中考作文英语评分标准及评分说明(推荐20篇)

对于中考作文，大家都知道“切合”题意比“符合”程度更深，但是究竟怎样的文章才算“切合”题意呢?实际上，切合题意可以从两个方面来加以理解：形式上的切合题意和内容上的切合题意。形式上的切合题意包括以下几方面的内涵：

(1)开门见山，开篇的写作内容直接指向题目涵盖的内容。如萧红的《祖父和我》：“呼兰河这个小城镇里边住着我的祖父。 /我生的时候，祖父已经六十多岁了，我长到四五岁的时候，祖父快七十了。 ”

(2)全文以题目中的中心词作为写作的连接线，串联起相关内容。如冯骥才的《花脸》，全文关公的花脸作为串联起相关材料的线索，把我热衷花脸、买了关公的花脸、买了花脸之后的相关活动内容和我对关公花脸的喜爱这些材料串联起来。

(3)首尾都能很好呼应题目中的中心词。朱自清的《绿》可谓是样式的典范。题为“绿”，开篇作者写道：“我第二次到仙岩的时候，我惊诧于梅雨潭的绿了。 ”文章结尾，作者又写道：“我第二次到仙岩的时候，我不禁惊诧于梅雨潭的绿了。 ”

就中考的临场作文来看，在600字要求的作文中，以上三种形式，能很好保证作文在“中心和材料”上能获得很好的分数。

在形式上做到了 "切合题意”，就为内容上切合题意打下了坚实的基础，一般情况下，形式上切合题意后，只有作文的主题不是消极的，一般情况下，在中心和材料这项得分上就不会低。特别是在文章的开头，如果能完成点题，并隐含着下文一定的写作内容，就能比较好地完成“切合题意”的要求。

假设你是《21世纪中学生英语报》“heart to heart”专栏的编辑.下面是你收到的一位中学生的来信.请你根据他来信的内容写一封回信.针对他的问题。

Dear Xiaowei,

Weight problem is quite common among teenagers everywhere. So I don’t think you have much to worry about. Here are my suggestions. Eating late at night is OK, but you should to eat more fruit and vegetables, which are good for you.

Also, when you are free, you’d better do more exercise. Running is great. You don’t like running alone, but what about running with your friends? Or you can do some team sports like basketball. I’m sure your friends will be willing to help you lose weight. I hope you have as much success in losing weight as you have had in your studies. “Believe myself, and I will win.” It’s really important for us when we meet difficulties. Don’t lose heart; I’m sure you will succeed one day.

Changes in Shanghai

1 300年前的上海

2 上海的今天(东方明珠、金茂大厦)

3 上海的明天(2010年的世博会)

参考作文

Shanghai was a small town three hundred years ago. There were only a few thousand people living here. Many of them were fishermen and farmers.

300年前，上海只是个小镇，只有几千人居住在这里，其中很多人是渔民和农民。

Today, Shanghai is becoming an international city. Many tall building have been built. Some bridges have been put up over the Huangpu River. More and more foreigners come to Shanghai for a visit every day.

今天，上海已变成一座国际大都市，并建成了很多高楼大厦。黄浦江上架起了很多桥梁。每天都有越来越多的外国人前来旅游。

Shanghai has already won the bid for holding the World Expo 2010. I think the environment will be better and better and the city will be more and more beautiful.

上海已经取得了2010年世博会的举办权，我相信上海的环境会越来越好，并且越来越美丽。

点评：虽然2010年世博会已经结束，但关于城市发展的话题依然热烈，除了上海，像广州、北京、深圳等大城市也有可能是考试的热点。

假若今天是香港回归5 周年纪念日，你观看了中央电视台的专题节目，看到了香港回归所发生的巨大变化。

根据下列要求写一篇英语日记，表达自己盼望祖国统一的心愿。

1. 香港、澳门和台湾自古以来就是中国的领土，由于历史的原因被分割。

2. 1997 年 7 月 1 日香港已经回归祖国， 1999 年 12 月 20 日澳门也回到了祖国的怀抱。香港和澳门的明天会更加美好。

3. 台湾是中国领土不可分割（ integral ）的一部分，中国人民，包括生活在台湾的绝大多数人都盼望台湾赶快回归祖国。

注：英语短文的标题已经给出，全文约 100 词。

How I Wish China Would Be United Sooner！

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How I Wish China Would Be United Sooner！

July 1st， 2002 Fine

Hong Kong and Macao are parts of China in history， but they were separated from the motherland for some political reasons. China has been getting richer and stronger since its opening to the outside world. On July 1， 1997， Hong Kong finally returned home. On December 20， 1999， Macao returned home， too. Great changes have taken place in both Hong Kong and Macao. It shows the development and great strength of our country.

