中考英语作文评分标准及评分说明（精品20篇）

The desire for good health is universal. In our competitive society it is important to maintain good health.

On the one hand, people with good health can do work with full confidence and their progress in work in turn contributes to their health and happiness.

On the other hand, a sick person is usually not interested in everything around him and therefore he loses many opportunities to become successful.

There are many ways to keep it. First, those who are always on the go from morning till night should find time to relax because too much stress will affect their health. Second, enough time should be left for sleep because that will help one become rested and refreshed.

Finally, regular physical exercises benefit one‘s health a lot. So one should always keep in mind that a certain amount of exercise is not a waste of time.As for me, I like playing tennis in the morning. I also attach much

A:内容(12分)

一(好) 12—11分 中心突出,内容充实,有真情实感

二(较好) 10—8分 中心明确,内容具体,有真情实感

三(中) 7—5分 中心基本明确,内容比较具体,有一定感受

四(较差) 4—3分 中心不明确,内容抽象,不具体,缺乏真情实感

五(差) 2—0分 严重偏离题意

B:语言(11分)

一(好) 11—10分 语言通顺,连贯,得体,生动,无语病,表达准确清楚

二(较好) 9—8分 语言得体,通顺,有少量语病,表达清楚

三(中) 7—5分 语言得体,大体通顺,有四到五处语病,表达较清楚

四(较差) 4—3分 语言不够得体,不太通顺,病句较多

五(差) 2—0分 文理不通

C:结构 (9分)

一(好) 9—8分 结构严谨,层次清晰

二(较好) 7—6分 结构完整,层次清楚

三(中) 5—4分 结构基本完整,条理基本清楚

四(较差) 3—2分 结构不完整,条理欠清楚

五(差) 1—0分 结构混乱

D:书写 (4分)

4分 书写规范,工整,标点,格式正确,卷面整洁

3分 书写较规范,标点,格式正确,卷面干净字迹清楚

2分 有三到四处错别字和标点错误字迹潦草

1分 错别字和标点错误较多字体难看,不易辨认

0分 错别字和标点错误多

E:说明:

1.加分:凡语言或内容有一项特别突出者可加1—3分,加到满分为止.

2.减分:不足500字,每少20字扣1分

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a letter to a publishing house on food safety. You should write at least 120 words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

A Letter to a Publishing House on Food Safety

June 15th, 2006

Dear Sir or Madam,

Thank you for taking time to read this letter. As the problem of food safety has been becoming worse and worse nowadays, I am obliged to write to you.

Several days ago, one of my classmates came back from supermarket with a large bag of food. Because of having found a new style of tinned?ish in the

food store, she was very glad. Several other roommates were invited to enjoy the mouth?atering chicken. Unfortunately, after finishing the food, all of my three friends had stomachaches and vomited, their faces having become paler and paler. Due to sensitivity to that kind of tinned food, I escaped that suffer. At that time, my mind went blank. I dialed the emergency number with my trembling hand, therefore they were quickly sent to hospital. The doctor said they were lucky to be out of danger because they did not eat too much of that rotten fish and were hospitalized on time.

This is the matter that happened around me which made me realize the seriousness of the food safety problem. I sincerely hope that the whole society could attach much importance to this issue.

Thanks!

Yours,

Julie

最近几年的中考英语当中，很多省市已经摆脱了单一作文模式，采用一大一小两个作文相结合的模式。例如，去年辽宁沈阳中考英语作文就是一个小作文，应用文-写假条，加上一个大作文，汉语提示作文构成。今年，北京中考英语作文也将是两个，一个看图作文在加上一个提示作文构成。这一讲，我们先来学习一下看图作文的写法。

看图作文要求考生按照所给图画，通过合理的联想将一组画面的内容正确地表达出来。看图作文与其他类型作文的不同之处在于，它除了要求考生有英语语言表达能力，还要求考生有观察能力、分析能力和想象能力。

