中考作文英语评分标准及评分说明（合集20篇）

1. 随着人口的增加…… With the increase/growth of the population, …

随着科技的进步…… With the advance of science and technology, …

例：With the rapid development of Taiwans economy, a lot of social problems have come to pass.

随着台湾经济的快速发展许多社会问题产生了。

2. ……是必要的 It is necessary (for sb.) to do / that …

…… 是重要的 It is important/essential (for sb.) to do / that …

…… 是适当的 It is proper (for sb.) to do / that …

……是紧急的 It is urgent (for sb.) to do / that …

例：It is proper for us to keep the public places clean.

It is proper that we (should) keep the public places clean.

我们应当保持公共场所清洁。

3. 就我的看法……;我认为……

In my opinion, …

= To my mind, …

= As far as I am concerned, …

= I am of the opinion that …

例：In my opinion, playing video games not only takes much time but is also harmful to health.

就我的看法打电动玩具既花费时间也有害健康。

4. 不用说…… It goes without saying that … = (It is) needless to say (that) …

= It is obvious that …

例：不用说早睡早起是值得的。

It goes without saying that it pays to keep early hours.

5. 在各种……之中，…… Among various kinds of …， … /= Of all the …， …

例︰在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。

Among various kinds of sports, I like jogging in particular.

6. 花费 spend … on sth. / doing sth. …

例：我们不应该在我们不感兴趣的事情上花太多的时间。

We shouldnt spend too much time on something we arent interested in.

7. how 引导的感叹句

例：那至少可以证明你很诚实。

At least it will prove how honest you are.

8. 状语从句

A)如果你不……，你就会…… If you dont …， youll …

例︰If you dont keep working hard, youll lose the chance.

如果你不坚持努力工作，你就会失去这次机会。

B) 如此 ……，以至于…… so … that …

例：At that moment, I was so upset that I wanted to give up.

当时，我非常伤心，最后都想放弃了。

9. 宾语从句

我认为，…… / 我认为……不 I think / I dont think that …

我想知道是否…… I wonder whether …

例：He doesnt think I should stop him joining the club.

他认为我不应该阻止他参加这个俱乐部。

10. Since + S + 过去式， S + 现在完成式。

例：Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.

自从他上高中，他就一直很用功。

1．习惯是养成的；

2．好习惯是福气；

3．坏习惯必须克服。

[写作导航]习惯不论好坏都是后天形成的，一旦形成，就很难改变；好习惯是祝福，许多成功人士都承认守时、早起、诚实和毅力等是早期形成的；坏习惯如粗鲁、懒惰、说谎、偷盗和诽谤等恶习是我们应努力避免的。

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Habits, whether good or bad, are generally acquired. When a person does a certain thing once and again, he is impelled by some unseen force to do the same thing repeatedly; thus a habit is formed. Once a habit is formed, it is difficult, and sometimes impossible, to shake it off. It is therefore very important that we should take great care in the formation of habits. Some bad habits formed in childhood may remain lifetime. Older persons also form bad habits, and in some cases they are ruined by these bad habits.

There are good habits which, when formed in early life, are great blessings. Many successful people declare that they owe much of their success and prosperity to the formation of such good habits as punctuality, honesty, and perseverance in early life.

Such habits as rudeness, laziness, stealing and slandering are bad habits. If we want to be useful to society, we ought to keep away from ail these vices, and strive to acquire those habits that are proven to be good for ourselves and others.

My hometown is a country known as "jujube township" town -- linze county. All say "landscape jiatianxia guilin, my home is not in guilin the wonderland is beautiful, but also has a small city of beauty. Town, the beauty of the static Shi green beauty, charming beauty, make each town residents of the mind is also beautiful.

To say small core of beauty, that they belong to the h and rokuen. There are more than thousand trees, trees, is a good place for summer!

Spring, the city is green, the leaves cui lust drops, h and rokuen, grass swinging with the breeze, the green grass, green leaves, all kinds of bright flowers together. Forsythia flower park blows the golden horn, square, various kite and baiyun mountain, everything is so quiet Shi.

People wear sandals in summer, h and rokuen step in waterways, music fountain, the children got into drill and adults were standing to the side, a smile the night in the square thick fragrance, barbecue flavor, mutton changing, town in summer is really hot!

Golden autumn, a town full of jujube aroma, h and rokuen jujube branches full of big, red jujube, it could make tea and can be used as a traditional Chinese medicine, passing pedestrians can resist the urge to take one. People in the street, selling red jujube mine, be happy.

Winter, although winter is so cold, but people is such a warm heart, a nice snow world, the groups of childrens play, added a few for city landscape for brilliance.

Not to have such a song? "Small story, full of joy and joy, if you come to town, much harvest", the beauty of the static Shi, charming beauty, unique beauty.

I love you -- -- hometown linze!

我的家乡是一个被祖国誉为“枣乡”的小城—临泽。都说“桂林山水甲天下”，我的家乡虽没有桂林那仙境般的美，但也别有一番小城美景。小城那静谥的美，绿色的美，迷人的美，使每个小城的居民心灵也美。

要说小城美的核心，那便属颐和绿苑了。那儿有千多棵树，绿树成荫，是避暑的好地方呢!

春天，小城是翠绿色的，树叶翠色欲滴，颐和绿苑里，小草随微风摆动，青的草，绿的叶，各色鲜艳的花聚拢而来。街心公园连翘花吹起金黄的小喇叭，广场里，千姿百态的风筝与白云戏耍，一切都是那么静谥。

盛夏，颐和绿苑里人们穿着凉鞋踏在水道里，音乐喷泉中，孩子们钻进钻出，站在一旁的大人个个露出笑容，广场上的夜市香味浓浓，烧烤味、羊肉串味，小城的夏天真是火辣辣啊!

金秋，小城充满了枣香味，颐和绿苑的枣树枝上挂满了又大又红的红枣，它可以泡茶，可以作中药，过路的行人都忍不住要尝一个。大街上，卖红枣的人们各各喜笑颜开。

隆冬，虽然冬天是那么的冷，可人们心中是那么暖和，雪的世界真好看，那一群群孩子的嬉戏，为小城景色增添了几争光彩。

不是有这样一首歌吗?“小城故事多，充满喜和乐，若是你到小城来，收获特别多”，静谥的美，迷人的美，独特的美。

我爱你——家乡临泽!

Seeing my whole education history, I have many teachers. But my favorite teacher is only one. He is Mr Lu. He is my middle Chinese teacher and head teacher. He is about fifty years old. Maybe he works too hard, so his back is a little bent. He always wears a black glasses. He looks amiable but serious in study. He always thinks us before everything. His class is very interesting and full of different kinds of encouraging stories. He is very strict to us in study. But whoever has difficulties, he would help us without hesitation. Sometimes he plays the role of a strict teacher, sometimes he takes the place of a kind father.

纵观我整个受教育史，我有过很多老师。但我最喜欢的老师只有一个。他是陆老师。他是我的初中语文老师兼班主任。他大约五十岁。也许是因为工作辛苦，所以他的背有点弯了。他总是戴一副黑色的眼镜。他看上去很和蔼可亲，对学习却是很严格的。他总是把我们放在第一位。他的课是非常有趣的，也经常讲各种不同励志故事。他对我们学习很严格。但无论谁有困难，他都会毫不犹豫地帮助我们。有时他是一个严格的老师，有时候他是一个慈祥的父亲。

[中考满分英语作文My Favorite Teacher

The desire for good health is universal. In our competitive society it is important to maintain good health.

