about me的英语作文初一精彩20篇

第一次七年级英语月考试卷充分体现了新课改的精神，切实有效地考察了所学知识内容。下面对试卷试题进行具体分析：

一、试卷题型情况

1、注重对基础知识、基本技能的考察，题型新颖、覆盖面大，涉及到了所学的全部内容，促进学生有效学习。

2、注重从实际中选取素材，考察了学生的分析和处理问题能力。

3、试卷对学生探究能力是一个重点考察，增强了学生的探究分析能力。

二、试卷结构分析

试卷充分体现了新课标课改精神，注重了对学生基础知识和综合能力的考察，因此对学生的细心程度要求很高。

1、听力部分：试题难度不大，因此学生在该部分的得分率较高，但是学生的两极分化严重，高分很高，甚至满分，而低分则太低。

2、完形填空和阅读理解：难度适中，但是得分率一般，主要原因是学生理解文章不透彻，阅读能力差造成的。

3、词语运用：此题是各大题中得分最低的一个题，主要原因是学生对词的用法掌握不好，一些固定词组记不清。

4、书面表达：该题对于学生来说是比较容易的一题，它是对学生整体知识的一个考察，但两极分化最为严重。

三、学生分析

存在问题：

1、优等生对基础知识掌握较好，但是还有一部分学生对语言的运用能力较差，对比较碎的知识点没有能够很好地掌握。

2、中等生的基础知识掌握不够牢固，并且做题比较粗心。

四、具体改进措施

1、钻研新教材，夯实英语基础。练习中很多学生“一看就会，一做就错”，这种现象比较普遍，失误原因是对于常见用语掌握的熟练程度还不够。其根本原因就在于基础不牢，只有扎扎实实从基础做起，才能最终达到“一看就会，一做就对”。

2、加强英语课外阅读。英语知识的获得与能力的提高是在不断的听、说、读、写的训练过程中逐步形成的，而教材和课堂所能提供的训练还是比较有限的，因此，要加强理解语篇的能力训练，增强英语语感。

3、规范训练，改进学习方法。要善于分析学生，找出学生的薄弱环节，合理安排好教材知识梳理、专项训练和应试技巧指导。

在今后的教学中应注意开阔学生视野，多渠道、大容量地给学生提供具有时代感的英语信息，加强语言运用能力的培养，少讲解，多给学生实际运用语言的机会，在用中学英语。

My name is XXX.And Im 13 years old.My hobbies are singing,dancing and

drawing pictures.And Im a sanguine person.My favourite stars are Shu Chang and JJ Lam.I like playing computer game and reading classic

in the rest.Im studying at Xiao Shi Zhong Xin school.

My name is Liu yang. I`m a thirteen-year-old boy. I`m a student of Class Four, Grade Seven in the No.3 middle school from Luo yang . My study is well. I`m tall and strong.

I`m a diligent boy. I study hard at all my lessons. My dream is to be a knowledgeable man. I know it`s very hard. The way is very long. But I will try my best to do it well. And I belive myself. I have many hobies. They are reading, running, swimming, playing, basketball, climbing and playing table tennis. Everyday I all need some time to reading. On Saturdays I play basketball or play table tennis with my friends.

In my free time, sometimes I help my mother with housework or do what I want to do. I have a colorful life!

[新初一的英语自我介绍

I am Sally， Everyday

I am very busy. I have too many rules in my house. I have to get up at six o’clock every morning. I must have my breakfast at 7:00 o’clock . I can’t meet my friends after school because I have to walk my dog.(.溜狗) I can’t watch TV on school nights. And I have to be in bed by 10:00 o’clock. On weekends, I have

to make my bed and clean my room. Then I have to wash the dishes. Later I have to go to the Children’s Palace to learn the guitar. I love music. But I can’t listen to music at home .I never have any fun. My life is so boring. What can I do ?

也许长这么大，对我帮助最大的就是英语村了(English village)了。

英语村是我六年级毕业以后学校组织的一次英语活动。聘请外教来上课，吃住都在学校中，听说还可以在晚上搞搞活动，看看影片，其乐无穷。

于是，我动心了，便成为了英语村中的一名学子。好兴奋!虽说我的自理能力挺差的，不过，我更渴望一些自由，更渴望无拘无束地玩耍。我渴望与外教谈天说地，我渴望学到那纯正的英语……虽说我的英语水平说不上怎么好，但是，毕竟比别人多学了几年的剑桥英语，要是想表达一个意思，想法，那是绝对没问题的。想到自己在英语村中一定会很出色，不由地沾沾自喜。但现在想想，父母的忠告的确是对的：“你不要感觉太好了，离开了父母你会碰到很多困难的。”而我却说了一句：“我不是自我感觉良好，而是自我感觉优秀!”

