英语中考作文阅卷评分标准（合集20篇）

中考英语作文范文春节见闻

Things Happened in Spring Festival Today, I went shopping with my parents, grandparents, aunts, uncles, and cousins. It was a rare

occasion because we hardly only get together few times in a year as a big family. On the way to the shopping mall, we watched the lion dance. Overall, we had an unforgettable day.

6月5日( June 5)是世界环境保护日， 我们周围的环境变得越来越糟糕，污染越来越严重。环境问题影响着人们的工作，学习，生活等，而我们的工作，生活，生产等又使环境污染越来越严重....。。如何保护我们的环境? 请以“ How to protect/save our environment/world? ”为题写一篇短文。

提示：存在问题：1.水污染越来越严重;2.砍伐森林严重;3. 大气污染严重;4. 白色垃圾等。

要求：如何改善/保护环境?至少：3---4个方面， 80字左右的。

★ 范文

How to protect/save our environment/world?

The environmental pollution is worse and worse /more and more seriously today. Water is polluted; we have no clean water to drink. Many trees are cutting down, some animals is getting less and less. Some factories are pouring dirty air in the sky, the population is increasing faster and faster, resources are getting less and less…etc. Not only does it affect our lives and health, it but also has a great affection in the future. Peoples health has been greatly affected by air, noise and water pollution. Many people died of diseases. In order to live a better life, we need protect our world。

We shouldn’t throw away rubbish everywhere. We want to recycle, reduce, reuse things .Don’t waste things. This saves money and reduces pollution. Use things for as long as possible. We don’t use plastic bags. We must plant more trees and stop the people cutting them .We hope our world becomes more and more beautiful。

我了解到目前很大一部分学生的作文都处在15分左右，写作满分25分，15分也就是个及格分，那么15分和20多分的作文到底差在哪里?这个问题很容易回答。15分的作文中规中矩，该对的都对，包括内容要点的完整，语法与词形的正确，但是全都是简单句子的堆砌，没有任何亮点。而20多分的作文在句型词汇方面就做了很好的包装，它的句子穿的衣服已经不是校服，而是李宁、耐克，或者是阿迪，所以让人觉得很“拽”，而高考英语写作要的就是这种很“拽”的感觉。

中考英语作文：Shopping on the Internet

With the development of the Internet and the popularization of computers, shopping on the Internet has become a commonplace in our life. Here consumers can buy almost everything they need.

Shopping on the Internet has a lot of advantages, of which the most important is perhaps its convenience. People dont have to waste a lot of their energy and precious time to go from one shop to another to choose the commodities they like. This is especially desirable to the old, the sick and the busy people who cannot go to the shops in person. The goods come in all shapes, sizes and colors on the Internet. All they need to do is to sit in front of their computers and click the mouses. The commodities they order will be delivered to them promptly.

However, shopping on the Internet also has its disadvantages. The first disadvantage is that the consumers cant see the goods or try them on personally. Sometimes, the real goods may not be the same as what they have seen on the computer. The second disadvantage is that some shops on the Internet are not registered. They will never deliver anything to you after they get the money from you. Once cheated, you will find that you have nowhere to go to complain.

中考英语作文：网上购物

随着互联网的发展和电脑的普及，网上购物已成为我们生活中司空见惯的事情了。消费者在这里几乎可以买到所有他们需要的东西。

网上购物有很多优点，其中最重要的也许是它的方便。人们不必浪费了很多精力和宝贵的时间去从一个商店到另一个选择，他们喜欢的商品。这是可取的是老人，病人和忙碌的人们谁不能亲自去商店。商品的形状，大小和颜色在互联网上。所有他们需要做的是坐在电脑前，点击鼠标。他们的商品订单将交付给他们及时。

但是，网上购物也有其缺点。第一个不利因素是，消费者不能看到商品或亲自试穿他们。有时候，真正的货物不同他们所看到的电脑上得。第二个缺点是，一些商店在互联网上没有登记。一旦骗了，你会发现，你已经无处可去抱怨。

中考英语作文带翻译：网上购物(Shopping on the Internet)，以供各位同学们呢参考，在学习英语作文的时候，也多注意网上购物的利弊!

