高中叙事英语作文范文10篇（合集20篇）

Whatever we are, we should do our best!

When I was a little girl ,I dreamed to grow up. Because I think a child doesn‘t has freedom,and can‘t do anything himself.

But now I have grown up, to my surprise, I feel more tired and have more suffering.Though I can do something myself, I don‘t feel happy at all.

I believe you also have the same thoughs with me. when we was a child , we wanted to grow up, but when we became a older man,we don‘t have such nice life as wish. So whatever we are children or adults, we should try to make our life better, and make ourselves more happy. we should try our best to study hard, then we can let parents have good life, too! Let‘s do our best to do ourself ! Believe yourself ! You are the best!

[我们应该做最好高中英语日记

Once， when I was a teenager， my father and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus. Finally， there was only one family between us and the ticket counter.

This family made a big impression on me. There were eight children， all probably under the age of 12. You could tell they didnt have a lot of money.

Their clothes were not expensive， but they were clean. The children were well-behaved， all of them standing in line， two-by-two behind their parents， holding hands. They were excitedly jabbering about the clowns， elephants， and other acts they would see that night.

One could sense they had never been to the circus before. It promised to be a highlight of their young lives. The father and mother were at the head of the pack， standing proud as could be.

The mother was holding her husbands hand， looking up at him as if to say， "Youre my knight in shining armor."

He was smiling and basking in pride， looking back at her as if to reply， "You got that right."

The ticket lady asked the father how many tickets he wanted. He proudly responded， "Please let me buy eight childrens tickets and two adult tickets so I can take my family to the circus."

The ticket lady quoted the price. The mans wife let go of his hand， her head dropped， and his lip began to quiver. The father leaned a little closer and asked， "How much did you say?"

The ticket lady again quoted the price. The man didnt have enough money.

How was he supposed to turn and tell his eight kids that he didn‘t have enough money to take them to the circus? Seeing what was going on， my dad put his hand in his pocket， pulled out a $20 bill and dropped it on the ground. (We were not wealthy in any sense of the word!)

清晨下起了小雨。丝丝缕缕，好似要将寒意渗入人的内心。奈眯起眼睛，带走一朵小花，捂在怀里，往学校跑去。昏暗的教室随着灯光的开启变得透亮起来。透过窗户上映出的那张苍白的脸，外面的世界一片混沌。

奈把小花小心地植进白色的小花盆里，摆在窗台上，然后趴在桌子上，做起了习题，脑海里挥之不去的是洛洛的笑颜。她站在朝阳映照下的花丛里，挥舞着身体问眼前的男孩：是花美，还是我美?.奈抬起头来，红霞如画。

南方的夏天总是让人胸口闷得像随时会爆炸。一团又一团的黑虫子爬满了心脏，在寻找一个开口，摄取新鲜血液。对于像奈这样的高四学生来说，再也不能失败。大家在教室忙完沉闷的每一天，然后奔出教室，等待着来给自己送饭的父母。唯独奈，静静坐在教室里，低下头，奋笔疾书。他不愿想起父亲，在失业多年后终于被母亲抛弃，变成一个满脸胡碴酗酒的男人。他常常打奈，吼他滚出去找回他的母亲。

于是，奈学会了抽烟、酗酒、打架。他以为生活一直会这样下去，直到高三时，一个叫洛洛的女孩出现在他的身边。

那是又一个午后，酗酒的父亲又一次对他拳打脚踢，忍无可忍的他终于奋起反抗。然而，当他抹着嘴角的血迹跑出家门的时候，一个女孩光着脚站在隔壁打开的门前，轻声但一字一顿地说：你就不能为自己活着吗?想要摆脱苦难，就得奋起!奈迅速跑掉了。

过了几天，他竟然发现那个女孩与他同在一栋教学楼。他再一次拿起书本，坐在教室的角落里慢慢地翻着，那个女孩则利用课余时间过来给他补课。她叫洛洛，一位优秀的应届生。

尽管他一年来尽心竭力，但无情的高考还是那么冷静、公允。奈送洛洛上火车的时候，说：等着我，看我成功的那一天!洛洛笑了，说：我从没想过你有不成功的可能……盯着眼前的花盆，奈忽然想起了一句诗：忆当时，垂柳丝，花枝，满庭蝴蝶儿。这一年来，洛洛不知道，就在她所在的这个城市里，有一个高四生在一直努力着。

当又一年的高考过后，奈提着行李来到了洛洛所在的大学，她却早已等在校门口，对着他，笑出了泪来。更让他没有想到的是，在洛洛的身后，站着那个奈又恨又舍不下的男人。奈抬起头，望了望那天边的红霞，然后对着洛洛说：你真美!

