英语中考作文阅卷评分标准20篇

Environmental protection is a big project, but we can start from around things, do a lot of things to protect the environment.

Our paper every day, do you know the paper is how to? Is made of trees to make paper. Every year around the world to cut down many trees to make paper. I have seen a special TV, save 1500 sheets of paper, you can leave a big tree. The tree is our good friend, it can turn carbon dioxide into oxygen, can reduce the noise, can block the sand, can prevent water loss and soil erosion... Starts from me, saving every piece of paper, children all over the world can save a lot of a lot of paper, you can retain a lot of trees, you can leave a big forest, desert, less and less, more and more pure and fresh air, green more and more. How I wish my hometown mountain more green, and blue, the water environment of our lives forever charactizing a fine spring day.

We used in battery life; it contains lead, if throw it carelessly, section 1 waste batteries can lose one square metre of soil utilization value forever. In many countries, many areas have carried out recycling of waste batteries. In Germany, to buy a new battery, used batteries must be pay back. So, we should to find a "home" for waste batteries. I hope we panzhihua environmental protection departments also set up waste battery recycling. Thoroughly protect the soil so that it can always grow crops.

Save a piece of paper, recycling waste battery section... Although we do is small, but it made great contribution for environmental protection. I hope my classmates from now on, all to do an environmental small guards. There is only one earth, we have to take care of it.

环保是一个很大的工程，但我们可以从身边的小事做起，为保护环境做很多事。

我们每天都要用纸，你知道纸张是怎么来的吗?是用大树来造纸的。全世界每年都要砍掉很多树来造纸。我看过一个专题电视，节约1500张纸，就可以保留一棵大树。大树是我们的好朋友，它可以把二氧化碳变为氧气，可以降低噪音，可以挡住风沙，可以防止水土流失……从我做起，节约每一张纸，全世界的小朋友可以节约很多很多纸，就可以保留很多很多大树，就可以留下一片大森林，沙漠越来越少，空气越来越清新，绿色越来越多。我多希望我的家乡山更青、水更绿，我们生活的环境永远鸟语花香。

我们生活中用到的电池，它含有铅，如果把它随手乱扔，1节废电池可以使一平方米的土壤失去永远的利用价值。很多国家、很多地区都开展了废电池的回收。在德国，购买新电池的时候，必须将废旧电池交回来。所以，我们应该给给废电池找个“家”。我希望我们攀枝花的环保部门也设立废旧电池回收站。好好的保护土壤，让它可以永远长出庄稼。

节约一张纸、回收一节废旧电池……我们做的虽然是小事，但却为环保做了大贡献。我希望我的同学们从现在开始，都来做一个环保小卫士。地球只有一个，我们都要好好爱护它。

越来越多汽车进入我们的家庭生活，改善了我们的生活，但同时也带来了很多问题，如塞车和车祸，给家庭和社会带来极大的危害。作为中学生，我们应该怎样做呢?

请写一篇有关交通安全的短文(80字左右)

内容包含：

遵守交通规则，如走人行道/过斑马线。

别在街道上或马路上玩耍和踢球。

劝父母不能酒后驾车。

你可以适当增加内容，让短文通顺，过渡自然。

参考词汇：sidewalk 人行道 zebra-crossing 斑马线

注：第一段已给出，不计入总数

★ 参考范文

With more and more cars coming into our families, we are happy that it has greatly improved our life. But unluckily, it has also brought many problems, such as heavy traffic and traffic accidents.

Traffic safety is everybodys business. We must obey the rules. For example, we must walk on walk side, when we cross zebra – crossing, stop and look right and left, then go across fast. Don’t play football on the road .we can tell our parents not to drink before they drive, not to run through red lights, not to talk and laugh while driving etc.

We can say cars are coming into our life, but only when everybody thinks traffic safety is everybodys business can we be safe driving on roads and walking on sidewalks.

1、A contented mind is the greatest blessing a man can enjoy in this world.

知足是人生在世最大的幸事。

——Joseph Addison(美国作家艾迪生)

2、If you would know the value of money, go and try to borrow some.

要想知道钱的价值，就想办法去借钱试试。

——Benjamin Franklin(美国总统富兰克林)

3、If you wish to succeed, you should use persistence as your good friend,

experience as your reference, prudence as your brother and hope as your sentry.

如果你希望成功，当以恒心为良友，以经验为参谋，以谨慎为兄弟，以希望为哨兵。

——Thomas Edison(美国发明家爱迪生)

4、Health is certainly more valuable than money,

because it is by health that money is procured.

健康当然比金钱更为重要，因为我们所赖以获得金钱的就是健康。

——Samuel Johnson(英国作家约翰逊)

5、That man is the richest whose pleasure are the cheapest.

能处处寻求快乐的人才是最富有的人。

——Henry David Thoreau(美国作家梭罗)

6、Sometimes one pays most for the things one gets for nothing.

有时候一个人为不花钱得到的东西付出的代价最高。

——Albert Einstein(美国科学家爱因斯坦)

7、Will, work and wait are the pyramidal cornerstones for success.

意志、工作和等待是成功的金字塔的基石。

——Louis Pasteur(法国化学家巴斯勒)

8、All the splendor in the world is not worth a good friend.

人世间所有的荣华富贵不如一个好朋友。

——Voltaire(法国思想家伏尔泰)

9、There is a great different between exposure of

the mind and that of the body.

表露思想和展露身体之间存在极大的不同。

——William Hazlitt(英国批评家散文家哈滋里特)

10、To travel hopefully is a better thing than to arrive,

and the true success is to labor.

怀着希望去旅行比抵达目的地更愉快;而真正的成功在于工作。

——Robert Louis Stevenson(英国作家史蒂文森)

11、The greater a man is, the more distasteful is praise and flattery to him.

一个人越伟大，对表扬和奉承就越反感。

——John Burroughs(美国博物学家巴勒斯)

12、I might say that success is won by three things:

first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort.

可以说成功要靠三件事才能赢得：努力，努力，再努力。

——Thomas Hardy(英国诗人小说家哈代)

13、Success often depends upon knowing how long it will take to succeed.