I still remember the Titanic, though its a big ship but it still sunk, so, in my opinion, the best ship is the friendship. Friendship is one of the most important things in everyones life.

我还记得泰坦尼克号，但它是一个大的船，但它仍然沉没，所以，在我看来，最好的船是友谊。友谊是每个人生活中最重要的东西。

When you’re down, friends lift you up. When you lose your way, friends guide you and cheer you on

当你失落时，朋友会让你振作起来。当你迷失方向时，朋友会引导你，鼓励你

everyone need friends because there are a lot of things that you cant deal with yourself, and the friend’s just make up for it.

每个人都需要朋友，因为有很多事情你不能处理自己的问题，和朋友只是弥补。

When you’re down, friends lift you up. When you lose your way, friends guide you and cheer you on

当你失落时，朋友会让你振作起来。当你迷失方向时，朋友会引导你，鼓励你

Friendship just likes the sun, it can make you fell warm though in the cold winter, friendship just likes the water in the desert, it can make you fell that in the world, there still has hope .in a word, the friendship is the same meaning as the greatness, selfness and devotion.

友谊就像太阳，它可以让你在寒冷的冬天温暖，友谊就像沙漠里的水，它可以让你爱上这个世界，还是有希望的。总之，友谊是伟大意义相同，无私和奉献。

To make friends ,adding a friend equals adding a way ,open your heart ,devote yourself ,let friendship make your world colorful 。

交朋友，增加一个朋友等于增加一个方法，打开你的心扉，奉献自己，让友谊使你的世界丰富多彩。

英语作文：

Of the fifth year, it is one of the most important traditional festival - Dragon Boat Festival in China.

On to this day, every family will eat rice dumplings, drink realgar wine, hang calamus, wormwood leaf, also held a rowing dragon boat game in some places...

On the Dragon Boat Festival, there are a very popular story. Have a great patriotic poet in ancient China, named qu yuan. In AD 278, on the day of the fifth day of the fifth lunar month, qu yuan under the despair and grief, in old luo, when a local people, immediately go fishing boat and always amiable form of dongting lake is always not see the body of qu yuan.

In order to show their grief, people swing the boat rivers, thereafter becomes for the dragon boat race. The people were afraid of river fish eat qu yuans body, from their home to rice into the river, lest the fish and shrimp spoiling of qu yuans body. Then formed the custom of eating zongzi...

According to the above story, these are all in memory of qu yuan and form a kind of custom. There are lots of traditional culture in our country, as a Chinese, I also to learn more about these splendid ancient culture.

China has many rich and colorful traditional culture, extensive and profound, has a long history. Because I grew up very love to eat dumplings, so the "Dragon Boat Festival" is very impressive.

中文翻译：

每年的五月初五，是我国的一个重要传统节日——端午节。

每逢到这一天，家家户户都要吃棕子、喝雄黄酒、挂菖蒲、艾叶、有些地方还举行划龙舟比赛……

关于端午节，有一个流传很广的故事。中国古代有一位伟大的爱国诗人，名叫屈原。在公元278年，农历五月初五的那天，屈原在绝望、悲愤之下，投入旧罗江，当地的百姓闻讯后，马上划船去打捞，一直行止洞庭湖始终不见屈原的尸体。

为了寄托哀思，人们荡舟江河之上，此后就变成为龙舟比赛。百姓又怕江河里的鱼吃掉屈原的身体，就纷纷从家里拿来米糰投入江中，以免鱼虾糟蹋屈原的尸体。后来就形成了吃粽子的习俗……

根据以上故事来看，这些都是为了纪念屈原而形成一种风俗习惯。我国还有许许多多的传统文化，作为一名中国人，我平时还要更多地去了解这些灿烂古代文化。

中国有许许多多丰富多彩的传统文化，博大精深，源远流长。由于我从小非常爱吃粽子，所以对“端午节”的印象非常深刻。

We often hear that different methods to teach children will have different result. And different children adapt different methods. Luckily, I think my parents’ teaching method fits me very much and I am glad to have such parents. They are my friends. We often talk and play together. They often tell me to be a kind-hearted person by words and they also act in that way. If they find that I have any wrong thought, they will try to correct it in a gentle way. If they find me do the same wrong thing again and again, they will criticize me badly, which makes me do not dare to do it next time. And nobody will speak for me.