Youth Day (青年节) in the Peoples Republic of China is on May 4. It was established in December 1949 by the Government Administration Council to commemorate the beginning of the May Fourth Movement in 1919. This day is known as …

May Fourth Movement

Chinese intellectual revolution and sociopolitical reform movement (1917 – 21)。 In 1915 young intellectuals inspired by Chen Duxiu began agitating for the reform and strengthening of Chinese society through acceptance of Western science, democracy, and schools of thought, one objective being to make China strong enough to resist Western imperialism. On May 4, 1919, reformist zeal found focus in a protest by Beijings students against the Versailles Peace Conferences decision to transfer former German concessions in China to Japan. After more than a month of demonstrations, strikes, and boycotts of Japanese goods, the government gave way and refused to sign the peace treaty with Germany. The movement spurred the successful reorganization of the Nationalist Party and gave birth to the Chinese Communist Party. See also Treaty of Versailles.

If you ask someone that do they often go to library, I think they will

answer you with no, the reason I am saying this because of the development of

ebook. Many years ago, without computer, the only way to check the information

that you need is from paper books, it means you need to go to the book shop or

the library, while with the development of the Internet, people have access to

the information very easily, you only need to click on the computer, then what

you look for is in front of you. Ebook is a very popular form for reading,

people can find what they want to read in the computer, like the novel story,

then download. It is so convenient and fast, it can save a lot of time, we don’t

need to go to the library if we are busy. Ebook is a good way for reading.

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如果你问一些人他们是否经常去图书馆，我觉得他们会回答不，我这样说的理由是因为电子书的发展。很多年前没有电脑，你想要核查你所需要的信息，唯一的方法就是去找纸质书，这意味着你需要去书店或者图书馆，然而随着电脑的发展，人们能很轻易得到信息，你只需要点击电脑，然后你所寻找的就会在你眼前。电子书是一种很受欢迎的阅读方式，人们可以在电脑上找到他们想要阅读的，比如小说，然后下载。这很方便快捷，能够省时，我们不需要去图书馆，如果我们很忙的话。电子书是阅读的好方式。

Last Sunday, I went sightseeing with my friends in the Fairy Lake Park. I was appreciating the beautiful lake when a scene that didn’t go with its harmony came into my eyes. A couple were cheering loudly on a boat, letting out the noise disturbing all the visitors around. They even threw litter and spat into the water, completely ignoring the sign nearby “No throwing litter into the lake!”

How could they lack public morality so much? I felt sad about them. And I was totally against what they did.

Every individual should think about others’ feelings and avoid polluting the environment while they are enjoying the beautiful scenery; otherwise the Fairy Lake Park would not be fairy at all and lake might be a pool of dirty dead water some day. Therefore we should mind our behavior in public places so that the environment in public places will be more and more beautiful.

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上周日，我去和我的朋友在仙女湖公园观光。我很欣赏美丽的湖时，一个场景，不去与和谐进入我的眼睛。一对夫妇被大声欢呼，船上的噪声干扰，让所有参观者。他们甚至扔垃圾，吐入水，完全无视标志附近的“不乱扔垃圾入湖!“

他们怎么可能缺乏公德这么多?我感到悲伤，他们。我是完全反对他们做了什么。

每一个人都应该考虑别人的感受，避免污染环境而他们享受美丽的风景;否则，仙女湖公园不会仙女在所有和湖是一池的水脏死了有一天。因此我们应该注意我们在公共场所的行为，在公共场所的环境会越来越漂亮。

Dragon Boat race Traditions

At the center of this festival are the dragon boat races. Competing teams drive their colorful dragon boats forward to the rhythm of beating drums. These exciting races were inspired by the villagers valiant attempts to rescue Chu Yuan from the Mi Luo river. This tradition has remained unbroken for centuries.