成功常常取决于知道需要多久才能成功。

——Charles Montesquieu(法国思想家孟德斯鸠)

14、Only those who have the patience to do simple things

perfectly ever acquire the skill to do difficult things easily.

只有有耐心圆满完成简单工作的人，才能够轻而易举的完成困难的事。

——Friedrich Schiller(德国剧作家诗人席勒)

15、You have to believe in yourself. Thats the secret of success.

你必须相信自己，这是成功的关键。

——Charles Chaplin(美国演员卓别林)

16、A man can succeed at almost anything for which

he has unlimited enthusiasm.

无论何事，只要对它有无限的热情你就能取得成功。

——C. M. Schwab(美国实业家施瓦布)

17、The man who has made up his mind to win will never say “impossible”.

凡是决心取得胜利的人是从来不说“不可能的”。

——Bonapart Napoleon(法国皇帝拿破仑)

18、Progress is the activity of today and the assurance of tomorrow.

进步是今天的活动，明天的保证。

——Emerson(美国思想家爱默生)

20、Our destiny offers not the cup of despair,

but the chalice of opportunity.

命运给予我们的不是失望之酒，而是机会之杯。

——Richard Nixon(美国总统尼克松)

21、Miracles sometimes occur, but one has to work terribly for them.

奇迹有时候是会发生的，但是你得为之拼命的努力。

——C. Weizmann(爱尔兰总统魏茨曼)

22、It never will rain roses.

When we want to have more roses we must plant trees.

天上不会掉下玫瑰来，如果想要更多的玫瑰，必须自己种植。

——G. Eliot(英国小说家艾略特)

23、If you have great talents, industry will improve them;

if you have but moderate abilities, industry will supply their deficiency.

如果你很有天赋，勤勉会使其更加完善;如果你能力一般，勤勉会补足其缺陷。

——Joshuas Reynolds(美国散文家雷诺兹)

24、Great works are performed not by strength , but by perseverance.

完成伟大的事业不在于体力，而在于坚韧不拔的毅力。

——Samuel Johnson(英国作家和评论家约翰逊)

25、Genius only means hard-working all ones life.

天才只意味着终身不懈的努力。

——Mendeleyev(俄国化学家门捷列耶夫)

26、Few things are impossible in themselves; and it is often for want of will ,

rather than of means, that man fails to succeed.

事情很少又根本做不成的;其所以做不成，与其说是条件不够，不如说是由于决心不够。

——(La Racheforcauld(法国作家罗切福考尔德)

27、Dare and the world always yields.

If it beats you sometimes, dare it again and again and it will succumb.

大胆挑战，世界总会让步。如果有时候你被它打败了，不断地挑战，它总会屈服地。

——W.M Thackeray(英国小说家萨克雷)

28、All that you do, do with your might; t

hings done by halves are never done right.

做一切事情都应尽力而为，半途而废永远不行。

——R.H. Stoddard(美国诗人斯托达德)

29、A man can fail many times,

but he isnt a failure until he begins to blame somebody else.

一个人可以失败多次，但是只要他没有开始责怪旁人，他还不是一个失败者。

——J.Burroughs(美国博物学家巴勒斯)

30、You can tell the ideals of a nation by its advertisements.

从一个国家的广告可以看出这个国家的理想。

——Norman Douglas(英国作家道格拉斯)

31、The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today.

实现明天理想的唯一障碍是今天的疑虑。

——Franklin Roosevelt(美国总统罗斯福)

32、The man with a new idea is a crank until the idea succeeds.

具有新想法的人在其想法实现之前是个怪人。

——Mark Twain(美国作家马克?吐温)

33、The important thing in life is to have a great aim,

and the determination to attain it.

人生重要的事情是确定一个伟大的目标，并决心实现它。

——Johann Wolfgang von Goethe(德国诗人、剧作家歌德)

34、Most of the trouble in the world is caused by people wanting to be important.

人世间的大多数烦恼都是由那些想成为重要人物的人惹出来的。

——George Eliot(英国小说家艾略特)

35、If you doubt yourself,

then indeed you stand on shaky ground.

如果你怀疑自己，那么你的立足点确实不稳固了。

——Ibsen(挪威剧作家易卜生)

36、Ideal is the beacon. Without ideal,

there is no secure direction; without direction ,there is no life.

理想是指路明灯。没有理想，就没有坚定的方向;

没有方向，就没有生活。 ——Leo Tolstory(俄国作家托尔斯泰)

37、Ideal are like the stars ——- we never reach them ,

but like mariners , we chart our course by them.

理想犹如天上的星星，我们犹如水手，虽不能达到天上，

但是我们的航程可凭借它指引。

——Carl Schurz(美国政治家舒尔茨)

38、Have an aim in life, or your energies will all be wasted.

人生应该树立目标，否则你的精神会白白浪费。

——R. Peters(美国法学家彼得斯)

39、Dont part with yourxxxs, When they are gone you may still exist,

but you have ceased to live.

不要放弃你的幻想。当幻想没有了以后，你还可以生存，但是你虽生犹死。

——Mark Twain(马克 吐温)

40、Do not, for one repulse,

give up the purpose that you resolved to effect.

不要只因一次失败，就放弃你原来决心想要达到的目的。

——Willian Shakespeare(莎士比亚)

41、Between the ideal and the reality,

Between the motion and the act, Fall the shadow.

理想与现实之间，动机与行为之间，总有一道阴影。

——Thomas Stearns Eliot(T.S.爱略特)

42、A man is not old as long as he is seeking something.

A man is not old until regrets take the place of dreams.

只要有一个人还有所追求，他就没有老。直到后悔取代了梦想，一个人才算老。

——J. Barrymore(巴里穆尔)

43、Change as change is mere flux and lapse; it insults intelligence. Genuinely to know is to grasp a permanent end that realises itself through changes.

如果仅仅就变化论变化，则只是变动不羁，倏忽即逝;这是低能的表现，真正了解变化在于把握住在变化中完成自身的永恒目标。

——John Dewey 约翰·杜威

44、Change is the law of life. And those who look only to the past or the present are certain to miss the future.

变化是生活的法则。只盯着过去或眼前的人注定失去未来。

——John F.Kennedy 约翰·弗·肯尼迪

45、Genius is formed in quiet, character in the stream of human life.

