初中英语日记范文10篇带翻译【推荐20篇】

It is believed that the computer is bringing the world into a brand new

era. At the time the computer was invented, scientists, marveling at its

calculating speed, felt that they had created a miracle. Nowadays, the function

of the computer is no longer confined to calculation; it permeates people’s

daily lives and has become an inseparable part of human society.

People become so heavily dependent on computers that it is hard to imagine

the life without computers. Therefore, some people are worried that “The real

danger is not that the computer will think like man, but man will think like the

computer.”

Their concern does make sense. Indeed, some people spend such a long time

working on computers that they have few interactions with people in real life.

According to a research, too many hours in front of a computer may lead to a

poker face and interpersonal isolation. This fact should arouse our attention,

because unlike computers, human beings are social creatures that need emotional

connections with others.

Yet, it is also unnecessary for us to be overwhelmed by the negative

impacts of computers. After all, we humans are intelligent and will be able to

figure out better ways to make improvements.

MondaySeptember1,20__weather：__

This is my day. Im very busy, but very happy. I got up at 6:45. I had

breakfast at 7:10 with my parents. I said “Good morning!” to my parents. My

parents smiled. I went to school at 7:30. I said “Hello! Good morning!” to my

friends. I had English class at 8:40.At noon, I had lunch. In the evening, I had

dinner at 6:30. I did my homework at 7:00. I went to bed at 10:00.This is my

day!

时光飞逝，短暂而又愉快的假期生活已经结束了。接下来我所面临的是紧张而又愉快的新学期的教育教学生活。为把新学期的教育教学工作做好，特此作如下教学计划：

一、指导思想。

坚持马列主义，毛泽东思想。高举邓小平理论伟大旗帜，认真学习教育理论，贯彻“三个代表”重要指导思想，积极响应和贯彻素质教育钻研素质教育的实质。“减负”的内在，并以此指导自己的教育教学工作，遵循教育教学规律，紧扣大纲，把我教学层次，不断提高自己的业务水平。

二、基本情况。

这一学期，我继续担任初一(1，2)班的英语教学工作。这两个班级，每班各有学生三十五人左右，但是，基础却不尽人意。初一.1班的学生基础还可以，但是2班的基础却相差很远，学生基础参差不齐，两极分化严重，没有学习的兴趣。因此，教学工作开展的相当困难。

三、教材特点。

初中英语第一册(下)主要介绍了日常生活的交际用语以及一些西方国家的文化背景和风俗习惯，教材通俗易懂，旨在使初一级学生基本能用英语进行简单的交流。

四、教学目标。

力争在期末考试中优秀率打到30%左右，及格率达到60%左右。缩小学生间的差距。为下一学期的英语教育教学工作打下以良好的基础。

五、具体措施。

1、每天背诵课文中的对话。目的：要求学生背诵并默写，培养语感。

2、每天记5个生词，2个常用句子或习语。实施：利用“互测及教师抽查”及时检查，保证效果并坚持下去。

3、认真贯彻晨读制度：规定晨读内容，加强监督，保证晨读效果。

4、坚持日测、周测、月测的形成性评价制度：对英语学习实行量化制度，每日、每周、每月都要给学生检验自己努力成果的机会，让进步的同学体会到成就感，让落后的同学找出差距，感受压力。由此在班里形成浓厚的学习氛围，培养学生健康向上的人格和竞争意识。

5、对后进生进行专门辅导，布置单独的作业，让他们在小进步、小转变中体味学习的快乐，树立学习的自信，尽快成长起来。

6、关注学生的情感，营造宽松、民主、和谐的教学氛围。

7、实施"任务型"的教学途径，培养学生综合语言运用能力。

8、在教学中根据目标并结合教学内容，创造性地设计贴近学生实际的教学活动，吸引和组织他们积极参与。学生通过思考、调查、讨论、交流和合作等方式，学习和使用英语，完成学习任务。

9、加强对学生学习策略的指导，为他们终身学习奠定基础。

10、认真钻研教材，备好，上好每一节课，向45分钟要质量。

总之，新的学期已经开始了，我要以上一学期的基础为起点，树立信心，全身心的投入到新学期的教育教学工作中去。争取在新的一年里，把教育教学工作推向一新的层次。

I think I will be an interpreter, because I like all kinds of the languaes.