我们常常听说教育孩子不同的方法会有不一样的结果。不同的孩子适合不一样的方法。幸运的是，我觉得我父母的教学方法非常适合我，我很高兴有这样的父母。他们是我的朋友。我们经常一起聊天一起玩。他们经常告诉我要做一个善良的人，他们也用行动证明了。如果他们发现我有任何不良的思想，他们会温和地纠正。如果他们发现我多次还犯同样的错误，他们就会重重地批评我，让我不敢再做第二次。也没有人会为我说话。

[中考英语作文：Teaching Children

新的英语课程标准引发了一系列变化，首先加强了指导性和可操作性；其次体现语言学习的规律和渐进性；再次体现了弹性和选择；第四有的地方降低了难度；第五有的地方提高了要求。对教学模式和教师本人提出了新的挑战,同时也提供了新的发展空间。

一、教师是活动的指导者，学生是活动的主体

《英语课程标准》的基本理念中提到“让学生在教师指导下，通过感知、体验、实践、参与和合作探究等活动方式，实现任务的目标，感受成功。学生在学习过程中进行情感态度和学习策略的调整，以形成积极的学习态度，促进语言实际运用能力的提高。”

这就要求我们英语老师要掌握一定的课堂和课外教学艺术，开展集趣味、知识、娱乐、教育于一体的英语活动，能为学生提供尽可能多的语言实践机会。教师要用直观形象的形体语言，丰富多彩的表情，幽默风趣的语言表达，使学生在轻松、愉快、和谐的氛围中复习旧知，学习新知，提高学习信心。

教学中教师要根据教学目标，学生的需要和客观条件，创造性地探索有效的教学方法，要学会活用教法突破难点。我们可以鼓励学生大胆地模仿，带表情说句子。如“I am hungry.”（可以作饥饿状）；“I am thirty.”（可以作口渴状）。在教单词或句子时，我们老师可以带领学生做动作，甚至做夸张的动作或用夸张的朗读语调，孩子们特别喜欢。“big”两手张开画个大圈，“small”用两手指做个特别小的小圈，“strong”出示手臂，并鼓起肌肉，“thin”做一个瘦的动作。学完单词后，老师做出动作，学生就会说出这个单词。

二、多用评价语，真诚激励。

《英语课程标准》的基本理念中对评价案例进行了重新整合和调整，补充了大量的可操作性比较强的评价方式和方法，提到“英语教学中提倡过程性评价方式，把对学生的评价贯穿到平常的学习过程之中。注重培养和激发学生学习的积极性和自信心。”

因为每个学生，都渴望得到老师的重视和肯定，渴望得到激励和赞许。让每个学生都能享受到鼓励、温暖的阳光，这样无论哪种知识水平、能力、层次的学生都能获得心理上的满足，从而使学生有一种积极向上的源动力。所以教师的评价语应丰富多彩，真诚激励。下面的句子应该多说：Good! Great! Wonderful! You are clever! Don’t worry!

三、面向全体学生、尊重学生的自主选择

《英语课程标准》的教学建议中提到“尊重每个学生，建立融洽、民主的师生交流渠道。”平时学生如果主动帮我拿教具，我会向他致谢“Thank you”，若不小心撞到了学生，我会很抱歉地道声“Sorry”……虽然是点点滴滴的小事情小细节，但我希望从中带给学生“师生平等”的观念。

老师因为尊重学生而更关注他们的个性发展，学生因为受到老师的尊重会更乐意亲近老师，也就更加尊敬老师，这种心灵上的沟通和交流，一旦形成健康的双向互动，正面效应就会成倍增长，师生关系也会更加和谐地向前发展。

总之，新课程下的课堂教学，应是通过师生互动、学生之间的互动，共同发展的课堂。它既注重了知识的生成过程，又注重了学生的情感体验和能力的培养。因此，我们在教学中对教材的处理、教学过程的设计以及评价的方式都要以学生的发展为中心，以提高学生的全面发展为宗旨，这才是课改的最终目标。

[英语课程标准的基本理念读后感

Nowadays, there are a considerable number of individuals who prefer to lead a low-carbon lifestyle which find expression in the fact that more and more commuters are using public transportation system in their daily life.

