高中英语作文20分评分标准(20篇)

高中英语作文一次不愉快的旅行

一次不愉快的旅行

I went to Changsha for my holiday by train on the night of July 15th,2012. It was so hot in the carriage that many passengers wanted something to drink. Just then, a young man came to deliver water with a water jug in hand. "Water, water. Free water. "shouted the young man.

A middle-aged woman asked for a glass of water and was very grateful to the young man. But after a while, two tall and strong men came to charge her five yuan for that glass of water. The middle-aged woman looked at them and took out a five-yuan note from one of her pockets slowly. Without a word, she handed the note to one of them, her eyes being filled with anger.

The carriage was silent. The two men went away without any sense of shame. "Robbers!" someone said in a low voice.

This was really an unpleasant trip I have ever had!

2012年7月15日晚，我乘火车去长沙度假。由于天气很热，车厢里有很多乘客都想喝水。正好，一个年轻人提着水壶来送水。"水，水，免费供水。"年轻人大声嚷着。

一位中年妇女喝了一杯水，非常感激他。可过了一会儿，来了两个又高又壮的人向她要5元水钱。中年妇女看着他们，慢慢地从兜里掏出了5元纸币给其中一个人。她什么也没说，眼里充满了愤怒。

车厢里一片寂静。那两个人毫无愧色地走了。"强盗!"有人小声说道。

这是我经历过的一次不愉快的旅行。

On the night of July 15th,2012,I went to Changsha for my holiday on a train. It was very hot. The temperature went up to 38 centigrade. It was stuffy and crowded in the carriage, so many passengers wanted something to drink, Just then, a young man came to deliver water with a water jug in hand. "Water, water. Free water. "The young man shouted while walking.

A middle-aged woman asked for a glass of water and was very thankful to the young man. But after a while, two tall and strong men came to charge her 5 yuan for that glass of water. The woman looked at them for a while,then she took out a 5-yuan note from one of her pockets and handed it to one of them. Though she said nothing, her eyes were full of anger. The two men went away without any sense of shame.

This was the most unpleasant trip I have ever had.

2012年7月15日晚，我乘火车去长沙度假。天气很热，气温高达38摄氏度。车厢里又闷又挤，因此许多乘客都想喝水。正在这时，一个年轻人提着水壶来送水。"水，水。免费供水。"年轻人一边走一边大声嚷着。

一位中年妇女喝了一杯水，非常感谢他。可是过了一会儿，来了两个又高又壮的人向她要5元水钱。她看了他们一会儿，从口袋里掏出5元纸币给了其中一个人。尽管她什么也没说，可是她眼里充满了愤怒。那两个人毫无愧色地走了。

这是我经历过的最不愉快的一次旅行。

一、优化词汇输入教学，丰富词汇知识积累

词汇是一篇文章最基本的组 成要素。头脑中如果没有一定数量的、且处于鲜活状态的词汇，就无法写出好文章。要写出好的文章，就必须善于从众多的词语中选择和运用最恰当的词语。因此， 加强词汇教学、扩大和丰富学生的词汇量是提高学生写作能力的基础工作。克拉申的“语言输入假说模式”认为：正确和恰当的语言输入将会使语言学习的效果更 佳。

最佳语言输入的两个必要条件：

1)密切相关的

2)大量的。因此，将密切相关的常用词汇、习惯搭配适当集中教学，反复归纳、不断循环和强化是较好的词 汇输入方法，同时也保证了常用词汇在头脑中的鲜活状态，为写作输出提供可靠保障。

二、加强基础写作训练，活化基础知识积累

在学生写作过程中，我们 常常会发现许多学生的词汇量与运用能力不成正比的现象，写作中经常出现词汇贫乏和用词不当等问题。这种问题的出现实际上是学生获得的知识没有有效的活化。 配合词汇和句型教学，教师可以经常以所教学词汇为关键词拟定一些与时事或生活相关的话题，让学生用词、句做翻译练习，一段时间(4-5天)之后，再让学生 用这些词、句进行写作，多写多练以达到活化知识的目的。

