英语中考作文阅卷评分标准汇总20篇

一、素材

言语类

(一)名人名言

1.大地给予所有的人是物质的精华，而最后，它从人们那里得到的回赠却是这些物质的垃圾。——惠特曼

2.地球所提供的足以满足每个人的需要，但不足以填满每个人的欲望。——甘地

3.大自然是善良的慈母，同时也是冷酷的屠夫。——雨果

4.人生欲求安全，当有五要：一要清洁空气;二要澄清饮水;三要流通沟渠;四要扫洒房屋;五要日光充足。——南丁格尔

5.我们不要陶醉于我们对自然界的胜利，对于每一次这样的胜利，自然界都报复了我们。——恩格斯

6.我们违背大自然的结果是，我们破坏了自然景观的美，自然动态的美和天籁的美。——诺曼?卡曾斯

7.人法地、地法天、天法德、道法自然。——老子

8.久在樊笼里、复得返自然。——陶渊明

9.俯仰终宇宙、不乐复何如。——陶渊明

10.山中何所有?岑上多白云只可自怡悦、不堪持寄君“诏问山中何所有”，赋诗以答。——陶弘景

11.仓满鼠雀喜、草尽兔狐愁。——包拯

12.只有服从大自然，才能战胜大自然。——达尔文

13.水光山色与人亲，说不尽，无穷好。——李清照

14.人们常常将自己周围的环境当作一种免费的商品，任意地糟蹋而不知加以珍惜.——甘哈曼

15.大自然的每一个领域都是美妙绝伦的。——亚里士多德

16.没有一个清洁美好的环境，再优裕的生活条件也无意义。——曲格平

17.自然不掺杂半丝人情。谁抵抗它，谁就被一脚踢开，谁顺从它，谁就承受其恩典。——长冈半太郎

18.人只有按照自然所启示的经验来生活。——叔本华

19.大自然斯不会欺骗我们，欺骗我们的往往是我们自己。——卢梭

20.一切都是一个行列，宇宙便是用完美的步伐前进的一个行列。——惠特曼

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(二)妙语集锦

21.人类对自然生态的道德期望必须与其对自然生态的道德责任相联系，人类与自然生态之间必须建立一种等价交换机制，以此限制、消除人类对自然生态不负责任的邪恶行为和自利欲望的膨胀，匡正天人之间的严重不和谐关系。

——张立文

22.可持续发展是既满足当代人的需要，又不对后代满足其需要的能力构成危害的发展。

——世界环境与发展委员会对”可持续发展”的定义

23.人类将会杀害大地母亲，抑或将使她得到拯救?如果滥用日益增长的技术力量，人类将置大地母于死地;如果克服了那导致自我毁灭的放肆的贪欲，人类则能够使她重返青春，而人类的贪欲正在使伟大母亲的生命之果——包括人类在内的一切生命造物付出代价。——汤因比：《人类与大地母亲》

24.除了足迹，我们什么也别留下;除了摄影，我们什么也别带走为了子孙后代，请留下一片净土。

——台湾森林公园环保广告

25.淡水用完——南北极取，冰山用完——过滤海水，海水用完——?——公益广告

26.人类是花的“根”，环境是未绽的“花苞”，“根”努力就能开出美丽的花朵，反之只有枯竭、谢落。

——哲学家如是言

27.鲁迅：不在污染中爆发，就在污染中死亡。

裴多芬：环境诚可贵，治理价更高，若为利润故，二者皆可抛。

——互联网上网友戏改名人言论以讽刺当今环境现状

28.罗贯中：滚滚长江东逝水，“碱”花淘尽英雄，污染依旧在，不见夕阳红。

——叶檀《关于环境问题的几点思考》的观感

事例类

数据

失落的“伊甸园”——两河流域文明的毁灭

由于土地盐碱化而引起古文明衰亡的最早案例

位于两河流域的美索不达米亚平原，是人类文明最早的发源地之一。在这片肥沃的土地上，古代世界最伟大的三个文明曾经在这里繁荣昌盛。苏美尔、亚述、阿卡德和巴比伦人相继在公元前4000至前2000年间，在这里创造了高度发达的城市文明，令世人叹为观止。然而，这些古文明的发祥地如今却是盐碱泛滥、流沙纵横的不毛之地。