Low carbon lifestyle can endow us and our society with numerous benefits. Firstly, it goes beyond doubt that low carbon lifestyle contributes a lot to the environmental protection and it is a favorable way to slow down the rate of climate change of our earth, which also means a lot to our health.

We are supposed to undertake the responsibility to lead a low-carbon lifestyle, which is of great significance. And there is a diversity of measures we can take so as to lead such an environmental-friendly life. For one thing, we are expected to minimize the use of private cars, which emit a large amount of greenhouse gases. For another, we are supposed to cultivate the public awareness of energy conservation for energy in the world today is decreasing rapidly. For instance, we can turn off electrical appliances if not necessary as well as using renewable materials. Furthermore, at our leisure, we can seek opportunities to plant more trees which can absorb carbon-dioxide.

In brief, low-carbon lifestyle is nothing but the best choice for us and only in this way can we form a harmonious relationship with the environment.

如今,有相当数量的个体们喜欢领导一个低碳生活方式的表现,越来越多的通勤者使用公共交通系统在他们的日常生活。

低碳生活方式可以使我们和我们的社会有诸多益处。首先,它超越怀疑低碳生活方式很多有助于环境保护和它是一个有利的方式来减缓气候变化的速度,我们的地球,这也意味着很多我们的健康。

我们应该承担责任领导一个低碳生活方式,具有重要意义。和有一个多样性的措施,我们可以采取这样一个环保的生活。一方面,我们预计会减少私家车的使用,排放大量的温室气体。另一方面,我们应该培养公众对能源的节能意识是当今世界上迅速减少。例如,我们可以关掉电器如果没有必要使用可再生材料。此外,在我们的闲暇,我们可以寻找机会种植更多的树木可以吸收二氧化碳。

总之,低碳生活方式不过是我们的最佳选择,只有用这种方法我们才能形成一个和谐的关系与环境。

三 —六年级作文评分标准

1、内容 结构 语言 卷面

一 类 文：(100～90分)

内容：主题明确、内容具体、感情真实、符合作文要求

结构：结构严谨、条理清晰、分段表述

语言：语言流畅、用语准确、形象生动、不写错别字

卷面：卷面整洁、书写工整

二 类 文(80—89分) 内容：题较明确、内容具体、感情真实、符合作文要求

结构：结构完整、层次较分明、分段表述

语言：语言较通顺、用语较准确、形象较生动、不写错别字

卷面：卷面整洁、书写规范

三 类 文 (70—79分)

内容：主题基本明确、内容比较具体、有感情表达、偏离作文要求

结构：结构较合理、层次欠清楚、分段表述

语言：语言较通顺、用语较准确、有形象刻画、少许错别字

卷面：卷面较整洁、书写较规范

四 类 文(60—69分)

内容：主题基本明确、内容不够具体、离题

结构：层次较清楚、结构较乱

语言：语言基本通顺，有少量语病

卷面：卷面较整洁、书写较规范

五 类 文(60分以下)

内容：中心不明确、内容不具体、偏离题意

结构：条理不清、结构混乱

语言：语句不通顺

卷面：卷面杂乱、字迹不清

注：1)没有标题扣5分。

(2)满分100，酌情按分值打分。

(3)出现多篇作文雷同的，只判其中一篇实分，其它降两等计。

(4)分每本试卷在拆卷前相关负责人要进行抽查，必要时可重评。

(5)特色加分(3分)。达到下列三项之一者可加1—3分。

① 感情真挚，有自己的深切感悟。

② 构思或选材新颖，见解独特，有个性。

③ 语言生动，有文采。

our city is a new and developing city, and was built at the beginning of 1980s. the infrastructure for water, gas, electricity and other energy in this area is complete and sufficient.

from here one can travel to any place by sea, by air or by land. and there is a highway leading to the capital, beijing. besides there are many other advantages for the investors to work here. for example, the areas around this city are rich in natural resources.

the public order is very nice and so on. the most impor ant. thing is that the government of this city supports foreign investors in many respects. in a sentence, this city is filled with enthusiasm and vigor. it is a good place for investors.