回想一下，的确希望是越大，失望也就越大。在整个英语村中，我还是吃了很多苦的，当时当然也很后悔，但毕竟也锻炼了我的能力，让我学会了很多的知识，学会了生活。对自己而言，我是很成功的!

Love is a stranger a hand; Love is the teacher sets a white hairs in the homework; Love is the mother of a move, let you feel the warm.

A little boy, I hate my mom, but since that time, I understand the mothers love.

On one occasion, I was just about to do the homework, but found that I lost my homework, Im afraid I carelessly, didnt see it, just opened the bag, take out your book all, one by one to find, but not yet, my heart suddenly tense up, thought: without the book I cant do the homework, tomorrow, but how to account with the teacher! True when I worry, mom came back, I just want to let my mother to help me get to the school, but have to see mother look very embarrassing, appear very tired, very worry, dont let mother go, cant replacement tomorrow, let mother go, mom look very tired today, should have a good rest at home. When my mother found my exception, a little angrily said: "what are you doing! Dont do your homework?" I speak hesitatingly ground to say: "my homework...... in the school, cant... help me to get?" After mother, drop a words: "I cant help you any more, let you suffer, next time do not!" I reluctantly went back to the room and felt very upset, and in the end I had to do other homework well first, after a while, I heard a door shutting, also didnt care.

The next morning, I was bedding bag, found that fall in the school yesterday book appear in the table above, feel very strange, suddenly recalled that door shutting in the brain, ask mother, mother said: "I cant help you with, it must be you didnt see!" But I think mother lying, ask grandma, grandma, mother to help me to get in the rain at night, my heart was warm, head emerge with a tired mother help me to take his umbrella rain notebook.

At this point, the warmth welled up in my mind.

爱是陌生人的一把搀扶;爱是作业本里老师落下的一根白发;爱是母亲的一个举动，让你体会到温暖。

小的时候，我讨厌我的妈妈，但从那次以后，我懂得了妈妈的爱。

有一次，我正准备做作业，可是发现我的作业本不见了，我怕是我粗心，没看见，就翻开书包，把本子全都拿出来，一本一本的找，可还没有，我的心一下子紧张了起来，心想：没有了本子我就没法做作业了，明天可怎么跟老师交代呀!真当我犯愁的时候，妈妈回来了，我就想让妈妈帮我到学校拿一下，可有看妈妈脸色很难堪，显得十分疲倦，就很忧虑：不让妈妈去吧，明天没法交代，让妈妈去吧，妈妈今天看起来很累，应该在家好好休息。就在这时妈妈发现了我的异常，有点生气地说：“你在干嘛呀!不好好做作业?”我吞吞吐吐地说：“我的……作业本……在学校里，能不能……帮我去拿一下呀?”妈妈听后，丢下一句话：“我可不会再帮你了，让你吃吃苦头，下次就不会这样了!”我无可奈何地回到了房间，心里忐忑不安，最后我只好先把其他的作业做好，过了一会儿，我听到了一声关门声，也没怎么在意。

第二天早上，我正在理书包的时候，发现昨天落在学校里的本子出现在桌子上面，感到很奇怪，突然脑子里回想起那关门声，就去问妈妈，妈妈说：“我可没帮你拿，准是你自己没看到!”可我觉得妈妈在撒谎，就去问奶奶，奶奶说是妈妈晚上冒雨帮我去拿的，我的心一阵温暖，脑袋里浮现着劳累了一天的妈妈打着伞冒着大雨帮我拿本子的情形。

此时，阵阵暖意涌上我的心头。

New year, New Year! I have long been looking forward to the new year. New years old people come to us with joy, and our faces have opened flowers.

For the new year, everyone took out the already prepared fireworks, rushed out to the door, and ignited the lead. Ah, how beautiful! The sky suddenly opened a brilliant flower, the sky was dyed extraordinarily dazzling. Streets and lanes have already become the world of children.

