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与最好的自己相遇初中

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有时偶然的相遇也是那样的美好,就像冬日里暖暖的阳光。

冬天的一个下午,是我第一次滑冰。看见别人都已经会滑轮滑了,自认为聪明能干的我给妈妈夸下了海口:不就是轮滑吗?一个下午准能搞定。

就这样兴致勃勃的我,来到了广场的空地,很快地穿上了冰鞋,滑了整整一下午。与其说滑了一下午,还不如说摔了一下午。好强而固执的我,却不肯收回那句海口。我一次一次地摔倒,又一次一次地站起来,可还是不行。真的是学不会滑轮滑了,又累又着急的我,有些泄气,坐在地上直想哭。忽地,边上传来一句:你只要注意低下重心,控制好速度就好了。有人在教我怎样轮滑,我感激地望去,只见到一个潇洒的身影是一个小男孩,他飞驰着,红红的轮滑鞋在冬日中有些显眼。在远去的时候,他还不忘回头给我一个攥拳的动作,鼓励我一下。我忽地又有了劲儿,站起来接着滑进步大大的!我居然能连着滑一小段了。

天色越来越晚了,可我还记着我的誓言,继续着我的练习。实在是太累了,我脚下一个不稳,又重重地摔倒在冰上,我咬了咬嘴唇。

嗨,加油干!

不远处传来一声那有些熟悉的童音。我寻声望去,还是那个小男孩,正坐在那边朝我挥手。嗨,加油干!

这美好的相遇,我永生难忘。

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篇1:初中三年级学生英语

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My English Study

How time flies! My three-year middle school life will be over soon。 Looking back, I have many memories of my English study。

When I entered the middle school, I had so many difficulties with my English。 I was not able to understand the teacher in class, and I couldn’t master the words and phrases。 For a time I wanted to give it up。 Later, with the help of the teacher and my classmates, I listened to the teacher carefully in class, kept on reading English every day and spoke as much as possible。 Step by step I made great progress in English。

In a word, only when you develop interest in studying English can you learn it well。

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篇2:又是快乐的一天初中英语日记

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I think my teacher got out of bedon the wtong side this afternoon as she hasn’t cries.i went to office saw the boys unhappy.Because the students got their teacher’s goat became they didn’t do their homework..I think this is my teacher unhappy’s cause. Today, I saw a boy ,he played the handset.But didn’t saw the walls so he Rnocked we laugh up our sleeve at he knocked ,but he hurt his norse in the accident, and he was laying it on thick about how painful it was .

It’s also a happy day, isn’t it ?

我认为我的老师今天很不高兴因为她一个下午都没笑过。我到办公室去看到一些男生很不高兴,因为他们的作业没写。我想老师生气就是这个原因。今天,我看见一个男生,他正玩着手机,但是他并没有看到前面有墙,所以他撞了上去,在他撞上去时,我们都窃笑。但是他的鼻子受伤了,他看起来好像很痛苦。

今天也是快乐的一天,不是吗?

[又是快乐的一天初中英语日记

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篇3:给自己朋友的一封信英语作文带翻译

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Dear Mercy,

亲爱的梅斯,

How is everything going! Last time you said you are anxious now because you

find it hard to learn English well. Don’t worry. I think you have to improve

your English step by step. And I will right behind you. In my view, you should

develop you interest on English first. According to my experience, I think

watching English movie, listen to some wonderful English songs and talk in

English on the Internet would be helpful. Secondly, you have to prepare lessons

before class that will help you understand what the teacher says in the class. I

know you feel bored in the class, but you have force yourself to be

concentrated. A few days later you will feel it a little easy to learn English.

The left steps I will tell next time. By the way, we have not seen each other

since your family move to Hunan a year ago. Have you ever thought about going

back to visit me and learn English together in the coming Summer vacation.

Looking forward to your reply.

