初中期末英语作文写作九大技巧分析九篇 作文范文(精品20篇)

删除诸如"who is”或"that is"类的关系代词，变从句为短语，例：

句：The novel, which is written in three parts, told a story that took place in the Middle Ages.

修改后：The three-part novel told a story set in the Middle Ages.

注：把句中的"three parts"改用形容词来表达，节省了四个不必要的单词"which is written in"。我们经常可以将关系代词如"that"去掉，这只会引起最少的变动。

借物喻人，就是借某一事物的特点，来比喻人的一种品格。这也是作文中用来表现、突出中心思想的常用的一种写作方法。

如《落花生》，全文讲述“我们”全家欢度收获节，边品尝新花生，边谈论花生的好处；告诉人们，做人要做务实有用的人，不要做只讲体面而对别人没有好处的人。文章在谈论花生的好处时，有这样几段话：父亲说：“花生的好处很多，有一样最可贵：它的果实埋在地里，不像桃子、石榴、苹果那样，把鲜红嫩绿的果实高高地挂在枝头上，使人一见就生爱慕之心。你们看它矮矮地长在地上，等到成熟了，也不能立刻分辨出来它有没有果实，必须挖起来才知道。”我们都说是，母亲也点点头。父亲接下去说：“所以你们要像花生，它虽然不好看，可是很有用，不是外表好看而没有实用的东西。”我说：“那么，人要做有用的人，不要做只讲体面，而对别人没有好处的人了。”父亲说：“对。这是我对你们的希望。”

这几段话就运用了借物喻人（借用花生的特点来比喻怎样做人）的方法：父亲引导孩子谈花生，目的是为了论人生；他赞美花生的品格，也是为了说明做人应该做怎样的人。“我”从父亲的话中体会到“人要做有用的人，不要做只讲体面，而对别人没有好处的人。”这个认识得到了父亲的肯定。这就像画龙点晴一样，很自然地表达出了文章的中心思想。

由此可见，无论写人记事还是写景状物，正确运用借物喻人的方法：可以使文章立意更深远，表情达意更含蓄；可以大大增强文章的表现力和感染力。

大家再读读下面这篇文章，体会一下借物喻人的特点及作用：

山中的老杏树

杏子成熟时，正赶上农村收麦。麦收过后的一天，我才抽空儿扛着木棍儿，棍儿上挑着篮儿，上了南山。

半路碰上邻居二婶儿。二婶儿见我也去采杏，忙告诉我：“我都找遍了，只有山梁南面第二个山沟里那棵树上还有杏儿，只是杏子又青又小，还不好吃！”说完，二婶便走下山去。

我登上山梁，老远就看到了那棵树。它是那条山沟里仅有的一棵杏树。走近了才望见树上绿绿的叶子中颗颗半红不绿的杏子，成串成串地挤满枝头。随着一阵微风，杏树抖动起枝叶，像是在和我打招呼。

这是一棵老杏树，它长在沟底缺土少水的岩石旁，树干又高又曲又粗，疤痕累累，显然它已历尽沧桑。我把木棍儿插在腰间攀到树上。坐在粗大的树杈上，我看得更清楚了：枝条上，每个叶窝儿都挂着一个圆溜溜的杏子。大多杏子又都长着“阴阳脸”——一面绿中透黄，一面黄里带红；个头儿也不小，个个儿都像个小苹果儿。望着这绿叶间压串枝的杏子，我比喻不出它们像珍珠、像宝石，还是像翡翠、像玛瑙。捏开一个一看，哎呀，金色的果肉浸满果汁，放到嘴里，酸溜溜，甜滋滋，沁人心脾。

一抬头，无意中发现两个树杈之间卡着一块石头。哦！我全明白了：二婶儿说这杏子又青又小不好吃，是因为树太高，她看不见结在上面的杏子，只摘些下面小的。她不会上树，够不着，用石头又砸不下来。显然，她着实冤枉了这棵老杏树。