Of course, I may be a businessman . Because I like biz,too. I will have a villa

and a robot. In ten years, My parents will have hoary hair and rimple. And I

will be more mature than now. I will be more disengaged than now, too. My family

will be richer and richer.

我认为我将会作为一名翻译,因为我喜欢各种各样的语言.当然,我可能是一个商人.因为我喜欢,真是太好了.我将会有一幢别墅和一个机器人.在十年内,我的父母会有花白的头发和rimple.主耶和华如此说、我将比现在更加成熟.我将会有更多的空闲比现在也是.我的家人会越来越丰富.

The Laba Festival is a traditional Chinese holiday celebrated on the eighth day of the twelfth month of the lunar Chinese calendar. "La" is the name given to the 12th lunar month and 8 is pronounced as "ba" in Chinese, which translated is "Laba." There are several legends about the origin of this festivity and we could not tell which one is true. But what we know today is that this festival started as a sacrificial offering to ancestors. It was also a time for the ancient Chinese to pray to heaven and earth that there would be a bountiful harvest. Many people hoped for good luck as well for the coming year.

农历十二月初八是中国的传统节日——腊八节，腊代表中国农历的十二月，而八是eight的发音，因此，这个节日被翻译成腊八。关于腊八起源的传说有很多，我们已经不能辨其真假。时至今日，我们确定的是这个节日起初是为了祭祀祖先，祈求丰收以及为即将来到的一年祈福。

Traditionally, the Laba rice porridge is the most important element of the festival. Generally, the porridge contains eight ingredients which can include glutinous rice, red beans, millet, Chinese sorghum, peas, dried lotus seeds and some other ingredients, such as dried dates, chestnut meat, walnut meat, almond, peanut, etc. The porridge must be boiled for many hours and then offered as a sacrifice to the ancestors. This must be done before noontime. Also, it is tradition that family members eat the porridge together. Then they leave some as a symbol of hope for a good harvest the coming year.

从传统上讲，腊八粥是腊八节最重要的元素。腊八粥通常由八种材料做成，这些材料可以是黏米，红豆，小米，高粱，豌豆，莲子和一些诸如红枣，栗子，核桃仁，杏仁，花生等谷物。粥要熬制数小时，然后作为祭品祭献给祖先。这个祭祀活动一定要在中午之前完成。之后，家人们坐在一起吃腊八粥也就成了传

Another custom is the soaking of Laba garlic. Garlic is soaked in vinegar for more than twenty days starting from Laba festival. Then when the Chinese New Year comes, the garlic and vinegar is used alongside jiaozi on the table.

腊八节的另一传统式腌制腊八蒜。从腊八节那天起，就将蒜泡在醋中二十多天，这样，到春节的时候，就可以在餐桌上与饺子同食了。

One Sunday my mother (Mother) had (made) me take my little young brother to

a trip to the country. She bade me take good care of him.While we were walking

along the road, the sun was shining brightly and the breeze was blowing gently.

We saw the beautiful flowers smile (smiling) at us and heard the birds sing

(singing) their sweet songs on the trees. The scenery was indeed very pretty

(beautiful).When we felt tired, we returned home. We saw Mother (our mother)

wait (waiting) for us at the door.