三、广泛阅读，拓展知识积累

“熟读唐诗三百首，不会作 诗也会吟”。在大量的阅读过程中，可使学生开拓视野，拓展知识，增加语感，为写作提供必要的语言材料。写作和阅读是互相促进、相辅相成的。有些词汇和句 型，学生只是似曾相识，通过广泛的阅读能促使学生把这些东西运用得更熟练，表达得更准确。反过来，这也会有效地提高学生的阅读理解能力。

下面是小编整理的高考作文评分标准，欢迎阅读。

高考作文评分标准内容方面：审题、立意是根本，材料是否充实，视角是否独特，情感表达是否真切是欣赏点。审题、立意的关键是对题目或材料中心的把握是否准确，不偏离题旨。丰富：材料丰富，论据充实，形象丰满，意境深远。材料丰富，是指内容丰富，是在基础等级内容充实基础上的更高一级的评价标准。高考作文存在的一个普遍问题是内容单薄，内容单薄的主要原因是平时缺少甚至没有积累。这个积累应当包括阅读积累、生活积累、审美积累等多个方面。

高考作文评分标准有创新：见解新颖，材料新鲜，构思精巧，推理想象有独到之处，有个性色彩。培养学生的创新精神和创新能力，在新的教育观念之下，已成为语文科必须参与完成的任务。高考作文在发展等级中设立有创新的条目，目的正是想通过一个侧面鼓励学生培养创造性思维。需要说明的是发展等级采用一点评分法，所谓一点评分法，就是依据12个评分点,不求全面,以一点突出者按等评分,直至满分。也就是说，有一点突出就可以得到满分20分。

高考作文评分标准表达方面：文体、语言是根本，结构是其欣赏点。符合文体要求是指写作符合所选文体特点，且特征明显，不要写成四不像文章;语言表达顺畅，不能生涩难懂，也不提倡文白相杂或乱用网络语言;结构 要做到有头有尾，有分段，有过渡，没有大的漏洞。

深刻：透过现象深入本质，提示事物内在的因果关系，观点具有启发性。深刻，高考作文评分标准是指作文的见解深刻。高考作文对深刻这一发展等级的认同是包含社会流行的正确观点与自己深切体会这两个方面的。议论性文章是说理透切，论点深刻;记叙性文章是形象生动，思想深刻。高考作文鼓励见解深刻，并且是鼓励多种多样，或是深入本质，或是提示原因，或是说明结果，或是指出规律，或是预见发展，或是抓住要害，或是给人启发，等等。

高考作文评分标准体来说，与过去几年作文阅卷相同，语言仍是本次作文判分的主要依据之一。低幼化的语言、过于寒碜的语言、缺少品位的语言应该在切入分之下。语言形象生动，富有包孕，意味深长，很有文化底蕴一类的文章赋分应当上浮。具体说：记叙类文章在如下几个方面的亮点要予以特别关注：①有相当精巧的构思;②有鲜明的人物形象;③有真实感人的生活故事;④有鲜明的个性特点;⑤有深远的意境;⑥有相当的语言表达智慧。

Dear Mum and Dad,

Time flies! Ive been here for nearly a year. Im very pleased to find that our school is really a good one. The students in our school work hard at their lessons. They take an active part in activities that help to improve their qualities and health. They are friendly to each other and always ready to help each other.

The teachers here all enjoy their work and they love their students. They work hard and do what they can do to help their students. And the students respect their teachers. They get on well with each other. The students in our school try their best to kkp the school yard clean and tidy. They never throw waste about nor pick the flowers.

In a word, I am deeply impressed by the harmonious atmosphere in this school. I love my new school.

