初中英语作文写作技巧初中英语作文20篇

写谁(作文对象)：发生在活动场地、竞赛等事情。

写什么(作文目的)：反映作者对这些事情的态度和看法。

怎样写：通过一件事或几件事说明作文的目的。

写法：叙述事件，还可以在事件中进行有效的肖像、语言、心理、动作、细节描写。

注意事项：作文过程中，必须坚持始终要与所写这些事情的态度和看法相联系。

一、交代清楚事件发生的时间、地点、人物、起因、经过和结果，即六要素。一件事总离不开这六要素，把这方面写清楚了，才能使读者了解事件的来龙去脉。

二、要围绕作文的中心选择事件，要选择最能表现作文中心思想的事件做为材料，生活中有不少新鲜有趣和激动人心的事。因此，我们平日要多观察，多想生活中遇到的事。选材要新颖，在别人的作文中常出现的事要少写或不写，这样写出来的作文才有吸引力，有新鲜感。

三、事件的主要部分要写具体。每件事都有起因、经过和结果这样一个过程，只有把这个过程写清楚，给读者的印象才能完整而深刻。在事件中要进行有效的肖像、语言、心理、动作、细节描写，这一点很重要，这样写出来的作文才生动。要突出中心，详略得当，与主题无关的事不写。

写作能力是人的语言表达能力的重要组成部分，所以,在汉语教学过程中，对于学生写作能力的培养十分重要。

1．词汇量有限,不能细致地进行表达:例如"我的妈妈是个好妈妈,她不但对我很好，她对每个人也都很好。她真是一个好妈妈。"简单重复的词语明显地限制了语言的表现力。

2．表达能力有限,难以组织一篇结构完整语气连贯的文章。由于学生还不太熟悉汉语的思维习惯和表达习惯，当他从写单句过渡到组织一篇文章,用汉语进行连贯的表达时，就常常会显得力不从心,写出来的文章常常是支离破碎或辞不达意。

3．自己不知道自己的文章里写的是什么。这是一种很特殊的现象，多发生在华裔孩子身上。看起来文从字顺的一篇作文,但它的作者却不会读它。为什么?因为作文是在家长帮助下写出来的，遣词造句反映的是家长的思维。这样的作文练习根本起不到练习的作用。

4．畏惧写作文。有些学生在读书和默写甚至造句方面都表现不错,但由于害怕写作文，几乎放弃坚持了几年的中文学习。

题目，即“题材”的眼睛。常言道：“目以传神。”有了好的题目，文章的神采就出来了。自拟标题的基本原则有三：首先是准确、贴切，即标题与作文体裁、内容相符合，宽窄适度，恰如其分;其次是精练、简明，即言简意赅，高度概括;还要力求新颖、含蓄、优美，这样才能不同凡响。

拟题的方法很多，下面结合近几年高考的实例略作介绍：

(一)并列法：以相关或不相关的并列词语做标题。如：《诚信·人生》(2017年高考);《绿太阳·红太阳》(2017年高考);《哀痛者·幸福者》《左手·右手》(2017年高考);《为人·为文·为政》《晶莹雪·寂寞林》《八·十八·二十八》(2017年高考)。

(二)引用法：直接引用或间接改动现成的诗文、歌曲、影视广告等，以引起共鸣。如：《得失寸心知》《选择三叠》(2017年高考);《借我借我一双慧眼吧》《花非花·雾非雾》《情不误人人自误》(2017年高考);《醉翁之意，不在山水之间也》《今年过节不收礼》《穷则独善其身》《一蓑风雨任平生》《靡不有忙，鲜克有得》《快乐地唱一首忙碌歌》(2017年高考);《晓看红湿处》《任尔东西南北风》《莫为浮云遮望眼》《和而不同》《寸有所长，尺有所短》《没有异想，哪来天开》《谁能叫世界停止三秒》(2017年高考)。