On the one hand, people with good health can do work with full confidence and their progress in work in turn contributes to their health and happiness.

On the other hand, a sick person is usually not interested in everything around him and therefore he loses many opportunities to become successful.

There are many ways to keep it. First, those who are always on the go from morning till night should find time to relax because too much stress will affect their health. Second, enough time should be left for sleep because that will help one become rested and refreshed.

Finally, regular physical exercises benefit one‘s health a lot. So one should always keep in mind that a certain amount of exercise is not a waste of time.As for me, I like playing tennis in the morning. I also attach much

1. 不用说…… It goes without saying that …

= (It is) needless to say (that) ….

= It is obvious that ….

例：不用说早睡早起是值得的。

It goes without saying that it pays to keep early hours.

2. 在各种……之中，…… Among various kinds of …, … /= Of all the …, …

例︰在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。

Among various kinds of sports, I like jogging in particular.

3. 就我的看法……;我认为……

In my opinion, …

= To my mind, ….

= As far as I am concerned, …

= I am of the opinion that ….

例：In my opinion, playing video games not only takes much time but is also harmful to health.

就我的看法打电动玩具既花费时间也有害健康。

4. 随着人口的增加…… With the increase/growth of the population, …

随着科技的进步…… With the advance of science and technology, …

例：With the rapid development of Taiwan’s economy, a lot of social problems have come to pass.

随着台湾经济的快速发展许多社会问题产生了。

5. ……是必要的 It is necessary (for sb.) to do / that …

…… 是重要的 It is important/essential (for sb.) to do / that …

…… 是适当的 It is proper (for sb.) to do / that …

……是紧急的 It is urgent (for sb.) to do / that …

例：It is proper for us to keep the public places clean.

It is proper that we (should) keep the public places clean.

我们应当保持公共场所清洁。

6. 花费 spend … on sth. / doing sth. …

例：我们不应该在我们不感兴趣的事情上花太多的时间。

We shouldn’t spend too much time on something we aren’t interested in.

7. how 引导的感叹句

例：那至少可以证明你很诚实。

At least it will prove how honest you are.

8. 状语从句

A) 如果你不……，你就会…… If you don’t ..., you’ll ...

例︰If you don’t keep working hard, you’ll lose the chance.

如果你不坚持努力工作，你就会失去这次机会。

B) 如此 ……，以至于…… so … that …

例：At that moment, I was so upset that I wanted to give up.

当时，我非常伤心，最后都想放弃了。

C) 每当我听到……我就忍不住感到兴奋。Whenever I hear …, I cannot but feel excited.

每当我做……我就忍不住感到悲伤。 Whenever I do …, I cannot but feel sad.

每当我想到……我就忍不住感到紧张。Whenever I think of …, I cannot but feel nervous.

每当我遭遇……我就忍不住感到害怕。Whenever I meet with …, I cannot but feel frightened.

每当我看到……我就忍不住感到惊讶。Whenever I see …, I cannot but feel surprised.

例：Whenever I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot but feel sad.

= Every time I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot help feeling sad.

每当我想到我家附近那一条清澈的小溪我就忍不住感到悲伤。

9. 宾语从句

我认为，…… / 我认为……不 I think / I don’t think that …

我想知道是否…… I wonder whether …

例：He doesn’t think I should stop him joining the club.

他认为我不应该阻止他参加这个俱乐部。

10. Since + S + 过去式, S + 现在完成式.

例：Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.

自从他上高中，他就一直很用功。

雅思考试全程考试时间为2小时55分钟。其中，写作在听力、阅读部分之后出现，是笔试的最后一项。雅思写作考试要求在60分钟内完成两篇作文（Task 1 and Task 2）。写作中，以移民为主的培训类（General Training）和以留学为主的学术类（Academic）试题类型有所不同。

Task 1要求考生在20分钟内完成150字以上的文章。G类（培训类）要求考生针对题目要求写一封信来询问某方面信息或阐释某种状况。到目前为止，出现较多的书信种类有投诉信、请求信、建议信、寻找失物信、邀请信等。而A类（学术类）则考核图表为主。考得较多的有曲线图、柱状图、饼状图、表格等。也有可能考到两种不同种类的图。另外，流程图和示意图也偶尔考到。

Task 2 要求考生在40分钟内写作一篇不少于250字的议论文。A类和G类在Task 2方面非常相似。考生可能需要对某个观点发表支持或反驳意见，或者讨论针锋相对的一组观点，或者解释某种问题出现的原因并提出相应的解决办。

雅思评分按9分制。基本上，移民或读语言学校起码要5分（Modest User）。留学需要6分（Competent User）以上。如果读的是法律、传媒、管理等名校的研究生的话，写作最好达到7分（Good User）。但考生最后写作成绩并不是Task 1和Task 2的简单平均，而是以Task 2为主。

雅思写作的评分标准不象四六级或托福采用整体式的评分，而是分项式评分（analytical scoring）。也就是说，考官给考生并不只打一个分数，而是根据具体的评分细则分项给分。

书信或图表评分标准：

Task 1（书信或图表）按照以下三方面评分：Task Fulfilment（完成任务）；Coherence and Cohesion（连贯与衔接）；Vocabulary and Sentence Structure（词汇与句子结构）。

Task Fulfilment指的是考生是否能够在正确审题的基础上完成题目的指令。具体说来，书信作文应该完成书信的使命，题目里的每一项要求都不可或缺。图表作文应该在对于图表所给出的数据进行分析的基础上指出图表的总体趋势和走向，并点明与总趋势不相吻合的特殊之处，而且还要有数据的支持。

Coherence and Cohesion指的是文章通过一定的衔接手段（Cohesive Devices）来表明上下文的连贯性（Coherence）。衔接手段，或叫语篇纽带，经常用的有（logical）逻辑、（grammatical）语法和（semantic）语义三方面的连接词（connectors）。

Vocabulary and Sentence Structure指的是文章的语言表达。5分或5分以下的作文一般语法错误较多。6分作文则一般没有致命的语法错误，用词和句子基本准确。而7分以上的作文用词丰富（Variety）、句子结构复杂（Complexity）。

议论文评分标准：

Task 2（议论文）的三方面评分标准是：Arguments, Ideas and Evidence（论证，论点和论据）；Communicative Quality（交流质量）；Vocabulary and Sentence Structure（词汇与句子结构）。

Arguments, Ideas and evidence涉及对于议论文的内容要求。具体说来，应该是内容切题，论据合理，论证充分。

对于Ideas（内容）而言，应该注意的是不要出现跑题。有的考生由于词汇量有限，导致题目中的单词不认识，从而写作的时候写离题了。比如：Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Do you agree or disagree? 如果考生不懂international tourism是什么意思的话，这道题是没法写的。但是，雅思写作涉及的词汇量并不是大得令人生畏，大概有六七千左右。考生万一碰到个把单词不理解的话，完全可以通过上下文加以推测。比如上面这句话中tension可能是个生词，但是如果考生能想到rather than表示对比关系的话，可以推断tension应该和understanding（理解）形成反义词，那就应该是接近于误解，即紧张关系的意思。所以，对于单词，考生应该平时注意积累，应试时根据上下文推断。