Yours,

Tom

亲爱的妈妈和爸爸，

时光飞逝！我来这儿已经快一年了。我很高兴发现我们学校真是一个好的学校。我们学校的学生在功课上努力工作。他们积极参加活动，帮助提高他们的素质和健康。他们彼此友好，随时准备互相帮助。

这里的老师们都喜欢他们的工作，他们喜欢他们的学生。他们努力工作，尽他们所能做的来帮助他们的学生。和学生尊重他们的老师。他们相处得很好。我们学校的学生尽力北校园干净整洁。他们从不乱扔垃圾，也不摘花。

一句话，我对这所学校的和谐氛围印象深刻。我爱我的新学校。

The quality of human life has improved greatly over the past few centuries, but Earth is being harmed more and more by human activity. As we develop our technology, we demand more from our planet. Eventually, this will harm people as well.

Our planet gives us everything we need, but natural resources are not endless. Strip mining devastates whole regions, leaving bare and useless ground. Deforestation removes old growth trees that cant be replaced. Too much fishing may harm fish populations to the point where they cant recover. We are too careless in taking what we want without giving anything back.

There are more people than ever, living longer that ever. So is it any surprise that many areas suffer from too much development? Anyone living in or near a city has experienced "urban sprawl". There is a new shopping area on every corner and new houses, townhouses and apartments everywhere. Traffic gets worse and worse because planners cant keep up with growth. Keeping up with human demand is hard enough. Environmental concerns come in last.

With growth comes pollution. Companies and communities dump waste into water. Landfills are full of trash. Emissions from factories pollute the air. Barrels of industrial waste and worse, radioactive waste, have no safe place to go. If were not careful, we can harm our planet beyond repair.

People need to respect the Earth and try to preserve it. If we dont, what kind of future will we have?

Christmas Day is on December 25th, though it originated in the western

country, now it is popular around the world. In China, people will spend that

day happily, they will eat apples on Christmas Eve, the children will put the

socks so that they could get the presents from Santa Claus. When I went to

college, I had an unforgettable memory about my first Christmas Day.

As my major is English, I have many foreign teachers, so that I could have

access to the local culture from them. Christmas Day is a big day for them, when

the day came, they asked us to spend the day with them, because most of them

left home and did not have families around. My classmates and I went to the

foreign teacher’s home at that day, we brought some presents, when we arrived at

his house, we found a beautiful tree with shinning lights. My teachers taught us

how to cook all the cookies, we were having such great fun. I made the cookies

with many favors. We talked happily and sung Christmas songs.

I learned how the foreign people spend their big day, it was such

unforgettable for me.

My sister is Alice. She is very lovely. She has long hair .Her hobby is flying kites. She likes collecting stamps too. Her favourite fruit is apples. She likes noodles very much.

She is a good girl. She often helps her mother do the housework. She is very kind. She has many friends in her school. She likes riding bikes with me. This is my sister. I love her very much.

The Spring Festival,Chinese New Year,is the most important festival for all of us.All family members get together on New YearEve to have a big meal. At the same time,everyone celebrates to each other.At about 12 oclock,some parents and children light crackers.The whole sky is lighted brightly.We may watch the fireworks excitedly.How busy it is!

On the first early morning of one year,many senior citizen get up early and they stick the reversed Fu or hang some couplets on the front door.Some houses windows are sticked on red paper cuttings.The Chinese New Year lasts fifteen days.

So during the fifteen days,we always visit our relatives from door to door.At that time,children are the happiest because they can get many red packets form their parents,grandparents,uncles,aunts and so on.

The last day of the Chinese New Year is another festival.It names the Lantern Festival.So the Chinese New Year comes to the end

Chinese New Year is the tradition festival in China.It is the same as the christmas day in the west country,it is welcome the new year.

It is the day that the families get together.

The spring festival is usually in the February ,sometimes in January.In the spring festival,every family all paste the lucky inscriptions,they fire the cracker,they eat the dumplings.The day before the new years first day is the new years eve,same as the christmas eve,all the families get together to have the new yaars dinner,wishes each other,talk about the wishes about the new year.Small children will receive the money given to children as a lunar new year gift.

