2018年福建中考英语作文范文（推荐20篇）

Dear editor，

Im writing to tell you something about the problem of food safety.

“The food is what matters to the people, the food by An Weixian”, the humanity grows, the economy soars, the social progress, the time cannot leave food, cannot leave the security, hygienic, nutrition food.“How can like this? How should we manage?”The general populations were asking unceasingly “we must eat safe food” the general populations to request unceasingly, populaces call, stimulates to movement us to ponder, moves.

Food enterprise, the conscience enterprise”, food production management enterprise is qualified, the high quality food producer, is the person who has rendered meritorious service, also is the inferior harmful food manufacturer, and possibly becomes the criminal, therefore said, food produces the operator is the food security first owner, decides food quality the key aspect both is the technology, also is not the management and the equipment, the key lies in food production in the human key to manage the owner and jobholders professional personal integrity and the moral standard.

The dead pork production meat product, the use industry paraffin wax manufacture hot pot bed charge, the use sodium hydroxide soaks floods sends the product, dont they know these things harmfully? Also non-, how lets us listen to the production protein content only is 2% powdered milk production business owner when hears the long-term oral administration powdered milk causes the big end of baby death is says, “, this kind of powdered milk cannot eat continuously, we always do not eat in any case, we all arrive the supermarket to buy several dozens Yuan tin of import powdered milk to eat”。

This accident made me realize the seriousness of the food safety problem. I sincerely hope that the whole society pay much more attention to food safety.

[中考英语写给主编关于食品安全问题的一封信作文

1.同学们中普遍存在的压力是什么;

2.我的压力是什么;

3.我是如何成功缓解我的压力的。

注意：文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名。

词数80~100;短文的开头已给出(不计入总词数)。

Less Pressure, Better Life

Hello, boys and girls!

Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Students in our class are under too much pressure. ……

That’s all. Thank you!

参考范文:

Less Pressure, Better Life

Hello, boys and girls!

Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can’t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams.

I’m always under pressure, too. My parents want me to be the top student in class. So they send me to all kinds of training classes at weekends.

Last Monday evening, I had a talk with my mother. I told her I was not lazy. I really felt tired. I needed time to relax. My mother agreed with me at last. So I think a conversation with parents is necessary to solve the problem.

That’s all. Thank you!

最近几年的中考英语当中，很多省市已经摆脱了单一作文模式，采用一大一小两个作文相结合的模式。例如，去年辽宁沈阳中考英语作文就是一个小作文，应用文-写假条，加上一个大作文，汉语提示作文构成。今年，北京中考英语作文也将是两个，一个看图作文在加上一个提示作文构成。这一讲，我们先来学习一下看图作文的写法。

看图作文要求考生按照所给图画，通过合理的联想将一组画面的内容正确地表达出来。看图作文与其他类型作文的不同之处在于，它除了要求考生有英语语言表达能力，还要求考生有观察能力、分析能力和想象能力。

写好看图作文应注意的事项1、结合文字提示，正确理解图意。一般情况下，看图作文在提供图画的同时也附带有简要的文字提示，我们可以利用文字提示去正确地理解图意，得到要点。切忌孤立地看图而忽视文字提示。

写作从图画的细节出发。所谓细节，就是指图画中的人物、事件、地点、环境、时间、动作等。依据图画细节，就可以把图画的内容用英语具体而生动地表达出来了。

(三)例题分析(例题)

同学们，看到下面的四幅图片及相应的报道后，你感到最担忧的是哪两种情形?请简述你担忧的理由并提出建议或希望。

要求：

⒈ 从所给素材中任选两种情形进行阐述，不可多选或少选。

⒉ 条理清楚，意思连贯，语句通顺，标点正确;

⒊ 词数 80 ～ 100。

参考词汇： 建议 suggest v. suggestion n.

气体 gas n. 污染 pollution n.

THE POLLUTIONS

① One third of the worlds people dont have enough clean water.

② More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

③ People are disturbed quite often by kinds of noises.

④ Every person in our city makes about 1.8 kilos of rubbish every day.