Taiwan is an intergral part of China. The Chinese people as well as most of the people from Taiwan are looking forward to the day on which Taiwan will return home. We are sure that day will come sooner or later.

[中考英语关于香港回归几周年的作文

You are writing a complaint to the manager about the hotel.

题目：你向饭店经理写信投诉酒店服务。

(以e-mail的形式出现)

On the whole, my stay here was satisfactory. The hotel was comfortable and the room was bright, but it was too dirty. Whats more the food was compeletely awful and the service was really terrible. I have stayed in your hotel for several times and everything is getting worse, though the price is fair.

总体而言，我在这边住得比较满意。酒店很舒服，房间也很明亮，但是太脏了。另外，这儿的食物太糟糕了，服务也很差。我已经在这里住过好几次了，虽然价钱还不错，但每件事都越来越糟糕。

Please try to clean the room a bit more often and find someone who is capable of cooking and who knows how to talk friendly to others.

请时常打扫一下房间，找个真正懂烹饪的和懂得跟别人和睦相处的员工!

家对我意义重大。「不管家是多么简陃，家是世界上最好的地方。」我珍视家庭温暖，并且认为家是世界上最光辉的地方之一。

每当我在日常生活中遭遇到困难、失败甚至挫折时，家就是我寻求庇护之所。在家中，我亲爱的父母和兄弟姊妹会安慰我a、鼓励我。而有了他们的关心与鼓舞，我将恢复自信，并能鼓能我的所有的力量和勇气，来面对严酷的生活现实。对我而言，家永远是一种喜悦，我总是可以在其中找到爱、了解、关怀与帮助。

home means a lot to me. “be it ever so humble, there is no place like home.” i appreciate the warmth of my home, and regard it as one of the brightest and dearest spots on earth.

it is the place where i can take refuge whenever i meet with difficulties, failures and even frustrations in my daily life. at home, my dear parents and brothers and sisters will comfort me and cheer me up. and with their concern and encouragement, i will regain my self-confidence and muster up all my strength and courage to face the stern realities of life. to me, home is forever a joy where i can always find love, understanding, care and help.

[中考英语作文家永恒的喜悦

My Chinese Teacher.

Of all the subjects, I like Chinese best because I have a good Chinese teacher. Though she has been teaching us for only three years, I respect and love her very much.

My Chinese teacher is thirty-six years old and she is neither tall nor short.

Ms Sun works very hard. She is always the first to come and the last to leave her office. She tries to make her classes lively and interesting. And we enjoy her lessons very much.

Ms Sun is very kind and friendly to us. And we＇re getting on well with each other. But she is very strict with us in our studies.

Ms Sun teaches us so well that we all enjoy learning Chinese. All the students think she is one of the most popular teachers in our school.

体育运动是在人类发展过程中逐步开展起来的有意识地对自己身体素质的培养的各种活动。下面是关于体育运动的英语作文范文，希望对你写作有帮助。

英语作文一

Recently, more and more people stay at home watching TV and surfing the Internet, which leads to obesity and even get serious illness.

最近，越来越多的人呆在家里看电视、上网，所以导致肥胖甚至更严重的疾病。

This is no doubt that sport is good for our health. A person who takes exercises regularly will keep fit. What’s more, exercise can make you well-behaved and confident. If you usually take exercise with your friends, you will be close to them. After all, sports can make your life more colorful.

毫无疑问，运动对我们的健康有好处。人经常运动可以保持身体健康。更重要的是，运动可以使你表现得自信。如果你经常和你的朋友锻炼，你们之间的关系会更加紧密。毕竟，运动可以使你的生活更加丰富多彩。

Nothing is more important than doing sports. Its time to take actions to stay away from the TV and computer and to take part in sport activities.