Today was the first day of my new life. I looked at my new books and checked everything for the new school year. I was excited as well as worried.

今天是我新生活的第一天，我翻看我的新课本，检查了新学年的一切。我既激动又担心。

Entering new school, I was curious about everything, new classrooms, new teachers, new classmates etc. It would be a new start for each student. And what I was worried about is that I had no friends here. I wondered if no liked to play with me. Were the teachers strict with students?

进入新的学校，我对所有事情都很好奇，新的教室，新的老师，新的同学等等。这对每个学生来说都是一个新的开始。我所担心的是在这没有朋友。我想知道是不是没有人喜欢和我玩。老师对学生是不是很严厉?

I fell relaxed when the teacher asked me, What else could I help you, freshman?". I found that the teachers were kind and polite, and the classmates around me were friendly. While I was thinking about how to get on well with my classmates, my desk mate showed me his favorite Ipad4s. He wanted to play with me, but I didnt know how to play, so he taught me patiently, and we played happily.

当老师问我：“我能够帮你什么吗，新同学?”的时候，我一下子觉得放松了。我发现老师很善良很有礼貌，周围的同学也很友善。正当我想着怎样和同学相处的时候，我的同桌给我看他最爱的Ipad4s。他想和我一起玩，但是我不知道怎么玩，于是他就耐心的教我，然后我们就开心的玩起来。

Worries have gone, and happiness is coming.

忧虑已经消失了，幸福即将来临。

项目类别内容语言结构书写一类（46——50分）

思想感情健康，立意深刻，内容充实，中心突出文从字顺，语言准确生动，表达好结构严谨，层次清楚字体工整，书写规范，卷面整洁二类（40——45分）

思想感情健康，内容具体，中心明确文从字顺，表达较好结构完整，层次比较清楚字体工整，书写规范，卷面较整洁 三类（35——39分）

思想感情健康，内容尚具体，中心基本明确语言通顺，病句少结构基本完整字迹清楚，有少量错别字，少量涂改四类（30——34分）

思想感情基本健康，内容不够具体，中心不够明确语言基本通顺，病句不太多结构不够完整字迹潦草，错别字较多，卷面不整洁五类（29分以下）

思想感情不健康，内容不具体，中心不明确语言不通顺，病句多结构不完整字迹不易辨认，错别字多，卷面很不整洁。

[河南省中考作文评分标准

Recently, the movies about the old people happen to have the magic and then

come back to their 20 years old time are very popular. The old people do all

kinds of crazy things that they never have the chance to do. These movies tell

people that given another chance, they will do whatever they want to do. I

always hear my parents said when they retired, they could carry out all kinds of

their plans and enjoyed the life. In my opinion, when we are young , we shuold

enjoy our moment and chase our dream. It is a little to carry out the plans when

we are old. Youth is the advantages.

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Today, we live in the modern world, most things we do can use the machine. The technology brings so many convenience to us, it facilitates our life. As we are facing the new products all the time, the traditional things are fading away. Take the paper-cut for example. When I was very small, paper-cut was so popular in my grandma’s generation, most women could cut all kinds of interesting shapes.

While today when I went back to my hometown, I found that most of them had stopped cutting papers, because they could buy them at the very low price.

What’s more, the young people don’t learn such art, for the parents think it is not necessary for their children to learn the old-fashion thing. The tradition should not be abandoned, it is the reflection of our culture. Even facing the challenge, we need to inherit the tradition.