这道看图作文题，主题和图片连接得不是很紧密。从考查的形式上来说，虽是看图，实质上却属于提示性的作文。这个作文应该结合个人的观点，选择的余地还是很大的。做这个题应该注意几个方面：

1、认真读题。注意，题目虽然给了四幅图，但是却只要求写其中的两个就行。

2、题意要求的是阐述个人的观点-最担忧的两种情形。而不是对图片进行描述。

3、结合所给的提示。提示中，对每种污染都进行了阐述，考生可以这些描述进行写作。

4、注意字数，语法，拼写等，避免错误。

下面是两个例文，大家可以参考一下。

One possible version:

The environment is becoming worse and worse. There are many kinds of pollution I worry about. The most serious two are water pollution and air pollution, because people cant live healthily with dirty water and polluted air, nor can animals. More and more diseases are caused by polluted air.

I think factories should not pour dirty water into the river directly or produce more waste gas. Wed better go on foot or by like instead of by car, because more cars mean more waste gas. We should make our world more and more beautiful.

Another possible version:

The first fact I worry about is noise pollution. People cant sleep well if there is too much noise. Thats why so many people prefer to live in the countryside rather than live in the noisy city. I suggest all the factories and cars shouldnt make terrible noises. If they make terrible noise that isnt allowed, they will be fined, and we can also produce the cars which cant make terrible noise.

The other pollution is rubbish pollution. If everyone makes so much rubbish, one day we may live in a world filled with rubbish. Some people throw the waste paper about. I suggest rubbish should be put into different kinds of dustbins or paper bags.

下面，我们来看看这道题的评分标准。一般来说，各地的评分标准都和下面的这个标准差不多。这个最高的标准，实际上也就是我们写作的目标。

评分标准：

1. 内容完整，语句流畅，无语法错误，书写规范，给9-10分;

2. 内容较完整，语句较流畅，基本无语法错误，书写较规范，给6-8分;

3. 内容不完整，语句欠流畅，语法错误较多，书写较规范，给3-5分;

4. 只写出个别要点，语法错误较多，书写欠规范，只有个别句子可读或不知所云，给0-2分。

看图作文不可小视。希望大家掌握答好这种题型的要点，并积累词汇。

Seeing my whole education history, I have many teachers. But my favorite teacher is only one. He is Mr Lu. He is my middle Chinese teacher and head teacher. He is about fifty years old. Maybe he works too hard, so his back is a little bent. He always wears a black glasses. He looks amiable but serious in study. He always thinks us before everything. His class is very interesting and full of different kinds of encouraging stories. He is very strict to us in study. But whoever has difficulties, he would help us without hesitation. Sometimes he plays the role of a strict teacher, sometimes he takes the place of a kind father.

纵观我整个受教育史，我有过很多老师。但我最喜欢的老师只有一个。他是陆老师。他是我的初中语文老师兼班主任。他大约五十岁。也许是因为工作辛苦，所以他的背有点弯了。他总是戴一副黑色的眼镜。他看上去很和蔼可亲，对学习却是很严格的。他总是把我们放在第一位。他的课是非常有趣的，也经常讲各种不同励志故事。他对我们学习很严格。但无论谁有困难，他都会毫不犹豫地帮助我们。有时他是一个严格的老师，有时候他是一个慈祥的父亲。

[中考满分英语作文My Favorite Teacher

一、给写作留有充分的时间

在中考英语题中， “书面表达”往往是最后一项，有的学生把最后几分钟用在写作上，匆匆了事，这是很不明智的。学生用在写作上的时间应不少于10分钟，力争不丢分，少丢分。

二、认真审题，先打草稿

写之前一定要认真阅读写作要求，切忌见题就写。中考作文主要有两种类型： “提示作文”和 “看图作文”。 “提示作文”一般已经给出要点，而 “看图作文”则需根据图画及提示在很短的时间内将要点列出。把要点列出后，在草稿纸上写提纲，打草稿，就可以看出大概有多少字。在正式往试卷上写之前，根据题目要求适当增减内容，保持卷面整洁。

三、正确使用标点

学生在初中学习阶段，对标点符号的用法极不重视，因此，考试中明显的标点错误屡有发生，在一定程度上影响学生的成绩。另外，大小写错误也常有发生。有的甚至一篇文章从头到尾没有一个大写字母，再加上标点不正确，让人看了不知所云，以致直接影响考试成绩。