导语：写英语作文的时候适当引用一些名言警句，能够给我们的作文加分哦，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语素材，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

01. Practice makes perfect.

熟能生巧.

02. Time is money.

时间就是金钱

03. Easier said than done.

说来容易做来难

04. Where there is a will, there is a way.

有志者事竟成.

05. Look before you leap.

三思而后行.

06. Knowledge is power.

知识就是力量

07. God helps those who help themselves.

自助者天助.

08. Nothing is impossible to a willing heart.

心之所愿，无事不成

09. It’s never too old to learn.

活到老，学到老

10. No pains, no gains.

不劳无获

11. Once in a blue moon.

千载难逢

12. To make the impossible possible.

将不可能变为可能

13. Failure is the mother of success.

失败乃成功之母

14. A friend in need is a friend indeed.

患难见真情

15. First things first.

先做重要之事

16. Great minds think alike.

英雄所见略同

17. Rome was not built in a day.

成功并非一朝一夕的事

18. All that glitters is not gold.

闪光的未必都是金子

19. East or west, home is the best.

金窝银窝不如自家草窝

20. Time and tide wait for no man.

时间不等人

21. There is but a secret to success—Never give up!

成功只有一个秘诀—永不放弃!

22. Where there is life, there is hope.

有生命必有希望

23. Beauty will buy no beef.

漂亮不能当饭吃

24. Better late than never.

迟做总比不做好

25. Every little helps.

点滴都有用;积少成多

26. The shortest answer is doing.

最简短的回答就是行动

27. No news is good news.

没消息，就是好消息

28. Well begun, half done.

好的开始是成功的一半

29. All for one, one for all.

人人为我，我为人人

30. One false step will make a great difference.

失之毫厘，谬以千里

31. Facts speak louder than words.

事实胜于雄辩

32. As the tree, so the fruit.

种瓜得瓜，种豆得豆

33. To live is to learn; to learn is to better live.

活着为了学习，学习为了更好的活着

34. Like and like make good friends.

趣味相投

35. All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.

只学习不玩耍聪明的孩子也变傻

越来越多汽车进入我们的家庭生活，改善了我们的生活，但同时也带来了很多问题，如塞车和车祸，给家庭和社会带来极大的危害。作为中学生，我们应该怎样做呢?

请写一篇有关交通安全的短文(80字左右)

内容包含：

1、遵守交通规则，如走人行道/过斑马线。

2、别在街道上或马路上玩耍和踢球。

3、可以适当增加内容，让短文通顺，过渡自然。

4、参考词汇：sidewalk 人行道 zebra-crossing 斑马线

注：第一段已给出，不计入总数

参考范文：

With more and more cars coming into our families, we are

With more and more cars coming into our families, we are happy that it has greatly improved our life. But unluckily, it has also brought many problems, such as heavy traffic and traffic accidents。

Traffic safety is everybodys business. We must obey the rules. For example, we must walk on walk side, when we cross zebra – crossing, stop and look right and left, then go across fast. Don’t play football on the road .we can tell our parents not to drink before they drive, not to run through red lights, not to talk and laugh while driving etc。

We can say cars are coming into our life, but only when everybody thinks traffic safety is everybodys business can we be safe driving on roads and walking on sidewalks.

Last week, the cat that our family raised for two years had lost. All of us searched every corner of the house and even walked down the whole street block to ask others, but just got no information of it. At last, we had to give up, though I was sad, I had to get used to it. But last night, the cat showed up in our balcony. When I saw her, I just couldn’t believe, how she could walk home after missing for almost a week. This is miracle, for the first time I believe in miracle. My parents were so surprised and happy to see our member return.

上周，我们家养了两年的猫不见了。我们搜查了房子的每一个角落，甚至跑到街上去问别人，但是都没有人见过她。最后，我们不得不放弃。虽然我很伤心，但我必须要去适应。不过昨晚，猫突然出现在我们的阳台上。当我看到她时，我简直不敢相信，她怎么会在失踪了近一个星期后还能回来。这是奇迹，我第一次相信奇迹。我父母也非常惊讶也很高兴看到我们的成员回来了。

[深圳市中考英语作文

Two secondary school teachers I remember show how different people can be though engaged in the same profession.