After the new year, I went to my grandparents home early and sent a good word: "wish you, happy Spring Festival!" The blessing suddenly >warm you and me. At night I also send a text message to my teacher, which says: I wish you good health and all the best. Your student: Lu Yao. And write back to the teacher: Thank you, I wish you a happy new year, learning progress! When I read the mind tianzizi.

In the new year, I got one thousand yuan more in my wallet. I really want to spend one hundred yuan on my wallet, but I think of grandma again, "Daddy is not easy to earn money, and money must be spent in the most needed place." I hold back.

I have been a year old again. I grew up, increased weight, increased a lot of knowledge, and should be more knowledge-based.

Ah, new year old man, thank you for this joy. In this year, I will certainly make you happy. Believe me! Come on for me!

Today， I was late for school because the traffic was jam. I usually so to school by bike but I hurt my leg the day before yesterday.

So I had‘to go to school by taxi this morning. I left home very early. When I took the taxi， I found the traffic bad. The traffic was so busy that the car couldn’t move at all. I think the government should get the road wider so that the car can run easily and smoothly.

[初一寒假英语作文450字

Tomorrow is New Year’s Day,my family have had a completely cleaning for two days.Then my father and I decorated our flat and my mother cooked delicious food for our meal.After supper we watched TV program.How happy we were!

明天是春节,我家里以近在两天前做了彻底的大扫除.然后我和爸爸一起装饰家里,妈妈则在烧好吃的东西.晚饭以后,我们一起看电视节目,我们多高兴呀!

i have a good friend , her name is gina . she is a girl. she is 13 years old.she is a student in class 1 of no.1 middle school . she studies very well. her favorite subject is chinese , beacuse it is very interesting.her like strawberries best.

she usually gets up at 6:00am .then she brushes her teeth. next she goes to school at 7:40. she has four classes in the morning . her last ciass is history . that is her faorite subject , too.she goes to bed at 9:00pm.

she has a big family.she love her mother and father . and she also has a sister.she also like she.

this is my good friend . i want to learn about your good friend. please write and tell me about your friend.

My mother is an ordinary woman,who is 1.58 meters tall.With kind appearance

and good manners,you will feel that she is very amiable and noble if you meet

her. As far as I concerned,my mother is always helping our neighbours or

strangers,which makes her gain good honors in our villages.Whenever somebody

needs aids,she will give her hands as much as she can.One day I went back home

to see my mother,but she wasnt in.After some inquiring ,I knew that my mother

was looking after a child whose mother had to work.In my mothers oppions,only

when the sorrounding enviornment is harmonious and people in the society help

each other,we can live a happy life and work happily and effectivel.

在教棒和粉笔的共同飞舞中，在老师声声叮咛，鼓励和无微不至地呵护下，多少位良师被学子深深地印在心里啊！

——题记

我在这里写的是一位普普通通，平凡得不能再平凡的人民教师，５０来岁，由于终日为我们不辞辛苦的操劳，脸上布满了皱纹，她的两眼黑得发亮，锋利的目光，仿佛要把什么刺穿似的。我有点害怕。她只教我们还不到四个月，但是，每当我想起她时。她对我们的严就像教练训练运动员那样一丝不苟；她对我们很关心，体贴，就像对待自己的儿女一样。 但是，那一次，我尽对她起了怨恨。那是一节自习课，英语老师让同学们把作业本Ａ订正好交到办公室去批改，作业本Ｂ作好的也去批改。我怀着喜悦的心情拿着作好的Ｂ去批改，＂报告＂＂进来＂她的声音很平稳，我走了进去，队伍并不长，我跑到英语老师右边去批改，无意间发现了电脑里有语文竞赛的成绩，我便很期盼得到自己的成绩，不听话的手尽往鼠标地区前行，不经意间，我触摸到了，这下手更不听使唤，一直往下翻动着，＂啊＂我目瞪口呆，倒数第三，我的喜悦心情沉淀了下来，＂谁呀，谁在动我的电脑？＂一声果断而又严厉的语言向我发起进攻，我吓了一大跳，我心里想：哎呀，这下怎么办呀，不如来个死不承认，或者，英语老师的教棒在桌上＂吃吃＂作响，＂把手拿过来。＂我害怕极了，真想使用一下神仙的仙术，把英语老师的教棒变成长长的棉花棒，只有我能看见，而老师看不见，软软的棉花棒触摸了我一下，＂哇！＂教棒落下来了，打得好痛呀，我有点生气，心里暗暗想着；你这个老太太，太坏了，我只不过碰了一下鼠标，看了电脑屏幕一眼，也不过如此，您竟打我，只要教育几下就行了嘛，我可是个怕痛的女孩。我心中的怨恨一直不能平静。但刚想完，那教棒的滋味和对老师的怨恨跑掉了，我寻找着，发现它屹立在英语老师身上展现出来的无可抗拒的人格魅力上。