四、写好简单句，慎用长句

考生要根据所列要点，运用相应的提示词及正确的动词形式在稿纸上写出简单句。考生应熟悉简单句的五种基本句型，尽量使用简单句。在简单句的基础上，根据各句之间的关系适当加上一些连词，使得整篇文章结构紧凑，行文流畅。套用句型，能显示考生的英语基础扎实，提高作文档次。慎用长句是因为其成分多，结构复杂，所以出错的机会也多。考生在没有十足的把握时最好少用或不用长句，以免给自己的作文带来不必要的损失。

五、熟悉各种时态，灵活运用

时态是学习英语语言的难点。考生务必系统地学习初中出现的各种时态，做到灵活运用。在同一篇作文当中，时态要保持一致。

六、切忌中式英语，避免生搬硬套

一些学生因缺乏写作技巧，往往在写英语作文时，根据中文意思堆积英文单词，编造出许多中式英语，结果错误百出，意思表达不清楚，直接影响考试成绩。

七、认真检查和修改，减少错误

做完写作题后要从头至尾读一遍，检查一下文章是否通顺，有无逻辑错误，标点符号、单词拼写和时态运用是否正确，避免笔误。

Should students make friends online? Some people say yes. Internet helps people make many friends. Chatting on line, students can express their feelings and opinions more freely, and even get help for their foreign language studies.

Others, however, think students should not. They say making friends online is a waste of time, which should be spent more meaningfully on study. Besides, some students get cheated online.

It is my opinion that students should place their study, health and safety before other things. As for friendship, we can readily find it in our classmates and other people around us.

1.As far as …is concerned 就……而言

2.It goes without saying that… 不言而喻，…

3.It can be said with certainty that… 可以肯定地说……

4.As the proverb says， 正如谚语所说的，

5.It has to be noticed that… 它必须注意到，…

6.Its generally recognized that… 它普遍认为…

7.Its likely that … 这可能是因为…

8.Its hardly that… 这是很难的……

9.Its hardly too much to say that… 它几乎没有太多的说…

10.What calls for special attention is that…需要特别注意的是

11.Theres no denying the fact that…毫无疑问，无可否认

12.Nothing is more important than the fact that… 没有什么比这更重要的是…

13.whats far more important is that… 更重要的是…

导语：我们无法改变过去，却能用勤奋和智慧创造美好未来。亲爱的同学，你对未来的生活有着怎样的期待呢?下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

请以“My life in the future” 为题写一篇短文，畅想字迹未来的学习、工作和生活。

要求：

1. 语句通顺，合乎逻辑，书写规范。60-80词。

2. 文中不得使用真实的姓名和学校名称。

参考范文：

My life in the future

My life in the future will be colorful and meaningful.

I’m going to be a good doctor after I graduate from the university. I believe I’ll bring my parents health and happiness. In my spare time, I’ll stay with my family. We’ll travel a lot and do lots of sports. I’ll also read as many books as I can for I want to improve myself. Even if I work, I will never give up studing.

I’m sure my dream will come true because of my hard work and the life in the future will get better and better.

【参考译文】

我未来的生活

我未来的生活将是丰富多彩的，有意义的。

大学毕业后我将成为一名好医生。我相信我会带给我的父母健康和幸福。在我的业余时间，我会留在我的家庭。我们会经常旅行，做大量的运动。我也会读尽可能多的书，因为我想提高自己。即使我工作，我也不会放弃学习。

我相信我的梦想会实现，因为我的努力和未来的生活会越来越好。

中考英语作文范文 我的朋友

标签： 范文 / 作文 / 英语

I have many friends. One of them is my classmate Ma Hua.He is a League member and one of the best students in my class.He is fond of English and good at it.

He often practises reading aloud. So he has a good pronunciation. He is always ready to help others. With his help I have made great progress. I have made up my mind to catch up with him and to join the League in the near future.

英语作文：

Of the fifth year, it is one of the most important traditional festival - Dragon Boat Festival in China.

On to this day, every family will eat rice dumplings, drink realgar wine, hang calamus, wormwood leaf, also held a rowing dragon boat game in some places...

On the Dragon Boat Festival, there are a very popular story. Have a great patriotic poet in ancient China, named qu yuan. In AD 278, on the day of the fifth day of the fifth lunar month, qu yuan under the despair and grief, in old luo, when a local people, immediately go fishing boat and always amiable form of dongting lake is always not see the body of qu yuan.