中学二级教师我记得如何不同的人虽然可以从事相同的职业。

Mrs. Wang, my philosophy teacher, sent us to sleep less than ten minutes when she started talking in class. When a head nodded, she would point at the dozing student and made threatening remarks. She said that she was bored teaching us. Some students in her eyes had no desire to learn. But the other teacher Mr. Li always had bright eyes in a smiling face and encouraging words which showed that he loved Chinese history he was teaching and wanted us to love it too.

王太太，我的哲学老师，给我们的睡眠时间少于十分钟的时候，她开始在课堂上说话。当一头点了点头，她会在打瞌睡的学生和威胁的话。她说，她厌倦了我们的教学。在她的眼睛里有些学生没有学习的欲望。但是，李老师总是有明亮的眼睛在微笑和鼓励的话表明他爱中国历史上他是教学要我们太爱它。

When it came to their attitudes to their students, they were different too. After Mrs. Wang finished her day`s lessens she felt that she had finished her job. Once when I asked her a question outside class about a term, she continued with preparation to leave and said that I could bring my question to class next week. Before I knew it she had put her keys into her handbag and walked out of the door. In the history class, however, a question even after the bell would still be given attention to by Mr. Li. He would rush to the board in a last minute attempt to clear up. Often he was seen with a number of students standing outside the classroom, discussing the day`s assignment.

当它来到他们的态度，他们的学生，他们是不同的。王太太完成她的天`后使她觉得她已经完成了她的工作。当我问她有关的术语类之外的一个问题，她继续准备离开，说我可以带我的问题下周上课。我知道她已经把她的钥匙在手提包，走出门前。然而在历史课，甚至，铃响后一个问题仍然会关注由李先生。他会冲到董事会在最后一分钟尝试清理。他经常看到许多学生站在教室外面，讨论一天的任务`。

Their methods of teaching were not like as well. Mrs. Wang stuck to the textbook and trained us how to memorize minute facts. However Mr. Li brought in films, maps, slides, tapes, anything that would help us learn. Once the whole class went to see the `film Lin Zexu` in order to better understand the history of the Opium War from 1840 to 1842.

他们的教学方法是不一样好。王太太在教科书和训练我们如何记住分钟的事实。但是李先生带来了电影，地图，幻灯片，录像带，任何能帮助我们学习。一旦整个班去为了更好地理解鸦片战争的历史，从1840到1842到`电影林则徐`。

Owing to these contrasts, I do not think I can forget either of my past teachers.

由于这些对比，我不认为我能忘记我过去的老师。

On Christmas morning， the children wake up very early. Some even turn on the light attwo o‘clock， and most of them are awake by six o’clock although it is not light in England for another hour or two at this time of the year.

Children look for their presents ， and the young ones play while the dinner is prepared. At about one o‘clock in the afternoon， the Christmas dinner is brought in . The turkey or chicken is quickly eaten . Children search in their Christmas pudding for new coins which are hidden in it . The rest of the day is full of games and eating until the happiest of all Christmas hollidays comes to an end.

根据中英文提示，与一篇日记，记叙一次(西塞山)郊游。(短文的开头已经给出。)

要求：

1.短文应包括汉语和英语提示内容。

2.语句通顺，意思连贯。

3.书写工整，卷面整洁，标点符号正确。

4.字数不少于80个英语单词。

Sunday, May 1st

I got to school very early. Our class took a special bus to Xisai Mount. We got to the foot of the mount at 8:30.We began climbing the mount soon. On our way the air was so fresh and the scenery was so beautiful. Everybody was talking and laughing.We reached the top at about 10:00. The Yangtze River appeared in the north, and over the river there was a great bridge. We felt very relaxed. Seeing some birds flying in the sky, I suddenly remembered a popular poem of Tang dynasty. " Birds are flying in front of Xisai Mount ,…". I kept feeling proud of our city.