就这个问题，美国亚述学家雅可布生对西亚出土楔形文字史料做过一次深入调查。他发现美索不达米亚的土壤盐碱化由来已久，始于公元前2400年的拉格什城邦，不久就发展到幼发拉底河，1000年后盐碱化进一步扩展到古巴比伦。20世纪50年代，美国芝加哥大学教授布雷伍德在伊拉克的耶莫组织过一次由地质、气象、动物和植物学家共同参加的大规模跨学科考古发掘，结果简直令人难以置信。布雷伍德在《伊拉克库尔德史前调查》中这样写道：

人类以及他们从事的农业和牧业，总的来说起一种破坏作用，尽管无人想有意去破坏……过去曾是丛林的整个平原和切姆查玛克河谷的山麓地区，如今连灌木丛都不存在了。栎树灌木丛在还未长到6英寸之前就被砍伐。由于树林和灌木树的消失以及草地每年春季全被吃光，只剩下草根，土壤大量流失，填入河流……

[点拨]世界上环境问题日趋严重和恶化，即对地球造成了重大的伤害，也对我们的生存形成了严重的威胁。

[适用话题]素材可用于“恶化”或“保护”“报复”一类的话题。

历史事件

北美“死湖”事件

美国东北部和加拿大东南部是西半球工业最发达的地区，每年向大气中排放二氧化硫2500多万吨。其中约有380万吨由美国飘到加拿大，100多万吨由加拿大飘到美国。七十年代开始，这些地区出现了大面积酸雨区，酸雨比藩茄汁还要酸，多个湖泊池塘漂浮死鱼，湖滨树木枯萎。

[点拨]我们在现代化建设的进程中，以牺牲环境为代价，只是为了满足一时的需求。而大自然却因此遭受到了不可弥补的创伤。

[适用话题]素材可用“破坏”或“报复”类话题。

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库巴唐”死亡谷”事件

巴西圣保罗以南60公里的库巴唐市，二十世纪八十年代以“死亡之谷“知名于世。该市位于山谷之中，六十年代引进炼油、石化、炼铁等外资企业300多家，人口剧增至15万，成为圣保罗的工业卫星城。企业主只顾赚钱，随意排放废气废水，谷地浓烟弥漫、臭水横流，有20%的人得了呼吸道过敏症，医院挤满了接受吸氧治疗的儿童和老人，使2万多贫民窟居民严重受害。

卡迪兹号油轮事件

1978年3月16日，美国22万吨的超级油轮“亚莫克?卡迪兹号”，满载伊朗原油向荷兰鹿特丹驶去，航行至法国布列塔尼海岸触礁沉没，漏出原油22.4万吨，污染了350公里长的海岸带。仅牡蛎就死掉9000多吨，海鸟死亡2万多吨。海事本身损失1亿多美元，污染的损失及治理费用却达5亿多美元，而给被污染区域的海洋生态环境造成的损失更是难以估量。

[点拨]人类的短视使得环境日益恶化，而人类也因此受到了相应的报应。急功近利的做法反而欲速则不达。

[适用话题]此素材可用于“和谐相处”或“可持续发展”类话题。

Recently,haze weather has become a daily one right here in large part of China.People are forced to wear the mask to avoid breathing poisonous air.So it is necessary to find out the reason why leads to that and work out the resolution.If we trace the cause for haze weather ,the main points are as follows ,first,china s air quality standards are rather lax and evaluation factors are limited,so you will see that current air appraisal system has defects.Second,some people just go for economic interests instead of turning out products according to relevant law and regulations.They tend to use obsolete equipment in which they are high likely to emit a great deal of wasted air.

Third,across our society ,relevant protection awareness has not built up so that people havent formed a habit of using green product and saving energy as much as possible.Just for the sake of convience to go out,people rely more and more on travelling and working by car while car is the main cause for the haze weather

To settle this problem,a series of meaures should be taken as follows.First ,we should strengthen air monitor to lower the levels of small particulate pollutants.Second,we should enact more strict laws and regulations and keep perfecting our current law on environmental protection to regulate people s daily action and the industrial production and punish those factories that ignore the protection and keep emitting dangerous material that cause haze.

Third,we should develop green and energy-saving energy to lower the emission of haze and improve air quality.As far as i am concerned ,if we work together to be able to do such measures ,our environment will getting better and better and haze weather will vanish completely.

my secret dream

Everyone has his or her own secret dream. I wonder why I am gonna tell you my secret dream. No way! Heheh... I am gonna make up one secret dream for you. Any way, you will not copy everything I have written down. I am sure that you will get good ideas about writing it up.