写好看图作文应注意的事项1、结合文字提示，正确理解图意。一般情况下，看图作文在提供图画的同时也附带有简要的文字提示，我们可以利用文字提示去正确地理解图意，得到要点。切忌孤立地看图而忽视文字提示。

写作从图画的细节出发。所谓细节，就是指图画中的人物、事件、地点、环境、时间、动作等。依据图画细节，就可以把图画的内容用英语具体而生动地表达出来了。

(三)例题分析(例题)

同学们，看到下面的四幅图片及相应的报道后，你感到最担忧的是哪两种情形?请简述你担忧的理由并提出建议或希望。

要求：

⒈ 从所给素材中任选两种情形进行阐述，不可多选或少选。

⒉ 条理清楚，意思连贯，语句通顺，标点正确;

⒊ 词数 80 ～ 100。

参考词汇： 建议 suggest v. suggestion n.

气体 gas n. 污染 pollution n.

THE POLLUTIONS

① One third of the worlds people dont have enough clean water.

② More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

③ People are disturbed quite often by kinds of noises.

④ Every person in our city makes about 1.8 kilos of rubbish every day.

这道看图作文题，主题和图片连接得不是很紧密。从考查的形式上来说，虽是看图，实质上却属于提示性的作文。这个作文应该结合个人的观点，选择的余地还是很大的。做这个题应该注意几个方面：

1、认真读题。注意，题目虽然给了四幅图，但是却只要求写其中的两个就行。

2、题意要求的是阐述个人的观点-最担忧的两种情形。而不是对图片进行描述。

3、结合所给的提示。提示中，对每种污染都进行了阐述，考生可以这些描述进行写作。

4、注意字数，语法，拼写等，避免错误。

下面是两个例文，大家可以参考一下。

One possible version:

The environment is becoming worse and worse. There are many kinds of pollution I worry about. The most serious two are water pollution and air pollution, because people cant live healthily with dirty water and polluted air, nor can animals. More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

I think factories should not pour dirty water into the river directly or produce more waste gas. Wed better go on foot or by like instead of by car, because more cars mean more waste gas. We should make our world more and more beautiful.

Another possible version:

The first fact I worry about is noise pollution. People cant sleep well if there is too much noise. Thats why so many people prefer to live in the countryside rather than live in the noisy city. I suggest all the factories and cars shouldnt make terrible noises. If they make terrible noise that isnt allowed, they will be fined, and we can also produce the cars which cant make terrible noise.

The other pollution is rubbish pollution. If everyone makes so much rubbish, one day we may live in a world filled with rubbish. Some people throw the waste paper about. I suggest rubbish should be put into different kinds of dustbins or paper bags.

下面，我们来看看这道题的评分标准。一般来说，各地的评分标准都和下面的这个标准差不多。这个最高的标准，实际上也就是我们写作的目标。

评分标准：

1. 内容完整，语句流畅，无语法错误，书写规范，给9-10分;

2. 内容较完整，语句较流畅，基本无语法错误，书写较规范，给6-8分;

3. 内容不完整，语句欠流畅，语法错误较多，书写较规范，给3-5分;

4. 只写出个别要点，语法错误较多，书写欠规范，只有个别句子可读或不知所云，给0-2分。

看图作文不可小视。希望大家掌握答好这种题型的要点，并积累词汇。

I think it’s very important for everyone to do sports. I like sports because they’re not only good for my health but also good for my study. My favorite sport is swimming. Whenever I am free, I will have a swim with my friends in the swimming pool. After swimming,I usually feel happy and relaxed. What’s more,Ican put more energy into my study. SoLet’s do sports,and we will become stronger and stronger.