1995 I went into taizhou junior middle school.Totally we had 7 classes,I

was in class 4.The head-teacher of the class was a middle age woman.she was so

strict with us.for example, i was catched when i ate a big rabbit sugar during

class time,she asked me to buy that bland sugar one peice for everyone.in my

opinion ,she hated everyting except study,everyweekend ,she asked us to study in

school,sunday afternoon was just the free time for us.when she saw we played

football,she must get the ball back to her office.someone who was to be in love

was found by her,he would be punished just like a shit.luckyly,i was not found

by her.i liked the girl who was my Elementary school schoolmate during my junior

middle school.i didnt know she konwed or not.it ended when we graduated.but i

liked to talk with others during class time,everytime i was found by her,she

asked me to write 3000 words to explain why and how to do in future. nowadyas

every time i remeber what happened in my junior middle school,i deeply appreciat

her kindness.she is real a good teacher.

My junior middle school time has pasted ,but it will influece till the end

of my life.

暑假是绿色的,太阳用毒舍舔着大地,而我用书来做”防晒霜”.我先在《海底两万里》处与小鱼儿们交朋友，与美人鱼姐姐做游戏;然后《环游地球八十天》来到南极，和企鹅们一起狂欢、一起跳舞;后来又和《飞向月球》的勇士们去探索奥秘。

暑假是蓝色的。我来到游泳馆和朋友们在水中嬉戏，在快乐中洗去一学期中的不愉快，在清凉的水中洗去暑假的炽热，玩呀玩，我们都变成了一只只活泼的小鸭子，变成了一只只幽雅的小天鹅，变成了一条条快乐的小鱼。

暑假是金色的。在夜幕降临之后，小星星们开始开派对!他们都穿着金丝绒的衣服，脚上穿着灰姑娘的水晶鞋，当我们睡着了，她们就偷偷溜入我们的梦中，把最美好的祝福送给我们，所以梦儿都会闪着金色的光芒。

啊!美丽的暑假，你如一位魔术师，把多少欢乐送给了我们!我真喜欢暑假!

201X年X月X日 晴天

In China, people usually have three meal a day, they are breakfast, lunch

and supper.People usually have breakfast from seven to nine in the morning.

There are many kind of food for them to eat, such as nuddles, eggs, fried dough

sticks and soy milk. They have lunch at about twelve at noon, usually have

vegetables, meats and rice. They have a short rest after lunch. Supper is about

at six in the evening. All the family eat together, they eat the same kind of

food as the lunch. Some people like to have some fruits after the meal.

Monday September1,20__ weather：__

I live very happily today! In the morning, it is very fine! Then I climb

the mountain with family, the air on the mountain is very fresh, the flowers

plants and trees on the mountain all seem extremely beautiful. Coming back home

in the evening, family and I sat and watched TV together, we are returning and

eating the fruit while chatting, the whole family is happy and harmonious!

"When a guest comes to my home from afar on a cold night, I light bamboo to

boil tea to offer him.”— Ancient Chinese poem.

China is the home country of tea. Before the Tang Dynasty, Chinese tea was

exported by land and sea, first to Japan and Korea, then to India and Central

Asia and, in the Ming and Qing dynasties, to the Arabian Peninsula. In the early

period of the 17th century, Chinese tea was exported to Europe, where the upper

class adopted the fashion of drinking tea. Chinese tea—like Chinese silk and

china—has become synonymous worldwide with refined culture. At the heart of the

culture of tea—the study and practice of tea in all its aspects—is the simple

gesture of offering a cup of tea to a guest that for Chinese people today is a

fundamental social custom, as it has been for centuries.

China traces the development of tea as an art form to Lu Yu, known as "the

Saint of Tea" in Chinese history, who lived during the Tang Dynasty and who

wrote The Book of Tea, the first ever treatise on tea and tea culture. The

spirit of tea permeates Chinese culture, and throughout the country there are

many kinds of teas, teahouses, tea legends, tea artifacts and tea customs.

Better-known places to enjoy a good cup of tea in China include Beijing noted

for its variety of teahouses; Fujian and Guangdong provinces and other places in

the southeast of China that serve gongfu tea, a formal serving of tea in tiny

cups; the West Lake in Hangzhou, also the home of the Tea Connoisseurs

Association, noted for its excellent green tea; and provinces in southwest China

like Yunnan where the ethnic groups less affected by foreign cultures retain tea

ceremonies and customs in original tea-growing areas.