天才悄无声息地诞生，性情却在生命之河里逐渐形成。

——Goethe 歌德

46、With a character both proud and timid, one never amounts to anything.

一个人既自傲又胆怯，将永远一事无成。

——Joseph Roux 约瑟夫·鲁

47、If there is anything that we wish to change the child, we should first examine it and see whether it is not something that could better be changed in ourselves.

假如我们想让孩子在某个方面有所改变，我们应首先检验一下，看看我们自己是否最好在这一方面变一变。

——Jung 荣格

48、The finest inheritance you can give to a child is to allow it to make its own way, completely on its own feet.

你能留给孩子的最好财产莫过于允许他完全独立自主地摸索自己的道路。

——Isadora Duncan 伊莎多拉·邓肯

49、Mans highest merit always is, as much as possible, to rule external circumstances and as little as possible to let himself be ruled by them.

人最大的优点是尽可能多地驾驭外部环境，尽可能少地让环境约束自己。

——Goethe 歌德

50、Dont wait for ideal circumstances, they will never come, nor for the best opportunities.

不要等候最好的条件或者最佳时机，它们永远不会降临。

——Janet Erskine Stuart 珍尼特·厄斯金·斯图亚特

中考英语作文范例：我的班主任

题目：请以“My Class Teacher”为题，写一篇不少于60个单词的作文。

My Class Teacher

我的班主任

My class teacher is Mr. Wang. He is strict but kind. He has taught us Chinese for two years.

我的班主任是王老师，他是一个要求严格而亲切的老师。他已经教了我们两年语文。

He always tells us to study hard but not all the time. Sometimes he plays with us. He says, "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy." I think he is a good class teacher.

他总是告诉我们要好好学习，但不是时时刻刻学习。有时他会和我们一起玩。他说：“只会用功不玩耍，聪明孩子也变傻。” 我觉得他是个很好的班主任。

点评：这篇文章取材的是身边熟悉的人，作者也有东西可写，更具有可读性。另外，写人时把主语稍作调整，读起来轻松多了。

I am a 15-year-old girl. My name is [ename]Cherry[/ename]. Now I am studying in the middle school. I want to be an actress because I think it is a funny and exciting job...

写人的常见句式如：

This is my friend, Mary.

She is... years old.

She is a teacher/ an artist/ a singer...

She/ He gets up at 6/5... / early/ late.

She/ He has sports at school.

She/ He likes...

She/ He is strong/ fat/ slim/ kind/ thin/...

She/ He looks like...

She/ He is good at English/ maths/ Chinese/ physics...

中考英语作文范例：给姚明的信

You are one of the fans of Yao Ming. Please write a letter to him.

题目：假设你是姚明的球迷，试着给他写封信。

参考作文

Dear Yao Ming,

亲爱的姚明：

How are you these days?

你最近好吗?

You are a bit surprised to get this letter. You dont know me but I know you. I am your fan. I have collected lots of information about you. When you left Shanghai, I felt a little sad. Ive been missing you all the time. But NBA is really a good place for a wonderful basketball player like you. Youve made the right choice.

收到这封信你一定觉得很惊讶。你不认识我，但我知道你。我是你的球迷，我收集了你的很多信息。当你离开上海时，我有点儿难过。我很想念你。不过对于一个优秀篮球运动员来说，NBA确实是个很棒的地方，你的选择很正确。

How about your wound? Do you still feel pain? Take good care of yourself and I do hope to see you win each match in the coming year.

你的伤怎么样了?是不是还很痛?好好照顾自己，希望你来年能赢得每一场比赛。

Yours

你的

Weiwei

魏伟

中考英语作文范例：上海的变化

题目：请以“Changes in Shanghai"为题，写一篇不少于60单词的作文。

Changes in Shanghai

1 300年前的上海

2 上海的今天(东方明珠、金茂大厦)

3 上海的明天(2010年的世博会)

参考作文

Shanghai was a small town three hundred years ago. There were only a few thousand people living here. Many of them were fishermen and farmers.

300年前，上海只是个小镇，只有几千人居住在这里，其中很多人是渔民和农民。

Today, Shanghai is becoming an international city. Many tall building have been built. Some bridges have been put up over the Huangpu River. More and more foreigners come to Shanghai for a visit every day.

今天，上海已变成一座国际大都市，并建成了很多高楼大厦。黄浦江上架起了很多桥梁。每天都有越来越多的外国人前来旅游。

Shanghai has already won the bid for holding the World Expo 2010. I think the environment will be better and better and the city will be more and more beautiful.

上海已经取得了2010年世博会的举办权，我相信上海的环境会越来越好，并且越来越美丽。

点评：虽然2010年世博会已经结束，但关于城市发展的话题依然热烈，除了上海，像广州、北京、深圳等大城市也有可能是考试的热点。

中考英语作文范例：通知的翻译

假如你陪你校的外籍教师Smith先生去音乐厅听音乐，在门口的布告栏里看见一张观众须知，内容如下：

观众须知

1、一人一票，凭票入场;

2、场内严禁吸烟;

3、食品和饮料请勿带进场内;

4、演出时请勿照相;

5、演出时请勿使用传呼机和移动电话;

6、提前30分钟入场。

Smith先生不懂中文，他很想知道布告栏里写着什么。现在，请你把观众须知的内容用英语告诉Smith先生，并把要讲的话写出来。

Mr. Smith, it is a notice to the audience. It says that we should enter the concert hall 30 minutes earlier before the concert starts. Entrance to the hall is by ticket only, each one each ticket.

史密斯先生，这是一则观众须知。上面说我们应该在音乐会开始前30分钟入场，每人凭票进入。

As a rule, food or drink should not be taken into the hall. Of course, smoking is not allowed in the hall either.

按照规定，食品和饮料不得带进场内，吸烟也是不允许的。

Please dont bring your digital camera with you because no photos can be taken during the concert. And what is more, beepers and mobile phones must be off during the concert.