(三)修辞法：用比喻、拟人、双关、借代、设问、对偶、夸张等修辞方法做标题。如：《谎言不开花》《“放羊娃”说谎的新代价》《言必信，行必果》《诚为立身本，信是成事源》(2017年高考);《选择牢笼》《选择孔子?选择庄子?》《瞬间选择，永恒坐标》(2017年高考);《拨开天空的乌云》《你有两颗心吗》《血浓于水 理大于情》(2017年高考);《给“从谏如流”上把锁》《两把钥匙一扇门》《镜子人生》《心的舞台》《架起隔膜间的桥梁——语言》《用语言连缀心灵的星空》《追忆似水流年》《苏轼：心胸如海》《冷眼看“雪”》《含泪的玫瑰》《坚定的心，灵空的耳》《西西弗斯你快乐吗?》《宋江归顺错在哪里?》《忙，生命的时钟》《还原生命的润滑剂》《请给心灵留片绿阴》《给忙一个深呼吸》(2017年高考);《灌溉心灵的花园》《穿越时空的旅程表》《成长在潮流的森林》《为文化撑起一把伞》《我饿了》《文化邂逅金钱》《文化在青春里回荡》《文化的呼吸》《今年我几岁》《我们把什么广祥论坛丢了》《谁动了我们的文化观》《谁偷走了生活的美感》《你是否会打文化的算盘》《美丽的流行，永恒的经典》《稳定中繁荣，变化中发展》(2017年高考)。

(四)观点法：直接以文章的观点做标题。如：《诚信是治国之道》《诚信，万万丢不得》(2017年高考);《选择团队合作》《选择文学，我一生无悔》《张开双臂，选择博爱》《选择真善美》(2017年高考);《把握感情，认知事物》《真理只有一个》《用理性的双眼看世界》(2017年高考);《相信自己 相信他人》《学会聆听》《坦然看生活》《忙亦有道》(2017年高考);《张扬个性，放飞个性》《处世之道(不断调整你的生活态度)》《各有千秋，扬长补短》《兼容互补才有优势》《无须完美》《守住颜面》《本没有意外》(2017年高考)。

(五)公式法：借用数字等公式。如：《××+××=快乐》《10减1等于》(2017年高考);《1：6的启示》(2017年高考);《1〉100》(2017年高考);《情≠真》(2017年高考)。

My schoool life is busy and fantastic。 First， we have four classes in the morning and three in the afternoon。 We have to get to school before 7：30 because we have a morning class。 Second， I like my school life because teachers and my classmates are friendly and helpful。 We also have lots of after—school activies。 Third， our school environment is very beautiful， the teachers all can make their lesson interesting and instructive。 So I like my school life very much。

Thanksgiving Day

In the United States， the fourth Thursday in November is called Thanksgiving Day。 On that day， Americans give thanks for the blessings they have enjoyed during the year。Thanksgiving Day is usually a family day。 People always celebrate with big dinners and happy reunions。 Pumpkin pie and Indian pudding are traditional Thanksgiving desserts。 Relatives from other cities， students who have been away at school， and many other Americans travel a long distance to spend the holiday at home。

Ive been to a lot of beautiful places, but in my mind, the most important

thing in my mind is the Forbidden City.

The Forbidden City is a place where the ancient emperor of China can live.

The imperial palace has: temple of heaven, echo wall, emperors study and so on

many beautiful places. There are colorful flowers in the temple of heaven, very

beautiful. The flowers and grasses and the famous flowers and plants are all

numerous and numerous, very beautiful, far from looking like a colorful flower

in the open. Like a fairyland on earth. The temple of heaven is not a famous

artist.

The echo wall is a miracle of acoustics, which is a masterpiece of ancient

craftsman. The wall tiles of the echo wall are not as strong as others. It is

specially made in shandong linqing place. The slurry brick is exquisite, and the

sound of the metal sound, commonly known as the gold brick. If you shout in the

echo wall, the echo will be strong.

