英语中考作文阅卷评分标准(最新20篇)

Now advocate low carbon life, as the primary school, I wont make much contribution to the earth, but in low carbon life that on the one hand, I also try to do things I can do.

Now I just have a holiday at home, will be the first to the family "operation"! Grandmother cooking meals every day dont pay attention to save, I say: "grandma, now advocate low carbon life", if you like rice, cook the rice for 20 minutes and then, can shorten the time, should be used when cooking in the fire; burn something to wipe pan, not easy to boil and boil food with a pressure cooker, and helps save gas. Also, wash dishes of water that clean out rice can be used to water the flowers, wash clothes of water can be used to mop the floor or flush the toilet." Grandmother surprise of say: "is that so?! Grandmother, dont know, just do what you say!"

Dad always play while the computer before you go to sleep, I have the chance to say: dad, advocated "low-carbon life", now playing computer not only a waste of electricity, is not good for your eyes, you know, there are a lot of countries is because there are many people of reckless waste of electricity, so they often power outages, the day was fine, have to have lights in the evening! Dad you look how poor they are, you still go to bed early! Dad said happily: "my daughter grow up, know more than me, has a point, I will try, also join your" low carbon gens ". My heart crossed.

In the evening, grandpa opened the TV, voice is very big. I said: "grandpa, now people are constantly improve low carbon consciousness, the voice is small, low brightness can power saving, and your mobile phone, the evening is turned off when not in use, can reduce the number of charging." Grandpa all smiles said: "you not the kui is a great granddaughter, I know at an early age saving, these I also thought, I will do." I am pleased to jump three feet high, grandpa is the "low carbon" crowd.

I cant ask someone to low carbon, oneself also want to do, I will immediately take action. Do drink plain boiled water more, drink less; Less with paper towel to wipe hands; Choose a day every week dont eat meat. Less to buy school supplies extra clothes and life; Book with the positive, dont use correction fluid and tape.

I hope everyone a low-carbon habit, low-carbon awareness, to achieve low carbon pacesetter.

现在，提倡低碳生活，身为小学生的我，虽然不能给地球做出多大的贡献，但在低碳生活这一方面，我也努力做好我能做的小事。

现在我正好放假在家里，就先向家里人“开刀”吧!外婆每天做饭不太讲究节约，我说：“外婆，现在提倡”低碳生活“，如果你焖米饭时，把大米浸泡20分钟后再煮，可缩短时间;做饭时要用中火;烧东西时要擦干锅，不易煮烂煮烂的食品要用高压锅，都有助于节省燃气。还有，洗菜淘米的水可以用来浇花，洗衣服的水可以用来拖地或者冲厕所。”外婆吃惊的说：“是吗?!外婆老了不知道，就照你说的办吧!”

爸爸睡觉前总要玩会儿电脑，我就趁机说：爸爸，现在提倡“低碳生活”，玩电脑不仅浪费电，对眼睛也不好，你知道吗，有好多国家就是因为有许多肆无忌惮浪费电的人，所以他们经常断电，白天还好，晚上就得打着灯了!爸爸你看他们多可怜啊，你还是早早的睡觉吧!爸爸高兴地说：“我女儿长大了，比我知道的还多，说的有道理，我试试看，也加入你的”低碳一族“。我心里喜滋滋的。

到了晚上，外公打开了电视，声音调的十分大。我说：“外公，现在人们都在不断提高低碳意识，声音小，亮度低都可以节电，还有你的手机，晚上不用时就关机，可以减少充电的次数。”外公满脸笑容的说：“你不愧是我的好外孙女，从小就知道节约，这些我还没想到呢，我一定照办。”我高兴地一蹦三尺高，外公也是“低碳一族”了。

我不能光要求别人低碳，自己也要做到，我要马上行动起来。做到多喝白开水，少喝饮料;少用纸巾擦手;每周选一天不吃肉;少买多余的衣服以及生活学习用品;本子反正面都用，不用修正液、修正带。

希望大家都养成低碳习惯，提高低碳意识，争当低碳标兵。

本次英语命题是八年级备课组命题，以考查基础知识为主，在此基础上考查学生综合运用语言的能力。命题材料贴近学生生活，难度适中。期中听力题，短文首字母填空和书面表达失分较多。我所教两个班级在均分，及格率和优秀率上都比较接近，均分60分左右，八(1)班19个及格、高分9个，八(2)班21个及格、11个高分。

从本次考试所反映的现状来看，今后的教学中应注意：

1、加强听力训练，营造语言环境。课堂上一定要加强对学生的听力训练，坚持用英语组织教学，尽可能利用多种教学资源让学生接触地道的语音、语调，多听英、美人士的录音材料。