1.As far as …is concerned 就……而言

2.It goes without saying that… 不言而喻，…

3.It can be said with certainty that… 可以肯定地说……

4.As the proverb says， 正如谚语所说的，

5.It has to be noticed that… 它必须注意到，…

6.Its generally recognized that… 它普遍认为…

7.Its likely that … 这可能是因为…

8.Its hardly that… 这是很难的……

9.Its hardly too much to say that… 它几乎没有太多的说…

10.What calls for special attention is that…需要特别注意的是

11.Theres no denying the fact that…毫无疑问，无可否认

12.Nothing is more important than the fact that… 没有什么比这更重要的是…

13.whats far more important is that… 更重要的是…

Recently,haze weather has become a daily one right here in large part of China.People are forced to wear the mask to avoid breathing poisonous air.So it is necessary to find out the reason why leads to that and work out the resolution.If we trace the cause for haze weather ,the main points are as follows ,first,china s air quality standards are rather lax and evaluation factors are limited,so you will see that current air appraisal system has defects.Second,some people just go for economic interests instead of turning out products according to relevant law and regulations.They tend to use obsolete equipment in which they are high likely to emit a great deal of wasted air.

Third,across our society ,relevant protection awareness has not built up so that people havent formed a habit of using green product and saving energy as much as possible.Just for the sake of convience to go out,people rely more and more on travelling and working by car while car is the main cause for the haze weather

To settle this problem,a series of meaures should be taken as follows.First ,we should strengthen air monitor to lower the levels of small particulate pollutants.Second,we should enact more strict laws and regulations and keep perfecting our current law on environmental protection to regulate people s daily action and the industrial production and punish those factories that ignore the protection and keep emitting dangerous material that cause haze.

Third,we should develop green and energy-saving energy to lower the emission of haze and improve air quality.As far as i am concerned ,if we work together to be able to do such measures ,our environment will getting better and better and haze weather will vanish completely.

写作题目 Knowledge or Experience

Directions： You are allowed 40 minutes to write an essay no less than 150 words on the following topic.

1.some emphasize book knowledge

2.others stress practical experience

3.which one is more important? Give your reasons to illustrate your opinion.

范文：

Which is more important in life， knowledge from the books you read， or personal experience you gain in reality? The answer may vary from person to person. The young， educated may emphasize the former， and the old may stress the later. But in my opinion， they are of the same importance.

Experience is priceless. How to become an efficient secretary? How to prepare for your first child to come into the world? There is so much experience we need in careers， in life and even in academic studies. It helps one deal with the problems with ease and confidence. Especially activities and to accumulate experience of different kinds is more crucial.

Experience， however， is limited in terms of time and space. For one thing， it is impossible for anyone to experience all the important events and meet all the famous people. For another， as the speed with which skills are obsolete and new problems crop up is unprecedented because of the fast development of society， experience is far less adequate. Depending too much on it only leads to narrow-mindedness and prejudice.

One way to compensate for it is to read books. Books of various kinds can bring us almost unlimited additional experience. From books you can not only trace back to the wisdom of our antecedents， but keep up with the latest developments of science and technology. To be sure， its secondhand experience. But it is the ideal supplement to our own limited experience. Few of us can travel around the world， or live long beyond one hundred years， but all of us can live many lives by reading books.

Both book knowledge and personal experience are essential. While experience makes one more resourceful， book knowledge makes one more learned.

[中考英语作文素材：知识和经验

chinese new year is a chinese traditional festival. we also call it the spring festival. it is on lunar january 1st.

on new year’s eve, all the people sit around the desk and have a big family dinner. there are some vegetables, some fish, some meat, some fruits and some drink like juice, coke, pepsi and some nice wine. overall, this is a good and delicious dinner. after dinner, we always watch tv new year progammes. we have a wonderful evening on new year’s eve.on the first day of the spring festival, most of people get up early and say “happy new year” to each other. for breakfast, people often eat dumplings and baozi. after breakfast, people often make many delicious foods, and children often play cards, computer games and fireworks. on the second and third day, we visit friends and relatives.

everyone is busy on chinese new year, and everyone is happy, too.

一、解决方法题型

要求考生列举出解决问题的多种途径

1. 问题现状

2. 怎样解决(解决方案的优缺点)

In recent days, we have to face the problem-----A, which is becoming more and more serious. First, ------------(说明A的现状).

Second, ---------------(举例进一步说明现状)( 这两个变换的词要记住)

Confronted with _ A, we should take a serious of effective measure

s to cope with the situation.(我们应该采取措施认真对待)

For one thing, ------(解决方法一).

