英语中考作文阅卷评分标准（精彩20篇）

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假若今天是香港回归5 周年纪念日，你观看了中央电视台的专题节目，看到了香港回归所发生的巨大变化。

根据下列要求写一篇英语日记，表达自己盼望祖国统一的心愿。

1. 香港、澳门和台湾自古以来就是中国的领土，由于历史的原因被分割。

2. 1997 年 7 月 1 日香港已经回归祖国， 1999 年 12 月 20 日澳门也回到了祖国的怀抱。香港和澳门的明天会更加美好。

3. 台湾是中国领土不可分割（ integral ）的一部分，中国人民，包括生活在台湾的绝大多数人都盼望台湾赶快回归祖国。

注：英语短文的标题已经给出，全文约 100 词。

How I Wish China Would Be United Sooner！

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How I Wish China Would Be United Sooner！

July 1st， 2002 Fine

Hong Kong and Macao are parts of China in history， but they were separated from the motherland for some political reasons. China has been getting richer and stronger since its opening to the outside world. On July 1， 1997， Hong Kong finally returned home. On December 20， 1999， Macao returned home， too. Great changes have taken place in both Hong Kong and Macao. It shows the development and great strength of our country.

Taiwan is an intergral part of China. The Chinese people as well as most of the people from Taiwan are looking forward to the day on which Taiwan will return home. We are sure that day will come sooner or later.

[中考英语关于香港回归几周年的作文

May first is a Sunday. And it is the Labor’s Day. My mother said to me :“Open your eyes！And look out of the window. What a fine day! Let’s go to park,” So my mother, my classmate and I went to the park. We took some foods in my schoolbag. On the way to the park. I saw the blue sky with snow-white clouds. I saw pear trees and some apple trees and so on. Below the trees, there are several kinds of flowers. It’s colorful, blue, red, yellow, pink, purple, orange and white. I saw some balloons and butterflies in the sky. I ate popcorn, cornflakes, banana and lollipop. They were wonderful.

In the afternoon, we went to the zoo. I visited the birds, mice, cats, dogs, budgies, hamsters, rabbits and so on.

May Day is my favorite day！

五月一日是一个星期日。这是劳动节。妈妈对我说：“打开你的眼睛，看看窗外。多么好的一天！让我们去公园，“所以我的母亲，我的同学和我去公园。我书包里带了一些食物。在去公园的路上。我看见蓝天白云。我看到一些梨树和苹果树等。在树下面，有几种不同种类的花。它是丰富多彩的，蓝色，红色，黄色，粉色，紫色，橙色和白色。我看到一些气球和蝴蝶在天空。我吃了爆米花，玉米片，香蕉和棒棒糖。他们都很棒。在下午，我们去了动物园。我参观了鸟类，老鼠，猫，狗，鹦鹉，仓鼠，兔子等。可能是我最喜欢的一天！

1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

【各档次的给分范围和要求】

第五档(很好)；(21-25分)

1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

2. 覆盖所有内容要点。

3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。

4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。

5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。

第四档(好)：(16-20分)

1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

2. 虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。

3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。

5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

6. 达到了预期的写作目的。

第三档(适当)：(11-15分)

1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。

2. 虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。

3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。

5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。

6. 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。

第二档(较差)：(6-10分)

1. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

2. 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。

3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。

5. 较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。

6. 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。

第一档(差)：(1-5分)

1. 未完成试题规定的任务。

2. 明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。  中国大学排名

3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

4. 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。

5. 缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。

6. 信息未能传达给读者。

不得分：（0分）

未能传达给读者仟何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清

2.评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3. 词数少于 80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。

4. 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。

5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受。

6. 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。

7. 内容要点可用不同方式表达，对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。

导语：英语写作中运用一些谚语或者名言会给人眼前一亮的效果哦，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文谚语句子，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

1. Actions speak louder than words. 事实胜于雄辩?

2. A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患难朋友才是真朋友?

3. A good beginning is half done. 良好的开端是成功的一半?

4. Where there is a will, there is a way. 有志者事竟成?

5. All roads lead to Rome. 条条大道通罗马?

6. Easier said than done. 说起来容易,做起来难?

7. Easy come, easy go. 来得快,去得快?

8. Every man has his weak side. 人人都有缺点?

9. Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母?