2、狠抓基础知识，加强写作训练。书面表达能客观地反映学生英语基础知识掌握情况，并且一直是学生的薄弱环节。

3、继续注重英语阅读教学。阅读理解在我们的各种测试中所占分值越来越大，而且选材也更趋广泛化。因此课堂教学中要侧重“篇章”，强调“含义”，将语篇教学贯穿于课文教学和阅读理解教学中，利用语篇教学扩大学生词汇量，增强语感，丰富文化知识，提高学生分析问题和解决问题的能力。

4、注重兴趣培养，慎防两极分化。从试卷分析中可以看出，两个班级都不同程度地出现了令人担忧的“两极分化”现象。一定要注意激发、培养学生的学习兴趣，关注学生的情感，营造宽松，民主、和谐的教学氛围，保护每个学生的自尊心和学习英语的积极性。只有这样，掉队的学生才会减少，也才可能大面积提高均分。

你们班上周进行了一次“说出你的烦恼”的调查活动，请你根据下面信息用英语写一篇短问。词数80左右。（开头已给出，不计入总词数）

20% 活动少，体质差；50%作业多，学业压力大；30% 父母要求严，相互沟通少；20%---twenty percent of the …

活动少---don’t often do sport；体质差---not health, be weak in health；作业多---have too much homework；学业压力大---feel stressed too much; under too much pressure；父母要求严--- be strict with sb.；相互沟通少--- don’t often talk with sb. ；

根据以下要点提示写一篇60-80词的短文。

1、在学校学习汉语、英语、数学、历史和一些其他学科；

2、我学习很努力，最喜欢的学科是英语，经常找机会练习英语；

3、现在中国已经加入世贸组织wto，并且2008年奥运会将在北京举行，英语正变得越来越重要；

4、我将更加努力学习英语，将来为祖国作贡献。

I study Chinese、English、maths and History and some other subject at school.I study hard. My favorite subject is English.I often find chance to practice English.China has joined WTO and Beijing will host the 2008 Olympics,English is more and more important .I will study hard and be dedicate to my homeland.

I saw an interesting scene from a TV show. A girl and a boy were forced to have the blind date, and they know nothing before they came to the dinner table. They felt embarrassed and after introducing each other, the girl began to speak English with the boy. The parents did not know what they were talking about, but they felt happy to see them communicating. Actually, the boy and the girl said they didn’t want this date and decided to tell their parents the truth, and they felt relieved. Mastering another language provides people more ways to communicate. Sometimes we can use it in the fun way.

我在电视节目上看到有趣的一幕。一个女孩和一个男孩被迫相亲，在他们来到餐桌前根本毫不知情。他们觉得很尴尬，互相介绍后，女孩开始和男孩说英文。父母不知道他们在说什么，但是很开心他们在聊天。其实，他们两个是在说不期待这样的约会，决定把真相告诉父母，他们觉得松了一口气。掌握另一种语言给人们提供了更多的交流方式。有时候我们可以进行有趣的交流。

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、作文案例

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[学生解答A]

My hobby is read books①.When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

②also的位置应放在can之后。

[点评]：档次9-11分。

①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

③有少量错误。

[学生解答B]

My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improvemy writing.I want to be a writer in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。

②真情流露，理由充分。

③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

[点评]：档次13-14分。

①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting theenvironment.They threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to preventstarting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirtywater into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

中考英语作文范文春节见闻

Things Happened in Spring Festival Today, I went shopping with my parents, grandparents, aunts, uncles, and cousins. It was a rare

occasion because we hardly only get together few times in a year as a big family. On the way to the shopping mall, we watched the lion dance. Overall, we had an unforgettable day.

教给大家十个字，搞定初中英语写作，帮你拿到一等文。

问：“哪十字？”

“结构+要点+逻辑+语法+亮点！”

结构：中考最流行的结构就是三段式，深受各地区中考英语写作阅卷老师的喜爱。为什么尼？因为这种结构十分清晰。“观点——要点——总结”让人一目了然。三段式的第一段：简单明了，开门见山，不超过2句话，如，我们想表达小强很强壮，第一段直接说 XQ is extremely strong. 观点明确，这一句足矣。第二段：分2-3点说为什么他强壮。1. 每天吃10顿饭，He has ten meals everyday! 详举吃的是什么。2. 每天运动2小时，He does exercise 2 hours a day! 详举做了什么运动。第三段：经过第二段的论证，可以得出结论。但请注意，不能完全照抄第一段，要有升华。也可以提出希望和建议等。如，How strong and robust XQ is! I hope to be? him one day!