For another -------(解决方法二).

Finally, ------(解决方法三).( 这三个变换的词要记住)

Personally, I believe that ---(我的解决方法). In a word , I’m confident that a bright future is a waiting us because------(带来的好处).

二、说明利弊题型

这种题型往往要求先说明一下现状，再对比事物本身的利弊，有时也会单从一个角度(利或弊)出发，最后往往要求考生表

明自己的态度(或对事物前景提出预测)

1. 说明事物现状

2. 事物本身的优缺点(或一方面)

3. 你对现状(或前景)的看法

Nowadays many people prefer A(事物) because it has a signific ant role in our daily life. Generally, its advantages can be seen as

follows.(它很好)

First ------(A的优点之一). Besides -------(A的优点之二).

But every coin has two sides.(事物都有两面性).

The negative aspects are also apparent. On the one hand,------(A的第一个缺点).The other hand,---------(A的第二个缺点).

In a word (总之), I believe that the positive aspects overweigh the

negative ones. Therefore, I would like to ---------------(我的看法).

So we should take it reasonably and do it according to the circum

stances we are in. Only by this way, it will be better(对前景的测).

三、议论文的框架

不同观点列举型( 选择型 :你会选A还是B，说说理由)

There is a widespread concern over the issue that __作文题目_____. But it is well known that the opinion is different from person to person. A majority of people think (大多数人认为)that _ 观点一________.

There are 2 factors as follows: firstly, ___原因一_______.

Secondly , ___原因二_____.

however,People differ in their opinions on this matter.Some people thin

k that ___观点二_______. On the one hand， ___原因一___ __

__. On the other hand, ____原因二_____.

Therefore, there is no doubt that ___观点二______.

As far as I am concerned, I firmly support the view that __观点一或二______.It is not only because ________, but also because ____(不仅因为。。还因为。。). The more _harder______, the more __better____.(越努力越好)

四、图表作文的框架

As is shown/indicated/illustrated by the figure inthetable (graph/picture/pie/chart), ___作文题目的议题_____ has been on rise/ decrease (goes up/increases/drops/decreases),significantly/dramatically steadily rising/decreasing from______to ______ . From the sharp/mared decline/ rise in the chart, it goes without saying that(说明) ________.

There are at least two good reasons accounting for ______. On the one hand,________. On the other hand,_______ is due to the fact that ________.In addition, ________ is responsible for _______. Maybe there are some other reasons.

But it is generally believed that the above mentioned reasons are commonlyconvincing.

As far as I am concerned,I hold the point of view that _______. I am sure my

opinion is both sound and well-grounded.(我的理由合情合理)

五、说明原因型

(一件事情或事物产生影响的原因)

Currently, A has been the order of the day .This does demonstrate the theory --- nothing is more valuable than A .It is clear that ( 1 ). if you ( 2 ), as a result ,your dreams will come true . On the contrary(相反), if you ( 3).Failure will be following with you .It turns out that(总结的话) .

No one can deny another fact (没有人会否认事实)that ( 4) .You dont have to lookvery far to find out the truth 。 We all know (5) .It will have a profound influence upon ( 6) For me ,I think (总结全文：题目中观点——某个原因很重要 ).

1、以MY Future plan为题目，100字左右

2、我决定大学毕业后当一 名中学教师，这是我孩提时代的梦想

3、我很喜欢教师在个职业，与中学生在一 起可以使自己永保青春

4、我国师资力量缺乏，主要原因是教师工作辛苦，收入低。想当老师的人很少，所以需要大批有志青年献身教育事业

中考英语作文范文：我未来的打算(My future plan)

I decided to be a middle teacher after college. （大学毕业后我决定当一名中学教师）There are many reasons contribute to this decision.（这有很多理由来说服这个决定）

Firstly, when I was a little/boy, I have been dreaming of being a teacher.（首先，当我还是个小孩时就梦想成为一名教师） It seemed so fascinate to me and I hope I can make my dream come true.（它让我很着迷，我希望我的梦想能够实现）