望着满树伸手可及的果实，再俯视一下这棵饱经风霜的老杏树，一种敬慕之情油然而生。老杏树啊老杏树，你不怕寂寞，不畏艰难困苦，独自扎根于这深山岩石之中，老而不衰。一年又一年，你为人们结下多少杏子？可你对人却无半点所求。当你受了委屈或遇到冷眼、非礼时，脚跟仍是那样坚定，胸怀仍是那样坦荡、无私。多么可敬的老杏树啊！我轻轻地取下石块，抽出腰间的木棍儿，可怎么也不肯打下去，唯恐因打杏儿而折损老树的枝叶，伤害它的身心。于是，我下了树，挎上篮儿，再爬上树，坐在老杏树的怀抱中，尽情地摘着杏子，尽情地享受着它奉献的果实。

这是一篇优美、生动、感人至深的文章。相信每一个同学读了此文之后，都一定会认识到：决不单纯是状“物”；作者运用了借物喻人的方法，借山中老杏树的特点，热情讴歌了具有老杏树品格（不怕寂寞，不畏艰难困苦，扎根深山，饱经风霜，老而不衰，只讲奉献，胸怀坦荡、无私）的人，同时从心底抒发了对具有老杏树品格的人的无比敬爱之情。

运用借物喻人的方法需要注意的是：作文时，描述的事物的特点，要与人的品格有相似之处；让人读了文章，就能清楚地认识到，借物要说明什么，要借物赞誉怎样的人。如果不是这样的话，“借物喻人”的方法，也就失去了使用的意义。

I am a 15-year-old student in junior Grade 3. Though I am occupied with my

study.I would like to spend time on my hobbies, such as playing the piano,

surfing the Internet.

One of my favourite hobby is reading. Reading has been in my life for many

years,since I began to learn characters. It can not only kill the time but also,

more importantly, help improve my comprehension ability. When reading, I can

learn a lot.Reading Shakespear’s works, I know how Hamlet looks like. Reading

Socrates, I can see how great ancient Greek philosophers are. Reading Lu Xu, I

come back to the old time of China.

Reading really affect my life.

I am one year older than my cousin. Both of us are the only child in the family, so my cousin and I are very closed, we are just like the sisters. I like to share my secret with my cousin, because I don’t want to tell my parents.

My cousin is a good listener, when I feel not happy, I will tell her about my annoyance, then she will comfort me and make me feel better. When Friday comes, I will ask my cousin to sleep with me, we will talk about a lot of things.

I am so lucky that I have a cousin as my good friends.

我比我的表妹长大了一岁。我们都是家里的独生子女,所以我和我的表妹很亲近,我们就像姐妹一样。我喜欢和我的表妹分享我的秘密,因为我不想告诉父母。我的表妹是一个好的倾听者,当我感到不高兴时,我会告诉她我的烦恼,然后她会安慰我,让我感觉良好。周五时,我会叫我的表妹和我睡觉,我们会谈论很多事情。我很幸运,有一个表妹作为我的好朋友。

[初中英语作文：我的表妹

I used to receive gifts like a basketball, a swatch or a CD. But the gift

I’m looking forward to is a bicycle though I can’t ride it now. How I want to

learn it well so that I can ride anywhere I want to go! Every morning, it is my

father who always drives me to school in all kinds of weather. Especially in the

past few days, he has worked hard until midnight. If I ride my own bicycle to

school, he will be able to sleep a little longer and work a bit harder. I hope

my dream of owning a bicycle will be realized in the shortest possible time.

英语作文：

Tomorrow is fathers day, I want to send two gifts for dad.

I take everyone to take a nap at noon, I took out fifty yuan pocket money to buy a gift, to the flower shop, I dont know which one to buy, this I see that look, finally found the right flowers, gave the money to the boss. I went and bought several packets of paper folding wishing star, came home, I put the flowers in the vase, add some water inside, then hid the flowers where nobody pay attention to. Ok so, I started to fold the wishing star, every star, I wrote a blessing, a star, the two stars were folded · · · · · · one hundred and seventy-nine, dont look at these small stars, but each star in with my blessing to my father. Wishing star after the discount, I put it in a nice little gift box, can look forward to come tomorrow.