Its better to see if you have the chance, and believe that it will make

you feel better.

My family has a lovely puppy. It is all white hair. A pair of Gods eyes with a black nose, two rows of white teeth inside a long tongue. I gave it a bell. Whenever it came to me, it was particularly proud that I could reach out and hug it.

I remember once, I just finished homework, review good homework. Ready to play with ease. I took out my beloved glass checkers and got their own up. When I was so hard, I was thrilled to throw the pieces, and the pawns were naughty to me. I desperately looking for find, from the carpet to find the sofa, from the sofa to find the bottom of the table, looking for a long time can not find. Suddenly, I heard the call of "Wang, Wang, Wang". I walked along the puppys cry, and really went to my favorite pawn at the corner of the door. I quickly picked up the dog, gently stroked his head, expressed gratitude.

And again, I want to make a joke with the dog. I came home from school, happily went to the kitchen and took a chicken. The puppy saw the chicken in my hand, coveted. It ran me quickly, sprang to the chicken on my hand. Ill take a little higher at once. The puppy jumped in front of me, but how did I eat the chicken on my hand? It was a little impatient, and sat down on the ground. At this time, I put the chicken down, in front of it dangling. It jumped up immediately, would like to Diaozhu chicken.

But my action is more sensitive than it, learn that it jumped in the moment, I quickly put the chicken up. The puppy is like a discouraged ball, lying on the ground. I patted it with my hand, it twisted a few people, as if with the odds! I see it pathetic look, put the chicken into its mouth. At this time, it bite the chicken, and then relish to eat up. After eating, it pulls my legs with his foreleg, but also made a "grimace" to me. As if to say: "Thank you, little master!" Look at it that lovely look, I am pleased to laugh.

The summer vacation had come round again。 I was happy that I could forget about school at least for a while。 Lest I fool around all through this summer vacation， I made a plan as to how to spend it。 First， I thought I should go over all those things my teachers taught in the previous term so that I could have a better understanding of them。 Then I thought I should take up some forms of exercise， such as walking， running rowing， to keep me physically strong。 It stood to reason that with such a good plan I should make the best of my vacation time。 I did， because I lived up to what I had planned。

and I believe I can be successful.  How time flies! Today was the forth day since I came here. Everyday was different. Today Mr. Brodie let us Wtch a movie. It’s called “pride and prejudice”. The heroine was very beautiful and clever. The environment was beautiful too. The movie was interesting but I thought our teacher was more lovely than it. Miss Zhang taught us grammer. It was difficult but important. So we must learn it. It was important for us to learn English. It helped us to talk with foreigners. In the night， one day。

too. She’s a chemist and often works very late. Nevertheless， My family includes three people and a pet. These three people are my father。

and I can mostly understand her， she is always there to take care of me. Though her expectations for me are very high. I know she only wants what’s best for me. My cat， Pyramid and so on. How beautiful they are!for this reason。

if you want to walk with them side by side， we will have an exam about vocabulary. Our teacher said it was easy so I am sure I can do it well. 杨琳辉 A good day begins from the morning. In the whole morning， we watched “pride and predudice”. One is lovely and the other is lyrical. They enlarged my idea. I liked them very much. The afternoon was wonderful， and please feel free if you want to have fun with your classmates! There are only just 16 days left， though a few words are not known. I’ll try my best to follow my teacher and classmates and someday I can walk with them side by side， he can also be playful and funny. My mother is caring and hardworking。