没有什么比运动更重要。是时候采取行动远离电视，电脑和参加体育活动了。

英语作文二

All over the world millions of people take part in different kinds of sports. Sports are perhaps the most popular form of relaxation that almost all can enjoy.

Some people seem to think that sports and games are unimportant things that people do at times when they are not working. But in fact sports and games can be of great value, especially to people who work with their brains most of the day. They should not be treated only as ammusements.

Sports and games build our bodies, prevent us from getting too fat, and keep us healthy. They also give us valuable practice in helping the eyes, brain and muscles to work together. In table tennis, the eyes see the ball coming, judge its speed and direction, and pass the information on to the brain. The brain has to decide what to do and sends its orders to the muscles of the arms legs and so on, so that the bah is met and hit back where the player wants it to do. All this must happen with very great speed, and only those who have had a lot of practice can do this successfully.

Sports and games are also very useful for character-training. In their lessons, boys and girls may learn about such virrues as unselfishness courage disciple and love of ones country, but what is learned in books can not have the same deep effect on a childs character as what is learned through practice. Most of students time is spent in classes, studying lessons. So what the students do in their spare time is of great importance. If each of them learns to go all out for his team and not for himself on the sports field, he will later find it natural to work for the good of society, for the good of his country.

参考翻译

世界上有许多的人参加不同种类的体育运动。体育运动可能是几乎所有的人都可享受的最大众化的娱乐形式。

有些人似乎认为体育运动不是什么重要的事情，只是人们在不干活的时候才去做的。但实际上，体育运动对人们益处很大。特别是对那些一整天从事脑力劳动的人来说，更是这样。不能把它们单纯看成是娱乐。

体育运动能增强我们的体质，防止发胖，保持身体健康。他们还在使眼睛、头脑和肌肉协同动作方面提供宝贵的锻炼机会。打乒乓球时，眼睛看到球打过来，要判断速度和方向，再把这个信息传到大脑，这时大脑得决定怎么办，并给胳臂、腿等部位的肌肉发出命令，以便接到球，并把球打回到打球人要它到的地方。所有这一切的反应都要非常迅速。只有那些打乒乓球训练有素的人，才能成功地做到。

体育运动还有利于品格的培养。孩子们在课堂上可能学到关于无私、勇敢、守纪律和爱国等品德。但是日本上学的东西对孩子品格的影响不可能和亲身体验中学来的东西影响一样深刻。学生大部分在校时间都用在上课。因此，学生的课余时间的活动至关重要。如果每个人在运动场上认识到是为自己的球队而不是为个人而拼搏，日后他就会感到，为社会利益，为国家利益而工作是理所当然的。

I think it’s very important for everyone to do sports. I like sports because they’re not only good for my health but also good for my study. My favorite sport is swimming. Whenever I am free, I will have a swim with my friends in the swimming pool. After swimming,I usually feel happy and relaxed. What’s more,Ican put more energy into my study. SoLet’s do sports,and we will become stronger and stronger.

What Can We Do for the Environment

our environment is becoming worse and worse，what can we do for the environment?I think each of us can do a little bit to help with this problem。

The first thing we can do is to use cloth bags instead of plastic bags when we go shopping. It helps to protect the environment. The second thing we can do is to reuse the old textbooks as possible as we can. We should also never forget to turn off the lights when we leave the classrooms in order to save energy. Whats more，it would be better if we walk or ride a bike to school. We should try our best to reduce pollution and waste。

In fact，even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment. I believe we can make the world a better place to live in.

1.As far as …is concerned 就……而言

2.It goes without saying that… 不言而喻，…

3.It can be said with certainty that… 可以肯定地说……

4.As the proverb says， 正如谚语所说的，

5.It has to be noticed that… 它必须注意到，…

6.Its generally recognized that… 它普遍认为…

7.Its likely that … 这可能是因为…

8.Its hardly that… 这是很难的……

9.Its hardly too much to say that… 它几乎没有太多的说…

10.What calls for special attention is that…需要特别注意的是

11.Theres no denying the fact that…毫无疑问，无可否认

12.Nothing is more important than the fact that… 没有什么比这更重要的是…

13.whats far more important is that… 更重要的是…

Food safety is very important for every one of us, because food safety is related to the physical and mental health of each and every one of us.