请不要携带数码相机入内，因为场内严禁拍照。另外，音乐会期间，传呼机和手机必须关闭。

点评：文章的用词和句式有一定的难度，特别是关联词的运用，如of course，as a rule，and what is more使文章读起来朗朗上口，层层紧扣，环环递进，体现了作者较高的写作技巧和水平。

中考英语作文范例：保护环境是我们的义务

题目：请以”Its Our Duty To Protect Our Environment”为题，写一篇不少于60单词的作文。

Its Our Duty To Protect Our Environment

保护环境是我们的义务

Its our duty to protect our environment. Where do we live? The earth. The earth is the only one place we live in. So you know how important the environment is.

保护环境是我们的义务。我们居住在哪里?地球。地球是我们唯一居住的地方，所以可想而知环境对于我们的重要性。

But now, some people are harming the environment, like cutting down trees, drawing pictures on public walls, littering onto the ground. Its terrible if we still do it.

但是现在，很多人都在破坏环境，比如砍伐树木，在公共墙壁上乱涂乱画，随地扔垃圾。如果我们继续这样下去是非常可怕的。

Now, its time for all the people in the society to protect the environment. Its our duty. It needs each of us to make a contribution to improving the environment. We should make our environment more and more beautiful.

现在，是人们保护环境的时候了，这是我们的义务，我们都要为改善环境做贡献，我们应该努力让我们的环境变得更好。

点评：作者多用学过的词语，不但保证了正确，还巩固了所学的知识，并且注意句型的多样化，如长句、短句、疑问句，使用了“if，so，now，but”等词，整篇文章读起来朗朗上口。实际上，写文章就像串珠子，连接词就在于把一个个单词串起来。

议论文常用的句型有：

1、论点：

Computer is important.

We must learn English well.

Its very important for us to...

In my opinion...

2、论证过程常用一些衔接词可使文章读起来流畅、紧凑。如：

Firstly, ... Secondly, ... Lastly, ... Above all, ... 等。

3、结尾强调观点，最好用不同的句型来表达相同的观点，如：

So we must...

So its very important for us to...

I believe...

We should...

中考英语作文范例：树为什么重要

题目：请以"Why Are Trees Important"为题，写一篇不少于60单词的作文。

Why Are Trees Important

树为什么重要

Trees are very important to us. Do you know why? Let me tell you.

树对于我们非常重要，你知道为什么吗?让我来告诉你吧。

Trees take in carbon dioxide from the air and make oxygen. Thats important. People and animals need oxygen to live. Many small animals and s live in the trees. Some of them also get food from trees. Trees can also stop water and soil from going away. If we have a lot of trees, we stop deserts from being large. I think this is very important. You know, trees are green. They can make our country even more beautuful.

树木可以吸收二氧化碳，并释放氧气，这非常重要。人类和动物需要依靠氧气生存。很多小动物和昆虫居住在树里，有些从树里获取食物。树木还可以防止水土流失。如果我们有很多树就可以阻止沙漠扩大。我认为这非常重要。众所周知，树是绿色的，它们能使我们的国家更加美丽。

Trees are our good friends. We should plant more trees and take good care of them.

树是我们的好朋友。我们应该种更多的树，并好好照料它们。

点评：文章先阐明观点，接着论证，最后重申自己的观点。

2013高考英语作文评分标准

1 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

2 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次 的 要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3 词数少于 80和多于 120的，从总分中减去2分。

4 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准 确性、上下文的连贯性。

5 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程 度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受。

6 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。

各档次的给分范围和要求

Ⅰ. 第五档(很好)；(21-25分)：

完全完成了试题规定的任务

⑴ 覆盖所有内容要点

⑵ 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，

⑶ 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力，

⑷有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 ， 完全达到了预期的写作目的 Ⅱ. 第四档(好)：(16-20分)

完全完成了试题规定的任务

⑴虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容

⑵应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求

⑶语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致 ⑷应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 达到了预期的写作目的

Ⅲ. 第三档(适当)：(11-15分)

基本完成了试题规定的任务

⑴虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容

⑵应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求

⑶有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解

⑷应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的Ⅳ. 第二档(较差)：(6-10分)

未恰当完成试题规定的任务

⑴ 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容

⑵语法结构单调、词汇项目有限

⑶ 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解

⑷较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性 信息未能清楚地传达给读者

Ⅴ. 第一档(差)：(1-5分)

未完成试题规定的任务

⑴明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求

⑵语法结构单调、词汇项目有限

⑶较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解 ⑷缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯 信息未能传达给读者。

Ⅵ. 不得分：（0分） ⑴ 未能传达给读者任何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要

求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。

三点关键定档因素(不跑题是前提)

词汇多样性

语法复杂性

文章连贯性

书面表达的五项秘诀：

审题，遣词，造句，润色，谋篇

既然知道了这些关键因素和高分秘诀，我们要如何从这些方面入手呢审题的概念

拿到试卷后，首先浏览书面表达的题目，研究题目要求。正确的审题内容包括A、审标题B、审体裁C、审要点。审标题：看文章是否要求有题目(title)或者主题(topic)能够确保你不跑题;审体裁：确能够定文章的文体，为你写作提供方向。审要点：如果英语作文中，有要求要点的，一般打分时是踩点给分的，准确把握住要点，是高分的一个诀窍。

如何审要点要做到以下两个方面：

总结归纳要点：不是所有内容都要写出来，而是抓住其中的关键要点、衔接要点!