And, I like so much to be with middle school students. （另外，我是如此的喜欢中学生）Most of the students at that age are full of youthful spirity and I am sure their passion would pass to me.（大多数的学生都在充满年轻激情的阶段，我确信仪仗队他们的热情会传染给我） I will retain all the zest of adolescence.（我将可以使自己永保青春）

The most important reason is that our country needs plenty of teachers.（最重要的原因是我们的国家需要教师） So far, teaching is considered a tough and low-income job in China.（讫今为止，在中国，教书被认为是一项辛苦又收入低的工作） However, if we have not enough teachers, our future will lack of excellent scientist, managers, businessmen, soldiers and even goood workers and farmers.（然而，如果我们没有足够的教师，我们将来会缺乏优秀的科学家，经理，商人，士兵甚至于好的工人和农民） How can our country to be strong and wealthy? （那我们的国家怎样才能强大和富饶起来呢）I wish my country to be a better one. （我祝福我的祖国的明天会更好）I am ready to be a teacher and hope all the persons with lofty ideals may dedicate themselves to this meaningful career.（我准备在为一名教师，我也希望大家带着崇高理想献身于这有意义的工作．

Mrs Wang decided to make a trip to Beijing.When she told her son about her decision,he was so overjoyed that he jumped up.They began to pack their luggage.When the day came,the son became worried,for noboday would take care of his flowers.They would die if they were not watered.Suddenly a good idea came to his mind. "Mum",he said to his mother, "we can use a piece of cloth to take care of the flowers". He showed her mother what he meant by putting one end of the cloth into the basin, full of water,and the other end into the flower pot.

Three days later,when they came back from Beijing, the flowers were still alive and even started to bloom.

新的英语课程标准引发了一系列变化，首先加强了指导性和可操作性；其次体现语言学习的规律和渐进性；再次体现了弹性和选择；第四有的地方降低了难度；第五有的地方提高了要求。对教学模式和教师本人提出了新的挑战,同时也提供了新的发展空间。

一、教师是活动的指导者，学生是活动的主体

《英语课程标准》的基本理念中提到“让学生在教师指导下，通过感知、体验、实践、参与和合作探究等活动方式，实现任务的目标，感受成功。学生在学习过程中进行情感态度和学习策略的调整，以形成积极的学习态度，促进语言实际运用能力的提高。”

这就要求我们英语老师要掌握一定的课堂和课外教学艺术，开展集趣味、知识、娱乐、教育于一体的英语活动，能为学生提供尽可能多的语言实践机会。教师要用直观形象的形体语言，丰富多彩的表情，幽默风趣的语言表达，使学生在轻松、愉快、和谐的氛围中复习旧知，学习新知，提高学习信心。

教学中教师要根据教学目标，学生的需要和客观条件，创造性地探索有效的教学方法，要学会活用教法突破难点。我们可以鼓励学生大胆地模仿，带表情说句子。如“I am hungry.”（可以作饥饿状）；“I am thirty.”（可以作口渴状）。在教单词或句子时，我们老师可以带领学生做动作，甚至做夸张的动作或用夸张的朗读语调，孩子们特别喜欢。“big”两手张开画个大圈，“small”用两手指做个特别小的小圈，“strong”出示手臂，并鼓起肌肉，“thin”做一个瘦的动作。学完单词后，老师做出动作，学生就会说出这个单词。

二、多用评价语，真诚激励。

《英语课程标准》的基本理念中对评价案例进行了重新整合和调整，补充了大量的可操作性比较强的评价方式和方法，提到“英语教学中提倡过程性评价方式，把对学生的评价贯穿到平常的学习过程之中。注重培养和激发学生学习的积极性和自信心。”

因为每个学生，都渴望得到老师的重视和肯定，渴望得到激励和赞许。让每个学生都能享受到鼓励、温暖的阳光，这样无论哪种知识水平、能力、层次的学生都能获得心理上的满足，从而使学生有一种积极向上的源动力。所以教师的评价语应丰富多彩，真诚激励。下面的句子应该多说：Good! Great! Wonderful! You are clever! Don’t worry!