In order to show their grief, people swing the boat rivers, thereafter becomes for the dragon boat race. The people were afraid of river fish eat qu yuans body, from their home to rice into the river, lest the fish and shrimp spoiling of qu yuans body. Then formed the custom of eating zongzi...

According to the above story, these are all in memory of qu yuan and form a kind of custom. There are lots of traditional culture in our country, as a Chinese, I also to learn more about these splendid ancient culture.

China has many rich and colorful traditional culture, extensive and profound, has a long history. Because I grew up very love to eat dumplings, so the "Dragon Boat Festival" is very impressive.

中文翻译：

每年的五月初五，是我国的一个重要传统节日——端午节。

每逢到这一天，家家户户都要吃棕子、喝雄黄酒、挂菖蒲、艾叶、有些地方还举行划龙舟比赛……

关于端午节，有一个流传很广的故事。中国古代有一位伟大的爱国诗人，名叫屈原。在公元278年，农历五月初五的那天，屈原在绝望、悲愤之下，投入旧罗江，当地的百姓闻讯后，马上划船去打捞，一直行止洞庭湖始终不见屈原的尸体。

为了寄托哀思，人们荡舟江河之上，此后就变成为龙舟比赛。百姓又怕江河里的鱼吃掉屈原的身体，就纷纷从家里拿来米糰投入江中，以免鱼虾糟蹋屈原的尸体。后来就形成了吃粽子的习俗……

根据以上故事来看，这些都是为了纪念屈原而形成一种风俗习惯。我国还有许许多多的传统文化，作为一名中国人，我平时还要更多地去了解这些灿烂古代文化。

中国有许许多多丰富多彩的传统文化，博大精深，源远流长。由于我从小非常爱吃粽子，所以对“端午节”的印象非常深刻。

1. Every coin has two sides.每个硬币都有两面，比喻事物的两面性。

2. The winter is coming and the spring is not far.冬天已经临近了,春天还会远吗?

3. Failure is the mother of success.失败是成功之母。

4. Practice makes perfect.熟能生巧。

5. Actions speak louder than words. 事实胜于雄辩。

6. A fall into a pit, a gain in your wit.吃一堑，长一智。

7. A good beginning is half done.良好的开端是成功的一半。

8.Dont put off till tomorrow what should be done today.今日事，今日毕。

9.Time and tide wait for no man.时不我待。

10.Where there is a will, there is a way.有志者事竟成。

[必备的10句谚语中考英语作文备考资料

一篇文章通常由开头、正文内容和结尾三个部分构成。的名师表示，这三个部分的比例安排要合理，只有合理的文章构成，才能拿到令人满意的分数。

文章的开头一般来说应尽量做到开门见山，用简单明白的叙述引出文章的话题，使读者了解文章要谈论什么，一下于引起读者的兴趣。

作文常见的开头形式大致有以下几种：

1、直叙主题开门见山

文章一开头就交待清楚文章的主题是什么。如“How I Spent My Vacation”(我怎样度假)的开头是：

I Spent my last vacation happily.

下面是题为“Honesty”(谈诚实)一文中的开头：

Honesty is one of the best virtues.An honest man is always trusted and respected.On the contrary, one who tells lies is regarded as a "liar",and is looked upon by honest people.

2、交代文章背景开头

在文章的开头，先把人物、事件和环境交待清楚。例如“A Trip to Jinshan” (去金山旅游)的开头：

The day before yesterday my class went on a bus trip to Jinshan. The bus ride there took three hours. The long trip made us very tired, but the sight of the beautiful sea refreshed us.

3、 以回忆来开头

用回忆的方法来开头。例如“A Trip to the Taishan Mountain”(泰山游)的开头是：

I remember my first trip to the Taishan Mountain as if it were yesterday.

4、以概括的方式来开头

即对要在文章中叙述的人或事先作一个概括性的介绍。如“The Happiness of Reading Books”(读书的快乐)的开头：

People often say that gold and silver are the most valuable things in the world. But I say that to read books is more valuable than anything else, because books give us knowledge and knowledge gives us power.

5、铺垫环境来开头

即开头利用自然景物或自然环境引出要介绍的事物。如“An Accident”(一场事故)的开头是:

It was a rainy and windy morning. The sky was gloomy, the temperature was low, and the street was nearly empty. I was on my way back to school. Suddenly, a speeding car came round the corner.