理顺要点：将提炼的要点按逻辑关系(如时间关系、因果关系、转折关系等)重新安排，这样整篇文章看起来就整体有序，流畅自然，更加容易打动评分老师，从而作文分数提升一档。

构思文章提纲：根据题目的要点，安排好段落和主次关系。要形成良好的分段意识，写作分段是必须要进行的(2至4段为佳)，这样显得文章不会拥挤并且层次分明。在行文意识上，要注意突出要点。

遣词的注意点

不出现语言错误

词语和短语搭配

适度使用加分词汇

避免词语重复

注意词语和短语搭配使用

可以适度的使用加分词句：高级词、同义词、短语等替代

造句的原则

表达意思要清楚无误。

多种表达方式表达相同含义

避免句式单调(简单句，并列句，复合句等适度调整)

表达意思清楚无误：具体化，细节化

可以用形象思维来表达(什么叫形象思维比如说你朗读的“很好听”，用“抑扬顿挫”来表达就是形象思维)

谋篇的攻略

注意分段、详略搭配、注意连贯

行文时多用关联词、引导词，把文章句子通过各种关系整合起来，达到起承转合，运用自如的目的，从而获取高分。

具体的连接关系有：并列关系、递进关系、因果关系、转折关系、让步关系、列举关系、条件关系、举例关系、时间关系等。

2015年高考英语全国I卷

写作阅卷评分标准及各档次作文示例

——领会高考阅卷要求，有效指导学生高考写作备考

【作文题】假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友彼得写信约稿，要点如下：

1.栏目介绍;

2. 稿件内容;

3. 稿件长度：约 400 词;

4. 交稿日期：6 月 28 日前。

注意： 1. 词数 100 左右; 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯; 3. 开头语已为你写好。

Dear Peter,

I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.________

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

2015年普通高考评卷英语作文评分标准

评分总则：

1、本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

2、评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定是否达到及格线（15分），然后确定其所属的具体档次，以该档次的要求来衡量，最后给分。其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3、词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。

4、评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性。

5、若缺少要点，分数降一档处理。

6、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

7、书写较差以至于影响交际，将其分数降低一个档次。 评分细则：

优秀（22--25）：紧扣主题，覆盖所有要点，内容充实；语法结构多样，词汇丰富，行文流畅，显示出较强的语言运用能力，允许有个别语言错误，但不影响意思表达。

This is my family.They are my mother,my father and me.My father is a teacher.He works in a school.He is of medium height and of medium build.He has shortstraight black hair.He looks young.Now he is reading books.

这是我的家庭。他们是我的母亲，我的父亲和我。我的爸爸是一位老师。他在一所学校工作。他中等身高，中等身材。他很高留着短而直的黑头发。他看起来很年轻。现在他正在看书。

My mother is a reporter.She works in a TV station.She is of medium height and a little thin.She has long curly black hair.She is very beautiful.Now she is watching TV.I am a student.I am tall and thin.I have long straight black hair.I am doing my homework,now.

我的母亲是一位记者。她在电视台工作。她中等身材，有点瘦。她有一头长长的黑发。她很漂亮。她现在正在看电视。我是一个学生。我又高又瘦。我有长而直的黑头发。我做我的家庭作业现在。

This is my family.

这是我的家人。

I still remember the Titanic, though its a big ship but it still sunk, so, in my opinion, the best ship is the friendship. Friendship is one of the most important things in everyones life.

我还记得泰坦尼克号，但它是一个大的船，但它仍然沉没，所以，在我看来，最好的船是友谊。友谊是每个人生活中最重要的东西。

When you’re down, friends lift you up. When you lose your way, friends guide you and cheer you on

当你失落时，朋友会让你振作起来。当你迷失方向时，朋友会引导你，鼓励你

everyone need friends because there are a lot of things that you cant deal with yourself, and the friend’s just make up for it.

每个人都需要朋友，因为有很多事情你不能处理自己的问题，和朋友只是弥补。

When you’re down, friends lift you up. When you lose your way, friends guide you and cheer you on

当你失落时，朋友会让你振作起来。当你迷失方向时，朋友会引导你，鼓励你

Friendship just likes the sun, it can make you fell warm though in the cold winter, friendship just likes the water in the desert, it can make you fell that in the world, there still has hope .in a word, the friendship is the same meaning as the greatness, selfness and devotion.

友谊就像太阳，它可以让你在寒冷的冬天温暖，友谊就像沙漠里的水，它可以让你爱上这个世界，还是有希望的。总之，友谊是伟大意义相同，无私和奉献。

To make friends ,adding a friend equals adding a way ,open your heart ,devote yourself ,let friendship make your world colorful 。

交朋友，增加一个朋友等于增加一个方法，打开你的心扉，奉献自己，让友谊使你的世界丰富多彩。

中招考试即将到来，许多学生感到压力很大，为此很烦恼。你校的校刊特意进行了课后放松方式的调查。请你以”Learn to relax yourself “为题写一篇80词左右的短文。要点提示：

1)学生压力大及其表现

2)学会放松很重要

3)常见的放松方式

4)最适合的自我放松方式

5)我的建议

Learn to relax yourself

Now many students of Grade 9 are under too much pressure. They always feel too tired to listen to the teachers carefully in class.

It’s important for students to relax. Only in this way can they study well and be healthy. Here are some different ways to relax themselves. For example, they can try to have enough sleep,or they can listen to their favourite music after class. They can also read some books or do some sports. For me, I often hang out with my friends.

While you are studying, don’t forget to relax. You will study better after a good rest.

参考译文

学会放松自己

现在许多9年级的学生压力太大。上课时他们总是觉得太累了以至于不能认真听老师讲课。

对学生来说放松是很重要的。只有这样他们才能学习健康。这里有一些不同的方法来放松自己。例如，他们可以尝试有足够的睡眠，或者他们可以听他们喜欢的音乐课后。他们也可以读一些书或做一些运动。对我来说，我经常和朋友们出去玩。

当你在学习的时候，不要忘记放松。好好休息后你会学得更好。

E-Books Are Good

It’s reported that school students in Korea will use e-books from 2011. What good news this is! E-books have many advantages.

Most importantly, they are good for the environment, since they can save lots of paper and trees. Besides, they are very convenient. To get a paper book, one has to spend a lot of time searching for it in a bookshop. But we can find e-books very quickly on the computer.

In short, e-books can help us enjoy our life more.

假设你是《21世纪中学生英语报》“heart to heart”专栏的编辑.下面是你收到的一位中学生的来信.请你根据他来信的内容写一封回信.针对他的问题。

Dear Xiaowei,

Weight problem is quite common among teenagers everywhere. So I don’t think you have much to worry about. Here are my suggestions. Eating late at night is OK, but you should to eat more fruit and vegetables, which are good for you.

Also, when you are free, you’d better do more exercise. Running is great. You don’t like running alone, but what about running with your friends? Or you can do some team sports like basketball. I’m sure your friends will be willing to help you lose weight. I hope you have as much success in losing weight as you have had in your studies. “Believe myself, and I will win.” It’s really important for us when we meet difficulties. Don’t lose heart; I’m sure you will succeed one day.