等风起

“随着风前行吧，你所向往的美好终会到来。”

——题记

那一天，安吉遇见了温蒂。

那是一个美丽的黄昏，安吉坐在田埂上，正一边弹奏着他的里拉琴，一边低唱着他创作的诗歌。

安吉是一个内向的孩子，他热爱音乐，有着极高的创作天赋，却无处展示他的才华——常年沉浸在音乐世界的他没有朋友，是旁人眼中的“怪小孩”。于是，他只能在孤身一人的时候弹起里拉琴，唱出自己的心声。

安吉遥望着太阳缓缓下落的地方，心中落寞，任凭晚风吹乱他的头发，只是静静的唱着歌。歌声如清泉一般，在被落日余晖染成金黄色的天地间缓缓流淌，却不知要流向何方。唱着、唱着，突然，一个甜美的女孩声音乘着风，轻轻落入他的耳中：“你的歌真好听!是你自己作的吗?”

安吉一抬头，一个身穿飘逸长裙的女孩俏生生地立在他面前。女孩笑嘻嘻地道：“我想和你做朋友!我叫温蒂，你叫什么呀?”

就这样，安吉认识了温蒂，两人一见如故，成了朋友。温蒂成了安吉唯一的听众，她总是如风一般神出鬼没，往往连招呼都不打，便突然出现在安吉面前。她那身如烟云般飘逸的长裙上总是带着各种不同的气息：花开的时候是淡雅的幽香，雨后是水珠的清爽香气，秋收时是农民们的汗水气息和迷人的稻香……这些让安吉才思泉涌，写下了一首又一首诗歌。当他将诗歌唱给温蒂听后，温蒂总会大加赞赏。有一天，她对安吉说：“你的诗歌这样好听，为什么不让更多的人听到呢?”

“让更多的人，听到……”安吉抱着琴喃喃自语，这是他一直想做，却又不敢做的事。“对啊!”温蒂笑道，“去更远的地方吧!不用害怕，我一直都在你身边。觉得迷茫的时候，就等风起

于是，安吉背上他的琴离开了故乡，成为了一名吟游诗人。他弹着琴，唱着歌，去了许多从未去过的地方，见到了许多形形色色的人，创作了许多世人广为传诵的诗歌。他尽情施展自己的才华，从那个小男孩变成了一个少年诗人。温蒂仍会在风起时出现，听他唱歌，陪他前行，日子便这样一天天过去。

可好景不长，战争爆发了，敌国的侵略者疯狂地在安吉的家园四处烧杀抢掠。安吉开始为军人、难民们演唱。他用歌声鼓舞军中的士气，抚慰难民们因战争千疮百孔的身体与心灵。但是战争实在太残酷：今天还在与安吉谈笑的士兵，也许明天就会在战场上为了保卫国家死去;今天还是山清水秀的小镇，也许明天就会在侵略者的铁蹄下化为满地废墟……安吉看着这一切，悲痛万分却又无可奈何。

一日，黄昏时分，军号突然响起，士兵们紧急前往边疆作战。当天夜里，安吉来到了他们曾奋战过的战场上，脚下是浸透血浆的焦土，远方是来势汹汹的敌人，以及苦苦抵抗他们的将士。一阵风拂过安吉的脸颊，那个熟悉的女孩声音响起：“安吉。”

“温蒂，”安吉没有转头，只是木讷地看着远方，身穿长裙的女孩出现在他身边。温蒂的长裙上，以前温暖迷人的气息不见了，只余下浓浓的血腥与尘土气味。安吉迎着风，眼神中满是茫然与不解，“为什么这世界上，会有战争和死亡呢?”