过得可好。上次你说你现在很焦虑因为你觉得很难学好英语。别担心。我觉得要提高英语你得一步步来。我会帮你的。在我看来,首先应该要培养你对英语的兴趣。根据我的经验,我认为看英文电影,听美妙的英文歌曲以及在互联网上与他人用英语交流会有很大的帮助。其次,你要预习,这样可以让你理解老师在课堂上说的东西。我知道你觉得上英语课很无聊,但你必须强迫自己聚精会神的听。一段时间后,你会感觉到学习英语变得容易些了。剩下的步骤下一次我会告诉你的。顺便提一下,自从一年前你们家搬到湖南后我们就没见过面。你有没有想过暑假的时候回来看看我,我们可以一起学习英语。期待你的回复。

Best wishes,

Li

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篇4:初中英语作文:自我介绍

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Hi, everybody! Today, I would like to introduce myself!

My name is ChengZiYing, 9 years old this year, I am a lovely little girl. I have a pair of watery eyes, a pair of big ears, a straight nose, a plausible mouth, a tender little face, have a black long hair on his head. Oh, regardless of appearance! Tell me about my hobby, advantage!

I often help my mother do housework at home, I also can play the piano! Ill play the song: "Mr. Red rope", "river bank Mongolia folk song", "dream wedding", "the moon represents my heart". Sometimes, when I was at home all right, will create their songs to play, and the lyrics!

I am very obedient at home, this is me, do you understand me? If you still dont understand, that is quick to make friends with me!

[初中英语作文:自我介绍

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篇5:给自己一片温暖成长_初中作文

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踏在那暗黄色的征途上,阳光洒满一地,我知道,考试快来了,这紧张的时刻让我感到天热了、人热了、心中的热血沸腾了。

朋友问我:怎么样,为中招考试做好准备了吗。

我说;黄沙百战穿金甲,不破楼兰终不还,信心满满。

那火一样的季节似乎在替高中选拔人才,能克服的录取,其余的淘汰,艳阳满天,连风都好像刚从火炉里出来,吹在人们脸上,留下一道道看似灼伤的红印。不过和同学们在一起,便不再觉得天热了,我们一起并肩作战,其乐无穷,不去抱怨那蚊虫漫天嗡嗡乱舞,也不去抱怨那书本哗然铺天盖地,更不去抱怨那热气袭人汗水直流,只觉得中考考好了,这一切都是浮云。

六月的温暖是享受的而不是浪费的,今天的回忆是珍惜的而不是忘记的,那即将逝去的岁月年华,和同伴们一起享受,和同伴们一起面对,和同伴们一起珍惜,这是我成长的记忆中留下的最美好的温暖,也是我在那温暖的坚持中真正的领悟。

曾经总是抱怨自己的问号,而现在,我毫不犹豫的将它替换成省略号,也许青春对我来说,就是心里那一份温暖吧,就是一种坚持吧,与艰难、艰苦无关,我带着那一份温暖走到中考的考场,那一天,我所经受的温暖和青春全部填写在考卷上,我希望这一份努力能给我成长的回馈。

以前的面容可能随现在的记忆悄悄的逝去,不过我相信,逝去了可能才不会那么怀旧,才是一种成长,失去了才不会那么高兴,才真正懂得珍惜。

路是自己走出来的,也许这就是暗藏在心底的温暖吧。

[给自己一片温暖成长_初中作文

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篇6:关于网购英语作文初中

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With the development of e-commerce, shopping online becomes a new way of

shopping which is getting more and more popular. Many citizens are likely to

shop through internet nowadays.

Generally speaking, shopping online offers lots of advantages with its

convenience the most prominent. There are many commodities on the internet where

you can search whatever you want. Besides, you just click the mouse can you get

all information you want, so that you don’t have to go to the shop personally.

In addtition, the commodities on the Internet is usually cheaper than the stores

which can save much money.

However, everything has two sides. You can not see the products or check

their qualities and some of the sellers on the Internet is not so honest. And,

for those who enjoys shopping around different stores, shopping online perhaps

will make them bored.

In my opinion, shopping online has more advantages than disadvantages, and

with the improvement of e-commerce, there will be more people to shop on the

Internet.