要点：实际上中考英语写作就等于两个字，翻译！因为中考英语写作一般会给出几个要点，要求必须在文章中有所体现。文章写的再好，只要缺少要点就会扣分。所以要点，也就是文章的第二段内容，要做到全，围绕中心。

逻辑：这里的逻辑实际指的就是逻辑词。最常用的就是表示递进的，转折的，总结的逻辑词等。递进：除了first, second, third, finally 等还可以使用高级点的，如first of all(首先)，in addition, whats more, moreover(都是另外的意思)，in a word, all in all（表示总结的）。转折：but, yet, however等。真正有经验的阅卷老师会很注意这些逻辑连接词，因为这些词体现了这个文章的思路。

语法：其他几点都不是硬性的要求，不那样做不能说是错，只能说是不好，但是语法却是硬性的。如，单词的使用，时态等。

亮点：当我们将前八个字都做得很完美的时候也只能得到一个二等文的上。要想得到一等文，最后两个字，亮点至关重要。大家设想如果我们是阅卷老师。有两篇写人美丽的作文摆在我们面前，都是结构清晰的三段式，要点都很全，都用了一些逻辑词，都没有语法错误，但是A篇只用了beautiful,good- looking,B篇却用到了attractive，charming，catching等，我坚信正常人都会给B篇高分的。这些高级一点的词汇，词组，句型便是我们得到一等文的最有力的绝招。所以，以后写英语作文要养成一般词汇限量用的好习惯。

只要把这十个字都搞定了，那么初中英语写作就一定能搞定！

饮食安全是个不变的话题，YJBYS为大家准备的这篇范文绝对值得大家收藏，请继续关注我们英语作文栏目。

假如你是一所国际学校校办英文杂志的学生编辑.你看了下面这封信后，也想写一篇关于该信的读后感，内容要点包括：你对此事件的看法;解释你的理由并提出你的建议;向受害者表达尽快康复的祝愿.

Today, I received the readers letter. I was shocked at it.Personally speaking, I think we should pay more attention to the food safety.The government must make some necessary laws. Whats more, some businessmenshouldnt be only interested in making money. They must care about peopleshealth. Wed better not eat anything in dirty places though some food isdelicious, because eating unhealthy food does harm to our health.

Finally, I hope the family in the accident will getbetter soon.

一篇文章通常由开头、正文内容和结尾三个部分构成。的名师表示，这三个部分的比例安排要合理，只有合理的文章构成，才能拿到令人满意的分数。

文章的开头一般来说应尽量做到开门见山，用简单明白的叙述引出文章的话题，使读者了解文章要谈论什么，一下于引起读者的兴趣。

作文常见的开头形式大致有以下几种：

1、直叙主题开门见山

文章一开头就交待清楚文章的主题是什么。如“How I Spent My Vacation”(我怎样度假)的开头是：

I Spent my last vacation happily.

下面是题为“Honesty”(谈诚实)一文中的开头：

Honesty is one of the best virtues.An honest man is always trusted and respected.On the contrary, one who tells lies is regarded as a "liar",and is looked upon by honest people.

2、交代文章背景开头

在文章的开头，先把人物、事件和环境交待清楚。例如“A Trip to Jinshan” (去金山旅游)的开头：

The day before yesterday my class went on a bus trip to Jinshan. The bus ride there took three hours. The long trip made us very tired, but the sight of the beautiful sea refreshed us.

3、 以回忆来开头

用回忆的方法来开头。例如“A Trip to the Taishan Mountain”(泰山游)的开头是：

I remember my first trip to the Taishan Mountain as if it were yesterday.

4、以概括的方式来开头

即对要在文章中叙述的人或事先作一个概括性的介绍。如“The Happiness of Reading Books”(读书的快乐)的开头：

People often say that gold and silver are the most valuable things in the world. But I say that to read books is more valuable than anything else, because books give us knowledge and knowledge gives us power.

5、铺垫环境来开头

即开头利用自然景物或自然环境引出要介绍的事物。如“An Accident”(一场事故)的开头是:

It was a rainy and windy morning. The sky was gloomy, the temperature was low, and the street was nearly empty. I was on my way back to school. Suddenly, a speeding car came round the corner.

6、表述目的来开头。

在文章的一开头就交待写作目的，如通过文章要表扬谁，批评谁，或说明一个什么问题等。如“Pollution Control”(控制污染)的开头：

In this article I shall draw your attention to the subject of pollution control.