We eat, for example, often eat junk food will cause great harm to the body. So the first thing to see if you eat food safety food, generally have the safety and production of a trademark can we eat, because of security and production of a trademark in general can guarantee food safety. If food has environmental protection sign, so much the better, because environmental protection sign of food to put it another way of green food, eat more security, and nutrition. So I suggest that we eat more green food.

In fact we all have a common bad habit, that is love to eat junk food.

What is junk food? We love to eat KFC, McDonalds, usually happy Tom inside of Fried food is junk food, and it is the small food is junk food sold outside the school gate.

Ill give you an example to eat KFC: there is a person, every day he is to eat KFC, the results longer than pig fat, ugly. Students often eat at the school gate shop in the small food also easy to cause the stomach is bad.

So we must not eat KFC and other 3 without the product.

食品安全对我们每一个人都很重要，因为食品安全关系到我们每一个人的身心健康。

例如我们吃东西的时候，经常吃到垃圾食品就会对身体造成很大的伤害。所以首先要看看你吃的食品是不是安全食品，一般要有安全商标和生产商标我们才能吃，因为安全商标和生产商标一般可以保证食品安全。假如食品有环保标志，那就更好了，因为环保标志的食品换一种说法就是绿色食品，吃了更安全，而且还有营养呢。所以我建议大家多吃绿色食品。

其实我们大家都有个共同的坏习惯，那就是爱吃垃圾食品。

那什么是垃圾食品呢?我们平常最爱吃的肯德基、麦当劳、开心汤姆里面的油炸食品就是垃圾食品，还有就是学校门口卖的小食品也是垃圾食品。

我给大家举一个吃肯德基的例子：有一个人，他每天都是吃肯德基，结果长的比猪还胖，多难看。同学们经常吃学校门口店子里的小食品也容易引起肠胃不好。

所以我们大家一定不要吃肯德基和其他的三无产品。

作文题目：上周，你们班举行了一场“初中生使用微信的利与弊”的主题班会，同学们各抒己见。班长针对同学们的不同意见，做了以下记录。请你根据表格的内容，以“The opinion of using WeChat”为题写一篇英语短文, 说明使用微信的利弊并谈谈自己的看法。不少于80字。

Last week, we had a discussion about using WeChat. Here are the results.

Some students think WeChat(微信) is a very useful tool. It can provide a platform (平台)to communicate with their friends. Besides, they can make more friends and learn more knowledge by WeChat.

However, some students think WeChat will affect (影响) their study if they spend too much time using it. And they may be tricked (欺骗) by strange net friends. Last but not least, it will also affect their eyesight to use WeChat for a long time .

In my opinion, we shouldn’t use WeChat for too long and make sure that don’t use it when we are studying. In addition(另外), we shouldn’t add strangers casually (随便)or meet net friends without our parents’ permission.

上周,我们讨论了使用微信。这里是结果。

一些学生认为微信是一个非常有用的工具。它可以提供一个平台与自己的朋友交流。除此之外,他们可以通过微信认识更多的朋友和学习更多的知识。

然而,一些学生认为微信会影响他们的研究如果他们花太多的时间使用它。和他们可能欺骗奇怪的网友。最后但并非最不重要,它也会影响他们的视力,使用微信很长时间了。

在我看来,我们不应该使用微信太长时间,确保不使用它当我们学习。除了,我们不应该随便加陌生人或满足网友没有父母的许可。

一篇文章的结尾，是文章的画龙点睛之处，如何用精简的语言，最精确地总结和概括文章的意思呢?今天，的名师为您总结了5种文章结尾的方式，一起来看看吧。

1、Taking all these factors into consideration， we naturally come to the conclusion that…

把所有这些因素加以考虑，我们自然会得出结论……

2、Taking into account all these factors， we may reasonably come to the conclusion that …

考虑所有这些因素，我们可能会得出合理的结论……

3、Hence/Therefore， we’d better come to the conclusion that …

因此，我们最好得出这样的结论……

4、There is no doubt that (job-hopping) has its drawbacks as well as merits.

毫无疑问，跳槽有优点也有缺点。

5、All in all， we cannot live without … But at the same time we must try to find out new ways to cope with the problems that would arise.