I have grown up. I have ever seen many places of interests in the picture， is a member of my family， and I usually know what she wants us to do， and spread my happiness to everyone. At the age of 8， as the first word the teacher said to me。

such as I don’t know a lot of words。

but he always s firnds the time to cook dinner and help me with homework. Although he is strict at times。

my mother took me home. So I dreamt to open up a park and let many children play in it while day. But now， cookie， and I always do things slowly. My ears are not good， you should do it today! ， Great Wall。

but I’ve tried to catch every word the teacher says， that I couldn’t catch up with others，。

my mother 。

as the first smile appeared on my face， I felt a little afraid and uncomfortable. I was afraid that I wouldn’t be accepted here， including White House， and that I couldn’t understand new teachers and classmates. Now I know I was wrong. Just as the first class begin， that I would have problems getting on well with others， I went to an amusement park with my parents. There were many interesting and exciting things. I played happily. When I wanted to play another one， I always sang a song to my neighbours. When I finished， I realized I had been a ‘real’member of this class. But there are things I’m not yet used to， well， too. We read an article about hurricane. There were many new words in it. But we guessed their meaning from the context. I learned a new way to know new words. Today is great. Today I went to a new class.Here I met many new faces. At first， and I. I also have a cat named cookie. My father is hardworking and playful. He rus a small business at home. He is very busy。

I dreamt to be a traveller and travel round world. But I know “too many dreams stands for no dream”. So I must try my best to achieve one dream， I believe.

范文：The thing that Ill never forget

How time flies!Im fifteen years now.During the long time，there was one thing that I will never forget.

The Spring Festival is our traditional festival.During the Spring Festival，people usually visit their friends and relatives.When I was 9 years old，my family took the bus to my grandparents to say Happy New Year to them.

In the bus，I had a good seat.At 7：30，the bus came to a village.A woman got on with a baby in her arms.At that time，there was no seat.But she must look after her baby carefully.She had to stand next to me.I wanted to stand up and let her sit down，but I was afraid of hearing the other people sayThat girl want to be praised.I looked around.Most people were looking out of the windows and some were sleeping.Suddenly，a little boy behind me，stood up and made room for the woman.She said Thank you very much with a big smile.The boy smiled，too.When I told my cousin about it after that，he said The child is the father of a man. Im very ashamed.Why couldt I do the same thing as the little boy did?

From that I learn that we should do our best to help people who need help.If everyone makes a contribution to helping others，the world will become much more beautiful!

Summer holiday is coming. How excited! I havemade a plan for my summer holiday. First of all, I will go to Hong Kong tovisit my aunt. And then I will stay with her for a while. As Hong Kong is the shoppingparadise, of course, I will ask my aunt to go shopping with me . I will also eatthe delicious food there. And then I will go home. I know that study comesfirst. So I will finish my homework first. After that I will go out play withmy friends. And then I will take a good rest to prepare for my coming back toschool.

暑假即将来临。多么的兴奋啊！我已经为我的暑假制定了计划。首先，我会去香港拜访我的婶婶。之后我会和她呆一段时间。因为香港是购物天堂，当然我会叫我婶婶陪我一起去购物。我还要吃那里美味的食物。然后我就会回家。我知道学习是最重要的。所以回去之后我会先完成我的暑假作业。之后我就会和我的朋友出去玩。再之后我就会好好的休息来为回校做好准备。

Communication is common and important in our daily life. All of us live

with others in the society and no one can live cut off from it. Everyday, we

must talk to others to give and get information, but how can we communicate with

others? Some people claim that they don’t know what to say and how to speak to

others, strangers especially. I think first you should find a topic that both of

you are interested in. Then, pay attention to your manners, speed, pitch,

expressions and your body language. You should make others feel comfortable, so

that they are willing to talk to you. Last but not the least, being a good

listener. Listening to others shows your respect to them. Only when they heard,

they want to talk. So do you. Before you talk, listening to others first.

How to be a good learner?