以上就是中考英语作文满分、高分分段的同学常使用的几种开头方式，您也可以依据自身的习惯来挑选适合自己的开头方式。不论用什么开头，目的都只有一个，那就是取得高分。

1、以MY Future plan为题目，100字左右

2、我决定大学毕业后当一 名中学教师，这是我孩提时代的梦想

3、我很喜欢教师在个职业，与中学生在一 起可以使自己永保青春

4、我国师资力量缺乏，主要原因是教师工作辛苦，收入低。想当老师的人很少，所以需要大批有志青年献身教育事业

中考英语作文范文：我未来的打算(My future plan)

I decided to be a middle teacher after college. （大学毕业后我决定当一名中学教师）There are many reasons contribute to this decision.（这有很多理由来说服这个决定）

Firstly, when I was a little/boy, I have been dreaming of being a teacher.（首先，当我还是个小孩时就梦想成为一名教师） It seemed so fascinate to me and I hope I can make my dream come true.（它让我很着迷，我希望我的梦想能够实现）

And, I like so much to be with middle school students. （另外，我是如此的喜欢中学生）Most of the students at that age are full of youthful spirity and I am sure their passion would pass to me.（大多数的学生都在充满年轻激情的阶段，我确信仪仗队他们的热情会传染给我） I will retain all the zest of adolescence.（我将可以使自己永保青春）

The most important reason is that our country needs plenty of teachers.（最重要的原因是我们的国家需要教师） So far, teaching is considered a tough and low-income job in China.（讫今为止，在中国，教书被认为是一项辛苦又收入低的工作） However, if we have not enough teachers, our future will lack of excellent scientist, managers, businessmen, soldiers and even goood workers and farmers.（然而，如果我们没有足够的教师，我们将来会缺乏优秀的科学家，经理，商人，士兵甚至于好的工人和农民） How can our country to be strong and wealthy? （那我们的国家怎样才能强大和富饶起来呢）I wish my country to be a better one. （我祝福我的祖国的明天会更好）I am ready to be a teacher and hope all the persons with lofty ideals may dedicate themselves to this meaningful career.（我准备在为一名教师，我也希望大家带着崇高理想献身于这有意义的工作．

假若今天是香港回归5 周年纪念日，你观看了中央电视台的专题节目，看到了香港回归所发生的巨大变化。

根据下列要求写一篇英语日记，表达自己盼望祖国统一的心愿。

1. 香港、澳门和台湾自古以来就是中国的领土，由于历史的原因被分割。

2. 1997 年 7 月 1 日香港已经回归祖国， 1999 年 12 月 20 日澳门也回到了祖国的怀抱。香港和澳门的明天会更加美好。

3. 台湾是中国领土不可分割（ integral ）的一部分，中国人民，包括生活在台湾的绝大多数人都盼望台湾赶快回归祖国。

注：英语短文的标题已经给出，全文约 100 词。

How I Wish China Would Be United Sooner！

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How I Wish China Would Be United Sooner！

July 1st， 2002 Fine

Hong Kong and Macao are parts of China in history， but they were separated from the motherland for some political reasons. China has been getting richer and stronger since its opening to the outside world. On July 1， 1997， Hong Kong finally returned home. On December 20， 1999， Macao returned home， too. Great changes have taken place in both Hong Kong and Macao. It shows the development and great strength of our country.

Taiwan is an intergral part of China. The Chinese people as well as most of the people from Taiwan are looking forward to the day on which Taiwan will return home. We are sure that day will come sooner or later.

[中考英语关于香港回归几周年的作文

Han Mei is my best friend. We know each other since we were born. Because we are twins. She is my elder sisiter. Like most twin sisters, we look almost the same. The most easy way to to distinguish us is that she has a scar on her arm. It is my fault. When we are six years old, we played beside the stair, and then I pushed her down the stair accidently. She got hurt but not blame me at all. That is the history of her scar. Since then our parents always recognize us with that mark. Han Mei is better than me in study. So, sometimes I was criticized by our mother for failing the exam, she will pretend me to receive the criticism, without making my mother see the mark. I’ m so thankful for this. So sometimes I will pretend her to take part in the piano class, as she is not interested in it. It is so interesting to play such game.