有的考生可能题目里面每个单词都认识依然写跑题，那可能是因为对于所涉及的题材不了解，没话可说。比如：

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is

pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 如果考生毫不了解所谓的传统技能和生活方式的话，肯定对此束手无策。雅思议论文涉及contemporary social issues of common interest（人们普遍感兴趣的当代社会问题），考生应该平时注意这方面的知识积累和主动思考。

另外，还有的考生不但认识题目中的每个单词，而且也熟悉话题，但依然写跑题，那很有可能是因为没有抓住写作重点。事实上，绝大多数考生写跑题都是因为这个因素。比如：There is an increasing number of juvenile delinquents. Analyze the possible causes of this phenomenon, and offer some recommendations. 许多考生都会注意到这道题考的是青少年犯罪话题，而且应该分析原因并提出解决办法。但是，如果原因只写了一段而建议写了数段的话，那么就是犯了忽略重点的错误。因为，如果没有把原因进行详细分析而贸然提出建议的话，这种建议是缺乏依据的。正确的做法应该是原因写二至三段，结果写一段。其次，考生还应注意到这道题考的不是泛泛的青少年犯罪的原因与解决方法，而是为什么现在青少年犯罪人数越来越多的原因和建议。由此看来，考生应该仔细审题，防止产生理解上的偏差。

对于Evidence（论据）来说，关键要合理，并且能够证明论点。比如Wild animals have no place in the 21st century and trying to protect these animals is a waste of resources. Do you agree or disagree? 有同学

这样写道：We can hardly imagine what our life will be like without wild animals. For example, if there is no cat, there will be more mice. The increase in the number of mice will result in the reduction of food resources and the spread of diseases. Thus, it is very important to protect animals. 这里，猫的论据是不合适的，因为猫不属于wild animals（野生动物）。再比如，The university should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give students more practical training. Do you agree or disagree? 有同学在论证这道题的时候举了赵括“纸上谈兵”的例子，说赵括就是典型的有很多兵法等理论知识，但是由于缺乏带兵打仗的实际经验，导致秦赵长平之战中赵兵大败，自己也命丧沙场，这充分说明了只有理论知识没有实际经验的恶果，所以应该重视实际经验。但这个论据也是不得体的，因为题目涉及的是大学应该怎么做，而赵括明显没有上过大学。事实上，古代的例子通常不适宜在雅思作文中出现，即便出现了，许多情况下只是作为反面例子与现今状况形成对比。

好的Arguments（论证）应该是充分并且有力的。这就需要运用多种论证手法。常用的论证手法有：explanation（解释说明），emphasis（强调论证），exemplification（举例说明），cause and effect（因果论证），comparison and contrast（比较与对比）facts and statistics（事实和统计数据），concession and refutation（让步与反驳），classification（分类），definition（下定义），analogy（比喻）等。论证手法的运用还应该和关联词结合起来。

Communicative Quality（交流质量）大体上与Task 1的Coherence and Cohesion相同，也涉及文章中代词，关联词，同义反义词等的运用。常用的关联词有：对比however, although, but, nevertheless；结果as a result, as a consequence, therefore, because of this, otherwise；附加in addition, additionally, and, as well as, furthermore, also, moreover；举例for example, for instance, such as, including；强调in fact, indeed；时间after, following, before, until, during, between, while等。

议论文在Vocabulary and Sentence Structure方面与Task 1的要求相同。

导语：写作练习对于英语能力的综合提高,特别是对高阶学习者而言有重要意义,不管做什么都需要技巧，写英语作文有什么技巧呢?下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关英语写作指导，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

如何写好一篇60字的作文，争取18分的最大值，显然已经引起了师生极大的重视。对于中考来说这可是个了不起的数字!那么如何提高作文得高分的能力?当然可以只回答一个字“练”。目标有了，最重要的就是方法了。至少我们应该注意作文的基本要求和基本技巧。

60字的作文，非常有限的文字里要说明白说清楚一件事或一个人物或者一个观点，并不是一件很容易的事情。所以更要注意结构、要求和技巧。

60字的作文最好先从结构上练起，一般要分这样五个层次：

1)开始句

2)向主体过度句

3)主体叙述

4)向结尾过度

5)结尾。

第一层开始句起着点题的作用，60字的作文一定要开门见山。也就是第一句就能让人感觉到你将要写什么。但是往往是概括性地笼统地指出。所以往往是一句话就解决问题。第二层往往是在第一层的基础上具体指出某人或某事。第三层就这个某人或某事进行详细的叙述或议论或描写。但一般以3至4句为宜。因为中考作文的字数是60至80字之间。不足和超过都要扣分。所以应该及时向结尾过渡，完成第四层，多半以谈感觉为主。在主体叙述和结尾之间起着承上启下的作用。但也应该一句话解决问题。过渡的梯子搭好了，也就能够圆滑地圆满地结尾了。结尾的一句话往往是感慨、感想、感叹之类的句子。这样6至8句的作文，每句平均10字左右(每个句子的字数根据含义的需要调整)，最后写好的作文就应该是在60至80字之间了。

说到这里我们只解决了层次清晰、符合字数要求的问题。其次注意没有把握的句子不写，拼写要准确，叙述中没有语法错误，时态要符合背景。我们学了含不同从句的复合句。所以作文中应该适当地出现复合句。一定要注意词汇上的不必要重复和句式的单一。巧妙地插入平时积累的格言警句，使作文生辉。设法满足“词汇和句型句式运用恰当自如;文中有值得肯定的好的句型和表达方式。”同时注意大小写、标点正确。

再次，一定注意作文的题内要求，往往是以问题形式出现为多，千万不可丢掉任何一个。

最后提醒大家注意的就是一定要打草稿，避免在卷面上涂抹。

以上这几点做到了，离满分作文也不远了。

俗话说千里之行始于足下。英语书面表达能力的形成不是一日之功，必须从平时的课堂学习一点一滴抓起，持之以恒。

一篇优秀的英语作文在内容和语言两方面应是一个统一体，任何一方面的欠缺都会直接影响到作文的质量。然而，很多考生在写作中或者由于粗心大意，或者由于基本功不扎实而经常出现名词不变复数、第三人称单数不加s，前后不一致，以及时态语态、句子完整性等方面的错误。

1. 审题不清

如2004年中考作文要求写一项最喜欢的课外活动，有些考生将作文的主题定位为我最喜欢的活动，偏离了一项、课外活动这一主题。依据作文的评分原则，若文章内容不切题，则不管语言如何规范、用词如何准确，都会被判为零分。

2.拼写错误

拼写是考生应该具备的最起码的基本功，但在考生的作文中却经常能发现很多拼写错误。有拼写错误的作文肯定会被酌情扣分，而且有大量拼写错误存在的作文不仅体现出语言基本功差，同时也直接影响内容的表达，通常会降低作文的档次。

3.名词单复数问题

误 my father and my mother is all teacher.

正 my father and my mother are both teachers.

4.缺少动词

在汉语中没有动词的句子是允许的，但英语中每个完整的句子都必须有动词来构成，如：我累了。这个句子没有动词作谓语，而用形容词，但英语形容词不能作谓语，一定要写成：im tired.

误 i happy i can come to beijing zoo.

正 i am happy i can come to beijing zoo.