10. Look before you leap. 三思而后行?

11. Nothing in the world is difficult if you set your mind to it. 世上无难事,只怕有心人?

12. A life without a friend is a life without a sun. 人若无友,就如同生命中没有太阳?

13. All things are difficult before they are easy. 万事开头难?

14. Always prepare for a rainy day. 未雨绸缪?

15. As you sow, so shall you reap. 种瓜得瓜,种豆得豆?

16. I might say that success is won by three things: first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort. 成功要靠三件事才能赢得:努力,努力,再努力?

17. Don’t put off till tomorrow what should be done today. 有事莫推明天?

18. Practice makes perfect.熟能生巧?

19. Bad news has wings. 好事不出门,坏事传千里?

20. Honesty is the best policy. 做人以诚信为本?

21. 表因果的过渡语:for, because of, one reason is that… another reason is that…, thus, so, as a result (of)等?

22. 表转折的过渡语:but, yet, however, after all, in fact, while, on the contrary, instead of, unlike, although, otherwise,nevertheless, in spite of, after all等?

23. 表列举的过渡语:for example, such as, that is, like, as follows, in other words, and so on等?

24. 表推进的过渡语:what’s more, on one hand… on the other hand…, in addition to, as well, still, also, in other words, not only…but also…, besides, furthermore, moreover等?

25. 表总结的过渡语:in short, in a word, in general, in brief, in all, on the whole等?

1．习惯是养成的；

2．好习惯是福气；

3．坏习惯必须克服。

[写作导航]习惯不论好坏都是后天形成的，一旦形成，就很难改变；好习惯是祝福，许多成功人士都承认守时、早起、诚实和毅力等是早期形成的；坏习惯如粗鲁、懒惰、说谎、偷盗和诽谤等恶习是我们应努力避免的。

[范文]

Habits, whether good or bad, are generally acquired. When a person does a certain thing once and again, he is impelled by some unseen force to do the same thing repeatedly; thus a habit is formed. Once a habit is formed, it is difficult, and sometimes impossible, to shake it off. It is therefore very important that we should take great care in the formation of habits. Some bad habits formed in childhood may remain lifetime. Older persons also form bad habits, and in some cases they are ruined by these bad habits.

There are good habits which, when formed in early life, are great blessings. Many successful people declare that they owe much of their success and prosperity to the formation of such good habits as punctuality, honesty, and perseverance in early life.

Such habits as rudeness, laziness, stealing and slandering are bad habits. If we want to be useful to society, we ought to keep away from ail these vices, and strive to acquire those habits that are proven to be good for ourselves and others.

Dear Linda，

Im very glad that youll come to China to watch the Olympic Games. I know it isnt easy to learn a foreign language，but I have some ideas that may help. Firstly，its very important to listen to the teacher carefully in class and make some notes so that you can go over your lessons later. Secondly，try to catch every chance to practice speaking，both in and out of class. Dont be afraid of making mistakes. Then try to listen and read more in Chinese. Whats more， youd better plan your time well and study it regularly every day。

Above all，you should be confident in yourself and dont give up whenever you meet with difficulties. Im sure you will succeed through your hard work。

Best wishes and look forward to meeting you in China.

Mamma you gave life to me，Turned a babysintosa man，And mamma all you had to of fer Was a prom is e of a lifetime of love,Now I know there is no other

love like a Mothers.Love for her child,I know that love so complete someday must leave.Must say goodbye,Goodbyes the saddest word,I＇ll ever hear.Goodbyes the last time I will hold you near,Someday you＇ll say that word and I will cry,It＇ll break my heart to hear you say Goodbye.

Mamma you gave love to me,And Mamma all I ever needed Was guarantee of you loving me,Cause I know there is no other love like a mother,the love you give will always live,You＇ll always be there every time I fall,You take my weakness and you make me strong,And I will always love you till forever comes.And when you need me,I＇ll be there for you always,I＇ll be there thru the lonely days.You are the wings that guide my

broken flight,and my shelter thru the raging storm,And I will love you till forever comes.