她总穿着比别人温暖的衣服，长得虽不出众，但是她的人格魅力在我心中是最出众的，那一次英语课，因我们作业做得不好，而被英语老师斥责了一翻，最使我深受教育的是这样一句话：我做事情，要做就要做到最好。＂这声音在教室里久久回荡，震撼着我的心灵。一颗＇作一个高尚的人＂的种子便埋下了，自从那节课后，我猛然发觉自己长大了好多好多，幼稚正向我告别。我的心底默默地感谢这位教我如何做人的英语老师。

Most people has a sweet home,so have I.I think my home is sweet because it is my best place to have rest or have fun with my friends or my parents.

I can remember clear.Once I came back home late because my teacher didn＇t want me leave until I finished my work.At that time,the weather became colder and the wind became stronger.I was so hungry and cold at that time!I felt I can＇t take it any more,so I ran to my home quickly.When I got my home,I felt much more warmer and happiness than ever before!

That＇s why I love my sweet home,Don＇t you think so ?

As you know, sports can help the body to keep healthy.

I enjoy many kinds of sports , such as swimming, running, and dancing. However, the sport that I like most is swimming. Because I was born in the year of the snake, I like water very much as a snake. During summer vacations, I go swimming with my mother, although I should get up very early every day, I do not feel hard, because I can enjoy the cool summer water. In the other hand, swimming is a good sport, it can exercise every parts of our body, when you swimming, you should move your hand, your leg, your head, and every body parts should cooperate with each other. Swimming can make me more and more strong.

So dear friends,lets go swimming together.

[我喜欢运动初一英语作文

There are four seasons in a year.The first season is spring. In spring,

almost everything comes back to life. The snow begins to melt, the trees sprout

and the grass turns green.Spring is warm so that its a good time to go hiking

outdoors. After spring, itis summer. Summer is my favorite season,because I can

swim quite often. The third one is autumn. In autumn, the weather is cool and

comfortable. Farmers may be the busiest people, because autumn is a time of

harvest.Winter is the last season of the year. In winter, the weather is very

cold. In the north, it usually snows. Children can play games or make snowmen

after snow. It seems very funny. But, because of the cold weather, I dont like

winter very much. Whats your favorite season?

My mother is the loveliest person in the world. She Ioves her children very much and is always kind and gentle to us. Every mother is kind to her children but my mothcrs kindness to us is unlike others.

She never gets angry and never loses her temper. When we are naughty and do not listen to her words, she truly pretends to be angry and walks away. She will come back to us later and asks whether we like to be good boys and good girls again. She is so gentle and patient to us.

My mother is busy all day. She cooks for us, washes our clothes and also teaches us to do our homework. We all love mad respect our dear mother.

[初一英语作文：我的妈妈

初一英语作文如何教好呢，老师们有何看法？下面一起去看看小编整理的初一英语作文教学方法吧！

写作是书面表达和传递信息的重要途径，培养学生初步的写作的能力，是初中英语教学的目的之一。但是长期以来，中学英语写作教学一直徘徊于不理想的状态，尤其是在农村中学来讲更是不堪入目。平素测验中，不少学生只能写出寥寥数语，而且文章中拼写错误和其他语病随处可见，学生英语作文的质量不尽如人意。即使在有些学校所谓的实验班级效果也不是怎么理想。尽管在平素的教学评价环节中，我们花费大量的时间用于批改学生的作文，但是学生一次又一次的反馈给我们的并不是我们预期所料的，甚至是差之千里。如何解决这一难题，成为现阶段我们英语教学工作者面前的“拦路虎”。本文就这一问题作一些粗浅分析，力求找出了中学英语写作教学的瓶颈所在，结合教学实践，探索性的作一些关于中学英语写作教学的交流——“读、改、写”的实践。