When I was much younger, I had some secret dreams. One of mine was about becoming a super hero to save the world. Hehe. I hope it doesnt sound funny to you. Another secret dream of mine was about being the most handsome and intelligent man in the world.

Yeh, I know that sounds unrealistic. After all, that was a bubble dream only. I had a lot more secret dreams when I was a little boy. Some of them came true!

[中考英语优秀作文：我的秘密梦想

Earth’s temperature begins with the Sun. Roughly 30 percent of incoming sunlight is reflected back into space by bright surfaces like clouds and ice. Of the remaining 70 percent, most is absorbed by the land and ocean, and the rest is absorbed by the atmosphere. The absorbed solar energy heats our planet.

地球的温度开始太阳。大约百分之30的太阳光被反射回太空的光明面与云冰。在余下的百分之70，多数是由陆地和海洋吸收，其余的被大气层吸收。吸收太阳能加热我们的星球。

As the rocks, the air, and the seas warm, they radiate “heat” energy (thermal infrared radiation). From the surface, this energy travels into the atmosphere where much of it is absorbed by water vapor and long-lived greenhouse gases such as carbon dioxide and methane.

当岩石，空气，和温暖的海洋，他们辐射热能源(热辐射)。从表面上看，这种能量进入大气层，大部分是由水蒸气和长寿命的温室气体如二氧化碳和甲烷的吸收。

When they absorb the energy radiating from Earth’s surface, microscopic water or greenhouse gas molecules turn into tiny heaters— like the bricks in a fireplace, they radiate heat even after the fire goes out. They radiate in all directions. The energy that radiates back toward Earth heats both the lower atmosphere and the surface, enhancing the heating they get from direct sunlight.

当他们吸收辐射能量从地球表面，微观水或温室气体分子变成小加热器-就像在壁炉的砖，他们散发热量，即使在火熄灭。他们在所有方向辐射。能量辐射回地球加热低层大气和表面，增强他们从阳光直射加热。

This absorption and radiation of heat by the atmosphere—the natural greenhouse effect—is beneficial for life on Earth. If there were no greenhouse effect, the Earth’s average surface temperature would be a very chilly -18°C (0°F) instead of the comfortable 15°C (59°F) that it is today.

这种吸收和辐射热的气氛自然温室效应有利于地球上的生命。如果没有温室效应，地球表面的平均温度将是一个非常寒冷的18°C(0°F)而不是舒适的15°C(59°F)，它是今天。

At our school , we have to wear uniforms every day. The problem is that all my classmates think the uniforms are ugly. We think young people should look smart and so we would like to wear our own clo

At our school , we have to wear uniforms every day. The problem is that all my classmates think the uniforms are ugly. We think young people should look smart and so we would like to wear our own clothes. Our teachers believe that if we did that. We would concentrate more on our clothes than our studies.We disagree. We should feel more comfortable and thate is good for studying. If we can’t do that, we should be allowed to design our own uniforms. We also think everyone should be different from others. That would be a good way to keep both teachers and students happy.

[中考英语作文欣赏：My view on school uniform

导语：空气污染是当今世界的主要问题之一。下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

Air pollution is one of the major problems of the modern world. A great deal of energy is needed to run the factories of modern industrial nations.

Automobile， trains， planes and busses need energy， too. Nearly all of this energy is produced by burning fuels. The burning produces wastes， some of which remain in the air， causing air pollution.

Scientists are finding ways to stop air pollution especially in big industrial areas and densely-populated cities.

They are studying new ways of generating electricity that may be less damaging to the environment. In the meantime， many power plants are being modernized to give off less polluted material.

Also， engineers try to design and locate new power plants to do minimum damage to the environment. However， it may be that we still have a long way to go before we have a "clean" world. Nearly all of the countries are trying hard to prevent and control air pollution.

There indeed seems to be no end to tasks that environmentalists will be required to do. People will continually find new ways to control pollution.

【参考译文】

空气污染是当今世界的主要问题之一。在现代化工业国家中，办工厂需要大量的能量。

汽车、火车、飞机和公共汽车需要能量，太。几乎所有这些能量都是由燃烧的燃料产生的。燃烧产生的废物，其中一些留在空气中，造成空气污染。

科学家们正在寻找办法来阻止空气污染，尤其是在大工业区和人口稠密的城市。

他们正在研究新的发电方式，这种方法对环境的破坏性更小。与此同时，许多发电厂正在现代化，以减少污染的物质。

同样，工程师们也正在努力设计新的发电厂，确定新的建厂地点，把对环境的危害减少到最低限度。然而，在我们拥有一个“干净”的世界之前，我们还有很长的路要走。几乎所有的国家都在努力防止和控制空气污染。

环境保护主义者的任务似乎没有尽头。人们会不断找到控制污染的新方法。

My three middle school life is coming to an end.