妈妈你给了我生命，从婴儿到老人，妈妈，你不得不更是舞会是E的一辈子的爱，现在我知道有没有其他的

爱情就像一个母亲。爱她的孩子，我知道，爱是如此完整的总有一天要离开。必须说再见，再见伤心的话，我＇将永远听到。再见最后一次我会抱着你靠近，总有一天你＇会说那句话，而我将会哭泣，它＇将打破我的心听到你说再见。

妈妈你给我爱，妈妈，所有我所需要的是保证你爱我，因为我知道有没有其他的爱，像一个母亲，你给的爱会永远活，你＇将总是有每次我跌倒，你拿我的弱点，你让我坚强，和我将永远爱你直到永远是。，当你需要我，我＇会永远在那里等你，我＇会有穿过寂寞的日子。你的翅膀，我的向导

破碎的飞行，和我的庇护通过肆虐的风暴，我会爱你直到永远。

[中考英语作文MY MOTHER’S LOVE

中考英语作文对考生的要求有四点：1、内容要完整。 2、语句流畅。3、没有语法错误。4、书写规范。能达到上述要求的作文，都会得到相应的高分。

一：先看一下扣分点：

1.内容方面：要点缺失，可酌情扣分。比如中考作文“I want to do something for my school”，若没有写一件具体的事情，是要扣3分以上的;若写的事情太过于虚幻，没有实际内容，也会扣1-2分。

2.字数：少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。

中考英语作文要求60字以上，标点符号不算，少了就要扣分。但是60字的作文能不能得高分?从我们拿到的实例作文来看，16分以上的作文，没有少于75字的，甚至少于80字的也少之又少。当然，也极少有超过100字的，因为中考试卷的短线格一共80个，在格子下面大约还有2行的空间，可以加20字左右，再多阅卷人就很难看清了，也会影响卷面的美观。所以，同学们如果想让作文得到高分，最好是让字数在75-100字之间。

3. 语法和拼写错误：每个扣0.5，重复错误不计;

4. 标点错误：每4个扣0.5.

二：加分点

除了这些扣分点，还有一些得分点：比如说作文的组织结构分，就是根据学生使用复杂句型、单词和谚语、俗语的情况来加分。

只要文章中有1个亮点，基本就可以争取到1分(3分的文采分是很难全部拿到的)。而这1分的亮点，是可以提前准备的。例如，有一些“万金油”式的复杂句型，例如强调句型、only相关的倒装句等，只要同学们多操练几次，几乎是一定能用到作文当中，从而为自己争取到这1分。

其次就是卷面分

很多家和同学，尤其是部分书法并不是十分整洁的同学，都会关心是否真的有“卷面分”的存在。虽然在阅卷标准里面并没有卷面分这一项，但是这个分数却真切地反映在了同学们的分数里面。

据阅卷老师的经验，在阅卷的时候并不是按这3个部分逐项打分的，而是在第一遍读完全文之后，心里已经形成了一个“印象分”，然后再细读第二、三遍，把印象分分配到各个打分部分。因此，这个“印象分”就非常重要，而同学们的书法，也正是在这个环节，影响到了自己的分数。所以初三的考生，如果书法不好，一定要注意。所谓的书法并不需要写的很漂亮，符合3个简单的标准即可：没有斜体、没有连笔、涂改较少。

最近几年的中考英语当中，很多省市已经摆脱了单一作文模式，采用一大一小两个作文相结合的模式。例如，去年辽宁沈阳中考英语作文就是一个小作文，应用文-写假条，加上一个大作文，汉语提示作文构成。今年，北京中考英语作文也将是两个，一个看图作文在加上一个提示作文构成。这一讲，我们先来学习一下看图作文的写法。

看图作文要求考生按照所给图画，通过合理的联想将一组画面的内容正确地表达出来。看图作文与其他类型作文的不同之处在于，它除了要求考生有英语语言表达能力，还要求考生有观察能力、分析能力和想象能力。

写好看图作文应注意的事项1、结合文字提示，正确理解图意。一般情况下，看图作文在提供图画的同时也附带有简要的文字提示，我们可以利用文字提示去正确地理解图意，得到要点。切忌孤立地看图而忽视文字提示。

写作从图画的细节出发。所谓细节，就是指图画中的人物、事件、地点、环境、时间、动作等。依据图画细节，就可以把图画的内容用英语具体而生动地表达出来了。

(三)例题分析(例题)

同学们，看到下面的四幅图片及相应的报道后，你感到最担忧的是哪两种情形?请简述你担忧的理由并提出建议或希望。

要求：

⒈ 从所给素材中任选两种情形进行阐述，不可多选或少选。

⒉ 条理清楚，意思连贯，语句通顺，标点正确;

⒊ 词数 80 ～ 100。

参考词汇： 建议 suggest v. suggestion n.