Tzung Tzu

A very popular dish during the Dragon Boat festival is tzung tzu. This tasty dish consists of rice dumplings with meat, peanut, egg yolk, or other fillings wrapped in bamboo leaves. The tradition of tzung tzu is meant to remind us of the village fishermen scattering rice across the water of the Mi Luo river in order to appease the river dragons so that they would not devour Chu Yuan.

Ay Taso

The time of year of the Dragon Boat Festival, the fifth lunar moon, has more significance than just the story of Qu Yuan. Many Chinese consider this time of year an especially dangerous time when extra efforts must be made to protect their family from illness. Families will hang various herbs, called Ay Tsao, on their door for protection. The drinking of realgar wine is thought to remove poisons from the body. Hsiang Bao are also worn. These sachets contain various fragrant medicinal herbs thought to protect the wearer from illness.

翻译：风俗习惯端午节最重要的活动是龙舟竞赛。比赛的队伍他们多彩的龙舟前进的鼓声中。这项活动的灵感是来自村民的勇敢的尝试营救汨罗江畔的屈原。这个传统一直保持了几个世纪。

粽子非常受欢迎的菜在端午节粽子。粽子的米包着肉、花生、蛋黄及其他材料，再以竹叶包裹。而粽子的传统是为了提醒我们的渔夫，将米丢进汨罗河水安抚蛟龙，希望他们不要将屈原吃掉。

塔索(Taso)的时间每年的端午节，农历的第五天，具有更多的意义，不仅仅是屈原的故事。许多中国人认为每年的这个时候，一个特别危险的时候，必须做出额外的努力，保护家人免受疾病。家庭在门上将挂各种草药，叫驱邪。喝雄黄酒被认为是去除体内的毒物。香包也穿，它是以含有多种香味药草认为保护人们远离疾病。

Good morning. It is my honour to come here for this interview.

First let me introduce myself to you. My name is Wendy. I am 17 years old, and was born in Jinan, Shandong Province. I was graduated from ** Middle School.

I am always studying hard, and I have achieved lots of fruitful results, including many certifications.

I am optimistic and open-minded. I have made a lots of good friends in my school.

In my spare time, I like reading and listening to the music. Sometimes, I also like to play basketball.

I hope I have the chance to enter the school. And I also believe that where there is a will, there is a way.

That is all. Thanks for your attention.

According to my memory, my high school life was full of happiness and fortune because of my lovely friend and teacher. They are sunshine in my high school life.

根据记忆，我的高中生活充满了幸福和运气，因为有可爱的朋友和老师。他们是我高中生活的阳光。

I met my best friend in senior one. She is a girl with long legs, white skin, and small face. What makes me a deep impression is her wide shoulder, wider than other girls who have the same height as her. She was kind, treating me just like I was her sister. I didn’t live in school dormitory, but she did. So, I slept with her at noon. Sometimes we argued, but we both checked our mistakes and recovered our relationship soon. When we were senior two, I moved in school dormitory, I didn’t feel comfortable in there very fast. She took care of me and made me feel warm. In my opinion, she is more than a friend, like a family.

在高一的时候我遇到了我最好的朋友。她是一个女孩，有着一条长长的腿，白皙的皮肤和小小的脸蛋。她比同身高的女生都要宽的宽宽的肩膀让我印象深刻。她很善良，对我就像是她妹妹一样。我不在学校宿舍住，但是她在。所以，中午我和她一起睡。有时候我们会争吵，但我们都自我反省，之后我们的关系很快就会恢复了。当我们高二的时候，我搬到学校宿舍住，很快我就觉得不舒服。她照顾我，让我感到很温暖。在我看来，她不止是朋友，也是家人。

As for my teachers, my chemistry teacher is my favorite teacher. She is a woman with sweet smile, not so tall, but she built a tall imagination in my heart. I used to chat with her result from my failure in the exam. She is a divorced woman; however, she was steel, living a happy life with her daughter. I appreciate people with a strong heart, maybe the reason is that I want to be the kind of person who is always optimistic and can’t be defeated easily. She expresses that.

至于我的老师，我最喜欢的老师是我的化学老师。她是一个女老师，总是挂着甜美的微笑，她不是很高，但她在我的心里却是伟大的形象。我曾经因为考试不及格而和她聊天。她是一个离了婚的女人;然而，她却像钢铁一样坚强，和她的女儿过着幸福的生活。我很欣赏拥有一颗坚强的心的人，也许是因为我想成为一个永远乐观，不轻易被打败的人。她说道。

The high school memory is a valuable memory in my life. It’s my fortune to meet them, my sunshine.