三、面向全体学生、尊重学生的自主选择

《英语课程标准》的教学建议中提到“尊重每个学生，建立融洽、民主的师生交流渠道。”平时学生如果主动帮我拿教具，我会向他致谢“Thank you”，若不小心撞到了学生，我会很抱歉地道声“Sorry”……虽然是点点滴滴的小事情小细节，但我希望从中带给学生“师生平等”的观念。

老师因为尊重学生而更关注他们的个性发展，学生因为受到老师的尊重会更乐意亲近老师，也就更加尊敬老师，这种心灵上的沟通和交流，一旦形成健康的双向互动，正面效应就会成倍增长，师生关系也会更加和谐地向前发展。

总之，新课程下的课堂教学，应是通过师生互动、学生之间的互动，共同发展的课堂。它既注重了知识的生成过程，又注重了学生的情感体验和能力的培养。因此，我们在教学中对教材的处理、教学过程的设计以及评价的方式都要以学生的发展为中心，以提高学生的全面发展为宗旨，这才是课改的最终目标。

[英语课程标准的基本理念读后感

导语：现如今几乎每个学生都有一部手机，你觉得这种现象有利于学生的学习吗?下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students. Some students think that it is easy to use them to keep in touch with parents and classmates.Also，they can be used to listen to music or take photos. But others think that we dont need to talk with parents and classmates with mobile phones，because we meet them every day. And mobile phones may influence our study。

In my opinion，its not wrong to follow the fashion，but the most important thing is how to use the mobile phone in a right way。

【参考译文】

如今手机在中学生中越来越受欢迎。一些学生认为使用它们与家长和同学保持联系很容易，也可以用来听音乐或拍照。但是其他人认为我们不需要和父母和同学用手机交谈，因为我们每天都会遇到他们。和手机可能会影响我们的研究。

在我看来，遵循时尚并不是错，但最重要的是如何正确使用手机。

例1：

National Day is coming,and we can have a seven-day.My family are going to Hainan.Its a good seaside city.We are staying there for a week. We are going to the beach and going swimming in the sea.Were visiting Tianya Haijiao,Wanquan River and many other beautiful places.I think well have a good time there.

国庆节来了，我有七天的假期。我们一家去海南。那是一个美丽的海滨城市。我们在那里待上一个星期。我们去沙滩，还在海里游泳。我们游览“天涯海角”，菀泉河还有别的许多好地方。我想我们在那里会玩得很开心。

例2：

National Day Holidays

I went to my cousins house on the first day of the holidays and got a piece of good news that his wife was pregnant;She said shes worrying about getting fat,but on her face there was a unconcealable pleasure of conceiving a baby.My cousin told me that hell educate his child in a severe way,with a future fathers matureness.Im happy for them.:)

Yesterday,our research schools soccer team had a match with the graduate students from the department of international business.It was almost a close game in the first half,but we seemed lacking of vigor in the second half,so,we lost the game.

Half of the National Day holidays have passed by...life still goes with good and bad times.

国庆假期

我去表哥家在第一天的假期和有一条好消息，他的妻子怀孕了；她说她的担心发胖，但她脸上有掩饰不住的怀孕的喜悦。我表哥告诉我他将教育他的孩子在一场严重的方式，用未来的父亲的口吻。我为他们高兴。：）

昨天，我们的研究学校的足球队有比赛与国际商务系的研究生。这几乎是一场势均力敌的比赛的上半场，但我们似乎缺乏活力，在下半年，但是，我们失去了游戏。

有一半的国庆假期已经过了……生活仍然持续好与不好的时光。

想要写好英语作文都有哪些技巧呢?下面是语文迷网为大家提供的英语写作技巧，欢迎阅读参考。

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、作文案例

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[学生解答A]

My hobby is read books①.When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

②also的位置应放在can之后。

[点评]：档次9-11分。

①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

③有少量错误。

[学生解答B]

My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improvemy writing.I want to be a writer in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。

②真情流露，理由充分。

③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

[点评]：档次13-14分。

①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting theenvironment.They threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to preventstarting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirtywater into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

You are writing a complaint to the manager about the hotel.