误 the apples cheap. ill take some.

正 the apples are cheap. ill take some.

5.缺少介词、冠词等

还有一些考生因为没有熟练掌握介词或者冠词的用法，不了解中英文语言习惯的不同，也会出现明显的错误，造成丢分现象。

误 because heavy rain we cant hold the sports meeting.

正 because of the heavy rain we cant hold the sports meeting.

6.代词的误用

英语中代词的形式很多，包括主格、宾格、物主代词、反身代词等。而汉语中没有主格和宾格、形容词性物主代词和名次性物主代词之分；此外汉语中很多时候不用物主代词，而英语中物主代词是不可省略的，代词的误用是考生最容易发生的错误。

误 i mother and i went to the shop to buy a present for i father.

正 my mother and i went to the shop to buy a present for my father.

7.句子不完整

有的考生因为对句子结构认识模糊，所以出现只写半句的现象，这也是造成失分的原因之一。

误 many students have a hard time passing all the tests to get into college. for example, my friend in high school.

(这段文章的第二句话没有动词，他不能独立构成一个句子。这是一个非常常见的错误，修改的方法是将两个句子连接起来。)

正 many students have a hard time passing all the tests to get into college, for example, my friend in high school.

8.前后不一致

所谓不一致，包括数的不一致、时态不一致及代词不一致、主谓不一致等.

例1. when one have knowledge, he can do what he want to do.

(人一旦有了知识，他就能想干什么就干什么.)

剖析：one是单数第三人称，因而本句的have应改为has ;同理，want应改为wants。本句是典型的主谓不一致.

改为 when one has knowledge , he can do what he wants (to do)

9.时态、人称和数的搭配错误

汉语动词无时态、人称和数的变化，而对英语来说，这些都至关重要。例：

误 when i get to the station the train leave.

正 when i got to the station the train had left.

10.综合性错误

综合性错误是指单词的大小写和标点符号的错误等，以及形容词和副词的混淆、连词的误用等等。这些都是靠考生平时知识的积累，所以考生应该从平时练习出发，每天坚持写英语日记，多读适合自己英语水平的原版著作，提高自己的英语素养。

[中考英语作文：十大常见错误分析

中考英语作文对考生的要求有四点：1、内容要完整。 2、语句流畅。3、没有语法错误。4、书写规范。能达到上述要求的作文，都会得到相应的高分。

一：先看一下扣分点：

1.内容方面：要点缺失，可酌情扣分。比如中考作文“I want to do something for my school”，若没有写一件具体的事情，是要扣3分以上的;若写的事情太过于虚幻，没有实际内容，也会扣1-2分。

2.字数：少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。

中考英语作文要求60字以上，标点符号不算，少了就要扣分。但是60字的作文能不能得高分?从我们拿到的实例作文来看，16分以上的作文，没有少于75字的，甚至少于80字的也少之又少。当然，也极少有超过100字的，因为中考试卷的短线格一共80个，在格子下面大约还有2行的空间，可以加20字左右，再多阅卷人就很难看清了，也会影响卷面的美观。所以，同学们如果想让作文得到高分，最好是让字数在75-100字之间。

3. 语法和拼写错误：每个扣0.5，重复错误不计;

4. 标点错误：每4个扣0.5.

二：加分点

除了这些扣分点，还有一些得分点：比如说作文的组织结构分，就是根据学生使用复杂句型、单词和谚语、俗语的情况来加分。

只要文章中有1个亮点，基本就可以争取到1分(3分的文采分是很难全部拿到的)。而这1分的亮点，是可以提前准备的。例如，有一些“万金油”式的复杂句型，例如强调句型、only相关的倒装句等，只要同学们多操练几次，几乎是一定能用到作文当中，从而为自己争取到这1分。

其次就是卷面分

很多家和同学，尤其是部分书法并不是十分整洁的同学，都会关心是否真的有“卷面分”的存在。虽然在阅卷标准里面并没有卷面分这一项，但是这个分数却真切地反映在了同学们的分数里面。

据阅卷老师的经验，在阅卷的时候并不是按这3个部分逐项打分的，而是在第一遍读完全文之后，心里已经形成了一个“印象分”，然后再细读第二、三遍，把印象分分配到各个打分部分。因此，这个“印象分”就非常重要，而同学们的书法，也正是在这个环节，影响到了自己的分数。所以初三的考生，如果书法不好，一定要注意。所谓的书法并不需要写的很漂亮，符合3个简单的标准即可：没有斜体、没有连笔、涂改较少。

健康的生活习惯对于成长中的我们是非常重要的。你认为健康的生活习惯应当是怎样的呢?请根据下面的信息提示，写一篇短文，首句已给出。

信息提示：健康饮食;早睡早起，不熬夜;参加运动，强身健体。

要求：根据信息提示，把握要点，适当发挥，不逐字翻译。字数在80词左右。

★ 范文

I think healthy habits are very important for us.

All of us want to be healthy. First, we should get enough sleep during the night. We can go to bed early and get up early. Staying up late is bad for our health. Second, we must have the right kinds of food. We should eat more fruit and vegetables and less meat. We should drink a lot of water. We should have healthy eating habits. Third, we should do more exercise to build up our bodies. Finally, we should wash hands before meals and brush our teeth twice a day. If we don’t feel well, we should go to see the doctor at once.

【预测题目】

假如你是Han Mei，下面是一封你的笔友Alice 给你发来的e-mail，请你根据e-mail 的内容给她写一封回信，与她交流看法，并帮她排忧解难。

提示词语：listen to，mother’s love，care about，communicate with，get along with，smile

写作要求：

语句通顺，书写工整;

可用所给提示词语，也可以适当发挥;

词数在60-80左右。

Dear Han Mei，

I’m afraid I’ve got a big problem recently. My mother talks too much to me. She always tells me," Be careful while crossing the street.”“Put on more clothes.”“Did you do a good job at school?” And so on. I’m annoyed(烦恼). What shall I do?

Alice

【参考范文】

Dear Alice，

As a teenager,I met the same problem as you. But now I can get along better with my mother. Here are some ideas for you.

Your mother talks much, because she cares about you. Maybe it’s not a good way, but it shows your mother’s love. So I think you should listen to her. If your opinions are different from your mother’s，you can communicate with her, and tell her what you are thinking about. If your mother doesn’t take your advice，just keep silent and give her a smile.

I hope what I say here can help you a lot.

Yours

Han Mei

【参考译文】

亲爱的爱丽丝，

作为一个少年，我遇到了和你一样的问题。但现在我可以更好地与我的母亲。这里有一些想法给你。

你妈妈说话多，因为她在乎你。也许这不是一个好方法，但它显示了你母亲的爱。所以我认为你应该听她的。如果你的意见和你母亲的不同，你可以和她交流，告诉她你在想什么。如果你的妈妈不接受你的建议，保持沉默，给她一个微笑。

我希望我在这里说的能帮到你很多。

你的好朋友，

韩梅

Two secondary school teachers I remember show how different people can be though engaged in the same profession.

中学二级教师我记得如何不同的人虽然可以从事相同的职业。

Mrs. Wang, my philosophy teacher, sent us to sleep less than ten minutes when she started talking in class. When a head nodded, she would point at the dozing student and made threatening remarks. She said that she was bored teaching us. Some students in her eyes had no desire to learn. But the other teacher Mr. Li always had bright eyes in a smiling face and encouraging words which showed that he loved Chinese history he was teaching and wanted us to love it too.