Early the next morning at six o clock, I quietly walked into the room, I put the flowers and wishing star on the table, I was out of the room. Slowly fragrance filled the room, dad was smoked aroma woke up and found it still reads: dad happy fathers day. Dad smiled on his face.

中文翻译：

明天就是父亲节，我想给爸爸送两份礼物。

中午，我趁大家睡午觉的时候，我拿出五十元的零花钱去买礼物，一到了花店，我却不知道要买哪一种，我这看看那看看，终于找到了合适的花，把钱给了老板。我又去买了几包折许愿星的纸，回到了家，我把花插进了花瓶，在里面加点水，便把花藏到没人注意的地方。花弄好以后，我就开始折许愿星，每一颗星星里我都写了一个祝福，一颗星，两颗星······共折了一百七十九颗，别看这些小小的星星，但每颗星星里都包含着我对爸爸的祝福。许愿星折完后，我把它放在一个精美的小礼盒里，期待着明天能快点到来。

第二天清晨六点钟，我悄悄地走进房间，我把花和许愿星放在了桌上，我便走出了房间。慢慢的香味便弥漫了整个房间，爸爸被香味给熏醒了，发现上面还写着：爸爸父亲节快乐。爸爸脸上露出了笑脸。

Many children are always looking forward to the winter vacation; This is because during the vacation, children needn’t go to school; They can do everything they like,such as playing, watching TV, traveling, or even sleeping all the day and so on.and when winter vacation come on ,It means that spring festival will come on soon.

I spent the whole day at home nearly every day, I played with my computer .I played computer games and surved the Internet. during the vacation I,I still stayed in touch with my classmates and my friends.I thinked I hasve been a potatoes mouse .

During the spring festival,I visited my relatives ,and I got a lot of red bags.

Even though my vacation wasn’t crazy and exciting, but I really learnt a lot. It was good for relaxing, and I am getting ready for the coming new term now. Good-bye, my winter vacation.

[寒假打算初中英语作文

Teacher is a great job in most students’ eyes. When they are asked what

they want to be in the future, most will say they want to be a teacher and make

a contribution to the society. Indeed, we have access to the teachers all the

time and they have great influence on us. So being a teacher is a ideal job for

most students, but for me, I want to be a librarian. I like reading books so

much and once I have time, I will be immersed in these novels. Books broaden my

vision, though I can’t travel to the places, I can still know about these famous

sites from these books. Being a librarian can make me have a lot of time to

read.

十月一日正好是国庆节，也就是祖国妈妈的生日。

每当国庆节来临之际，单位的门上挂起了灯笼，甚至上面都插上了彩旗，门上还张贴了“欢度国庆”四个大字。公园、大街小巷的树上都挂了灯笼。街道两边都摆满了五颜六色的鲜花。到处洋溢着节日气氛。

为了迎国庆，我们有的写作，有的画画，并且要从里面选出几个最好的作品贴在后面，办一个国庆专栏，作为送给祖国妈妈的生日礼物。

祝祖国妈妈生日快乐!

October is just the National Day, that is, the mothers mothers birthday.

When the National Day approaching, the unit hung on the door of the lantern, and even above the plug in the banners, the door also posted the "celebrate the National Day" four characters. Park, the streets of the trees are hung with lanterns. Both sides of the street are filled with colorful flowers. Filled with festive atmosphere everywhere.

In order to meet the National Day, we have some writing, some painting, and from the inside to choose a few best works posted in the back, do a national celebration column, as the mothers birthday gift to the motherland.

I wish my mother a happy birthday!

In,Dumbledore said to

Harry,Youth,live with more fun.Youth,a large amount of wealth.Youth days,spend

with friends,spend with joys.

Youth,some spend it,some treasure it,but I show respect to it.Not too much

fun with youth for me, niether do i feel happy or sad.I am just puzzled.Where a

youth can create a great many things?Or just go down,falling into the vally of

disapponitment?Finally,I find it just a fun for being a youth.Dont think too

many things about the past childhood,or the coming unknown life.Just for you,for

me,enjoy the fun in our youth,then be a tough man step-by-step go.