今天,我们生活在摩登时代,我们可以使用机器做大部分的事情。科技给我们带来了很多方便,它便利了我们的生活。我们每天都面对着新产品,传统的东西正在慢慢消失。以剪纸为例。在我很小的时候,在我祖母的那一代，剪纸很受欢迎,大多数女性可以剪出各种有趣的形状。现在当我回到家乡时,我发现他们中的大多数已经停止剪纸,因为他们可以以很低的价格购买。更重要的是,年轻人不了解这种艺术, 以为父母认为他们的孩子没有必要去学习这种不时髦的东西。传统不应该被放弃,这是我们文化的反映。甚至面临挑战,我们仍然需要继承传统。

[高中英语作文：传统文化的继承

The Autumn Festival

Chinese celebrate the harvest on the Mid-Autumn Festival since ancient times. Its the same as the custom of Thanksgiving Day in North America. The custom of the Mid-Autumn Festival was popular in everywhere in China in the early Tang dynasty. The Mid-Autumn is on August 15 according to lunar calendar, its the festival on which people will worship the moon.

On this night, the moon will be bright in the sky and people will get together to appreciate the moon in the family. The Mid-Autumn Festival was listed as one of Chinas cultural heritage in 2006 and was designed to be a public holiday in 2014. The moon cake is regarded as an indispensable food on Mid-Autumn Festival. People give them to their relatives and friends as gifts or enjoy them in the family party. The traditional moon cake is printed with cheracters "longevity", "blessing", "harmony" and so on. What a funny festival!

高中英语日记（一）

This afternoon, we play a game called ‘Family Tree’. This game is very interesting. I’m very interested in it. Our teacher’s family is very large. She has many brothers and sisters. But I am unlucky, I has only a sister and I without brothers. But I think I have the best parents in the world. They are very friendly to me. I live in a good family. My grand parents loves me, too. When they buy meat, they will give the best parts of the meat to me.

When I was a child, I can’t undertand them. I want to have bread. My grand father took a bike to Qu Tang. Because in our village there is no ‘bread house’. Qu Tang is far from our village. Now I grow up. I understand them when I think of this things. I will cry I can’t use words to say I love them.

I love my family!

高中英语日记（二）

I miss you very much, Mum.

I have left you for four days. Maybe it is really a short time. But I feel it is too long. I found that I couldn’t do a lot of things without you. For example, I couldn’t wash my clothes clean. It is too hard for me. I felt it is too troublesome and toilsome, but I’m sixteen years old now. I must be independent. So, Mum, I don’t know what’s what and I’m very stubborn. Sometimes, I disobeied your desire, which made you very angry. Now, I regret it. When I see some white hair in your head, I felt very sad. You are not young nay more. Sometimes you look very haggard. I know that’s because you give too much. You always concerned with my school record, healthy and a lot of other things. My school record always made you very sad. That’s my falt. I’m sorry.

Mum, you are too labbrious. You must have a good rest. I come of my ago now. I will correct my mistakes. You can rest assured!

Mum, I wish you good health and happy. I love you! Mum!

高中英语日记（三）

The hot sun is like our enthusiasm, because no matter how hot the weather is, we still keep on studying English hard.

Today, the chinese teacher taught us some English songs. I like the song which is called ”seasons in the sun” very much. We all lost ourselves in the beautiful voice. Today our theme is youth. After the teacher spoke. I suddenly understand that maybe being young is our advantage, so we must value every minute. We have to do something significant.

In the afternoon, our American teacher is father who is an associate proferssor of English from central college give us a lesson. He told us something about higher education in the USA. I think it will be useful for our future.

On the other side. I felt uncomfortable today. Perhaps it’s a small regret for such a wonderful day. But I think tomorrow still will be rosy.

1.There are several reasons for…, but in general, they come down to three major ones.有几个原因……，但一般，他们可以归结为三个主要的。

2.There are many factors that may account for…, but the following are the most typical ones.有许多因素可能占...，但以下是最典型的。

3.Many ways can contribute to solving this problem, but the following ones may be most effective.有很多方法可以解决这个问题，但下面的可能是最有效的。

4.Generally, the advantages can be listed as follows.一般来说，这些优势可以列举如下。

1) 主语+ cannot emphasize the importance of … too much.(再怎么强调……的重要性也不为过。)例如：We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much.