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篇7:我自己设计的别墅初中作文

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600字左右 一年一度的科技节即将到来,我们学校展开了制作“别墅模型”的比赛,我也参与到了比赛之中。

听老师说,材料学校发,工具自己带,“别墅”是用纸粘好的模型。我想这次活动就是剪些小玩意儿,再粘成一个“大别墅”,对我来说简直就是轻而易举的事。

比赛开始了,老师发下来一张厚厚的纸。我看了一眼,啊,一张纸上全是图案、虚线和直线,连怎么做的说明都没有,我傻眼啦,不知所措。

但是别墅总得做好呀,于是,我根据以往的经验,将一个像墙壁似的图形剪下来。刚开始剪,就听老师说:时间有限,只有两节课。我一听,心里更加急躁,一不小心剪错了一刀,后来我发现越急越剪不好。最后,我决定放下心来,不慌不忙地剪,将每一个缝隙都剪出来。不一会儿,我终于把“墙壁”剪好了。可是墙壁应该粘在别墅的地板上,地板在哪里呢?我想,一个别墅最大的就是地板和屋顶。这时,我看见一块“绿地”上标着“踏步”两字,这“绿地”应该就是“地板”啦,可是,墙壁粘在地板的哪个边缘呢?我又仔细打量起墙壁,发现它有许多需要折叠的地方,而地板刚好也有一边弯弯曲曲的。于是,我将墙壁折好粘在地板上,嘿,刚好吻合!接着,我依这种方法将所有墙壁粘好。

开始剪屋顶了。但是屋顶的边缘有许多需要剪掉的三角形。这些小三角形又都是在一条线上,一条边已经在外面,不用剪。我灵机一动,三角形都是等腰的,两个底角都已剪好,只剩一个顶角。于是,我沿着三角形的边,一左一右剪一刀,一个三角形就被剪掉了。接着,我用同样的方法,将所有屋顶剪下来,粘在墙壁上,一幢漂亮的别墅就“新鲜出炉”啦。

从制作别墅这件事上,我悟出了一个道理,只要仔细观察,认真思考,就会有很多发现。

[我自己设计的别墅初中作文

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篇8:初中作文:给自己一点挫折

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挫折”一些人会觉得是一个可怕的字眼,但对于我来说是一个历经沧桑、磨难的字。

“挫折”生活中要没有挫折就不堪一击,就像课本中说的:在不确定中生活的人,能比较经得起生活的考验,会锻炼出一颗独立自主的心。

记得有一次:我们班的锁不知道被哪个捣蛋鬼藏了起来,老师必须要把这个偷锁贼揪出来。

“谁是最后一个走的?”

我立刻就蒙了,因为我昨天晚上作业落在学校了,我又回来取的。

我不知所措的站起来,说:“虽然我是最后一个走的,但我真的没拿锁啊老师。”

老师严肃地说:“不是你是谁?难道不是你最后一个走的吗?还狡辩,下课到我办公室里来。”

“我……”

真是秀才遇到兵有理说不清,嗨!干认倒霉吧…==

看着同学们嬉笑的脸,我的眼泪还是不由衷的落了下来。

到了办公室,老师把我狠狠的教训了一顿,并让我赔一把新的锁。走出办公室我感到了从来没有过的委屈,这是我想起了那句话:生活中有挫折才会经得起磨难。对,我一定要把这些挫折看成在成长路上的坎坷、磨难,用微笑面对每一天。

自己一点挫折吧!挫折会让我们成长的更高、更强。

[初中作文:给自己一点挫折

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篇9:有关交通英语作文初中

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Many years ago, I saw a science fiction film, which described a future

world. The way people lived was very different. They could drive cars in the

sky. Everything in the future world was so convenient. Since then, I was always

curious about how the future world would become. The fling cars seemed so

ridiculous for now, but thinking about more than 100 years ago, people never

thought about flying in the sky, but now we could take planes and traveled

around the world. Everything was possible. Whats more, the development of

technology is so fast that the world changes so much every ten years. Nowadays,

people can pay the bill online. No matter where they go, a cell phone can solve

most problems. I believe that future transportation will be much efficient and

will surprise us all.

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篇10:海洋英语作文初中

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Marine biological environment is a complex system including sea water, sea

water, soluble matter and suspended matter, seabed sediments and marine

organisms. The rich biological resources, mineral resources, chemical resources

and power resources in the sea are indispensable human resources treasure

houses, which are closely related to the survival and development of

mankind.