Transportation has been greatly changed in the past few years. In ancient

days, people used to travel by horse or carriage. The journey was often tiring

and tedious. Then people had buses, trains and ships, which could shorten the

time of the long-distance trip. Now we have not only more private cars, but also

planes and high-speed rails. All of these modern transports could offer us a

quick and pleasant travel. Thus, more and more people enjoy traveling very much

these days. In conclusion, modern transportation has completely changed our

life. Thanks to modern transportation, our world is becoming smaller and

smaller.

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、作文案例

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[学生解答A]

My hobby is read books①.When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

②also的位置应放在can之后。

[点评]：档次9-11分。

①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

③有少量错误。

[学生解答B]

My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improvemy writing.I want to be a writer in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。

②真情流露，理由充分。

③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

[点评]：档次13-14分。

①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting theenvironment.They threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to preventstarting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirtywater into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

The computer is a very useful machine. It is the most important invention

in many years. People use it widely today in many ways.

Most computers have memories. People can store information in them and take

it out at any time. Computers are getting smaller and smaller, and working

faster and faster.

Computer can do many kinds of work. Now in many large factories there are

very few people. Computers do most of the work. They really help a lot.

People always say that we are lacking of the eyes of realizing the beauty in life. I can’t agree with it anymore. Last week, I woke up very early in the morning, so I decided to take a walk. The street was very quiet and there were many old people dancing in the square. Without many cars, I realized the city looked so clean and beautiful. Some coffee shops decorates so well, which attrated my eyes. The city was coverd by the green trees, which made it a green city. I liked this feeling so much. At this moment, I found the city was so lovely, I just ingored its beauty usually.

人们总是说我们缺乏发现实现生活中的美丽的眼睛。我十分同意。上周,我早上很早就醒了,所以我决定出去散步。街上很安静,有很多老人在广场上跳舞。街上没有了很多小车,我意识到这个城市看起来那么干净和漂亮。一些咖啡店装修很好,吸引了我的眼球。这座城市被绿色的树木覆盖着,这是一个绿化放的城市。我很喜欢这种感觉。这时,我发现这个城市是如此的可爱,平常我忽略了它的美。

As the drawing presents, there is a man walking across the street

absorbedly focusing on his cell phone without noticing the surroundings. This

sort of phenomenon is not uncommon and rare in some metropolis, especially among

the youngsters.

What the picture illustrates is the prevailing situation that has long

existed in todays China. That is the mobile phone obsession. With the advent of

information age, people are becoming

increasingly fascinated on the electronic products, especially the cell

phones. Not surprisingly, you could easily notice that most of us are obsessed

in sending messages, playing online games with their mobile phones. It cannot be

denied that this phenomenon may negatively impact the relationship among people,

and therefore they will become estranged and isolated.

Personally, in view of the overuse of mobile phones, I hold that we

individuals should raise the necessary awareness that good relationships are

reinforced by sincere and face-to-face communication.

Marie Curie, as a distinguished female scientists, In eight years time, and just 3,000 were of two different disciplines on the highest scientific crown -- Nobel Prize and the Nobel Prize in Chemistry.

No one has admitted she let such a beautiful and delicate woman to bear the cross of science,and she is going without looking back, in the history of mankind and left their names be eternal. Marie Curies life for the contribution it has made remarkable man. As a great woman, she has won the love and admiration for the people of the world.

However, she refused lifelong wealth, the honor and regard with indifference. She naturally behave but not disclosed to bear fruit, and she has not taken any of the fish for fame, neither helpless. Marie was born with the quality: unwavering character, intellectual perseverance; know all contributions to the spirit of self-sacrifice and not accept any benefits; success is not particularly proud of, scourge can bend the very purity of the soul. Shes all that. Her colorful life than work, or even more commendable.