In these past three years, we all have experienced a lot.

We have many good friends who studied and played together.

Our respectable teachers has taught us so many things that how to study, how to deal with questions, how to get along with others. Thanks for my teachers education for me.

Now, Im going to try my best to complete my lessons and use the freetime to do meaningful things.

I think I will miss you who are our friends and teachers.

我三年的初中生活即将结束。

在过去的三年里，我们都经历了许多。

我们有许多一起学习玩耍的朋友。

我们尊敬的老师教会我们很多东西，如何学习、如何处理问题、怎么与人相处。多些我的老师对我的教育。

现在，我将会尽我所能完成我的学业，利用课余时间去做有意义的事情。

我想我将会想你们的我的朋友、我的老师!

题目：你的好朋友某某沉迷于电脑游戏中，影响了学习。作为他的好朋友，你打算怎么帮他呢?请用下面所给的提示词写一篇不少于80字的短文。字迹工整，语言流畅。

提示词：give up concentrate on be (become)interested in

范文：

Li Hua spent too much time playing computer games and he fell behind others. As a good friend of his, I must do something to help him.

Firstly, I think it’s very important for him to learn lessons well. He should spend most of his time on his study instead of computer games. Secondly, I must tell him that playing computer games too much is bad for his health, especially for his eyes. So he must give it up. I can play more sports with him after school. Maybe he will become more interested in sports than computer games. And then Ill ask him to concentrate more on his study. Of course, I will try my best to help him with all his subjects. I think I can do it in many fun ways and let him find much fun in studying. At the same time, Ill ask both his parents and our teachers to help him, too. If I try these, Im sure he will make great progress soon.

饮食安全是个不变的话题，YJBYS为大家准备的这篇范文绝对值得大家收藏，请继续关注我们英语作文栏目。

假如你是一所国际学校校办英文杂志的学生编辑.你看了下面这封信后，也想写一篇关于该信的读后感，内容要点包括：你对此事件的看法;解释你的理由并提出你的建议;向受害者表达尽快康复的祝愿.

Today, I received the readers letter. I was shocked at it.Personally speaking, I think we should pay more attention to the food safety.The government must make some necessary laws. Whats more, some businessmenshouldnt be only interested in making money. They must care about peopleshealth. Wed better not eat anything in dirty places though some food isdelicious, because eating unhealthy food does harm to our health.

Finally, I hope the family in the accident will getbetter soon.

饮食安全是指对人体健康不造成任何急性、亚急性或者慢性危害。下面是语文迷为大家整理的英语作文范文，希望对你有帮助。

假如你是一所国际学校校办英文杂志的学生编辑。你看了下面这封信后，也想写一篇关于该信的读后感，内容要点包括：你对此事件的看法;解释你的理由并提出你的建议;向受害者表达尽快康复的祝愿。

★ 范文1

Today, I received the readers letter. I was shocked at it. Personally speaking, I think we should pay more attention to the food safety. The government must make some necessary laws. Whats more, some businessmen shouldnt be only interested in making money. They must care about peoples health. Wed better not eat anything in dirty places though some food is delicious, because eating unhealthy food does harm to our health。

Finally, I hope the family in the accident will get better soon。

★ 范文2

From this incident,we can see that there are still more things to be done.Firstly,the government needs everything possible to ensure the quality of products,particularly the safety of food as this concerns everyones life.Secondly,as for the producers,it is very important for them to be morally honest.They should never try to pursue profit or economic growth at the expense of health and life of people.Thirdly,we consumers must attach importance to the things we eat and develop an awareness of how to protect our legal rights if cheated.Only in this way will we be able to build a more secure and harmonious society.

Changes in Shanghai

1 300年前的上海

2 上海的今天(东方明珠、金茂大厦)

3 上海的明天(2010年的世博会)

参考作文

Shanghai was a small town three hundred years ago. There were only a few thousand people living here. Many of them were fishermen and farmers.

300年前，上海只是个小镇，只有几千人居住在这里，其中很多人是渔民和农民。

Today, Shanghai is becoming an international city. Many tall building have been built. Some bridges have been put up over the Huangpu River. More and more foreigners come to Shanghai for a visit every day.