韩梅是我最好的朋友，我们从出生开始就彼此认识了。因为我们是双胞胎。她是我的姐姐。就像很多的双胞胎姐妹一样，我们长得几乎一模一样。最容易区分我们两个的方法是她在手臂上有一个伤疤。那都是我的错。在我们六岁的时候我们在楼梯旁边玩之后我们不小心把她推下楼梯。她受伤了，但是一点都没有怪我。这就是她的伤疤的来历。自从那时候起，我们的父母总是通过那个伤疤来区分我们。韩梅在学习上比我好。所以有时候我考试不及格被妈妈批评，她就会挡住那个标志冒充我去接受批评。我很感激她。所以有时候我也会冒充她去帮她参加钢琴课，因为她对钢琴一点都不感兴趣。玩这样的游戏真的是太有趣了。

在我们的语文考试中，书写作文是必不可少的一环。以下是小编搜索整理的深圳中考作文评分标准，我们来看看下文。

一类卷（43-50分）

A.内容：切合题意 思想健康 中心突出 内容充实 感情真切

B.语言：语言顺畅 没有语病

C.篇章：结构完整 条理清楚

评分细则：

①具备ABC三项条件的，评一类下(43-45分)。

②具备其中一项条件的，评一类中(46-47分)。

③立意深、构思巧、语言生动形象的，评满分;具备其中两项条件的，评一类上(48-49分)。

二类卷(35-42分)

A.内容：切合题意 思想健康 中心明确 内容具体 感情真实

B.语言：语言通顺 偶有语病

C.篇章：结构完整 条理较清楚

评分细则：

以38分为基准分，适当浮动：

①具备B项条件，而另两项只达到三类卷标准的，酌情减分。

②具备B项和另一项条件，其余一项达到三类卷标准的，获得基准分。

③具备ABC三项条件的，酌情加分;或材料新鲜，或立意新颖，或结构新巧，可评为二类上。

三类卷(27-34分)

A.内容：基本合题意 中心尚明确 内容尚具体 感受尚真实

B.语言：语言尚通顺 语病不多

C.篇章：条理尚清楚 能分段

评分细则：

以30分为基准分，适当浮动：

①基本具备ABC三项条件的，获得基准分;,

②其中B项较好的，酌情加分;

③另有某些缺点的，酌情减分。

四类卷(18-26分)

A.内容：偏离题意 中心欠明确 内容不具体

B.语言：语言不通顺 语病较多

C.篇章：条理不清楚

评分细则：

以22分为基准分，适当浮动：

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为四类卷，获得基准分;

②另两项较好的，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

五类卷(0-17分)

A.内容：文不对题 不知所云

B.语言：语病严重 文理不通

C.篇章：结构混乱 不能完篇

评分细则：

以13分为基准分，适当浮动:

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为五类卷，获得基准分;②其他两项尚好，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

说明：

1.漏写题目扣1分。

2.错别字每3个扣1分，重现不计，最多扣2分。

3.字迹工整的加1─2分;字迹潦草，难以辨认的酌情扣1-3分。

4.字数不足550字，每少50字扣1分;不足400字，降一等。

5.凡认为有严重错误的答卷，评卷领导小组研究处理。

[深圳中考作文评分标准

The computer is widely used in education，and some people think teachers do not play important roles in the classroom. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In this period of communication, computer has been used in all kinds of fields widely, and plays a particular role in our lives. Especially computer has become more and more important in educational field, therefore dozens of people considered teachers could be replaced computers that will go with the current of the times. The above point is certainly wrong; this essay will outline three reasons.

The main reason is that peoples brain better than computer. Firstly, people design all kinds of computers programs. Secondly, computer doesnt have logistic ideation. Computer only can defend on that designer inputted computers programs to judge a questions right or wrong. In other words, computer cant defend on thinking that computer independently analyzes a questions right or wrong. In case, designer inputted programs that are wrong. Computer output the result that also will be wrong. If this kind of problem happened in classroom, students would be infused plenty of wrong information.

Another reason is that computers programs designed software of education that could be amended difficultly. If software of education of bugs were found, commonly these of problems couldnt be solved in the classroom. The software was amended that means total of program were corrected, not only parts of program were ed or amended usually.

Last but not the least reason is computer is mechanical, it couldnt be suited all kinds of students and different demands. As students intellect is different, same of software couldnt base on every status of student to set a perfect project.

In conclusion, computers couldnt instead of the position of teachers in the classroom, however computer is an absolutely good helper for teacher.