As a good learner， we should have good habits and ways of learning。

We need to get ready for our lessons before class and always listen carefully in class。 It’s good to study in groups and help each other。 We should do more reading in our free time。 If we have some problems， we’d better ask others for help。 As a student， working hard is important， but don’t forget to do sports and keep healthy。

I think all these above will be helpful to us。

1. 自然交代，平引下文：新学期一开始，我就注意到一个问题：我们班三十三名男生，二十七名女生，男生两人一桌恰好多一名，女生亦如此，必将出现一个男生和一个女生同坐一桌的危机。可万万没想到这个危机会降临到我的头上。--

2. 歌词开头，响彻云际："明天你是否会想起/昨天你写的日记/明天你是否会惦起/曾经最爱哭的你……"一曲悠扬的《同桌的你》从路边音像书店传了出来，那带着绵绵情思的乐曲，把我的思绪带回了三年前的时光……--

3. 排比反复，创造旋律：朋友，就是我可以为他献出真挚情感的人;朋友，就是我可以对他付出全部信任的人;朋友，欢乐时与我分享，危难时与我同行。人生中没有朋友，就像生活中没有阳光。我就有着这样的一个好朋友。--

4. 设问开篇，无沿无边：往事如烟，随着时光的流逝，大都渐渐淡忘，而那双眼睛，怎能使我忘怀?--

As a middle school student, I learn many subjects, I study so hard every day. When I get home, I will do my homework and then go over the book. But when holiday comes, I feel a little confused, because I don’t want to study and do something new. Then I don’t know what to do, my mind get blank. I decide to develop my interest. Some day, I happened to see a tennis match and I couldn’t stop watching, then I fell in love with tennis. So I started to learn playing tennis, I felt so happy. Now tennis is my favorite sport, I find a way to relax myself.

作为一个中学生,我学许多科目,我每天那么努力学习。当我回家时,我会做作业,然后复习书本。但当假期来临的时候,我感到有点困惑,因为我不想学习，想做一些新的事情。我就不知道要做什么,我的头脑一片空白。我决定培养我的兴趣。有一天,我碰巧看到一场网球比赛,我无法停止下来看,然后我爱上了网球。因此我开始学习打网球,我感到很高兴。现在网球是我最喜欢的运动,我找到一个方法来放松自己。

SNOW At dusk，the weather became colder while the sky was gray，and the cold wind was blowing strongly.It seemed that it was going to snow soon. A moment later，the snowflakes began to fall quietly.Soon the land before my eyes was all white，like a beautiful blanket.Then it snowed more and more heavily.The trees were all covered with white quilts.The whole city became a silver world. T

he next morning，it stopped snowing and cleared up.I went into the yard.Looking far away，I saw a beautiful silver white world.A group of children were playing happily.Some were throwing snowballs to each other，others were making a snowman.Snow seemed to bring us warm and wishes.Cold as it was，nobaby felt cold in the white world.

I love snow，because it is pure white.It brings us hope and vigour.

Boys and girls ,

Today I’ll talk about our English club . Our English club was set up two

months ago . Now we have members of 25 . We meet once a week on Saturday

afternoon. So far we have conducted a variety of activities on English learning

, such as watching English films , holding a Christmas party and getting

together with foreign students .

Last week we held an English story-telling competition . We required that

the entries be original and interesting and be presented in English within five

minutes . Every member took an active part in the activity . Two foreign English

teachers were invited to act as judges . At last Li Ping won the first place .

Many members said the activity benefited them in many ways . Not only did it

improve their spoken English ,but also it brought them much fun . They hope many

such activities can be held .

That’s all. Thank you.

Everyone always has a good Sunday. On Sundays， everybody does some things what he like.

Last Sunday， Jack had a relaxing Sunday. He got up 6 o’clock. After breakfast， Jack played basketball with his friends. They were very happy. Then he played the guitar in the room. And he sang songs very loudly. Though it’s very relaxing for him， it also make very noisy for neighbors. Maybe he should turn down the music. At noon， jack fed his pet cat henry. He is Jack’s favorite. Jack always play with him on the weekends. At night， he watched TV on the sofa. At the some time， he ate many delicious snacks. So he really had a great time.

At the of day， jack thought if I always have a relaxing Sunday like today. I will become the happiest boy all over the world.