气体 gas n. 污染 pollution n.

THE POLLUTIONS

① One third of the worlds people dont have enough clean water.

② More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

③ People are disturbed quite often by kinds of noises.

④ Every person in our city makes about 1.8 kilos of rubbish every day.

这道看图作文题，主题和图片连接得不是很紧密。从考查的形式上来说，虽是看图，实质上却属于提示性的作文。这个作文应该结合个人的观点，选择的余地还是很大的。做这个题应该注意几个方面：

1、认真读题。注意，题目虽然给了四幅图，但是却只要求写其中的两个就行。

2、题意要求的是阐述个人的观点-最担忧的两种情形。而不是对图片进行描述。

3、结合所给的提示。提示中，对每种污染都进行了阐述，考生可以这些描述进行写作。

4、注意字数，语法，拼写等，避免错误。

下面是两个例文，大家可以参考一下。

One possible version:

The environment is becoming worse and worse. There are many kinds of pollution I worry about. The most serious two are water pollution and air pollution, because people cant live healthily with dirty water and polluted air, nor can animals. More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

I think factories should not pour dirty water into the river directly or produce more waste gas. Wed better go on foot or by like instead of by car, because more cars mean more waste gas. We should make our world more and more beautiful.

Another possible version:

The first fact I worry about is noise pollution. People cant sleep well if there is too much noise. Thats why so many people prefer to live in the countryside rather than live in the noisy city. I suggest all the factories and cars shouldnt make terrible noises. If they make terrible noise that isnt allowed, they will be fined, and we can also produce the cars which cant make terrible noise.

The other pollution is rubbish pollution. If everyone makes so much rubbish, one day we may live in a world filled with rubbish. Some people throw the waste paper about. I suggest rubbish should be put into different kinds of dustbins or paper bags.

下面，我们来看看这道题的评分标准。一般来说，各地的评分标准都和下面的这个标准差不多。这个最高的标准，实际上也就是我们写作的目标。

评分标准：

1. 内容完整，语句流畅，无语法错误，书写规范，给9-10分;

2. 内容较完整，语句较流畅，基本无语法错误，书写较规范，给6-8分;

3. 内容不完整，语句欠流畅，语法错误较多，书写较规范，给3-5分;

4. 只写出个别要点，语法错误较多，书写欠规范，只有个别句子可读或不知所云，给0-2分。

看图作文不可小视。希望大家掌握答好这种题型的要点，并积累词汇。

导语：你有什么印象深刻的同学吗?他做了什么事呢?下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

请以My Classmate为标题写一篇记叙文

要求:1、主题明确。语言流畅。思路清晰。 2、字数在100字以内。

思路点拨

写记叙文要按照事物发展的客观规律叙述,所叙述的内容要交代清楚,条理清晰,重点突出,主次分明,详略得当。

这篇文章也是记叙文,主人公应该用第三人称,时态以一般过去时为主。本文以主人公为中心线索,以一、两件事件为重点内容去组织材料,反映主人公的形象特征。整个内容情节要合情合理,有真实感,叙述时可按事情发展的顺序进行,同时加以点评。

参考范文

My Classmate

Liu Kai is my classmate. He is a good student and always ready to help others.

One day on his way to school, he saw a little girl crossing the road. A car was coming towards her quickly and the girl was too frightened to move. The car nearly hit her. Just then LiuKai rushed up to her and caught her by the arm. The little girl was saved. She told him where she lived, and he took her home. When LiuKai hurried into the classroom, the teacher had already begun his lesson. He told the teacher why he was late. He was then praised for what he had done.