计算机计算机在教育领域中的广泛应用，一些人认为没有老师在课堂上发挥重要作用。你同意还是不同意？在这一时期的通信，计算机已被应用于各种领域广泛，并且在我们的生活中起着独特的作用。尤其是在教育领域，计算机已成为越来越重要的作用，因此教师数十人认为可以取代电脑，将顺应时代的潮流。上述观点肯定是错误的；本文将概述三个原因。主要的原因是，人们的大脑比电脑。首先，人们设计了各种各样的计算机程序。其次，计算机没有逻辑思维能力。计算机只能在该设计师保卫输入计算机的程序来判断问题的对错。换句话说，计算机不能捍卫独立思考的计算机分析问题的正确或错误。在情况下，输入的程序设计是错误的。计算机输出的结果，也将是错误的。如果这类问题发生在课堂上，学生将注入大量的错误信息。另一个原因是计算机程序设计的软件教育可以修改难。如果教育软件的漏洞被发现，通常这类问题不能在课堂上解决。该软件进行了修订，这意味着总计划得到纠正，不仅在程序部分，插入或修改通常。最后但并非最不重要的原因是计算机的机械，它不可能适合学生和各种不同的要求。学生的智力是不同的，相同的软件无法根据每一个学生的身份设定一个完美的计划。总之，计算机不能代替教师在课堂上的位置，但是计算机是教师绝对的好帮手。

Environmental pollution is a serious social problem. It poses a terrible threat to men’s health.

The atmosphere is filthy. The air is thick with dust and burnt oil. Dark smokes are being emitted from chimneys, and choking fumes are being released from numerous vehicles. Stay a little while in a big city, then wipe your forehead with your handkerchief, it is black. Hang out your washing on the line to dry, you will have to wash again. Garbage is left to accumulate in unsanitary heaps that attract flies and give off bad smell.

Nor is the pollution confined to air and land. Large quantity of sewage and chemical waste are dumped daily into rivers, lakes and the sea, which kills millions of fish. Noises coming from honking cars, rumbling machines and broadcasting loudspeakers may make a person nervous and irritable, even drive him crazy.

Environmental pollution is responsible for many diseases that are disabling, or bringing death to human beings.

In short, let’s take good care of our mother globe, not only for the well-being of ourselves, but also for that of our future generations.

环境污染是一个严重的社会问题。这带来了一个可怕的威胁男性健康。

大气是肮脏的。这里的空气灰尘和烧油。黑烟正从烟囱排放,和令人窒息的烟雾释放大量的车辆。在大城市呆一会儿,然后与你的手帕,擦擦额头是黑色的。你洗好的衣服晾在绳子上晾干,你要洗了。垃圾留给积聚在不卫生的堆,吸引苍蝇和散发难闻的气味。

并不局限于空气的污染和土地。每天大量的污水和化学废物倾倒入河流、湖泊和海洋,杀死了成千上万的鱼。来自汽车鸣笛的声音,隆隆的机器和广播喇叭可能让人不安和急躁,甚至把他逼疯。

环境污染负责禁用的许多疾病,或使人类死亡。

简而言之,让我们好好照顾我们的母亲地球,不仅对我们自己的福祉,也为我们的子孙后代。

请你阅读你的加拿大网友tommy的e-mail，根据e-mail的内容，给他写一封回信.

dear li lei,

i havent heard from you for a long time. im glad to tell you that ill visit beijing this summer vacation. it is said that beijing is a great city with a long history and more changes have taken place since the 2008 olympic games. i would like to know something about beijing, such as places of interest, the environment, traffic and people there.

im looking forward to hearing from you soon.

yours,

tommy

★ 范文

dear tommy,

im glad to know you will come to beijing.

beijing, the capital of china, is one of the largest cities in the world. there are many places of interest, such as the summer palace, the forbidden city and the great wall. all of them are beautiful and well-known to the world. great changes have taken place in beijing since we successfully held the 2008 0lympic games.

now, people pay more attention to the environment. more trees and flowers have been planted. for the traffic, it is very convenient for people to travel around beijing, because several new subway lines have been built. if you come to beijing, you will find people here are very friendly and helpful. whats more, a lot of people can speak english. beijing is really an attractive city with a long history.

im looking forward to hearing from you soon.

yours,

li lei

Should students make friends online? Some people say yes. Internet helps people make many friends. Chatting on line, students can express their feelings and opinions more freely, and even get help for their foreign language studies.

Others, however, think students should not. They say making friends online is a waste of time, which should be spent more meaningfully on study. Besides, some students get cheated online.

It is my opinion that students should place their study, health and safety before other things. As for friendship, we can readily find it in our classmates and other people around us.