在我的人生中高中记忆是我一段宝贵的记忆。遇见他们，我的阳光是我的运气。

Its Sunday today. I got up early and did my homework on the table. All of a

sudden I remembered the mothers day, a picture of my mind, remembering a past

thing that moved me.

Thats the case. After coming home from school that afternoon, my mother came

back. I found that my mother was very tired, his eyes were squinting, and I

yawned. So she sent me to do my homework at home. But I felt very sad to see my

mother working so hard, so I decided to share the housework for my mother. I

began to pick up the stuff in my home, first fold the newspaper, and then the

glass was cleaned.

I put the glass on the pot filled with water, and then picked up the cloth, a

brush up. I found a little dirty in a cup, and I took some detergent to wash it.

Suddenly, the cup from the hand slipped, piercing sound startled me. I hastened

to pick up the pieces of glass on the floor. At this time, I found that my

mother was standing in front of me, and she said, "dont pick up the pieces with

your hands. Let me come." I stood up and bowed my head embarrassed and said,

"Im sorry, mom, Im too careless." I thought: this must be closed. Mother

walked over and touched my head and said, "kid, dont frighten you?" Let mommy

pack up, you go out and watch TV. " Mothers words are very gentle, but make me

more difficult, unwittingly I cry.

Looking back on this, I felt very warm. It told me that maternal love is

selfless and great, and I want to repay my mother on Mothers day.

In high school, Chinese students study very hard to fight for the future

college, while in western countries, students are spending time in taking all

kinds of activities. Though students from different countries have different

ways to spend high school time, they make the decision and take charge of their

life. This is the best age to learn knowledge, their brain can remember words

and numbers quickly. For making friends, they will probably meet their lifetime

friends. During three years, besides gaining knowledge and making friends, they

grow so fast, not only in body, but also in mind. Being independent is the main

feature. They can make a lot of decisions without asking parents for help. When

they are equipped themselves with basic skill, then they can better get used to

the new environment, which is important for future life.

千年负债，前世轮回的苦！好想问苍天，谁能拯救？

地老天荒，一变再变！曾是落日野狼，以为可以独嗷，可以独走，可是为什么，要给我这世间最复杂的爱？我有要过么？

转折如风，也如空气，经不到我的认可。这些年，风也过，雨也走，没认输，没流泪。因为我是狼，狼行千里！可是，不小心，被人挑穿心房，从此，蜕变成伤痕狼子。

我不要你的承诺，不要你的永远，只想要你好好久久爱我一遍，就算虚荣也好，贪心也好！可我最怕你用沉默当作是对我的回答！

相遇在人海，又是不是老天来的安排？！

有多少人，值得等待？有多少爱，可以从来？有多少相遇，能够携手明天？

就算安排，又怎么能左右情感？

深陷泥潭，我无法自拔，我打不开困我的枷锁！所以，我得为你在泥泞里翻滚！在现实里落泪！

我已一无所有，拿什么来拯救那份已成记忆的爱情？

关上了连着世界的门，又整理着记忆，却把心放在一边，让它在睡梦中死去。这一路过来，它太倦了？

要做我自己，原原本本的一个追梦人，不会改变，但会坚持！时常会沉默，不会哭，不能笑。像一遵塑像。我明白，我就应该这样对着时间，阻止不了它来替我清刷情丝，给我沧桑的面庞。一段一段过后，凭着千沟万壑的笑容回头看遥远的今生，可能那时候便是真正的笑…

关于回报和付出，关于得到和放弃，到底孰轻孰重？也或者，它们本就是触不到的两边…

哪里是尽头？哪里是出口？谁会来拯救？

谁能来拯救？？

The period of high school stage is the preparation for college, all the students work hard in the purpose of the better future. In this stage, they hold the same target, fighting for the College Entrance Exam, especially in the third year, the sprint is very important. There are some suggestions for a better sprint. First, students should take a regular work schedule, it is very important to sleep in time, so that students can wake up early in the morning and then work with efficiency. Second is to keep the balanced diet. Students should pay attention to what they eat, the nutrition should be enough, so they can keep a better mind, thinking in a quick way. The last year of high school life must be hard and tedious, the one who keeps hold on will gain what they want. If they do as the mentioned suggestions, they can work better.

