现了学生对时事的关注，对焦点问题的思考，眼界相当开阔，立意也很深刻。

除以上几方面以外，还有就是我与书，我与语文，我与古代名家，像李白、杜甫、陶渊明、李煜等等，写得是大气磅礴，文采飞扬，充分显示了学生深厚的文学底蕴，这些当属一类作文中的上品。

(二)表达方面

(1)表达方式运用得好。多数考生表达方式运用的合理，但也有一些考生处理不好。如：出现了一些结构不够完整，表达方式单一，甚至不知所云的作品，如一些考生通篇记叙自己与父母关系“近了”的事实，没有动人的细节描写，语言平淡无味，缺少感染力，缺少个性;从表达角度来看，大多数学生还是以大量口语化的语言出现在卷面，缺乏书面语，缺少语文的文学气息。

(2)结构完整，条理清楚。如：一位考生的考场作文，全文的结构如下：师生之间是加减乘除。一：师生之间是+，老师+学生=家;二：师生之间是-，减去烦恼;三：师生之间是×，师生相乘，走向成功;四：师生之间是÷，除去陋习，让学生改邪归正。总结：加减乘除都是爱。

(3)语句流畅、通顺。语言以朴实真挚风格为主，有不少语言流畅、文采飞扬的佳作。如：有一位考生写中日关系近了，远溯到唐代用鉴真六次东渡和晁衡留居长安证明两国一衣带水的亲密，又提到近代日本对中国的侵略，日本右翼分子的猖狂，中国一部分人民身受伤害后的仇日情绪表现“远”了，然后用两国民间社团友好往来，温总理“融冰之旅”表现两国人民相互了解和对和平友好的向往以及希望世界和平的主题。行文结构严谨，通篇语言流畅，美妙的比喻和一气呵成的排比层出不穷，且恰到好处。最后以“心近了，心静了，心惊了，心敬了，心近了”结束全篇，耐人寻味。

有少数学生引用古诗文名句，巧用一些修辞造句，驾驶语言的能力相当强。 如： 开篇： 蒲公英因长风飞向远方，小树苗因甘霖获得滋长，学生因老师而成材。结尾：冰寒于水而出于水，青胜于蓝而出于蓝。纵观整体来说，基本上做到了语句通顺，表述清楚。一部分考生通篇议论抒情、空喊口号，令人乏味;还有个别考生掉书袋，几乎每一句都要引用古诗句，没有自己的语言和感悟可言。

(三)字数的要求。安徽省及芜湖市均有明确的规定：考虑到内容的充实，文章不要少于500字。字数不足500字，每少50字酌情扣一分。但是，一篇文章写的字数较少分量自然很轻。其实，400字、500字的作文扣分不过2分，可再少就不仅仅是字数的问题了。从考场作文实际看，600-700字的作文很多，分数上也偏向这些文章。

(四)、卷面书写。试卷最后一项得分栏就是卷面得分，共5分。根据是书写干净与否;有无涂抹和大面积改动;字体端正、匀称、工整与否。卷面整洁，书写、标点、格式正确等一般给4—5分，最少2—3分。从得分看，字体有形、书写清楚的文章得分较高，好作文卷面分也很高，是相辅相成的。

《语文课程标准》的总目标中，对学生写作能力有如下概括：能具体明确、文从字顺地表达自己的意思，能根据日常生活需要，运用常见的表达方式写作。其实，作文评分标准只是参考，最主要的是鼓励学生写真事、抒真情，写作的过程也是一个教育学生做人的过程。

Olympic Games is the biggest event for the players, because it holds every four years. I remembered that my father watched the games at midnight many years ago, and I did not understand why he was so crazy about it. Now I watched the game with him and I started to appreciate the charm of sports. No matter what the result is, standing in the biggest stage and competing with the greatest rivals make the players feel proud. They chase to be higher, stronger and faster and these are the spirit of Olympic Games. When the audience see the players break the record and challenge human being’s limitation, how excited it is.

奥运会对于运动员来说是最大的大事，因为它每四年才举行一次。我记得我的父亲很多年前在午夜看奥运会，我不明白他为什么那么的疯狂。现在我和他一起看了比赛，我开始体会到体育的魅力。不管结果怎么样，站在最大的舞台与最伟大的对手竞赛使运动员们感到骄傲。他们追求更高、更强、更快，这也是奥运会的精神。当观众看到运动员们打破记录，挑战局限性时，是多么的令人兴奋啊。

1. 不用说…… It goes without saying that = It is obvious that …

例：不用说早睡早起是值得的。It goes without saying that it pays to keep early hours.

2. 在各种……之中，…… Among various kinds of …， … /= Of all the …， …

例：在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。Among various kinds of sports, I like jogging in particular.