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我的同学

刘凯是我的同学。他是个好学生，总是乐于助人。

有一天，在上学的路上，他看见一个小女孩正在过马路。一辆汽车飞快地向她驶来，女孩吓得不敢动了。汽车差点撞到她。这时刘凯冲到她面前，抓住了她的胳膊。小女孩得救了。她告诉他她住在哪里，他带她回家。当刘凯i赶到教室时，老师已经开始上课了。他告诉老师他为什么迟到了。他被称赞为他所做的。

在我们的语文考试中，书写作文是必不可少的一环。以下是小编搜索整理的深圳中考作文评分标准，我们来看看下文。

一类卷（43-50分）

A.内容：切合题意 思想健康 中心突出 内容充实 感情真切

B.语言：语言顺畅 没有语病

C.篇章：结构完整 条理清楚

评分细则：

①具备ABC三项条件的，评一类下(43-45分)。

②具备其中一项条件的，评一类中(46-47分)。

③立意深、构思巧、语言生动形象的，评满分;具备其中两项条件的，评一类上(48-49分)。

二类卷(35-42分)

A.内容：切合题意 思想健康 中心明确 内容具体 感情真实

B.语言：语言通顺 偶有语病

C.篇章：结构完整 条理较清楚

评分细则：

以38分为基准分，适当浮动：

①具备B项条件，而另两项只达到三类卷标准的，酌情减分。

②具备B项和另一项条件，其余一项达到三类卷标准的，获得基准分。

③具备ABC三项条件的，酌情加分;或材料新鲜，或立意新颖，或结构新巧，可评为二类上。

三类卷(27-34分)

A.内容：基本合题意 中心尚明确 内容尚具体 感受尚真实

B.语言：语言尚通顺 语病不多

C.篇章：条理尚清楚 能分段

评分细则：

以30分为基准分，适当浮动：

①基本具备ABC三项条件的，获得基准分;,

②其中B项较好的，酌情加分;

③另有某些缺点的，酌情减分。

四类卷(18-26分)

A.内容：偏离题意 中心欠明确 内容不具体

B.语言：语言不通顺 语病较多

C.篇章：条理不清楚

评分细则：

以22分为基准分，适当浮动：

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为四类卷，获得基准分;

②另两项较好的，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

五类卷(0-17分)

A.内容：文不对题 不知所云

B.语言：语病严重 文理不通

C.篇章：结构混乱 不能完篇

评分细则：

以13分为基准分，适当浮动:

①凡属ABC三项之一者，评为五类卷，获得基准分;②其他两项尚好，酌情加分;

③兼有ABC两项以上情况的，酌情减分。

说明：

1.漏写题目扣1分。

2.错别字每3个扣1分，重现不计，最多扣2分。

3.字迹工整的加1─2分;字迹潦草，难以辨认的酌情扣1-3分。

4.字数不足550字，每少50字扣1分;不足400字，降一等。

5.凡认为有严重错误的答卷，评卷领导小组研究处理。

[深圳中考作文评分标准

In our accommodations, many students have computers. Also we can see in the electronic reading room and the cybercafés, rows of students sit in front of the monitors. Computers play an important role in our everyday life.

We use computers to cope with files and photos etc. And the internet is just a large database and we can get on the internet to search for anything we need through the computers. We can keep in touch with the others with the emails, msn and QQ etc. Enjoying ourselves in music, games and movies can loosen us after nervous classes.

Each coin has two sides. Disadvantages of the computers can also do harm to us. Most of us students use the computers more to play games and chat with strangers than searching for useful information. That’s a waste of time. There is so much rubbish on the net, which are some medium messages about crime or sex. It does harm to our minds.

From all above, we should learn to use computers in our own right ways. The computers doesn’t have no responsibility, it depends on the way we use them.

Food safety is very important for every one of us, because food safety is related to the physical and mental health of each and every one of us.

We eat, for example, often eat junk food will cause great harm to the body. So the first thing to see if you eat food safety food, generally have the safety and production of a trademark can we eat, because of security and production of a trademark in general can guarantee food safety. If food has environmental protection sign, so much the better, because environmental protection sign of food to put it another way of green food, eat more security, and nutrition. So I suggest that we eat more green food.

In fact we all have a common bad habit, that is love to eat junk food.

What is junk food? We love to eat KFC, McDonalds, usually happy Tom inside of Fried food is junk food, and it is the small food is junk food sold outside the school gate.

Ill give you an example to eat KFC: there is a person, every day he is to eat KFC, the results longer than pig fat, ugly. Students often eat at the school gate shop in the small food also easy to cause the stomach is bad.

So we must not eat KFC and other 3 without the product.