题目：你向饭店经理写信投诉酒店服务。

(以e-mail的形式出现)

On the whole, my stay here was satisfactory. The hotel was comfortable and the room was bright, but it was too dirty. Whats more the food was compeletely awful and the service was really terrible. I have stayed in your hotel for several times and everything is getting worse, though the price is fair.

总体而言，我在这边住得比较满意。酒店很舒服，房间也很明亮，但是太脏了。另外，这儿的食物太糟糕了，服务也很差。我已经在这里住过好几次了，虽然价钱还不错，但每件事都越来越糟糕。

Please try to clean the room a bit more often and find someone who is capable of cooking and who knows how to talk friendly to others.

请时常打扫一下房间，找个真正懂烹饪的和懂得跟别人和睦相处的员工!

桑德斯上校退休后拥有的所有财产只是一家靠在高速公路旁的小饭店。饭店虽小，但颇具特色，与众不同。可最受欢迎的、也是客人最爱吃的一道菜就是他发明烹制的香酥可口的炸鸡，仅此就给他带来了一笔可观的财富。多年来，他的客人一直对他烹制的炸鸡赞赏有加。可是令他万万没想到的是，由于高速公路改道别处，饭店的生意突然间也一落千丈，最后只好关门歇业。被逼无奈，桑德斯上校决定向其他饭店出售他制作炸鸡的配方，以换取微薄的回报。

在推销的过程中，没有一家饭店愿意购买他的配方，并且还不时地嘲笑他。一个人在任何年龄被人嘲笑都不是件令人愉快的事，更何况到了退休的年龄还被人嘲笑，这就更令人难以接受了。而这恰恰发生在了桑德斯上校身上。他不但被人嘲笑并且接连不断地被人拒绝，可见这些经历对他的影响有多么巨大。但他始终没有放弃，在没有找到买主之前，他开着车走遍了全国，吃住都在车上，就在被别人拒绝了1009次后，才有人终于同意采纳他的想法，购买他的配方。从此后他的连锁店遍布全世界;也被载入了商业史册。这就是肯德基的由来。

人们为了纪念这位桑德斯上校，就在所有的肯德基店前树立一尊他的塑像，以此作为肯德基的形象品牌。俗话说：“神枪手是一枪一枪打出来的!”缺乏坚持不懈的毅力或者认为自己不能得到自己想要的东西，这两者都是阻碍大多数人勇于改变的关键原因。如果你能够紧紧抓住自己的目标不放并坚持不懈，那么很快你就会超过大多数人。记住，是你掌握着自己的生活。如果你一心想达到一个目标，就一定会有办法取得成功。

文章摘要：1. 遇见你的那一刻，世界轰然倒塌；两人抬起头有点不相信的盯着我。英语如何写出中考高分作文儿子出院那天，已经夕阳西下了，他笑了笑对儿子说：乖啊，不怕，有爸爸呢，我还有办法。关于事业:没有什么高低贵贱之分,人人为我我为人人,只要合法,能干什么就干什么,口袋没钱最丢人,死要面子活受罪的事千万别干.！

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so...that，so，little by little，when，so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to，became interested in，come true......等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest ...

趁现在，没有孩子，没有牵绊，我也不贪图他什么，该是离婚最好的时机吧；他还能自己走路，朋友却已经站不起来了。英语如何写出中考高分作文12、诚实是上策。他们用钱去做坏事!多么痛的领悟，你曾是我的全部，只愿你挣脱情的枷锁 ，爱的束缚，任意追逐，别再为爱受苦。最后只能采取自愿加班的方式。

一般来说，文章的开头应尽量做到“开门见山”，即要用简单明了的语言引出文章的话题，使人一开始就能了解文章要说明的内容。

一. 开头经典句型

1、对于叙事类的文章，可以在开头把人物、时间、事件和环境交代清楚。

如“A Trip to Huangshan(黄山之旅)”的开头可以是：Last month, my family went to Huangshan by train. It took us ten hours to get there. What a long and tiring journey! We were tired but the beautiful scenery excited us.