3. 就我的看法……;我认为……In my opinion, …= To my mind, …= As far as I am concerned, …

例：In my opinion, playing video games not only takes much time but is also harmful to health. 就我的看法打电动玩具既花费时间也有害健康。

4. 随着人口的增加…… With the increase/growth of the population, …

随着科技的进步…… With the advance of science and technology, …

例：With the rapid development of Taiwans economy, a lot of social problems have come to pass. 随着台湾经济的快速发展许多社会问题产生了。

5. ……是必要的 It is necessary (for sb.) to do / that … ……

是重要的 It is important(for sb.) to do / that … ……

是适当的 It is proper (for sb.) to do / that … ……

是紧急的 It is urgent (for sb.) to do / that …

例：It is proper for us to keep the public places clean.

It is proper that we (should)keep the public places clean. 我们应当保持公共场所清洁。

6. 花费 spend … on sth. / doing sth. …

例：我们不应该在我们不感兴趣的事情上花太多的时间。 We shouldnt spend too much time on something we arent interested in.

7. how 引导的感叹句

例：那至少可以证明你很诚实。At least it will prove how honest you are. 8. 状语从句

A)如果你不……，你就会…… If you dont …， youll …

例：If you dont keep working hard, youll lose the chance. 如果你不坚持努力工作，你就会失去这次机会。

B) 如此 ……，以至于…… so … that …

例：At that moment, I was so upset that I wanted to give up. 当时，我非常伤心，最后都想放弃了。

9. 宾语从句：我认为，…… / 我认为……不 I think / I dont think that …

我想知道是否…… I wonder whether …

例：He doesnt think I should stop him joining the club.他认为我不应该阻止他参加这个俱乐部。

10. Since + 主语+ 过去式， 主语 + 现在完成式。

例：Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.自从他上高中，他就一直很用功。

母亲节起源于美国。1906年5月9日，美国费城的安娜·贾薇丝的母亲不幸去世，她悲痛万分。在次年母亲逝世周年忌日，安娜小姐组织了追思母亲的活动，并鼓励他人也以类似方式来表达对各自慈母的感激之情。此后，她到处游说并向社会各界呼吁，号召设立母亲节。她的呼吁获得热烈响应。1913年5月10日，美国参众两院通过决议案，由威尔逊总统签署公告，决定每年5月的第二个星期日为母亲节。这一举措引起世界各国纷纷仿效，至1948年安娜谢世时，已有43个国家设立了母亲节。

Mothers Day originated in the United States. In May 9, 1906, American Philadelphia Anna Jia Wei silks mother died, her grief. In the next year Mothers death anniversary, miss Anna mother organized a memorial service, and encourage others to express their gratitude to the mother in a similar manner. Since then, her lobbying and appeal to all walks of life, calls for the establishment of mothers day. Her appeal to get a warm response. In May 10, 1913, American house and Senate passed a resolution, signed by President Wilson announcement, decided each year the second Sunday in May as mothers day. The move by all the countries in the world have to follow, to 1948 xieshishi Anna, 43 countries have established the mothers day.

母亲节在我国最早是港澳台地区有此节日。改革开放后，母亲节也为内地所接受。广东省于1988年开始，杭州等城市于1989年开始，都由各级妇联组织母亲节的庆祝活动，并把评选"好母亲"作为节日的内容之一。

Mothers day in China is the first Hong Kong and Macao have this festival. After the reform and opening up, mothers Day is also accepted for the mainland. Guangdong Province, beginning in 1988, Hangzhou city began in 1989, the womens federations at all levels have mothers Day celebration, and the selection "good mother" as part of the festival.

在母亲节许多人将康乃馨赠给母亲，这是源于1934年5月美国首次发行母亲节纪念邮票。邮票上一位慈祥的母亲，双手放在膝上，欣喜地看着前面的花瓶中一束鲜艳美丽的康乃馨。随着邮票的传播，在许多人的心目中把母亲节与康乃馨联系起来，康乃馨便成了象征母爱之花，受到人们的敬重。康乃馨与母亲节便联系在一起了。人们把思念母亲、孝敬母亲的感情，寄托于康乃馨上，康乃馨也成为了赠送母亲不可缺少的珍贵礼品。

On Mothers Day carnations to the mothers for many people, this is from 1934 May America issued the first mothers Day commemorative stamps. Stamp a kind mother, hands on knees, delighted to see the vase in front of a bunch of bright beautiful carnations. With the spread of the stamps, linked the mothers Day carnations in many peoples minds, carnations became the symbol of motherly love flowers, respected by people. Mothers Day carnations and he relates in together. People miss mother, your mothers feelings, hopes in the carnation, carnations has become the indispensable precious gifts mother gifts.