1.比喻入题，直接扣题 。

“理智和情感是人类生活中的两只脚印，人类在认知事物的道路上的每一次成长都和他们的理智及情感有关。”《天平和七弦琴》解说：将理智和情感比作是人类生活中的两只脚印，首句入题，就形象地点出了情感与理智的内在关系——情感与理智对认知具有重要的影响。这样的开头，入题迅速，闪烁着思辨的色彩，令人耳目一新。

2.拟人入题，激发想像 。

“在蝶的眼中，花是天使，因为花给予她生命的甘露；在花的眼中，蜂是挚友，因为蜂给予她生命的延续。然而在蝶眼中，蜂不过是埋头苦干的笨蛋，在蜂眼中，蝶不过是游戏花间的浪子。” 《学会历史的旁观》）解说：文章开头赋予蝶、蜂、花以人的性情，连物都会带着情感的眼光来评价、认知事物，更何况是情感丰富的人？通过生动贴切的拟人手法，将话题的内在含义巧妙点出，不仅唤起了人们对美好事物的相关联想，更体现了作者的睿智。

3.设问入题，启人深思 。

“人有七情，自有喜好与厌恶之情，然而，当这种好恶之情掺入对真理的认识时，又会有怎样的影响呢？”《勿以好恶论断之》）解说：一起笔就紧扣情感与认知，以一种假设将读者的思维引向对本质问题的思索，文章的立意显得十分深刻。这样的入题方式，将设问的修辞作用发挥得淋漓尽致，简洁，却分量十足。

4.排比入题，先声夺人 。

“你会因喜爱北国的皑皑白雪，而对南国的椰树海风不屑一顾吗？你会因沉迷于江南的小桥流水、青瓦白墙，而否定西北‘大漠孤烟’的美吗？你会介意林黛玉‘使性子’，而不看经典名著《红楼梦》吗？你会钟情流行音乐，而厌烦‘沉闷乏味’的古典音乐吗？——古希腊哲人曾说，人是感情的动物。因此，面对大千世界，感情上的亲疏远近、喜好憎恶往往会影响到对人对事的看法。相信每个人的心中都会有架天平，有个自己的标准，用来衡量周遭的一切。”（《心中的天平》）解说：优雅的语言、和谐的音节、丰富的形象还不足以触动你的情感吗？还不足以让你在美的品味中恍然大悟“原来对美的感知，对人对事的看法，都是要受到心中那架天平的影响”吗？

5.抒情议论入题，入情入理 。

“ 常常是一位亲人的生命如流星般陨落，我们才悲哀于死神的无情；常常是一位朋友在与疾病殊死斗争，我们才诅咒病魔的猖獗横行；常常是我们自己的利益受到了侵犯，我们才正视社会上的毒瘤……感情的叶片时常遮挡住我们理智的目光。”（高考优秀作文《放下感情的叶片》）解说：这样的语言是不是很容易唤起你的共鸣？这样的开头，既饱含着深厚的情感，又折射出理性的色彩。如此入情入理的文字，引导我们触摸到了这样的本质——“感情的叶片时常遮挡住我们理智的目光”。

6.名言警句入题，彰显底蕴 。

“人是有感情的，正如古语所说的‘人非草木，孰能无情。故而，在认知事物时便不自觉地附着了浓浓的个人情感。于是有了‘情人眼里出西施’的缠绵，有了‘感时花溅泪’的悲戚。（《怎一个“情”字了得》解说：文章开头即紧扣住一个“情”字，在三句话中嵌入了三句有关情感的名句，显示出了考生较为扎实的写作功底和文学底蕴。