总之，我们没有…是无法生活的。但同时，我们必须寻求新的解决办法来对付可能出现的新问题。

有了以上的五种万能的结尾句型，我们在托福写作结尾的时候，就不用啰嗦一大堆又得不到分了。

春节习俗与计划，如何过2009年的春节，假如你是LINGLING给外国朋友JHON发一份电子邮件。

The spring Festival

Dear Jhon :

The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China. It is on January 1st according to the Chinese lunar calendar(中国的农历). It’s China’s New Year’s Day. So usually a month before the festival people begin to buy food clothes and decorations(装饰) for houses.

About a week before the festival housewives are busy preparing the new year dinner. And they will do a lot of washing and cleaning in the houses. People who are far away on business are hurrying to return home for the new year’s family reunion（团聚）.

On New Year Eve each family will gather tighter eating talking and watching TV for almost the whole night. And there will be some interesting programmes on TV. The children are the happiest of all because they can get presents from parents or grandparents.

On Lunar New Year’s Day after getting up people will eat dumplings. When they meet their neighbours or friends they’ll say: “Happy New Year!”

I am ready to spend with together my family on the Spring Festival I’am going to see my grandparents and friengs . I ’m going to Diseyland in HONGKONG with my parents I will revise lessinos do exercise every day help the old and children .Wellcom to China. Waiting for your e -mail.

Yours

Lingling

Pollution around us

In recent years our life is becoming better and better. But our environment is becoming worse and worse. Its very bad for our life. Now many people have air-conditioners and cars, they produce (give off ) waste gas. More and more trees are being cut down. There are so much sand on the earth (leaving only sand ) . We often see factories pour waste into rivers or lakes. Water in the river is quite dirty. We havent enough clean water to drink in cities. Now we are in danger. Its very necessary and important to protect the environment well. I think if everyone tries his best to protect the environment, the world will become much more beautiful , and our life will be better and better .

我们周围的污染

近年来我们的生活越来越好。但是，我们的环境越来越糟。它对我们的生活很糟糕。现在很多人都有空调和汽车，他们生产的（出）废气。越来越多的树被砍伐。有那么多的沙子在地球（只留下沙）。我们经常看到工厂把废水倒入河流或湖泊。河里的水很脏。我们没有足够的干净的水的城市。现在我们有危险。这是非常必要和重要的保护好环境。我想，如果每个人都尽自己最大的努力去保护环境，世界将变得更加美丽，我们的生活会越来越好。

导语：书面表达是对学生在初中阶段英语学习的综合考查，涉及篇章结构、句子构成、短语使用和单词拼写等多方面内容，以下是yuwenmi小编就中考书面表达的写作方法和注意事项进行指导，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

一、认真审题，确定时态人称，同时关注题材格式时态：故事性文章一般用过去时，其中表达感受时可用现在时。说明性或议论性文章一般用现在时，举例时可用过去时。根据题目要求也会出现时态的交错使用，如过去和现在的对比等。如果句中出现了时间状语，时态则要遵循时间状语。如ago，last…——过去时next，in…——将来时等人称：注意在句子中人称的统一。例如：Thanks to the teachers,we have improved our English.其中we和our就是人称的统一。格式：注意书信格式的开头和结尾。

二、找全信息点，紧扣主题，突出重点切忌只看表格中或所列1、2、3中的信息点。一定把题读全，找齐信息点，建议用铅笔标出，写完后再涂掉。根据题目，可适当增加合理内容。特别注意文章要有开头和结尾。

三、成文时表述正确，文字流畅切忌与汉语提示的一一对应，使用所学表达方法将语义表达出来即可。首先考虑句子结构(如主谓宾，主系表等)。同时注意短语的正确使用和单词的拼写，最好使用课本上学过的短语和句式。

四、文章结构清晰，重点句型出彩，可使文章在得分上提高一个档次考虑文章的篇章结构，使用适当的连接短语，使文章结构紧凑。常用连接词：

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all，Firstly/First，Secondly/Second…And then，Finally，In the end，At last

2.表并列补充关系的：What is more，Besides，Moreover，Furthermore，Inaddition

3.表转折对比关系的：However，On the contrary，but Although+clause(从句)，Inspite of+n/doing On onehand…On the other hand…Some…，while others…

4.表因果关系的：Because，As So，Thus，Therefore，As a result

5.表换一种方式表达：In other words

6.表进行举例说明：Forexample，句子;For instance，句子;such as+n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact

8.表达自己观点：As far as I know，In my opinion

9.表总结：In short，In a word，In conclusion，In summary

10.文中正确使用两三个好的句型，如：宾语从句、状语从句、动名词做主语等。

宾语从句举例：I believe Tianjin will be more beautiful and prosperous.