At present, the main objective of marine conservation is to protect marine

biological resources so that they can not be exhausted for sustainable use by

mankind. In particular, priority should be given to the conservation of marine

animals that are valuable and endangered. According to the UN investigation, due

to overfishing, mangrove accidental killing of non target to allow the killing

of marine organisms, the coastal engineering construction, deforestation,

pollution of the marine environment in general, at least 25 of the worlds most

valuable fisheries resources consumed, whales, sea turtles, manatees and many

other marine animal faces the danger of extinction. It is expected that with the

expansion of marine development, it is possible to cause more damage to marine

biological resources.

Marine protection task should first stop on the marine biological resources

excessive use, secondly to protect the marine biological habitat or habitat,

especially their migration, spawning, feeding, avoid Huahai coastline, beaches,

estuaries, coral reefs, to prevent heavy metals, pesticides, oil, organic

produce and eutrophication. Nutrients such as marine pollution. Maintain the

ability of regeneration of marine biological resources and the natural

purification ability of the sea water, maintain the marine ecological balance,

and ensure the sustainable development and utilization of the marine.

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篇11:初中英语作文大全

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As it is known to us all ,LuXun is a famous Chinese writer. He is not only

a writer, thinker, but also the founder of Chinese Literature . He wrote many

classic (经典的)novels and his stories, which are translated many languages, were

made into film,such as The True Story of AH Q and The New Years Sacrifice,which

deeply showed peoples suffering in the old days.

Because of his achievement to Chinese literature, Chairman Mao spoke highly

of him. Besides, some of his works were selected into the text books in high

school and university. I think youll gain a lot from reading his works.

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篇12:有关严格要求自己初中

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从小,妈妈就对我的要求十分严格。不管是在学习上还是在生活上,不管什么事情都要求做到,如果达不到目标就要受到惩罚。而我正是在这样的严格要求下茁壮成长。

每周六周日,妈妈都会让我根据作业的多少和近日的成绩来列出周全的计划。计划中的每一项学习任务都要认真完成。在三、四年级时,学习任务完成后,妈妈总会一个题一个题的细细检查,而现在,我养成了认真完成任务的习惯后,妈妈就只是会大致的浏览一下我的作业,看一看我的字工不工整,有没有完成。有时妈妈还会对我进行“突击检查”,看看我到底做的怎么样。如果被发现错题,那我就惨了。错一个题要再做同类型的题十个,要错两个,就要做二十个,依次类推。如果我有不明的问题,妈妈会给我讲。讲完后不是就完了,而是要再找几个类似的题,再让我练习,直到我完全懂了。妈妈让我练习,不是一味的让我做题,而是用各种方法结合在一起,在生活中找出问题。

妈妈不但在学习上对我严格要求,而且在生活上也对我的要求十分严格。妈妈锻炼我独立自主,我的事情都要求我干。从三,四岁起,妈妈就要求我自己洗袜子,口罩等小件的衣物。什么买本子买笔,买课外书之类我都要我自己做主。

从妈妈对我的严格要求中,我也养成了不少好习惯并且改了不少的坏毛病。我希望别的同学的家长也能像我妈妈一样,对孩子们严格要求。俗话说的好“严母出孝子”嘛!

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篇13:春节初中英语小

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Because the Spring Festival is the most solemn traditional festival of Chinese folk. In the first month of the summer calendar, also known as the lunar calendar, commonly known as "New Year", "New Year". Every year, the streets are covered with red lanterns and colorful flags. The mall is a sea of people, buying New Year goods, but lively. Grandma prepared a hearty meal, with a lot of "bam, bam, bam" on the outside, and the guns  . Every little friend put on a beautiful new dress, and the grown-ups smiled with satisfaction. Until dad bought me a lot of fireworks and firecrackers, in the evening, I will take out fireworks went downstairs and children put together, we play very happy, the party began, I was reluctant to go home, eat fruit while watching the party together with family, a good laugh at our wonderful performances, wish: I wish that every day is New Years day! I also like the double ninth festival.

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篇14:初中英语作文大全

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It is known to all that Newton got the great inspiration from the falling

apple as he was walking pass a tree. This apple changed and promoted the social

civilization. Many people play the joke that if the apple hits on their heads,

maybe they can be the next Newton. Actually, apple is just the stimulation to

help Newton to figure out his thoughts. If it hits on other peoples heads, it

is just the ordinary incident and nothing special. The meaning of life is to

keep searching. Everyone can make a difference if they keep thinking, and

inspiration will come sooner or later. At that time, the success will be at

hand.