我们都知道，想在小升初英语写作拿高分，就要摸透老师的喜好，引起“读者”的注意。而在写作中句子偏长恰恰会适得其反，很容易让人漏听一、两个单词，影响对整个句子的理解，所以我们要教大家一些化繁为简的技巧——

1、巧用单个词：即用一个单词代替一组意义相同的单词。比如：

用forget(忘记)代替do not remember(没有记住)

用ignore(忽视)代替do not pay attention to(不注意)

用now(现在)代替at this point in time(此时此刻)

用because(由于)代替due to the fact that(鉴于下列事实)

2、省略同义词或近义词。比如在下面例句中，形容词important(重要的)和significant(有重要意义的)，就是两个同义词(也可以说是近义词)，我们可以省略important，只保留significant。

The government project is important and significant.(这项政府计划是重要的，有重要意义。)

The government project is significant.(这项政府计划有重要意义。)

3、在不改变句子含义的前提下，省略所有可以省略的单词。比如在下面例句中，the cover of the book(书的封面)可以省略成the book cover，is red in color(是红色的)可以省略成is red。

The cover of the book is red in color.(书的封面是红色的)

The book cover is red.(书的封面是红色的)

现在我们把这三种方法结合起来，将一个冗长、绕嘴的句子，改写成一个简短、易懂的句子。

University malls must be accessible and free from congestion in order that students, faculty and employees may have unobstructed passage through those areas of the campus.(校内道路必须是便于通行的，不拥堵的，以便让学生、教师和职员能够无阻碍地通过，到达校园的各处。)

University malls must be free enough from congestion to allow people to walk through easily.(校内道路不应当拥堵，以便人们顺利通行。)

4、用介词短语替代从句。比如：

原句：While they were playing tennis, she started an argument that lasted all morning.

修改后：During tennis she started an argument that lasted all morning.

原句：When you come to the second traffic light, turn right.

修改后：At the second traffic light turn left.

5、删除诸如"who is”或"that is"之类的关系代词，变从句为短语。比如：

原句：The novel, which is written in three parts, told a story that took place in the Middle Ages.

修改后：The three-part novel told a story set in the Middle Ages.

注：把句中的"three parts"改用形容词来表达，节省了四个不必要的单词"which is written in"。我们经常可以将关系代词如"that"去掉，这只会引起最少的变动。

在今日全球化的经济环境下，有效地用英语(精品课)交流已经变得至关重要。

然而如何清晰地表达你的想法却是门大学问。太多时候人们只是简单地照抄他们眼中同事，尤其是上级写出来的“漂亮英语”。你每天都能在收件箱里看到很多例子——那些难懂的需要你读好多遍才能理解的邮件。

一个巨大的错误就是用一些不必要的单词和词组让你的文章变得冗长。你要牢记你写作的目的是为了更清晰地交流你的想法。

总是尽可能减少你句子中使用的字数，避免使用可以用更短的词代替的长词。以下是一些例子：

Instead of "prior to" use *before*

用“before”代替“prior to”

Instead of "subsequent" use *after*

用“after”代替“subsequent”

Instead of "in order to" use *to*

用“to”代替“in order to”

Instead of "in the event that" use *if*

用“if”代替“in the event that”

Instead of "with reference to" use *about*

用“about”代替“with the reference to”

Instead of "state of the art" use *latest*

用“latest”代替“state of the art”

Instead of "due to the fact that" use *since*

用“since”代替“due to the fact that”

Instead of "not later than 2pm" use *by 2pm*

用“by 2pm”代替“not later than 2pm”

Instead of "at the present time" use *now*

用“now”代替“at the present time”

同时也要记得文章有组织性。第一句话就要开门见山地点出你每一段要讲什么。除此之外，要控制你邮件的长度。没人想读一条长达10段的邮件。

通过使用简单的单词和易懂的词组，你就能最终提高你信息的清晰度。

难忘的回忆

Last summer holiday, I learned to swim. It was very unforgettable and interesting. I went to the swimming pool with my father. He taught me how to swim. At first, I was afraid of diving in the water. And I felt uncomfortable in the water. But father said it doesn’t matter and he would protect me. Then I began to swim, but I couldn’t swim forward at all. It made me upset. Then father told me how to move, how to stretch out my hands and legs. Slowly, I could move a little. In fact, it was not that easy. I learned it for almost half a month. I was excited when father told me I made it.