七年的初中英语教学下来，留给我无穷的思考与困惑：不管在什么样的测试中，只要谈到英语写作，很多学生都感到头痛？即使有部分学生能动笔写写，其中的语法错误也是随处可见，写作要点不明确，语句不通顺，语言、词汇档次低，语言不地道或是汉语式的英语写作，让人看后很是费解。即使给材料作文学生也感到无从下手，在他们看来：翻译又是个问题，或是上面所说的汉语式的直接翻译出来。导致这些问题的缘由何在？是平时的教学没有到位，存在写作教学走过场？重视不够？还是学生根本就不是学英语的那块料？困惑，苦思、冥想！多方寻缘由。究其原因，我认为英语写作教学效果不理想主要问题出在平素的教学环节上。长期以来，我们很多英语教学者都重复着同一种模式：教师布置写作内容——学生完成作文——教师批阅作文——作文发还给学生。缺乏对学生的有效地针对性的指导，像那种简单而粗暴的评价方式，从根本上起不到什么作用。久而久之，还会使学生厌恶英语作文写作，甚至产生“写作恐惧症”，进而影响整个英语学习及考试效果！现我就英语写作教学的几点感悟与大家一起共勉。

一、读中不忘写，在阅读中适时穿插写作教学。

“读中教”指的是写作与阅读联系挂钩。因为单靠指导学生掌握写作要领进行写作，在实际的教学工作中是完全不够的，而当我们教学一篇篇阅读理解文章，才正是学生们学习写作的好时机，阅读理解也是我们教学写作的最有效武器，毕竟好文章是写作最好的老师和范例，更是我们教写作的法宝。因此，在每次学习和欣赏一篇阅读理解文章的时候，尤其是文中含有经典语句时，我都给学生设定四个目标：第一，理解作者写作的用意，即作者在文章中阐明了什么观点和段落的安排及其如何阐述的。第二，弄清作者运用了什么样的写作方法。比如是说明、记叙还是论证，包括文章运用的时态、语态以及其他种种语法手段。第三，学习作者的一些用词来扩大词汇量，积累词汇，同时让学生学习短语的搭配并收集词汇和短语。第四，收集作者在文章中写出的佳句、妙句、绝句。为今后的写作奠定基础。几年的教学实践证明了这样的教学有其独具的特色与效果

因此，我认为：写作教学完全应该，而且必须与阅读理解相结合才能真正让学生领悟和掌握写作方法与写作技巧的要领，没有阅读哪里来的模仿和借鉴？所以“读中教”是我的第一步，之后，在感性的基础上，我再给学生讲解具体的写作方法，这一点是我接下来要做的第二步“写中教”。

二、写作中不失恰如其分的指导，适时地开展“写中教”。

所谓“写中教”，就是在学生学作时给予写作方法的指导，通常我从三个方面入手：首先，概括初级写作的文体特点。书面表达在文体上以记叙文、应用文（书信、日记、通知、说明书等）的形式为多见。然后，概括其形式特点。近年来，初级写作题型在形式上以看图说话和根据中英文提出写作两种类型出现频率最高，要求能根据图画所提供的情景和英汉提出的词语，建立联想，创造性地运用所学过的词汇和语法知识来进行表达，比如根据一副或多幅图画及提示语，写出语法正确的六至八句话，或者一篇字数在60－100字的短文，充分地运用自己所学的知识，完整、准确地表达所需求的意思，考查的重点是在领会图意和提示语的前提下能简单创造语言的能力。最后是概括题材特点。在题材上，初级英文写作的表达题所给的大部分内容是比较贴近孩子们生活的人物和事件，诸如饮食、运动、爱好、环境、交友、旅行、娱乐等等，考查的是生活知识和语言知识学与用综合能力。

根据以上文体、形式、题材特点，我要求学生在看图写话时，掌握好以下一个要领：

1、看图说话书面表达题要领

首先，认真审题，弄清画意，把握中心。一般来说，写作题所提供的几幅图画虽然是整个故事情节中的一个或数个重要的情景片段，但每幅图的主体内容一定是清清楚楚、脉络分明的，这一点务必要准确把握，只有具体、透彻的理解画意，方能抓住抓准表达的重点。紧扣暗示内容，分析表达重点，看图题若也有语言提示，那么首先要细审提示材料。若是英文提示语，那就更加重要了，因为提示词语不但能有助于理解画意，而且告知如何围绕这些重点词语组织材料，然后表达出图画内容。但应注意，无论哪种形式的看图写话均不会给出所有的词语，因此，必须紧扣画面暗示的内容，再结合提示语的补充，酌情填补一些关键词语。