王太太，我的哲学老师，给我们的睡眠时间少于十分钟的时候，她开始在课堂上说话。当一头点了点头，她会在打瞌睡的学生和威胁的话。她说，她厌倦了我们的教学。在她的眼睛里有些学生没有学习的欲望。但是，李老师总是有明亮的眼睛在微笑和鼓励的话表明他爱中国历史上他是教学要我们太爱它。

When it came to their attitudes to their students, they were different too. After Mrs. Wang finished her day`s lessens she felt that she had finished her job. Once when I asked her a question outside class about a term, she continued with preparation to leave and said that I could bring my question to class next week. Before I knew it she had put her keys into her handbag and walked out of the door. In the history class, however, a question even after the bell would still be given attention to by Mr. Li. He would rush to the board in a last minute attempt to clear up. Often he was seen with a number of students standing outside the classroom, discussing the day`s assignment.

当它来到他们的态度，他们的学生，他们是不同的。王太太完成她的天`后使她觉得她已经完成了她的工作。当我问她有关的术语类之外的一个问题，她继续准备离开，说我可以带我的问题下周上课。我知道她已经把她的钥匙在手提包，走出门前。然而在历史课，甚至，铃响后一个问题仍然会关注由李先生。他会冲到董事会在最后一分钟尝试清理。他经常看到许多学生站在教室外面，讨论一天的任务`。

Their methods of teaching were not like as well. Mrs. Wang stuck to the textbook and trained us how to memorize minute facts. However Mr. Li brought in films, maps, slides, tapes, anything that would help us learn. Once the whole class went to see the `film Lin Zexu` in order to better understand the history of the Opium War from 1840 to 1842.

他们的教学方法是不一样好。王太太在教科书和训练我们如何记住分钟的事实。但是李先生带来了电影，地图，幻灯片，录像带，任何能帮助我们学习。一旦整个班去为了更好地理解鸦片战争的历史，从1840到1842到`电影林则徐`。

Owing to these contrasts, I do not think I can forget either of my past teachers.

由于这些对比，我不认为我能忘记我过去的老师。

Topic(题目)：

What are some of the qualities of a good parent.Use specific details and examples to explain youranswer.

Model Essay(范文)：

I am fortunate to have good parents so it is easy for me to identify the qualities that makethem good. These qualities are unconditional love, trust, and respect for me and my brothersand sisters.

All mothers and fathers love their children. They nurture them and keep them from harm. Butnot all love is unconditional. Some parents would not love their children if they married someoneof a different religion or from a different ethnic group. Some parents would not love theirchildren if they were of a different sexual orientation. My parents won’t. My parents would loveus regardless of whom we married or whom we chose to love.

Part of unconditional love is trust. My parents trust us to do what is right. They know we wouldnever do anything to hurt them or to disgrace them. They trust us so we trust them. We areconfident that they would never do anything to hurt us.

Because our parents love us, they also respect us. They treat us as individuals. They accept ourdifferences. They do not expect us to be like them. They want us to be our own persons. Theywant us to make our own way in the world, not follow in their footsteps.

Without their love, I would not be as confident as I am. Without their trust, I would not befree to do what I want. Without their respect, I would not feel comfortable being on my own. Allchildren should have such wonderful parents.

[考研英语作文：合格的父母的标准是什么

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1.打算做....../计划做......

intend /plan to do 打算做......

be going to do 打算做......

decide to do决定做......

determine to do决定做......

be determine to do 决定做......

make up ones mind to do 下定决心做......

2.想/希望......

want to do= would like to do想做......

hope to do希望做......

expect to do期待做......

wish to do 希望做......

consider doing 考虑做......

looking forward to doing盼望做......

dream of doing 梦想做......

cant help doing 情不自禁地做......

3.表示喜欢和感兴趣

like /love doing 喜欢做......

enjoy doing 喜欢做.......

be fond of doing 喜欢做......

be keen on+n/doing 喜欢做......

prefer to do A rather than B 宁愿做A也不愿做B

be interest in n/doing对......感兴趣

show/take interest in n/doing 对......产生兴趣

4.其他短语

keep on doing 坚持做......

keep/stop/prevent sb from doing 阻止某人做......

be busy (in) doing= be busy with +名词 忙于做......

spend time/money(in) doing =spend time/money on+名词 花费时间做......

have fun/have a good time/enjoy oneself doing 玩得开心

have trouble/have problem/ have difficulty (in) doing 或with +名词 做...有困难

满分句型

1.Its adj for sb to do 做...对某人来说是...

2. ...so...that ...如此...以至于...

...too...to do 太...而不能...

such...that...如此...以至于...

3.not...until...直到...才...

4. The reason why+句子is that +句子...的原因是...

5.That is why+句子 那是...的原因

6. That is because+句子 那是因为...

7.It is said that+句子 据报道...

It is reported that+句子 据报道...

8.There is no doubt that+句子 毫无疑问...

9.It goes without saying that+句子 不言而喻/毫无疑问...

10. There is no need to do 没必要做...

11.There is no point in doing 做某事毫无意义

12. You had better (not) do ...最好(不)做

13.How about /What about doing...怎么样?

14. I think you should do我认为你应该...

15. I suggest that you (should) do 我建议你做...

16. If I were you, I would do...我要是你的话，我会做...

Directions： You are allowed 40 minutes to write an essay no less than 150 words on the following topic.

1.some emphasize book knowledge

2.others stress practical experience

3.which one is more important？ Give your reasons to illustrate your opinion.

范文：

Which is more important in life， knowledge from the books you read， or personal experience you gain in reality？ The answer may vary from person to person. The young， educated may emphasize the former， and the old may stress the later. But in my opinion， they are of the same importance.

Experience is priceless. How to become an efficient secretary？ How to prepare for your first child to come into the world？ There is so much experience we need in careers， in life and even in academic studies. It helps one deal with the problems with ease and confidence. Especially activities and to accumulate experience of different kinds is more crucial.

Experience， however， is limited in terms of time and space. For one thing， it is impossible for anyone to experience all the important events and meet all the famous people. For another， as the speed with which skills are obsolete and new problems crop up is unprecedented because of the fast development of society， experience is far less adequate. Depending too much on it only leads to narrow-mindedness and prejudice.

One way to compensate for it is to read books. Books of various kinds can bring us almost unlimited additional experience. From books you can not only trace back to the wisdom of our antecedents， but keep up with the latest developments of science and technology. To be sure， it＇s secondhand experience. But it is the ideal supplement to our own limited experience. Few of us can travel around the world， or live long beyond one hundred years， but all of us can live many lives by reading books.

Both book knowledge and personal experience are essential. While experience makes one more resourceful， book knowledge makes one more learned.

[中考英语作文Knowledge or Experience知识或经验

We often hear that different methods to teach children will have different result. And different children adapt different methods. Luckily, I think my parents’ teaching method fits me very much and I am glad to have such parents. They are my friends. We often talk and play together. They often tell me to be a kind-hearted person by words and they also act in that way. If they find that I have any wrong thought, they will try to correct it in a gentle way. If they find me do the same wrong thing again and again, they will criticize me badly, which makes me do not dare to do it next time. And nobody will speak for me.