2、对于论述性的文章，可以在开头处先阐明自己的观点，接着展开进一步的论述。

如“The Time and the Money (时间和金钱)” 的开头可以是：Most people say that money is more important than time. But I dont think so. First, when money is used up, you can earn it back， but……

3、在描述事件或游记类的文章中，采用回忆性的开头往往更能吸引人的眼球。这种类型的开头中通常含有描述自己心情或情绪的词汇，如never forget(永远无法忘记)、 remember (记得)、unforgettable(难以忘怀的)、 exciting(令人激动的)、surprising(令人惊讶的)、sad (难过的)……

如“A Trip to Huangshan(黄山之旅)”的开头还可以这样写：I will never forget my first trip to Huangshan. 或It was really an unforgettable experience I had.

4、在叙事类或论述性的文章中，都可采用疑问型开头，这样既可以吸引阅卷者的注意又容易抓住中心。

如“Planting Trees(种树)”的开头可以是：Have you ever planted trees? Dont you think planting trees is ……

再如“Traveling Abroad(出国之旅)”的开头可以是：If you have an opportunity to travel abroad, why not consider Singapore?

5、有的文章，特别是叙事类的文章中，可以采用倒叙的写作手法，先写出事件的结果，再陈述过程。

如“Catching Thieves (捉贼)”的开头可以这样写：I lay in bed in the hospital. I smiled at my friends even though my legs hurt. Do you want to know what happened to me? Let me tell you. Its a ... story.

二、结尾经典句型

1、随着文章的结束，文章自然而然地结尾。

如“Helping the Policeman (帮助警察)”的结尾可以是：The two children were praised by the police and they felt happy.

再如“The Tortoise and the Hare(龟兔赛跑)” 的结尾可以是：When the hare got to the tree, the tortoise had already been there。

2、升华主题在文章的结尾可以用含义较深的话点明主题，深化主题，起到“画龙点睛”的效果。

如“I Love My Hometown(我爱家乡)”的结尾可以是：I love my hometown, and I am proud of it.

3、反问结尾，引起深思

这种方式的结尾虽然形式是问句，但意义却是肯定的，而且具有一定的强调作用，可引起他人的深思。

如 “Learning English can give us a lot of pleasure (学英语能为我们带来许多乐趣)” 的结尾可以是：If we learn English well, we can …Dont you think learning English is great fun?

4、表达祝愿，阐述愿望

这种方式的结尾常出现在书信或演讲稿的文体中，表示对他人的祝福或对将来的展望等。

如“A Letter to the Farmers(给农民们的一封信)”的结尾可以是：I hope the farmers life will be better and better.

另外，书信的结尾常有以下形式的祝福语：Best wishes; I wish you a merry Christmas and a happy new year; I wish you have a good time等。

I have a lot of aspirations. but what i desire most is to have no examinations.

We are always told that examinations aim to check what we have learned. but i dont think so. examination is not the best way, especially in the primary school. examinations, composition examinations in particular, will bring students, teachers and parents a great deal of pressure. to cope with the examination, some students just remember the model essays by rote. it will do no good to the improvement of writing.

The students scores can be measured by their daily in-class study and by the completion of their everyday homework. if we do in this way, all the students and teachers will have a pleasant time every day.

翻译：

我有很多愿望，但我最渴望的就是不要考试。

我们总是被告知考试的目的是为了检测我们学到了什么，但是我不这么认为。考试不是最好的方式，特别是在小学。考试，特别是作文考试，会给学生、教师、学生家长带来很大的压力。为了应付作文考试，一些学生仅仅是死记硬背范文，这对提高学生的写作没有什么好处。

学生的成绩可以通过课内的日常学习和每天家庭作业的完成情况来衡量。如果我们用这种方法检查学习效果，所有的学生和教师每天都很快乐。