其次，运用正确的表达方式和准确的写作方法。用正确的表达方式准确地写出图画所表现的内容，形成一句或一段切合画意又无语法错误的句子是关键。具体应注意以下几点：

（1）确定基本时态。动词是做谓语还是做非谓语？是否需要用第三人称单数？这些必须考虑清楚再动笔。要抓住提示语中提供的或自己设置的时间状语，或抓住第一画图反映出来的故事背景。

（2）注意词语的变化。如该用形容词还是副词？名词是否可数？前面是否需用冠词？词尾是否丢失s或者其他变化形式？特指的定冠词the是否要用或不用？这些在平时演练时，都需要“斤斤计较”，养成习惯。

（3）句型的选择。尽量用自己所学过的句型表达，能用简单句尽量用简单句。

（4）书写规范、准确。

（5）反复检查。要逐字逐句检查词语搭配和句子的结构，是主系表还是主谓宾，注意时态是否完整等等。

2、写中英文提示作文的提纲要领

在做没有图画只有中英文提示语的书面表达题时，对学生要求更高，写作的难度也更大了。这种题型对八年级（下）和九年级学生较多用。我指导学生运用以下六条要领：

（1）、审清题意。反复仔细阅读、推敲提示，分析出文章的重点，弄清文章的格式，确定写什么内容，以免离题；

（2）、概括简要的中文提示中的部分要点，此时切记不可逐句翻译，题前所给的英文提示词语最好全部用上，采用扩写的方式，根据所给材料进行适当的恰如其分的扩写，可以由词到句，再有句到段，最后到篇的“点及面”的写法。

（3）、将提示中的有关信息融入自己的语句中，尽力做到语言规范、准确，文字通顺。

（4）、在抓住重点，不偏离主题的前提下，合理想象，拓展思路；

（5）、用好介词和连词，使文章简练、纹理通顺，尽量使用自己有把握的句式来表达，避免使用不熟练的词、短语和句型；

（6）、最后，正确把握文中的时态和语态，仔细揣摩、合理灵活变化时态和语态。

三、在写作评价中适时地给与指导，积极开展“改中教”。

我的最后一步是走“错误路线”，即在批改学生习作中利用学生的“错误资源”进行写作教学。在批改学生的习作时，我把其中的错字、别字以及大量的令人啼笑皆非的病句收集起来，这些东西常常是学生们的通病，虽说使我苦恼，但经验告诉我，其实这也是一种资源，颇有利用价值，而且用好了还是一剂治病句的“良药”呢！与此同时，我们也要善于发现学生的优点，适时不忘鼓励教学的开展，从而激发学生的写作兴趣。对于写得有水平、有档次的习作可以范读，从而进一步的调动学生的写作热情。

对于大多数学生容易犯的错误，我把一些比较典型的病句展示在黑板上，然后让学生互相订正。许多时候学生在“欣赏”他们自己的劣作时都忍不住哄堂大笑，但笑过之后，错误也在轻松愉快的气氛中改正了，这样既活跃了写作课堂的气氛，又达到了让学生纠正错误的效果。除此之外，我让每个学生准备一个纠错本，将他们平时在练习、造句和作文中出现的病句摘录在册并认真纠正，以避免重复出错，使文章中的病句逐渐减少。

以下是我在学生习作中遇到的典型案例，原文如下：

Nowadaays,the environment gets more and more bad.because of the pollution.Although the  government take any measures  to carry  it , it isnt working well  in it.

There is only one earth.I think we should do something useful we can to protect the environment.sach as we can use both sides of each piece of paper and use cotton handkerchiefs,not the paper ones to protect soil .if we go to a short distance.we can walk or by bike.we can also plant more trees and grass to protect air.

If  we  all do that,we will have healthy and  happy.