我们常常听说教育孩子不同的方法会有不一样的结果。不同的孩子适合不一样的方法。幸运的是，我觉得我父母的教学方法非常适合我，我很高兴有这样的父母。他们是我的朋友。我们经常一起聊天一起玩。他们经常告诉我要做一个善良的人，他们也用行动证明了。如果他们发现我有任何不良的思想，他们会温和地纠正。如果他们发现我多次还犯同样的错误，他们就会重重地批评我，让我不敢再做第二次。也没有人会为我说话。

[中考英语作文：Teaching Children

导语：每个人都来自不一样的地方，而这个地方就是家乡，你会怎么跟大家介绍你的家乡呢?下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关作文素材，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

My hometown is a beautiful place, it is in the countryside, because it is far away from the city, so the environment is very natural. The water is very clean, I can even see the fish and the mountain has many green trees. But I like the morning best, because the air is very fresh and there are voices from nature. The frogs and other animals always are calling in the morning, I like listening to their voices, they sound like the songs for me. What’s more, the fog makes the country look like the wonderland, I will never know who will come to me until it is close to me, I like this mysterious feeling.

我的家乡是个美丽的地方，它在乡村，由于它远离城市，因此那里的环境很自然。水很清澈，我几乎能看到鱼，山上有很多绿油油的树。但是我最喜欢早上的时候，因为空气很清新，还有很多来自大自然的声音。青蛙和其它动物总是在早上叫，我喜欢听到他们的声音，听起来像在为我歌唱。而且，雾气让整个乡村看起来像仙境一样，我永远都不知道谁向我走来直到它走进我，我喜欢这样神秘的感觉。

安徽省合肥市包河区教育局教研室 王一枝

根据初中阶段的写作具体目标：写作时考虑不同的目的和对象，写作要感情真挚，力求表达自己对自然、社会、人生的独特感受和真切体验;多角度地观察生活，发现生活的丰富多彩，捕捉事物的特征，力求有创意地表达;根据表达的中心，选择恰当的表达方式。合理安排内容的先后和详略。条理清楚地表达自己的意思。运用联想和想像，丰富表达的内容;写记叙文，做到内容具体：写简单的说明文，做到明白清楚;写简单的议论文，做到有理有据;根据生活需要，写日常应用文……简单地说，就是会写记叙文、简单的说明文、简单的议论文和一般的应用文;内容具体明确，语言文从字顺;感情真实健康，力求有创意。安徽省中考作文评分基本上涵盖了上述精神。

一、作文评分总体要求

以安徽省2009年中考题“师生之间”为例，对中考作文评分标准具体分析，具有可解读性和可操作性。这个命题作文，它的内容很宽泛，可写的东西很多，有关师生之间的事、物、情，皆可入文。具体评分要求如下：

1、要审清题目。文章要切题，不能写成“我的老师”， 要扣住“之间”来写，是老师和学生之间的双向活动。

2、体裁要分辨清。叙事有起伏，阐述有哲理，写人须有触动人物内心深处，抒情、议论兼而有之。

3、立意要有创新。文题看似平平淡淡，没有精心雕琢，但要写出独特的、与众不同之处。师生老师与学生的界定可以引申、拓展，也可以是广义的。

4、文章有真情实感。写事要具体可感，语言要流畅，有文采，有点睛之笔，行文思路清晰，感情充沛。

二、作文分等分类简述

就阅卷评分标准结合学生实际作文情况，作文大致分为以下几类：

(一)力求创新。力避旧瓶装新酒，有的同学在考场中将师与生进行引申、比喻，文章开头引用《三字经》中的“生不学，师之惰”，接着亮出自己的观点，“生不学”未必是“师之惰”，用“诸葛亮与刘禅”这对师生来佐证。以思辩的眼光去看待师生之间的关系，提倡一种平等、和谐的新型师生关系，这篇文章结构完整、首尾照应、层次清楚、语言流畅，应属一类文(得54分)。

(二)形式新颖。

形式新颖，内容详实、描写具体。比如一位考生列了四个小标题：“酸”、“甜”、“苦”、“辣”，分别写了与老师之间的四件事，也都有师生之间的活动，有师生间真挚的情感，内容具体真实，可成为一篇佳作，属一类中等(得50分)。

(三)误读题意。一位考生将师生之间写成了“教与学”的关系，整篇文章围绕着“师傅领进门，修行在个人”来写。在立意、内容上只能归属为三类下、四类上。(得30分左右)

(四)选材陈旧。在选材方面流于俗套而缺乏真挚的情感。比如很多考生写在我生病时老师不顾羸弱的身体背着我去医院，老师在下雨天送我回家，把伞让给学生，自己却淋透了，生病了等。没有从生活实际中选取典型的、新颖的、感人的事例来表现主题。这样的事例不够典型，情感也抒发的不到位就难以达到感动人的目的。属三类下。(得32分)

(五)切题不紧。中等成绩的考生的作文都更倾向于写老师是如何对待自己的，主要写老师是如何关心我，如何辅导我的学习，这样的文章中老师的行动是主体，其中穿插了学生的感悟与体会，但占的笔墨不多，因为写老师的文字中必然有学生的活动。这样的文章不能说完全切题，也不能说离题，因为它写到了老师对学生的关爱与呵护。属于二类下、三类上。(得38分)

(六)文体单一。绝大多数写成记叙文，显得平铺直叙，没有生动、细致的描写，选择写议论文的很少，即使有所议论，也是空发感慨。基本上分数不会太高。(得25分上下)

三、中考作文评分细则解读

我们通常用语言优美、立意新颖、结构独特、构思精巧、内容充实、感情真实、表达恰当等方面去评判优秀学生的作文。其实，对于绝大多数学生来说，评分标准的制定有所局限性，就安徽省而言，主要从内容和表达两个方面对作文的评分细则简要解析。

(一)内容方面：

新课标所提倡的作文理念，在安徽省的作文命题及评分标准的制定中已得到很好的体现。内容具体、充实的作文也不在少数，考生视野开阔，体现了他们对生活的感悟，做到了我手写我心，出现了一大批关注亲情友情、关注社会自然、关注艺术历史的佳作。如2007年安徽省的“我们的心近了”，有考生写通过感悟李白、李煜和岳飞的诗词与他们的爱国之心;有写通过印度洋海啸与世界人民的心近了，通过中国免除非洲债务，中国人民与非洲人民的心近了……这些选材与立意都是很高的，有部分考生写社会生活的一些小小的细节反映人与人之间的心近了，如写为瓜农提供方便，与辛苦劳作的人心近了;到山区体验生活与农村孩子的心近了，选材立意温暖人心……我感到：出题人与考生的心近了，考生与家庭、学校、社会、自然、历史的心近了。具体得分点有以下几点：

(1)中心明确。有些考生选材虽好，但中心不够明确，如有考生写了三个片断：与同学的心近了，与老师的心近了，与父母的心近了，但各有自己的中心，没有将三个片断统一到一个主题上。还有将“心近了”误当成团结、友爱的同义词，写成了“团结就是力量”、“友爱使人快乐”等主题。

(2)文章切题 。未抓住题眼“近了”，“近了”是一个过程，而这个过程有些考生未作为重点。如有一个考生重点描写了父母与自己的矛盾，而对矛盾解决的过程即“近了”只是一笔带过就总结说“我们的心近了”，作文主次不分明。个别考生干脆将“心近了”写成“心静了”，严重偏题。有的同学字顺文美，读之感人，但读后和材料要求对照，跑题了。