食品安全对我们每一个人都很重要，因为食品安全关系到我们每一个人的身心健康。

例如我们吃东西的时候，经常吃到垃圾食品就会对身体造成很大的伤害。所以首先要看看你吃的食品是不是安全食品，一般要有安全商标和生产商标我们才能吃，因为安全商标和生产商标一般可以保证食品安全。假如食品有环保标志，那就更好了，因为环保标志的食品换一种说法就是绿色食品，吃了更安全，而且还有营养呢。所以我建议大家多吃绿色食品。

其实我们大家都有个共同的坏习惯，那就是爱吃垃圾食品。

那什么是垃圾食品呢?我们平常最爱吃的肯德基、麦当劳、开心汤姆里面的油炸食品就是垃圾食品，还有就是学校门口卖的小食品也是垃圾食品。

我给大家举一个吃肯德基的例子：有一个人，他每天都是吃肯德基，结果长的比猪还胖，多难看。同学们经常吃学校门口店子里的小食品也容易引起肠胃不好。

所以我们大家一定不要吃肯德基和其他的三无产品。

You are writing a complaint to the manager about the hotel.

题目：你向饭店经理写信投诉酒店服务。

(以e-mail的形式出现)

On the whole, my stay here was satisfactory. The hotel was comfortable and the room was bright, but it was too dirty. Whats more the food was compeletely awful and the service was really terrible. I have stayed in your hotel for several times and everything is getting worse, though the price is fair.

总体而言，我在这边住得比较满意。酒店很舒服，房间也很明亮，但是太脏了。另外，这儿的食物太糟糕了，服务也很差。我已经在这里住过好几次了，虽然价钱还不错，但每件事都越来越糟糕。

Please try to clean the room a bit more often and find someone who is capable of cooking and who knows how to talk friendly to others.

请时常打扫一下房间，找个真正懂烹饪的和懂得跟别人和睦相处的员工!

参考范文：

We talked about the advantages and disadvantages of internet shopping these days. Some students think its very convenient for us to go shopping on the internet. The shops on Internet ，for example taobao.com, 360buy.com are open for almost 24 hours a day, so we can buy something we want at any time if we like. Whats more, we neednt to wait in a queue.

However, some students disagreed with them. We cant see the things while we are shopping. So we are not sure whether they are good or not.. Besides, we cant enjoy the happiness of shopping with our friends.

例1：

National Day is coming,and we can have a seven-day.My family are going to Hainan.Its a good seaside city.We are staying there for a week. We are going to the beach and going swimming in the sea.Were visiting Tianya Haijiao,Wanquan River and many other beautiful places.I think well have a good time there.

国庆节来了，我有七天的假期。我们一家去海南。那是一个美丽的海滨城市。我们在那里待上一个星期。我们去沙滩，还在海里游泳。我们游览“天涯海角”，菀泉河还有别的许多好地方。我想我们在那里会玩得很开心。

例2：

National Day Holidays

I went to my cousins house on the first day of the holidays and got a piece of good news that his wife was pregnant;She said shes worrying about getting fat,but on her face there was a unconcealable pleasure of conceiving a baby.My cousin told me that hell educate his child in a severe way,with a future fathers matureness.Im happy for them.:)

Yesterday,our research schools soccer team had a match with the graduate students from the department of international business.It was almost a close game in the first half,but we seemed lacking of vigor in the second half,so,we lost the game.

Half of the National Day holidays have passed by...life still goes with good and bad times.

国庆假期

我去表哥家在第一天的假期和有一条好消息，他的妻子怀孕了；她说她的担心发胖，但她脸上有掩饰不住的怀孕的喜悦。我表哥告诉我他将教育他的孩子在一场严重的方式，用未来的父亲的口吻。我为他们高兴。：）

昨天，我们的研究学校的足球队有比赛与国际商务系的研究生。这几乎是一场势均力敌的比赛的上半场，但我们似乎缺乏活力，在下半年，但是，我们失去了游戏。

有一半的国庆假期已经过了……生活仍然持续好与不好的时光。

请你阅读你的加拿大网友Tommy的e-mail，根据e-mail的内容，给他写一封回信.

Dear Li Lei,

I havent heard from you for a long time. Im glad to tell you that Ill visit Beijing this summer vacation. It is said that Beijing is a great city with a long history and more changes have taken place since the 2008 Olympic Games. I would like to know something about Beijing, such as places of interest, the environment, traffic and people there.