状语从句举例：If everyone does something for the environment,our hometown will become clean and beautiful.

动名词做主语举例：Reading books in the sun is bad for our eyes.It’s bad for our eyes to read books in the sun.

常用状语从句句型：1)时间when，not…until，as soon as 2)目的so that+clause;todo(为了) 3)结果so…that+clause，too…todo(太……以至于……) 4)条件if，unless(除非)，as long as(只要) 5)让步though，although，eventhough，even if no matter what/when/where/who/which/how 6)比较as…as…，not so…as…，than

五、认真检查，检查信息点是否全面，时态、人称是否一致，句子结构是否清晰，短语使用、单词拼写是否准确等。检查后，将草稿誊写在纸上，请注意按结构分段，书写清晰。下面列举一些在检查中可发现的错误：

1.We live more and more comfortable。改正：comfortably(副词修饰动词)2.we can get many informations by reading newspapers.改正：much information(不可数名词由much修饰)

3.There has many programs in TV.改正：There are many programs on TV.(There be句型和介词短语)

4.I think ride a bike can keep our health.改正：I think riding a bike can keep us healthy.(动名词作主语)

建议大家练习或模仿不同题材的文章，特别注意改错总结和吸取范文中好的结构与表达方法，适当运用于自己的文章中。

Topic(题目)：

What are some of the qualities of a good parent.Use specific details and examples to explain youranswer.

Model Essay(范文)：

I am fortunate to have good parents so it is easy for me to identify the qualities that makethem good. These qualities are unconditional love, trust, and respect for me and my brothersand sisters.

All mothers and fathers love their children. They nurture them and keep them from harm. Butnot all love is unconditional. Some parents would not love their children if they married someoneof a different religion or from a different ethnic group. Some parents would not love theirchildren if they were of a different sexual orientation. My parents won’t. My parents would loveus regardless of whom we married or whom we chose to love.

Part of unconditional love is trust. My parents trust us to do what is right. They know we wouldnever do anything to hurt them or to disgrace them. They trust us so we trust them. We areconfident that they would never do anything to hurt us.

Because our parents love us, they also respect us. They treat us as individuals. They accept ourdifferences. They do not expect us to be like them. They want us to be our own persons. Theywant us to make our own way in the world, not follow in their footsteps.

Without their love, I would not be as confident as I am. Without their trust, I would not befree to do what I want. Without their respect, I would not feel comfortable being on my own. Allchildren should have such wonderful parents.

[考研英语作文：合格的父母的标准是什么

雅思作文

剑桥雅思作文评分标准：

Task Response

Coherence and Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为“内容”，“逻辑结构”，“语法的准确使用和范围”以及“词汇量”四个标准。

实际案例

根据下面的全面修改案例，读者可以清楚的看到一篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。

Cambridge 8 – Test 2

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?

Has this become a positive or negative development?

原文：

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

Yes, the technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In past there was no quick technology to contact or to establish any communication between one person to another person. The drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and were time taking process such as telegrams, letter etc. People used to afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecure medium of communication. When it comes to professional level, the privacy and accuracy should be maintain but, to that time there were no secure communications.

Now the things have changed around, people from far distance contact their loves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the interaction level between two person. Quality the level of the interaction between people to people, has improved because the people are equipped with high-tec technology which enhances the communication. There are many many medium which are available now such as internet, called cards etc.

The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time anywhere in the world.

People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want. It has become so easier and feriendly to be in touch with your feriends, relatives even with the unknown people.