(3)内容充实。少数学生为了出新出奇，另辟蹊径，对“老师”和“学生“的内涵和外延进行了拓展。如有学生把“书本”、“大自然”等比作“老师”，写出自己徜徉其中的经历和感受。有些考生将作文写成议论文或者散文，虽反复点题，但内容不够具体，缺少有力的论据或感人的细节，只是空洞的议论或抒情。如：无视“我们的心”，写成“他们的心近了”。如一个考生创作了一篇小说，笔触细腻地写了两个小女孩由竞争到互相帮助的过程，但用的是第三人称的叙述视角，没有“我们的心近了”之意，很遗憾地与一类作文失之交臂。其实只要将小说中的一个角色换成“我”即可。大部分考生都能围绕中心有话可写，内容也较充实。写作水平较高的学生所写内容都能较好地兼顾“老师”和“学生”两个方面，紧扣中心，表达有技巧，具有一的表现力，演绎出师生之间的情感变化，常令人耳目一新。

(4)感情真实。出现了许多题材雷同的套作。可能是时代变了，考生的作文中有不少写对后妈由排斥到心近的过程。有许多夫妻离婚可以理解，怎么父母离婚了，孩子都是跟着爸爸?后妈个个都那么宽容、忍让?这类作品有些感情不够真实，很难得高分。

(5)立意新颖。作文关键抓住“心近了”来立意，选材涉及到对题目中的 “我们”的具体所指，大多数学生理解为“我与父亲”、“我与母亲”、“我与老师”、“我与同学”、“我与朋友”、“我与后爸”、“我与后妈”等，具体所指的身边人物，当属切题作文;还有把“我们”理解为台湾与祖国大陆，香港、澳门与祖国，时值香港回归祖国十周年之际，属立意有一定的高度;还有理解为中国与世界、中国加入WTO，世界经济一体化;中国与日本、涉及到中日两国由来已久的渊源关系，到当下的中日关系;中国与印度，涉及海啸中中国人民的友好援助。这些都充分体现了学生对时事的关注，对焦点问题的思考，眼界相当开阔，立意也很深刻。

除以上几方面以外，还有就是我与书，我与语文，我与古代名家，像李白、杜甫、陶渊明、李煜等等，写得是大气磅礴，文采飞扬，充分显示了学生深厚的文学底蕴，这些当属一类作文中的上品。

(二)表达方面

(1)表达方式运用得好。多数考生表达方式运用的合理，但也有一些考生处理不好。如：出现了一些结构不够完整，表达方式单一，甚至不知所云的作品，如一些考生通篇记叙自己与父母关系“近了”的事实，没有动人的细节描写，语言平淡无味，缺少感染力，缺少个性;从表达角度来看，大多数学生还是以大量口语化的语言出现在卷面，缺乏书面语，缺少语文的文学气息。

(2)结构完整，条理清楚。如：一位考生的考场作文，全文的结构如下：师生之间是加减乘除。一：师生之间是+，老师+学生=家;二：师生之间是-，减去烦恼;三：师生之间是×，师生相乘，走向成功;四：师生之间是÷，除去陋习，让学生改邪归正。总结：加减乘除都是爱。

(3)语句流畅、通顺。语言以朴实真挚风格为主，有不少语言流畅、文采飞扬的佳作。如：有一位考生写中日关系近了，远溯到唐代用鉴真六次东渡和晁衡留居长安证明两国一衣带水的亲密，又提到近代日本对中国的侵略，日本右翼分子的猖狂，中国一部分人民身受伤害后的仇日情绪表现“远”了，然后用两国民间社团友好往来，温总理“融冰之旅”表现两国人民相互了解和对和平友好的向往以及希望世界和平的主题。行文结构严谨，通篇语言流畅，美妙的比喻和一气呵成的排比层出不穷，且恰到好处。最后以“心近了，心静了，心惊了，心敬了，心近了”结束全篇，耐人寻味。

有少数学生引用古诗文名句，巧用一些修辞造句，驾驶语言的能力相当强。 如： 开篇： 蒲公英因长风飞向远方，小树苗因甘霖获得滋长，学生因老师而成材。结尾：冰寒于水而出于水，青胜于蓝而出于蓝。纵观整体来说，基本上做到了语句通顺，表述清楚。一部分考生通篇议论抒情、空喊口号，令人乏味;还有个别考生掉书袋，几乎每一句都要引用古诗句，没有自己的语言和感悟可言。

(三)字数的要求。安徽省及芜湖市均有明确的规定：考虑到内容的充实，文章不要少于500字。字数不足500字，每少50字酌情扣一分。但是，一篇文章写的字数较少分量自然很轻。其实，400字、500字的作文扣分不过2分，可再少就不仅仅是字数的问题了。从考场作文实际看，600-700字的作文很多，分数上也偏向这些文章。

(四)、卷面书写。试卷最后一项得分栏就是卷面得分，共5分。根据是书写干净与否;有无涂抹和大面积改动;字体端正、匀称、工整与否。卷面整洁，书写、标点、格式正确等一般给4—5分，最少2—3分。从得分看，字体有形、书写清楚的文章得分较高，好作文卷面分也很高，是相辅相成的。

《语文课程标准》的总目标中，对学生写作能力有如下概括：能具体明确、文从字顺地表达自己的意思，能根据日常生活需要，运用常见的表达方式写作。其实，作文评分标准只是参考，最主要的是鼓励学生写真事、抒真情，写作的过程也是一个教育学生做人的过程。

雅思作文

剑桥雅思作文评分标准：

Task Response

Coherence and Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为“内容”，“逻辑结构”，“语法的准确使用和范围”以及“词汇量”四个标准。

实际案例

根据下面的全面修改案例，读者可以清楚的看到一篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。

Cambridge 8 – Test 2

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?

Has this become a positive or negative development?

原文：

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

Yes, the technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In past there was no quick technology to contact or to establish any communication between one person to another person. The drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and were time taking process such as telegrams, letter etc. People used to afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecure medium of communication. When it comes to professional level, the privacy and accuracy should be maintain but, to that time there were no secure communications.

Now the things have changed around, people from far distance contact their loves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the interaction level between two person. Quality the level of the interaction between people to people, has improved because the people are equipped with high-tec technology which enhances the communication. There are many many medium which are available now such as internet, called cards etc.

The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time anywhere in the world.

People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want. It has become so easier and feriendly to be in touch with your feriends, relatives even with the unknown people.

原文翻译：

今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了改变。

是的。技术改善了人们的交流方式。以前人们总是期待找到方便的方法联系居住在异地的亲朋好友。以前没有高效的技术帮助人们沟通交流。以往的通讯系统的问题是速度慢，费时间，比如：电报和信件等。在过去，人们不敢给爱人写一些私密的事情因为担心通信不够安全。专业的通信技术应该是安全的、准确的，但是在当时根本没有安全的通信可言。

现在，这些事情已经改变了，住在远处的人们利用一种高效的方式联系他们的爱人。这些方式改善了人们之间的交流方式。因为人们使用了改善交流的高科技，所以他们交流的方式已经得到改善。现在有了很多这类媒体，比如：国际互联网、语音卡等。

这些技术提供了更快的移动性，帮助人们在任何时间、世界上的任何地方与他人沟通。

现在人们能够在任何时间联系亲朋好友。和朋友、家人以及陌生人的沟通变得更容易了。

（注：上述的习作存在语法错误和表达错误，因此对应的翻译也有一定出入。）

Sample Answer:

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.5 score. Here is the examiner’s comment:

这是一位考生写的5.5分作文。下面是考官的评语。

The topic introduction has been copied from the task and is deducted from the word count. This leaves the answer underlength at 236 words, so the candidate loses marks for this.