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篇15:我告诉自己想见她英语作文附译文

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b well, all those feelings over the next few months through our phone calls and our chats…and then i told her i want to see her, and she said yes『我告诉自己想见她,然后她同意了。』.

n and then?

b when i put down the phone, i just have the questions of ‘am i mad?’ 『当放下电话的时候,我问自己是不是疯了。』

n u never meet friends offline before? 『你之前没见过网友么?』

b well, i can never explain all of my story, dreaming of things we are doing at the time they happen, and the feeling of knowing each other so well, the feelings of how we were meant to meet. 『我真的无法说清楚我的故事,回想着当时发生的事情,所有的感觉,从认识对方,到完全了解对方,还有我们相识的必然性。』

n unexplained. 『无法解释的。』

b yes, by all means『的确是这样』. it was just unplanned. 『这跟我计划的不一样。』

n amazing, isn’t it?

b yes, when i finally met her, yes.

n and where did you meet?

b we meet in a kfc store『肯德基店』 near xu jia hui 『徐家汇』and the song is ours which is ‘qing zang gao yuan’ 『青藏高原』, the song still makes me close to cry. 『现在一听到这首歌我就想哭。』

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篇16:培养自己的兴趣高二英语作文

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It’s normal that we all have our own interests and it’s various from people to people. Some people may be interested in sports and some others in music or literature. In short, it’s good for us to have our own interests or hobbies and it means a lot. For one thing, having some interests can bring us a sense of belonging, for it’s your own thing and no one can carry off from you. For another, interest is our best teacher. If you like something, you have the desire to go deep to it. Last, developing interest is a good way to make friends with who have something in common. You can share and be shared, which is an inspiring process and experience.

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篇17:我们自己“编程”初中作文_其他话题1100字

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现在,我简直是个大忙人,语文、数学、电脑、游泳等补习班围着我转。每天做什么全被爸爸妈妈给我量身定做好。我成了被爸爸妈妈编好程序的“机器人”。

来看看爸爸妈妈给我编好的那繁忙的“程序”吧。每天早晨6:30之前,我就被爸爸妈妈从被窝里拉出,扯开嗓门读英语。吃了早饭冲向学校接受“全封闭”训练。下午放学直奔游泳池,接受挑战极限般的游泳训练。当我筋疲力尽的时候又被拖回家里闷头写起永无止境的作业。后面还有一个小时的电子琴练习向我“招手”呢!周六、周日作文、华数、英语、电脑等补习班“一一袭来”。我每天都在知识的海洋里颠簸,已被“颠”得麻木不仁。同龄人们个个都像我一样“幸福”。

我们对这些补习班不是都感兴趣,有许多是家长逼着学的。难道他们小时候曾是爷爷奶奶实验室里的小白鼠,也被强迫做他们不愿意做的事?上一辈自身没有实现的梦想非要在下一代身上实现吗?

家长和孩子都应该拥有自己独立的空间,请家长们请别让我们这些“小机器人”与你们联网。我们的“程序”自己编。

首先,我要开发一个攻无不克的“清洁工软件”,删除家长强行添加给我们的一套套繁忙的“程序”,改变他们的意念;然后运行我的“蜗牛壳保护程序”。这套程序硬硬的外壳,像一座坚固的堡垒。我可以在这里远离任何人的“侵扰”,任凭拍打,我都可以像小蜗牛一样躺在壳里安安静静的熟睡。我的“学习程式序”则由“大博士”——机器人教授担任。它可是满肚子学问,对任何学习上的问题都对答如流,脾气十分温和,总是不断地鼓励我,从不说我懒、说我笨。学习起来,我就像一叶顺流而下的小舟,一点都不吃力。我没有忘记有劳有逸,当我感到疲劳的时候,“魔笛程序”就发挥作用了。它像一支美丽的竹笛,会自动飞到空中,奏响美妙动听的乐曲,舒缓我的紧张情绪。此时家长都无影而飞了,我可以自由自在、无拘无束地玩耍。这套程序中,我只给家长开了一个小小的“窗口”。他们只能做一名旁观者,通过窗口来观看,再也不能做指挥员了。

老师,下堂课让家长来上课,我来介绍这个软件,讲这套程序,好吗?