2)There is no need for sb to do sth. for sth.(某人没有必要做……)，例如：There is no need for you to bring more food. 不需你拿来更多的食物了。

3)By +doing…，主语can …. (借着……，……能够……)，例如：By taking exercise, we can always stay healthy. 借着做运动，我们能够始终保持健康。

4) … enable + sb.+ to + do…. (……使……能够……)，例如：Listening to music enables us to feel relaxed. 听音乐使我们能够感觉轻松。

5) On no account can we + do…. (我们绝对不能……)，例如：On no account can we ignore the value of knowledge.我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值。

6) What will happen to sb.? (某人将会怎样?), 例如：What will happen to the orphan? 那个孤儿将会怎样?

7)For the past + 时间，主语 + 现在完成式…. (过去……年来，……一直……)例如：For the past two years，I have been busy preparing for the examination. 过去两年来，我一直忙着准备考试。

8)It pays to + do….(……是值得的。)例如：It pays to help others. 帮助别人是值得的。

9)主语+ be based on….(以……为基础)，例如：The progress of thee society is based on harmony.社会的进步是以和谐为基础的。

10)主语 + do one’s best to do….(尽全力去……)，例如：We should do our best to achieve our goal in life.我们应尽全力去达成我们的人生目标

健康对于我们每个人来说是非常重要的，但你的父母天天忙于工作而忽略了这个问题，你很为他们担忧。请你以此为话题，并结合提示给他们写一封信。

提示：1.要走路去上班，而不是开车或坐车;

2.每周至少去体育馆锻炼一次，或打球、或游泳;

3.饮食要健康;

4.不要工作太晚，要早休息。

要求：1.短文结构完整，意思连贯，语言流畅，语法准确，符合逻辑;

2.80—100词左右;

3.开头和结尾部分已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Dad(Mum),

You’re so busy every day that you don’t pay much attention to your health. I’m worried about your health all the time. I’d like to give you some suggestions. I hear walking is the best sport. Your company isn’t far from home, is it? Why not walk to the office? You’d better take exercise at least once a week, such as playing tennis in the gym. Going to swim is also a nice choice, too. What’s more, it’s necessary to have healthy food. Try not to stay up too late. Having enough sleep can help your brain work better.

Dad, please accept my advice. I really wish you healthy!

Your loving son (daughter)

Tom (Mary)

亲爱的爸爸(妈妈)，

你每天这么忙，你不重视你的健康。我对你的健康担心所有的时间。我想给你一些建议。我听到走路是最好的运动。您的公司没有远离家乡，是吗?为什么不步行到办公室吗?你最好锻炼，每周至少一次，如在健身房打网球。去游泳也是一个不错的选择了。更重要的是，它需要有健康的食物。尽量不要熬夜太晚。有足够的睡眠可以让你的大脑工作得更好。

爸爸，请接受我的意见。我真的希望你健康!

您的爱子(女)

汤姆(玛丽)

[给父母的一封信高中英语满分作文

My hometown mulan, in towns the low-profile, flowing is the biggest tributary of heilongjiang, songhua river.

Morning breeze is blowing, microwave float. Clouds of light on the water with water. The shore, sending out the scent of the grass shore willow branches are swaying gently. Vaguely saw the outline of the mountain, river, continuous mountains were like this microwave, let a person feel is gentle and kind, like a mothers letters, also does not say to tire. The sides of the river is full of green. Grass, leaves, and the river of life is green, they are in the start of the day is full of green hope.

The sun is shining, the songhua river water. River billowing east go, is to seize the legendary treasure? Wash the sound of water, the branches swaying and laughing voices of people constitute a jolly, light travel route. Sunshine is aspersed spread evenly on the river, river sparkling, seems like a big moving mirror, reflecting the dazzling light.

Into the night, the sun sets to the west, on the river and the gold of the horizon. Deep blue sky, a bright moon hanging in the round, each star like a sparkling gem with the sky. The moon reflected on the river, also is so round, like the river on the also have a moon. In the quiet of the night, the songhua river is also gradually fell asleep, ended its journey of a day.