扬州市2007年中考作文是半命题作文“吃_______”，由于题目紧扣学生生活，从阅卷情况看，考生人人有话说，有事叙，有情抒。考场作文中，就吃的本义实写的，有以吃的地点拟题的，如“吃在食堂，吃在家里，吃在扬州，吃在中国”等;有以吃的内容拟题的，如“吃西瓜、吃香蕉、吃鱼、吃龙虾、吃葡萄、吃

苹果、吃山芋、吃药”等;有以家长的语言为题的，如“吃了没、吃什么、吃多点”等。就吃的引申义虚写的，如“吃一堑长一智、吃(理解)书、吃(研究)透《论语》”等。但也有不少令人费解的题目，如“吃心、吃幸福、吃父爱、吃人类自己的日子”等。

这次中考作文阅卷中，我们看到了不少选材新颖、思想深刻、构思精巧、语言优美的考生佳作，但同时也暴露出了一些值得深思的问题。针对这些问题，同学们的写作思维也应作一定调整：

一、多一点描写少一点叙述

有些考生作文语言通顺，但由于缺少生动的描写而使文章显得空洞无物。因此，同学们在平常作文时，应首先注意将动作、心理、神态等描写训练到位。比如，“雨水冲不进窗来，在玻璃上痛哭，我在涕泗横流中承受着心灵的谴责”，这样情景交融的描写要比“我痛苦死了”的简单叙述的表现力不知强多少倍。

二、多一点真情少一点造作

有考生在《吃葡萄》一文中写自己“吃葡萄不吐葡萄皮”，因为母亲“已为我把葡萄皮吐了”，而母亲却“不吃葡萄倒吐葡萄皮”。这种情形用以写小时候倒是真实的，但写现在就未免有些造作了。

三、多一点创新少一点守旧

“吃”的内容千变万化，“吃”的方法各有千秋，如果思维封闭，立意平淡，不但容易“撞车”，还很难出彩。所以考场作文千万不能有从众心理，要“力求有创意地表达”。如写《吃的变化》的考场作文很多，但大多只是简单叙述由穷到富的故事，有一个考生却用书信体展开叙事，情感细腻，写出自己对父亲的感激之情。有考生以“吃透坚强”为题，题记就很有创意：“我们每个人都像是跃动在刀尖上的美人鱼，坚强是我们等待王子的永恒的力量。”

四、多一点规矩少一点随意

有的考生运用书信体、日记体、剧本等形式写作，但格式上却不合要求;有的考生通篇文章只有一段，且标点符号不规范，书写不工整，文面不整洁，因为没有按“规矩”办事，所以扣了不少冤枉分。另外，考场作文内容上也应该守一些规矩，如“吃得苦中苦，方为人上人”虽有一定道理，但不适宜在文章中作为正确的观点亮出来;“我情愿永远长不大，让姑父永远责备我，打骂我”，“让我们回到从前，让我变回无知而又好吃的猪吧”，这些可能存在的幼稚心理，写在中考作文中，让人哭笑不得。

写作导航

一、把“吃”写明

上面那些令人费解的题目，要将含义写明，如“吃幸福”的“吃”解释成“体验”，“吃父爱”的“吃”解释成“感受”，就容易让人接受。《吃在四季》这样写道：春，我吃着万物复苏之餐;夏，我吃着万物勃发之餐;秋，我吃着万物丰收之餐;冬，我吃着万物入睡之餐。应该写明，这里的“吃”是“欣赏”的意思。

二、把“吃”写巧

写《吃西瓜》的人不少，多数学生照搬《中学生作文选》上的范文，撞车撞得“人仰马翻”。有考生写成《吃西瓜的趣事》，加进了成语接龙、猜成语灯谜、对诗等情节，就巧妙得多。《吃的文化》写出了中西方饮食文化在改革开放大潮碰撞中迸发出的灿烂火花，令人炫目。《吃人参吃人生》是一篇小小说，写的是两个骗子的故事，一个骗子以假人参卖了个好价钱，正在得意之时，却发现原来人家用来买假人参的钱也是假的，这样的巧事揭示了一个道理：以诚待诚，以假换假;欺人者必自欺!