今天，上海已变成一座国际大都市，并建成了很多高楼大厦。黄浦江上架起了很多桥梁。每天都有越来越多的外国人前来旅游。

Shanghai has already won the bid for holding the World Expo 2010. I think the environment will be better and better and the city will be more and more beautiful.

上海已经取得了2010年世博会的举办权，我相信上海的环境会越来越好，并且越来越美丽。

点评：虽然2010年世博会已经结束，但关于城市发展的话题依然热烈，除了上海，像广州、北京、深圳等大城市也有可能是考试的热点。

三 —六年级作文评分标准

1、内容 结构 语言 卷面

一 类 文：(100～90分)

内容：主题明确、内容具体、感情真实、符合作文要求

结构：结构严谨、条理清晰、分段表述

语言：语言流畅、用语准确、形象生动、不写错别字

卷面：卷面整洁、书写工整

二 类 文(80—89分) 内容：题较明确、内容具体、感情真实、符合作文要求

结构：结构完整、层次较分明、分段表述

语言：语言较通顺、用语较准确、形象较生动、不写错别字

卷面：卷面整洁、书写规范

三 类 文 (70—79分)

内容：主题基本明确、内容比较具体、有感情表达、偏离作文要求

结构：结构较合理、层次欠清楚、分段表述

语言：语言较通顺、用语较准确、有形象刻画、少许错别字

卷面：卷面较整洁、书写较规范

四 类 文(60—69分)

内容：主题基本明确、内容不够具体、离题

结构：层次较清楚、结构较乱

语言：语言基本通顺，有少量语病

卷面：卷面较整洁、书写较规范

五 类 文(60分以下)

内容：中心不明确、内容不具体、偏离题意

结构：条理不清、结构混乱

语言：语句不通顺

卷面：卷面杂乱、字迹不清

注：1)没有标题扣5分。

(2)满分100，酌情按分值打分。

(3)出现多篇作文雷同的，只判其中一篇实分，其它降两等计。

(4)分每本试卷在拆卷前相关负责人要进行抽查，必要时可重评。

(5)特色加分(3分)。达到下列三项之一者可加1—3分。

① 感情真挚，有自己的深切感悟。

② 构思或选材新颖，见解独特，有个性。

③ 语言生动，有文采。

根据中英文提示，与一篇日记，记叙一次(西塞山)郊游。(短文的开头已经给出。)

要求：

1.短文应包括汉语和英语提示内容。

2.语句通顺，意思连贯。

3.书写工整，卷面整洁，标点符号正确。

4.字数不少于80个英语单词。

Sunday, May 1st

I got to school very early. Our class took a special bus to Xisai Mount. We got to the foot of the mount at 8:30.We began climbing the mount soon. On our way the air was so fresh and the scenery was so beautiful. Everybody was talking and laughing.We reached the top at about 10:00. The Yangtze River appeared in the north, and over the river there was a great bridge. We felt very relaxed. Seeing some birds flying in the sky, I suddenly remembered a popular poem of Tang dynasty. " Birds are flying in front of Xisai Mount ,…". I kept feeling proud of our city.

1)结构2)内容要点 3)语言(词组搭配、句型、句式变化、过渡词)看结构和内容要点定分数档，看语言给成绩。这是中考英语阅卷的潜规则。 三段四步法——中考英语满分杀手锏 知己知彼，方能百战不殆，既然中考阅卷流程和内部标准已经明朗化，相对的策略也就顺利成章的形成了。现在和大家分享，笔者教学和阅卷过程中总结创立的写作满分秘诀。

1 “三段”(三个段落)——针对的阅卷老师先看文章结构和内容要点，让阅卷老师不得不给你定位一类文。 中高考情景是作文，无论是那种文体，都可以用三段法来表示。这个方法的起源是来自美国的“高考”SAT考试，(SAT是美国或它国学生想要申请美国大学必须参加的考试，故被叫过美国的高考)。 我们管这样的文章叫做HamburgerWriting(汉堡写作)

顾名思义，就是无论是记叙文、还是议论文、或者08年中考以及09一模西城的夹叙夹议文章，都可以通用。简单解释如下：

【写作要求】

假设你叫李华，你们市将要举行以“How to Eat in a Healthy Way”为题的演讲比赛，请你准备写一篇演讲稿，内容包括：

1.说明此次演讲的主题(how to eat in a healthy way)。

2.我们应该少吃、不吃及多吃的食物有哪些，并说明原因。

3.描述自己的健康饮食习惯，并举例说明。

4.希望大家都有个好的饮食习惯。

作文要求：

1.不能照抄原文;不得在作文中出现学校真实的名称和学生的真实姓名。

2.语句连贯，词数80个左右。

【范文】

How to Eat in a Healthy Way

Hello, everybody. Im Li Hua.Today my topic is how to eat in a healthy way.