文章的开篇是从标题中抄来的，所以不能算字数。剩下的只有236个字，考生因此失分。

This answer addresses both questions, but the first is not well covered in terms of how actual relationships have changed. Nevertheless, there is a clear opinion that the effects have been positive and relationships have improved, with some relevant ideas to support this. There is a general progression to the argument, with some effective use of time markers and linkers. There is also some repetition, however. Paragraphing is not always logical, and ideas are not always well linked. A range of vocabulary that is relevant to the topic is used, including some precise and natural expressions. There are quite a lot of mistakes in word form, word choice or spelling, but these do not usually reduce understanding. A variety of sentence type is used, but not always accurately. Errors in grammar and punctuation are distracting at times, but only rarely cause problems for the reader.

修改后：

Nowadays,.(It is true that technology has shifted people’s communicative ways. 利用It is true that的句式突出后面的事件；Change和shift是同义词替换；the way people interact和communicative way是同义词替换。这样的改变可以避免引用标题中的原词。)

（拒绝非正式的使用方法。）The technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people used（前后时态必须一致。）to wait and try to find easy ways（名词单复数）to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In the past, there was no （词汇使用不当，应该改成effective）technology to contact others or to establish any communication between two people. And（重要的连接词，表示本句和上一句共同解释为什么“人们一直在期待找到更有效的通讯方式。”）the drawback ofthe past communication systems was that they （指代不清，这里指代的是communication systems）were too （表示“太”。）slow and were time-consuming （表示“费时”）, including （这是应该使用分词形式，表示对主句的communication ways的具体描述。）the telegrams, the letter etc. Not only that,（这里需要连接词）people used to be afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their loved ones because of （because of 强调“外部原因”；due to 强调“根据”）information security （根据上下文理解，此处应该表达的是“信息安全”）of communication. (They worried their letters might be stolen or read by some strangers.这里可以继续描述人们的担心。)

However，（上文主要讨论过去的情况，而接下来将讨论现在的改变）now the things have changed around.（必须避免使用“，”连接两个句子。正确的处理方法是，要么采用断句的方法，要么添加连词。）People in a long distance contact their lovesd one in (effective and efficient) ways, which improve（主谓一致，which代替ways。）the interaction level between two persons. Quality （用词重复）of the interaction between people and people（主谓之间不能添加“，”。）has been improved（这里使用被动是因为沟通质量的提升是因为技术的发展。）because they are equipped with high-techdevices which enhances their communication. There are many（重复）mediummediaavailable such as internet, called cards etc.So the technology has provided better mobility , which help people to talk or keep in touch with each other at any time anywhere in the world.（不应该单独成段，应该和上一段结合在一起。）（本句应该被删除，因为没有提出任何新的观点，并且与上文的句子非常重复。）

好的句子运用得到可以为作文提高分值。下面是语文迷为大家整理的英语励志名言，希望对你写作有帮助。

1、When all else is lost the future still remains.就是失去了一切别的，也还有未来。

2、Sow nothing, reap nothing.春不播，秋不收。

3、Keep on going never give up.勇往直前， 决不放弃!

4、The wealth of the mind is the only wealth.精神的财富是唯一的财富。

5、Never say die.永不气馁!

6、Nurture passes nature.教养胜过天性。

7、There is no garden without its weeds.没有不长杂草的花园。

8、The best preparation for tomorrow is doing your best today.对明天做好的准备就是今天做到最好!

9、The reason why a great man is great is that he resolves to be a great man.伟人之所以伟大，是因为他立志要成为伟大的人。

10、The best preparation for tomorrow is doing your best today.

对明天做好的准备就是今天做到最好!

11、You cannot improve your past, but you can improve your future. Once time is wasted, life is wasted.

你不能改变你的过去，但你可以让你的未来变得更美好。一旦时间浪费了，生命就浪费了。

12、Knowlegde can change your fate and English can accomplish your future.

知识改变命运，英语成就未来。

13、Dont aim for success if you want it; just do what you love and believe in, and it will come naturally.

如果你想要成功，不要去追求成功;尽管做你自己热爱的事情并且相信它，成功自然到来。

14、Jack of all trades and master of none.

门门精通，样样稀松。

15、Judge not from appearances.

人不可貌相，海不可斗量。

16、Justice has long arms.

天网恢恢，疏而不漏。

17、Keep good men company and you shall be of the number.

近朱者赤，近墨者黑。

18、Kill two birds with one stone.

一箭双雕。

19、Kings go mad, and the people suffer for it.

君王发狂，百姓遭殃。

20、Kings have long arms.

普天之下，莫非王土。

21、Knowledge is power.

知识就是力量。

21、Knowledge makes humble, ignorance makes proud.

博学使人谦逊，无知使人骄傲。

22、Learn and live.

活着，为了学习。

23、Learning makes a good man better and ill man worse.

好人越学越好，坏人越学越坏。

24、Learn not and know not.

不学无术。

25、Learn to walk before you run.

先学走，再学跑。

26、Let bygones be bygones.

过去的就让它过去吧。

27、Let sleeping dogs lie.

别惹麻烦。

28、Let the cat out of the bag.

泄漏天机。

29、Lies can never changes fact.

谎言终究是谎言。

30、Lies have short legs.

谎言站不长。

31、While there is life there is hope.一息若存，希望不灭。

32、I am a slow walker,but I never walk backwards.我走得很慢，但是我从来不会后退。

33、Cease to struggle and you cease to live. 生命不止，奋斗不息。

34、Never underestimate your power to change yourself!永远不要低估你改变自我的能力!

35、Nothing is impossible!没有什么不可能!

36、Do what you say,say what you do.做你说过的，说你能做的。

37、The man who has made up his mind to win will never say "impossible ".凡是决心取得胜利的人是从来不说“不可能的”。

38、Live a noble and honest life. Reviving past times in your old age will help you to enjoy your life again.过一种高尚而诚实的生活。当你年老时回想起过去，你就能再一次享受人生。

39、You have to believe in yourself . Thats the secret of success.人必须相信自己，这是成功的秘诀。

40、If you fail, dont forget to learn your lesson.如果你失败了，千万别忘了汲取教训。

41、You cannot improve your past, but you can improve your future. Once time is wasted, life is wasted.你不能改变你的过去，但你可以让你的未来变得更美好。一旦时间浪费了，生命就浪费了。

42、There is but one secret to sucess---never give up!成功只有一个秘诀--永不放弃!

43、For man is man and master of his fate.人就是人，是自己命运的主人。

44、What makes life dreary is the want of motive.没有了目的，生活便郁闷无光。

45、Difficult circumstances serve as a textbook of life for people.困难坎坷是人们的生活教科书。

46、Gods determine what youre going to be.人生的奋斗目标决定你将成为怎样的人。