本文构思巧妙。小作者以让自己编程,揭示了当前教育存在的现象——课业负担繁重,各种补习班“一一袭来”,使得孩子们在知识的海洋里被“颠”得麻木不仁。对强迫他们不愿做的事发出了呐喊。读了此文,不知当爸爸,妈妈的该怎样反思。不要让孩子成为家长的机器人,还给孩子快乐、自由、幸福吧!

作者运用比喻、拟人手法,使文章语言生动、形象。如:“硬硬的外壳像一座坚固的堡垒;我就像一叶顺流而下的小舟,“魔笛程序”像一支美丽的竹笛;我像小蜗牛一样躺在壳里”等句。这些写作手法值得学习。

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篇18:关于梦想英语作文初中

全文共 235 字

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I have a dream. When I grow up, I want to be a scientist. I want to make a

robot by myself. It can help my mother to do the housework, help my father to

drive his car, and help me to walk my dog. I think my parents will like it very

much.

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篇19:初中英语

全文共 543 字

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Since I went to school, I spent a lot of time in study. My classmates and

teachers are just like my families. We almost meet each other every day. My

teachers help me a lot. When I meet problems in study, they are very patient and

help me to figure out the answers. When I have trouble in getting along with

other students, they will talk to me and comfort me. I am so thankful to them,

because they care about me just like my parents. I respect them so much. In my

heart, they are the great people. I must study hard so that I can return their

love.

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篇20:喜看自己的变化中考满分作文750字

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成长的路上,有父母的呵护,有老师的关爱,有同学的帮助……这一切,我都装进了我的背包里。当我打开背包,我高兴地看到了我的变化,爸爸·早餐备战中考时可谓争分夺秒,睡得晚起得早是家常便饭。爸爸担心我因为赶时间来不及吃早餐,每天都起得很早为我做早餐。我一直认为这是理所当然的,因为中考备战这么紧张我根本来不及自己做早餐,何况爸爸也要吃早餐。可是过了一个月后,我发现每天的饭桌上都只有一个碗,一份早餐。

一天,从来都埋头吃饭的我突然抬起了头,看到了爸爸那张布满深深皱纹的脸上洋溢着的灿烂的笑容,可是很快,我被那满银白的发丝吓了一跳——我开始怜惜我的爸爸了,我不再认为爸爸为我做的这一切都是理所当然了,渐渐地,我也学会了为爸爸作我些我认为是“理所当然的事”。老师笑容经历了一段时间的叛逆和任性,我变得不爱学习。一天我的叛逆劲又爆发了。我不愿去上学,爸爸非常生气,把我拖到了学校。老师到校门口拉住我,原以为老师会给我一顿“狂风暴雨”,谁知,老师却只是轻轻把手搭在了我的背上,手指轻轻地拍着我的肩。我小心翼翼的看了老师一眼,老师那暖暖的笑容让我感受到了一股强大的精神力量,它把我的心也拉回了课堂。从此,我不再叛逆,不再逃离,我努力奋进,怀揣着老师殷切的期望前进。同学·温水为了赶上晚自习,我常常一吃完饭就往学校跑。

有一次在路上突然打起了嗝,我原以为到了教室就会好些了罢,谁知一点也没有缓解,一连连的打嗝声引来了同学们的目光,让我无地自容,可是大家都没有带水。可怎么办?正在我着急的时候,一个同学走过来问清我的情况,二话没说,他出去给我找来了一瓶温水。那瓶水给止了嗝,更温暖了我的心。从此我不再对身边的人表现漠然。背包收藏的一切,改变了我。我的爸爸、老师、同学给予我的爱,使我发生了巨大的改变,使我的心更加温暖。大家都高兴地看到了我的变化。

点评:

1、用小标题的形式结构全文,提纲携领,层次清楚。

2、紧扣“变化”,截取与爸爸、老师、同学对我的帮助的三个生活小片段,表现“我”在亲情、师生情、友情的包围中变化成长,思路清晰。

3、开头点题,总领全文;结尾点题,总结全文,首尾响应,结构完整。

4、不足:细节不够生动,语言还需打造。

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