这篇内容是关于回忆的初中英语作文，讲述的是暑假去学游泳，我和爸爸去游泳池，他叫我怎么游的故事。

小学生作文写作技巧——写人的作文怎么写

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怎样写好写人作文

以写人为主的记叙文主要是通过对人物外貌、语言、动作、心理活动的描写和典型事例的叙述来反映人物的思想、性格、品质、作风等特点。

要写好写人为主的记叙文，应当从以下几方面入手：

1、写好人物的形象。人物的形象，一般指人物的外貌、语言、动作、心理活动等。人物的外貌，就是人物的外形特征，包括容貌、衣着、姿态、神情等等。外貌描写首先必须从文章中心思想的需要出发，要求抓住人物的本质特征，有选择、有重点地描写。人物的语言包括人物的独白，对话，交谈以及语气。“言为心声”。人物的语言是人物内心世界的直接表现。因此成功的语言描写能恰当地表现人物的身份、年龄、思想、品质、作风和个性特点。描写人物语言时，要注意符合人物的身份，表现人物的思想感情，反映人物相互间的关系。描写人物的动作时，不仅要写出人物“做什么”，还要写出“怎么做”。心理活动是无声的语言，是直接表现人物精神面貌，思想活动的手段。描写人物的心理活动时，要注意把心理活动产生的原因叙述清楚，还要注意与外貌、动作、语言描写结合起来。外貌、语言、动作、心理活动写好了，人物的形象就突出、鲜明了。

2、抓住人物的特点。每个人都有自己的特点，这个特点可以从人物的年龄、外貌、语言、动作、兴趣、个性、生活习惯等诸方面去考虑。一个人的特点是多方面的，作文时，我们应根据中心思想有所选择地写。

3、选用典型事例。人与事是分不开的。一个人做的事很多，在作文时我们应选择那些最能表现人物思想、性格和文章中心思想的典型事件。

4、运用细节描写。细节描写就是对能充分表现文章中心思想的人物外貌，语言、动作、表情等细小环节作具体、细致的描写。

小学阶段以写人为主的记叙文，一般分为三种类型；写一个人、写两个人、写几个人。其中应以写一个人为主。

一、写一个人。

记一个人的写人记叙文，大致有以下三种情况：

（一）通过写一件事写一个人。有的文章写人只写了一件事，写这一类的作文要注意以下几点：

1、要选择有代表性的生动事例画写。反映一个人的精神面貌的事例是很多的，通过一件事写人就要选取最有代表性的生动事例来写。

2、要写出事情的发展过程，使人物的形象逐步完整。

3、要把事情写具体。用一个典型事例记叙一个人，应该把这一事例写具体，这样人物形象才能丰满。

4、为了使读者对人物了解得更全面，使重点记叙的这件事有充分的依据和坚实的思想基础，使人物的形象更加丰富，文章的开头可以对人物作简要的介绍。

（二）通过几件事写一个人。

我们在生活中会接触到各种各样的人，有时使用一件事来反映一个人就显得比较单簿，不足以充分反映人物的特点及其品质，因此，必须用两三件事才可能说的明白，再现得充分。

通过几件事写一个人，要注意以下几点：

1、几件事不能相互矛盾，，人物的性格在几件事中要和谐、统一。

2、概括交代和具体描写相结合。在一篇简短的作文中要用几件事写一个人，不可能将每一件事详细叙述，因此一般可以彩杨交代和具体描写相结合的方法。即先概括交代一些事例，再具体记叙一两件事。

3、通过对比的方法写一个人。

通过对比方法写一个人，一般有三种：第一种是同一个人前后相比，说明这个人变化；第二种是对一个人的认识前后相比，说明这个人的品质；第三种是一个人同另一个人比，突出歌颂其中一个人。

通过对比的方法写一个人要注意：

（1）要突出主要人物及其主要特点。

（2）要写出人物的真实表现，不要捏造事实，采用拔高或贬低的方法。

二、写两个人

写两个人，一般是写《我和**》，**应包括亲人、同学、朋友、老师等熟悉的人，要写好这一类型的作文必须注意：

（一）要写好人物之间的联系。《我和**》，题目中突出了一个“和”字，这就要求从双方写起，通过具体的事例，写出“我”和**之间的联系。在叙事过程中，要写出彼此之间都想了些什么，说了些什么，做了些什么。只有从双方落笔，才能把握住题目要求写的重点。