Dear friend,

Welcome to our school. I would like to talk about two ways of study in our school. The first way is to study in groups. When we study in groups, we can help each other. We can learn to listen to others and how to work together. Also, everyone can have chances to express his own ideas. The other way we like is to study by ourselves. We can make our own plans for study and learn to make good use of time. We can also learn to think by ourselves. And the most important thing is that we we can be the master of our own study Thanks for listening!

[中考英语话题作文

导语：健康对一个人的生命是很重要的，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

You can take away our money, house, car, or even our clothes and we can survive. But if our health was taken away, we would surely die. That is why we always try to eat in a healthy way and exercise regularly.

In order to eat healthily, I usually avoid eating food high in fat, like French fries or cookies. I also eat little meat. I eat a lot of vegetables and fresh fruit which are full of vitamins.Taking exercise every day helps us build a strong body. Regular exercise is an important part of keeping me healthy.Whats more, I think friends are an important part of ones health. Many studies show that people with a wide range of social contacts get sick less than those who dont. I always feel better when I am with friends than when I am alone. When I am with my friends, I always laugh. Laughing is also an important part of health. I like to laugh with my friends.

By eating properly and exercising regularly, I can keep my body at a proper weight and keep healthy. By spending time with my friends, I can keep my mind as well as my body happy. these things sound easy to do, but not many people can manage them. I think a strong will is necessary if we want to keep healthy.

【参考译文】

你可以拿走我们的钱，房子，汽车，甚至我们的衣服，我们可以生存。但是，如果我们的健康被带走，我们一定会死。这就是为什么我们总是尝试吃健康的方式和定期锻炼。

为了健康饮食，我通常避免吃高脂肪食物，如薯条或饼干。我也吃很少的肉。我吃很多蔬菜和新鲜的水果，富含维生素。每天锻炼有助于我们强健体魄。经常锻炼是保持健康的重要组成部分，而且我认为朋友是健康的重要组成部分。许多研究表明，社会接触广泛的人比不喜欢的人生病少。当我和朋友在一起的时候，我总是感觉比独自一人好。当我和朋友在一起的时候，我总是笑。笑也是健康的重要组成部分。我喜欢和我的朋友一起笑。

通过适当的饮食和经常锻炼，我可以保持我的身体在适当的体重和保持健康。花时间和朋友在一起，我可以保持我的身心健康。这些事情听起来容易做，但没有多少人可以管理他们。我认为坚强的意志是必要的，如果我们想保持健康。

在我们的语文考试中，书写作文是必不可少的一环。以下是小编搜索整理的深圳中考作文评分标准，我们来看看下文。

一类卷（43-50分）

A.内容：切合题意 思想健康 中心突出 内容充实 感情真切

B.语言：语言顺畅 没有语病

C.篇章：结构完整 条理清楚

评分细则：

①具备ABC三项条件的，评一类下(43-45分)。

②具备其中一项条件的，评一类中(46-47分)。

③立意深、构思巧、语言生动形象的，评满分;具备其中两项条件的，评一类上(48-49分)。

二类卷(35-42分)

A.内容：切合题意 思想健康 中心明确 内容具体 感情真实

B.语言：语言通顺 偶有语病

C.篇章：结构完整 条理较清楚

评分细则：

以38分为基准分，适当浮动：

①具备B项条件，而另两项只达到三类卷标准的，酌情减分。

②具备B项和另一项条件，其余一项达到三类卷标准的，获得基准分。

③具备ABC三项条件的，酌情加分;或材料新鲜，或立意新颖，或结构新巧，可评为二类上。

三类卷(27-34分)

A.内容：基本合题意 中心尚明确 内容尚具体 感受尚真实

B.语言：语言尚通顺 语病不多

C.篇章：条理尚清楚 能分段

评分细则：

以30分为基准分，适当浮动：

①基本具备ABC三项条件的，获得基准分;,

②其中B项较好的，酌情加分;

③另有某些缺点的，酌情减分。

四类卷(18-26分)

A.内容：偏离题意 中心欠明确 内容不具体

B.语言：语言不通顺 语病较多

C.篇章：条理不清楚

评分细则：

以22分为基准分，适当浮动：

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为四类卷，获得基准分;

②另两项较好的，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

五类卷(0-17分)

A.内容：文不对题 不知所云

B.语言：语病严重 文理不通

C.篇章：结构混乱 不能完篇

评分细则：

以13分为基准分，适当浮动:

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为五类卷，获得基准分;②其他两项尚好，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

说明：

1.漏写题目扣1分。

2.错别字每3个扣1分，重现不计，最多扣2分。

3.字迹工整的加1─2分;字迹潦草，难以辨认的酌情扣1-3分。

4.字数不足550字，每少50字扣1分;不足400字，降一等。

5.凡认为有严重错误的答卷，评卷领导小组研究处理。

[深圳中考作文评分标准

小明做了一个梦。他梦见自己为北京奥运会做一名志愿者：他努力帮助来自世界各国的外国朋友……在交谈中，小明让外国朋友更多地了解北京。外国朋友感谢小明，并认为小明的英语非常好。小明很高兴，他甜蜜地笑了……

请你根据设定的梦境并加以想象，写一段 80 词左右的短文。开始语和结束语均已给出（不计入总词数）。

内容要求：

（ 1 ）帮助外国朋友；（ 2 ）与外国朋友交谈；（ 3 ）感谢小明；（ 4 ）小明很高兴。

词汇参考： try （ do ） one＇s best ， find （ that ）， heavy （ lost ）， carry （ show ， take ）， taxi （ car ， bike ）， on the way ， talk with （ about ）

Xiao Ming had a dream （梦） last night . In the dream ， he volunteered to serve （志愿列队） the Beijing Olympics .