温蒂沉默了，许久后才道：“这个世界上不止有战争、死亡，还有许许多多你无法想象的污浊与黑暗。它们就像迷雾一样，出现在世间，出现在每个人的身边。但是，风总会刮起，光明总会落下，黑夜将被照彻，迷雾将被吹散，希望将会到来。”

安吉收回目光，看向温蒂，温蒂笑着指指他的脚边，安吉低头一看，讶异的发现——一朵孱弱的白色小花静静地盛开在满地血污之间，显得那么纯洁、美好。明明脆弱的一触即碎，却仍是傲然立于风中，显得无比生气蓬勃。

远方的风中传来嗡鸣，安吉分辨出来——那是他的国家的号角，胜利的号角。与此同时，阳光正一缕缕从地平线溢出，天亮了。

新生，即将来临。

“我该走了。”温蒂轻声说，她单薄的身体逐渐变得透明，安吉一脸无措，想出手挽留，被温蒂阻止，“你不需要我的陪伴了。迷茫的时候，就等风起

女孩的声音淡在风中，仿佛带着笑意。

“我叫Windy。安吉，我一直都在你身边……”

安吉抱着琴在原地沉默了许久，随后擦了擦眼睛，转身走向了远方，再次开始他的旅程。他将继续写诗，给人民带来快乐与慰籍。

在他身后，那朵小花仍立于风中，它会枯萎，会长出种子，风会把它的种子带往远方，世界的每个角落都将开满繁花。风会吹走战争的阴霾，失去的家园会重建，死去的人们将安息，而活下来的人们，将会迎来全新的开始，走向更美好的未来……

等风起

The first snow came. How beautiful it was, falling so silently all day

long, all night long, on the mountains, on the meadows, on the roofs of the

living, on the graves of the dead! All white save the river, that marked its

course by a winding black line across the landscape; and the leafless trees,

that against the leaden sky now revealed more fully the wonderful beauty and

intricacies of their branches. What silence, too, came with the snow, and what

seclusion! Every sound was muffled, every noise changed to something soft and

musical. No more tramping hoofs, no more rattling wheels! Only the chiming of

the sleigh-bells, beating as swift and merrily as the hearts of children.

Today, I opened my free forum and I was very happy because I could do a lot

of things there. I decided to upgrade my forum and make it interesting. Then I

will make it grow up and at the same time, I can write down what I want to say

there. I will be very happy.

今天我开通了自己的免费论坛，我很高兴。因为我可以在那里做很多事。我决定要好好改造我的论坛，让他变得很新奇。然后我就会慢慢地让他成长起来，同时在那里写下我的心声。那样我会很快乐。

Halloween

Halloween is an autumn holiday that Americans celebrate every year. It means "holy evening," and it comes every October 31, the evening before All Saints Day. However, it is not really a church holiday, it is a holiday for children mainly.

Every autumn, when the vegetables are ready to eat, children pick large orange pumpkins. Then they cut faces in the pumpkins and put a burning candle inside. It looks as if there were a person looking out of the pumpkin! These lights are called jack-o-lanterns, which means "Jack of the lantern".

The children also put on strange masks and frightening costumes every Halloween. Some children paint their faces to look like monsters. Then they carry boxes or bags from house to house. Every time they come to a new house, they say,"Trick or treat! Money or eat!" The grown-ups put treat-money or candy in their bags.

Not only children, but most grown-ups also love Halloween and Halloween parties because on this day,they can disguise themselves as personages or ghost as their imaginations will lead them. This bring them the satisfaction of being young.