Im looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours,

Tommy

★ 范文

Dear Tommy,

Im glad to know you will come to Beijing.

Beijing, the capital of China, is one of the largest cities in the world. There are many places of interest, such as the Summer Palace, the Forbidden City and the Great Wall. All of them are beautiful and well-known to the world. Great changes have taken place in Beijing since we successfully held the 2008 0lympic Games.

Now, people pay more attention to the environment. More trees and flowers have been planted. For the traffic, it is very convenient for people to travel around Beijing, because several new subway lines have been built. If you come to Beijing, you will find people here are very friendly and helpful. Whats more, a lot of people can speak English. Beijing is really an attractive city with a long history.

Im looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours,

Li Lei

题目：你的好朋友某某沉迷于电脑游戏中，影响了学习。作为他的好朋友，你打算怎么帮他呢?请用下面所给的提示词写一篇不少于80字的短文。字迹工整，语言流畅。

提示词：give up concentrate on be (become)interested in

范文：

Li Hua spent too much time playing computer games and he fell behind others. As a good friend of his, I must do something to help him.

Firstly, I think it’s very important for him to learn lessons well. He should spend most of his time on his study instead of computer games. Secondly, I must tell him that playing computer games too much is bad for his health, especially for his eyes. So he must give it up. I can play more sports with him after school. Maybe he will become more interested in sports than computer games. And then Ill ask him to concentrate more on his study. Of course, I will try my best to help him with all his subjects. I think I can do it in many fun ways and let him find much fun in studying. At the same time, Ill ask both his parents and our teachers to help him, too. If I try these, Im sure he will make great progress soon.

切入分为54分

1.紧扣题旨，立意深刻，构思新颖。能真实生动叙写有关“纪念日”的故事，(公共的、自己的或他人的，现实的或历史的)并能抒发真情实感，或能阐释有关“纪念日”在人类进步发展、社会文化传承等方面重要意义，内容丰富，结构严谨，可从65分切入。语言精彩的，最高可判70分。要对照“发展等级”细则，准确赋分;要发现好文章，准确判高分。

2.符合题意，立意准确。能紧扣“纪念日”选材作文，中心突出，内容充实，结构完整，语言有鲜明特色的，可从60分切入。

3.符合题意。中心基本明确，结构基本完整，语言通顺，可从54分切入，视语言表达水平上下浮动。

4.写记叙文仅是对所叙对象轻描淡写，缺乏情感体验;写议论文仅对“纪念日”空谈泛谈，而无真材实料，观点缺乏清晰有序的表述;写成了“纪念”，忽视了具体“日子”，可在48至53分之间赋分。记叙文中缺乏基本要素，议论文中出现以叙代议、点据不一，比照同等情况降低一档赋分(一档4至5分)。行文若即若离，可在42至47分之间赋分。

5.不解题意，立意偏颇(所写内容不属于“纪念日”，或全无“纪念”价值)，硬贴标签，结构不完整，语言欠通顺，最高不超过41分。如胡编乱造、违背常理，文字表述低下，在41分以下赋分，最低可判25分。抄袭套作不超过20分。

6.错别字，每错一字扣1分，扣满3分为止;篇幅不足400字，最高30分，依实际情况定;篇幅基本完整，字数不足者，每少50字扣1分，扣满3分为止。

This morning, my father took me to school by bike. I sat at the back of the bike, eating abanana. After I ate it up, I threw the skin onto the street randomly. No sooner had I done thisthan I realized that I had done something bad to our environment. And maybe someone wouldstep on it and tumbleover. I must pick it up. Thinking of these, I asked father to stop. I jumpedoffthe bike and ran back to pick up the banana skin and threw it into a roadside dustbin. Seeingthis, father praised me and I felt very happy.

In future I will protect the surroundings more consciously and think more about others.

上学路上

今天早晨，爸爸骑车带我去上学。我坐在后车座上，吃着香蕉。吃完后，我顺手将香蕉皮扔到了街上。我马上意识到我的所作所为破坏了我们的环境，或许有人会踩在上面而跌倒，我必须把它拾起来。想到这些，我让爸爸停车。我跳下自行车，跑回去拾起香蕉皮，并扔到了路边的垃圾箱里。看到这些，爸爸表扬了我。我感到很高兴。

将来我要更自觉地保护周围的环境，更多地为他人着想。