原文翻译：

今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了改变。

是的。技术改善了人们的交流方式。以前人们总是期待找到方便的方法联系居住在异地的亲朋好友。以前没有高效的技术帮助人们沟通交流。以往的通讯系统的问题是速度慢，费时间，比如：电报和信件等。在过去，人们不敢给爱人写一些私密的事情因为担心通信不够安全。专业的通信技术应该是安全的、准确的，但是在当时根本没有安全的通信可言。

现在，这些事情已经改变了，住在远处的人们利用一种高效的方式联系他们的爱人。这些方式改善了人们之间的交流方式。因为人们使用了改善交流的高科技，所以他们交流的方式已经得到改善。现在有了很多这类媒体，比如：国际互联网、语音卡等。

这些技术提供了更快的移动性，帮助人们在任何时间、世界上的任何地方与他人沟通。

现在人们能够在任何时间联系亲朋好友。和朋友、家人以及陌生人的沟通变得更容易了。

（注：上述的习作存在语法错误和表达错误，因此对应的翻译也有一定出入。）

Sample Answer:

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5.5 score. Here is the examiner’s comment:

这是一位考生写的5.5分作文。下面是考官的评语。

The topic introduction has been copied from the task and is deducted from the word count. This leaves the answer underlength at 236 words, so the candidate loses marks for this.

文章的开篇是从标题中抄来的，所以不能算字数。剩下的只有236个字，考生因此失分。

This answer addresses both questions, but the first is not well covered in terms of how actual relationships have changed. Nevertheless, there is a clear opinion that the effects have been positive and relationships have improved, with some relevant ideas to support this. There is a general progression to the argument, with some effective use of time markers and linkers. There is also some repetition, however. Paragraphing is not always logical, and ideas are not always well linked. A range of vocabulary that is relevant to the topic is used, including some precise and natural expressions. There are quite a lot of mistakes in word form, word choice or spelling, but these do not usually reduce understanding. A variety of sentence type is used, but not always accurately. Errors in grammar and punctuation are distracting at times, but only rarely cause problems for the reader.

修改后：

Nowadays,.(It is true that technology has shifted people’s communicative ways. 利用It is true that的句式突出后面的事件；Change和shift是同义词替换；the way people interact和communicative way是同义词替换。这样的改变可以避免引用标题中的原词。)

（拒绝非正式的使用方法。）The technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people used（前后时态必须一致。）to wait and try to find easy ways（名词单复数）to contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In the past, there was no （词汇使用不当，应该改成effective）technology to contact others or to establish any communication between two people. And（重要的连接词，表示本句和上一句共同解释为什么“人们一直在期待找到更有效的通讯方式。”）the drawback ofthe past communication systems was that they （指代不清，这里指代的是communication systems）were too （表示“太”。）slow and were time-consuming （表示“费时”）, including （这是应该使用分词形式，表示对主句的communication ways的具体描述。）the telegrams, the letter etc. Not only that,（这里需要连接词）people used to be afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their loved ones because of （because of 强调“外部原因”；due to 强调“根据”）information security （根据上下文理解，此处应该表达的是“信息安全”）of communication. (They worried their letters might be stolen or read by some strangers.这里可以继续描述人们的担心。)

However，（上文主要讨论过去的情况，而接下来将讨论现在的改变）now the things have changed around.（必须避免使用“，”连接两个句子。正确的处理方法是，要么采用断句的方法，要么添加连词。）People in a long distance contact their lovesd one in (effective and efficient) ways, which improve（主谓一致，which代替ways。）the interaction level between two persons. Quality （用词重复）of the interaction between people and people（主谓之间不能添加“，”。）has been improved（这里使用被动是因为沟通质量的提升是因为技术的发展。）because they are equipped with high-techdevices which enhances their communication. There are many（重复）mediummediaavailable such as internet, called cards etc.So the technology has provided better mobility , which help people to talk or keep in touch with each other at any time anywhere in the world.（不应该单独成段，应该和上一段结合在一起。）（本句应该被删除，因为没有提出任何新的观点，并且与上文的句子非常重复。）

1、关于这个问题，大家意见不同。

Opinions are divided about/on the problem.

2、百分之八十的学生喜欢校服。

Eighty percent of the students like school uniforms.

3、他们认为校服设计得好。

They think the uniforms are well designed.

4、其余的人对校服不感兴趣。

Therest are not interested in school uniforms.

5、三分之一的学生住得离学校近。

One third of the students live near their school.

6、一半多学生要花50分钟才能到学校。

More than half of the students spend 50 minutes on the way to school.

7、很少的人坐小汽车上学。

Few of them go to school by car.