万圣节前夕

万圣节前夕是美国人年年都会庆祝的秋季节日。它的意思是“神圣的夜晚”，在每年的10月31日，也就是万圣节前夜。但实际上这不是一个真正的宗教节日，而主要是孩子们的节日。

每年秋天蔬菜成熟可以食用的时候，孩子们就会挑出大个儿的橙色南瓜。然后在南瓜上刻上一张脸，把一根点燃的蜡烛放在里面。看起来就好像有人在向南瓜外面张望。这些灯就叫做“iack-o-lantems”，意思也就是“杰克的灯”。

每年万圣节前夕孩子们还戴上奇怪的面具，穿上吓人的服装。有些孩子把脸刷成怪物。然后他们拿着盒子或袋子挨家挨户串门。每来到一个新房子他们就说：“不款待就捣乱!给钱还是吃的!”大人们就会把用来招待的钱或糖放在他们的袋子里了。

不仅孩子，许多成年人也喜欢万圣节前夕和万圣节前夕晚会。因为这一天他们可以根据自己的想象把自己装扮成名流或幽灵。这会带给他们年轻的快感。

1959至2009，中国成立60周年，我们为这一天而欢腾，而快乐!

60年来，祖国经历了多少困难，有过多少经历，终于经过60年我国发扬起来了，强大起来了，振兴起来了，站起来了!我们为这而骄傲而自豪。

60年来，中国也出了不少英雄，有：小雨来、周恩来、主席、詹天佑、雷锋、鲁迅还有很多。

我记得，鲁迅先生曾说过：唯有发扬起来才有真进步!我们只有努力，虚心才有进步，我们离中国60年这一天不远了，让我们为中国祝贺：祝祖国妈妈生日快乐!

去图书馆看书

The weather of today is very comfortable, though the weather forecast said

it is cloudy, but just a little bit rain, very cool.

今天非常炎热，一大早起床就感觉闷热的难受。吃完早饭妈妈让我陪同她去买菜我也没去。因为实在是太热了，感觉动一下手指头身上都在向外冒汗。

The weather forecast said it is cloudy, and friends about to play

basketball, but unfortunately, in the rain can play. Afternoon after the rain

stopped to help my mother to buy food supermarket. Generally bad mood today.

下午到市图书馆看了一下午的书。因为图书馆有空调可以吹，而且书也比家里的多太多了。顺便查了一下日全食的资料。

快乐的周末 A Happy Weekend

I have a happy weekend!Take lessons on Saturday, Im going to cram school,

tutoring English and maths. In the afternoon, I watch TV at home. In the

evening, I want to go out for a walk with mom and dad and sister.On Sunday, Im

going to the shopping center reading, the book is really interesting. After

lunch, Im going to the sports, the body health is very important! In the

evening, I at home reading. How about you? What are you going to do this

weekend?

Serious Floods

The Yangzte River is the longest river in China. And its important and helpful to us Chinese. But these days the Yangtze River is bringing us serious floods.

Many villages were destroyed by floods. The floods made hundreds of millions of people lose their homes, relatives and friends. Many children cant go to school as usual .Now the foods have drawn the attention of the whole world. People from abroad have offered their help too. In China, millions of soldiers are busy fighting against the floods. They are working very hard. Many of them have lost their lives in their attempt to save the villagers.

Though we cant help them to fight against floods, we should help them to rebuild their homeland. We can present them our pocketmoney and clothes. I believe most of the people will return to their homeland in the near future.

严重的水灾

长江是中国最长的河流。它对我们中国人十分重要。但现在长江给我们带来了严重的水灾。

许多村庄被洪水冲毁于。洪水使成千上万的人失去了家园，亲戚和朋友。许多孩子不能与平常——样去学校了。现在洪水引起了全球的注意。国外的人也给予了援助。在中国，上百万的战士忙于与洪水搏斗。他们努力工作，许多人在救村民时献出了自己的生命。