Life is each person s wealth, because the world with life and colorful, full of vigour, let us love and cherish own life, seize every minute of life. Life is short, be gone for ever, human life is fleeting, time can not be reversed, we can only in a limited life infinite brilliance.

That day, my good friend clay came to my house to play, my mother know, immediately do a lot of delicious to clay. When we have fun when, suddenly, clay fainted. Mom saw mud, immediately sent to hospital. After the doctor s detailed inspection, the final judgment is had leukemia. Doctor for my mother said: oh! The child to live no longer than four months, if you come a little earlier treatment, it is no big deal. But now... Alas! Mother pale, said to the doctor: doctor, do not save? The doctor reluctantly shook his head. At that moment, I have tears in eyes is the best, but couldn t flow down. I think: why the event would fall in my good friend why, why! My mother said to me: my daughter, you don t cry. We don t know if that mud, mud know she will be very sad, you promised mom don t tell clay, okay? I cried and said: Mom and I promise you, I will not tell her.

We came to the clay ward, pretending to be happy. For I in the four months to make clay can happy every day, make clay in full every day, I spend a lot of time. But time always flies so fast, I am very sad, because I know the clay have not much time.

[热爱生命高中生英语作文

Today, as the economy develops fast, people can buy what they need, the

producers provide them all the new things, so the factory produce many products,

in order to make the biggest profit, they don’t deal with the pollution. Water

gets polluted, it does harm to people’s health, we drink water everyday, the

government controls the producers to figure out some ways to deal with the water

pollution.

Which is better, shopping online or traditional shopping? Different people have different attitudes towards it. Some people think that online shopping is very convenient, for it can save them a lot of time and energy. It’s especially helpful for those who are always busy with their work. Besides, through the internet, they can get more information about the commodities they want to buy and buy a lot of things that cannot be bought in local places.

网上购物还是传统购物，那种方式更好呢？每个人对这事的看法都不一样。有些人认为网购十分方便，因为这种方式可以节省许多的时间和精力。特别是对那些工作十分繁忙的人来说，网购帮了大忙。此外，通过网络他们可以知道关于他们想购买的产品的信息，还能卖到当地没有卖的商品。

Nevertheless, I’m not keen on online shopping at all, since most commodities which are bought online are of poor quality. Once we are cheated, we may find it difficult to make a complaint. Thus we should take more cautions when shopping online.

尽管如此，我还是不太热衷于网购，因为大多数我们网购而来的产品的质量劣质。一旦我们上当受骗，我们会发现我们无处投诉。因此我们网购时要非常的谨慎。

In my eyes, I prefer traditional shopping, because I can choose what I really need. Also, I can know the quality of every commodity more clearly. Even if there’s something wrong with the commodities, I can still ask the sellers to compensate for my loss.

在我看来，我更喜欢普通的购物方式，因为我只需要选购我所需要的，而且我还能很清楚的知道商品的质量如何。假如我买的东西出现问题，我还能让卖家赔偿我的损失。

[高中英语作文：网上购物还是传统购物？

Currently, some cities are considering a food ban on subways, which has sparked heated discussion. Some people say food should be banned because of the trash and rats they attract. And, garbage from discarded food can cause track fires. Beyond sanitary and mechanical concerns, food can also cause fights, as was discovered last week by one passenger who criticized a woman eating steamed stuffed bun on the subway.

However, some others are opposed to the idea. They argue that people like eating in the train in the morning because they dont have enough time to eat at their houses or restaurants. Sometimes that may be the only time or meal a transit rider may be able to eat especially when traveling long distances. Besides, there are people, for example diabetics, who do require food at various times to maintain blood-sugar levels.

Personally, Im against the ban because of the huge inconvenience it would cause to commuters, and the expense involved in enforcing it. Still, I believe we should have a little common courtesy. I think we all have responsibility to try to treat our subway system and fellow riders with respect, and that extends to food as well.

Howeverhard the situation is, we shouldnt lose our heart, because we have our dreams.Our dreams are always glorious. We also have enthusiasm that will make ourdreams come true. But we must have the willingness to work hard, since if wework hard, some miracles will happen. Nothing good will happen without our hardwork.