6、表述目的来开头。

在文章的一开头就交待写作目的，如通过文章要表扬谁，批评谁，或说明一个什么问题等。如“Pollution Control”(控制污染)的开头：

In this article I shall draw your attention to the subject of pollution control.

以上就是中考英语作文满分、高分分段的同学常使用的几种开头方式，您也可以依据自身的习惯来挑选适合自己的开头方式。不论用什么开头，目的都只有一个，那就是取得高分。

导语：每个人都有梦想，这能让我们更加的努力，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的my dream英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

I have many dreams, such as I am rich in the future. Therefore, I can buy all what I want. But my greatest dream is that I want to be an astronaut. Our country develops fast and our space make great progress in the last several decades. It has great achievements. All of our country are proud of it. Therefore, I want to be one of this amazing area. In order to make my dream come true, I must work hard now. So that I can go to a good university to learn more knowledge. I hope my dream can come true one day.

【参考译文】

我有很多梦想，比如我希望将来变得富有，这样我就可以买我想买的一切。但是我最大的梦想是成为一名宇航员。我们国家发展得很快，而且在过去几十年中太空取得了巨大进步，有很多大成就，所有人都为之骄傲。因此，我想成为这一神奇领域中的一员。为了使我的梦想成真，我必须从现在开始努力。这样我就能够去一所好的大学学习更多的知识了。我希望有一天能够梦想成真。

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中考英语试卷写作的分数各个省市有所不同，一般在15-20分之间。下面从阅卷老师的角度分析一下中考英语作文的得分点和扣分点。2.字数：少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。中考英语作文要求60字以上，标点符号不算，少了就要扣分。

中考英语试卷写作的分数各个省市有所不同，一般在15-20分之间。下面从阅卷老师的角度分析一下中考英语作文的得分点和扣分点。

中考英语作文对考生的要求有四点：1、内容要完整。 2、语句流畅。3、没有语法错误。4、书写规范。能达到上述要求的作文，都会得到相应的高分。

一：先看一下扣分点：

1.内容方面：要点缺失，可酌情扣分。比如中考作文“I want to do something for my school”，若没有写一件具体的事情，是要扣3分以上的;若写的事情太过于虚幻，没有实际内容，也会扣1-2分。

2.字数：少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。

中考英语作文要求60字以上，标点符号不算，少了就要扣分。但是60字的作文能不能得高分?从我们拿到的实例作文来看，16分以上的作文，没有少于75字的，甚至少于80字的也少之又少。当然，也极少有超过100字的，因为中考试卷的短线格一共80个，在格子下面大约还有2行的空间，可以加20字左右，再多阅卷人就很难看清了，也会影响卷面的美观。所以，同学们如果想让作文得到高分，最好是让字数在75-100字之间。

3. 语法和拼写错误：每个扣0.5，重复错误不计;

4. 标点错误：每4个扣0.5.

二：加分点

除了这些扣分点，还有一些得分点：比如说作文的组织结构分，就是根据学生使用复杂句型、单词和谚语、俗语的情况来加分。

只要文章中有1个亮点，基本就可以争取到1分(3分的文采分是很难全部拿到的)。而这1分的亮点，是可以提前准备的。例如，有一些“万金油”式的复杂句型，例如强调句型、only相关的倒装句等，只要同学们多操练几次，几乎是一定能用到作文当中，从而为自己争取到这1分。

其次就是卷面分

很多家长[微博]和同学，尤其是部分书法并不是十分整洁的同学，都会关心是否真的有“卷面分”的存在。虽然在阅卷标准里面并没有卷面分这一项，但是这个分数却真切地反映在了同学们的分数里面。

据阅卷老师的经验，在阅卷的时候并不是按这3个部分逐项打分的，而是在第一遍读完全文之后，心里已经形成了一个“印象分”，然后再细读第二、三遍，把印象分分配到各个打分部分。因此，这个“印象分”就非常重要，而同学们的书法，也正是在这个环节，影响到了自己的分数。所以初三的考生，如果书法不好，一定要注意。所谓的书法并不需要写的很漂亮，符合3个简单的标准即可：没有斜体、没有连笔、涂改较少。

Today is Sunday. It is sunny. I dont go to school. I want go shopping. I get up at 6:30 in the morning.I have some cereal and an egg for breakfast. I go out at 8:00. The shop is near . I go there on foot. Many people are in the shop. I buy a pencil . At 12:00 I go home for lunch. I have some vegetable and meat for lunch. I read a book in the afternoon. I eat some noodles and fruit for supper. After supper, I do my homework. then I watch TV. Later, I play on the computer. I lie on my bed. I listen to the radio. I have a happy day.