8、2020年，这个城市将会有三百万辆汽车。

There will be 3 million cars in the city in 2020.

9、他们每天花一个半小时做作业。

It takes them an hour and a half to do their homework every day.

10、他们学了一年多英语了。

They have learned English for more than a year.

Now advocate low carbon life, as the primary school, I wont make much contribution to the earth, but in low carbon life that on the one hand, I also try to do things I can do.

Now I just have a holiday at home, will be the first to the family "operation"! Grandmother cooking meals every day dont pay attention to save, I say: "grandma, now advocate low carbon life", if you like rice, cook the rice for 20 minutes and then, can shorten the time, should be used when cooking in the fire; burn something to wipe pan, not easy to boil and boil food with a pressure cooker, and helps save gas. Also, wash dishes of water that clean out rice can be used to water the flowers, wash clothes of water can be used to mop the floor or flush the toilet." Grandmother surprise of say: "is that so?! Grandmother, dont know, just do what you say!"

Dad always play while the computer before you go to sleep, I have the chance to say: dad, advocated "low-carbon life", now playing computer not only a waste of electricity, is not good for your eyes, you know, there are a lot of countries is because there are many people of reckless waste of electricity, so they often power outages, the day was fine, have to have lights in the evening! Dad you look how poor they are, you still go to bed early! Dad said happily: "my daughter grow up, know more than me, has a point, I will try, also join your" low carbon gens ". My heart crossed.

In the evening, grandpa opened the TV, voice is very big. I said: "grandpa, now people are constantly improve low carbon consciousness, the voice is small, low brightness can power saving, and your mobile phone, the evening is turned off when not in use, can reduce the number of charging." Grandpa all smiles said: "you not the kui is a great granddaughter, I know at an early age saving, these I also thought, I will do." I am pleased to jump three feet high, grandpa is the "low carbon" crowd.

I cant ask someone to low carbon, oneself also want to do, I will immediately take action. Do drink plain boiled water more, drink less; Less with paper towel to wipe hands; Choose a day every week dont eat meat. Less to buy school supplies extra clothes and life; Book with the positive, dont use correction fluid and tape.

I hope everyone a low-carbon habit, low-carbon awareness, to achieve low carbon pacesetter.

现在，提倡低碳生活，身为小学生的我，虽然不能给地球做出多大的贡献，但在低碳生活这一方面，我也努力做好我能做的小事。

现在我正好放假在家里，就先向家里人“开刀”吧!外婆每天做饭不太讲究节约，我说：“外婆，现在提倡”低碳生活“，如果你焖米饭时，把大米浸泡20分钟后再煮，可缩短时间;做饭时要用中火;烧东西时要擦干锅，不易煮烂煮烂的食品要用高压锅，都有助于节省燃气。还有，洗菜淘米的水可以用来浇花，洗衣服的水可以用来拖地或者冲厕所。”外婆吃惊的说：“是吗?!外婆老了不知道，就照你说的办吧!”

爸爸睡觉前总要玩会儿电脑，我就趁机说：爸爸，现在提倡“低碳生活”，玩电脑不仅浪费电，对眼睛也不好，你知道吗，有好多国家就是因为有许多肆无忌惮浪费电的人，所以他们经常断电，白天还好，晚上就得打着灯了!爸爸你看他们多可怜啊，你还是早早的睡觉吧!爸爸高兴地说：“我女儿长大了，比我知道的还多，说的有道理，我试试看，也加入你的”低碳一族“。我心里喜滋滋的。

到了晚上，外公打开了电视，声音调的十分大。我说：“外公，现在人们都在不断提高低碳意识，声音小，亮度低都可以节电，还有你的手机，晚上不用时就关机，可以减少充电的次数。”外公满脸笑容的说：“你不愧是我的好外孙女，从小就知道节约，这些我还没想到呢，我一定照办。”我高兴地一蹦三尺高，外公也是“低碳一族”了。

我不能光要求别人低碳，自己也要做到，我要马上行动起来。做到多喝白开水，少喝饮料;少用纸巾擦手;每周选一天不吃肉;少买多余的衣服以及生活学习用品;本子反正面都用，不用修正液、修正带。

希望大家都养成低碳习惯，提高低碳意识，争当低碳标兵。