尽管我们不能帮助他们抗洪，但我们可以帮他们重建家园。我们可以捐出零花钱和衣服。我相信在不久的将来大多数人会回到家乡。

教学目标：

1、 知识与能力：通过片段训练，学生能对一件事情做到具体叙述。

2、 过程与方法：通过演示实验、练习，掌握一定的写作技巧。

3、 情感态度与价值观：营造浓郁的文学氛围，激发学习文学热情，陶冶学生心情。 教学重点：片段练习

教学难点：通过片段练习，掌握如何使作文具体化的技巧方法

教学设想：演示实验—练习—分析—片段练习—方法总结

教学过程：

一、组织教学、课堂导入：

同学们在学习语文的过程中感到最可怕的是写作文，感到最难的`也是写作文，胶尽脑汁而无处下笔，搜肠刮肚找不到一个恰当的词语。不由的发出感叹：“作文难啊，难于上晴天”。其实作文难写吗?答案是肯定的!真那么难写吗?亦不然!

因为在祖国的语言文字里，有黄河的不羁和刚强，有长江的奔放和潇洒，有泰山的威武，有草原的粗犷，有彩陶的古朴典雅，有花椒的芳香四溢。有先秦的繁星明月：是皎洁的汉宫秋月，是珠落玉盘的琵琶，是高山流水的琴瑟，是“推”“敲”不定的月下门，是庄子的逍遥游，是孔子的颠沛流利，是魏王的老骥之志，是诸葛的锦囊妙计，是君子好逑的《诗三百》，是魂兮归来的《楚词》，是执过羊鞭的《兵法》，是受过宫刑的《史记》，是李太白的杯中酒，是曹雪芹的梦中泪，是千古绝唱的诗词曲赋，是功垂青史的《四库全书》……它不仅是我们每个人学习、工作、生活的工具，而且负载着丰富的情感，深邃的思想，人类的文明。有了这些，我们写作文怎么会难写呢?何愁写不好呢?这就要我们平时养成多读书、读好书的习惯，写好读书笔记。因为书到用时方恨少。这节课老师和同学们一起解决作文中的一个难题：如何使作文具体化?

二、活动一：

(一) 、教师演示：教师手拿一枚硬币，硬币从手中滑落，掉到讲桌上后又掉到地上。

1、要求：

(1)、每一个同学仔细观察这种现象，然后用一句话描写这种现象。

(2)、同学之间交流、分享。

摘录例句：

(1)、有一枚硬币从老师手中滑落，掉到了地上。

(2)、有一枚硬币从老师胖乎乎的手中滑落，掉到了讲桌上，然后又像一个小精灵叮叮当当的掉到了地上，在地上画了一个优美的圆弧后平静地躺在哪儿。

2、分析：

在同学们写的句子中你认为哪一句写的最好?原因是?第二句比第一句增加了一些内容，说说增加了哪些内容?

通过讨论分析得出结论：都认为第二句好。第二句不仅写出了硬币从哪儿掉下来，更写出了老师的手，硬币掉到地上的响声，还运用拟人的手法，写出了硬币的姿态，写出了情感。

3、教师点拨：

我们在课堂上要会听课：伸开耳朵去细心的听，睁大眼睛去仔细的看，张开嘴巴去详细的说，用心去细细的想，让后用笔去写写、记记——你看看你变的“聪”明了。在前面的学习讨论中，逐步扩充，最终使句子完整、生动、形象，我们不妨给它取名“步步追问”。用这个方法可以把内容写的具体一些。但是同学们想想：在现实生活中，我们遇到的事情，能不能每件事情都要去演示，都要去追问，这显然是不可能的!有些事情我们不能去演示，只能通过联想和想象去解决，使情节更合理，我们不妨叫它“想象延伸”。如“绿色”、王羲之“之”字写法、“台阶”你可以想到什么?