饮食安全是个不变的话题，YJBYS为大家准备的这篇范文绝对值得大家收藏，请继续关注我们英语作文栏目。

假如你是一所国际学校校办英文杂志的学生编辑.你看了下面这封信后，也想写一篇关于该信的读后感，内容要点包括：你对此事件的看法;解释你的理由并提出你的建议;向受害者表达尽快康复的祝愿.

Today, I received the readers letter. I was shocked at it.Personally speaking, I think we should pay more attention to the food safety.The government must make some necessary laws. Whats more, some businessmenshouldnt be only interested in making money. They must care about peopleshealth. Wed better not eat anything in dirty places though some food isdelicious, because eating unhealthy food does harm to our health.

Finally, I hope the family in the accident will getbetter soon.

导语：随着环境污染问题日益加剧，我们每个人都要履行保护环境的责任和义务。下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

Harmony with the environment is that we live in on Earth, who is a natural son, and not only to natural persons as the conqueror, as we all know, there is only one earth and the mountains on Earth, the animals. Plant human cells, if it damaged, destroyed nature organizations, to the eradication of mankind. Therefore, the environment must be linked with social ethics, character education and practice acts as an important elent of it. Everyone must fulfil its responsibilities and obligations to protect the environment.

【参考译文】

人与环境是和谐相处的,我们生存在地球上,人是自然之子,而不能仅把人看作自然的征服者,大家都知道,人类只有一个地球,地球上的山山水水、动物。植物是人类的细胞,如果我们把它损坏了,破坏了大自然的组织,等 于消灭人类。因此,环境要与社会公德联系起来,与实践行为作为人格教育的一项重要内容来抓。每个人都要履行保护环境的责任和义务。

I lie cartns because the chatacters are ust lie cn peple. I can’t stand scar vies because the’re s scar . I dn’t lie sap peras because the’re lng and bring. Althugh I reall wnder what happens next .I dn’t lie the at all. I lve watching cedies because the alwas ae e laugh. It’s alwas interesting t watch the funniest perfrer shw their es,als I can lean se funn es fr the. As fr actin vies. I dn’t ind the . The’re as bring as sap peras .But , I’d sa ,actin vies are trul exciting! What abut u?What inds f shws d u lie?

想要写好英语作文都有哪些技巧呢?下面是语文迷网为大家提供的英语写作技巧，欢迎阅读参考。

一、写作决窍

总体把握，要点齐全;人称时态，逻辑清楚;

关键词汇，动词第一;组词成句，结构完整;

组句成文，连词增色;此路不通，绕道迂回;

字迹工整，留好印象;从句适量，高分有望。

二、写作步骤

1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料;同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

4.先草稿，后抄写。

三、作文案例

[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. Tell the magazine readers.

·What exactly your hobby is;

·When and how you became interested in this hobby;

·Why you enjoy your hobby;

·About your hopes and plans for the future.

写作要求：

1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

3.词数60-80.

[学生解答A]

My hobby is read books①.When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

②also的位置应放在can之后。

[点评]：档次9-11分。

①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

③有少量错误。

[学生解答B]

My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ,my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improvemy writing.I want to be a writer in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

①开门见山、点题。

②真情流露，理由充分。

③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

[点评]：档次13-14分。

①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

[高分突破]

①文体：记叙文。

②要点：what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future.

③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

四、培养途径

1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

4.自己纠错，写下反思。

五、备考演练

A

缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

写作要求：

1.词数在100左右。

2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

提示：

1.生活离不开水。

2.可饮用水在减少。

3.水污染严重。

4.应保护水源，再利用水。

思路点拨与参考答案

A. [思路点拨]：

①文体：记叙文。

②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting theenvironment.They threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to preventstarting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

B. [思路点拨]：

①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

②时态：一般现在时态。

③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

Water is very important to humans.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirtywater into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

导语：写英语作文的时候适当引用一些名言警句，能够给我们的作文加分哦，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的优秀英语素材，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

01. Practice makes perfect.

熟能生巧.