（二）用对话展开情节。写《我和**》作文时，由于要写出两个人之间的关系，所以一定要写好两个人之间的对话。要用对话展开情节，用对话表现文章的中心。

三、写几个人。

写几个人是比较复杂的以写人为主的记叙文，可以写“一家子”、“这一班”，也可以写“几个小伙伴”。总之，不论是家庭的，学校的、社会的，只要是自己熟悉的几人都行。

这类作文有以下几种写法。

（一）列人物表似的介绍。

（二）有代表性的介绍。

（三）以一件事为线索写几个人。

（四）通过几件事写几个人。

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写人的作文，就是通过记叙人物的具体活动，来表现人物特点、性格、道德品质、精

神风貌及思想感情。要想写好写人的作文,必须学会以下几个方面的技巧、方法。

一、抓住特点。

有的同学爱学习、有的同学爱帮助别人，有的同学爱做小手工，有的同学爱吃零食，等等。这“爱学习”“爱帮助别人”“爱做小手工”“爱吃零食”就是这些人的主要特点。写人的作文就是要抓住这些特点，通过特点反映出这个人是什么样的人，有什么样的思想品质，等等。这些特点抓得越准确，事例写得越具体，给读者留下的印象就越深刻。如《胆小的我》，就是抓住了“我”胆小的事，写出了“我”胆小的性格特点。

二、选好事例。

写人的文章，也要写事例，通过一个或几个事例来表现出这个人的特点（最好用两、三件事来写一个人）。选择事例时，要选那些能打动人、影响人、感染人，给人印象深刻的事例，也就是要选择典型、新颖的事例。作文时，你第一个想到的事例不要用，第二个想到的事例也不要用，第三个甚至是第四、第五个想到的事例，你用在作文中一般容易吸引人、给人留下深刻的印象。这是因为你容易想到，别人也容易想到，大家都把这样的事写在作文中，作文就成了人云亦云的“大路货”，得不到高分或老师的好评。所选的事例要能充分表现人物的性格和品质。当你读完《胆小的我》后，你对“我”就有了深刻的印象了，作文就成功了。

三、运用描写。

要想把人物写得栩栩如生、活灵活现，就要运用动作、语言、心理、神态、肖像等多种描写方法。如《胆小的我》中“吓得我大叫一声，赶忙把眼睛蒙住，心‘怦怦’地跳个不停。”这句动作描写，把“我”胆小的性格写得惟妙惟肖。描写要符合人物的年龄、身份和职业。对同一个事物，一个小学生说的话肯定同大学教授说的话不一样。

四、写出细节。

要把人物细微的动作及其变化，写具体，写生动。如《胆小的我》中“把礼物放在了一个明显的地方”，第二天“故意给‘忘了’”。一“放”一“忘”，把“我”胆小的性格特征，给写活了。

五、善用对比。

对比是写人作文经常用到的写作方法。可以拿自己的某一方面特点、爱好、特长和他人的对比，即横向对比；也可以写自己现在在某一方面怎么样和过去自己在某一方面如何进

行对比，即纵向对比。通过横、纵对比，能把一个人的思想品质、精神风貌、主要特点给突出形象地表现出来。运用对比描写，不应该勉强凑合，适合采用对比写法就用，不适合采用对比写法的就不要用。

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本学期，我将结合学校工作计划和学校教学工作计划的要求，规范常规教学，提高教学质量，努力形成自己的教学特色。

一、总体思路

以努力提高教学质量为目标，以抓好教学常规工作，提高英语合格率为重点，采用任务型教学法，注重“学困生”的教育补差工作，形成良好的教学风气。

二、学生情况分析

经过一学期的学习，从上期期末成绩来看，七年级两个班的英语成绩比较理想。平均分82分。大部分学生学习目的明确，态度端正，掌握了英语学习的一些基本方法，能够积极主动认真地学习，学习成绩较好。但还有少部分学生没有明确的学习目的，缺少学习的热情和主动性，自觉性较差，相应的学习习惯也差，加上两极分化十分严重。