Xiao Ming had a dream last night . In the dream ， he volunteered to serve the Beijing Olym pics . He tried his best to help the foreign friends from different countries . When he found a foreign friend worried in the street ， he went up to him and asked him what was the matter . The foreigner told Xiao Ming he was Jack ， and he forgot the way to the Sun Hotel . Then Xiao Ming stopped a taxi and took him to the Sun Hotel . Xiao Ming talked with Jack on the way and made Jack know more about Beijing . Jack thanked Xiao Ming very much and thought Xiao Ming＇s English was very good . Xiao Ming was very happy . He smiled and smiled ， then he woke up .

My hometown is a country known as "jujube township" town -- linze county. All say "landscape jiatianxia guilin, my home is not in guilin the wonderland is beautiful, but also has a small city of beauty. Town, the beauty of the static Shi green beauty, charming beauty, make each town residents of the mind is also beautiful.

To say small core of beauty, that they belong to the h and rokuen. There are more than thousand trees, trees, is a good place for summer!

Spring, the city is green, the leaves cui lust drops, h and rokuen, grass swinging with the breeze, the green grass, green leaves, all kinds of bright flowers together. Forsythia flower park blows the golden horn, square, various kite and baiyun mountain, everything is so quiet Shi.

People wear sandals in summer, h and rokuen step in waterways, music fountain, the children got into drill and adults were standing to the side, a smile the night in the square thick fragrance, barbecue flavor, mutton changing, town in summer is really hot!

Golden autumn, a town full of jujube aroma, h and rokuen jujube branches full of big, red jujube, it could make tea and can be used as a traditional Chinese medicine, passing pedestrians can resist the urge to take one. People in the street, selling red jujube mine, be happy.

Winter, although winter is so cold, but people is such a warm heart, a nice snow world, the groups of childrens play, added a few for city landscape for brilliance.

Not to have such a song? "Small story, full of joy and joy, if you come to town, much harvest", the beauty of the static Shi, charming beauty, unique beauty.

I love you -- -- hometown linze!

我的家乡是一个被祖国誉为“枣乡”的小城—临泽。都说“桂林山水甲天下”，我的家乡虽没有桂林那仙境般的美，但也别有一番小城美景。小城那静谥的美，绿色的美，迷人的美，使每个小城的居民心灵也美。

要说小城美的核心，那便属颐和绿苑了。那儿有千多棵树，绿树成荫，是避暑的好地方呢!

春天，小城是翠绿色的，树叶翠色欲滴，颐和绿苑里，小草随微风摆动，青的草，绿的叶，各色鲜艳的花聚拢而来。街心公园连翘花吹起金黄的小喇叭，广场里，千姿百态的风筝与白云戏耍，一切都是那么静谥。

盛夏，颐和绿苑里人们穿着凉鞋踏在水道里，音乐喷泉中，孩子们钻进钻出，站在一旁的大人个个露出笑容，广场上的夜市香味浓浓，烧烤味、羊肉串味，小城的夏天真是火辣辣啊!

金秋，小城充满了枣香味，颐和绿苑的枣树枝上挂满了又大又红的红枣，它可以泡茶，可以作中药，过路的行人都忍不住要尝一个。大街上，卖红枣的人们各各喜笑颜开。

隆冬，虽然冬天是那么的冷，可人们心中是那么暖和，雪的世界真好看，那一群群孩子的嬉戏，为小城景色增添了几争光彩。

不是有这样一首歌吗?“小城故事多，充满喜和乐，若是你到小城来，收获特别多”，静谥的美，迷人的美，独特的美。

我爱你——家乡临泽!

根据中文设置的情景和英文提示词语，写出语法正确，意思连贯的句子。所给的英文提示词语必须都用上。

上星期日，我们乘车去西山植树。一些学生种树，其他学生……

1.It, fine, last Sunday

2.we, go, West Hill, by bus

3.some, plant trees, other, carry water

4.because, we, work hard, tired, happy

5.all, know, stop… form, blow, and, city, make, beautiful

It was fine last Sunday. We went to West Hill by bus. Some students planted trees, others carried water. Because we worked hard, we were tired, but we felt happy. We all know trees can stop the wind from blowing the sand towards the city, and they can make the city beautiful.

桑德斯上校退休后拥有的所有财产只是一家靠在高速公路旁的小饭店。饭店虽小，但颇具特色，与众不同。可最受欢迎的、也是客人最爱吃的一道菜就是他发明烹制的香酥可口的炸鸡，仅此就给他带来了一笔可观的财富。多年来，他的客人一直对他烹制的炸鸡赞赏有加。可是令他万万没想到的是，由于高速公路改道别处，饭店的生意突然间也一落千丈，最后只好关门歇业。被逼无奈，桑德斯上校决定向其他饭店出售他制作炸鸡的配方，以换取微薄的回报。

在推销的过程中，没有一家饭店愿意购买他的配方，并且还不时地嘲笑他。一个人在任何年龄被人嘲笑都不是件令人愉快的事，更何况到了退休的年龄还被人嘲笑，这就更令人难以接受了。而这恰恰发生在了桑德斯上校身上。他不但被人嘲笑并且接连不断地被人拒绝，可见这些经历对他的影响有多么巨大。但他始终没有放弃，在没有找到买主之前，他开着车走遍了全国，吃住都在车上，就在被别人拒绝了1009次后，才有人终于同意采纳他的想法，购买他的配方。从此后他的连锁店遍布全世界;也被载入了商业史册。这就是肯德基的由来。

人们为了纪念这位桑德斯上校，就在所有的肯德基店前树立一尊他的塑像，以此作为肯德基的形象品牌。俗话说：“神枪手是一枪一枪打出来的!”缺乏坚持不懈的毅力或者认为自己不能得到自己想要的东西，这两者都是阻碍大多数人勇于改变的关键原因。如果你能够紧紧抓住自己的目标不放并坚持不懈，那么很快你就会超过大多数人。记住，是你掌握着自己的生活。如果你一心想达到一个目标，就一定会有办法取得成功。

导语：地球妈妈在流泪，我们人类做了太多伤害它的事情，让我们一起来拯救它吧!下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

Let’s Do Something to Save Our Environment

It is recently reported that some rivers and lakes have dried up in South China. A lot of fishes died. The bottoms of the rivers and lakes have become grass land. The water is becoming less and less because of the bad weather.