Firstly, we should never eat fried food or foods with lots of sugar because they are not good for health.Secondly, try to eat more vegetables and fruit.Because they can make us become much healthier.

My eating habits are good.For example, I often eat healthy foods, like wholemeal bread, eggs, vegetables and milk for breakfast and rice, noodles, and vegetables for dinner.

I hope everyone can eat in a healthy way.

写作该部分由A、B两节组成，主要考查考生的书面表达能力。共30分。 A节：

考生根据所给情景写出约100词(标点符号不计算在内)的应用性短文，包括私人和公务信函、备忘录、报告等。

考生在答题卡2上作答。共10分。

B节：考生根据提示信息写出一篇160~200词的短文(标点符号不计算在内)。提示信息的形式有主题句、写作提纲、规定情景、图、表等。考生在答题卡2上作答。共20分。 *硕士研究生入学考试将英译汉试题作为阅读理解的一部分，其目的是测试考生根据上下文准确理解概念或复杂结构并用汉语正确予以表达的能力。

20～17分：内容切题，包括提纲的全部要点;表达清楚，文字连贯;句式有变化，句子结构和用词正确。文章长度符合要求。

16～13分：内容切题，包括提纲的全部要点;表达比较清楚，文字基本连贯;句式有一定变化，句子结构和用词无重大错误。文章长度符合要求。

12～10分：内容切题，基本包括提纲的要点;表达基本清楚;句子结构和用词有少量错误。文章长度符合要求。

9～5分：内容基本切题，基本包括提纲的要点;语句可以理解，但有较多的句子结构和用词错误。文章长度基本符合要求。

4～1分：基本按题写作，但只有少数句子可以理解。

假设你是李华，现就读于某寄宿制中学。你的室友王明经常违反寝室(dormitory)规定，如不整理床铺，休息时间大声拨打电话，未经许可(permission)动用他人物品，离开寝室不关灯等。为了提醒他改正不良习惯，做个文明室友，你决定写一封电子邮件给他。

要求：(1)包含以上所有要点，可适当增加细节，使行文连贯;

(2)字数：60-80词(信得开头和结尾已给出，不介入总词数);

(3)信中不得出现你的真实姓名，学校名和地名。

From：lihua2758 sina com

To: wangming63 sohu com

Subject: To be a great roommate

Dear Wang Ming,

Im writing to kindly remind you of the dormitory rules.

………

Best wishes,

LiHua

写一封电子邮件英语作文范文：

Dear Wang Ming,

Im writing to kindly remind you of the dormitory rules. As we live in the same room, we are like families thus we should love each other and respect each other. Whats more, we should make our room clean and tidy. Therefore, I hope you can read the following rules and obey them. Rule No.1 When you get up in the morning, remember to make the bed. Rule No.2 Dont make phone calls when we are sleeping. Rule No.3 Dont use others things without permission. Rule No.4 Turn off the lights before you leave the room. I hope all of us can obey these rules and make our room more and more comfortable.

Best wishes,

LiHua

文章摘要：1. 遇见你的那一刻，世界轰然倒塌；两人抬起头有点不相信的盯着我。英语如何写出中考高分作文儿子出院那天，已经夕阳西下了，他笑了笑对儿子说：乖啊，不怕，有爸爸呢，我还有办法。关于事业:没有什么高低贵贱之分,人人为我我为人人,只要合法,能干什么就干什么,口袋没钱最丢人,死要面子活受罪的事千万别干.！

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so...that，so，little by little，when，so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to，became interested in，come true......等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest ...