4、学生讨论总结：

由“绿色”想象到：“水、植物、春天、军人、生命、和平、希望、朝气、青春……等”;

由王羲之“之”字写法想象到：“要有个性、不要墨守成规、行行出状元……等”;

有“台阶”想象到：“一切从零开始、成功的道路的不平坦的、人梯精神、永不止步……等”。这样以来我们的思维变的活跃了，视野开阔了，作文变得好写了。

5教师点拨：我们每天生活在祖国温暖的怀抱之中，生活在亲人、老师、同学的关爱之中、生活在亲情之中，其乐融融。要我们去刻画一个人物的肖像，同学们想想，上面两种方法是否可行?显然以上两种方法是不不够的，我们必须对一个人的某一部位，某个方面进行精细的描绘，才能表现出这个人的优秀品质，我们不妨叫它“局部雕刻”。举例：《范进中举》中胡屠户形象。

三、活动二：根据以上方法进行片段练习。

(一)、练习话题1：我惭愧。

1、公式：具体心理形象=步步追问+想像延伸

2、注意：

(1)、是什么原因惭愧?

(2)、惭愧时是什么表情?

(3)、惭愧时是什么心理?

3、师生互动交流，分享成果。

4、教师范文：

我惭愧。我站在老师跟前，耷拉着脑袋，脸火烧火燎的，两只手没处放了，只是无意识的拧着衣角，两脚无力的支撑着身体。心里好像打翻了五味瓶，酸甜苦辣咸，什么滋味儿都有。同学们信任我，选我当班干部，我却做出这等丢人现眼的事儿，我对的起谁?是家里的父母，还是学校里的老师。我的目光在地面上搜寻着，如果有个缝儿的话，我一定会钻进去。

(二)练习话题2：既喜欢又讨厌的同桌。

1、公式：具体人物形象=步步追问+想象延伸+局部雕刻

2、注意：

(1)喜欢到什么程度?

(2)讨厌到什么程度?

(3)为什么会有这样两重情况?

(4)特别注意人物刻画。

3、学生练笔、师生互动、交流分享成果。

4、教师范文：

1、大胆夸张，来点叛逆。

范文：

已知：数学卷2张，语文卷2张，物理、化学卷各1张，英语卷2张， 求：能否在眼皮打架之前做完?

解：因为：一天24小时，在校上课学习时间9个小时，睡觉休息时间8个小时，吃喝拉撒、路上时间2个小时，数学卷2个小时，语文卷2个小时，物理化学卷2个小时，英语卷2个小时。

所以：总共需要27个小时。 结果：在眼皮打架之前不能完成。

2、巧妙悖论，来点幽默。

范文：

3、准确扑捉，画一副漫画。

范文：

4、学以致用，历练身手。

范文：

五、总结：文似看山不喜平。所以除了引人眼球的标题，一锤定音的开头，回头百媚生的结尾外，还要做到词语生动、句式灵活、善用修辞、文体立意等诸多方面。做生活中的有心人，在生活中运用语文，在生活中学会语文。

六、作业：以“他在娘的脸上亲了一下”为话题，写150字左右的片段。

七、板书设计

小雨中，第二天的军训正式拉开帷幕。绵中的新生以“不怕困难，勇往直前”的精神，在细雨中进行队列转换。天边时有闪电以耀眼的白光迸出，在天空炸开，向四周溅射，随之而来的是低沉的雷声，像心不在焉的贝斯手无意间弹拨出的声音。乌云在天的一边，压得很低很低，以不为人知的速度在慢慢移动。而天的另一边则是几朵轻云孤零零的飘着。天上也没有太阳，但却有十分清晰的分界：一边就像夜晚即将来临，一边还不如黎明前的将亮未亮。

雷声越来越近，震耳欲聋，雨点也越来越大，越织越密;天色渐渐暗了下来，四周笼罩着阴云。同学们纷纷向教学楼方向跑去，想找一处避雨之所。教官们都站在主席台躲雨的地方，乐呵呵地看着我们，还互相讨论着。我们班仍保持着整齐的队列一起向教室方向跑。有伞的也毫不吝啬与周围的同学分享。

回到教室，我的身上湿完了。看到大家都湿漉漉回来，不禁相视对笑。有的人在埋怨雨太大，有的人在忙着将身上擦干。

军训遇雨，既有苦趣，更有乐趣，不亦快哉!