三、把“吃”写深

以“吃在扬州”为题的也不少，多数人写的是“吃富春包子、清蒸狮子头、扬州炒饭、巴湘龙虾、蒋家桥的锅贴子”等，“吃”得太多就难以消化，写得太杂就难以写生动。如果入题口小一点，把“吃”写得“深”一点，写出与之有关的生动故事，写出自己的深刻感悟，也就是说要写出新意才能诱人。同样是写吃，有人停留在表面，有人却能写出“吃与考试一样，是对做菜过程、做菜水平的检测”，有了这样深刻的感悟，文章就有了深度。《吃在中国?在吃中国!》写出了考生自己独特而又深刻的思考：几年前，广东人吃果子狸，吃出了“非典”，造成了巨大的经济损失;中国发达地区食品浪费一年的总和将近是希望工程刚创办时几年捐款的总和，人们吃掉的是“国家的资源以及民族的美德”;吃青蛙、吃中华鲟及“长江三鲜”，吃掉了生态平衡，吃掉了和谐的自然环境。结尾说：“想到这些，我茫然了：我们吃在中国?我们在吃中国!”在吃上作这样深刻的思考，作文能不受到阅卷老师的青睐吗?

点评：这篇阅卷感言从作文写作角度给学生作出指导，要想做到文质兼美的文章，除了选材新颖、思想深刻、构思精巧、语言优美外，还应该多描写、多真情实感，多一些创新和规矩。

Nowadays, there is often a lack of understanding between parents and children. Children always complain that their parents are out of date, while parents can’t approve of what their children say and do. Thus, a big generation gap is formed.

如今，往往是缺乏了解父母与子女之间。孩子们总是抱怨他们的父母都是过时的，而父母并不赞同他们的孩子说的和做的。因此，形成一个大的代沟。

The gap remains wide for many reasons. Children want to be free to choose their own friends, select their own classes in school, plan their own future, earn and spend their own money, and generally run their own life in a more independent way than many parents allow. Also, young children wish to be understood by their parents, but most parents don’t quite understand their children. They regard it as their responsibility to teach their offspring traditional beliefs. They want them to be obedient and do well in school. Therefore, misunderstanding often arise from parents’ tendency to interfere in children’s daily activities.

产生代沟的原因有很多。孩子们想要自由的选择自己的朋友，选择在学校自己的班级，规划自己的未来，自己挣钱自己花，和一般运行自己的更独立的生活方式比父母允许的。同时，年轻的孩子们希望能够得到父母的，但大多数父母不太了解他们的孩子。他们认为这是他们教他们的后代的传统信仰的责任。他们想让他们听话，在学校做得很好。因此，误解往往从父母倾向于干涉孩子的日常活动。

In my opinion, most problems between parents and children could be solved by joint efforts of both sides to enhance mutual understanding.

在我看来，父母和子女间的代沟问题可以通过双方的共同努力，增进相互理解的解决。

假设你是李华，David是你的美国网友。他对目前中国出现的雾霆天气很关注，来信向你询问此事。请你给他写封回信。主要内容如下：1.感谢他的关注。 2.简介雾霾 (smog) 天气给人们的身体、生活带来的危害。3.谈谈你的感想。注意：可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯流畅;开头与结尾已写好，不计人总词数; 词数：120左右Dear David，

Im glad to receive your letter. _______________________________________

Yours，

Li Hua

【参考范文】：

Dear David,

Im glad to receive your letter. I have learned from your letter that you are concerned about the smog which frequently appears in some areas of China. Thank you for your concern. Im also very worried about such terrible weather because it has brought much inconvenience or rather harm to peoples health such as traffic jam, road accidents, bad coughs, throat hurts and ever lung cancers and so on.

As everybody knows, a good environment comes from good protection. So we should do what we can to make a difference. Try to drive less and choose air-friendly products. Only when everyone has the environmental awareness can we have cleaner air.

Hoping to hear from you soon and share your good ideas.

As we know，water is very important to man，we cant live without water. The amount of water which is suitable to drink is less and less. But some people dont care about it. They waste a lot of water in their daily life. Even worse，they pour dirty water into rivers. They throw rubbish into rivers，too. Many rivers and lakes are seriously polluted. Something must be done to stop the pollution. And I think its a great shame to waste while millions are in great need of water. I think what we can do is that we have to save every drop of water as possible as we can. For example，we must turn off the tap immediately after we use it. We can use a basin to wash our hands and faces. Its also a good idea to encourage my friends and family members to join me!Only in this way can we live happily. If we dont save water，the last drop of water will be a tear-drop of us. I believe if everyone makes a little effort，we can make a big difference.