趁现在，没有孩子，没有牵绊，我也不贪图他什么，该是离婚最好的时机吧；他还能自己走路，朋友却已经站不起来了。英语如何写出中考高分作文12、诚实是上策。他们用钱去做坏事!多么痛的领悟，你曾是我的全部，只愿你挣脱情的枷锁 ，爱的束缚，任意追逐，别再为爱受苦。最后只能采取自愿加班的方式。

类别

内容A.内容B.语言C.篇章评分细则

一类卷

切合题意思想健康中心突出内容充实感情真切语言顺畅没有语病结构完整条理清楚

①具备ABC三项条件的，评一类下(43-45分)。

②立意深、构思巧、语言生动形象的，评满分;具备其中两项条件的，评一类上(48-49分);具备其中一项条件的，评一类中(46-47分)。

二类卷(35-42分)

切合题意思想健康中心明确内容具体感情真实语言通顺偶有语病结构完整

条理较清楚以38分为基准分，适当浮动：

①具备B项和另一项条件，其余一项达到三类卷标准的，获得基准分;

②具备ABC三项条件的，酌情加分;或材料新鲜，或立意新颖，或结构新巧，可评为二类上;

③具备B项条件，而另两项只达到三类卷标准的，酌情减分。

三类卷(27-34分)

基本合题意中心尚明确内容尚具体感受尚真实语言尚通顺语病不多条理尚清楚能分段

以30分为基准分，适当浮动：

①基本具备ABC三项条件的，获得基准分;,

②其中B项较好的，酌情加分;

③另有某些缺点的，酌情减分。

四类卷(18-26分)

偏离题意中心欠明确内容不具体语言不通顺语病较多条理不清楚

以22分为基准分，适当浮动：

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为四类卷，获得基准分;

②另两项较好的，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

五类卷(0-17分)

文不对题不知所云语病严重文理不通结构混乱不能完篇

以13分为基准分，适当浮动:

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为五类卷，获得基准分;②其他两项尚好，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

说明：

1.漏写题目扣1分。2.错别字每3个扣1分，重现不计，最多扣2分。3.字迹工整的加1─2分;字迹潦草，难以辨认的酌情扣1—3分。4.字数不足550字，每少50字扣1分;不足400字，降一等。5.凡认为有严重错误的答卷，评卷领导小组研究处理。

一般来说，文章的开头应尽量做到“开门见山”，即要用简单明了的语言引出文章的话题，使人一开始就能了解文章要说明的内容。

一. 开头经典句型

1、对于叙事类的文章，可以在开头把人物、时间、事件和环境交代清楚。

如“A Trip to Huangshan(黄山之旅)”的开头可以是：Last month, my family went to Huangshan by train. It took us ten hours to get there. What a long and tiring journey! We were tired but the beautiful scenery excited us.

2、对于论述性的文章，可以在开头处先阐明自己的观点，接着展开进一步的论述。

如“The Time and the Money (时间和金钱)” 的开头可以是：Most people say that money is more important than time. But I dont think so. First, when money is used up, you can earn it back， but……

3、在描述事件或游记类的文章中，采用回忆性的开头往往更能吸引人的眼球。这种类型的开头中通常含有描述自己心情或情绪的词汇，如never forget(永远无法忘记)、 remember (记得)、unforgettable(难以忘怀的)、 exciting(令人激动的)、surprising(令人惊讶的)、sad (难过的)……

如“A Trip to Huangshan(黄山之旅)”的开头还可以这样写：I will never forget my first trip to Huangshan. 或It was really an unforgettable experience I had.

4、在叙事类或论述性的文章中，都可采用疑问型开头，这样既可以吸引阅卷者的注意又容易抓住中心。

如“Planting Trees(种树)”的开头可以是：Have you ever planted trees? Dont you think planting trees is ……

再如“Traveling Abroad(出国之旅)”的开头可以是：If you have an opportunity to travel abroad, why not consider Singapore?

5、有的文章，特别是叙事类的文章中，可以采用倒叙的写作手法，先写出事件的结果，再陈述过程。

如“Catching Thieves (捉贼)”的开头可以这样写：I lay in bed in the hospital. I smiled at my friends even though my legs hurt. Do you want to know what happened to me? Let me tell you. Its a ... story.

二、结尾经典句型

1、随着文章的结束，文章自然而然地结尾。

如“Helping the Policeman (帮助警察)”的结尾可以是：The two children were praised by the police and they felt happy.

再如“The Tortoise and the Hare(龟兔赛跑)” 的结尾可以是：When the hare got to the tree, the tortoise had already been there。

2、升华主题在文章的结尾可以用含义较深的话点明主题，深化主题，起到“画龙点睛”的效果。

如“I Love My Hometown(我爱家乡)”的结尾可以是：I love my hometown, and I am proud of it.

3、反问结尾，引起深思

这种方式的结尾虽然形式是问句，但意义却是肯定的，而且具有一定的强调作用，可引起他人的深思。

如 “Learning English can give us a lot of pleasure (学英语能为我们带来许多乐趣)” 的结尾可以是：If we learn English well, we can …Dont you think learning English is great fun?