不管情况多么艰难，我们都不应该迷失自己，因为我们还有梦想。我们的梦想总是光荣的。我们也有能使我们梦想成真的热情。但我们必须要有努力工作的意愿，因为如果我们努力工作，会有奇迹发生的。如果不如理工作就不会有好的事情发生。

Whatsmore, when we are unhappy, we can think about our dreams, so that we will bemore enthusiastic. When we are defeated, we should stand up and say," Imnot a failure." Please remember, “ Anything is possible to a man who has astrong determination.”

更重要的是，在我们不快心的时候，我们可以想一想我们的梦想，这样我们就会更加充满热情。在我们失败的时候，我们应该站起来说，“我不是一个失败者”。请记住，“对于一个有决心的人一切皆有可能。”

[高中英语作文：不放弃希望

我们的春节是中国人一年中的第一个传统佳节，它标志旧的一年结束，新的一年已经开始。年夜饭，是春节的重要活动之一，中国的百姓家庭对年夜饭极为重视。正月初二，我和爸爸妈妈一起到奶奶家吃年夜饭。

在今天来的人特别多，奶奶家显得格外热闹，年味超浓。姑姑、叔叔和我爸爸正聊得热火重天。他们边嗑瓜子，边滔滔不绝的聊着各种话题。表哥和嫂子在房间里逗小baby开心，看着小宝贝的笑脸，他们别提有多开心了。而我和俩位表姐则更是“肆无忌惮”了。我们三人盘腿坐在沙发上，悠闲自得地玩着ipad上的割绳子，时不时传出一阵阵爽朗的笑声。

又过了一会儿，奶奶慈祥地把我们带进房间，塞给我们每人一个印着“马”的红包，我们接过红包，笑盈盈的谢谢奶奶。

很快的还有5分钟就到6点了。姑父把我们安排到圆桌上的各个座位上，我和2位表姐左右邻座。先上一道饭前甜点“蔬菜沙拉”开开胃。我们三个吃货纷纷拿勺子一勺勺地舀着沙拉，没一会儿，沙拉就差不多吃完了。姑姑笑着说：“慢点吃，每人和你们抢。”这时，第二道菜“年年有鱼”上来了。色香味俱全，酱油的味道恰到好处，加上葱花点缀，这道菜别提有多美了。鱼上完了，紧接着就是“清煮虾仁”了。这道菜清甜可口，配上一碗香醋，让人垂涎欲滴。稍后又上了不少好菜，个顶个都是美食，今天来真是有口福了。

晚上，吃完晚饭。大家陆陆续续都散了，我和爸爸妈妈也只好依依不舍的和奶奶说“再见”了，今天一天玩得别提有多开心了，和家人团聚是一件幸福的事。

1、审题：审题是做到切题的第一步。所谓审题就是要看清题意，确定文章的中心思想、主题，并围绕中心思想组织材料。

2、进行构思，列出简单的提纲，打造文章之骨架：审好题、立好意后，就要写提纲，打造文章的骨架。文章布局要做好几件事：安排好层次段落，铺设好过渡，处理好开头和结尾。

3、扩展成文：根据字数多少扩展成篇。扩展的内容一定要紧扣主题，千万不要写那些与主题不相关的内容。展开的方式包括：顺序法、举例法、比较法、对比法、说明法、因果法、推导法、归纳法和下定义等。可以根据需要任选一种或几种方式。

在这一步骤中还需注意三方面问题：

1、确保提纲中段落结构的思路与各段主题句的一致性。只有这样，才能保证所写段落不偏题、不跑题。

2、要综合考虑各个段落的内容安排，避免段落内容的交叉。

3、用好连接词，注意段落间、句子间的连贯性。要做到所写文章层次分明，思路清晰，文字连贯，就需要在句与句之间、段与段之间架起一座座桥梁，而连接词起的正是桥梁作用。

在扩展的过程中也有些窍门，以下几点可供参考：

1、在整篇文章中，避免只是用一两个句式或重复用同一词语。英语中存在着极为丰富的同义词，准确地使用同义词可以给读者清新的感觉。同时要灵活运用各种句式，如倒装句、强调句、省略句、主从复合句、对比句、分词短语、介词短语等，从而增加文章的可读性。