So everyone should do something to save our environment. First， we should save every drop of water， such as turning off the taps after using it and recycling the water. For example， we can water the plants and clean the rest room with our used water. Second， we should save energy， such as less turning on the lights and turning off the lights when we leave;Do more walking， more bicycling and less driving and so on. Third， we should ask our government to control the pollution from the factories.

Let’s act now from everything to save our environment. Don’t let our tears be the last drop of water in the world!

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让我们做些事情来拯救我们的环境

这是最近报道，一些河流和湖泊已经干涸的中国南方地区。许多鱼死了。河流和湖泊的底部变成了草地。由于天气不好，水变得越来越少了。

所以每个人都应该做些事情来拯救我们的环境。首先，我们应该节约每一滴水，如使用后关闭水龙头和回收水。例如，我们可以用我们用过的水给植物浇水和打扫休息室。第二，我们应该节约能源，比如我们离开时少开灯和关灯;多走路，多骑车，少开车等等。第三，我们应该要求政府控制工厂的污染。

让我们从一切行动来拯救我们的环境。不要让我们的眼泪成为世界上最后一滴水!

如果一百份试卷里都是清一色的“I think”简单句,那阅卷人读起来将会多么的乏味,乏味至极的阅卷人又如何能给得出高分?所以,我们在写句子的时候,要尽可能的变换句式和结构,让文章富于变化,错落有致。具体地说:中考作文中,我们可以尝试使用更多的复合句,主要是宾语从句、状语从句以及尝试变化语态。例如,2008年中考北京卷作文题,以汶川地震为背景描写一个叫做林浩的小英雄的故事以及自身感受。其中有一句细节描写叫做“他救出了自己的同学并步行七小时到达安全地点。”例文给出的句子是“he saved two of his classmates. Then he walked for seven hoursto safety。” 这句话我们可以改写成为一个从句:saving two of his classmates, Lin Haowalked for seven hours to safety。

如果再加上语态的变换,还可以改写成:Being saved from the earthquake, two of LinHao’s classmates walked for seven hours to safety with Lin Hao。这样的变化在作文中能够主动使用的话,一定会增加阅卷人的青睐,从而给你的文章增加获胜的筹码。

1、 内容完整，语句流畅，无语法错误，书写规范，给9-10分;

2、内容较完整，语句较流畅，基本无语法错误，书写较规范，给6-8分;

3、 内容不完整，语句欠流畅，语法错误较多，书写较规范，给3-5分;

4、只写出个别要点，语法错误较多，书写欠规范，只有个别句子可读或不知所云，给0-2分。

对考生的作文要求有四点：1、内容要完整。2、语句流畅。3、没有语法错误。4、书写规范。能达到上述要求的作文，都会得到相应的高分。所以，在写作文的时候，大家要牢记这些要求。

要做到内容完整，我们首先要认清看好题目的要求，抓住要点，注意文体。我们可以在写作之前好好构思一下，自己将从几个方面来写。是否能将所有内容都包含在内。在写完之后，再检查一遍。看看有没有内容的缺失。

要做到语句的流畅，这就要求有扎实的英语基本功。在平时的积累上，注意一些语义的表达方法。要尽量使用自己能够正确运用的语句和表达方式。注意句子之间的连贯性。这不仅仅指从语法上，也指句意上的连贯。

在初中阶段，考生应注意语法点有：动词单三形式，时态(包括：现在进行时，一般过去时，将来时)，定语从句(此项语法建议考生尽量不要使用)，语态，单复数，主谓一致，冠词等还有一些表达方式。比如，我非常喜欢足球。考生经常会写成I very like football.这样的错误一定要避免。

书写一定要规范。要了解英语作文的书写规则。同时，要知道应用文的写作方法。

除了以上的四个方面，还建议考生们要检查：单词的拼写、大小写和标点符号。

考试的时候，要尽量留出充足的时间给作文。这样，我们才能有足够的时间去构思，去打草稿。在评卷的时候，第一印象很重要，所以考生们一定要让自己的作文看起来舒服，干净，整齐。

中考英语中，很多学生自感基础很差，主动放弃了作文的15分。即便学生表达能力很差，但只要所写文章中包括题目要点中的部分信息，依然能得1-3分的最低档分数;如能完整表达题目给出的要点和要求，同时文章通顺，无严重语法和拼写错误，一般能得到4-11分的中档分。

The 21st century, the thought of the teenagers, we and our beloved one generation, will never be able to melt together, seems to have no why, I do not know why. Adults like to impose their ideas in a new generation of us, and we, must also accept the ideology of "unreasonable", if not accept, perhaps, in the eyes of an adult, our behavior is what is called a rebellious, not sensible, wings hard, but, you never know what we carry in our hearts, can only silently bear all this, buried our own thoughts, not move to the attraction.

We are the -- the future of The Times. We have our own dreams, we have our own in the future, we have our own life to live, all this, go to our own, you can never be with us life, the way back, but also to go on our own. Please let go of your generous hand, let us fly yourself.

Times are changing, the life also is changing. Different time, different people, have their own way. Dear, father, mother, we grow up, learn to walk, bumpy road ahead, lets face it alone, raising more than ten years, we wont forget, you also should have a rest.

二十一世纪，我们这些青少年的思想，与我们所敬爱的上一辈人，永远无法融在一起，似乎没有为什么，也不知道为什么。大人们喜欢把他们的思想强加在我们新一辈人的身上，而我们，也必须接受这种“无理”的思想，如若不接受，也许，在大人的眼睛里，我们的行为就是所谓的叛逆、不懂事、翅膀硬了，可是，你们永远不会知道我们心中所想的一切，只能默默地承受这一切，埋藏我们自己的思想，不动生色。

我们是这个时代的——未来。我们有自己的梦想，我们有自己的未来，我们有我们自己的生活要过，这一切，要我们自己去承担，你们永远不能陪伴我们一生，往后的路，还要靠我们自己去走。请你们放开你们那宽厚的手，让我们自己飞翔吧。

时代在变，生活也在变。不同的时代，不同的人，有自己的路。亲爱的——爸爸，妈妈，我们长大了，学会走路了，前面坎坷的路，让我们独自面对吧，十几年的养育之恩，我们不会忘记，你们也该休息休息了。