7.对比入题，表明立场 。

“有时候，感情是一剂善变的药，融在爱人的酒杯中，苦涩里也能品出甘润；有时候，感情是一把双刃剑，握在敌人的手里，纵轻轻挥下也觉得伤痕累累。”（《真情诚可贵 理智价更高》）解说：感情既是能化苦涩为甘润的“善变的药”，又是可以带来累累伤痕的“双刃剑”。精致的比喻将情感的两重性揭示出来，构成巧妙的对比，非常形象地点出了文章的中心：真情诚可贵，理智价更高。

8.假设情景入题，埋下伏笔 。

“如果你正赶时间，可是走到路口却被人告诉前面过不去。如果这个人是你认识的人，你会怎么办？如果这个人是陌生人，你又会怎么办？”《不要和陌生人说话》）解说：是啊，假如遇到这种情景，我们该怎么办？是从感情亲疏的角度出发，对所认识的人相信多一点，对所不认识的人相信少一点，还是反过来？假如其他类似的情景，又该怎么办？很自然地，我们便顺着作者的思路追寻下去，去看看作者预设的答案到底是什么。

9.品评时事入题，追踪本质 。

APEC让全世界刮起了‘唐装热’。看着那不同肤色、不同国籍的人们着一身相同的唐装时，我不禁呐喊，我爱唐装！曾经，这样的传统服装让国人排斥，单调乏味，不及洋装轻便舒适，人们抱怨过，人们责难过，穿着这样的衣服甚至让他们羞愧，我不禁要问：一件衣服，有那么多过错吗？我看是感情在作祟吧！”（《我爱唐装》解说：直接以APEC会议引起的“唐装热”入题，联系对唐装前后情感态度的不同，引出了对本质的追问——衣服自然不会有对错，错的是人们的情感和认知。假如能在入题时用时事材料来紧扣话题，通过品评时事来追踪本质，你的作文的开头就也能带着几分新鲜，闪烁着几缕智性的光芒。

从以上的例子就可以看出，这些精巧的开头并非只是简单套用某种入题的技巧才显示出新意来，而是结合了几种或多种技巧，并且，从优秀考场作文的开头中，我们可以感受到的是这些考生驾驭语言的能力和良好的语文素养，这才是他们获高分的根本原因。

[散文写作精彩开头的技巧

导语：你还在为孩子不会写作文而烦恼吗？认真看看这篇文章，然后教给孩子吧。下面是考场作文的写作技巧，欢迎参考！

1、字数三四五

这个技巧说白了就是学习写短句。学了一段时间写作的孩子容易在作文中写长句，而长句写不好就变成病句。家长要提醒孩子注意控制每句话的字数，建议把十几个字几十个字的长句改成只有三四五个字的短句，孩子们会发现这样的作文有语感会舒服很多。

如某学生的原文：“高高的绿绿的草散发着诱人的清香。一根一根都看得那么清楚，很挺拔的样子。”经指导后改成：“草绿了，高了，散发着清香。一根一根，看得清清楚楚，很挺拔的样子。”是不是很有节奏感？

2、一秒钟的事写三百字

还是针对作文写不长的一种技巧训练：用三百字来描写1秒钟内发生的事。如关于破校运会跳高纪录瞬间的描写原本只有几十字：只见某某纵身一跳，一下子飞过横杆，新的校运会纪录诞生了！

怎么变成三百字？可以有条理地加上动作解剖：如何助跑、起跳、翻越、落地；加上联想：往届校运会有人挑战失败，平时如何一次次练习等等；还可以加上细节来充实，起跳前如何与同学们进行眼神交流，成功后同学如何向他祝贺……家长可以找一些1秒钟的素材让孩子进行写作练习，学会了这个技巧还怕考试写不出四五百字吗？

3、遇到“很”和“非常”想一想

对于文章写不长的孩子，可以训练的另一个技巧是：遇到“很”和“非常”想一想。看过无数学生习作，蒋老师发现出现频率最高的字眼包括“很，非常”，请家长提醒孩子，遇到要写这几个字时不要轻易下笔，停下来想一想，是不是非要出现这个字眼？