雅思考试全程考试时间为2小时55分钟。其中，写作在听力、阅读部分之后出现，是笔试的最后一项。雅思写作考试要求在60分钟内完成两篇作文（Task 1 and Task 2）。写作中，以移民为主的培训类（General Training）和以留学为主的学术类（Academic）试题类型有所不同。

Task 1要求考生在20分钟内完成150字以上的文章。G类（培训类）要求考生针对题目要求写一封信来询问某方面信息或阐释某种状况。到目前为止，出现较多的书信种类有投诉信、请求信、建议信、寻找失物信、邀请信等。而A类（学术类）则考核图表为主。考得较多的有曲线图、柱状图、饼状图、表格等。也有可能考到两种不同种类的图。另外，流程图和示意图也偶尔考到。

Task 2 要求考生在40分钟内写作一篇不少于250字的议论文。A类和G类在Task 2方面非常相似。考生可能需要对某个观点发表支持或反驳意见，或者讨论针锋相对的一组观点，或者解释某种问题出现的原因并提出相应的解决办。

雅思评分按9分制。基本上，移民或读语言学校起码要5分（Modest User）。留学需要6分（Competent User）以上。如果读的是法律、传媒、管理等名校的研究生的话，写作最好达到7分（Good User）。但考生最后写作成绩并不是Task 1和Task 2的简单平均，而是以Task 2为主。

雅思写作的评分标准不象四六级或托福采用整体式的评分，而是分项式评分（analytical scoring）。也就是说，考官给考生并不只打一个分数，而是根据具体的评分细则分项给分。

书信或图表评分标准：

Task 1（书信或图表）按照以下三方面评分：Task Fulfilment（完成任务）；Coherence and Cohesion（连贯与衔接）；Vocabulary and Sentence Structure（词汇与句子结构）。

Task Fulfilment指的是考生是否能够在正确审题的基础上完成题目的指令。具体说来，书信作文应该完成书信的使命，题目里的每一项要求都不可或缺。图表作文应该在对于图表所给出的数据进行分析的基础上指出图表的总体趋势和走向，并点明与总趋势不相吻合的特殊之处，而且还要有数据的支持。

Coherence and Cohesion指的是文章通过一定的衔接手段（Cohesive Devices）来表明上下文的连贯性（Coherence）。衔接手段，或叫语篇纽带，经常用的有（logical）逻辑、（grammatical）语法和（semantic）语义三方面的连接词（connectors）。

Vocabulary and Sentence Structure指的是文章的语言表达。5分或5分以下的作文一般语法错误较多。6分作文则一般没有致命的语法错误，用词和句子基本准确。而7分以上的作文用词丰富（Variety）、句子结构复杂（Complexity）。

议论文评分标准：

Task 2（议论文）的三方面评分标准是：Arguments, Ideas and Evidence（论证，论点和论据）；Communicative Quality（交流质量）；Vocabulary and Sentence Structure（词汇与句子结构）。

Arguments, Ideas and evidence涉及对于议论文的内容要求。具体说来，应该是内容切题，论据合理，论证充分。

对于Ideas（内容）而言，应该注意的是不要出现跑题。有的考生由于词汇量有限，导致题目中的单词不认识，从而写作的时候写离题了。比如：Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Do you agree or disagree? 如果考生不懂international tourism是什么意思的话，这道题是没法写的。但是，雅思写作涉及的词汇量并不是大得令人生畏，大概有六七千左右。考生万一碰到个把单词不理解的话，完全可以通过上下文加以推测。比如上面这句话中tension可能是个生词，但是如果考生能想到rather than表示对比关系的话，可以推断tension应该和understanding（理解）形成反义词，那就应该是接近于误解，即紧张关系的意思。所以，对于单词，考生应该平时注意积累，应试时根据上下文推断。

有的考生可能题目里面每个单词都认识依然写跑题，那可能是因为对于所涉及的题材不了解，没话可说。比如：

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is

pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 如果考生毫不了解所谓的传统技能和生活方式的话，肯定对此束手无策。雅思议论文涉及contemporary social issues of common interest（人们普遍感兴趣的当代社会问题），考生应该平时注意这方面的知识积累和主动思考。

另外，还有的考生不但认识题目中的每个单词，而且也熟悉话题，但依然写跑题，那很有可能是因为没有抓住写作重点。事实上，绝大多数考生写跑题都是因为这个因素。比如：There is an increasing number of juvenile delinquents. Analyze the possible causes of this phenomenon, and offer some recommendations. 许多考生都会注意到这道题考的是青少年犯罪话题，而且应该分析原因并提出解决办法。但是，如果原因只写了一段而建议写了数段的话，那么就是犯了忽略重点的错误。因为，如果没有把原因进行详细分析而贸然提出建议的话，这种建议是缺乏依据的。正确的做法应该是原因写二至三段，结果写一段。其次，考生还应注意到这道题考的不是泛泛的青少年犯罪的原因与解决方法，而是为什么现在青少年犯罪人数越来越多的原因和建议。由此看来，考生应该仔细审题，防止产生理解上的偏差。