从整体看，本文错误较多，汉语思维较严重.但总的来讲这篇作文的思路还是比较清晰的，

于是我和学生一道对该文进行了分析：

1、本文首先缺一个主题，从正文中我们不难看出本文是要求写作如何保护环境问题，作者应根据题目要求拟定题目，再进行写作！譬如：我们可以拟定为：HOW  TO  SAVE  OUR  MOTHER等。

2、该文的第一句就出现拉严重的语法错误，The environment gets more and more bad.变得越来越糟糕，应该是“worse  and  worse".在提出问题时，最好创设一定的语言情景，逐步导入,俗话说得好“好的开始就是成功了一半”。以本文为例，我们完全可以以这样导入：With  the  development of  economy  ,more and more factories have built .But there is more and more pollution coming.

3、该文的第二句中的take any measures to carry  it  。意思没有表达清楚，让人看了费解，其实作者可能是想说政府采取一些措施去阻止污染。而采取一些措施去制止污染应为：take  some  measures  to  keep pollution.然而效果不好应为:it  doesnt  work  well.

4、在第二自然段中有单词拼写错误及名词单复数误用的现象，比如“sach as ”应为"such as".

5、表意不清。"not the paper ones to protect soil"和we can also plant more trees and grass to protect air.都存在表意不清的现象。其应该表达为：第一句最好这样表达：not to use paper or use less paper to protect  trees and  because the trees  can  keep the earth from washing.第二句改写为we  can also plant more trees and grass to keep the air clean and fresh.

5、标点符号用得不够恰当，如If we go to a short distance.we can walk or by bike.在这里我们最好这样用要好一些：If we go to a short distance，we can walk or by bike.

6、在最后一段发起倡议时，最好使用感叹句型或祈使句型这样会显得更有力！文章会显得更深入.如;my dear friends, lets get together to protect "The Blue Sky"!等。

除了上述“九字法”英文写作教学模式，我们还应重视做足“平时功夫”以促进学生写作。所谓平时功夫，是指背诵名篇佳作；收集各种话题，布置学生在假期或周末练笔，提倡“一周一文"；传阅、张贴、展览学生优秀习作以资鼓励等。鼓励学生善于从平素的练习中总结经验、吸取教训，只要持之以恒，我们完全可以让越来越多的学生逐渐学会用第二语言来表达自己的思想，而且可以像用母语一样轻松自如。

结束语

路漫漫其修远兮。英语写作教学的探究征程远而富于变化，需要各位同仁在实际工作中不断探索。在英语写作教学中如何教学及讲评需要继续探索。但有一点鄙人是这样认为的：宽松、愉悦、不断获得鼓励的环境中，学生的思维才会变得活跃。所以教师要及时抓住学生稍纵即逝的新奇、独特的想法，给予赞扬，使学生的创造性思维得以发展。多给学生创造性思维活动的机会，鼓励学生勇于尝试，并在失败面前不气馁。在平素的写作教学实践中，教师应最大限度地创设和实施多种鼓励机制，充分调动全体学生动笔写作的积极性，这样才能促进学生的写作能力更快更好地实现，从而从整体上提高学生的英语语言应用能力。

Friends are important for us, everyone has their own friends, we share sorrow and happiness with our friends. We are making new friends now and then, but it is hard to find the genius friends, the trust between friends are hard to build. If the trust exists, friends can talk anything, they are willing to show who they are in front of their friends. While if the trust doesn’t exist, the friendship is not real deep, people will ask you when they are in trouble. The real friendship is built on the basis of trust. My best friend will never ask me to do thing all the time, instead, she cares about me, and comforts me when I am upset. That’s a real friend.

朋友对于我们来说很重要，每人认都有他们的朋友，我们和朋友分享喜怒哀乐。我们会时而不时地交朋友，但是交到真正的朋友很难，朋友间的信任很难建立。如果信任存在，朋友间可以讨论任何事情，他们愿意在朋友面前展示真正的自己。

然而如果信任不存在,友情就不会很深，人们只会在他们有困难的时候才叫上你。真正的友情是建立在信任的基础上的。我最好的朋友永远都不会一直叫我去做事情，相反的，她一直关心我，当我感到烦恼时，给予我安慰。这是真正的朋友。

I have many favorite holiday, such as: the Dragon Boat Festival and the double ninth festival, but I most like the needlework. Because the needlework section is by niulang and zhinv, below I will speak to you of the origin of the needlework section.

Met a sick one day, the cowherds workhorse, cowherd saw it was ill, and was taken care of.

One day, met a group of vega cowherd, and fell in love with the one of the female, the vega also like cowboy, they lived a happy life. This thing is know the heavenly queen, and catch the vega on the day.