02. Time is money.

时间就是金钱

03. Easier said than done.

说来容易做来难

04. Where there is a will, there is a way.

有志者事竟成.

05. Look before you leap.

三思而后行.

06. Knowledge is power.

知识就是力量

07. God helps those who help themselves.

自助者天助.

08. Nothing is impossible to a willing heart.

心之所愿，无事不成

09. It’s never too old to learn.

活到老，学到老

10. No pains, no gains.

不劳无获

11. Once in a blue moon.

千载难逢

12. To make the impossible possible.

将不可能变为可能

13. Failure is the mother of success.

失败乃成功之母

14. A friend in need is a friend indeed.

患难见真情

15. First things first.

先做重要之事

16. Great minds think alike.

英雄所见略同

17. Rome was not built in a day.

成功并非一朝一夕的事

18. All that glitters is not gold.

闪光的未必都是金子

19. East or west, home is the best.

金窝银窝不如自家草窝

20. Time and tide wait for no man.

时间不等人

21. There is but a secret to success—Never give up!

成功只有一个秘诀—永不放弃!

22. Where there is life, there is hope.

有生命必有希望

23. Beauty will buy no beef.

漂亮不能当饭吃

24. Better late than never.

迟做总比不做好

25. Every little helps.

点滴都有用;积少成多

26. The shortest answer is doing.

最简短的回答就是行动

27. No news is good news.

没消息，就是好消息

28. Well begun, half done.

好的开始是成功的一半

29. All for one, one for all.

人人为我，我为人人

30. One false step will make a great difference.

失之毫厘，谬以千里

31. Facts speak louder than words.

事实胜于雄辩

32. As the tree, so the fruit.

种瓜得瓜，种豆得豆

33. To live is to learn; to learn is to better live.

活着为了学习，学习为了更好的活着

34. Like and like make good friends.

趣味相投

35. All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.

只学习不玩耍聪明的孩子也变傻

1. 关于……人们有不同的观点。一些人认为……

There are different opinions among people as to ____ .Some people suggest that____.

2. 俗话说(常言道)……，它是我们前辈的经历，但是，即使在今天，它在许多场合仍然适用。

There is an old saying______. Its the experience of our forefathers，however，it is correct in many cases even today.

3. 现在，……，它们给我们的日常生活带来了许多危害。首先，……;其次，……。更为糟糕的是……。

Today, ____, which have brought a lot of harms in our daily life. First, ____ Second, ____. What makes things worse is that______.

4. 现在，……很普遍，许多人喜欢……，因为……，另外(而且)……。

Nowadays，it is common to ______. Many people like ______ Because ______. Besides，______.

5.任何事物都是有两面性，……也不例外。它既有有利的一面，也有不利的一面。 Everything has two sides and ______ is not an exception. It has both advantages and disadvantages.

6. 关于……人们的观点各不相同，一些人认为(说)……，在他们看来，…… People’s opinions about ______ vary from person to person. Some people say that ______.To them, _____.

7.…已成为人的关注的热门话题，特别是在年青人当中引发激烈的辩论。

…has become a hot topic among people，especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way.

8.…在我们的日常生活中起着越来越重要的作用, 它给我们带来了许多好处，但同时也引发一些严重的问题

…has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life. It has brought us a lot of benefits but has created some serious problems as well

9.人类正面临着一个严重的问题…，这个问题变得越来越严重。

Man is now facing a big problem ..., which is becoming more and more serious.

10、如今，人们普遍认为...,但是我怀疑...。

Nowadays，it is generally/commonly believed that..., but I wonder that...

11、“如同硬币的正反面，...也有积极的一面和消极的一面。Like a coin has two sides, there is a positive aspect and a negative aspect to...

12、“近来，...的问题已经成为人们注目的焦点。”

Currently, the issue of ...has been brought to public attention

13、“随着...的快速增长，...在日常生活中已经变得越来越重要。

Along with the rapid growth of ..., ...has become increasingly important in our daily 列举时可以用

First of all, 首先 secondly, 其次 beside, 另外 whats more, 另外last but not least 最后的但不是不重要的

First 首先 Second 第二 ,After that另外 ,Later还有 on last最后