对于Evidence（论据）来说，关键要合理，并且能够证明论点。比如Wild animals have no place in the 21st century and trying to protect these animals is a waste of resources. Do you agree or disagree? 有同学

这样写道：We can hardly imagine what our life will be like without wild animals. For example, if there is no cat, there will be more mice. The increase in the number of mice will result in the reduction of food resources and the spread of diseases. Thus, it is very important to protect animals. 这里，猫的论据是不合适的，因为猫不属于wild animals（野生动物）。再比如，The university should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give students more practical training. Do you agree or disagree? 有同学在论证这道题的时候举了赵括“纸上谈兵”的例子，说赵括就是典型的有很多兵法等理论知识，但是由于缺乏带兵打仗的实际经验，导致秦赵长平之战中赵兵大败，自己也命丧沙场，这充分说明了只有理论知识没有实际经验的恶果，所以应该重视实际经验。但这个论据也是不得体的，因为题目涉及的是大学应该怎么做，而赵括明显没有上过大学。事实上，古代的例子通常不适宜在雅思作文中出现，即便出现了，许多情况下只是作为反面例子与现今状况形成对比。

好的Arguments（论证）应该是充分并且有力的。这就需要运用多种论证手法。常用的论证手法有：explanation（解释说明），emphasis（强调论证），exemplification（举例说明），cause and effect（因果论证），comparison and contrast（比较与对比）facts and statistics（事实和统计数据），concession and refutation（让步与反驳），classification（分类），definition（下定义），analogy（比喻）等。论证手法的运用还应该和关联词结合起来。

Communicative Quality（交流质量）大体上与Task 1的Coherence and Cohesion相同，也涉及文章中代词，关联词，同义反义词等的运用。常用的关联词有：对比however, although, but, nevertheless；结果as a result, as a consequence, therefore, because of this, otherwise；附加in addition, additionally, and, as well as, furthermore, also, moreover；举例for example, for instance, such as, including；强调in fact, indeed；时间after, following, before, until, during, between, while等。

议论文在Vocabulary and Sentence Structure方面与Task 1的要求相同。

i have two great-grandfathers, one from my mother’s side. my father’s grandfather is now97 years old and lives. in toufen although his eyesight and hearing is poor, his mind is still sharp and clear.

he always asks each visitor many pertinent questions and shares his ideas and opinions. he often talks with a loud voice and with much enthusiasm and energy. he can remember all he can remember all the names of his relatives and friends.

in his youth he was trained to be a medical doctor; through his life he was an avid reader.

[中考英语作文:我的曾祖父

英语期中考试优秀作文：Hw t sta health（4篇）

If u want t sta health,u shuld eat re fruit and vegetables.If u want t eep health,u shuldnt eat t uch fried fd.We ust chage ur bad habits.And u shuld have enugh exercise ever da.I thin in this wa,we can eep health.

——孙xx

Health is ver iprtant t us.We shuld be health.If u want t be health,u shuld have enugh exercise,eat health fd and have a gd tietable.I used t watch a lt f TV ever da.But nw I dnt wacth uch TV an lnger.I exercise regularl.S,thats wh I ver health.

——王xx

Ever peple want t eep healeh.But a lt f peple are unhealth because the dnt have a gd diet and the dnt have enugh sleep.If u want t sta health,u shuld nt eat t uch fried fd.u shuld eat se vegetables instead.And u shuld g t bed earl and get up earl.The st iprtant ting is t exercise rugularl.But I dnt have enugh exercise,s I shuld exercise ever da.In this wa,I can sta health.

——毛xx

We shuld sta health.Staing health is iprtant.But hw can we sta health?If we want t sta health,we shuld eat a lt f fruit and vegetables.If we want t sta health,we shuld drin enugh water ever da.If we want t sta health,dnt frget exercise.We shuld exercise regularl ever da.In fact,we can sta health in an different was.Fruit,vegetables,water and enugh exercise are useful t help us t sta health.We als shuld have gd habits.I used t eat a lt f sweets.But nw I dnt eat t an sweets an lnger.Nw I health and teeth are health,t.S if u have bad habits,u shuld change bad habits quicl.If u want t sta health,it will be iprtant t change bad habits.Lets sta health,shall we?

——朱xx