4、表达祝愿，阐述愿望

这种方式的结尾常出现在书信或演讲稿的文体中，表示对他人的祝福或对将来的展望等。

如“A Letter to the Farmers(给农民们的一封信)”的结尾可以是：I hope the farmers life will be better and better.

另外，书信的结尾常有以下形式的祝福语：Best wishes; I wish you a merry Christmas and a happy new year; I wish you have a good time等。

最近几年的中考英语当中，很多省市已经摆脱了单一作文模式，采用一大一小两个作文相结合的模式。例如，去年辽宁沈阳中考英语作文就是一个小作文，应用文-写假条，加上一个大作文，汉语提示作文构成。今年，北京中考英语作文也将是两个，一个看图作文在加上一个提示作文构成。这一讲，我们先来学习一下看图作文的写法。

看图作文要求考生按照所给图画，通过合理的联想将一组画面的内容正确地表达出来。看图作文与其他类型作文的不同之处在于，它除了要求考生有英语语言表达能力，还要求考生有观察能力、分析能力和想象能力。

写好看图作文应注意的事项1、结合文字提示，正确理解图意。一般情况下，看图作文在提供图画的同时也附带有简要的文字提示，我们可以利用文字提示去正确地理解图意，得到要点。切忌孤立地看图而忽视文字提示。

写作从图画的细节出发。所谓细节，就是指图画中的人物、事件、地点、环境、时间、动作等。依据图画细节，就可以把图画的内容用英语具体而生动地表达出来了。

(三)例题分析(例题)

同学们，看到下面的四幅图片及相应的报道后，你感到最担忧的是哪两种情形?请简述你担忧的理由并提出建议或希望。

要求：

⒈ 从所给素材中任选两种情形进行阐述，不可多选或少选。

⒉ 条理清楚，意思连贯，语句通顺，标点正确;

⒊ 词数 80 ～ 100。

参考词汇： 建议 suggest v. suggestion n.

气体 gas n. 污染 pollution n.

THE POLLUTIONS

① One third of the worlds people dont have enough clean water.

② More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

③ People are disturbed quite often by kinds of noises.

④ Every person in our city makes about 1.8 kilos of rubbish every day.

这道看图作文题，主题和图片连接得不是很紧密。从考查的形式上来说，虽是看图，实质上却属于提示性的作文。这个作文应该结合个人的观点，选择的余地还是很大的。做这个题应该注意几个方面：

1、认真读题。注意，题目虽然给了四幅图，但是却只要求写其中的两个就行。

2、题意要求的是阐述个人的观点-最担忧的两种情形。而不是对图片进行描述。

3、结合所给的提示。提示中，对每种污染都进行了阐述，考生可以这些描述进行写作。

4、注意字数，语法，拼写等，避免错误。

下面是两个例文，大家可以参考一下。

One possible version:

The environment is becoming worse and worse. There are many kinds of pollution I worry about. The most serious two are water pollution and air pollution, because people cant live healthily with dirty water and polluted air, nor can animals. More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

I think factories should not pour dirty water into the river directly or produce more waste gas. Wed better go on foot or by like instead of by car, because more cars mean more waste gas. We should make our world more and more beautiful.

Another possible version:

The first fact I worry about is noise pollution. People cant sleep well if there is too much noise. Thats why so many people prefer to live in the countryside rather than live in the noisy city. I suggest all the factories and cars shouldnt make terrible noises. If they make terrible noise that isnt allowed, they will be fined, and we can also produce the cars which cant make terrible noise.

The other pollution is rubbish pollution. If everyone makes so much rubbish, one day we may live in a world filled with rubbish. Some people throw the waste paper about. I suggest rubbish should be put into different kinds of dustbins or paper bags.

下面，我们来看看这道题的评分标准。一般来说，各地的评分标准都和下面的这个标准差不多。这个最高的标准，实际上也就是我们写作的目标。

评分标准：

1. 内容完整，语句流畅，无语法错误，书写规范，给9-10分;

2. 内容较完整，语句较流畅，基本无语法错误，书写较规范，给6-8分;

3. 内容不完整，语句欠流畅，语法错误较多，书写较规范，给3-5分;

4. 只写出个别要点，语法错误较多，书写欠规范，只有个别句子可读或不知所云，给0-2分。

看图作文不可小视。希望大家掌握答好这种题型的要点，并积累词汇。