三、教材分析

《Goforit》七年级下册共14个单元，包括2个复习单元。全书采用任务型语言教学模式，融汇话题、交际功能和语言结构，形成了一套循序渐进的生活化的学习程序。每个单元都列出明确的语言目标，主要的功能项目与语法结构，需要掌握的基本词汇，并分为A、B两部分。A部分是基本的语言内容，B部分是知识的扩展和综合的语言运用。每个单元还有selfcheck部分，供学生自我检测本单元所学的语言知识。它采用“语言的输入---学生的消化吸收---学生的语言输出”为主线编排的。

四、教学目标

掌握本册书上的重点词汇、词组以及句型。通过本学期的学习，培养学生对英语的学习兴趣，形成有效的学习策略，有效提高学习效率，发展双基能力;培养听、说、读、写的能力，使学生初步获得运用英语的能力，达到语言运用能力的迁移和拓展;通过了解世界，了解不同地区的人文风俗，学会理解和尊重异国文化，并使学生在人际交往中学会尊重和理解别人，能在小组活动中积极与他人合作，相互帮助，共同完成学习任务，尽情享受学习的乐趣。

五、教学措施

1、加强词汇教学，包括单词拼写、词义记忆，语言功能的训练。

词汇是文章、句子的基本单位，词汇量的大小，将直接关系到学生能否流利地运用英语进行交际;能否熟练地用英语读和写;能否顺利地用英语思考。从上学期的期末考试所反映的问题看，在今后的教学中，在加强拼读与拼写的同时，应帮助学生进行有意识记，应加强对词的用法及内在含义的理解，要培养学生用英语解释单词的能力，逐步启发引导学生用英语思考。单词教学一定要做到词不离句，这样，学生在学会了单词的同时，也学会了词的一些基本用法。

2、每天背诵课文中的对话，培养语感。

3、基本的语法教学一定要与语境相结合。

进行语法操练时，要坚持“四位一体”，即话题、语境、结构、功能相结合。抓住话题，联系语境，确定语法结构，明确语法功能(交际功能)。要重视语法知识对于培养语言运用功能的基础作用，又要注重改革教法。课堂上一定要有生动活泼的教学活动。

4、进一步培养阅读能力和写作能力。

阅读和写作能力的培养是英语教学的又一重点。阅读和写作能力的培养在于平时。教师在平时讲解阅读理解题时，应着力帮助学生分析语言材料，而不是核对答案;平常应该多写作文。

5、做好学困生转化和优秀生培养工作。

优秀生：___，___，__，___。

学困生：___，___，__，___，___，___，___，___，___，___，___，___，___。

尤其对学困生进行专门辅导，布置一些作业，让他们在小进步、小转变中体会学习的快乐，树立学习的自信，尽快成长起来。

6、继续搞好师徒结对活动。

师徒结对活动也是一种好的学习方式。

7、作业布置要做到数量适中，批阅及时，对出现的问题要跟踪矫正，认真讲评，尽量面批面改。提高练习质量，要精选资料。

六、教研课题

《浅谈英语阅读能力的培养》

措施：用新的教学理念指导英语阅读教学，进一步改变教法和学法，培养学生对英语阅读的兴趣，提高学生的英语阅读能力，提高英语教学效果。

1、尝试通过各种形式的学习，例如复述课文、把课文改编成情景剧、阅读竞赛等活动，提高学生学习英语的兴趣，从而达到自主积累、综合运用英语的目的，并指导学生运用科学的方法记忆单词、阅读课文，取得事半功倍的效果。

2、通过信息技术与学科整合的手段，以课内为基础，增加课外阅读的量，指导学生借助信息手段和工具书理解文章基本内容的方法，提高学生的英语自学能力。

3、以复述课文、回答问题、判断正误、通过上下文线索猜词义为载体，培养学生的综合阅读技能，提高学生的英语阅读理解能力。