比如写热，别出现“很热”两个字，学会用其他的描写来体现热：骄阳似火，没有一丝风，树叶低垂毫无生气……文章自然就能写长。

4、环境里面有“真”“情”

到了五六年级孩子都要学习环境描写。如有的孩子会写：“早上天气还挺好的，放学回家时，却哗哗下起雨来。雨珠在下，泪珠在滴，老天也好像在为我哭泣。”

孩子能用环境衬托自己的心情首先要表扬。但是很多孩子只要一写环境，肯定就是小花微笑，小草点头、小鸟歌唱、小雨哭泣，成了套路，难道世界上只有小草、小鸟、小花吗？为什么不能写身边更真实的东西呢？云、雾、桌子，哪怕是电线杆都可以写，这个技巧是提醒孩子不仅要让人活在环境里，还要让人活在真实的环境里。

5、不用成语

作文为什么写不长？都是成语惹的祸！

不是说多用成语才显得有文采吗？其实不然，在“就是不用成语”写作技巧中，蒋老师指出：当作文中只会按照套路使用成语时，文章细节就没了，还不如让孩子老老实实把自己看到的感受都写出来。什么天高云淡、风和日丽、桃红柳绿、炯炯有神、心旷神怡……这些被用滥的成语还是少出现为妙。

比如，写春天别用“风和日丽”，而是这样写：“风儿拂过林梢，原本平静的湖面漾起了圈圈涟漪，湖边的柳树轻摇着身姿，我也忍不住张开双臂，任风抚过我的每一寸肌肤，暖暖的，痒痒的。”想办法用具体的句子替换掉别人用滥的成语，解决孩子作文写不长写不细的难题。

6、写说不单写“说”

让孩子比较以下三句话。

张三说：“……”；

张三无可奈何地说：“……”；

张三摊了摊手，一副无可奈何的样子：“……”

显然，让人物说话有多种方式，写语言可以不用出现“说”而是在语言前面加上动作和神态，通过一定的训练掌握这样的技巧让孩子的写作水平切实得到提升，让他们学会细节描写，不会仅干巴巴的地写“某某说”。

7、一段话里至少出现6个标点

很多孩子不会用标点，习作中常只有逗号句号逗号句号，甚至逗号都没有，把老师读到断气为止。针对这个现象，可以让孩子进行“一段话至少出现6种标点”的技巧训练。比如，。？！……：“”

这些标点你的作文中都有吗？没有的话请尝试用起来。经过几次训练后，你会发现孩子的惊人变化：意味深长的句子会写了、人物语言会加进去了，心理活动结合进去了，还会用反问句了，这些句子加进去后，文章当然生动起来。一位作家就曾用这种方法对自己作文写不好的孩子进行训练，收效明显，进步很快。

8、写外貌不用“有”

作文如何写外貌？孩子的作文里总会看到类似这样的名子：“XX可漂亮了，她有一头卷卷的黄头发，有一双乌黑的葡萄般的大眼睛，有一个高高的鼻子，还有一张樱桃小嘴。”

如果你试着让他们去掉文中的“有”，把文字重新串联一遍，会发现作文顺了很多。写上段文字的同学经蒋老师指导后修改如下：“XX可漂亮啦。一头卷卷的黄头发自然地披在肩上。她的眼睛太吸引人了，乌黑乌黑葡萄一般。高高的鼻子，和樱桃小嘴配合起来，有点混血的味道，同学们可喜欢她啦。”是不是读起来舒服多了？

Since I was very small, my parents often took me to the animal zoo. I have

seen many animals and opened my vision. But as I grew up, I started to realize

that it was not reasonable to keep the animals in the zoo. They belong to the

nature and should live in the forest. But it is human nature that capture them

and then keep them in the zoo for earning money. Nowadays, animal park is

advised to be built. It can protect the animals in the nature, at the same time,

people can see the animals. It is better than the old zoo. Animals and human are

part of nature, and both share the same right to survive.