2、使用不同长度的句子。如果一个意思用一句话写不清楚的话，通过分句和合句或用两句、三句来表达，增强句子的连贯性和表现力。

3、改变句子的开头方式，不要总是以主、谓、宾、状的次序。可以把状语至于句首，或用分词等。

4、学会使用过渡词。递进furthermore，moreover，besides，in addition，then，etc ;转折however，but，nevertheless，afterwards，etc ;总结finally，at last，in brief，to conclude，etc ;强调really，indeed，certainly，surely，above a11，etc ;对比in the same way，just as，on the other hand，etc。

5、确定文章用第几人称写，基本时态是什么。使用人称时人物不能张冠李戴或指代不明。时态要尽量保持一致。

检查修改：要检查复核，不要写完了事。

要留时间通读全文，修改可能出现的错误。检查上下文是否连贯，句子衔接是否自然流畅。检验的标准主要是句子是否通畅，该用连词的地方用了没有，所用的连词是否合适，是否有语法错误，主谓是否一致，动词的时态、语态、语气的使用是否正确，词组的搭配是否合乎习惯，是否有大小写、拼写、标点错误等，还有就是注意卷面整洁。

可归纳为：中心突出，主题明确;层次清楚，条理清晰;表达

I think Mid-Autumn Day is an old traditional festival in China。 Everybody likes it because its a family get-together。 You see it is called"Mid-Autumn Day"， so it often es in September or October。 It is on the 15th of the 8th of the lunar month。 Now， lets say something about this interesting festival。

Firstly， Id like to say something about the moon。 I like it very much because I want to be an astronaut in the future。 That day the moon is round， big， just like a beautiful plate hanging on the blue cloth。 When I see the moon， I will remember the ancient myths——the godess Chang Er and her little rabbit are playing under the tree which Wu Gang grows。 I will also think about Armstrongs first moonwalk。 I will also miss the friends in Tai-wan island， in Macao and Chinese people who are abroad。 I know they are missing us very much， too。

Secondly， I11 say something about the tradition on Mid-Autumn Day。 Look!Theres a big tree in a garden of a Chinese fami-ly。 All the family members are sitting around a big table under the tree in the open air。 They are eating the mooncakes and admiring the full moon in the sky。 That is a family reunion dinner。 The mooncakes and the moon represent the love from a family。 I think this is one of the most valuable things in the world。

Thirdly，it is a very good opportunity to make three wishes on Mid-Autumn Day。 My wishes are: the first， I， an astronaut in the future， would like to go to the moon one day， and stay with the sky and stars; the second， I hope every person in the world will stay with family， share love from the family forever; the third， I hope everybodys dream will e true。

That is the Mid-Autumn Day in my mind。 I will always re-member: East or West， home is best。

我认为中秋节是中国古老的传统节日。每个人都喜欢它，因为它是一个家庭聚会。你看它被称为“中秋节”，所以通常在九月或十月。这是在农历八月十五日。现在，让我们谈谈这个有趣的节日。

首先，我想谈谈月亮问题。我非常喜欢它，因为我希望将来成为一名宇航员。那天月亮是圆的，大的，就像一块美丽的盘子挂在蓝色的布上。我看到月亮，我会记得古老的神话 - 长女和她的小兔子正在吴刚生长的树下玩耍。我也会想到阿姆斯特朗的第一次月球漫步。我也会想念台湾的朋友们岛上，澳门和国外的中国人。我知道他们也非常想念我们。

其次，我要谈谈中秋节的传统。看!中国家庭的花园里有一棵大树。所有的家庭成员都坐在树下的一张大桌子旁边露天。他们正在吃月饼，欣赏天空中的满月。这是一个家庭聚会晚餐。月饼和月亮代表了一个家庭的爱。我认为这是世界上最有价值的东西之一。

第三，这是一个非常好的机会，在中秋节做出三个愿望。我的愿望是：第一，我，未来的宇航员，有一天想去月球，和天空和星星呆在一起; 第二，我希望世界上每个人都能和家人在一起，永远地与家人分享爱意; 第三，我希望每个人的梦想都是真的。

那是我心中的中秋节。我将永远重新成员：东方或西方，家是最好的。