The beauty of a gentle, songhua river is wild, it is quiet...

高中英语作文范文：完美的心

完美的心

One day a young man was standing in the middle of the town proclaiming1) that he had the most beautiful heart in the whole valley. A large crowd gathered, and they all admired his heart for it was perfect. There was not a flaw2) in it.

Suddenly, an old man appeared and said, "Why3), your heart is not nearly as beautiful as mine!"

The crowd and the young man looked at the old mans heart. It was full of scars. It had places where pieces had been removed and other pieces put in, but they didnt fit quite right, and there were several jagged4) edges. In fact, in some places there were deep gouges5) where whole pieces were missing.

The young man laughed. "Comparing your heart with mine, mine is perfect and yours is a mess of scars."

"Yes," said the old man, "Yours looks perfect but I would never trade with you. You see, every scar represents a person to whom I have given my love. I tear out a piece of my heart and give it to them, and often they give me a piece of their heart that fits into the empty place in my heart.

"But because the pieces arent exact, I have some rough edges, which I cherish, because they remind me of the love we shared.

"Sometimes I have given pieces of my heart away, and the other person hasnt returned a piece of his or her heart to me. These are the empty gouges - giving love is taking a chance.

"Although these gouges are painful, they stay open, reminding me of the love I have for those people too, and I hope someday they may return and fill the space Ive been waiting. So now do you see what true beauty is"

The young man walked up to the old man, reached into his perfect heart, and ripped6) a piece out. He offered it to the old man.

The old man placed it in his heart, then took a piece from his old scarred heart and placed it in the wound in the young mans heart. It fit, but not perfectly, as there were some jagged edges.

The young man looked at his heart, not perfect anymore but more beautiful than ever, since love from the old mans heart flowed into his.They embraced7) and walked away side by side.

How sad it must be to go through life with a whole untouched heart!一天,一个年轻人站在镇子的中央,宣称他拥有整个山谷最美丽的心。一大群人围了过来,都交口称赞年轻人的心,因为这颗心完美无瑕。

一位老者突然出现了,说道:"嗨,你的心可不如我的心美丽啊!"

这群人和年轻人都看了看老者的心,只见上面布满伤痕。心上的一些部分被取走了,另外补上了其他人的,但并不十分吻合,还有几处边缘参差不齐。事实上,他的心上有些地方留下了深深的凹痕,整瓣整瓣的心都不见了。

年轻人笑道:"跟你的心相比,我的心才是完美的,你的心满是疤痕。"

"没错,"老者说:"你的心看上去很完美,但是我永远不会和你交换。你瞧,每处伤痕都代表一个我曾爱过的人。我撕下自己的一片心给他们,他们往往也会给我一片他们的心,填补我心中缺失的那部分。

"但是由于每片心大小并不完全相同,我的心有些粗糙的边缘,不过我很珍惜,因为它们让我想起我们之间分享过的爱。

"有时我把自己的几片心送出去,其他人却没有向我回馈他们的心。这些便成了空着的深痕--付出爱本来就是一种冒险。

"尽管这些凹痕让我感到痛苦,但它们敞开着,让我想起我对他们付出的爱,并希望有朝一日能得到回馈,填满这等待已久的空间。所以,现在你明白什么才是真正的美了吗"

年轻人走到老者面前,把手伸进自己完美的心中,撕下了一片,赠给了老者。老者把这片心放进自己的心里,然后从自己那颗苍老而又伤痕累累的心上撕下一片,放入年轻人心上的伤口。虽然能够放进去,但不十分吻合,因为有的边缘凹凸不平。

年轻人看了看自己的心,它虽然不再完美,却更加美丽,因为老者心中的爱流入了他的心田。

他们互相拥抱,然后并肩前行。

人这一生如果一直保持着一颗完整未动的心是多么可悲啊!