After women talked: "when I die, I made a pair of leather shoes, you can walking." The old cow died, cowherd took the old cow leather to make shoes, find vega flew to heaven, but was head of the heavenly queen hair clasp into the Milky Way of blocking the way. Cowboy on the other side has kept many days, finally, was touched by the heavenly queen so heavenly queen in July 7th this one day, only to meet niulang and zhinv. Vega ingenuity, women are begging for blessing themselves can also ingenuity.

This is the origin of the needlework section.

我有许多喜欢的节日，比如：端午节、重阳节，但我最喜欢乞巧节。因为乞巧节是由牛郎和织女而来的，下面我就来给你讲一讲乞巧节的由来吧。

有一天，牛郎碰见一头生病的老黄牛，牛郎见它生病了，就悉心照料。

有一天，牛郎碰见一群织女，并喜欢上了其中一个织女，那个织女也很喜欢牛郎，他们过上了幸福的生活。这事被王母娘娘知道了，又把织女抓上了天。

老牛说话了：“等我死了以后，把我的皮做成一双鞋，你就可以腾云驾雾了。”老牛死了以后，牛郎把老牛的皮做成了鞋，飞上了天去找织女，可是却被王母娘娘头上的簪子变成的银河挡住了去路。牛郎在对面守了许多天，最后王母娘娘也被感动了，所以王母娘娘只在七月七日这一天，让牛郎和织女见面。织女心灵手巧，女人都乞福自己也能心灵手巧。

这就是乞巧节的来历。

I used to be fond of skating. But now things have changed because of a horrible experience.

One winter, the weather was so cold that water turned into ice. One day on my way home, when seeing a frozen lake, I thought that the ice must be thick enough to support me. Being so interested in skating, I couldnt help going down and sliding on the ice. Suddenly, I heard a sound of crack. Looking down, I saw the crack on the ice surface. I was frightened out of my life and didnt dare to move. But nobody could help me. I had to move toward the bank carefully.

As soon as I got onto the bank, the ice broke. How horrible it was! Even ifit has been a long time since then, I can still feel the fear. And I no longer like skating since then.

我曾经非常喜欢滑冰。但现在事情发生了变化,因为一次可怕的经历。

一年冬天,天气太冷,水变成冰。有一天在我回家的路上,看到一个冻湖的时候,我认为必须冰厚度足以支持我。因为喜欢滑冰,我忍不住跑下来,在冰上滑行。突然,我听到一个裂缝的声音。向下一看,我看到冰面上的裂缝。我吓坏了,不敢移动。但是没有人能帮助我。我不得不小心翼翼地向岸边挪动。

我一到银行,冰了。这一切是多么的可怕!即使过去了很久,我仍然可以感觉到恐惧。从那时起,我不再喜欢滑冰了。

My Computer

When I was in grade four in primary school, my father taught me how to use computer. After that, I was very interested in playing computer. I watched movies, played computer games, searched the Internet and listened to the music on computer. Because my father must work in his computer, so he bought another for me. I was very happy that I had my own computer. It was put in the study. I am always very careful to use my computer, because I am worried I would break. I often chat with my net friends. Because of my computer, I make many friends who have many in common. Of course, I use my computer in study. There are resources on the Internet. I can learn more after class. It does great help to me.

导语：童年趣事像天上的星星数也数不完，像大海的浪花一样美丽迷人。回忆过去，连我自己也会情不自禁地嘿嘿傻笑。下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

I’d like to tell you something about my childhood. when i was six years old, i was a lovely girl!

One day, my father saw some fish in the river, so he asked me, why can fish only live in water? i thought about it, then i gave him the answer, because there are some cats on the bank. my father laughed when he heard that. then he said, you are smart! i was happy to hear that.

Maybe you will say, it’s a funny answer. now, i think, it is very interesting. and now i am smart. my parents love me very much. i am so happy to have that childhood.

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我想告诉你一些关于我的童年的事。当我六岁的时候,我是一个可爱的女孩!

有一天,我爸爸在河里看到一些鱼,所以他问我,为什么鱼只能生活在水里?我想了一下,然后我给了他答案,因为银行里有一些猫。听到这话,我父亲笑了。然后他说,你很聪明!听到这个我很高兴。

也许你会说,这是一个有趣的答案。现在,我想,这很有趣。现在我很聪明。我的父母非常爱我。我很高兴有这样的童年。